Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY903Z3B964V59TVJPATQA7

Run Details

Duration:
23.9s
Cost:
$0.001906
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora's fingers tightened around the Heartstone Pendant as its crimson glow pulsed against her palm, warm like a heartbeat trapped in stone. The air in the Fae Grove thickened, the ancient oaks twisting their branches into unnatural arches above the wildflowers. Isolde led the way, her silver hair catching the perpetual twilight that filtered through the leaves. No footprints marred the moss behind her. Nyx trailed at the edges, their shadowy form flickering like smoke caught in a draft, violet eyes scanning the boundaries where the world bent. The Seer paused at the heart of the grove, her pale lavender gaze fixed on a shimmer in the air—a distortion that rippled like heat over cobblestones, but colder, pulling at the edges of reality. "The Veil thins here," Isolde murmured, her voice a melody wrapped in thorns. "Step where the light fractures, and the path opens. But remember, what lies beyond hungers as much as it feeds." Aurora swallowed the knot in her throat. The pendant's warmth spread up her arm, urging her forward. She glanced at Nyx, who coalesced into a more solid silhouette, tall and indistinct, like a man carved from midnight. "You sense it too? That pull?" Nyx's whisper slithered through the air, carried on an unfelt wind. "Shadows whisper of excess. A realm where want devours itself." Isolde extended her hand, palm up. No lines creased her skin; it gleamed smooth as polished marble. "The blade will guard you. Cut if the indulgence turns to chains." Aurora nodded, sliding the Fae-Forged Blade into her belt. Its moonsilver hilt chilled her hip through her jacket, a constant reminder of the cold edge waiting. She stepped toward the shimmer first, the group closing in behind. The air hummed, then tore—a brief sting like pins against her skin. The grove vanished. In its place stretched a landscape that defied the ache in her chest. Warm amber light bathed everything, the sky a vast dome of molten honey that never quite set. Vines heavy with fruit climbed trellises that spiraled into infinity, their leaves broad and veined with gold. Aurora's boots sank into soil richer than any earth she'd known, soft and yielding, scented with spices that made her mouth water unbidden. Grapes the size of fists dangled from arches overhead, their skins taut and glistening, promising juices that could drown a thirst she'd never felt before. She knelt, plucking one. It burst between her fingers, dark red liquid spilling warm across her knuckles. The taste exploded on her tongue—sweet, then sharp, then a depth that pulled her in, urging another bite. She shook her head, wiping her hand on her jeans. "This place... it's alive. Like it's breathing around us." Isolde moved ahead, her steps silent on the path of crushed petals that lined the ground. "Dymas calls to the hollow parts. Fill them, or they fill you." Nyx drifted closer, their form sharpening into edges that mimicked human shoulders and a jawline. They reached out, shadow fingers brushing a low-hanging branch. Leaves rustled without wind, releasing a puff of aroma—cinnamon and something feral, like meat roasting over unseen fires. "Listen. The echoes of feasts long past. Or yet to come." Aurora pushed forward, the path widening into a meadow where orchards gave way to terraced gardens. Trees bore fruits she'd never seen: orbs of blue flesh striped with silver, pods that hummed faintly when touched. Birds with feathers like polished brass wheeled overhead, their cries a chorus of laughter twisted into hunger. The air grew heavier, laced with the sizzle of distant flames and the low murmur of voices—hundreds, thousands, blending into a symphony of satisfaction. A stone arch loomed ahead, carved with reliefs of figures locked in eternal banquets, mouths open wide, hands clutching platters. As they passed beneath, the ground shifted to mosaic tiles, each piece a tiny scene of indulgence: a lover feeding another jewel-encrusted sweets, a warrior drowning in wine rivers. Aurora's skin prickled. The pendant throbbed harder now, its glow visible even in the amber light. "Feels wrong," she said, voice low. "Beautiful, but... like it's watching." Isolde tilted her head, silver strands swaying. "Beauty in Hel wears many masks. The Prince rules from excess, but chains hide in the silk." They crested a hill, and the valley unfolded below—a sprawl of vineyards that marched to the horizon, rows upon rows of vines twisting like serpents. In the center, a grand pavilion rose, its silken walls billowing in a breeze that carried scents of roasted meats and baked goods still warm from ovens. Figures moved within, ethereal at first, then solidifying into souls bound to this realm—cooks in aprons stained with sauces, diners sprawled on cushions, their laughter booming like thunder. Aurora froze at the sight of a massive table, laden with dishes that steamed and shimmered. Platters of glistening fish from nonexistent seas, towers of pastries flaking gold dust, bowls of creams swirled with colors that shifted like oil on water. One soul, a man with eyes too wide and skin too pale, lifted a goblet, wine sloshing over the rim. "Come! Join the endless night. Taste what you've craved." Nyx's form rippled, violet eyes narrowing. "Illusions woven into truth. They were mortal once. Now, they serve the gluttony." Isolde raised a hand, weaving fingers through the air. A faint barrier shimmered around them, thin as spider silk. "We seek the rift's heart, not its belly. Deeper, where the gardens choke on their own bounty." Aurora forced her legs to move, skirting the pavilion's edge. The man's laughter followed, echoing off the vines. Her stomach growled despite herself, the aromas coiling around her like fingers. She gripped the blade's hilt, its cold seeping through her resolve. The path dipped into a ravine, walls lined with espaliered trees bearing nuts that cracked open at a glance, revealing kernels pulsing with inner light. As they descended, the sounds changed. The distant feasts faded, replaced by a rhythmic thrum—like hearts beating in unison, or perhaps the churn of vast kitchens underground. The air cooled slightly, carrying hints of earth turned over, roots unearthed. Aurora brushed a hand against a trunk; sap oozed, sticky and sweet, clinging to her skin. She peeled it away, but the tackiness lingered, a subtle weight. "Look there." Nyx pointed, their whisper sharpening. A cluster of flowers bloomed at the ravine's base, petals unfurling like mouths, releasing spores that danced in the amber glow. Each puff carried visions—flashes in Aurora's mind of tables groaning under feasts, of hands reaching, never sated. She blinked hard, shaking it off. "It's messing with my head. Like whispers I can't quite hear." Isolde knelt by the flowers, her lavender eyes reflecting their iridescence. "Dream-weeds of Dymas. They plant seeds of want. Pluck one, and see your deepest hunger bloom." Aurora backed away, heart pounding. The ravine narrowed, forcing them single file. Stone steps emerged, worn smooth by countless feet, leading to a grotto where a spring bubbled from cracked earth. Water clear as crystal filled a basin, but ripples formed faces beneath the surface—souls staring up, mouths moving in silent pleas. One broke the surface, a woman's translucent form rising halfway. "Drink. Forget the chains above. Here, peace in abundance." Nyx extended a shadowy tendril, touching the water. It steamed on contact, hissing back to liquid. "Bound servants. The Prince's chefs, eternal in their toil." The unease settled in Aurora's gut like lead, but wonder threaded through it. The grotto's walls sparkled with embedded gems—rubies like frozen blood, emeralds veined with fire. She traced one, and it warmed, projecting a hologram of sorts: a grand competition, chefs battling with flames that danced like lovers, crowds cheering as dishes levitated on platters of light. "Competitions," Isolde said, her riddle laced with warning. "Where victory tastes of ash, and defeat feeds the vines." They pressed on, the steps climbing out of the grotto into a labyrinth of hedges. Thorns tipped with dew that smelled of honey guarded the turns, scratching at Aurora's sleeves. Each wrong path led to clearings of temptation: a bench laden with cheeses that melted at a touch, a fountain spraying nectar that hummed lullabies. Nyx slipped ahead, incorporeal now, scouting shadows between the leaves. They reformed abruptly, blocking a turn. "Dead end. But voices—planning a harvest that never ends." Aurora wiped sweat from her brow, the air growing thicker, humid with the breath of growing things. Her mouth dried, the earlier grape's sweetness turning cloying in memory. "How much deeper? This place pulls at you, like it's got hooks." Isolde's lips curved, not quite a smile. "Until the core reveals itself. The excess builds to a pinnacle." The labyrinth opened to a plateau, where orchards gave way to terraced fields of herbs that swayed in unison, releasing clouds of scent that made colors brighter, sounds sharper. In the distance, spires rose—towers of bone-white marble, topped with domes that pulsed like breathing lungs. Smoke curled from chimneys, carrying the promise of breads baking, stews simmering. A group of souls worked the fields below, their movements fluid, almost dance-like. One turned, spotting the intruders. "Wanderers! Fresh palates for the Prince's table?" Aurora's hand went to the pendant; it burned now, guiding left toward the spires. Nyx merged with a shadow cast by a fruit tree, reemerging beside her. "The rift lies within. But guards approach—shades of gluttony, fattened on lies." The souls detached from their tasks, forms bloating slightly as they neared, eyes gleaming with unnatural hunger. Isolde drew a subtle circle in the air with her finger, murmuring words that twisted like vines. The air warped, bending the souls' path away. "Wonder and dread, hand in hand," the Seer said. "Dymas offers all, takes more." Aurora led now, the blade humming faintly at her side, its luminescence cutting through the amber haze. The plateau sloped toward a grand staircase, flanked by statues of revelers frozen in mid-laugh, goblets raised. Each step descended into deeper warmth, the thrum growing to a pulse that synced with her own heartbeat. Fruits hung lower here, brushing her shoulders, and she batted them away, their juices splattering like blood. At the base, a plaza spread out, paved with tiles that depicted the seven sins in mosaic—gluttony central, a maw devouring worlds. Fountains jetted wine of every hue, and market stalls overflowed with spices that sang when ground. Vendors called out, their voices a cacophony of invitation. "Spices from the abyss! Meats from forgotten beasts!" Aurora's vision blurred at the edges, the scents weaving dreams of feasts in her old flat above Silas' bar—endless plates, laughter with Eva, no shadows of Evan chasing her. She gripped Nyx's arm, the shadow solidifying under her touch. "Fight it. We're not staying." Nyx nodded, violet glow steady. "The heartstone leads true. Through the central arch." Isolde followed, her presence a cool anchor. They wove past stalls where souls haggled over loaves that expanded in hands, fruits that granted visions of lost loves. One vendor thrust a pear toward Aurora, its skin veined with light. "Bite, and remember what you've forsaken." She sidestepped, the pendant's heat guiding to a shadowed alcove. There, the air split again—a smaller rift, pulsing crimson like the stone. But unease crested as figures emerged from the plaza's edges—taller souls, their forms rippling with power, eyes fixed on the group. "The Prince's tasters," Nyx whispered. "They sample more than food." Aurora drew the blade, its edge glowing cold blue. The first taster lunged, mouth yawning wide, but the moonsilver sliced clean, parting shadow from flesh. It dissolved into mist, reforming as a puddle of syrup that seeped into the tiles. More came, their steps heavy, breaths ragged with need. Isolde chanted, barriers flaring, while Nyx darted between them, shadows coiling to trip and bind. Aurora slashed, the blade singing through wards that tasted of honeyed poison. One taster grazed her arm, its touch igniting a fire of want—she craved, suddenly, the life left behind, the simple deliveries for Yu-Fei's, the bar's dim lights. But the pendant burned brighter, grounding her. She drove the blade home, and the taster wailed, collapsing into fruit rinds that withered on the stone. The plaza quieted, echoes fading. The rift beckoned, its edges fraying like torn silk. Aurora sheathed the blade, chest heaving. Wonder lingered in the air's aftertaste, the alien beauty of Dymas etched into her senses— a realm where abundance twisted into trap, where every delight hid a devourer. Isolde placed a hand on her shoulder. "Deeper still calls. The true excess awaits." Nyx's form steadied, watching the rift. "We enter, or it claims us piecemeal."
created_at"2026-02-20T19:39:01.999Z" 2/20/2026, 7:39:01 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags8
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences36
tagDensity0.222
leniency0.444
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.95% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2127
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
1.27% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2127
totalAiIsms42
found
0
word"pulsed"
count2
1
word"scanning"
count1
2
word"warmth"
count2
3
word"whisper"
count3
4
word"marble"
count2
5
word"chilled"
count1
6
word"reminder"
count1
7
word"glistening"
count2
8
word"echoes"
count2
9
word"symphony"
count1
10
word"loomed"
count1
11
word"mosaic"
count2
12
word"throbbed"
count1
13
word"silk"
count3
14
word"shimmered"
count2
15
word"echoing"
count1
16
word"stomach"
count1
17
word"resolve"
count1
18
word"rhythmic"
count1
19
word"churn"
count1
20
word"weight"
count1
21
word"pounding"
count1
22
word"crystal"
count1
23
word"traced"
count1
24
word"simmering"
count1
25
word"dance"
count1
26
word"gleaming"
count1
27
word"pulse"
count1
28
word"maw"
count1
29
word"cacophony"
count1
30
word"etched"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"scanning"
2"warmth"
3"whisper"
4"marble"
5"chilled"
6"reminder"
7"glistening"
8"echoes"
9"symphony"
10"loomed"
11"mosaic"
12"throbbed"
13"silk"
14"shimmered"
15"echoing"
16"stomach"
17"resolve"
18"rhythmic"
19"churn"
20"weight"
21"pounding"
22"crystal"
23"traced"
24"simmering"
25"dance"
26"gleaming"
27"pulse"
28"maw"
29"cacophony"
30"etched"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences127
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences127
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences157
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen36
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2102
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
90.71% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions64
wordCount1771
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1.19
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Fae2
Grove1
Seer2
Aurora21
Nyx14
Fae-Forged1
Blade1
Isolde13
Yu-Fei1
Dymas1
One5
persons
0"Pendant"
1"Seer"
2"Aurora"
3"Nyx"
4"Blade"
5"Isolde"
6"Yu-Fei"
7"Dymas"
8"One"
places
0"Fae"
1"Grove"
globalScore0.907
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences115
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"not quite a smile"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2102
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences157
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs50
mean42.04
std22.03
cv0.524
sampleLengths
088
168
243
321
429
565
682
754
828
953
1076
1165
1211
1324
1480
1570
1619
1736
1866
1966
2045
2117
2227
2371
2425
2558
2618
2755
2825
2940
3018
3157
3225
3339
3442
3514
3669
3747
388
3944
4013
4145
4243
4310
4440
4563
4625
4748
4814
4913
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences127
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs339
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount17
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences20
totalSentences157
ratio0.127
matches
0"The Seer paused at the heart of the grove, her pale lavender gaze fixed on a shimmer in the air—a distortion that rippled like heat over cobblestones, but colder, pulling at the edges of reality."
1"No lines creased her skin; it gleamed smooth as polished marble."
2"The air hummed, then tore—a brief sting like pins against her skin."
3"The taste exploded on her tongue—sweet, then sharp, then a depth that pulled her in, urging another bite."
4"Leaves rustled without wind, releasing a puff of aroma—cinnamon and something feral, like meat roasting over unseen fires."
5"The air grew heavier, laced with the sizzle of distant flames and the low murmur of voices—hundreds, thousands, blending into a symphony of satisfaction."
6"They crested a hill, and the valley unfolded below—a sprawl of vineyards that marched to the horizon, rows upon rows of vines twisting like serpents."
7"Figures moved within, ethereal at first, then solidifying into souls bound to this realm—cooks in aprons stained with sauces, diners sprawled on cushions, their laughter booming like thunder."
8"The distant feasts faded, replaced by a rhythmic thrum—like hearts beating in unison, or perhaps the churn of vast kitchens underground."
9"Aurora brushed a hand against a trunk; sap oozed, sticky and sweet, clinging to her skin."
10"Each puff carried visions—flashes in Aurora's mind of tables groaning under feasts, of hands reaching, never sated."
11"Water clear as crystal filled a basin, but ripples formed faces beneath the surface—souls staring up, mouths moving in silent pleas."
12"The grotto's walls sparkled with embedded gems—rubies like frozen blood, emeralds veined with fire."
13"In the distance, spires rose—towers of bone-white marble, topped with domes that pulsed like breathing lungs."
14"Aurora's hand went to the pendant; it burned now, guiding left toward the spires."
15"At the base, a plaza spread out, paved with tiles that depicted the seven sins in mosaic—gluttony central, a maw devouring worlds."
16"There, the air split again—a smaller rift, pulsing crimson like the stone."
17"But unease crested as figures emerged from the plaza's edges—taller souls, their forms rippling with power, eyes fixed on the group."
18"One taster grazed her arm, its touch igniting a fire of want—she craved, suddenly, the life left behind, the simple deliveries for Yu-Fei's, the bar's dim lights."
19"Wonder lingered in the air's aftertaste, the alien beauty of Dymas etched into her senses— a realm where abundance twisted into trap, where every delight hid a devourer."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1402
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount32
adverbRatio0.02282453637660485
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.0028530670470756064
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences157
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences157
mean13.39
std6.65
cv0.497
sampleLengths
022
119
216
37
424
535
613
720
87
910
1020
116
1211
1310
146
1511
1612
179
1817
1911
2012
213
2213
2317
2417
2523
2625
274
2813
2918
3010
319
3216
3312
3415
359
3618
3711
3816
3919
4017
4124
4220
4329
443
4513
466
475
487
4917
60.93% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.3885350318471338
totalSentences157
uniqueOpeners61
26.46% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences126
matches
0"More came, their steps heavy,"
ratio0.008
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount23
totalSentences126
matches
0"She glanced at Nyx, who"
1"Its moonsilver hilt chilled her"
2"She stepped toward the shimmer"
3"She knelt, plucking one."
4"It burst between her fingers,"
5"She shook her head, wiping"
6"They reached out, shadow fingers"
7"she said, voice low"
8"They crested a hill, and"
9"Her stomach growled despite herself,"
10"She gripped the blade's hilt,"
11"She peeled it away, but"
12"She blinked hard, shaking it"
13"It steamed on contact, hissing"
14"She traced one, and it"
15"They pressed on, the steps"
16"They reformed abruptly, blocking a"
17"Her mouth dried, the earlier"
18"She gripped Nyx's arm, the"
19"They wove past stalls where"
ratio0.183
27.46% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount109
totalSentences126
matches
0"Aurora's fingers tightened around the"
1"The air in the Fae"
2"Isolde led the way, her"
3"Nyx trailed at the edges,"
4"The Seer paused at the"
5"Isolde murmured, her voice a"
6"Aurora swallowed the knot in"
7"The pendant's warmth spread up"
8"She glanced at Nyx, who"
9"Nyx's whisper slithered through the"
10"Isolde extended her hand, palm"
11"Aurora nodded, sliding the Fae-Forged"
12"Its moonsilver hilt chilled her"
13"She stepped toward the shimmer"
14"The air hummed, then tore—a"
15"The grove vanished."
16"Vines heavy with fruit climbed"
17"Aurora's boots sank into soil"
18"Grapes the size of fists"
19"She knelt, plucking one."
ratio0.865
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences126
matches(empty)
ratio0
14.45% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences89
technicalSentenceCount16
matches
0"Isolde led the way, her silver hair catching the perpetual twilight that filtered through the leaves."
1"The Seer paused at the heart of the grove, her pale lavender gaze fixed on a shimmer in the air—a distortion that rippled like heat over cobblestones, but colde…"
2"She glanced at Nyx, who coalesced into a more solid silhouette, tall and indistinct, like a man carved from midnight."
3"In its place stretched a landscape that defied the ache in her chest."
4"Aurora's boots sank into soil richer than any earth she'd known, soft and yielding, scented with spices that made her mouth water unbidden."
5"Grapes the size of fists dangled from arches overhead, their skins taut and glistening, promising juices that could drown a thirst she'd never felt before."
6"They crested a hill, and the valley unfolded below—a sprawl of vineyards that marched to the horizon, rows upon rows of vines twisting like serpents."
7"In the center, a grand pavilion rose, its silken walls billowing in a breeze that carried scents of roasted meats and baked goods still warm from ovens."
8"Platters of glistening fish from nonexistent seas, towers of pastries flaking gold dust, bowls of creams swirled with colors that shifted like oil on water."
9"A cluster of flowers bloomed at the ravine's base, petals unfurling like mouths, releasing spores that danced in the amber glow."
10"She traced one, and it warmed, projecting a hologram of sorts: a grand competition, chefs battling with flames that danced like lovers, crowds cheering as dishe…"
11"Each wrong path led to clearings of temptation: a bench laden with cheeses that melted at a touch, a fountain spraying nectar that hummed lullabies."
12"The labyrinth opened to a plateau, where orchards gave way to terraced fields of herbs that swayed in unison, releasing clouds of scent that made colors brighte…"
13"Aurora led now, the blade humming faintly at her side, its luminescence cutting through the amber haze."
14"Fruits hung lower here, brushing her shoulders, and she batted them away, their juices splattering like blood."
15"At the base, a plaza spread out, paved with tiles that depicted the seven sins in mosaic—gluttony central, a maw devouring worlds."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags8
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Isolde murmured, her voice a melody wrapped in thorns"
1"she said, voice low"
2"Nyx pointed, their whisper sharpening"
94.44% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
1"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences36
tagDensity0.139
leniency0.278
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.111
76.9556%