Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY94TM7SQJ9KHGQJYETSSCJ

Run Details

Duration:
3m 4s
Cost:
$0.015567
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Harlow’s boot crunched broken terracotta tile across the abandoned Camden Tube station platform, the sound echoing off water-stained brick arches that had not held a train in 47 years. This was The Veil Market’s last known haunt—before the full moon’s rise had forced vendors to pack their enchanted trinkets and banned alchemical vials into unmarked crates and vanish to a new hidden spot. The Market’s residual scent clung to every crevice: burnt myrrh that stung the back of her throat, rust from a hundred discarded metal charms, and a faint, sickly sweet tang she’d come to associate with supernatural residue—same as the tang that had clung to her partner DS Morris’s body three years prior. She flicked her flashlight beam in a military-precision arc, cutting through the thick, dust-mottled dark to land on a crumpled figure slumped against a disused ticket barrier. Her sharp jaw tightened; she tapped the worn leather watch on her left wrist, the tick-tick-tick marking the three minutes she’d spent staring at evidence that refused to cohere into anything the Metropolitan Police’s rulebook could classify. The body was a Veil Market vendor, she’d learned from a reluctant tipster who’d traded the information for a promised reprieve from a minor theft charge. No cuts marred his weathered hands, no bruises bloomed on his neck, but his eyes were frozen wide, pupils dilated to pinpricks as if he’d stared into something that had stripped the breath from his lungs. Beside his outstretched hand lay a small brass compass, its casing coated in a verdigris patina so thick it dulled the protective sigils etched into its face—she’d seen a similar compass in Eva’s occult research books, labeled a Veil Compass, crafted by Shade artisans to point toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal. Eva was perched on a chipped concrete bench ten feet away, her curly red hair catching the flashlight’s glint when she shifted. Her worn leather satchel, stuffed to bursting with Oxford-annotated ancient history tomes and British Museum restricted archive manuscripts, propped open at her feet, a few loose pages fluttering in the faint draft that whispered through the station’s tunnel mouths. She tucked a strand of hair behind her left ear—her nervous habit, one Harlow had come to recognize as a signal she was wrestling with a puzzle her academic training hadn’t fully prepared her for—round glasses slipping down her freckled nose as she squinted at a dog-eared book in her lap. The coroner’s office faxed their preliminary report an hour ago. Harlow’s flashlight beam snapped to Eva’s face, the light catching the way her green eyes narrowed in frustration. Natural causes. Cardiac arrest, they said. Eva slammed the book shut, the sound echoing off the brick arches. She tucked another strand of hair behind her left ear, leaning forward until her elbows rested on her knees. They didn’t smell the residue. They didn’t see the compass. Harlow knelt, her knee sinking into a puddle of stagnant water that pooled between two tile cracks. She carefully lifted the Veil Compass by its thin brass chain, her fingers avoiding the sigils—she’d learned the hard way that supernatural objects could leave burns if handled without caution, a lesson she’d picked up after grazing a cursed amulet during a case six months prior. The compass’s needle twitched once, then locked into place, pointing toward a shadowed tunnel mouth that had been boarded up since the station’s closure. The victim’s pockets were emptied. No rift map—his tipster said he’d been haggling over a rare one with a Shade artisan the night before he died. No bone token. Eva stood, her book still clutched in her hand, and crossed the platform to join her. She leaned over the compass, round glasses sliding so far down her nose she had to push them up with her thumb to see the sigils clearly. You can’t enter The Veil Market without a bone token. He couldn’t have come here without one. Either the attacker took it, or he hid it. Harlow’s sharp jaw set harder. She tapped her watch again, the tick-tick-tick louder now in the station’s oppressive silence. The tipster said he left the Market at midnight. No one saw him leave with anyone. No one heard a scream. Eva tucked a third strand of hair behind her left ear, her green eyes darting to the ticket barrier behind the victim. She pointed to a faint, glowing silver scratch on one of the barrier’s metal slats—something that didn’t match the rough, brown scratch marks left by broken tile. That’s not a tile mark. It’s rift residue scarring. Forms when a supernatural portal opens and closes too fast, the energy burning through whatever surface it touches. Harlow stood, her flashlight beam tracing the scar from top to bottom, then sweeping the rest of the barrier. She spotted two more scars, smaller but identical, hidden in the gap between the barrier’s slats. Three scars. Three portal openings? Eva flipped her book open again, turning to a marked page that featured a diagram of the same silver scars, paired with a paragraph in faded Latin. She translated under her breath, then looked up at Harlow. No. One portal, opening and closing three times. That’s a sign someone was trying to force it open—someone who didn’t know what they were doing. Harlow’s mind flicked back to Morris’s body, found in a derelict warehouse three years prior: same wide, terrified eyes, same lack of physical wounds, same silver rift scars hidden on a nearby metal beam. The coroner had called his death “unexplained” and closed the case, but Harlow had never let it rest—she’d spent every spare hour hunting for clues, until a chance encounter with Eva at the British Museum’s restricted archives had led her to The Veil Market’s existence. Morris’s warehouse had three identical scars. Eva’s green eyes softened for a split second— a rare show of sympathy, one Harlow had only seen twice before—before she tucked another strand of hair behind her left ear and refocused on the compass. The Veil Compass’s sigils are supposed to repel rift energy. They’re crafted to keep the holder safe from the portals it points to. Harlow held the compass up to the flashlight beam, squinting at the sigils. She spotted a faint, deep scratch across one of the largest sigils, a scratch that had reversed the sigil’s curved line into a sharp angle. That’s tampered with. Eva leaned in, her breath catching when she saw the scratch. She pulled a magnifying glass from her satchel—one of the many tools she kept for examining ancient manuscripts—and held it over the sigil. Whoever did this reversed the sigil’s purpose. Instead of repelling rift energy, this compass draws it. Harlow’s jaw tightened until her molars ached. She tapped her watch again, the tick-tick-tick marking the moment she connected the vendor’s death to Morris’s. The victim picked up the compass. Thought it was a tool to find the rift map. Instead, it dragged a portal to him. Eva nodded, flipping her book to a page about sigil reversal. She pointed to a passage that described the side effects: instant cardiac arrest, pupils dilated to pinpricks, no physical wounds. That’s the exact cause of death. The rift energy leeches the heat from the body’s core in seconds. No time to scream. Harlow knelt beside the victim again, her fingers brushing his cold, clammy cheek. She’d felt the same cold on Morris’s cheek, the same lack of warmth that had made her realize something was drastically wrong, even before the coroner’s report came back. He’s still cold. Colder than the station’s air, which is 42 degrees Fahrenheit. Eva pulled a digital thermometer from her satchel—another archive tool—and pressed it to the victim’s neck. She frowned at the reading. 31 degrees. Rift energy leaves a residual cold that lingers for 72 hours. Morris’s body was 30 degrees when you found it, right? Harlow nodded, her flashlight beam sweeping the platform again. She spotted a small, bone-colored token tucked under a loose tile near the bench where Eva had been sitting. It was a Veil Market entry token— a carved raven’s talon, the same type she’d used to get into the station that morning. There’s his bone token. Eva crossed to the tile, carefully lifting it to retrieve the token. She turned it over in her hand, examining the carved runes on its surface. He hid it. Didn’t want the attacker to find it. Maybe he knew he was in danger. Harlow stood, tucking the token into her jacket pocket. She held the tampered Veil Compass up again, the needle still locked on the shadowed tunnel mouth. The portal was here. The attacker forced it open three times. Tried to get something from the victim. Eva flipped her book to a page about Shade artisan rules. She pointed to a passage that forbade the sale of tampered Veil Compasses. Shade artisans face banishment if they tamper with their crafts. Whoever did this is either a rogue artisan or someone who stole a compass and modified it. Harlow’s flashlight beam swept the tunnel mouth’s boarded-up planks. She spotted a faint, ink-stained fingerprint on one of the planks—something that didn’t belong in a station that had been abandoned for decades. That’s a fresh print. Eva pulled a fingerprint kit from her satchel— a favor Harlow had done for the British Museum’s security team had earned her the tool— and carefully lifted the print. She tucked it into a sealed envelope, then pulled a tattered map from her satchel, marked with The Veil Market’s known past locations. The next Market location will be a disused factory in Hackney. It moves at full moon rise, which is in 12 hours. Harlow tapped her watch again, the tick-tick-tick marking the start of a countdown. She tucked the Veil Compass into her jacket pocket, then grabbed the rift map she’d found tucked in the victim’s jacket lining (she’d missed it earlier, a mistake she’d corrected when her flashlight beam had caught its faded ink) and flipped through its pages. The victim’s map has a Shade artisan’s name scrawled in the margin. Kael. He’s the one who crafts Veil Compasses. Eva’s green eyes lit up— a sign she’d found a piece of the puzzle. She flipped her own book to a marked page, pointing to a photograph of a Shade artisan with a scar across his left cheek. Kael. He’s been under the Museum’s watch for six months. He’s been stealing restricted archive manuscripts about sigil reversal. Harlow’s military bearing sharpened, every muscle in her body coiling into a state of readiness. She’d spent three years chasing the ghost of Morris’s death; now, she had a name, a location, and a physical clue. We’re going to Hackney. We’re going to confront Kael. Eva tucked a final strand of hair behind her left ear, then stuffed her books and tools back into her satchel, slinging it over her shoulder. She picked up the bone token, turning it over in her hand. We need two tokens to get into the Hackney factory. I can get a second one from a contact at the archive. Harlow’s boot crunched tile as she walked toward the station’s exit, her flashlight beam cutting a path through the dark. The Market’s residual scent still stung her throat, but now it felt like a trail, not a dead end. I’ll meet you at the archive in one hour. Bring your magnifying glass. Bring your books. Bring everything you’ve got on sigil reversal. Eva followed, her own boots tapping softly against the tile. I’ll bring the fingerprint analysis kit too. We can run the print through the Museum’s database on the way. Harlow tapped her watch again, the tick-tick-tick marking the moment she finally felt like she was going to get answers—answers for Morris, answers for the vendor, answers for every unsolved supernatural death the Metropolitan Police had swept under the rug. She pushed open the station’s rusted metal door, stepping into the gray Camden dawn.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences1
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
90.19% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2039
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count3
1
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
1"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
70.57% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2039
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"echoing"
count2
1
word"flicked"
count2
2
word"etched"
count1
3
word"glint"
count1
4
word"oppressive"
count1
5
word"silence"
count1
6
word"tracing"
count1
7
word"encounter"
count1
8
word"warmth"
count1
9
word"database"
count1
highlights
0"echoing"
1"flicked"
2"etched"
3"glint"
4"oppressive"
5"silence"
6"tracing"
7"encounter"
8"warmth"
9"database"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences135
matches
0"d in frustration"
47.62% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount7
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences135
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"realize"
hedgeMatches
0"try to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences135
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen54
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2004
ratio0
matches(empty)
97.22% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Cardiac arrest, they said."
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions111
wordCount2003
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity1.05
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Camden2
Tube1
Veil13
Market10
Morris8
Metropolitan2
Police2
Eva19
Compass5
Shade6
Oxford-annotated1
British3
Museum5
Harlow21
Latin1
Fahrenheit1
Compasses2
Hackney3
Kael3
Bring3
persons
0"Market"
1"Morris"
2"Police"
3"Eva"
4"Compass"
5"Museum"
6"Harlow"
places
0"Veil"
1"Oxford-annotated"
2"British"
3"Hackney"
globalScore0.976
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences107
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"felt like a trail, not a dead end"
1"felt like she was going to get answers—"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2004
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences135
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs61
mean32.85
std29.27
cv0.891
sampleLengths
0179
1115
2112
310
418
56
631
710
887
929
1043
1126
1219
1321
1449
1527
1635
175
1837
1925
2079
216
2235
2323
2438
253
2634
2716
2824
2923
3031
3122
3242
3313
3421
3523
3651
374
3826
3917
4026
4118
4224
4327
4432
454
4652
4722
4857
4920
87.07% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount7
totalSentences135
matches
0"was perched"
1"been boarded"
2"were emptied"
3"are supposed"
4"crafted"
5"tampered"
6"been abandoned"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs355
matches
0"was wrestling"
1"was trying were doing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount22
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences19
totalSentences135
ratio0.141
matches
0"This was The Veil Market’s last known haunt—before the full moon’s rise had forced vendors to pack their enchanted trinkets and banned alchemical vials into unmarked crates and vanish to a new hidden spot."
1"The Market’s residual scent clung to every crevice: burnt myrrh that stung the back of her throat, rust from a hundred discarded metal charms, and a faint, sickly sweet tang she’d come to associate with supernatural residue—same as the tang that had clung to her partner DS Morris’s body three years prior."
2"Her sharp jaw tightened; she tapped the worn leather watch on her left wrist, the tick-tick-tick marking the three minutes she’d spent staring at evidence that refused to cohere into anything the Metropolitan Police’s rulebook could classify."
3"Beside his outstretched hand lay a small brass compass, its casing coated in a verdigris patina so thick it dulled the protective sigils etched into its face—she’d seen a similar compass in Eva’s occult research books, labeled a Veil Compass, crafted by Shade artisans to point toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal."
4"She tucked a strand of hair behind her left ear—her nervous habit, one Harlow had come to recognize as a signal she was wrestling with a puzzle her academic training hadn’t fully prepared her for—round glasses slipping down her freckled nose as she squinted at a dog-eared book in her lap."
5"She carefully lifted the Veil Compass by its thin brass chain, her fingers avoiding the sigils—she’d learned the hard way that supernatural objects could leave burns if handled without caution, a lesson she’d picked up after grazing a cursed amulet during a case six months prior."
6"No rift map—his tipster said he’d been haggling over a rare one with a Shade artisan the night before he died."
7"She pointed to a faint, glowing silver scratch on one of the barrier’s metal slats—something that didn’t match the rough, brown scratch marks left by broken tile."
8"That’s a sign someone was trying to force it open—someone who didn’t know what they were doing."
9"The coroner had called his death “unexplained” and closed the case, but Harlow had never let it rest—she’d spent every spare hour hunting for clues, until a chance encounter with Eva at the British Museum’s restricted archives had led her to The Veil Market’s existence."
10"Eva’s green eyes softened for a split second— a rare show of sympathy, one Harlow had only seen twice before—before she tucked another strand of hair behind her left ear and refocused on the compass."
11"She pulled a magnifying glass from her satchel—one of the many tools she kept for examining ancient manuscripts—and held it over the sigil."
12"Eva pulled a digital thermometer from her satchel—another archive tool—and pressed it to the victim’s neck."
13"It was a Veil Market entry token— a carved raven’s talon, the same type she’d used to get into the station that morning."
14"She spotted a faint, ink-stained fingerprint on one of the planks—something that didn’t belong in a station that had been abandoned for decades."
15"Eva pulled a fingerprint kit from her satchel— a favor Harlow had done for the British Museum’s security team had earned her the tool— and carefully lifted the print."
16"Eva’s green eyes lit up— a sign she’d found a piece of the puzzle."
17"She’d spent three years chasing the ghost of Morris’s death; now, she had a name, a location, and a physical clue."
18"Harlow tapped her watch again, the tick-tick-tick marking the moment she finally felt like she was going to get answers—answers for Morris, answers for the vendor, answers for every unsolved supernatural death the Metropolitan Police had swept under the rug."
76.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2038
adjectiveStacks4
stackExamples
0"faint, sickly sweet tang"
1"thick, dust-mottled dark"
2"small, bone-colored token"
3"faint, ink-stained fingerprint"
adverbCount42
adverbRatio0.020608439646712464
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.005397448478900883
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences135
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences135
mean14.84
std11.5
cv0.775
sampleLengths
029
134
252
327
437
526
636
753
822
939
1051
1110
1218
132
144
1512
1619
175
185
1917
2046
2124
225
2321
243
2516
2627
2710
287
299
305
3114
329
337
345
3522
3627
375
384
3918
4019
4116
422
433
4427
4510
461
477
4817
4934
42.59% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.25925925925925924
totalSentences135
uniqueOpeners35
77.52% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences129
matches
0"Instead of repelling rift energy,"
1"Instead, it dragged a portal"
2"Maybe he knew he was"
ratio0.023
71.16% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount48
totalSentences129
matches
0"She flicked her flashlight beam"
1"Her sharp jaw tightened; she"
2"Her worn leather satchel, stuffed"
3"She tucked a strand of"
4"She tucked another strand of"
5"They didn’t smell the residue."
6"They didn’t see the compass."
7"She carefully lifted the Veil"
8"She leaned over the compass,"
9"You can’t enter The Veil"
10"He couldn’t have come here"
11"She tapped her watch again,"
12"She pointed to a faint,"
13"It’s rift residue scarring."
14"She spotted two more scars,"
15"She translated under her breath,"
16"They’re crafted to keep the"
17"She spotted a faint, deep"
18"She pulled a magnifying glass"
19"She tapped her watch again,"
ratio0.372
53.02% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount105
totalSentences129
matches
0"Harlow’s boot crunched broken terracotta"
1"This was The Veil Market’s"
2"The Market’s residual scent clung"
3"She flicked her flashlight beam"
4"Her sharp jaw tightened; she"
5"The body was a Veil"
6"Eva was perched on a"
7"Her worn leather satchel, stuffed"
8"She tucked a strand of"
9"The coroner’s office faxed their"
10"Harlow’s flashlight beam snapped to"
11"Eva slammed the book shut,"
12"She tucked another strand of"
13"They didn’t smell the residue."
14"They didn’t see the compass."
15"Harlow knelt, her knee sinking"
16"She carefully lifted the Veil"
17"The compass’s needle twitched once,"
18"The victim’s pockets were emptied."
19"Eva stood, her book still"
ratio0.814
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences129
matches
0"Either the attacker took it,"
1"Whoever did this reversed the"
2"Whoever did this is either"
ratio0.023
29.62% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences82
technicalSentenceCount13
matches
0"The Market’s residual scent clung to every crevice: burnt myrrh that stung the back of her throat, rust from a hundred discarded metal charms, and a faint, sick…"
1"Her sharp jaw tightened; she tapped the worn leather watch on her left wrist, the tick-tick-tick marking the three minutes she’d spent staring at evidence that …"
2"The body was a Veil Market vendor, she’d learned from a reluctant tipster who’d traded the information for a promised reprieve from a minor theft charge."
3"No cuts marred his weathered hands, no bruises bloomed on his neck, but his eyes were frozen wide, pupils dilated to pinpricks as if he’d stared into something …"
4"Her worn leather satchel, stuffed to bursting with Oxford-annotated ancient history tomes and British Museum restricted archive manuscripts, propped open at her…"
5"She pointed to a faint, glowing silver scratch on one of the barrier’s metal slats—something that didn’t match the rough, brown scratch marks left by broken til…"
6"Eva flipped her book open again, turning to a marked page that featured a diagram of the same silver scars, paired with a paragraph in faded Latin."
7"She spotted a faint, deep scratch across one of the largest sigils, a scratch that had reversed the sigil’s curved line into a sharp angle."
8"She pointed to a passage that described the side effects: instant cardiac arrest, pupils dilated to pinpricks, no physical wounds."
9"She’d felt the same cold on Morris’s cheek, the same lack of warmth that had made her realize something was drastically wrong, even before the coroner’s report …"
10"She pointed to a passage that forbade the sale of tampered Veil Compasses."
11"She spotted a faint, ink-stained fingerprint on one of the planks—something that didn’t belong in a station that had been abandoned for decades."
12"Harlow’s military bearing sharpened, every muscle in her body coiling into a state of readiness."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags1
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"The coroner had (have)"
dialogueSentences1
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio1
80.8641%