Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY965DBJSQFKX8Q951DYMM6

Run Details

Duration:
3m 24s
Cost:
$0.017531
Provider:
Seed

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rory’s black shoulder-length hair whipped her cheeks as she cut through Richmond Park’s frost-dusted paths, the crumpled receipt from her last Golden Empress delivery crinkling in her jacket pocket. She’d dropped off a carton of honey-glazed duck to a businessman near the royal deer enclosure, his quick tip barely covering the cost of her oyster card home—but Isolde’s message, delivered via Nyx’s shadow-whisper in her flat’s hallway, had trumped her shift’s end. Her left wrist burned, a faint prick of the crescent scar she’d earned falling from her father’s barrister’s bookshelf at seven, and she rubbed it against the wool of her coat, a nervous tic she’d never outgrown. The scar’s edge was still raised, a permanent reminder of the day she’d tried to reach a copy of her mother’s Welsh poetry collection, only to send a stack of legal briefs crashing down. Nyx hovered at her heel, incorporeal now, their violet-glowing eyes a faint smudge in the dusk shadow of a gnarled oak tree. When she’d first met the Shade, she’d flinched at their wind-whisper voice, but now it was a strange comfort—like the hum of her mother’s Welsh lullabies through a thin wall. “The boundary nears,” they breathed, their shadow form sliding under a splintered park bench before coiling at her feet, solidifying just enough to let her feel a cool weight against her ankle. At 6’2”, their humanoid silhouette cut a sharp line against the frost, their glowing eyes pinning her to the spot. She’d watched them shift forms before—sliding through keyholes, curling around streetlights—but their solid form still made her pause; it was too human, too much a reminder that they’d once been Aldric, a sorcerer trapped between realms in 1643 after a failed summoning ritual. Rory’s Heartstone Pendant, a thumbnail-sized crimson gem on a silver chain tucked under her shirt, pulsed faintly—warmth seeping through the fabric like a distant campfire. She’d found it tucked into her delivery bag three days prior, no note, only the faint inner glow that had made her freeze mid-dropoff. Dymas origin, she’d deduced from the faint Hel-portal pulse (she’d research Hel realms during her Pre-Law days at Cardiff University, a habit of overanalyzing every unknown until it fit into a legal brief), but she hadn’t dared tell Yu-Fei or her mother—too many questions she couldn’t answer without sounding mad. Then she saw the standing stones. Ancient oak, their bark gnarled like crumpled legal briefs left in the rain, marked the Grove’s boundary, their tops glowing with a faint silver light that didn’t match the dusk sky’s gray. Isolde stood between them, her silver waist-length hair cascading over her ethereal shoulders, pale lavender eyes locking onto Rory’s bright blue ones. Rory scanned the ground—no footprints, not even a dent in the frost, and her breath caught in her throat. The Half-Fae seer couldn’t lie, but she could twist truth like a legal loophole, a fact Nyx had warned her about before they left the flat above Silas’ bar. “Your stone beats for the thin place,” Isolde said, her voice like wind through chimes. “The glutton’s vineyard stretches its roots to our door.” Rory furrowed her brow, parsing the riddle like a contract clause she’d been hired to dissect. Glutton’s vineyard—Dymas, Prince Belphegor’s realm of excess, where helbound souls stirred exotic ingredients for grand feasts. Thin place—the Veil, which weakened with the winter solstice (only a week away, she’d noted from her calendar’s sticky note reminder to call her mother). “You mean the Heartstone’s pulsing is because of a Hel rift here?” she asked, her Pre-Law precision cutting through the cryptic words. Isolde’s lips curved into a faint smile, her silver hair catching the standing stones’ glow. “I cannot speak falsehoods. The stone’s warmth is a map, not a warning.” Nyx’s shadow form contracted, their voice a sharper whisper that made Rory’s neck prickle. “Aldric’s ritual taught me thin places bite. Cross with caution—they trap souls who don’t watch their steps.” Rory froze—she’d never heard them name their former human self, Aldric, the sorcerer who’d become trapped between realms four centuries prior. The memory of Evan’s sharp words, you’re always overthinking, you’ll get yourself trapped, flickered in her head, and she clamped down on it, her intelligence a shield against the old fear. She stepped toward the standing stones, the frost crunching under her boots—until she crossed the first oak’s shadow. The crunch vanished. The frost melted into dark, rich soil. Wildflowers burst from the ground at her feet: crimson poppies that matched her Heartstone, white daisies with golden centers, jasmine blooms that scented the air like summer, even though London’s winter had turned the park’s grass brown outside the boundary. Her left wrist’s scar burned hotter, a sharp throb that made her gasp, and she yanked back her coat sleeve to stare at the crescent mark, its edges flushing pink with the pain. “Time unspools here,” Isolde said, gliding past her—still no footprints, not even a trace of her dress brushing the wildflowers. “An hour inside is a child’s skips outside. Or a grandparent’s final breath.” Rory fumbled for her phone, pulling it from her pocket. The screen was black, dead, even though she’d charged it fully before her delivery. She spotted a discarded soda can half-buried in the wildflowers, its aluminum rusted through like it had been there for decades, while a nearby dandelion’s fluff floated toward her, fresh as a spring morning. Nyx shifted to incorporeal, their shadow sliding up a standing stone to peer at the Grove’s clearing, their violet eyes glowing brighter with what Rory took for unease. “The pendant’s pulsing is stronger,” Rory said, tucking the phone back and pressing her palm to the crimson gem through her shirt. The warmth seeped into her skin, a steady thrum that matched her heartbeat, and she realized it was syncing with the standing stones’ silver glow. “Is there a Hel portal here, hidden in the Grove’s pocket?” Isolde stopped at the clearing’s center, her silver hair catching the Grove’s amber-tinted light—a faint echo of Dymas’ warm amber sky, Rory noted, a thread connecting the two realms. She held out a hand, and the Fae-Forged Blade materialized in her palm—slender, leaf-shaped, moonsilver, its faint luminescence making Rory’s eyes water when she stared too long. “This cuts through wards,” Isolde said, her voice sharp now, no riddle to hide behind. “Against demons that creep through the Veil’s tears. Against the helbound souls that serve Belphegor.” Rory reached for it, and the cold hit her like a slap across the face, making her gasp. She’d never felt anything so cold—colder than Evan’s silent treatments that stretched for days, colder than the frost outside the Grove that had nipped her cheeks on the walk over. The blade’s weight was solid in her hand, a contrast to Nyx’s shifting form, and she curled her fingers around the hilt, her crescent scar still burning like a brand. “Why give this to me?” she asked, her Pre-Law training making her demand terms, not just accept a gift blindly. Isolde’s pale lavender eyes softened, a rare crack in her ethereal facade. “The glutton’s servants seek the Heartstone. They tracked you from Dymas to your delivery route, to your flat above the bar. You cannot outrun them—but you can cut their path before they take the stone and open a full portal to Belphegor’s realm.” Nyx’s whisper cut through the Grove’s quiet, their shadow form coiling around her ankle like a chain. “I saw them in the shadow of Silas’ bar last night—helbound souls, their breath reeking of Dymasian spiced wine. They know you have the pendant. They’re waiting for the solstice to strike.” Rory’s chest tightened, her bright blue eyes widening with the weight of the revelation. She thought of her mother in Cardiff, texting her every Sunday to ask if she was eating enough, if she was still writing her legal essays (a habit she’d kept up, even though she’d abandoned Pre-Law). She thought of Yu-Fei’s quiet concern when she’d shown up to her delivery shift with a black eye (Evan’s doing, a month before she fled to London), of the way Yu-Fei had slipped her an extra carton of fried rice without a word. She pressed the Heartstone harder against her chest, its warmth a anchor in the Grove’s unspooling time, and stared at the Fae-Forged Blade’s cold glow. She turned to Isolde, her voice steady despite the fear coiling in her gut. “If the Veil is weak here, can we seal the rift before the winter solstice? Before the helbound souls can reach the Heartstone?” Isolde’s lips curved into a riddle again, but Rory heard the truth beneath the cryptic words, parsed like a legal precedent. “The stone’s root is in the glutton’s realm. To seal the rift, you must taste the excess you fear—you must go to Dymas and unbind the stone from its origin.” Nyx’s shadow form contracted, their violet eyes flaring. “Dymas is a trap for mortals. Aldric’s ritual once brushed its edges—its excesses consume souls who cannot resist.” Rory glanced back at the standing stones, now faded like they were a memory instead of a physical boundary. A child’s laugh floated from outside the Grove, high and bright, but when she tried to pinpoint its source, it vanished, replaced by the distant creak of a Fae oak. She clutched the Fae-Forged Blade in one hand and pressed the Heartstone to her chest with the other, her crescent scar still burning a steady reminder of the risks she’d always taken to protect the people she loved. Her quick, out-of-the-box thinking kicked in—she’d research Dymasian portals at the university library tomorrow, she’d draft a plan like a legal strategy, she’d not let the glutton’s servants trap her like Evan once had. The Grove’s wildflowers bloomed brighter, their scent overwhelming now, and Rory stepped toward the clearing’s center, her boots sinking into the rich soil without a sound. She was in over her head, but for the first time since she’d fled Cardiff, she didn’t feel trapped—she felt prepared, her intelligence and the two artifacts in her hands a shield against the realms that sought to claim her. Nyx’s shadow slid down the standing stone to join her, their violet eyes softening with a flicker of what might have been respect, and Isolde glided beside them, her silver hair weaving through the wildflower stems without a single petal being crushed. The Veil’s thinness hummed in the air, the Heartstone’s pulse a steady drumbeat, and Rory knew the next step would be dangerous—but for the first time in years, she was ready to run toward the fight, not away from it.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Ancient oak their bark gnarled like [like]"
1"quiet their shadow form coiling around [around]"
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.833
leniency1
rawRatio0.1
effectiveRatio0.1
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1820
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
25.82% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1820
totalAiIsms27
found
0
word"whisper"
count4
1
word"reminder"
count4
2
word"weight"
count3
3
word"pulsed"
count1
4
word"warmth"
count4
5
word"pulse"
count2
6
word"cascading"
count1
7
word"scanned"
count1
8
word"furrowed"
count1
9
word"flickered"
count1
10
word"throb"
count1
11
word"charged"
count1
12
word"echo"
count1
13
word"facade"
count1
14
word"flicker"
count1
highlights
0"whisper"
1"reminder"
2"weight"
3"pulsed"
4"warmth"
5"pulse"
6"cascading"
7"scanned"
8"furrowed"
9"flickered"
10"throb"
11"charged"
12"echo"
13"facade"
14"flicker"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences40
matches(empty)
0.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences40
filterMatches
0"feel"
1"know"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences40
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen150
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1778
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
99.29% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions97
wordCount1479
uniqueNames30
maxNameDensity1.01
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Golden1
Empress1
Isolde10
Nyx9
Welsh2
Shade1
Rory15
Heartstone5
Pendant1
Hel-portal1
Hel3
Pre-Law4
Cardiff3
University1
Yu-Fei3
Grove9
Half-Fae1
Dymas4
Prince1
Belphegor2
Veil3
London2
Evan3
Sunday1
Fae-Forged2
Blade2
Fae4
Dymasian1
persons
0"Isolde"
1"Nyx"
2"Rory"
3"Heartstone"
4"Yu-Fei"
5"Prince"
6"Belphegor"
7"Veil"
8"Evan"
9"Blade"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Cardiff"
3"University"
4"Grove"
5"Dymas"
6"London"
7"Fae-Forged"
8"Fae"
globalScore0.993
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences38
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1778
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences40
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs23
mean77.3
std41.14
cv0.532
sampleLengths
0143
1147
299
36
4102
524
679
728
883
9101
1033
1186
1258
1386
1498
1555
1649
17118
1837
1951
2026
21121
22148
96.49% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences40
matches
0"been hired"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs239
matches
0"was syncing"
1"was eating"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount18
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences16
totalSentences40
ratio0.4
matches
0"She’d dropped off a carton of honey-glazed duck to a businessman near the royal deer enclosure, his quick tip barely covering the cost of her oyster card home—but Isolde’s message, delivered via Nyx’s shadow-whisper in her flat’s hallway, had trumped her shift’s end."
1"When she’d first met the Shade, she’d flinched at their wind-whisper voice, but now it was a strange comfort—like the hum of her mother’s Welsh lullabies through a thin wall."
2"At 6’2”, their humanoid silhouette cut a sharp line against the frost, their glowing eyes pinning her to the spot. She’d watched them shift forms before—sliding through keyholes, curling around streetlights—but their solid form still made her pause; it was too human, too much a reminder that they’d once been Aldric, a sorcerer trapped between realms in 1643 after a failed summoning ritual."
3"Rory’s Heartstone Pendant, a thumbnail-sized crimson gem on a silver chain tucked under her shirt, pulsed faintly—warmth seeping through the fabric like a distant campfire. She’d found it tucked into her delivery bag three days prior, no note, only the faint inner glow that had made her freeze mid-dropoff. Dymas origin, she’d deduced from the faint Hel-portal pulse (she’d research Hel realms during her Pre-Law days at Cardiff University, a habit of overanalyzing every unknown until it fit into a legal brief), but she hadn’t dared tell Yu-Fei or her mother—too many questions she couldn’t answer without sounding mad."
4"Ancient oak, their bark gnarled like crumpled legal briefs left in the rain, marked the Grove’s boundary, their tops glowing with a faint silver light that didn’t match the dusk sky’s gray. Isolde stood between them, her silver waist-length hair cascading over her ethereal shoulders, pale lavender eyes locking onto Rory’s bright blue ones. Rory scanned the ground—no footprints, not even a dent in the frost, and her breath caught in her throat. The Half-Fae seer couldn’t lie, but she could twist truth like a legal loophole, a fact Nyx had warned her about before they left the flat above Silas’ bar."
5"Rory furrowed her brow, parsing the riddle like a contract clause she’d been hired to dissect. Glutton’s vineyard—Dymas, Prince Belphegor’s realm of excess, where helbound souls stirred exotic ingredients for grand feasts. Thin place—the Veil, which weakened with the winter solstice (only a week away, she’d noted from her calendar’s sticky note reminder to call her mother). “You mean the Heartstone’s pulsing is because of a Hel rift here?” she asked, her Pre-Law precision cutting through the cryptic words."
6"Cross with caution—they trap souls who don’t watch their steps.” Rory froze—she’d never heard them name their former human self, Aldric, the sorcerer who’d become trapped between realms four centuries prior. The memory of Evan’s sharp words, you’re always overthinking, you’ll get yourself trapped, flickered in her head, and she clamped down on it, her intelligence a shield against the old fear."
7"She stepped toward the standing stones, the frost crunching under her boots—until she crossed the first oak’s shadow. The crunch vanished. The frost melted into dark, rich soil. Wildflowers burst from the ground at her feet: crimson poppies that matched her Heartstone, white daisies with golden centers, jasmine blooms that scented the air like summer, even though London’s winter had turned the park’s grass brown outside the boundary. Her left wrist’s scar burned hotter, a sharp throb that made her gasp, and she yanked back her coat sleeve to stare at the crescent mark, its edges flushing pink with the pain."
8"“Time unspools here,” Isolde said, gliding past her—still no footprints, not even a trace of her dress brushing the wildflowers. “An hour inside is a child’s skips outside."
9"Isolde stopped at the clearing’s center, her silver hair catching the Grove’s amber-tinted light—a faint echo of Dymas’ warm amber sky, Rory noted, a thread connecting the two realms. She held out a hand, and the Fae-Forged Blade materialized in her palm—slender, leaf-shaped, moonsilver, its faint luminescence making Rory’s eyes water when she stared too long. “This cuts through wards,” Isolde said, her voice sharp now, no riddle to hide behind. “Against demons that creep through the Veil’s tears."
10"Rory reached for it, and the cold hit her like a slap across the face, making her gasp. She’d never felt anything so cold—colder than Evan’s silent treatments that stretched for days, colder than the frost outside the Grove that had nipped her cheeks on the walk over. The blade’s weight was solid in her hand, a contrast to Nyx’s shifting form, and she curled her fingers around the hilt, her crescent scar still burning like a brand. “Why give this to me?” she asked, her Pre-Law training making her demand terms, not just accept a gift blindly."
11"You cannot outrun them—but you can cut their path before they take the stone and open a full portal to Belphegor’s realm.”"
12"To seal the rift, you must taste the excess you fear—you must go to Dymas and unbind the stone from its origin.”"
13"Aldric’s ritual once brushed its edges—its excesses consume souls who cannot resist.”"
14"Rory glanced back at the standing stones, now faded like they were a memory instead of a physical boundary. A child’s laugh floated from outside the Grove, high and bright, but when she tried to pinpoint its source, it vanished, replaced by the distant creak of a Fae oak. She clutched the Fae-Forged Blade in one hand and pressed the Heartstone to her chest with the other, her crescent scar still burning a steady reminder of the risks she’d always taken to protect the people she loved. Her quick, out-of-the-box thinking kicked in—she’d research Dymasian portals at the university library tomorrow, she’d draft a plan like a legal strategy, she’d not let the glutton’s servants trap her like Evan once had."
15"The Grove’s wildflowers bloomed brighter, their scent overwhelming now, and Rory stepped toward the clearing’s center, her boots sinking into the rich soil without a sound. She was in over her head, but for the first time since she’d fled Cardiff, she didn’t feel trapped—she felt prepared, her intelligence and the two artifacts in her hands a shield against the realms that sought to claim her. Nyx’s shadow slid down the standing stone to join her, their violet eyes softening with a flicker of what might have been respect, and Isolde glided beside them, her silver hair weaving through the wildflower stems without a single petal being crushed. The Veil’s thinness hummed in the air, the Heartstone’s pulse a steady drumbeat, and Rory knew the next step would be dangerous—but for the first time in years, she was ready to run toward the fight, not away from it."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount809
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount14
adverbRatio0.0173053152039555
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.002472187886279357
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences40
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences40
mean44.45
std37.9
cv0.853
sampleLengths
029
143
237
334
422
530
632
763
899
96
10102
1124
1279
1319
149
1521
1662
17101
1828
195
2086
2158
2279
237
2498
2518
2615
2722
2836
296
307
31118
3229
338
3429
3522
3614
3712
38121
39148
80.83% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.5
totalSentences40
uniqueOpeners20
85.47% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences39
matches
0"Then she saw the standing"
ratio0.026
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount9
totalSentences39
matches
0"She’d dropped off a carton"
1"Her left wrist burned, a"
2"they breathed, their shadow form"
3"She stepped toward the standing"
4"They tracked you from Dymas"
5"You cannot outrun them—but you"
6"They know you have the"
7"They’re waiting for the solstice"
8"She turned to Isolde, her"
ratio0.231
62.56% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount31
totalSentences39
matches
0"Rory’s black shoulder-length hair whipped"
1"She’d dropped off a carton"
2"Her left wrist burned, a"
3"The scar’s edge was still"
4"Nyx hovered at her heel,"
5"they breathed, their shadow form"
6"Rory’s Heartstone Pendant, a thumbnail-sized"
7"Isolde said, her voice like"
8"Rory furrowed her brow, parsing"
9"Isolde’s lips curved into a"
10"The stone’s warmth is a"
11"Nyx’s shadow form contracted, their"
12"She stepped toward the standing"
13"Isolde said, gliding past her—still"
14"Rory fumbled for her phone,"
15"Rory said, tucking the phone"
16"Isolde stopped at the clearing’s"
17"Rory reached for it, and"
18"Isolde’s pale lavender eyes softened,"
19"They tracked you from Dymas"
ratio0.795
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences39
matches
0"Before the helbound souls can"
1"To seal the rift, you"
ratio0.051
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences13
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Rory’s Heartstone Pendant, a thumbnail-sized crimson gem on a silver chain tucked under her shirt, pulsed faintly—warmth seeping through the fabric like a dista…"
1"She stepped toward the standing stones, the frost crunching under her boots—until she crossed the first oak’s shadow. The crunch vanished. The frost melted into…"
2"Rory fumbled for her phone, pulling it from her pocket. The screen was black, dead, even though she’d charged it fully before her delivery. She spotted a discar…"
3"The Grove’s wildflowers bloomed brighter, their scent overwhelming now, and Rory stepped toward the clearing’s center, her boots sinking into the rich soil with…"
62.50% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Isolde’s lips curved, her silver hair catching the standing stones’ glow"
1"Isolde said, her voice sharp now, no riddle to hide behind"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"they breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.167
leniency0.333
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.083
83.7658%