Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY97ND47T5AADD9F8S1BT19

Run Details

Duration:
30.8s
Cost:
$0.001459
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The rain slashes the London streets like a scalpell, stitching the night into a gray blur. Detective Harlow Quinn runs with the precision of a soldier—shoulders back, boots finding the grit of pavement without faltering—her breath ragged but steady, the weight of her service revolver a leaden counterbalance against her ribs. It’s 2:17 a.m. by her left wrist, the leather strap frayed from 18 years of wear, and the time seeps into her bones, a timer ticking toward the moment she’ll catch him. *The rat*, she thinks, her jaw tight. *The one who’s been slipping through the cracks for six months*. She’d seen him first in the surveillance van, silhouetted against the green neon of The Raven’s Nest—a flicker of dark hair, the curve of a scar on his left forearm, the *Saint Christopher* medallion glinting at his throat. *Tomás*, the file said. *Estranged from the clique, but useful*. Useful for what? Harlow didn’t know. Not yet. But when he’d turned toward the alley behind the bar, his eyes locking on hers through the rain-streaked glass, she’d moved. The chase began on Dean Street, where his boots had splashed through a puddle, leaving a footprint that still glowed faintly—*magic*, she realized too late, as the liquid seared her calf through her tactical pants. She’d ignored the pain, lunging after him, but by the time she’d rounded the corner, he was gone. Now, the alley behind Soho’s Flanagan’s Pub closes in on her, the walls of brick and dripping metal enclosing her movement, the air thick with the sour stench of garbage and damp stone. Another glow—pale blue, like a lost match—flickers up ahead. That’s when she hears it: a *scuffle*, muffled, followed by a low, guttural snarl. Harlow freezes, hand hovering over her holster. The rain beats down, but she sees the way the light *pulses*, like a heartbeat. *Supernatural*, her gut tells her. She’d spent three years after Morris died refusing to believe the last case hadn’t been a human error. *Ghosts*, the coroner had called it. *A trick of the light*. But Morris’ body had been found in a ditch, eyes wide, a single, perfect puncture wound in his throat—*a fang*, someone had whispered before the station swept it under the rug. Harlow doesn’t whisper anymore. She moves forward, her shoulder pressed to the wall, and around the corner, there he is: Tomás, bent low, a man in a trench coat crumpled at his feet. The man’s throat is torn, black blood seeping into the rainwater, but Tomás isn’t looking at him. His gaze is fixed on the ground, where a bone token glints—a fox’s skull, its eyes hollow, carved with runes Harlow doesn’t recognize. “Tomás.” Her voice is steady, but her thumb rubs the edge of her utility belt, where her flashlight lives. He jumps, spinning. The medallion clatters against his chest, and for a second, Harlow sees the fear in his eyes—*real* fear, not the practiced calm he’d worn when she’d raided his clinic last month. “Detective,” he says, his Spanish accent thick, the *s* in the word slurring like a hiccup. He wipes his hands on his pants, leaving smears of black. “I… I don’t know what happened here. He just… showed up. Said he needed help.” “Who showed up?” Harlow steps closer, her boots splashing in a puddle. The fox token is half-buried in the muck, its runes still glowing, faint as starlight. Tomás’ jaw tightens. “A client. From the market. The one who’s been asking about… *the thing* you’re looking for.” “The Veil Market.” Harlow’s throat feels dry. She’d heard the rumors—black markets where you traded blood for potions, information for souls, a fetus for a wish. The Met had dismissed them as old wives’ tales until last week, when a fishmonger in Whitechapel had died, her tongue torn out, the words *Veil* carved into her palm. Tomás nods. “He wanted to know if I knew how to bypass the wards. The bone tokens—they’re not enough if the warder catches you. But he… he had something else. A key. A *real* key, made from a dragon’s tooth.” He swallows. “I told him no. Told him they’d kill him if he went back. But he left. And then… that man. The one who attacked me. He had the same key. Said the Clique didn’t pay for lies anymore. Just *answers*.” Harlow bends to pick up the fox token. It’s warm, like a hand, and when she touches it, she sees a flash—*a train*, dark and empty, a woman with her hair in a bun, screaming. *Morris*. “Tomás,” she says, standing, “where is he going?” He hesitates. The rain slows, just for a second, and for a moment, Harlow sees the man he used to be—the paramedic, the hero, the one who’d argued with her for an hour after she’d arrested his patient, a nephilim with a bullet in his shoulder. “The old Northern Line tunnel,” he says, finally. “The one beneath Camden. The market’s there. But only if you have a token. And… and a *stake*.” “A stake?” Harlow’s fingers curl around the revolver. “For the warders. They don’t like humans who don’t belong. Not after what happened in ’07.” He looks away. “The Clique uses it to keep them out. But he… he didn’t need a token. Not with that key.” Harlow stares at the token in her hand. The glow is brighter now, a steady hum, and in her mind, she sees the Fox—a trickster, a liar, a guide. *Morris used to tell me stories about tricksters*, she thinks. *Said they were the only ones who could be trusted*. “Show me the tunnel,” she says. Tomás’ eyes widen. “You can’t. It’s dangerous. The market’s not just goods. It’s *hunger*. It eats people who get greedy. Who think they can take more than they give.” “I’ve seen worse,” Harlow says. She unclips her flashlight, twists the dial, and the beam cuts through the rain. “He took Morris. He’s going to take whoever he can. I’m not letting him.” He sighs, the sound heavy. “The entrance is through a pub. The *Bricklayer’s Arms*. There’s a boarded-up archway in the cellar. You have to say the password: *‘The dead do not forget.’* But if the warders smell you… they’ll hunt you until you’re dead. And I don’t think you’re wearing enough protection.” Harlow takes off her jacket, revealing a bulletproof vest beneath. “I’ll do. Where’s the pub?” He gives her the address, his voice low. “And Harlow…” She looks up. “Be careful. The market doesn’t *let* people leave easily. Especially not you.” --- The Bricklayer’s Arms is a stench of beer and fried food, the jukebox blaring a 70s ballad that echoes off the tin ceiling. Harlow stands at the bar, pretending to nurse a pint of lager, her eyes scanning the room. The cellar door is at the back, a set of wooden steps leading down, and she can see the boarded archway, splinters of wood crumbling where someone has tried to break through. The password comes to her as she takes a sip—the words rolling off her tongue like a threat. “The dead do not forget.” The wood of the archway *screams*, a high-pitched wail that makes her ears bleed. The boards fall away, clattering to the floor, and Harlow steps through, the air thick with the smell of rust and damp stone. Below, the tunnel stretches into darkness, a shadowy river of concrete that glows faintly with bioluminescent moss—*magic*, she realizes. *They grow it here*. She turns on her flashlight, and the beam cuts through the gloom, revealing a sign painted on the wall: *VEIL MARKET. 100 YARDS. NO SHOUTING. NO STEALING. NO SURVIVING*. Harlow laughs, a dry, humorless sound. “Glad someone’s honest.” She walks forward, her boots echoing against the concrete. The tunnel widens, and up ahead, she sees a light—pale, green, like the neon of a city at night. The sound of voices reaches her, a babble of languages she doesn’t recognize, mixed with the clink of glasses and the low hum of magic. As she rounds a corner, the market comes into view. It’s an underground station, the platform walls decorated with faded posters of the Tube map, now covered in ivy and runes. Stalls line the edges—wooden tables piled high with jars of glowing liquid, cages holding strange animals with scales like metal, vendors haggling over the price of a wolf’s heart. A woman with antlers sells potions from a cauldron, her voice a siren’s song. A man with no face sells information from a booth, his sign reading *“I know what you did. I can make you forget.”* Harlow’s pulse quickens. This is it. This is where the Clique operates. Where they trade secrets, where they sell death. And there, at the far end of the platform, is the suspect—his back to her, the dragon’s tooth key in his hand, turning it in a lock set into the wall. He hesitates, then pushes the door open, and disappears. Harlow moves forward, her revolver raised, her eyes scanning the market. Stalls grow closer, the vendors eyeing her warily. A guard—tall, with skin like ash and eyes like coals—steps into her path, blocking her way. “Human,” he says, his voice like gravel. “You’re not supposed to be here.” “I’m looking for a man,” Harlow says, her voice steady. “Dark hair, scar on his left forearm. He has a key.” The guard tilts his head. “Keys are traded here. Keys are *bought*. Keys are *killed for*.” He takes a step closer, and Harlow sees the fangs—sharp, white, glinting in the light. “Then show me where he is,” she says, her finger resting on the trigger. The guard smiles, a slow, deliberate thing. “The market doesn’t *give* up its secrets easily, human. Especially to those who don’t belong.” He raises a hand, and Harlow feels the air *rip*, like cloth torn. Dogs—*a pack of them*, their fur black as ink, their eyes glowing green—burst from the shadows, growling, salivating. Harlow fires once, twice, hitting the first two dogs in the chest. They collapse, their bodies melting into black smoke. The guard snarls, lunging at her, his claws slashing at her arm. She dodges, firing again, this time hitting him in the throat. He gurgles, falling to his knees, and Harlow puts the gun to his head, pressing the trigger. The market is silent, for a moment. The vendors watch, their eyes cold. Harlow ignores them, turning toward the door the suspect entered. She pushes it open, and the sound of magic hits her like a wave—warm, suffocating, *alive*. On the other side, a staircase leads down, into the heart of the market. She starts walking, her boots clattering against the steps. The door closes behind her, cutting off the light, and for a moment, she is alone—save for the sound of her own breath, ragged and fast. But then, from somewhere below, she hears a laugh—a low, familiar laugh. *Tomás*. Harlow’s heart leaps. She runs down the stairs, her flashlight beam shaking, and around a corner, she sees him—standing in front of a stall, the suspect beside him, the dragon’s tooth key in his hand. “Harlow!” Tomás says, his voice tight. “You shouldn’t be here. The market—” “Tomás, what’s going on?” Harlow says, stepping closer. “Why is he here? Where is he going?” The suspect looks up, his eyes glinting. “He’s not here to help. He’s here to stop me. Just like you.” Tomás takes a step back, his hand going to his medallion. “I didn’t know—” “You *did* know,” the suspect says. “He told you everything. About Morris. About the way the Clique uses you. About the fact that you could’ve saved him… but you didn’t.” Harlow’s eyes snap to Tomás. “Is this true? About Morris?” Tomás closes his eyes. “He came to me, three years ago. Bleeding. Saying the Clique had done this to him. That they’d given him a *gift*—something that would let them control him. He wanted to know if I could help him. If I could take it out.” Harlow takes a step closer. “And?” Tomás opens his eyes, his face pale. “I couldn’t. It was… *in him*. A parasite, feeding on his soul. I tried to contain it, to find a way to remove it. But it was too late. By the time I realized what it was, it was already too late. He was dead.” Harlow stares at him, her mind reeling. *Morris*, she thinks. *He knew*. He’d come to Tomás, to the only person who could’ve saved him, and Tomás had failed him. The suspect laughs, a cold, bitter sound. “You think you can stop me? The Clique wants answers. They want to know what Morris did. What he found. And I’m going to give it to them. Because if I don’t… they’ll kill me. Just like they killed him.” Harlow’s hand tightens on her revolver. “Then you’re making a mistake.” The suspect pulls a knife from his pocket, the blade glowing with green magic. “You don’t understand. This isn’t about them. It’s about *me*. About finally being free.” He charges, and Harlow fires, hitting him in the shoulder. He staggers, but doesn’t fall. Tomás grabs him, tackling him to the ground, and the knife skids across the floor. Harlow kneels, pressing the gun to the suspect’s head. “Tell me where it is. The thing they want. The secret Morris found.” The suspect laughs. “You’ll never find it. It’s *everywhere*. It’s in the air. In the water. In you.” Harlow’s head spins. *Morris*, she thinks. *He said something like that*. *“It’s not a thing,” he’d said, his voice weak. “It’s a presence. They didn’t just give me a wound. They gave me a *door*.”* The suspect’s eyes widen, and he looks past Harlow, his face going pale. “No. No, you can’t—” Tomás stands, his hand raised. Harlow turns, and sees it—the key, on the floor, glowing brighter than before. *The dragon’s tooth*, she realizes. *It’s the door*. “Tomás, no—” But it’s too late. Tomás grabs the key, and the ground *shakes*. Harlow is thrown back, her head hitting a wall. The world goes white. And then, silence. She opens her eyes, and sees the market—empty. The stalls are gone, the vendors gone, the staircase leading down into darkness. The key is gone, too. And Tomás—he’s gone, too. Harlow stands, her head throbbing, and looks around. In the distance, she hears a train whistle—a low, mournful sound. *The Northern Line*, she thinks. *The tube*. She starts walking, her boots clattering against the concrete, and follows the sound. The tunnel stretches on, endless, dark, and quiet. And somewhere ahead, she knows, there is a door—waiting. For her. For Morris. For the truth. --- The rain is still falling when she emerges, three hours later, onto the streets of Camden. Her arm is bandaged, her head throbbing, but her eyes are clear. She looks up at the sky, the moon breaking through the clouds, and smiles. “Next time, Tomás,” she says, her voice low, “we’ll talk. *After* I find the truth.” She turns, walking into the dawn, the glow of the neon signs of Camden Town guiding her way. Behind her, the tunnel fades away, silent, like a secret. But Harlow knows. It’s not over. It’s just beginning.
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num_input_audio_prompt(null)
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags22
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Harlow’s fingers curl around [around]"
1"He looks away [away]"
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.407
leniency0.815
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.074
98.06% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2583
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"warily"
count1
highlights
0"warily"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
70.96% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2583
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"weight"
count1
1
word"flicker"
count1
2
word"glinting"
count3
3
word"perfect"
count1
4
word"whisper"
count1
5
word"echoes"
count1
6
word"scanning"
count2
7
word"gloom"
count1
8
word"echoing"
count1
9
word"pulse"
count1
10
word"familiar"
count1
11
word"silence"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"flicker"
2"glinting"
3"perfect"
4"whisper"
5"echoes"
6"scanning"
7"gloom"
8"echoing"
9"pulse"
10"familiar"
11"silence"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences174
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences174
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences208
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen48
ratio0
matches(empty)
73.82% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans55
markdownWords161
totalWords2552
ratio0.063
matches
0"The rat"
1"The one who’s been slipping through the cracks for six months"
2"Saint Christopher"
3"Tomás"
4"Estranged from the clique, but useful"
5"magic"
6"scuffle"
7"pulses"
8"Supernatural"
9"Ghosts"
10"A trick of the light"
11"a fang"
12"real"
13"s"
14"the thing"
15"Veil"
16"real"
17"answers"
18"a train"
19"Morris"
20"stake"
21"Morris used to tell me stories about tricksters"
22"Said they were the only ones who could be trusted"
23"hunger"
24"Bricklayer’s Arms"
25"‘The dead do not forget.’"
26"let"
27"screams"
28"magic"
29"They grow it here"
30"VEIL MARKET. 100 YARDS. NO SHOUTING. NO STEALING. NO SURVIVING"
31"“I know what you did. I can make you forget.”"
32"bought"
33"killed for"
34"give"
35"rip"
36"a pack of them"
37"alive"
38"Tomás"
39"did"
40"gift"
41"in him"
42"Morris"
43"He knew"
44"me"
45"everywhere"
46"Morris"
47"He said something like that"
48"“It’s not a thing,” he’d said, his voice weak. “It’s a presence. They didn’t just give me a wound. They gave me a *door"
49"The dragon’s tooth"
50"It’s the door"
51"shakes"
52"The Northern Line"
53"The tube"
54"After"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions26
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions82
wordCount1845
uniqueNames23
maxNameDensity2.11
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity5
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
London1
Harlow39
Quinn1
Raven1
Nest1
Dean1
Street1
Soho1
Flanagan1
Pub1
Morris6
Tomás16
Spanish1
Met1
Fox1
Bricklayer1
Arms1
Tube1
Clique1
Dogs1
Northern1
Camden2
Town1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Raven"
3"Flanagan"
4"Pub"
5"Morris"
6"Tomás"
7"Met"
8"Bricklayer"
places
0"London"
1"Dean"
2"Street"
3"Soho"
4"Camden"
5"Town"
globalScore0.443
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences110
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2552
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences208
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs91
mean28.04
std25.15
cv0.897
sampleLengths
0101
177
286
3114
469
519
676
727
819
956
1082
1136
128
1372
148
1538
1649
176
1829
1933
2052
2115
2210
233
2412
251
2672
2723
2860
2929
309
3153
3297
3320
3440
3535
3613
3721
3831
3914
4035
4118
4260
4313
4440
4535
4612
471
4835
4912
95.18% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences174
matches
0"was gone"
1"is torn"
2"is fixed"
3"is thrown"
4"are gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs333
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount31
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences27
totalSentences208
ratio0.13
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn runs with the precision of a soldier—shoulders back, boots finding the grit of pavement without faltering—her breath ragged but steady, the weight of her service revolver a leaden counterbalance against her ribs."
1"She’d seen him first in the surveillance van, silhouetted against the green neon of The Raven’s Nest—a flicker of dark hair, the curve of a scar on his left forearm, the *Saint Christopher* medallion glinting at his throat."
2"The chase began on Dean Street, where his boots had splashed through a puddle, leaving a footprint that still glowed faintly—*magic*, she realized too late, as the liquid seared her calf through her tactical pants."
3"Another glow—pale blue, like a lost match—flickers up ahead."
4"His gaze is fixed on the ground, where a bone token glints—a fox’s skull, its eyes hollow, carved with runes Harlow doesn’t recognize."
5"The medallion clatters against his chest, and for a second, Harlow sees the fear in his eyes—*real* fear, not the practiced calm he’d worn when she’d raided his clinic last month."
6"She’d heard the rumors—black markets where you traded blood for potions, information for souls, a fetus for a wish."
7"It’s warm, like a hand, and when she touches it, she sees a flash—*a train*, dark and empty, a woman with her hair in a bun, screaming."
8"The rain slows, just for a second, and for a moment, Harlow sees the man he used to be—the paramedic, the hero, the one who’d argued with her for an hour after she’d arrested his patient, a nephilim with a bullet in his shoulder."
9"The glow is brighter now, a steady hum, and in her mind, she sees the Fox—a trickster, a liar, a guide."
10"The password comes to her as she takes a sip—the words rolling off her tongue like a threat."
11"Below, the tunnel stretches into darkness, a shadowy river of concrete that glows faintly with bioluminescent moss—*magic*, she realizes."
12"The tunnel widens, and up ahead, she sees a light—pale, green, like the neon of a city at night."
13"Stalls line the edges—wooden tables piled high with jars of glowing liquid, cages holding strange animals with scales like metal, vendors haggling over the price of a wolf’s heart."
14"And there, at the far end of the platform, is the suspect—his back to her, the dragon’s tooth key in his hand, turning it in a lock set into the wall."
15"A guard—tall, with skin like ash and eyes like coals—steps into her path, blocking her way."
16"“Keys are traded here. Keys are *bought*. Keys are *killed for*.” He takes a step closer, and Harlow sees the fangs—sharp, white, glinting in the light."
17"Dogs—*a pack of them*, their fur black as ink, their eyes glowing green—burst from the shadows, growling, salivating."
18"She pushes it open, and the sound of magic hits her like a wave—warm, suffocating, *alive*."
19"The door closes behind her, cutting off the light, and for a moment, she is alone—save for the sound of her own breath, ragged and fast."
20"But then, from somewhere below, she hears a laugh—a low, familiar laugh."
21"She runs down the stairs, her flashlight beam shaking, and around a corner, she sees him—standing in front of a stall, the suspect beside him, the dragon’s tooth key in his hand."
22"Harlow turns, and sees it—the key, on the floor, glowing brighter than before."
23"She opens her eyes, and sees the market—empty."
24"And Tomás—he’s gone, too."
25"In the distance, she hears a train whistle—a low, mournful sound."
26"And somewhere ahead, she knows, there is a door—waiting."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1710
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount31
adverbRatio0.018128654970760234
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.0023391812865497076
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences208
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences208
mean12.26
std9.97
cv0.813
sampleLengths
016
135
23
329
47
511
638
74
86
93
103
112
1221
1335
1418
1533
169
1714
187
1915
205
2118
226
235
2431
254
2629
2717
2823
2919
303
3131
3216
3311
3415
3512
3615
373
3816
397
4019
4130
422
4340
4440
458
4627
471
488
492
38.94% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats23
diversityRatio0.2403846153846154
totalSentences208
uniqueOpeners50
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences157
matches(empty)
ratio0
97.71% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount48
totalSentences157
matches
0"It’s 2:17 a.m."
1"She’d seen him first in"
2"She’d ignored the pain, lunging"
3"She’d spent three years after"
4"She moves forward, her shoulder"
5"His gaze is fixed on"
6"Her voice is steady, but"
7"He jumps, spinning."
8"he says, his Spanish accent"
9"He wipes his hands on"
10"She’d heard the rumors—black markets"
11"It’s warm, like a hand,"
12"she says, standing"
13"he says, finally"
14"He looks away"
15"She unclips her flashlight, twists"
16"He sighs, the sound heavy."
17"He gives her the address,"
18"She looks up."
19"*They grow it here*."
ratio0.306
26.88% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount136
totalSentences157
matches
0"The rain slashes the London"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn runs with"
2"It’s 2:17 a.m."
3"*The rat*, she thinks, her"
4"*The one who’s been slipping"
5"She’d seen him first in"
6"*Tomás*, the file said."
7"Harlow didn’t know."
8"The chase began on Dean"
9"She’d ignored the pain, lunging"
10"Another glow—pale blue, like a"
11"That’s when she hears it:"
12"Harlow freezes, hand hovering over"
13"The rain beats down, but"
14"She’d spent three years after"
15"*Ghosts*, the coroner had called"
16"*A trick of the light*."
17"Harlow doesn’t whisper anymore."
18"She moves forward, her shoulder"
19"The man’s throat is torn,"
ratio0.866
31.85% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences157
matches
0"Now, the alley behind Soho’s"
ratio0.006
72.43% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences71
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"Harlow stands at the bar, pretending to nurse a pint of lager, her eyes scanning the room."
1"The wood of the archway *screams*, a high-pitched wail that makes her ears bleed."
2"Below, the tunnel stretches into darkness, a shadowy river of concrete that glows faintly with bioluminescent moss—*magic*, she realizes."
3"Dogs—*a pack of them*, their fur black as ink, their eyes glowing green—burst from the shadows, growling, salivating."
4"The guard snarls, lunging at her, his claws slashing at her arm."
5"He gurgles, falling to his knees, and Harlow puts the gun to his head, pressing the trigger."
6"She starts walking, her boots clattering against the concrete, and follows the sound."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags22
uselessAdditionCount7
matches
0"Harlow steps, her boots splashing in a puddle"
1"he says, finally"
2"Harlow says, her voice steady"
3"she says, her finger resting on the trigger"
4"Tomás says, his voice tight"
5"he’d, his voice weak"
6"she says, her voice low,"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"he’d (would)"
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.222
leniency0.444
rawRatio0.083
effectiveRatio0.037
76.8614%