Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY99AJZX9GZ8EN44ETH01D1

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Duration:
23.9s
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$0.001160
Provider:
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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The lock clicked open. Harlow pressed her palm to the cold concrete of the Tube entrance, the bone token—curved,像是被啃过的象牙—digging into her skin. Camden’s morning noise seeped through the grate: a bus rumbled, a child wailed, a vendor’s voice cut through, “Steak pies! Fresh out the oven!” But down here, the hum was different—thicker, as if the walls were breathing. “Quinn.” DS Voss turned from where he stood by the body. His uniform was crisp, but his tie was askew, a telltale sign of a rushed morning. He nodded at the prone figure on the stone floor. “Coroner’s just finishing. Victim’s male, mid-thirties. No ID on him. Found by a potholer—they come down here for the bats, weirdos.” Harlow knelt. The body was naked, not unusual in the Veil Market’s casual trade, but the color was wrong—pale, almost gray, like ash. No blood. Not a drop. Her fingers brushed the throat; the skin was cold, but not rigor mortis. Rigor was already starting, so the time of death had to be within the last six hours. But the body wasn’t stiff—it was *flexible*, as if someone had moved it after. “Burn marks,” she said. Voss followed her gaze. A smudge on the left collarbone, faint, like a brand. “Coroner says it’s nothing. Dirt. Or a trick of the light.” Harlow leaned closer. The smudge shifted, rippling, then solidified into a sigil—angular, with a central eye. She recognised it. From Morris’s case file. The last thing he’d ever sent her: a photo of the same symbol, scrawled on the wall of a warehouse. “It’s a protection rune,” she said. Voss snorted. “Protection? From what? A rat?” “From whatever killed him.” Harlow pressed a finger to the sigil. It heated, just for a moment, then cooled. “Did you check the pockets? Wallet? Phone?” “Empty. Like someone stripped him clean. But the token’s gone.” Voss kicked a piece of rusted pipe. “Veil Market kills are clean. No bodies left. This one’s… *here*.” Harlow stood. She scanned the market: vendors gawked from behind their stalls, but their eyes darted, guilty. A woman with a fox’s tail tucked into her coat lingered by a stack of jars, her gaze locked on the body. Harlow turned back to Voss. “Why bring the body here? The market moves in three days. No one’s staying past the full moon.” Voss shrugged. “Maybe he was late. Or he didn’t know the schedule. Stupid, if you ask me.” Harlow’s jaw tightened. Stupid wasn’t the word. The Veil Market had rules. No bodies inside the station. No weapons with magic. No *unauthorized* possessions. This wasn’t a kill. It was a *message*. She knelt again. The body’s left hand was curled, fingers splayed. She pried them open. A single, small bone—white, smooth—rested in the palm. Not a token. Too small. A finger bone, perhaps, but not human. Harlow recognized it instantly. *Shade bone*. Rare, expensive. Used to power potions that banish ghosts. “Voss,” she said, “where’d this come from?” “Just dirt, I told you—” “*Where’d this come from?*” Voss held up his hands, backtracking. “Coroner didn’t mention it. Probably fell out of his pocket. Or the potholer dropped something.” Harlow stood. Her watch—leather, worn thin at the edges—ticked against her wrist. Morris had worn a similar one, before the warehouse. He’d laughed, when she’d teased him about it, “Sentimental, but it keeps me on time for the dead.” The dead. She’d found his body three days later, the same smudge on his throat, the same sigil burned into the wall. The case was closed. Supernatural. No leads. Just a note scrawled in blood: *You saw too much*. “You’re quiet,” Voss said, shifting his weight. “What’re you thinking?” Harlow looked at the fox-tailed woman. She was gone. “The token’s not just an entry. It’s a promise.” “Promise?” “To the market. ‘I won’t take what I’m not owed.’ If someone breaks that… the market *remembers*.” Harlow walked to the nearest stall. A man with a beard dyed green sold glowing herbs. “How much to banish a ghost?” The man stopped grinding. “Depends. How *angry*?” “Very angry.” He leaned in, lowering his voice. “Depends on the ghost. A human? A few shillings. A Shade? More. But they don’t banish. They *consume*. Takes more than money. Takes… *bones*.” Harlow’s throat went dry. “What bones?” “Shade bones. Keep the ghost full. Keeps it from feeding on the living.” He paused, then added, “Stupid to mess with Shades. They don’t forget. Not when you take their bones.” She turned away. The body was still there, but the sigil on its throat was gone. Like someone had erased it. The left hand was open now, the bone gone. “Voss,” she said, “check the victim’s ID again. Slow this time.” He stared. “We checked. Nothing. Looked like a drift.” “Drift doesn’t have Shade bones in its pocket. Drift doesn’t have protection runes burned into its skin. Drift doesn’t get marked by the market.” Harlow walked toward the exit, her boots clanging on the concrete. The fox-tailed woman was waiting at the top of the stairs, her face hidden by a hood. She held up a finger, then mouthed, *“Eva.”* Harlow stopped. Eva. Her best friend, the one who ranted about forbidden texts and ancient curses. The one who’d laughed when Harlow had called the warehouse case “bullshit.” The one who’d said, *“Magic’s real, Harlow. You just don’t want to see it.”* The stairs creaked behind her. Harlow turned. Voss was there, holding a phone. “Found something. The victim’s name is Marcus Hale. He worked at the British Museum. Restricted archives.” Harlow’s blood ran cold. The restricted archives. Where Eva worked. “Voss,” she said, “call Eva. Tell her to stay at home. Lock the door. Don’t answer the phone.” He hesitated. “Why—” “Just do it!” The station rumbled. A low, distant sound, like thunder. Harlow looked down at her watch. 7:14. The full moon was in three days. The Veil Market would move soon. The fox-tailed woman was gone. But the sigil was burning on her palm—bright, hot, a brand. Harlow clenched her fist. She’d seen too much. Again. And this time, the market had a name. Eva.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"He paused then [then]"
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.395
leniency0.789
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.053
95.20% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1042
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"very"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Marcus"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
85.60% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1042
totalAiIsms3
found
0
word"the last thing"
count1
1
word"scanned"
count1
2
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"the last thing"
1"scanned"
2"weight"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"blood ran cold"
count1
1
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
highlights
0"blood ran cold"
1"clenched her fist"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences105
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences105
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
98.06% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences128
gibberishSentences1
adjustedGibberishSentences1
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen38
ratio0.008
matches
0"Harlow pressed her palm to the cold concrete of the Tube entrance, the bone token—curved,像是被啃过的象牙—digging into her skin."
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans13
markdownWords29
totalWords1026
ratio0.028
matches
0"flexible"
1"here"
2"unauthorized"
3"message"
4"Shade bone"
5"Where’d this come from?"
6"You saw too much"
7"remembers"
8"angry"
9"consume"
10"bones"
11"“Eva.”"
12"“Magic’s real, Harlow. You just don’t want to see it.”"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
11.92% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions40
wordCount688
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity2.76
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
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Voss9
Veil3
Market3
Morris2
Harlow19
Eva3
persons
0"Voss"
1"Market"
2"Morris"
3"Harlow"
4"Eva"
places
0"Veil"
globalScore0.119
windowScore0.167
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences45
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.975
wordCount1026
matches
0"not unusual in the Veil Market’s casual trade, but the color was wrong"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences128
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs44
mean23.32
std19.46
cv0.834
sampleLengths
059
11
257
372
44
525
649
77
826
928
1062
1117
1232
1350
147
155
164
1721
1839
1939
2010
2118
221
2339
247
252
2630
276
2831
2930
3011
319
3260
3342
3429
3510
3618
373
383
3929
4016
419
428
431
91.90% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences105
matches
0"was curled"
1"was gone"
2"was gone"
3"was gone"
43.75% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs128
matches
0"were breathing"
1"was waiting"
2"was burning"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences128
ratio0.07
matches
0"Harlow pressed her palm to the cold concrete of the Tube entrance, the bone token—curved,像是被啃过的象牙—digging into her skin."
1"Camden’s morning noise seeped through the grate: a bus rumbled, a child wailed, a vendor’s voice cut through, “Steak pies! Fresh out the oven!” But down here, the hum was different—thicker, as if the walls were breathing."
2"The body was naked, not unusual in the Veil Market’s casual trade, but the color was wrong—pale, almost gray, like ash."
3"Her fingers brushed the throat; the skin was cold, but not rigor mortis."
4"But the body wasn’t stiff—it was *flexible*, as if someone had moved it after."
5"The smudge shifted, rippling, then solidified into a sigil—angular, with a central eye."
6"A single, small bone—white, smooth—rested in the palm."
7"Her watch—leather, worn thin at the edges—ticked against her wrist."
8"But the sigil was burning on her palm—bright, hot, a brand."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount702
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount19
adverbRatio0.027065527065527065
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.0014245014245014246
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences128
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences128
mean8.02
std7.19
cv0.897
sampleLengths
04
118
237
31
410
516
610
721
82
921
102
113
1213
1317
1414
154
164
1710
1811
193
2013
213
224
2320
246
252
265
2711
288
297
3017
3111
322
3315
3422
355
3618
372
3815
393
404
415
425
434
443
454
464
473
488
494
60.37% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.3858267716535433
totalSentences127
uniqueOpeners49
41.67% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences80
matches
0"Just a note scrawled in"
ratio0.013
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount19
totalSentences80
matches
0"His uniform was crisp, but"
1"He nodded at the prone"
2"Her fingers brushed the throat;"
3"She recognised it."
4"It heated, just for a"
5"She scanned the market: vendors"
6"It was a *message*."
7"She knelt again."
8"She pried them open."
9"Her watch—leather, worn thin at"
10"He’d laughed, when she’d teased"
11"She’d found his body three"
12"She was gone."
13"He leaned in, lowering his"
14"He paused, then added"
15"She turned away."
16"She held up a finger,"
17"Her best friend, the one"
18"She’d seen too much."
ratio0.238
47.50% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount66
totalSentences80
matches
0"The lock clicked open."
1"Harlow pressed her palm to"
2"Camden’s morning noise seeped through"
3"DS Voss turned from where"
4"His uniform was crisp, but"
5"He nodded at the prone"
6"The body was naked, not"
7"Her fingers brushed the throat;"
8"Rigor was already starting, so"
9"Voss followed her gaze."
10"A smudge on the left"
11"Harlow leaned closer."
12"The smudge shifted, rippling, then"
13"She recognised it."
14"The last thing he’d ever"
15"Harlow pressed a finger to"
16"It heated, just for a"
17"Voss kicked a piece of"
18"She scanned the market: vendors"
19"A woman with a fox’s"
ratio0.825
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences80
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences22
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
58.33% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Camden’s morning noise seeped, a child wailed, a vendor’s voice cut through,"
1"Harlow walked, her boots clanging on the concrete"
71.05% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Harlow pressed (press)"
1"He’d (would)"
2"Harlow had (have)"
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.237
leniency0.474
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.158
78.4006%