Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY9B4ZMHGP7KVBBTKJQFRRV

Run Details

Model:
Grok 4
Duration:
1m 18s
Cost:
$0.043758
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora shoved through the thicket of brambles, the thorns snagging at her jacket like insistent fingers. She cursed under her breath, yanking free, and stumbled into the clearing where the ancient oak standing stones loomed like forgotten sentinels. The Heartstone Pendant hung heavy against her chest, its faint warmth pulsing stronger now, insistent, as if it recognised this place. She had come here chasing rumours, whispers Eva had overheard in Silas' bar about a hidden grove in Richmond Park where time bent and old magic lingered. The pendant's glow had started that morning, drawing her like a moth to flame, promising answers about the unknown sender who had slipped it into her delivery bag weeks ago. But now, standing amid the wildflowers that bloomed unnaturally vibrant even under the cover of night, doubt clawed at her edges. She circled the nearest standing stone, tracing its rough bark with her fingertips. The oak felt alive, almost breathing, its surface etched with patterns that swirled like veins under skin. No wind stirred the air, yet a low hum vibrated through the ground, subtle at first, like the thrum of distant traffic. Aurora paused, tilting her head. Not traffic. Something else. A rhythm, irregular, as if stones themselves murmured secrets. She shook off the unease and pulled out her phone, thumbing the torch on. The beam cut sharp angles across the grass, illuminating petals that gleamed too brightly, their colours bleeding into one another—crimson bleeding into indigo, like bruised flesh. She had read about places like this in her university days, folklore tucked into dusty library corners, but those tales always ended with warnings: don't linger, don't trust the light. A twig snapped somewhere beyond the stones. Aurora froze, beam swinging wild. The sound echoed oddly, too crisp for the dense foliage she had pushed through. Deer, perhaps. Richmond Park teemed with them. She waited, breath held, but only silence answered. Then another snap, fainter, as if whatever made it had paused to listen back. She pocketed the phone, relying on the pendant's subtle glow instead. It cast a crimson hue over her hands, making her skin look flushed, feverish. Moving deeper into the grove, she noted how the wildflowers clustered thicker here, forming paths that twisted without reason. One led to a small hollow where mushrooms sprouted in perfect circles, their caps pale and glistening. Fairy rings, her mother's old stories called them. Step inside, and you danced forever. Aurora skirted the edge, her boots sinking into soft earth that gave too easily, like sponge. The hum grew louder now, resolving into whispers—indistinct, layered, as if multiple voices overlapped in a language she almost understood. She strained to catch words, but they slipped away, leaving only the sense of mockery. Her scar on her left wrist itched, the crescent shape throbbing in time with the pendant. Childhood accident, her parents had said, but the memory blurred, always had. She pressed on, the grove seeming to expand around her. What should have been a small clearing stretched now, the standing stones receding into shadows that defied the space. Time moved differently here, the codex of rumours claimed— an hour inside could steal days outside. She checked her watch: the hands ticked normally, but when she glanced again, minutes had jumped ahead unnaturally. Her pulse quickened. She needed to find the centre, the spot where the veil thinned, where the pendant's origin might reveal itself. A flutter caught her eye, peripheral, like a moth's wing brushing air. She turned, but nothing stirred. Just flowers nodding in a breeze that wasn't there. Aurora rubbed her arms, the chill seeping despite her jacket. The whispers intensified, weaving through the hum, and now she caught fragments: "Carter... lost... come..." Her name? No, imagination. She shook her head, focusing on the path ahead. The ground dipped into a shallow basin, where a pool reflected starlight unnaturally clear, its surface unbroken by ripples. She knelt at the edge, peering in. Her face stared back, distorted, eyes too wide, hair framing a expression she didn't recognise—fear? The pendant dangled forward, its crimson light dancing on the water like blood droplets. Something shifted in the reflection. Not her. A shadow, elongated, slipping behind her mirrored form. Aurora whipped around, heart slamming. Empty grove. Only stones and flowers. But the air felt heavier now, charged, as if the space compressed around her. She stood, backing away from the pool. Another sound: a soft rustle, like silk over stone. It came from the left, near a cluster of oaks that twisted together like lovers' limbs. She edged closer, hand slipping into her pocket for the small knife she carried from delivery shifts—Evan's legacy, a habit she couldn't shake. The rustle repeated, closer, deliberate. "Rory," a voice whispered, clear now, intimate as a breath on her neck. She spun, knife out. Nothing. The pendant burned hot against her skin, pulsing erratically. Not alone. The certainty hit her like a wave, building from the snaps, the flutters, the whispers. Eyes watched her, multiple, hidden in the blooms or the bark. She scanned the perimeter, the standing stones now seeming to lean inward, closing the circle. Movement again, at the corner of her vision—a pale shape darting between flowers, too quick to identify. Humanoid? No, slighter, ethereal. She pursued, boots crunching petals that released a sweet, cloying scent, like overripe fruit masking decay. The path narrowed, forcing her to brush against vines that coiled like serpents, their leaves whispering against her sleeves. The whispers multiplied, overlapping: "Aurora... stay... ours..." Laughter threaded through, high and tinkling, like glass bells. She broke into a jog, the grove twisting, paths forking illogically. One led to a thicket where thorns gleamed wetly, as if dipped in dew—or something thicker. She veered away, heart racing, the pendant's warmth now a sear, guiding her? Or luring? A figure flickered ahead, slender, cloaked in shadow, vanishing behind a stone. Aurora slowed, knife raised. "Who's there?" Her voice echoed back, warped, mocking her Welsh lilt. No answer, but the rustles encircled her now, a chorus. Something brushed her ankle— a vine? A hand? She kicked out, connecting with nothing but air. The ground trembled faintly, the hum rising to a drone that vibrated in her bones. She reached the centre, or what felt like it—a raised mound carpeted in moss, soft as velvet underfoot. Atop it sat a pedestal of intertwined roots, empty, as if waiting for something. The pendant tugged, almost painfully, urging her forward. She hesitated, the air thickening with presence. Eyes everywhere, boring into her. Not alone. Never alone here. A hand—pale, elongated fingers—emerged from the moss, grasping at her boot. Aurora recoiled, but more shapes stirred, rising from the flowers, their forms twisting into visibility: lithe bodies, eyes like polished obsidian, smiles sharp as thorns. They closed in.
created_at"2026-02-20T19:45:03.503Z" 2/20/2026, 7:45:03 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
33.33% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Her voice echoed back [back]"
dialogueSentences4
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.167
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1147
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1147
totalAiIsms27
found
0
word"loomed"
count1
1
word"sentinels"
count1
2
word"warmth"
count2
3
word"tracing"
count1
4
word"etched"
count1
5
word"vibrated"
count2
6
word"echoed"
count2
7
word"silence"
count1
8
word"perfect"
count1
9
word"glistening"
count1
10
word"resolving"
count1
11
word"sense of"
count1
12
word"pulse"
count1
13
word"quickened"
count1
14
word"chill"
count1
15
word"dancing"
count1
16
word"charged"
count1
17
word"silk"
count1
18
word"scanned"
count1
19
word"racing"
count1
20
word"flickered"
count1
21
word"lilt"
count1
22
word"trembled"
count1
23
word"velvet"
count1
highlights
0"loomed"
1"sentinels"
2"warmth"
3"tracing"
4"etched"
5"vibrated"
6"echoed"
7"silence"
8"perfect"
9"glistening"
10"resolving"
11"sense of"
12"pulse"
13"quickened"
14"chill"
15"dancing"
16"charged"
17"silk"
18"scanned"
19"racing"
20"flickered"
21"lilt"
22"trembled"
23"velvet"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences100
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences100
filterMatches
0"look"
1"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences100
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen30
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1138
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions3
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions15
wordCount1111
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.72
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Eva1
Park1
Evan1
Laughter1
Welsh1
Aurora8
persons
0"Pendant"
1"Eva"
2"Evan"
3"Laughter"
4"Aurora"
places
0"Park"
globalScore1
windowScore1
80.56% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences72
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"felt like it—a raised mound carpeted in"
1"as if waiting for something"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1138
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences100
matches
0"started that morning"
76.71% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs21
mean54.19
std22.68
cv0.418
sampleLengths
038
199
270
370
455
575
679
785
851
968
1040
1160
1213
1357
1456
1558
1627
1741
1857
1936
203
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences100
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs224
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences10
totalSentences100
ratio0.1
matches
0"The beam cut sharp angles across the grass, illuminating petals that gleamed too brightly, their colours bleeding into one another—crimson bleeding into indigo, like bruised flesh."
1"The hum grew louder now, resolving into whispers—indistinct, layered, as if multiple voices overlapped in a language she almost understood."
2"Time moved differently here, the codex of rumours claimed— an hour inside could steal days outside."
3"Her face stared back, distorted, eyes too wide, hair framing a expression she didn't recognise—fear?"
4"She edged closer, hand slipping into her pocket for the small knife she carried from delivery shifts—Evan's legacy, a habit she couldn't shake."
5"Movement again, at the corner of her vision—a pale shape darting between flowers, too quick to identify."
6"One led to a thicket where thorns gleamed wetly, as if dipped in dew—or something thicker."
7"Something brushed her ankle— a vine?"
8"She reached the centre, or what felt like it—a raised mound carpeted in moss, soft as velvet underfoot."
9"A hand—pale, elongated fingers—emerged from the moss, grasping at her boot."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount72
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount1
adverbRatio0.013888888888888888
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences100
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences100
mean11.38
std7.01
cv0.616
sampleLengths
016
122
221
327
430
521
613
717
822
95
102
112
129
1314
1426
1530
167
175
1814
192
205
218
2214
2311
2414
2519
2617
278
286
2916
3020
3115
3216
3312
3410
3519
3616
3718
383
3919
4012
415
429
4310
4415
452
462
479
4819
497
55.67% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.34
totalSentences100
uniqueOpeners34
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences87
matches
0"Then another snap, fainter, as"
1"Just flowers nodding in a"
2"Only stones and flowers."
ratio0.034
77.47% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount31
totalSentences87
matches
0"She cursed under her breath,"
1"She had come here chasing"
2"She circled the nearest standing"
3"She shook off the unease"
4"She had read about places"
5"She waited, breath held, but"
6"She pocketed the phone, relying"
7"It cast a crimson hue"
8"She strained to catch words,"
9"Her scar on her left"
10"She pressed on, the grove"
11"She checked her watch: the"
12"Her pulse quickened."
13"She needed to find the"
14"She turned, but nothing stirred."
15"She shook her head, focusing"
16"She knelt at the edge,"
17"Her face stared back, distorted,"
18"She stood, backing away from"
19"It came from the left,"
ratio0.356
46.21% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount72
totalSentences87
matches
0"Aurora shoved through the thicket"
1"She cursed under her breath,"
2"The Heartstone Pendant hung heavy"
3"She had come here chasing"
4"The pendant's glow had started"
5"She circled the nearest standing"
6"The oak felt alive, almost"
7"Aurora paused, tilting her head."
8"A rhythm, irregular, as if"
9"She shook off the unease"
10"The beam cut sharp angles"
11"She had read about places"
12"A twig snapped somewhere beyond"
13"Aurora froze, beam swinging wild."
14"The sound echoed oddly, too"
15"Richmond Park teemed with them."
16"She waited, breath held, but"
17"She pocketed the phone, relying"
18"It cast a crimson hue"
19"Fairy rings, her mother's old"
ratio0.828
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences87
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences50
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"She cursed under her breath, yanking free, and stumbled into the clearing where the ancient oak standing stones loomed like forgotten sentinels."
1"The Heartstone Pendant hung heavy against her chest, its faint warmth pulsing stronger now, insistent, as if it recognised this place."
2"The pendant's glow had started that morning, drawing her like a moth to flame, promising answers about the unknown sender who had slipped it into her delivery b…"
3"But now, standing amid the wildflowers that bloomed unnaturally vibrant even under the cover of night, doubt clawed at her edges."
4"The oak felt alive, almost breathing, its surface etched with patterns that swirled like veins under skin."
5"The beam cut sharp angles across the grass, illuminating petals that gleamed too brightly, their colours bleeding into one another—crimson bleeding into indigo,…"
6"The hum grew louder now, resolving into whispers—indistinct, layered, as if multiple voices overlapped in a language she almost understood."
7"What should have been a small clearing stretched now, the standing stones receding into shadows that defied the space."
8"The path narrowed, forcing her to brush against vines that coiled like serpents, their leaves whispering against her sleeves."
9"Atop it sat a pedestal of intertwined roots, empty, as if waiting for something."
10"Aurora recoiled, but more shapes stirred, rising from the flowers, their forms twisting into visibility: lithe bodies, eyes like polished obsidian, smiles sharp…"
41.67% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"The whispers multiplied, overlapping:"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"a voice whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences4
tagDensity0.25
leniency0.5
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.5
73.7202%