Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY9BQNY42GP2J8RZTWBM1R1

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The bell above the door jangled. Rory Carter didn’t look up from the whiskey glass she was polishing. The Raven’s Nest didn’t get many customers after midnight—most regulars drifted home when the green neon sign flickered off at 1:00. “Just one minute,” she called, though the place was empty except for the lump of coal in the stove and the ghost of Yu-Fei’s voice from the kitchen earlier, complaining about burnt spring rolls. The second jingle, sharper this time, made her stop. She set the glass down, the cloth bunching in her fist. “Who—” Her words died. The person standing in the doorway was tall, shoulders squared, wearing a tailored black coat that looked expensive, not like the thrifted duster Rory had seen her in at 17. Her hair, once a wild mass of honey-brown curls, was coiled tight at her nape, silver clips catching the light. But those eyes—wide, hazel, flecks of gold—still made Rory’s throat go tight. “Eva,” she said, the name a rusted hinge. Eva smiled, but it didn’t reach her eyes. She stepped forward, her boots quiet on the threadbare carpet. “You still use a cloth, don’t you?” Rory’s hand flew to her wrist, the crescent scar stinging. *“Playing dress-up in a barrister’s coat, are you, Carter?”* Evan’s voice, slurred with whiskey, came back. She’d fled that night, Eva’s text flashing on her phone: *Come. Now.* Four years. Four years and she’d never called. “I… thought you were in Dublin,” Rory said. Eva had left Cardiff the same month Rory did, chasing a scholarship to Trinity. “Had a flat in Temple Bar. Told all the O’Connors you’d taken to law.” Eva slid onto a stool, her coat pooling around her. “Temple Bar’s a tourist trap. I moved to London two years ago. Started at King’s. Helped take down a human trafficker ring, actually. Real noble stuff.” She tapped the bar top, once, twice. “How’s the delivery gig? Still delivering curry to drunk students?” Rory’s jaw tightened. “Yu-Fei’s got a new crew. Better tips.” Better *secrecy*. No one at the Golden Empress knew about Evan. No one at the Nest except Silas. She poured a gin and tonic—Eva’s old favorite, before Rory had learned to hate the taste—though she’d never asked what had driven Eva from Cardiff. “Silas still limps,” Eva said, nodding at the far corner, where an empty armchair sat beside a table cluttered with maps and a half-finished crossword. Silas had talked about his leg once, many years ago. *“Botched operation in Prague. Don’t ask.”* Rory slid the drink over. “He’s back at the pub. Watching the monitors.” Eva took a sip, her eyes never leaving Rory’s. “You look different. Calmer. Like you’ve got a lid on the whole mess.” “I’ve got a good therapist,” Rory said, too quickly. She grabbed a bottle of bitters, twisting the cap until the plastic crackled. “Or so the bar bill says.” Eva’s smile flickered. *“You were never calm, Rory. You were a storm. The kind that wipes out the fields but lets the trees grow back strong.”* Rory set the bitters down. The storm had left her with a scar, a flat in a basement, and a job that let her keep her head down. “You’re the one who left the storm behind,” she said. “Dublin, Trinity, traffickers. Who knew?” Eva’s gaze dropped to the table, where a napkin had been scuffed into a spiral. “Dublin’s where the *trauma* started. Not where it ended. Evan… your ex. He didn’t stop.” Rory’s hand froze. *Evan was dead. She’d found him in the river, his throat slit, six months after she’d come to London. The police called it a gang hit. She’d never doubted that.* “You found his body,” she said, voice flat. Eva nodded. “I read the papers. The ‘drowning’ story. But Evan… he wasn’t the kind to stay quiet. Not about you. He’d been pressuring people, asking questions. *Who* got you out of Cardiff? *Who* gave you money when you left? When he disappeared, people started talking. To *me*.” Rory’s throat burned. Evan had always resented her for leaving. Resented *Eva* for hiding her. “You should have told me,” she said. “I would have—” “Told the police? And what? Let them dig up the things I did to keep you alive?” Eva’s voice rose, then dropped, sharp as a knife. “You want to know why I’m here? Because Evan was right about one thing: you’re a storm. The kind that *pulls people in*. And now someone else is asking questions. Someone who knows you. Someone who was there that night you left.” The bell jangled again. Rory’s head snapped up. Silas stood in the doorway, his auburn beard trimmed, his hazel eyes narrowed. He took a step inside, his left leg limping forward. “Rory,” he said, slow, deliberate. “Close the bar. Now.” Eva’s hand went to her coat pocket. Rory’s fingers brushed the knife in her apron—hidden, a relic from the nights Evan had drunk too much and come looking. “What did he want?” she asked Eva. Eva’s eyes met hers. “His name was Marcus. He worked with Evan. Before Evan… *left*. Marcus has a photo of you and me, outside your old house. Dated. The night you ran.” She leaned forward, her voice a whisper. “He wants to know what you were running from, Rory. And he’s not going to stop until he finds out.” Silas stepped closer. “Rory. *Now.*” Rory stood, her back against the bar. The scar on her wrist throbbed. *Sh*t hits the fan*, the guidelines had said. This was it. Evan’s ghost, Marcus, Silas’ secrets—all of it boiling to the surface. Eva stood too, her coat falling open. Underneath, a scar snaked down her collarbone, silvery and thin. “Same as you,” she said. “We all carry the marks.” The bell jangled once more. Rory didn’t look. She turned to Silas, her hand on the catch that unlocked the secret door. “What did you tell them?” Silas crossed the room, his gaze steady. “Nothing. Yet.” Eva smiled, a small, bitter thing. “Now it’s your turn, Rory. Storm or not, you can’t outrun it forever.” The basement door creaked open. Rory stepped inside, the knife heavy in her hand. Outside, the green neon sign flickered. And somewhere in the dark, a phone rang.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.378
leniency0.757
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.28% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1060
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found
0"Marcus"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
76.42% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1060
totalAiIsms5
found
0
word"flickered"
count3
1
word"whisper"
count1
2
word"throbbed"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"whisper"
2"throbbed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences78
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences78
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences99
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen46
ratio0
matches(empty)
43.66% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans15
markdownWords82
totalWords1049
ratio0.078
matches
0"“Playing dress-up in a barrister’s coat, are you, Carter?”"
1"Come. Now."
2"secrecy"
3"“Botched operation in Prague. Don’t ask.”"
4"“You were never calm, Rory. You were a storm. The kind that wipes out the fields but lets the trees grow back strong.”"
5"trauma"
6"Evan was dead. She’d found him in the river, his throat slit, six months after she’d come to London. The police called it a gang hit. She’d never doubted that."
7"Who"
8"Who"
9"me"
10"Eva"
11"pulls people in"
12"left"
13"Now."
14"Sh"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions24
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
6.28% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions63
wordCount661
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity2.87
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Carter1
Raven1
Nest2
Yu-Fei1
Rory19
Eva18
Four2
Cardiff2
Trinity1
Golden1
Empress1
Evan6
Silas6
London1
Marcus1
persons
0"Carter"
1"Raven"
2"Yu-Fei"
3"Rory"
4"Eva"
5"Empress"
6"Evan"
7"Silas"
8"Marcus"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"Trinity"
2"Golden"
3"London"
globalScore0.063
windowScore0.167
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences48
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1049
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences99
matches
0"fled that night"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs39
mean26.9
std19.21
cv0.714
sampleLengths
073
121
23
362
48
525
646
736
853
953
1025
1116
1213
1322
1428
1526
1643
1730
1833
198
2048
2125
2268
234
2436
2535
2659
275
2835
2917
3010
315
3222
339
3419
355
369
376
388
96.27% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences78
matches
0"was coiled"
1"been scuffed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs125
matches
0"was polishing"
27.42% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences99
ratio0.04
matches
0"The Raven’s Nest didn’t get many customers after midnight—most regulars drifted home when the green neon sign flickered off at 1:00."
1"But those eyes—wide, hazel, flecks of gold—still made Rory’s throat go tight."
2"She poured a gin and tonic—Eva’s old favorite, before Rory had learned to hate the taste—though she’d never asked what had driven Eva from Cardiff."
3"Rory’s fingers brushed the knife in her apron—hidden, a relic from the nights Evan had drunk too much and come looking."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount606
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount13
adverbRatio0.02145214521452145
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.0016501650165016502
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences99
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences99
mean10.6
std8.76
cv0.827
sampleLengths
06
112
221
334
49
511
61
73
830
920
1012
118
128
1310
147
1510
1616
1711
183
196
208
2114
2214
2310
2433
2510
263
279
289
297
3025
3125
3210
336
345
358
369
3713
389
3913
406
413
4223
435
4423
4510
465
4715
4815
493
58.25% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.37373737373737376
totalSentences99
uniqueOpeners37
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences72
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount18
totalSentences72
matches
0"she called, though the place"
1"She set the glass down,"
2"Her words died."
3"Her hair, once a wild"
4"she said, the name a"
5"She stepped forward, her boots"
6"She’d fled that night, Eva’s"
7"She tapped the bar top,"
8"She poured a gin and"
9"She grabbed a bottle of"
10"She’d found him in the"
11"She’d never doubted that.*"
12"she said, voice flat"
13"He took a step inside,"
14"he said, slow, deliberate"
15"she asked Eva"
16"She leaned forward, her voice"
17"She turned to Silas, her"
ratio0.25
22.50% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount63
totalSentences72
matches
0"The bell above the door"
1"Rory Carter didn’t look up"
2"The Raven’s Nest didn’t get"
3"she called, though the place"
4"The second jingle, sharper this"
5"She set the glass down,"
6"Her words died."
7"The person standing in the"
8"Her hair, once a wild"
9"she said, the name a"
10"Eva smiled, but it didn’t"
11"She stepped forward, her boots"
12"Rory’s hand flew to her"
13"Evan’s voice, slurred with whiskey,"
14"She’d fled that night, Eva’s"
15"Eva had left Cardiff the"
16"Eva slid onto a stool,"
17"She tapped the bar top,"
18"Rory’s jaw tightened."
19"She poured a gin and"
ratio0.875
69.44% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences72
matches
0"Now.* Four years."
ratio0.014
77.92% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences22
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The person standing in the doorway was tall, shoulders squared, wearing a tailored black coat that looked expensive, not like the thrifted duster Rory had seen …"
1"She turned to Silas, her hand on the catch that unlocked the secret door."
17.86% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"she called, though the place was empty except for the lump of coal in the stove and the ghost of Yu-Fei’s voice from the kitchen earlier, complaining about burnt spring rolls"
1"she said, voice flat"
2"She leaned, her voice a whisper"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Evan’s voice slurred (slur)"
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.324
leniency0.649
rawRatio0.083
effectiveRatio0.054
79.0431%