Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY9CSJMXZTDZBSD6CKTQ4J1

Run Details

Model:
Grok 4
Duration:
1m 52s
Cost:
$0.058547
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The knock came sharp and insistent, three raps that echoed through the cramped hallway of Eva's flat. Rory paused with her hand on the third deadbolt, Ptolemy the tabby cat weaving figure-eights around her ankles. She had crashed here for the night after a late delivery run, Eva off chasing some obscure scroll in Edinburgh. No one knew she was here. No one except... She twisted the lock and yanked the door open. Lucien Moreau stood on the threshold, his heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one black—fixing on her with that familiar, predatory gleam. His platinum blond hair gleamed under the corridor's flickering bulb, slicked back without a strand out of place. The tailored charcoal suit hugged his frame, and he leaned on that ivory-handled cane, the one that hid a blade sharper than any promise he'd ever broken. "Rory," he said, his voice a smooth roll of French-accented English, each syllable laced with that effortless charm. "Or should I say Aurora? You look... occupied." She gripped the doorframe, her bright blue eyes narrowing. The small crescent scar on her left wrist itched, a ghost from childhood that always flared when trouble loomed. "Lucien. What the hell are you doing here?" He tilted his head, a faint smile playing on his lips. "Charming as ever. May I come in? The curry house downstairs is wafting scents that offend my sensibilities." Ptolemy hissed low, fur bristling, and darted back into the flat. Rory didn't move. "This isn't my place. It's Eva's. And you weren't invited." "Details." He stepped forward anyway, forcing her to either shove him back or yield. She yielded, just enough, the door swinging wider as he brushed past her. His cologne hit her—a mix of sandalwood and something darker, like brimstone masked by civility. It stirred memories she had buried deep, nights in shadowed London alleys where his touch had promised escape from her past, only to chain her to new dangers. She slammed the door shut, the three deadbolts clicking into place one by one. The flat swallowed them both, every surface cluttered with Eva's books and scrolls, yellowed pages spilling from shelves onto the worn Persian rug. A half-eaten bowl of instant noodles sat on the coffee table, steam long gone cold. Lucien surveyed the chaos, his cane tapping once against the floorboards. "Cozy. Reminds me of that bookshop in Marseille where we first... discussed terms." "Cut the nostalgia." Rory crossed her arms, leaning against the kitchenette counter to put space between them. The flat smelled of old paper and lingering spice from below, but his presence overpowered it all. "You vanished six months ago. No note, no call. Just gone, after everything." He set his cane against the arm of the sagging sofa and shrugged off his suit jacket, folding it with precise movements over the back of a chair. "Business, ma chérie. The underworld doesn't pause for sentiment." "Sentiment?" She laughed, sharp and bitter. It echoed off the stacks of research notes piled on the windowsill. "Is that what you call it? Dragging me into your deals, using my deliveries as cover for your demonic errands, and then bailing when Evan showed up sniffing around?" Lucien's jaw tightened, the amber eye flashing. He spoke four languages fluently, but his silences said more. "Evan. Your charming ex. I handled him." "You left me to clean up the mess." She pushed off the counter, pacing to the window where Brick Lane buzzed below, street vendors hawking samosas and knockoff watches. But she didn't look out; her gaze stayed on him, on the way his shirt clung to his shoulders, hinting at the half-demon strength beneath. Attraction surged, unbidden, mixed with the old hurt—like a wound that refused to scar over. He moved closer, his steps silent on the rug. "I left to protect you. Avaros called. My father's realm doesn't negotiate." "Bullshit." Rory whirled, her straight black hair whipping across her face. She was 5'6" to his 5'11", but she met his stare level, unflinching. "You left because things got real. Attraction, sure. But hurt? Things left unsaid? That's your specialty, Luc." A muscle in his cheek twitched at the nickname. He reached out, fingers brushing her arm, light as a whisper. Electricity sparked where he touched, a reminder of stolen moments in his upscale flat, where he'd traced her scar with lips that burned like sin. "What do you want me to say? That I regretted it every day? That I tracked you here through half of London's supernatural web?" She didn't pull away. Not yet. "Why are you really here? Eva's out of town. No one's buying your coincidence story." His black eye darkened further, like ink spreading in water. He dropped his hand, but the space between them hummed. "Information. Always information. Word on the street says your friend's digging into something dangerous. Avaros artifacts. The kind that summon more than just memories." Rory's mind raced, quick as ever. Eva had mentioned a lead on ancient scrolls tied to demon realms, but she hadn't shared details. "Eva can handle herself. What's it to you?" "Everything." Lucien retrieved his cane, twisting the ivory handle with a soft click. The hidden blade didn't emerge, but the threat lingered. "If she uncovers the wrong thing, it pulls me back in. Pulls you in. We both know how that ends." She stepped into his space now, close enough to feel the heat radiating from him. Half-demon blood ran hot, or so he'd claimed during one of their nights tangled in sheets. "We? There is no we, Lucien. You made sure of that." His free hand cupped her jaw, thumb tracing her lower lip. "Liar. You feel it still." The kiss came sudden, his mouth claiming hers with the same intensity that had first drawn her in—a fixer who bent rules like they were suggestions. She responded despite herself, hands fisting in his shirt, pulling him closer. Hurt andwant collided, her body remembering what her mind tried to forget. His cane clattered to the floor as he backed her against the wall, books toppling from a nearby shelf in a cascade of paper. Ptolemy yowled from the bedroom, but Rory ignored it, lost in the taste of him, the way his heterochromatic gaze bored into her when they broke for air. "Tell me to leave," he murmured against her throat, voice roughened. "Say it, and I'm gone." She didn't. Instead, her fingers found the buttons of his shirt, popping them one by one. "Shut up and make this count." They moved to the sofa, clothes shedding like old skins. His hands explored her with familiar precision, tracing the curve of her hip, the scar on her wrist. She arched under him, nails digging into his back, drawing a hiss that sounded more demon than man. The flat's clutter faded, replaced by the rhythm of their breathing, the creak of springs protesting their urgency. But midway, as his lips trailed fire down her collarbone, a sound pierced the haze—the front door's deadbolts clicking open, one by one, without a key. Rory froze, pushing him off. "What—" Lucien rolled to his feet, cane in hand, blade sliding free with a metallic whisper. The door swung inward, revealing a figure in the hallway shadow. Not Eva. Not anyone she recognized. The intruder smiled, teeth too sharp, eyes glowing with infernal light. "Moreau. You've been avoiding my calls." Lucien's posture shifted, all seduction gone, replaced by lethal grace. "Kael. How did you find me?" The demon—because what else could it be?—stepped inside, kicking the door shut. "The girl. Your little human pet. She led me straight here." Rory scrambled for her discarded shirt, heart pounding. Things left unsaid? Now they exploded into the open, with fangs and fury. Kael's gaze locked on her, hungry. "And now, we finish what your father started in Avaros." Lucien lunged, blade flashing, but Kael moved faster, a blur of shadow and claw. The fight erupted, furniture splintering as they crashed through the flat. Rory grabbed a heavy tome from the floor, swinging it like a weapon, but Kael backhanded Lucien into the wall, cracks spiderwebbing the plaster. "You think you can hide behind her?" Kael snarled, advancing on Rory. "Pathetic half-breed." She dodged, quick thinking kicking in. The kitchenette—Eva's hidden stash. She yanked open a drawer, fingers closing on a vial of what looked like holy water, or whatever Eva used for warding. Lucien recovered, tackling Kael from behind. They rolled, knocking over the coffee table, Ptolemy screeching and bolting under the bed. Rory uncorked the vial, splashing its contents. Kael howled as smoke rose from his skin, but he twisted free, claws raking Lucien's side. Blood welled, dark and viscous. "Run!" Lucien shouted, but Rory stood her ground, grabbing his fallen cane and thrusting the blade forward. Kael laughed, swatting it aside. "Feisty. I see why he likes you." He lunged at her, and time slowed. Lucien's eyes met hers—amber and black, full of unspoken regret—and then Kael's claws descended. But at that instant, the flat's wards flared to life, Eva's scribbled runes on the walls igniting in blue flame. Kael recoiled, screaming as the magic seared him. It wasn't enough. He recovered, eyes blazing, and charged again. Rory and Lucien backed toward the bedroom, weapons raised, as the demon shattered the barrier with a burst of dark energy. The flat shook, books flying like shrapnel. This wasn't over. It was just beginning.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.289
leniency0.579
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
96.86% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1592
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
40.33% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1592
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"echoed"
count2
1
word"familiar"
count2
2
word"effortless"
count1
3
word"charm"
count1
4
word"loomed"
count1
5
word"whisper"
count2
6
word"reminder"
count1
7
word"traced"
count1
8
word"raced"
count1
9
word"tracing"
count2
10
word"intensity"
count1
11
word"pounding"
count1
12
word"unspoken"
count1
13
word"charged"
count1
14
word"shattered"
count1
highlights
0"echoed"
1"familiar"
2"effortless"
3"charm"
4"loomed"
5"whisper"
6"reminder"
7"traced"
8"raced"
9"tracing"
10"intensity"
11"pounding"
12"unspoken"
13"charged"
14"shattered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences99
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences99
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences126
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen29
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1576
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions55
wordCount1239
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1.05
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Kael"
discoveredNames
Eva8
Ptolemy4
Edinburgh1
Moreau1
French-accented1
English1
London1
Persian1
Brick1
Lane1
Rory13
Kael9
Lucien13
persons
0"Eva"
1"Ptolemy"
2"Moreau"
3"Rory"
4"Kael"
5"Lucien"
places
0"Edinburgh"
1"London"
2"Brick"
3"Lane"
globalScore0.975
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences82
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like holy water, or whatever Eva u"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1576
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences126
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs49
mean32.16
std18.23
cv0.567
sampleLengths
064
19
264
326
436
529
624
770
852
924
1047
1137
1247
1324
1469
1521
1641
1769
1821
1944
2031
2142
2242
2316
2474
2528
2616
2722
2864
2926
306
3132
3217
3316
3423
3521
3616
3749
3814
3932
4020
4128
4217
4312
4421
4528
4610
4728
487
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences99
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs241
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences126
ratio0.071
matches
0"Lucien Moreau stood on the threshold, his heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one black—fixing on her with that familiar, predatory gleam."
1"His cologne hit her—a mix of sandalwood and something darker, like brimstone masked by civility."
2"But she didn't look out; her gaze stayed on him, on the way his shirt clung to his shoulders, hinting at the half-demon strength beneath."
3"Attraction surged, unbidden, mixed with the old hurt—like a wound that refused to scar over."
4"The kiss came sudden, his mouth claiming hers with the same intensity that had first drawn her in—a fixer who bent rules like they were suggestions."
5"But midway, as his lips trailed fire down her collarbone, a sound pierced the haze—the front door's deadbolts clicking open, one by one, without a key."
6"The demon—because what else could it be?—stepped inside, kicking the door shut."
7"The kitchenette—Eva's hidden stash."
8"Lucien's eyes met hers—amber and black, full of unspoken regret—and then Kael's claws descended."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1254
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount25
adverbRatio0.019936204146730464
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.0023923444976076554
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences126
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences126
mean12.51
std6.93
cv0.554
sampleLengths
017
118
220
36
43
59
619
718
827
918
108
119
1219
138
1411
1518
1611
173
1810
1914
2013
2115
2228
2314
2423
2515
2611
2713
2817
2917
3013
3128
329
336
3412
3529
367
3710
387
3929
4025
4115
429
4312
4411
4513
4617
479
4811
4925
64.29% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.40476190476190477
totalSentences126
uniqueOpeners51
34.72% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences96
matches
0"Instead, her fingers found the"
ratio0.01
65.83% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount37
totalSentences96
matches
0"She had crashed here for"
1"She twisted the lock and"
2"His platinum blond hair gleamed"
3"he said, his voice a"
4"She gripped the doorframe, her"
5"He tilted his head, a"
6"He stepped forward anyway, forcing"
7"She yielded, just enough, the"
8"His cologne hit her—a mix"
9"It stirred memories she had"
10"She slammed the door shut,"
11"He set his cane against"
12"She laughed, sharp and bitter"
13"It echoed off the stacks"
14"He spoke four languages fluently,"
15"She pushed off the counter,"
16"He moved closer, his steps"
17"She was but she met"
18"He reached out, fingers brushing"
19"She didn't pull away."
ratio0.385
12.08% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount86
totalSentences96
matches
0"The knock came sharp and"
1"Rory paused with her hand"
2"She had crashed here for"
3"She twisted the lock and"
4"Lucien Moreau stood on the"
5"His platinum blond hair gleamed"
6"The tailored charcoal suit hugged"
7"he said, his voice a"
8"She gripped the doorframe, her"
9"The small crescent scar on"
10"He tilted his head, a"
11"Ptolemy hissed low, fur bristling,"
12"Rory didn't move."
13"He stepped forward anyway, forcing"
14"She yielded, just enough, the"
15"His cologne hit her—a mix"
16"It stirred memories she had"
17"She slammed the door shut,"
18"The flat swallowed them both,"
19"A half-eaten bowl of instant"
ratio0.896
52.08% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences96
matches
0"Now they exploded into the"
ratio0.01
79.08% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences56
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"The knock came sharp and insistent, three raps that echoed through the cramped hallway of Eva's flat."
1"Attraction surged, unbidden, mixed with the old hurt—like a wound that refused to scar over."
2"The kiss came sudden, his mouth claiming hers with the same intensity that had first drawn her in—a fixer who bent rules like they were suggestions."
3"She responded despite herself, hands fisting in his shirt, pulling him closer."
4"She arched under him, nails digging into his back, drawing a hiss that sounded more demon than man."
79.55% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"he murmured, voice roughened"
44.74% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"She laughed (laugh)"
1"he murmured (murmur)"
2"Kael snarled (snarl)"
3"Lucien shouted (shout)"
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.132
leniency0.263
rawRatio0.8
effectiveRatio0.211
80.0964%