Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY9EFTRHNPWGSCEMWWX7J29

Run Details

Model:
Grok 4
Duration:
1m 50s
Cost:
$0.048271
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rain pelted the cobblestones of Camden High Street, turning the night into a slick, gleaming hazard. Detective Harlow Quinn's boots slapped through puddles, her sharp jaw clenched against the downpour that soaked her trench coat. She dodged a cluster of late-night revelers spilling out from a pub, their laughter cutting through the storm like distant thunder. Ahead, the suspect bolted, his short curly dark brown hair plastered to his scalp, olive skin glistening under the stuttering streetlights. Tomás Herrera. The former paramedic who'd vanished from the NHS radar after treating wounds that no hospital could explain. Quinn's brown eyes narrowed on his back as he veered left, scarf flapping like a flag of surrender he had no intention of waving. Her worn leather watch ticked on her left wrist, a relic from her military days, reminding her of the precision she once wielded in chaos. Eighteen years on the force, and tonight felt like a callback to that lost partner, DS Morris, gone in a blur of shadows she still couldn't piece together. Herrera wove through parked cars, his Saint Christopher medallion bouncing against his chest. He glanced back once, warm brown eyes wide with the panic of a man cornered by secrets. "Stop! Metropolitan Police!" Quinn's voice sliced through the rain, but the wind swallowed it whole. Herrera didn't break stride. He vaulted a low railing, cutting across a narrow alley that reeked of garbage and stale beer. Quinn followed, her military bearing propelling her forward with unyielding force. She felt the old ache in her knees from years of pursuits, but ignored it. This wasn't just a chase; it was the thread she'd pulled on for weeks, linking underground dealings to the clique she suspected of everything from black-market trades to the kind of vanishings that echoed Morris's fate. The alley spat them out onto a quieter stretch, where the rain hammered harder, blurring the neon signs of shuttered shops. Herrera skidded on wet pavement, his scar along the left forearm flashing pale as he caught himself on a lamppost. From Seville to this? Quinn's mind raced. He'd lost his license patching up wounds that healed too fast, patients who shouldn't have survived. Supernatural whispers, the kind the brass dismissed as urban myth. But Quinn knew better. Morris had died chasing the same ghosts. Herrera darted right, toward the mouth of an abandoned Tube entrance, its iron gates chained but ajar just enough for a body to slip through. Quinn's pulse hammered. Camden's underbelly—rumors swirled about hidden markets down there, places where the rules bent and broke. She slowed for a fraction, rain dripping from her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair into her eyes. Herrera squeezed through the gap, vanishing into the dark maw. Quinn gripped the chain, the metal cold and slick. Her boots scraped against the crumbling steps leading down. The air shifted, thick with mildew and something sharper, like ozone after lightning. She drew her flashlight, beam cutting through the gloom, illuminating graffiti-scrawled walls and forgotten debris. No turning back now. Herrera's footsteps echoed ahead, faint but frantic. "Give it up, Herrera! You're only making this worse!" No response, just the drip of water from overhead pipes. Quinn descended deeper, the city's hum fading above her. Her free hand brushed the wall, feeling the shift from rough concrete to something older, etched with symbols she didn't recognize. The temperature dropped, and a low murmur rose—like voices bartering in a language that twisted her gut. At the bottom, a platform stretched out, abandoned tracks yawning like open graves. Herrera leaped down onto the rails, balancing precariously before scrambling up the other side. Quinn followed, her flashlight swinging wildly. She landed hard, the impact jarring her sharp jaw. Up ahead, a faint glow seeped from a cracked doorway, marked by a symbol that looked like a stylized bone. Herrera paused at the threshold, fumbling in his pocket. He pulled out a small, ivory token—shaped like a femur—and pressed it against the door. It creaked open, releasing a wave of incense and chatter that didn't belong in a derelict station. Quinn froze on the tracks, beam locked on him. The Veil Market. She'd heard the name in hushed interrogations, a black market that slithered through London's veins, peddling enchanted trinkets and forbidden elixirs. It moved with the full moon, elusive as smoke. Tonight, beneath Camden, it pulsed with life she couldn't see but felt in her bones. Herrera shot her a look over his shoulder, his warm brown eyes pleading now, not panicked. "You don't belong here, Detective. Turn back while you can." His voice carried an accent, Seville-softened, but edged with warning. He slipped inside, the door swinging shut behind him with a groan that echoed like a promise of trouble. Quinn stood there, rain still dripping from her coat onto the rusted rails. Her heart pounded against her ribs, each beat a question. Follow him in, into that den of shadows where the law dissolved like mist? Or retreat, report it, and lose the trail forever? The air hummed with unseen energy, pricking her skin. She thought of Morris, his body found twisted in ways no human could inflict, the case buried under "unexplained" stamps. She stepped forward, hand on her radio, but didn't key it. Not yet. The bone token—entry requirement, or so the whispers went. She didn't have one. Forcing the door might unleash whatever guarded this place. Her fingers tightened around the flashlight, knuckles white. Inside, voices swelled—bartering, laughing, a cacophony that hinted at stalls crammed with glowing vials and ancient tomes. Herrera's footsteps faded into the din. Quinn pressed her ear to the door, catching fragments. "...fresh from the rift, pure essence..." "...bone tokens only, no exceptions..." A shiver ran down her spine. This was the undercurrent she'd suspected, the supernatural vein feeding the clique's operations. Herrera provided medical care off the books—maybe he was here for supplies, or to warn someone. Quinn's mind pieced it together: the unexplained healings, the vanishings, all threading back to places like this. She backed up a step, then another. The platform felt exposed, the dark tracks whispering of trains long gone but perhaps not forgotten. Rain seeped through cracks above, pooling at her feet. Her watch ticked louder in the quiet. No. She couldn't let him slip away. Not after tailing him from The Raven's Nest, that dimly lit bar in Soho where he'd met with shadowed figures behind a bookshelf door. Silas' place, walls papered with old maps that hid more than history. Herrera had bolted when she'd approached, knocking over a stool in his haste. Quinn advanced again, testing the door with her shoulder. It didn't budge. Solid as iron. She scanned the frame, spotting faint etchings—wards, maybe? The kind that kept out the uninvited. Her military precision kicked in; she traced the symbols with her flashlight, committing them to memory. Useless without a token. Frustration boiled up. "Open up, Herrera! We can talk this out!" Silence, then a muffled laugh from beyond—not his. The market's pulse quickened, as if sensing her intrusion. She circled the platform, searching for another way in. Debris littered the edges: broken bottles, faded posters from decades past. Her beam caught something glinting—a shard of bone? No, just glass. But the idea stuck. Bone token. Where did one get such a thing? Not from any evidence locker she knew. Herrera's voice floated back, faint through the door. "Stay out, Quinn. This isn't your world." The use of her name stung, like he knew more about her than she did him. Did he know about Morris? The supernatural underbelly that claimed her partner? Quinn hammered the door with her fist. "I make it my world! Come out, or I'll bring the whole force down here!" Empty threat. The brass wouldn't touch this with a ten-foot pole. Too many careers buried in "unexplained" files. A shadow moved behind the door—footsteps approaching? Quinn tensed, hand dropping to her hip where her service weapon waited. The rain above thundered louder, as if the storm urged her on. The door cracked open, just an inch. No face, but a whisper slithered out. "Entry requires tribute. Bone for bone." Not Herrera. Someone else, voice like gravel ground underfoot. Quinn's eyes flicked to the scar on her own history—the loss, the questions. She could bluff, force it. Or walk away, regroup. Her fingers curled around the door's edge, pulling. It resisted, but gave a fraction more. Inside, colors swirled—stalls draped in silks, lanterns floating without strings, vendors with eyes that glowed unnatural hues. Herrera melted into the crowd, his curly hair vanishing among hooded figures. Decision time. Cross the threshold, into the unknown, where her badge meant nothing and dangers lurked in every bargain? Or seal it shut, lose the lead, and let Morris's ghost haunt her forever? Quinn's breath came steady, military calm overriding the chaos. She shoved harder, the door yielding with a reluctant creak. The market's scent washed over her—spices, blood, and something electric. One step inside, and the world tilted. Vendors turned, eyes locking on her like predators sensing prey. No token, but she was through. Herrera spotted her, his face paling as he backed deeper into the throng. "You shouldn't have," he muttered, loud enough for her to hear over the bartering din. Quinn advanced, the door slamming shut behind her. No going back now. The market enveloped her, stalls pressing in with wares that defied logic: vials bubbling with liquid starlight, books that whispered when opened, creatures in cages that looked half-human. A vendor leaned close, breath hot and fetid. "Fresh meat? What do you seek, outsider?" "I seek him," Quinn pointed at Herrera, who ducked behind a cart laden with glowing herbs. The vendor chuckled, revealing teeth filed to points. "Chase in the Veil comes at a price." Quinn ignored him, pushing through the crowd. Bodies jostled her—some human, others not quite. A woman with scales on her arms hawked potions that promised eternal youth. A man with elongated fingers traded secrets in hushed tones. Herrera weaved ahead, knocking over a stack of enchanted amulets that sparked on the ground. Quinn leaped over them, her boots crunching crystal shards. The market stretched farther than the station should allow, illusions bending space. "Stop running, Tomás! Whatever you're into, I can help!" He spun, medallion glinting. "Help? Like you helped your partner? This place ate him alive." The words hit like a gut punch. Quinn faltered, the crowd closing in. How did he know? Morris's case was sealed. Herrera used the moment, slipping into a narrower aisle flanked by tents. Quinn recovered, shoving past a cluster of buyers arguing over a cursed dagger. The air thickened, heavy with incantations. She caught up as he reached a dead end—a wall of shimmering fabric that rippled like water. Herrera pressed his bone token against it, and it parted. Quinn lunged, grabbing his arm. The scar on his forearm felt rough under her fingers. "Enough. You're under arrest." He twisted free, warm brown eyes fierce. "For what? Saving lives the NHS won't touch?" "For aiding criminals. For whatever this market hides." The fabric wall beckoned, revealing glimpses of deeper chambers where shadows moved with intent. Herrera hesitated, then stepped through. "Follow if you dare, Detective. But remember Morris." Quinn stood at the edge, the decision crystallizing. The market's hum vibrated in her chest, pulling her in. Unfamiliar territory, yes. Dangerous, absolutely. But the answers she craved lay beyond. She took a breath, then plunged through, the fabric sealing behind her like a wound closing. Darkness swallowed her for a moment, then light bloomed— another layer of the market, more clandestine, where deals turned deadly. Herrera waited, not running now. "Welcome to the real Veil. What now?" Quinn's hand hovered near her weapon, eyes scanning the new space: alcoves with figures in robes, altars dripping with wax from black candles. The air crackled with power she didn't understand. "Now," she said, voice steady, "you talk."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences23
tagDensity0.261
leniency0.522
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2023
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
18.44% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2023
totalAiIsms33
found
0
word"gleaming"
count1
1
word"jaw clenched"
count1
2
word"glistening"
count1
3
word"echoed"
count3
4
word"raced"
count1
5
word"pulse"
count2
6
word"maw"
count1
7
word"gloom"
count1
8
word"footsteps"
count3
9
word"etched"
count1
10
word"pulsed"
count1
11
word"cacophony"
count1
12
word"down her spine"
count1
13
word"scanned"
count1
14
word"traced"
count1
15
word"silence"
count1
16
word"quickened"
count1
17
word"glinting"
count2
18
word"thundered"
count1
19
word"whisper"
count1
20
word"flicked"
count1
21
word"electric"
count1
22
word"crystal"
count1
23
word"vibrated"
count1
24
word"absolutely"
count1
25
word"clandestine"
count1
26
word"scanning"
count1
highlights
0"gleaming"
1"jaw clenched"
2"glistening"
3"echoed"
4"raced"
5"pulse"
6"maw"
7"gloom"
8"footsteps"
9"etched"
10"pulsed"
11"cacophony"
12"down her spine"
13"scanned"
14"traced"
15"silence"
16"quickened"
17"glinting"
18"thundered"
19"whisper"
20"flicked"
21"electric"
22"crystal"
23"vibrated"
24"absolutely"
25"clandestine"
26"scanning"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"shiver down spine"
count1
1
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
2
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"A shiver ran down her spine"
1"eyes narrowed"
2"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences173
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences173
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"know"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences191
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2000
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions3
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions76
wordCount1838
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity1.52
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Camden3
High1
Street1
Harlow1
Quinn28
Herrera23
Morris7
Saint1
Christopher1
Seville2
Tube1
Veil1
Market1
London1
Seville-softened1
Raven1
Nest1
Soho1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Herrera"
3"Morris"
4"Saint"
5"Christopher"
6"Market"
places
0"Camden"
1"High"
2"Street"
3"Seville"
4"London"
5"Seville-softened"
6"Raven"
7"Soho"
globalScore0.738
windowScore0.667
78.06% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences139
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"felt like a callback to that lost partn"
1"looked like a stylized bone"
2"as if sensing her intrusion"
3"not quite"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2000
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences191
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs61
mean32.79
std23.3
cv0.711
sampleLengths
096
1107
215
383
485
569
657
79
857
962
1041
1157
1216
1310
1429
1575
1643
1732
186
195
2052
2139
2256
2350
2411
2517
2651
2715
2828
2922
3018
3131
3220
339
3422
3544
3633
3729
3836
3915
4040
4115
4216
4316
4437
4536
469
4715
4821
4931
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences173
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs355
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount17
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences18
totalSentences191
ratio0.094
matches
0"This wasn't just a chase; it was the thread she'd pulled on for weeks, linking underground dealings to the clique she suspected of everything from black-market trades to the kind of vanishings that echoed Morris's fate."
1"Camden's underbelly—rumors swirled about hidden markets down there, places where the rules bent and broke."
2"The temperature dropped, and a low murmur rose—like voices bartering in a language that twisted her gut."
3"He pulled out a small, ivory token—shaped like a femur—and pressed it against the door."
4"The bone token—entry requirement, or so the whispers went."
5"Inside, voices swelled—bartering, laughing, a cacophony that hinted at stalls crammed with glowing vials and ancient tomes."
6"Herrera provided medical care off the books—maybe he was here for supplies, or to warn someone."
7"She scanned the frame, spotting faint etchings—wards, maybe?"
8"Her military precision kicked in; she traced the symbols with her flashlight, committing them to memory."
9"Silence, then a muffled laugh from beyond—not his."
10"Her beam caught something glinting—a shard of bone?"
11"A shadow moved behind the door—footsteps approaching?"
12"Quinn's eyes flicked to the scar on her own history—the loss, the questions."
13"Inside, colors swirled—stalls draped in silks, lanterns floating without strings, vendors with eyes that glowed unnatural hues."
14"The market's scent washed over her—spices, blood, and something electric."
15"Bodies jostled her—some human, others not quite."
16"She caught up as he reached a dead end—a wall of shimmering fabric that rippled like water."
17"Darkness swallowed her for a moment, then light bloomed— another layer of the market, more clandestine, where deals turned deadly."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1136
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"illuminating graffiti-scrawled walls"
adverbCount33
adverbRatio0.029049295774647887
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.00528169014084507
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences191
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences191
mean10.47
std5.93
cv0.566
sampleLengths
016
119
221
321
42
517
624
725
828
913
1017
1115
124
1317
1411
1515
1636
1721
1820
194
203
2116
2210
234
247
2525
263
2715
2816
2910
309
319
3213
3315
344
357
369
3710
389
3921
4017
4113
4214
436
449
4520
469
4715
4817
499
53.75% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.33507853403141363
totalSentences191
uniqueOpeners64
20.20% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences165
matches
0"Too many careers buried in"
ratio0.006
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount40
totalSentences165
matches
0"She dodged a cluster of"
1"Her worn leather watch ticked"
2"He glanced back once, warm"
3"He vaulted a low railing,"
4"She felt the old ache"
5"He'd lost his license patching"
6"She slowed for a fraction,"
7"Her boots scraped against the"
8"She drew her flashlight, beam"
9"Her free hand brushed the"
10"She landed hard, the impact"
11"He pulled out a small,"
12"It creaked open, releasing a"
13"She'd heard the name in"
14"It moved with the full"
15"His voice carried an accent,"
16"He slipped inside, the door"
17"Her heart pounded against her"
18"She thought of Morris, his"
19"She stepped forward, hand on"
ratio0.242
63.03% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount131
totalSentences165
matches
0"Rain pelted the cobblestones of"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn's boots slapped"
2"She dodged a cluster of"
3"The former paramedic who'd vanished"
4"Quinn's brown eyes narrowed on"
5"Her worn leather watch ticked"
6"Herrera wove through parked cars,"
7"He glanced back once, warm"
8"Quinn's voice sliced through the"
9"Herrera didn't break stride."
10"He vaulted a low railing,"
11"Quinn followed, her military bearing"
12"She felt the old ache"
13"This wasn't just a chase;"
14"The alley spat them out"
15"Herrera skidded on wet pavement,"
16"Quinn's mind raced."
17"He'd lost his license patching"
18"Morris had died chasing the"
19"Herrera darted right, toward the"
ratio0.794
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences165
matches(empty)
ratio0
34.36% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences79
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn's boots slapped through puddles, her sharp jaw clenched against the downpour that soaked her trench coat."
1"She dodged a cluster of late-night revelers spilling out from a pub, their laughter cutting through the storm like distant thunder."
2"He vaulted a low railing, cutting across a narrow alley that reeked of garbage and stale beer."
3"This wasn't just a chase; it was the thread she'd pulled on for weeks, linking underground dealings to the clique she suspected of everything from black-market …"
4"The temperature dropped, and a low murmur rose—like voices bartering in a language that twisted her gut."
5"She'd heard the name in hushed interrogations, a black market that slithered through London's veins, peddling enchanted trinkets and forbidden elixirs."
6"He slipped inside, the door swinging shut behind him with a groan that echoed like a promise of trouble."
7"Inside, voices swelled—bartering, laughing, a cacophony that hinted at stalls crammed with glowing vials and ancient tomes."
8"Inside, colors swirled—stalls draped in silks, lanterns floating without strings, vendors with eyes that glowed unnatural hues."
9"The market enveloped her, stalls pressing in with wares that defied logic: vials bubbling with liquid starlight, books that whispered when opened, creatures in …"
10"A woman with scales on her arms hawked potions that promised eternal youth."
11"Herrera weaved ahead, knocking over a stack of enchanted amulets that sparked on the ground."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Quinn's voice sliced, but the wind swallowed it whole"
1"she said, voice steady,"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"he muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences23
tagDensity0.087
leniency0.174
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.087
76.5057%