"The third deadbolt stuck, Rory’s left wrist aching as she twisted the brass key—she’d rubbed the crescent scar raw on her Golden Empress delivery bag strap on the walk over to Eva’s."
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"His heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one pitch black—locked on hers, and for a second, Rory was back in the rain-soaked alley six months prior, him shoving her behind a skip to hide her from Evan’s demon-powered goons, his cane clicking against the pavement as he lied through his teeth about not knowing Evan’s new allies."
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"She’d yelled at him then, her voice cracking as she pointed to the scar on her wrist—“You’re just like him, using people for profit”—and told him to never come near her again."
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"Lucien’s amber eye softened—just a flicker, so quick Rory might have imagined it—when the cat curled around his ankle."
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"He didn’t kick it away, didn’t even flinch; he just shifted his cane slightly to avoid stepping on it."
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"Lucien’s knowledge of that night made her skin crawl—another reminder of how much he’d dug into her life without her permission."
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"“Because I messed up,” he said, and for the first time, she noticed the faint dark circles under his eyes, the slight fray at the cuff of his suit sleeve—signs that he hadn’t been sleeping, that he’d been running too."
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"Her father’s law files—Brendan Carter’s most sensitive cases, including a few that had unknowingly tangled with supernatural elements—were his life’s work."
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"Rory flinched as if burned, but he didn’t pull away; he just handed her the book, his black eye locking on hers."
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"She’d spent six months hating him, but now she saw the guilt in his eyes—the same guilt she’d felt when she’d left her parents without a goodbye, when she’d lied to Eva about how she’d got the new scar on her wrist."
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"She glanced at the delivery hoodie she was wearing—stained with soy sauce from a lunch order, the Golden Empress logo faded—and then at Lucien’s tailored suit, and she wondered how two people so different could have ever found themselves tangled up together."
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"Lucien’s face relaxed, and he reached into his suit pocket, pulling out a crumpled scroll—one that looked exactly like Eva’s research scrolls."
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"Ptolemy stretched, knocking a tea cup off the desk—Eva’s favorite chipped one, painted with Welsh daisies—and it shattered on the floor."
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"She let her hand rest there for a second, feeling the callous on his thumb (from holding his cane for so long) and the warmth of his skin, and she realized that the hurt between them wasn’t gone—but maybe, just maybe, there was a way to fix it."
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"She felt ready—ready to outthink Evan, ready to fix her father’s life, and maybe, if she was brave enough, ready to untangle the mess she’d made with Lucien."
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"She’d assumed it was Eva, rushing back with more scrolls from the British Library, but Eva’s knocks were light, a three-tap staccato that matched her rambling t…"
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"She’d never told anyone but Eva about the night Evan had broken into her flat, his eyes glowing red as he’d grabbed her left wrist, his nails digging into the s…"
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"Rory sighed, bending to pick up the pieces, and Lucien bent too, his fingers brushing hers again."
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"She just watched him leave, undoing the deadbolts one by one as he walked down the stairs, the sound of his cane clicking against the steps fading into the curr…"
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"he said, his French accent thickening with urgency,"
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"she said, but her voice was weaker than she wanted, and Ptolemy chose that moment to dart past her legs, rubbing his tabby flank against Lucien’s cane"
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"he said, his voice so quiet she almost didn’t hear it"