Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY9G4ZESN28D02TSKYZXGSX

Run Details

Model:
Grok 4
Duration:
1m 59s
Cost:
$0.048057
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rain pelted the cobblestones of Soho like bullets from a stormcloud's magazine. Detective Harlow Quinn hunched her shoulders against the downpour, her trench coat slick and heavy. She had staked out The Raven's Nest for hours, that dimly lit bar with its green neon sign flickering like a faulty heartbeat. Whispers from informants pointed to irregulars slipping in and out, and tonight, her patience paid off. Tomás Herrera emerged from the alley behind the bar, his olive skin glistening under the streetlamps, that Saint Christopher medallion swinging from his neck as he hurried into the night. Quinn's brown eyes narrowed. Herrera matched the description—former paramedic, off the grid after some licensing scandal. Rumors tied him to underground dealings, the kind that smelled like the unexplained mess that took her partner three years back. She stepped out from the shadowed doorway, her sharp jaw set. "Herrera! Metropolitan Police—stop right there!" He bolted. His short curly hair bounced as he darted across the street, dodging a taxi that honked wildly. Water splashed up from puddles, soaking his jeans. Quinn cursed under her breath and gave chase, her military-precision stride eating up the distance. Boots slapped against the wet pavement, echoing off the brick walls lined with shuttered shops. "You're making this harder than it needs to be!" she shouted, voice cutting through the rain's roar. Herrera glanced back, warm brown eyes wide with something like panic—or recognition. "You don't know what you're stepping into, Detective! Back off!" He veered left into a narrower lane, knocking over a stack of crates that clattered behind him. Quinn leaped them without breaking stride, her worn leather watch ticking steadily on her left wrist. The scar on his forearm—she'd read about it in his file, a knife attack from years ago. Made him identifiable, even in this deluge. The chase spilled onto Wardour Street, neon signs blurring in the rain. Pedestrians scattered, umbrellas flipping inside out. Herrera shoved through a group of late-night revelers, earning shouts and a thrown bottle that shattered near Quinn's feet. She powered on, breath steady despite the burn in her lungs. Eighteen years on the force had honed her for this—decorated service, they called it. But the loss of DS Morris gnawed at her, those unexplained circumstances that reeked of something beyond the rational. Herrera ducked into an alley, slamming a gate that rattled but didn't latch. Quinn shouldered it open, emerging into a backstreet market closing down for the night. Stalls draped in tarps flapped in the wind, vendors yelling as Herrera barreled past, upsetting a cart of knockoff watches that spilled like metallic rain. "Stop him!" Quinn barked at a burly vendor, flashing her badge quick as a switchblade. The man just shrugged, rain dripping from his cap. "Not my circus, love." Herrera gained ground, slipping into the throng near Leicester Square. The tube entrance loomed ahead, stairs descending into the glow of underground lights. He vaulted the barrier, ignoring the ticket machines. Quinn followed, her coat flapping like wings. Commuters parted, some snapping photos on their phones—great, viral fodder for the morning news. Down the escalator, Herrera took steps two at a time. Quinn matched him, gripping the handrail. "Herrera! Whatever you're into, we can talk! Don't make me drag you in!" He hit the platform, scanning the tracks. A train whooshed in, doors hissing open. He shoved inside, wedging through passengers. Quinn lunged, but the doors clamped shut on her sleeve. She yanked free, pounding the glass. Herrera stared back, medallion glinting under the fluorescent lights. "Stay out of this, Quinn! It's bigger than you!" The train pulled away, leaving her stranded. She spun, spotting the service door at the platform's end—unmarked, but her instincts screamed shortcut. She jimmied it with a multitool from her pocket, slipping into the dimly lit tunnel beyond. Maintenance lights flickered, casting long shadows on the grimy walls. The air thickened with damp and the metallic tang of rails. Footsteps echoed ahead—Herrera, doubling back? No, he must have jumped off at the next stop. Quinn moved fast, avoiding the third rail that hummed with lethal promise. Rats skittered in the dark, and water dripped from cracks overhead. Her mind raced: the clique, those whispers of supernatural undercurrents. Morris had died chasing leads like this, body found twisted in ways no human could manage. A junction split the tunnel. Voices murmured from the left—faint, like a hidden gathering. Quinn pressed against the wall, listening. Herrera's voice cut through: "I need passage, now. She's on my tail." A gravelly response: "Bone token, or no entry." She peered around the corner. Herrera fumbled in his pocket, producing a small, carved bone that gleamed unnaturally white. He handed it to a hooded figure guarding what looked like a rusted door in the tunnel wall. The figure nodded, swinging the door open. Dim light spilled out, along with a cacophony of haggling voices and exotic scents—spices, herbs, something acrid like burning incense. The Veil Market. Quinn's intel had skimmed the edges of it—a black market for the bizarre, moving every full moon. Tonight, beneath Camden, in this abandoned Tube station. Herrera vanished inside, the door clanging shut. Quinn edged closer, rain still dripping from her salt-and-pepper hair. Her heart pounded, not from the run, but from the unknown pulsing behind that door. Unfamiliar territory, potentially dangerous—hell, definitely dangerous. The market dealt in enchanted goods, banned substances, information that could unravel cases like Morris's. But stepping in meant crossing a line, into a world she suspected but didn't understand. She reached for the door handle, then hesitated. No backup, no warrant. Just her gut, and that sharp jaw set against the chill. "What the hell are you hiding, Herrera?" she muttered to the empty tunnel. The hooded guard had slipped away, leaving the entrance unattended for a split second. Opportunity knocked. Quinn's fingers brushed the metal, cold and slick. Inside, shadows danced from lantern light, stalls crammed with vials that glowed faintly, merchants in tattered robes bartering over crystals that hummed. Herrera wove through the crowd, heading deeper. She could turn back, call it in, wait for reinforcements. But that medallion around his neck, the scar on his arm—they tied into something bigger, something that echoed Morris's last words: "It's not natural, Harlow. Run." No. She wouldn't run. Quinn gripped the handle tighter, decision crystallizing like ice in her veins. She pushed the door open and stepped inside, the market's clamor swallowing her whole. The air hit her like a wave—thick with the scent of dried herbs, ozone from enchanted artifacts, and the underlying rot of forgotten tunnels. Stalls lined the abandoned platform, their awnings patched from old tube maps and canvas scraps. A vendor with eyes like polished obsidian hawked potions in corked bottles, liquid swirling in impossible colors. "Elixirs for the weary soul! Memory wipes, strength boosters—name your vice!" Quinn ignored him, scanning for Herrera. He darted between two booths, glancing back once. Their eyes locked. "You shouldn't be here!" he yelled over the din, voice laced with urgency. She pushed forward, weaving through the throng. A cluster of beings—not all human, if the pointed ears and scaled skin meant anything—bartered over a shimmering orb that pulsed with inner light. "That's not regulation," Quinn thought, but she shoved the distraction aside. Herrera slipped behind a stall selling what looked like banned alchemical powders, fine grains sparkling under low-hanging lamps. Quinn followed, her boots crunching on scattered bone fragments—tokens, perhaps, discarded after use. "You think you can just vanish into this freak show?" she called, closing the gap. He spun, scar visible on his forearm as he raised a hand. "This freak show saved lives your system ignores! Back off, or you'll regret it!" A merchant nearby chuckled, revealing teeth filed to points. "Trouble in the Veil? We handle our own." Quinn's hand hovered near her hip, where her service weapon sat holstered under the coat. No drawing it here—not yet. The market pulsed with its own rules, and she felt the weight of unseen eyes. Herrera bolted again, toward a arched doorway at the platform's end, marked with runes that glowed faintly blue. She pursued, dodging a cart laden with caged creatures that snapped and hissed. The chase tightened, her breaths coming sharper now. Herrera reached the doorway, fumbling with another bone token. It slotted into a hidden mechanism, and the door grated open, revealing stairs descending further into the earth. "Last chance, Detective!" he shouted, pausing on the threshold. "Turn around. This isn't your world." Quinn skidded to a halt, rain-mixed sweat stinging her eyes. The market's energy hummed around her, a living thing pressing in. Unfamiliar, dangerous—words that defined her career's edges. Morris had crossed a similar line and paid for it. But backing down now meant letting the threads slip, the clique's secrets burying deeper. Her sharp jaw clenched. Decision made. She lunged forward, grabbing the door's edge before it could seal. "My world or not, you're coming with me." Herrera's face twisted in resignation as he descended the stairs. Quinn followed, the door thudding shut behind her, plunging them into a narrower corridor lit by flickering torches. The air grew cooler, damper, echoes amplifying their footsteps. "You have no idea what's down here," he said, voice bouncing off the walls. "Then enlighten me," Quinn shot back, closing in. He quickened his pace, turning a corner into a chamber lined with shelves of ancient tomes and glowing artifacts. "Your partner's death—it's connected. But you chase shadows without seeing the light." Quinn grabbed his arm, spinning him around. The scar felt rough under her fingers. "Connected how? Talk!" Herrera yanked free, warm brown eyes flashing. "Supernatural patients, treatments the NHS won't touch. I lost my license saving them. The clique— we're not the villains." She pressed him against the wall, her military bearing unyielding. "Then why run?" Footsteps approached from the shadows—market guards, perhaps, drawn by the commotion. Herrera shoved past her, deeper into the chamber. "Because detectives like you stir up worse!" Quinn gave chase again, the underground labyrinth twisting like veins under London's skin. Torches cast dancing shadows, illuminating murals of forgotten lore—creatures and symbols that matched scraps from Morris's files. They burst into a larger cavern, stalactites dripping water into pools that rippled unnaturally. Herrera skidded to a stop at the edge of a chasm, a rickety bridge spanning the void. "End of the line for you, Quinn. Cross this, and there's no going back." She halted, assessing. The bridge swayed in a draft from below, ropes frayed. Beyond, dim lights hinted at more market extensions, secrets buried deep. "You first," she said, voice steady. Herrera stepped onto the bridge, boards creaking. Quinn followed, the structure groaning under their weight. Halfway across, he turned. "Morris died because he got too close to the veil. You will too." The bridge shuddered. Quinn gripped the ropes, heart slamming. Decision point—push on or retreat? But retreat wasn't in her blood. She advanced, closing the distance. "I'm not him. Now move." A snap echoed— one rope frayed through. The bridge tilted, Herrera stumbling forward. Quinn leaped, grabbing his medallion chain to haul him back. They tumbled onto solid ground on the other side, breaths ragged. "You're in it now," he gasped, scrambling up. Quinn rose, dusting off her coat. The chasm yawned behind, bridge half-collapsed. No turning back. Ahead, the path forked into darkness, voices murmuring from both directions. "Lead the way," she said, her tone brooking no argument. Herrera hesitated, then nodded toward the left tunnel. "This way to answers. Or your end." They pressed on, the underground market's depths unfolding like a bad dream. Quinn's watch ticked on, a reminder of the world above, but her focus sharpened on the man ahead, the secrets he carried, and the choice she'd made to plunge into the unknown.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.382
leniency0.765
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2004
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
25.15% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2004
totalAiIsms30
found
0
word"glistening"
count1
1
word"echoing"
count1
2
word"shattered"
count1
3
word"loomed"
count1
4
word"scanning"
count2
5
word"pounding"
count1
6
word"glinting"
count1
7
word"flickered"
count1
8
word"footsteps"
count3
9
word"echoed"
count3
10
word"raced"
count1
11
word"cacophony"
count1
12
word"unravel"
count1
13
word"chill"
count1
14
word"pulsed"
count2
15
word"weight"
count2
16
word"jaw clenched"
count1
17
word"echoes"
count1
18
word"quickened"
count1
19
word"dancing"
count1
20
word"structure"
count1
21
word"depths"
count1
22
word"reminder"
count1
highlights
0"glistening"
1"echoing"
2"shattered"
3"loomed"
4"scanning"
5"pounding"
6"glinting"
7"flickered"
8"footsteps"
9"echoed"
10"raced"
11"cacophony"
12"unravel"
13"chill"
14"pulsed"
15"weight"
16"jaw clenched"
17"echoes"
18"quickened"
19"dancing"
20"structure"
21"depths"
22"reminder"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences162
matches
0"d with urgency"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences162
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences181
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1973
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Eighteen years on the force had honed her for this—decorated service, they called it."
63.14% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions76
wordCount1727
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity1.74
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Harlow1
Quinn30
Raven1
Nest1
Herrera25
Saint1
Christopher1
Wardour1
Street1
Morris6
Leicester1
Square1
Veil1
Market1
Camden1
Tube1
London1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Raven"
3"Herrera"
4"Saint"
5"Christopher"
6"Morris"
7"Market"
places
0"Soho"
1"Wardour"
2"Street"
3"Leicester"
4"London"
globalScore0.631
windowScore0.833
76.47% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences136
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"smelled like the unexplained mess that too"
1"something like panic—or recognition"
2"looked like a rusted door in the tunnel w"
3"looked like banned alchemical powders, fi"
98.63% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.014
wordCount1973
matches
0"not from the run, but from the unknown pulsing behind"
1"not regulation,\" Quinn thought, but she shoved the distraction aside"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences181
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs57
mean34.61
std19.96
cv0.577
sampleLengths
096
153
257
317
422
557
681
752
815
913
1052
1129
1254
1359
1464
1532
168
1764
1835
1961
2036
2153
2236
2330
2467
2530
2642
2731
2815
2926
3017
3153
3248
3315
3452
3525
3637
3714
388
3931
4017
4126
4213
4326
4430
4545
4624
476
4832
4920
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences162
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs352
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount22
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences21
totalSentences181
ratio0.116
matches
0"Herrera matched the description—former paramedic, off the grid after some licensing scandal."
1"Herrera glanced back, warm brown eyes wide with something like panic—or recognition."
2"The scar on his forearm—she'd read about it in his file, a knife attack from years ago."
3"Eighteen years on the force had honed her for this—decorated service, they called it."
4"Commuters parted, some snapping photos on their phones—great, viral fodder for the morning news."
5"She spun, spotting the service door at the platform's end—unmarked, but her instincts screamed shortcut."
6"Footsteps echoed ahead—Herrera, doubling back?"
7"Voices murmured from the left—faint, like a hidden gathering."
8"Dim light spilled out, along with a cacophony of haggling voices and exotic scents—spices, herbs, something acrid like burning incense."
9"Quinn's intel had skimmed the edges of it—a black market for the bizarre, moving every full moon."
10"Unfamiliar territory, potentially dangerous—hell, definitely dangerous."
11"But that medallion around his neck, the scar on his arm—they tied into something bigger, something that echoed Morris's last words: \"It's not natural, Harlow. Run.\""
12"The air hit her like a wave—thick with the scent of dried herbs, ozone from enchanted artifacts, and the underlying rot of forgotten tunnels."
13"A cluster of beings—not all human, if the pointed ears and scaled skin meant anything—bartered over a shimmering orb that pulsed with inner light."
14"Quinn followed, her boots crunching on scattered bone fragments—tokens, perhaps, discarded after use."
15"No drawing it here—not yet."
16"Unfamiliar, dangerous—words that defined her career's edges."
17"Footsteps approached from the shadows—market guards, perhaps, drawn by the commotion."
18"Torches cast dancing shadows, illuminating murals of forgotten lore—creatures and symbols that matched scraps from Morris's files."
19"Decision point—push on or retreat?"
20"A snap echoed— one rope frayed through."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1755
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount43
adverbRatio0.0245014245014245
lyAdverbCount13
lyAdverbRatio0.007407407407407408
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences181
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences181
mean10.9
std5.47
cv0.502
sampleLengths
012
115
223
316
430
54
612
721
811
95
102
1117
128
1315
1415
1517
1612
1710
1817
1916
2017
217
2212
236
2419
2511
2614
2719
2813
2914
3025
3115
329
334
3410
3513
368
377
3814
3910
406
4113
427
437
446
4510
466
479
489
497
56.54% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.3425414364640884
totalSentences181
uniqueOpeners62
21.10% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences158
matches
0"Just her gut, and that"
ratio0.006
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount43
totalSentences158
matches
0"She had staked out The"
1"She stepped out from the"
2"His short curly hair bounced"
3"she shouted, voice cutting through"
4"He veered left into a"
5"She powered on, breath steady"
6"He vaulted the barrier, ignoring"
7"He hit the platform, scanning"
8"He shoved inside, wedging through"
9"She yanked free, pounding the"
10"She spun, spotting the service"
11"She jimmied it with a"
12"Her mind raced: the clique,"
13"She peered around the corner."
14"He handed it to a"
15"Her heart pounded, not from"
16"She reached for the door"
17"she muttered to the empty"
18"She could turn back, call"
19"She wouldn't run."
ratio0.272
20.13% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount139
totalSentences158
matches
0"Rain pelted the cobblestones of"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn hunched her"
2"She had staked out The"
3"Whispers from informants pointed to"
4"Tomás Herrera emerged from the"
5"Quinn's brown eyes narrowed."
6"Herrera matched the description—former paramedic,"
7"Rumors tied him to underground"
8"She stepped out from the"
9"His short curly hair bounced"
10"Water splashed up from puddles,"
11"Quinn cursed under her breath"
12"Boots slapped against the wet"
13"she shouted, voice cutting through"
14"Herrera glanced back, warm brown"
15"He veered left into a"
16"Quinn leaped them without breaking"
17"The scar on his forearm—she'd"
18"The chase spilled onto Wardour"
19"Pedestrians scattered, umbrellas flipping inside"
ratio0.88
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences158
matches(empty)
ratio0
58.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences85
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"Rumors tied him to underground dealings, the kind that smelled like the unexplained mess that took her partner three years back."
1"He veered left into a narrower lane, knocking over a stack of crates that clattered behind him."
2"Herrera shoved through a group of late-night revelers, earning shouts and a thrown bottle that shattered near Quinn's feet."
3"But the loss of DS Morris gnawed at her, those unexplained circumstances that reeked of something beyond the rational."
4"Herrera fumbled in his pocket, producing a small, carved bone that gleamed unnaturally white."
5"The market dealt in enchanted goods, banned substances, information that could unravel cases like Morris's."
6"Inside, shadows danced from lantern light, stalls crammed with vials that glowed faintly, merchants in tattered robes bartering over crystals that hummed."
7"But backing down now meant letting the threads slip, the clique's secrets burying deeper."
8"He quickened his pace, turning a corner into a chamber lined with shelves of ancient tomes and glowing artifacts."
9"Torches cast dancing shadows, illuminating murals of forgotten lore—creatures and symbols that matched scraps from Morris's files."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"she shouted, voice cutting through the rain's roar"
1"he yelled, voice laced with urgency"
2"he said, voice bouncing off the walls"
3"she said, voice steady"
4"she said, her tone brooking no argument"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"she shouted (shout)"
1"Quinn barked (bark)"
2"she muttered (mutter)"
3"he yelled (yell)"
4"he shouted (shout)"
5"he gasped (gasp)"
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.294
leniency0.588
rawRatio0.6
effectiveRatio0.353
73.9994%