Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY9KE3A981QFS9PMEN2W3CT

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15.5s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The neon green sign of *The Raven’s Nest* flickered like a dying pulse as Rory pushed through the door, the scent of aged whiskey and damp wool wrapping around her. The place smelled the same—too many secrets, too little air—but the hum beneath it had shifted. She’d always thought of Silas’ bar as a quiet corner of the world, a place where the noise of London couldn’t quite reach. Tonight, it felt like a pressure cooker about to burst. She was halfway to the counter when the voice cut through the low murmur of conversation. “Well, if it isn’t Cardiff’s answer to a one-woman legal revolution.” Rory froze. The voice was wrong—too smooth, too polished—and yet, the accent was unmistakable. Irish, sharp as a blade. She turned slowly, her fingers tightening around the strap of her messenger bag. Evan stood at a corner table, his back to the wall, a glass of something amber and expensive in his hand. He’d filled out since she’d last seen him, his once-lean frame now broad with the kind of muscle that came from years of gym memberships and tailored suits. His hair was shorter, his jaw cleaner, the bruises she used to leave on him long gone. In their place was the cold precision of a man who’d spent the last five years building a life without her. “What are you doing here?” she asked, her voice steady despite the way her pulse hammered in her throat. Evan smirked, swirling his drink. “Same as you, I’d imagine. Drowning my sorrows.” His gaze flicked to the bag slung over her shoulder, the *Golden Empress* logo barely visible beneath the scuffed leather. “Though I’d say you’re doing a better job of it than I am.” Rory didn’t answer. She didn’t have to. The weight of the past pressed between them, thick as the smoke curling from the ashtray on Evan’s table. She turned back to the bar, her fingers brushing the scar on her wrist—just a faint crescent, barely noticeable unless you were looking for it. A reminder. Silas appeared beside her, his presence quiet but commanding. He didn’t ask what she wanted. He already knew. “Whiskey,” she said, her voice low. “Neat.” He poured without a word, sliding the glass toward her. The amber liquid caught the dim light, rich and unyielding. Just like the man who’d poured it. Evan watched them from across the room, his expression unreadable. “You look well,” he said finally, as if the words had been dragged from him. “Happy.” Rory took a slow sip, the burn grounding her. “Funny. I was just thinking the same about you.” A beat of silence. The kind that settled like dust between them. “You always did have a way with words,” Evan said, but there was no humor in it. Just the ghost of something older, something sharper. Rory set her glass down. “What do you want, Evan?” He leaned forward, just enough to make her tense. “I want to know why you left.” “You know why.” “Do I?” His fingers tapped the table, a rhythm that made her skin prickle. “Because if I did, I’d have spent the last five years trying to find you.” The words hit like a physical blow. She exhaled sharply, her hands curling into fists. “You had your chance.” “And I blew it.” His voice dropped, rough with something that wasn’t just regret. “Every damn day.” Rory laughed, sharp and bitter. “Spare me the guilt, Evan. You don’t get to play the victim now.” He didn’t flinch. “I’m not.” Silence again. The kind that stretched, taut as a wire about to snap. Then, from the corner of her eye, she saw it—the way his fingers twitched toward his pocket, the way his gaze flicked to the door behind her. Not at her. *Past* her. Rory turned just in time to see the man slide into the booth opposite Evan’s table. Tall, broad-shouldered, his suit the kind that cost more than her rent. He didn’t speak. Didn’t need to. The way Evan’s posture shifted, the way his knuckles whitened around his glass—it was enough. “Who’s your friend?” Rory asked, her voice deceptively light. Evan didn’t look at her. “Business.” “At ten o’clock on a Tuesday?” “Some of us still have jobs.” She should’ve walked away. Should’ve finished her drink and slipped out before whatever this was could drag her back into the past. But the whiskey had loosened her tongue, and the years had sharpened her instincts. “Funny,” she said, stepping closer. “I always thought you were the kind of man who did his business in the dark.” Evan’s jaw tightened. “You always did have a mouth on you.” “And you always did have a temper.” She leaned in, just enough to make sure he caught the scent of the takeout she’d eaten on the way here—spicy, greasy, nothing like the fine dining he was used to. “What’s the play, Evan? Missing me so much you had to track me down? Or is this about something else?” The man in the booth didn’t move, but his presence was a weight, pressing down on the conversation. Evan’s gaze flicked to him, then back to Rory. “It’s about the past,” he said finally. “And what we did to each other.” Rory’s laugh was hollow. “We’re not kids anymore.” “No.” His voice dropped. “But some things don’t change.” She should’ve walked away then. Should’ve turned and let the door swallow her whole. But the words were already out, sharp as broken glass. “What do you want from me, Evan?” He didn’t answer right away. Instead, he reached into his pocket and pulled out a folded piece of paper. Slid it across the table toward her. Rory didn’t touch it. “Open it,” he said. She did. A photograph. A woman, mid-thirties, dark hair streaked with silver, standing in front of a house that looked like something out of a magazine—manicured lawns, perfect brickwork, the kind of place that cost more than Rory had ever earned in her life. The woman’s smile was warm, genuine. Happy. “Who is she?” Rory asked, her voice barely above a whisper. “My wife,” Evan said. The words hit like a punch to the gut. Rory’s fingers trembled, the photograph slipping between them. “Congratulations.” “She’s pregnant,” Evan said. “Due in three months.” The bar blurred for a second, the edges of her vision darkening. She blinked, forcing herself back into focus. “That’s… great.” Evan’s expression was unreadable. “I wanted you to know.” “Why?” “Because you were my first thought when I found out.” Rory’s laugh was sharp, brittle. “That’s rich.” “It’s the truth.” She should’ve thrown the photograph back at him. Should’ve walked out, let the door slam behind her. But the words came out before she could stop them. “What do you want me to say, Evan? That I’m happy for you? That I wish you all the best?” “No.” His voice was raw. “I want you to look at that picture and tell me if you see me in it.” Rory stared at the photograph. The woman’s smile was bright, her eyes crinkling at the corners. There was no trace of the man Rory had known—the one who’d screamed at her, who’d left bruises, who’d made her feel like she was nothing more than a mistake. “You’re not in it,” she said finally. Evan’s fingers tightened around his glass. “That’s what I’m afraid of.” The man in the booth shifted, his presence a sudden, suffocating weight. Rory’s instincts screamed at her to move, to run, to do something—anything—to break the tension coiled between them. But Evan was already standing, his chair scraping against the floor. “I shouldn’t have come,” he said. “I just… I needed to see you.” Rory didn’t answer. She couldn’t. The photograph was still in her hand, the woman’s smile taunting her. Evan reached for it, but Rory pulled back. “Keep it,” she said. “I don’t want it.” He hesitated, then nodded. Turned toward the door. Rory watched him go, her fingers still trembling around the photograph. The man in the booth stood then, his presence a shadow looming over her. “You should leave,” he said, his voice low, rough. Rory didn’t look at him. “I know.” But she didn’t move. Silas appeared beside her, his hand resting lightly on her shoulder. “Time to go, Rory.” She nodded, finally tearing her gaze away from the door Evan had disappeared through. The photograph was still in her hand. She crushed it into a ball, then let it drop to the floor. “Burn it,” she said. Silas didn’t ask questions. He just picked up the photograph and dropped it into the ashtray on Evan’s table. Rory turned and walked out, the weight of the past pressing down on her like a physical force. The night air was cold, sharp. She pulled her jacket tighter around her, her breath fogging in front of her. She didn’t look back. But she knew he was watching. And that was enough.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
66.67% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags22
adverbTagCount4
adverbTags
0"She’d always [always]"
1"he said finally [finally]"
2"he said finally [finally]"
3"she said finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.367
leniency0.733
rawRatio0.182
effectiveRatio0.133
86.83% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1519
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"sharply"
count1
2
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
3
adverb"lightly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"sharply"
2"barely above a whisper"
3"lightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
34.17% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1519
totalAiIsms20
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count2
2
word"flicked"
count3
3
word"weight"
count4
4
word"reminder"
count1
5
word"unreadable"
count2
6
word"silence"
count2
7
word"perfect"
count1
8
word"whisper"
count1
9
word"trembled"
count1
10
word"tension"
count1
11
word"looming"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"pulse"
2"flicked"
3"weight"
4"reminder"
5"unreadable"
6"silence"
7"perfect"
8"whisper"
9"trembled"
10"tension"
11"looming"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences126
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences126
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences164
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords6
totalWords1503
ratio0.004
matches
0"The Raven’s Nest"
1"Golden Empress"
2"Past"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions28
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions49
wordCount1158
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity1.99
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Rory23
Tonight1
Evan18
Silas3
Should3
persons
0"Raven"
1"Rory"
2"Evan"
3"Silas"
4"Should"
places(empty)
globalScore0.507
windowScore0.5
16.67% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences75
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"felt like a pressure cooker about to bu"
1"appeared beside her, his presence quiet but commanding"
2"looked like something out of a magazine—m"
3"appeared beside her, his hand resting lightly on her shoulder"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1503
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences164
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs79
mean19.03
std16.42
cv0.863
sampleLengths
079
116
211
332
487
519
646
753
818
97
1027
1126
1218
1312
1425
1510
1616
173
1829
1919
2017
2118
225
2313
2432
2549
269
276
286
296
3036
3121
3211
3358
3427
3514
368
379
3824
397
4026
414
424
432
4449
4511
464
4718
488
4921
99.69% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences126
matches
0"been dragged"
1"was used"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs210
matches
0"were looking"
1"was watching"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences164
ratio0.055
matches
0"The place smelled the same—too many secrets, too little air—but the hum beneath it had shifted."
1"The voice was wrong—too smooth, too polished—and yet, the accent was unmistakable."
2"She turned back to the bar, her fingers brushing the scar on her wrist—just a faint crescent, barely noticeable unless you were looking for it."
3"Then, from the corner of her eye, she saw it—the way his fingers twitched toward his pocket, the way his gaze flicked to the door behind her."
4"The way Evan’s posture shifted, the way his knuckles whitened around his glass—it was enough."
5"“And you always did have a temper.” She leaned in, just enough to make sure he caught the scent of the takeout she’d eaten on the way here—spicy, greasy, nothing like the fine dining he was used to."
6"A woman, mid-thirties, dark hair streaked with silver, standing in front of a house that looked like something out of a magazine—manicured lawns, perfect brickwork, the kind of place that cost more than Rory had ever earned in her life."
7"There was no trace of the man Rory had known—the one who’d screamed at her, who’d left bruises, who’d made her feel like she was nothing more than a mistake."
8"Rory’s instincts screamed at her to move, to run, to do something—anything—to break the tension coiled between them."
95.97% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount269
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount12
adverbRatio0.04460966542750929
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences164
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences164
mean9.16
std7.14
cv0.779
sampleLengths
030
116
223
310
416
511
62
712
85
913
1021
1128
1217
1321
1419
155
1628
1713
183
194
2019
2125
222
239
246
253
266
271
2810
2910
307
3110
3215
331
349
359
364
378
3817
398
405
415
429
437
443
4514
4615
477
488
494
52.85% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.3353658536585366
totalSentences164
uniqueOpeners55
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences112
matches
0"Just like the man who’d"
1"Just the ghost of something"
2"Then, from the corner of"
3"Instead, he reached into his"
ratio0.036
84.29% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount38
totalSentences112
matches
0"She’d always thought of"
1"She was halfway to the"
2"She turned slowly, her fingers"
3"He’d filled out since she’d"
4"His hair was shorter, his"
5"she asked, her voice steady"
6"His gaze flicked to the"
7"She didn’t have to."
8"She turned back to the"
9"He didn’t ask what she"
10"He already knew."
11"she said, her voice low"
12"He poured without a word,"
13"he said finally, as if"
14"He leaned forward, just enough"
15"His fingers tapped the table,"
16"She exhaled sharply, her hands"
17"His voice dropped, rough with"
18"He didn’t flinch."
19"He didn’t speak."
ratio0.339
58.21% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount90
totalSentences112
matches
0"The neon green sign of"
1"The place smelled the same—too"
2"She’d always thought of"
3"Tonight, it felt like a"
4"She was halfway to the"
5"The voice was wrong—too smooth,"
6"She turned slowly, her fingers"
7"Evan stood at a corner"
8"He’d filled out since she’d"
9"His hair was shorter, his"
10"she asked, her voice steady"
11"Evan smirked, swirling his drink."
12"His gaze flicked to the"
13"Rory didn’t answer."
14"She didn’t have to."
15"The weight of the past"
16"She turned back to the"
17"Silas appeared beside her, his"
18"He didn’t ask what she"
19"He already knew."
ratio0.804
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences112
matches(empty)
ratio0
57.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences42
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"He’d filled out since she’d last seen him, his once-lean frame now broad with the kind of muscle that came from years of gym memberships and tailored suits."
1"She turned back to the bar, her fingers brushing the scar on her wrist—just a faint crescent, barely noticeable unless you were looking for it."
2"Tall, broad-shouldered, his suit the kind that cost more than her rent."
3"A woman, mid-thirties, dark hair streaked with silver, standing in front of a house that looked like something out of a magazine—manicured lawns, perfect brickw…"
4"But Evan was already standing, his chair scraping against the floor."
11.36% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags22
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"she said, her voice low"
1"he said finally, as if the words had been dragged from him"
2"Rory asked, her voice deceptively light"
3"Rory asked, her voice barely above a whisper"
4"he said, his voice low, rough"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags16
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.267
leniency0.533
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
77.1509%