Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY9MF1XQDJR1QRS9EAF423W

Run Details

Model:
Grok 4
Duration:
1m 40s
Cost:
$0.045623
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora pushed through the dense underbrush of Richmond Park, the crunch of leaves under her boots the only sound breaking the night's heavy silence. She had come here chasing a whisper from the pendant around her neck—the Heartstone, that deep crimson gem that had warmed against her skin all evening, pulling her like a magnet toward this forgotten corner of the park. Eva had laughed off her stories about it, called it a cheap trinket from some market stall, but Aurora knew better. The pulse had grown insistent, a rhythmic throb that matched her heartbeat, urging her to the grove she'd only heard about in old Welsh tales her mother used to spin. Answers waited here, or so the warmth promised. She adjusted the strap of her backpack, flashlight beam slicing through the dark, and stepped past the ancient oak standing stones that loomed like silent guardians. The air shifted the moment she crossed the boundary. Cooler, thicker, carrying a scent of wildflowers that bloomed impossibly in the autumn chill. Petals brushed her ankles, vibrant even in the dim light, as if the grove scorned seasons. She paused, heart quickening. No wind stirred the leaves overhead, yet a faint rustle echoed from the shadows ahead. Probably just a rabbit, she thought, shaking off the unease. She flicked off the flashlight to save battery, letting her eyes adjust to the moonlight filtering through the canopy. The clearing stretched before her, a pocket of unnatural stillness, wildflowers carpeting the ground in bursts of color that glowed faintly under the stars. She moved deeper, boots sinking into soft earth. The pendant warmed again, a steady pulse against her collarbone. Good. That meant she headed in the right direction, toward whatever portal or secret the thing hinted at. Her scar on the left wrist itched, a phantom reminder of that childhood fall from the tree in Cardiff, but she ignored it, focusing on the path. The grove's reputation for twisting time nagged at her—stories of people vanishing for days, emerging thinking only minutes had passed. She checked her watch: 11:47 PM. Plenty of time before dawn chased her back to the flat above Silas' bar. A twig snapped somewhere to her left. She froze, ears straining. Silence swallowed the sound, but her pulse hammered in her throat. Animals roamed parks at night, sure, but that snap carried weight, deliberate, like a footfall testing the ground. She scanned the treeline, bright blue eyes narrowing. Nothing. Just shadows dancing where branches overlapped. She exhaled, forcing her feet forward. The wildflowers parted under her steps, releasing a sweet, cloying aroma that clung to her clothes. Her black hair swung as she turned her head, catching a flicker at the edge of her vision—a shape, low and fleeting, gone before she could focus. "Get a grip, Rory," she muttered, voice slicing through the quiet. The words hung, unanswered, but they steadied her. She unzipped her backpack, pulling out the crumpled map Eva had sketched from some online forum—Richmond Park's hidden spots, marked with an X for the grove. The pendant's glow intensified, casting a faint crimson hue on the paper. She traced the lines with her finger, orienting herself toward the center, where the stories claimed the veil between worlds thinned. Isolation pressed in, the park's distant traffic hum faded to nothing, as if the grove sealed itself off from London entirely. Leaves whispered overhead, though no breeze touched her skin. She stopped again, tilting her head. The sound came rhythmic, like breath drawn through foliage, in and out, slow and measured. Wind, she told herself, but doubt crept in. Winds didn't breathe. She pushed on, shorter steps now, the clearing's heart drawing nearer. Moonlight painted the standing stones in silver, their bark etched with patterns that twisted like veins. One stone leaned slightly, as if listening. Something brushed her calf. She whipped around, heart lurching. Wildflowers swayed gently, but nothing else moved. A trick of the undergrowth, maybe, vines tangling her laces. She knelt, fingers probing the stems—cool, unyielding, no sign of disturbance. The pendant throbbed hotter, urgent now. Rising, she caught another flicker, this time to her right, a silhouette slinking between two oaks, too tall for a fox, too fluid for a deer. "Who's there?" Her voice cut sharp, echoing back distorted, like it passed through water. No response. The breathing sound returned, closer, mingling with a low hum that vibrated through the ground. She backed up a step, flashlight clicking on again, beam sweeping the perimeter. Empty. Just flowers and stones and endless shadow. But the certainty bloomed in her gut—she was not alone. Eyes watched her, unseen, patient. She swallowed, throat dry, and forced herself to move, backpack slung tighter over her shoulder. The center of the grove revealed itself as a shallow dip in the earth, ringed by smaller stones half-buried in moss. Wildflowers clustered thicker here, petals unfurling in the night air as if blooming just for her arrival. She circled the dip, pendant now a burning coal against her skin, its inner glow piercing the fabric of her jacket. This had to be it—the spot where time bent, where fae whispers slipped through. She knelt again, hands pressing into the soil, cool and damp, searching for any sign, any portal. A soft scrape echoed from behind a stone. Like nails on bark, deliberate, testing. She rose fast, spinning. Nothing. But the shadows deepened there, pooling unnaturally, defying the moonlight. Her breath came quicker, chest tight. The rustling returned, circling now, faint footsteps padding through the flowers, crushing petals with wet squelches. She tracked the sound, flashlight beam jerking left, then right, catching only glimpses— a branch bending, a leaf trembling out of sync. "Show yourself!" she shouted, voice cracking the stillness. The echo returned mockingly, stretched thin. Her scar burned, a sharp twinge that made her wince. The pendant pulsed in rhythm with it, as if connected. She clutched the gem through her shirt, warmth spreading up her arm, but it offered no comfort now, only insistence. The breathing grew louder, multiple sources now, inhalations overlapping like a chorus hidden in the trees. One drew near, hot and moist against the back of her neck. She whirled, beam flashing—empty air. Panic edged in, but she shoved it down, cool head prevailing. Think, Rory. Out-of-the-box. She backed toward the dip, eyes darting. A shape detached from a shadow, low and hunched, vanishing as her light hit it. Another followed, darting across her peripheral vision, pale and elongated. Not human. Not animal. The footsteps multiplied, a patter encircling her, closing in slow, inevitable. She dropped to one knee, rummaging in her backpack for the salt Eva had joked about packing—old folklore trick against fae. Her fingers closed on the shaker, spilling grains in a hasty circle around her. The sounds paused, as if assessing. Silence gripped the grove, thick and oppressive. Then a chuckle rippled through, low and guttural, not quite laughter, more like stones grinding together. Her heart slammed against her ribs. The pendant flared, crimson light spilling out, illuminating the flowers in bloody hues. Shapes resolved at the edges—limbs twisting unnaturally, eyes glinting like embers in the dark. They inched closer, testing the salt line, recoiling with hisses that mimicked wind through leaves. "Back off," she growled, voice steady despite the tremor in her hands. The chorus of breaths answered, swelling, pressing against her makeshift barrier. One shape lunged, a blur of motion, claws raking the air inches from her face. She staggered back, salt scattering underfoot. The pendant burned fiercer, a beacon in the night, drawing them like moths to flame. More emerged, slinking from behind stones, their forms shifting, elusive. The grove's time twisted around her—her watch ticked erratically, minutes stretching into what felt like hours. A whisper slithered into her ear, close enough to feel lips brush her hair. "Stay... play..." She spun, flashlight arcing. Empty. But the voice lingered, joined by others, murmurs overlapping in languages she half-recognized from her mother's tales—Welsh laced with something ancient, feral. They circled tighter, shadows weaving through the wildflowers, petals wilting where they touched. The ground hummed beneath her, vibrating up her legs, as if the earth itself awakened. Aurora gripped the pendant, yanking it free from the chain. Its glow intensified, pulsing in her palm, warmth surging like a heartbeat not her own. The shapes recoiled slightly, but pressed on, testing, always testing. A claw grazed her boot, cold and sharp, withdrawing with a snarl. She hurled salt at it, grains sparkling in the crimson light, and the thing shrieked, a sound like tearing metal. More voices rose, a cacophony now, words tumbling over each other. "Mine... ours... stay..." She backed into the dip's center, pendant raised like a talisman. The air thickened, wildflowers curling inward, vines snaking toward her ankles. Footsteps thundered closer, no longer subtle—crashing through underbrush, shapes materializing fully at last, twisted limbs and glowing eyes fixed on her. They ringed the dip, a wall of shadow and malice, breaths hot and ragged. One stepped forward, form coalescing into something almost human, features smeared like wet clay. It reached out, fingers elongating, voice a rasp. "Give it... give us..." Aurora's mind raced, piecing together fragments— the pendant's origin from Dymas, its pull to portals. This grove wasn't just fae-touched; it hungered. She clutched the gem tighter, its heat scorching her skin, and thrust it skyward. Light exploded outward, crimson waves rippling through the grove, illuminating horrors in stark relief—faces contorted in agony, bodies warped and fluid. The creatures howled, recoiling as one, shadows fracturing under the glow. But they regrouped, pressing in, whispers turning to roars. "Ours... forever..." She scanned for escape, the standing stones mocking her from afar. Time warped further—her watch spun backward, the moon dipping lower in an instant. Vines wrapped her calf, tugging her down. She kicked free, salt shaker emptying in a desperate arc. The lead creature lunged again, claws slicing air, breath foul and ancient on her face. "Get away!" she bellowed, voice raw. The pendant answered, a final surge of warmth flooding her veins. Light blinded her momentarily, and when vision cleared, the shapes hovered inches away, frozen in mid-attack, eyes burning with hunger. The grove trembled, ground splitting with faint cracks, wildflowers bursting into unnatural bloom around her feet. Whispers intensified, a torrent now, pulling at her mind. "Join us... stay..." Aurora staggered, pendant slipping from slick fingers, clattering into the dip. The creatures surged, a wave of darkness crashing toward her.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences10
tagDensity0.6
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.54% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1773
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1773
totalAiIsms51
found
0
word"silence"
count3
1
word"whisper"
count2
2
word"pulse"
count3
3
word"rhythmic"
count2
4
word"throb"
count1
5
word"warmth"
count4
6
word"loomed"
count1
7
word"chill"
count1
8
word"echoed"
count2
9
word"flicked"
count1
10
word"reminder"
count1
11
word"weight"
count1
12
word"footfall"
count1
13
word"scanned"
count2
14
word"dancing"
count1
15
word"flicker"
count2
16
word"fleeting"
count1
17
word"traced"
count1
18
word"measured"
count1
19
word"etched"
count1
20
word"lurching"
count1
21
word"throbbed"
count1
22
word"echoing"
count1
23
word"vibrated"
count1
24
word"footsteps"
count3
25
word"echo"
count1
26
word"pulsed"
count1
27
word"oppressive"
count1
28
word"resolved"
count1
29
word"glinting"
count1
30
word"beacon"
count1
31
word"moths to flame"
count1
32
word"cacophony"
count1
33
word"thundered"
count1
34
word"raced"
count1
35
word"stark"
count1
36
word"trembled"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"whisper"
2"pulse"
3"rhythmic"
4"throb"
5"warmth"
6"loomed"
7"chill"
8"echoed"
9"flicked"
10"reminder"
11"weight"
12"footfall"
13"scanned"
14"dancing"
15"flicker"
16"fleeting"
17"traced"
18"measured"
19"etched"
20"lurching"
21"throbbed"
22"echoing"
23"vibrated"
24"footsteps"
25"echo"
26"pulsed"
27"oppressive"
28"resolved"
29"glinting"
30"beacon"
31"moths to flame"
32"cacophony"
33"thundered"
34"raced"
35"stark"
36"trembled"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences144
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences144
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences149
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1754
ratio0
matches(empty)
93.75% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions8
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Wind, she told herself, but doubt crept in."
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions23
wordCount1726
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity0.29
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Richmond2
Park2
Heartstone1
Aurora5
Welsh2
Cardiff1
Eva3
London1
Rory1
Dymas1
One4
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Welsh"
2"Eva"
3"Rory"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Cardiff"
3"London"
4"Dymas"
globalScore1
windowScore1
49.19% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences124
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"as if listening"
1"as if blooming just for her arrival"
2"as if assessing"
3"not quite laughter, more like stones grinding together"
4"felt like hours"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1754
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences149
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs32
mean54.81
std35
cv0.639
sampleLengths
0147
1111
2103
3104
411
588
675
769
814
968
1090
1173
128
1379
1461
1564
1648
1712
1873
1916
2055
2167
2214
2357
2426
2557
2622
2756
286
2947
3012
3121
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences144
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs339
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount17
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences18
totalSentences149
ratio0.121
matches
0"She had come here chasing a whisper from the pendant around her neck—the Heartstone, that deep crimson gem that had warmed against her skin all evening, pulling her like a magnet toward this forgotten corner of the park."
1"The grove's reputation for twisting time nagged at her—stories of people vanishing for days, emerging thinking only minutes had passed."
2"Her black hair swung as she turned her head, catching a flicker at the edge of her vision—a shape, low and fleeting, gone before she could focus."
3"She unzipped her backpack, pulling out the crumpled map Eva had sketched from some online forum—Richmond Park's hidden spots, marked with an X for the grove."
4"She knelt, fingers probing the stems—cool, unyielding, no sign of disturbance."
5"But the certainty bloomed in her gut—she was not alone."
6"This had to be it—the spot where time bent, where fae whispers slipped through."
7"She tracked the sound, flashlight beam jerking left, then right, catching only glimpses— a branch bending, a leaf trembling out of sync."
8"She whirled, beam flashing—empty air."
9"She dropped to one knee, rummaging in her backpack for the salt Eva had joked about packing—old folklore trick against fae."
10"Shapes resolved at the edges—limbs twisting unnaturally, eyes glinting like embers in the dark."
11"The grove's time twisted around her—her watch ticked erratically, minutes stretching into what felt like hours."
12"But the voice lingered, joined by others, murmurs overlapping in languages she half-recognized from her mother's tales—Welsh laced with something ancient, feral."
13"Footsteps thundered closer, no longer subtle—crashing through underbrush, shapes materializing fully at last, twisted limbs and glowing eyes fixed on her."
14"Aurora's mind raced, piecing together fragments— the pendant's origin from Dymas, its pull to portals."
15"This grove wasn't just fae-touched; it hungered."
16"Light exploded outward, crimson waves rippling through the grove, illuminating horrors in stark relief—faces contorted in agony, bodies warped and fluid."
17"Time warped further—her watch spun backward, the moon dipping lower in an instant."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount367
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount12
adverbRatio0.0326975476839237
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.01634877384196185
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences149
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences149
mean11.77
std6.77
cv0.575
sampleLengths
024
138
221
330
48
526
69
714
816
94
1015
1110
1219
1324
148
1510
161
1717
1827
1920
206
2114
227
234
2411
2518
268
271
286
296
3016
3127
3211
338
3426
3512
3621
3721
389
396
4015
418
423
4311
4416
457
464
475
487
4910
63.09% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.3825503355704698
totalSentences149
uniqueOpeners57
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences134
matches
0"Probably just a rabbit, she"
1"Just shadows dancing where branches"
2"Just flowers and stones and"
3"Then a chuckle rippled through,"
4"More emerged, slinking from behind"
ratio0.037
76.72% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount48
totalSentences134
matches
0"She had come here chasing"
1"She adjusted the strap of"
2"She paused, heart quickening."
3"She flicked off the flashlight"
4"She moved deeper, boots sinking"
5"Her scar on the left"
6"She checked her watch: 11:47"
7"She froze, ears straining."
8"She scanned the treeline, bright"
9"She exhaled, forcing her feet"
10"Her black hair swung as"
11"she muttered, voice slicing through"
12"She unzipped her backpack, pulling"
13"She traced the lines with"
14"She stopped again, tilting her"
15"She pushed on, shorter steps"
16"She whipped around, heart lurching."
17"She knelt, fingers probing the"
18"Her voice cut sharp, echoing"
19"She backed up a step,"
ratio0.358
38.36% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount113
totalSentences134
matches
0"Aurora pushed through the dense"
1"She had come here chasing"
2"Eva had laughed off her"
3"The pulse had grown insistent,"
4"Answers waited here, or so"
5"She adjusted the strap of"
6"The air shifted the moment"
7"Petals brushed her ankles, vibrant"
8"She paused, heart quickening."
9"She flicked off the flashlight"
10"The clearing stretched before her,"
11"She moved deeper, boots sinking"
12"The pendant warmed again, a"
13"That meant she headed in"
14"Her scar on the left"
15"The grove's reputation for twisting"
16"She checked her watch: 11:47"
17"Plenty of time before dawn"
18"A twig snapped somewhere to"
19"She froze, ears straining."
ratio0.843
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences134
matches(empty)
ratio0
54.57% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences89
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"She had come here chasing a whisper from the pendant around her neck—the Heartstone, that deep crimson gem that had warmed against her skin all evening, pulling…"
1"The pulse had grown insistent, a rhythmic throb that matched her heartbeat, urging her to the grove she'd only heard about in old Welsh tales her mother used to…"
2"She adjusted the strap of her backpack, flashlight beam slicing through the dark, and stepped past the ancient oak standing stones that loomed like silent guard…"
3"Cooler, thicker, carrying a scent of wildflowers that bloomed impossibly in the autumn chill."
4"The clearing stretched before her, a pocket of unnatural stillness, wildflowers carpeting the ground in bursts of color that glowed faintly under the stars."
5"The wildflowers parted under her steps, releasing a sweet, cloying aroma that clung to her clothes."
6"The breathing sound returned, closer, mingling with a low hum that vibrated through the ground."
7"Wildflowers clustered thicker here, petals unfurling in the night air as if blooming just for her arrival."
8"Her scar burned, a sharp twinge that made her wince."
9"They inched closer, testing the salt line, recoiling with hisses that mimicked wind through leaves."
10"More emerged, slinking from behind stones, their forms shifting, elusive."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"she muttered, voice slicing through the quiet"
1"she shouted, voice cracking the stillness"
2"she growled, voice steady despite the tremor in her hands"
3"she bellowed, voice raw"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"she shouted (shout)"
2"she growled (growl)"
3"she bellowed (bellow)"
dialogueSentences10
tagDensity0.4
leniency0.8
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.8
75.5740%