Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY9MRCP490BA4V4W10DQKG6

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Duration:
37.9s
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$0.002537
Provider:
xAI

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory shoved the bookshelf aside, the hidden latch snicking into place behind her. She smoothed her shirt, the faint tang of soy sauce from the last Golden Empress run clinging to her sleeves. A woman perched on the end stool swivelled sharp. Glossy auburn bob sliced straight across her jaw. Designer coat draped over knees like shed skin. "Rory Carter. Bloody hell." Eva. The voice hit first, polished Cardiff edges filed smooth, vowels stretched like taffy. Rory froze mid-stride. Eight years carved those cheeks hollower, etched lines around eyes that used to crinkle easy. "Eva Ellis." Rory slid onto the stool two down, gravel in her throat. The bar's scarred oak bit into her palms. "Fancy you in a dive like this." Silas limped over from the taps, silver signet ring catching the green neon glow from the sign outside. He poured a gin without asking, slid it Rory's way. Ice clinked protest. "Evening, ladies." His hazel eyes flicked between them, beard twitching. "Old ghosts?" Eva's laugh scraped dry. She traced the rim of her empty glass, nail lacquer blood-red. "Ghosts pay better than most clients." She eyed Rory's wrist, the crescent scar peeking from her cuff. "Still got that souvenir, then." Rory tugged her sleeve down. The gin burned neat down her gullet. Copper-edged, like old blood. "Marks fade slower than you'd think." She nodded at Eva's hand, solitaire diamond winking under the low lamps. "Yours looks fresh. Husband? Or upgrade?" Eva's fingers curled. The ring spun once. "Neither. Business." She leaned in, perfume sharp, jasmine laced with smoke. "You vanished, Rory. Cardiff whispers you shacked up with that tosser Evan, then poof. Mum rang your mum last Christmas. Jennifer near had kittens." Silas snorted soft from down the bar, polishing a pint glass with deliberate twists. Black-and-white photos on the walls stared down: grainy spies in trench coats, forgotten alleys. Rory's jaw tightened. She tapped the bar once, firm. "Needed air. London delivers." Her delivery bag slumped at her feet, crumpled orders spilling like confetti. "You climbed the ladder instead. Ellis & Carter solicitors now, yeah? Saw the brass plate on my last pass-by." Eva's smile twisted thin. "Dad's firm. Took his name off the door after the merger." She signalled Silas with two fingers. He poured amber into her glass, neat. "Pre-Law suited you. Quick mind. Outfoxed every prof. What happened?" Rory swirled her gin. Ice chunks ground against glass. "Life happened. Exes. Flats that leak. Bills that bite." She met Eva's gaze, blue on faded green. "You look... settled. Sharp suit under that coat." Eva shrugged the coat off. Silk blouse clung, buttons straining at a new fullness. Changed curves, changed posture. Power shoulders. "Settled pays the mortgage." She sipped deep, throat working. "Evan rang me last month. Worried sick, he said. Said you ghosted without a word." Silas set his rag down. The bar fell quieter, maps rustling faint in the draft. Rory's grip crushed the glass stem near snap. "Evan can sod off." Her voice dropped level. "You know why I left." Eva's eyes darted to Silas, then back. "Everyone knew. Bruiser hands. Black eyes you blamed on doors." She leaned closer, voice a hiss. "I told you to come here. Promised a couch, job leads. You never called." Rory barked a laugh, short and jagged. "Couch? Your flat shared with that banker prick from Swansea? Heard he liked his fists too." She jabbed a finger at the diamond. "That's not a gift. That's a leash." Silas cleared his throat, limp carrying him nearer. He braced hands wide on the oak, ring glinting. "Ladies. Raven's Nest serves drinks, not digs." But his tone hooked deeper. "Though digs build character." Eva ignored him. She slid her stool closer, knee brushing Rory's. "Missed your calls. Your texts. Thought you'd drowned in the Thames." Her fingers grazed Rory's scar, feather-light. "This healed crooked because of him, didn't it? That night in the car." Rory jerked back. Memory flashed: screech of tyres on wet Cardiff tarmac, Evan's roar, glass shattering. Eva's screams from the back seat. "Accident." Rory's pulse throbbed at her temples. "You pulled me out. Held the rag till the blood clotted." Eva's nail dug in, just shy of break skin. "I did. Then you ran. Left me holding the mess." She glanced at the bar mirror, their reflections warped: Rory's black hair tousled, Eva's bob sleek. "Mum still asks. Brendan too. 'Where's Rory?' Like I know." Silas poured himself a finger of whisky. He sipped slow, eyes on the door's green glow. Rory drained her gin. Fire pooled low. "You climbed out first. Always did." She nodded at the photos, shadows pooling in frames. "These walls got ears. Silas here's heard worse." Eva shot him a look. He raised his glass, beard quirking. "MI6 pension buys silence." Eva snorted. "Spymaster tales. Bet you've got Rory dodging more than takeaways." She turned back, voice dropping. "Evan's not the same. Cleaned up. Corporate security now. Sent his regards." Rory's stool scraped back half-inch. "Regards." She spat the word. "Tell him mine: fuck off." Eva's laugh rang hollow, echoing off the maps. "That's the Rory I remember." She fished keys from her bag, Mercedes fob gleaming. "Drinks tomorrow? My treat. Neutral ground. Soho's got spots classier than this." Silas chuckled low. "Class gets sticky." Rory hesitated. Eva's eyes held plea under the polish, old friendship fraying like rope. "Work." Rory stood, bag slung over shoulder. Scar itched under cuff. "Deliveries don't wait." Eva gripped her arm. Nails bit. "Deliveries. From Pre-Law star to bike courier." Disdain curled her lip, regret shadowing it. "We were going to rule Cardiff. You, me, the firm. Now look." Rory peeled free. Skin flushed red. "Look at what? You in silk, me in grease?" She jerked thumb at the stairs. "This flat's rent-free. Silas feeds intel like scraps." Silas tapped his ring on oak, rhythmic. "Scraps sharpen knives." Eva slid cash across, twenties crisp. "Keep the change." She stood, coat swirling. Heels clicked sharp on floorboards. "Evan mentioned a package. For you. Said you'd want it." Rory's blood iced. "Package." Eva nodded, door handle in hand. "From Prague. Old friends." She paused, backlit green. "Don't ghost again, Rory. Time's heavier than you think." The door swung shut. Neon buzzed. Silas poured fresh gin. "Ghosts with packages." He slid it over. "Want the back room?" Rory stared at the door. Footsteps faded outside. Her phone buzzed in her pocket. Unknown number. *Prague drop. Midnight. Come alone. Or Eva pays.* She crushed the glass in her fist. Shards bit deep. Blood welled, copper sharp in the air.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags26
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"She turned back [back]"
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.456
leniency0.912
rawRatio0.038
effectiveRatio0.035
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1112
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
41.55% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1112
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"etched"
count1
1
word"flicked"
count1
2
word"traced"
count1
3
word"silk"
count2
4
word"glinting"
count1
5
word"pulse"
count1
6
word"throbbed"
count1
7
word"silence"
count1
8
word"echoing"
count1
9
word"gleaming"
count1
10
word"rhythmic"
count1
11
word"footsteps"
count1
highlights
0"etched"
1"flicked"
2"traced"
3"silk"
4"glinting"
5"pulse"
6"throbbed"
7"silence"
8"echoing"
9"gleaming"
10"rhythmic"
11"footsteps"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences107
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences107
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences138
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen26
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords8
totalWords1102
ratio0.007
matches
0"Prague drop. Midnight. Come alone. Or Eva pays."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions60
wordCount690
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity3.19
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Golden1
Empress1
Cardiff2
Rory22
Eva20
Silas10
Evan1
Mercedes1
Scar1
Heels1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Eva"
2"Silas"
3"Evan"
4"Scar"
5"Heels"
places
0"Cardiff"
globalScore0
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences56
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1102
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences138
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs70
mean15.74
std10.02
cv0.637
sampleLengths
033
125
24
332
428
531
612
715
822
916
1024
117
1235
1328
149
1535
164
1734
189
1925
2020
2124
2215
238
2413
257
2630
277
2830
2917
3016
3111
3230
3322
3418
359
3636
3716
387
3923
4011
414
422
4327
445
4510
468
4726
483
493
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences107
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs141
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences138
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount697
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount13
adverbRatio0.018651362984218076
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences138
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences138
mean7.99
std5.18
cv0.648
sampleLengths
013
120
29
38
48
54
61
713
83
915
1013
118
127
1318
1410
153
1610
172
184
1911
2017
215
225
237
244
2518
266
273
284
2911
3024
3114
3214
333
346
3516
3619
374
3817
397
4010
414
425
4317
448
455
469
474
482
499
89.37% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.5362318840579711
totalSentences138
uniqueOpeners74
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences97
matches(empty)
ratio0
88.04% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount32
totalSentences97
matches
0"She smoothed her shirt, the"
1"He poured a gin without"
2"His hazel eyes flicked between"
3"She traced the rim of"
4"She eyed Rory's wrist, the"
5"She nodded at Eva's hand,"
6"She leaned in, perfume sharp,"
7"She tapped the bar once,"
8"Her delivery bag slumped at"
9"She signalled Silas with two"
10"He poured amber into her"
11"She met Eva's gaze, blue"
12"She sipped deep, throat working"
13"Her voice dropped level"
14"She leaned closer, voice a"
15"She jabbed a finger at"
16"He braced hands wide on"
17"She slid her stool closer,"
18"Her fingers grazed Rory's scar,"
19"She glanced at the bar"
ratio0.33
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount91
totalSentences97
matches
0"Rory shoved the bookshelf aside,"
1"She smoothed her shirt, the"
2"A woman perched on the"
3"Designer coat draped over knees"
4"The voice hit first, polished"
5"Rory froze mid-stride."
6"Rory slid onto the stool"
7"The bar's scarred oak bit"
8"Silas limped over from the"
9"He poured a gin without"
10"Ice clinked protest."
11"His hazel eyes flicked between"
12"Eva's laugh scraped dry."
13"She traced the rim of"
14"She eyed Rory's wrist, the"
15"Rory tugged her sleeve down."
16"The gin burned neat down"
17"Copper-edged, like old blood."
18"She nodded at Eva's hand,"
19"Eva's fingers curled."
ratio0.938
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences97
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences12
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
48.08% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags26
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"His hazel eyes flicked, beard twitching"
1"She eyed, the crescent scar peeking from her cuff"
2"She nodded, shadows pooling in frames"
3"She turned back, voice dropping"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"She spat (spit)"
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.018
leniency0.035
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.035
82.2346%