Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY9MXQEXR27AWB509B2HN2E

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Duration:
20.0s
Cost:
$0.001103
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The air in Camden smelled of coal smoke and rain as Detective Harlow Quinn adjusted her trench coat against the draft, her leather-soled shoes clicking past a stack of crates marked with faded alchemical symbols. She’d come to this part of town for the third time this week, each visit more shadowed than the last, but tonight the neon glow of the canal-side pubs failed to pierce the wall of damp that clung to her skin. The Veil Market moved locations every full moon, but she’d gotten word—through a source in the City’s underbelly, one who owed her a debt from Operation Ashdown—at dusk: *they’re here*. Her watch, a battered thing with a cracked crystal that was all the time she needed, read 11:17 PM as she paused at the mouth of the tunnel. The bone token hung heavy in her coat pocket—a molar, filed to a point, its surface scored with a script she couldn’t read but that hummed in her bones. The guard, a scalie with a forked tongue and eyes like cracked amber, didn’t even look up as she pressed it to the iron gate. It melted into the metal with a hiss, revealing a portal: not a door, but a seething black maw, lined with teeth. Quinn stepped through, her boots squelching on moss that shouldn’t grow here. The main chamber of the old Tube station was a cavern, its platforms buried under stalls stacked with gilded jars, rusted keys, and books with covers that changed color when she looked away. The air hummed with static, like a radio tuned to a dead frequency. Most of the vendors were gone—probably scared off by the noise, or by the *presence* in the room. Quinn’s jaw tightened. She’d smelled it before: ozone, and something sweeter, like burnt sugar. Morris’s case. Three years ago, he’d found a trail of the same scent in an abandoned warehouse in Whitechapel. They’d been closing in on a supplier, he’d radioed—*something’s not right, Quinn, it’s not human*—before his comms went silent. His body had been found twenty hours later, face-down in a puddle of water that had no business being there, his eyes wide and empty. No wounds. No footprints. Just that cursed smell, lingering in the air like a warning. “Detective.” Quinn turned. A young woman stood at the edge of the crowd, her curly red hair escaping the bun at the base of her neck, a satchel slung over one shoulder. She wore round glasses that smudged at the edges, and her freckles were more prominent than ever, as if she’d been running. Eva Kowalski. Her best friend since college, when they’d both stayed up all night discussing *Midsomer Murders* and ancient magic, and the woman who’d just told her about the body in the back. “Evie,” Quinn said, her voice gruff. “Took you long enough.” Eva tucked a loose strand of hair behind her left ear—nervous, always nervous— and pushed her glasses up. “I had to check the archives. The bone token—you saw it? The one the guards use?” She held up her own, a molar from a boar, and Quinn nodded. Eva’s satchel gaped open, spilling books: *Secrets of the Veil*, *Runes of the Unseen World*, *The Art of Closing Rifts*. “I cross-referenced. The script isn’t just decorative. It’s a warning. *Beware the Wraith’s Teeth.*” Quinn’s throat went dry. The Wraith’s Teeth were a myth, part of the lore Eva obsessed over—creatures that fed on supernatural energy, according to the old texts. They didn’t exist. Morris had laughed at her when she’d mentioned them. *“You’ve been reading too much of your friend’s trash, Harlow,”* he’d said, clapping her shoulder. *“Next you’ll tell me ghosts solve crimes.”* The crowd shifted. A stall had been torn apart—a pile of silver coins scattered on the ground, their edges jagged as if bitten. And there, in the center of the mess, was the body. Quinn’s boots crunched on glass as she crossed the platform. The victim was a man, mid-thirties, wearing a tailored suit that was stained with something black and sticky—*blood?*—but her first thought was *wrong*. The lighting here was pale, emanating from bioluminescent mushrooms that grew in clusters at the base of the tunnel, casting his face in an otherworldly green hue. His eyes were closed, his hands folded over his chest, fingers splayed. But his posture—relaxed, almost comfortable—was wrong for a dead man. Victims of the market didn’t *rest*; they contorted, their faces frozen in fear, their bodies drained of every ounce of life. “Stab wound?” she said, stopping beside Eva. She knelt, ignoring the dampness seeping into her trousers, and pressed a finger to the wound in his chest. It was shallow, no deeper than a knife’s point, but the skin around it was black, as if burned. Eva’s voice was tight. “The vendor said it was clean. No blood, no struggle—except for the stall. He found the body an hour ago, when the moon rose. Said the coins were still warm.” Quinn stood, her knees cracking. She scanned the area. The mushrooms were too bright, their glow unnatural. And the air—*thinner*. As if the room itself had been exhaled. “Where’s the body of the guard?” Eva flinched. “There isn’t one.” Quinn turned. The scalie was gone. So were the other vendors, the ones who’d been haggling over a jar of glowing sand when she’d arrived. The only sound was the drip of water from a rusted pipe high above, and the *tick-tick* of her watch. “Why didn’t you tell me?” “Because you’d come storming in, and then you’d *see*,” Eva said, her voice rising. “The gills—why would a scalie guard just… disappear? They’re territorial. They’d tear the body apart before they let anyone take it.” She gestured to the wound. “And the stain—charcoal, not blood. The mushrooms are bioluminescent, but they don’t *burn*. I’ve seen them. They glow. That’s it.” Quinn squinted at the man’s hand. His fingers were curled around something small, half-buried in the moss. She knelt,小心翼翼拨开腐叶. A compass. Small brass, its casing etched with sigils that shifted as she watched—*protective* sigils, she realized, the ones Eva had mentioned in her books. The needle was broken, the tip bent. But it was *pointing*—not north, not south, but straight at the puddle at the man’s feet. The puddle. Quinn stepped closer. It was black, like oil, and it rippled. Not with water, but with a darkness that seemed to *move*, as if something was trying to get out. The smell hit her then: ozone, burnt sugar, *dead* air. And under it, a low, guttural hum. “Eva,” she said, her voice steady. “What’s the compass for? The one the artisans sell—what does it do?” Eva hesitated, then pulled a notebook from her satchel and flipped through it. “The Veil Compass. Crafted by Shade artisans. It’s attuned to supernatural energy. The needle… it points to rifts. Or portals. Or—” She looked up, her eyes wide. “The books say it can close them, too. If you know the right sigils.” Quinn traced the bent needle with her thumb. The sigils on the casing—she’d seen them before, on Morris’s body. The ones on his hands, etched into his skin in a frenzy, like he’d tried to carve them out. *“It’s closing in,”* he’d mouthed, as she’d found him. *“I should have left it alone.”* “You said the victim was a dealer,” she said, straightening. “What did he sell?” Eva bit her lip. “I don’t know. The vendor, Mr. Voss—he was scared. He wouldn’t say. But he mentioned ‘the key.’ Something that could open a rift. A *permanent* one.” She paused. “Harlow, the Wraith’s Teeth—they don’t feed on energy. They feed on *souls*. And if there’s a rift, if the barrier between worlds is thin… they could pour through.” Quinn’s watch ticked. Her mind was racing. The guard was gone. The victim’s wound was shallow, why no blood? The compass was broken, pointing to the puddle. Morris. Three years ago, his comms had gone silent during a raid on a supplier. He’d found a rift. He’d tried to close it with a compass. *That* was why his eyes were empty—he’d stared into the rift, and the Wraiths had taken his soul. “You think he was trying to close a rift,” Eva said, their voices overlapping. Quinn nodded. “But the vendor said the coins were warm. The guard is gone. So who took the body? Who’s covering it up?” Eva’s nervous habit flared—she tucked her hair behind her ear, twice. “The clique. The one you’ve been chasing. The one that deals with the Veil Market, right? The one that’s been moving bodies around London for months.” Quinn turned away from the puddle. The maw of the portal was still there, glowing faintly, as if it were waiting. She thought of the victim’s face, relaxed, almost at peace. He hadn’t been afraid. That was the worst part. He’d known what was coming, and he’d *let* it happen. “Put the books away,” she said, slinging her coat over her shoulder. “We’re going to the Museum.” Eva hesitated, then closed her satchel, her fingers brushing the compass in her pocket—the one Eva had given her for her birthday, three years ago, when Morris was still alive. “You’ll need it,” she said, quiet. Quinn took a step toward the portal. The hum in her bones was back, louder now, like a voice whispering *here* *here* *here*. She pulled the bone token from her pocket, and as she did, the sigils on it flared to life, glowing white against the dark. “The key,” she said, to herself. “It’s not the rift. It’s the *closing*.” The puddle rippled again, and this time, she saw it—a flash of white teeth, sharp and glinting, before the darkness swallowed it. Quinn walked through the portal, her boots clicking on the cobblestones of Camden High Street. The sky was pale, the sun rising, and for a moment, everything felt normal. Then her watch ticked. Three years, she thought. Three years too long. She turned toward the British Museum, her jaw set, her fingers tight around the bone token. The hunt was just beginning.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences33
tagDensity0.455
leniency0.909
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1717
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
67.97% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1717
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"crystal"
count1
1
word"maw"
count2
2
word"otherworldly"
count1
3
word"comfortable"
count1
4
word"scanned"
count1
5
word"etched"
count2
6
word"traced"
count1
7
word"racing"
count1
8
word"glinting"
count1
highlights
0"crystal"
1"maw"
2"otherworldly"
3"comfortable"
4"scanned"
5"etched"
6"traced"
7"racing"
8"glinting"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences116
matches
0"n in fear"
56.65% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences116
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
98.30% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences134
gibberishSentences1
adjustedGibberishSentences1
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0.007
matches
0"She knelt,小心翼翼拨开腐叶."
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans31
markdownWords75
totalWords1690
ratio0.044
matches
0"they’re here"
1"presence"
2"something’s not right, Quinn, it’s not human"
3"Midsomer Murders"
4"Secrets of the Veil"
5"Runes of the Unseen World"
6"The Art of Closing Rifts"
7"Beware the Wraith’s Teeth."
8"“You’ve been reading too much of your friend’s trash, Harlow,”"
9"“Next you’ll tell me ghosts solve crimes.”"
10"blood?"
11"wrong"
12"rest"
13"thinner"
14"tick-tick"
15"see"
16"burn"
17"protective"
18"pointing"
19"move"
20"dead"
21"“It’s closing in,”"
22"“I should have left it alone.”"
23"permanent"
24"souls"
25"That"
26"let"
27"here"
28"here"
29"here"
30"closing"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions21
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
79.21% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions66
wordCount1342
uniqueNames25
maxNameDensity1.42
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Camden2
Detective1
Harlow1
Quinn19
Veil2
Market1
City1
Operation1
Ashdown1
Tube1
Whitechapel1
Kowalski1
Eva15
Unseen1
Art1
Closing1
Wraith1
Teeth1
Morris5
Wraiths1
High1
Street1
British1
Museum1
Three4
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Market"
3"City"
4"Kowalski"
5"Eva"
6"Closing"
7"Wraith"
8"Morris"
9"Wraiths"
places
0"Camden"
1"Operation"
2"Whitechapel"
3"High"
4"Street"
5"British"
globalScore0.792
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences72
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"darkness that seemed to move*, as if something was trying to get out"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords2.367
wordCount1690
matches
0"not a door, but a seething black maw, lined with teeth"
1"not north, not south, but straight at the puddle at the man’s feet"
2"not south, but straight at the puddle at the man’s feet"
3"Not with water, but with a darkness"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences134
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs39
mean43.33
std30.48
cv0.703
sampleLengths
0106
1116
264
392
41
586
610
781
861
934
10103
1145
1234
1334
145
1550
1660
1767
182
1947
2018
2154
2253
2314
2460
2572
2614
2723
2837
2950
3017
3136
3247
3313
3422
3533
368
3716
385
75.02% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount10
totalSentences116
matches
0"were gone"
1"been found"
2"been torn"
3"were closed"
4"been exhaled"
5"was gone"
6"were curled"
7"was broken"
8"was gone"
9"was broken"
85.06% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs232
matches
0"was trying"
1"was racing"
2"were waiting"
3"was coming"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount22
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences18
totalSentences134
ratio0.134
matches
0"The Veil Market moved locations every full moon, but she’d gotten word—through a source in the City’s underbelly, one who owed her a debt from Operation Ashdown—at dusk: *they’re here*."
1"The bone token hung heavy in her coat pocket—a molar, filed to a point, its surface scored with a script she couldn’t read but that hummed in her bones."
2"Most of the vendors were gone—probably scared off by the noise, or by the *presence* in the room."
3"They’d been closing in on a supplier, he’d radioed—*something’s not right, Quinn, it’s not human*—before his comms went silent."
4"Eva tucked a loose strand of hair behind her left ear—nervous, always nervous— and pushed her glasses up."
5"The Wraith’s Teeth were a myth, part of the lore Eva obsessed over—creatures that fed on supernatural energy, according to the old texts."
6"A stall had been torn apart—a pile of silver coins scattered on the ground, their edges jagged as if bitten."
7"The victim was a man, mid-thirties, wearing a tailored suit that was stained with something black and sticky—*blood?*—but her first thought was *wrong*."
8"But his posture—relaxed, almost comfortable—was wrong for a dead man."
9"Victims of the market didn’t *rest*; they contorted, their faces frozen in fear, their bodies drained of every ounce of life."
10"And the air—*thinner*."
11"Small brass, its casing etched with sigils that shifted as she watched—*protective* sigils, she realized, the ones Eva had mentioned in her books."
12"But it was *pointing*—not north, not south, but straight at the puddle at the man’s feet."
13"The sigils on the casing—she’d seen them before, on Morris’s body."
14"*That* was why his eyes were empty—he’d stared into the rift, and the Wraiths had taken his soul."
15"Eva’s nervous habit flared—she tucked her hair behind her ear, twice."
16"Eva hesitated, then closed her satchel, her fingers brushing the compass in her pocket—the one Eva had given her for her birthday, three years ago, when Morris was still alive."
17"The puddle rippled again, and this time, she saw it—a flash of white teeth, sharp and glinting, before the darkness swallowed it."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1361
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount31
adverbRatio0.022777369581190303
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.00440852314474651
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences134
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences134
mean12.61
std9.19
cv0.728
sampleLengths
035
141
230
328
429
525
622
712
833
913
1018
113
1211
132
1417
1519
1625
172
182
1911
201
212
2229
2322
242
2531
266
274
2818
2929
3020
3114
324
3323
343
359
3615
377
383
3920
4011
4110
4223
4327
4412
4510
4621
477
4819
4919
42.54% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.291044776119403
totalSentences134
uniqueOpeners39
64.72% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences103
matches
0"Just that cursed smell, lingering"
1"Then her watch ticked."
ratio0.019
87.96% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences103
matches
0"She’d come to this part"
1"Her watch, a battered thing"
2"It melted into the metal"
3"She’d smelled it before: ozone,"
4"They’d been closing in on"
5"His body had been found"
6"She wore round glasses that"
7"Her best friend since college,"
8"She held up her own,"
9"They didn’t exist."
10"he’d said, clapping her shoulder"
11"His eyes were closed, his"
12"she said, stopping beside Eva"
13"She knelt, ignoring the dampness"
14"It was shallow, no deeper"
15"She scanned the area."
16"She gestured to the wound"
17"His fingers were curled around"
18"It was black, like oil,"
19"she said, her voice steady"
ratio0.33
37.67% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount87
totalSentences103
matches
0"The air in Camden smelled"
1"She’d come to this part"
2"The Veil Market moved locations"
3"Her watch, a battered thing"
4"The bone token hung heavy"
5"The guard, a scalie with"
6"It melted into the metal"
7"Quinn stepped through, her boots"
8"The main chamber of the"
9"The air hummed with static,"
10"Quinn’s jaw tightened."
11"She’d smelled it before: ozone,"
12"They’d been closing in on"
13"His body had been found"
14"A young woman stood at"
15"She wore round glasses that"
16"Her best friend since college,"
17"Quinn said, her voice gruff"
18"Eva tucked a loose strand"
19"She held up her own,"
ratio0.845
48.54% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences103
matches
0"As if the room itself"
ratio0.01
38.96% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences55
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"The main chamber of the old Tube station was a cavern, its platforms buried under stalls stacked with gilded jars, rusted keys, and books with covers that chang…"
1"His body had been found twenty hours later, face-down in a puddle of water that had no business being there, his eyes wide and empty."
2"She wore round glasses that smudged at the edges, and her freckles were more prominent than ever, as if she’d been running."
3"Her best friend since college, when they’d both stayed up all night discussing *Midsomer Murders* and ancient magic, and the woman who’d just told her about the…"
4"The victim was a man, mid-thirties, wearing a tailored suit that was stained with something black and sticky—*blood?*—but her first thought was *wrong*."
5"It was shallow, no deeper than a knife’s point, but the skin around it was black, as if burned."
6"So were the other vendors, the ones who’d been haggling over a jar of glowing sand when she’d arrived."
7"Small brass, its casing etched with sigils that shifted as she watched—*protective* sigils, she realized, the ones Eva had mentioned in her books."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"Eva said, her voice rising"
1"she said, her voice steady"
2"She looked up, her eyes wide"
3"Eva said, their voices overlapping"
4"she said, quiet"
89.39% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"he’d (would)"
1"he’d (would)"
dialogueSentences33
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0.182
effectiveRatio0.121
75.7331%