Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY9NZ1VCJB2BJE9WC81WFDD

Run Details

Duration:
29.1s
Cost:
$0.001680
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora Carter pushed through the thicket at the edge of Richmond Park, the beam of her torch slicing erratic paths through the ink-black night. Leaves rustled under her boots, crisp despite the late autumn chill that should have stripped the branches bare. She had come here on a whim, really—a tip from a stranger at Silas's bar, a murmured word about a place where the air hummed with secrets, where something ancient might explain the faint warmth that had started pulsing from the pendant around her neck two nights ago. The Heartstone, they called it, though she still didn't know who had slipped it into her coat pocket outside the Golden Empress. Curiosity had dragged her out here after her shift, the city's distant glow fading behind her as she veered off the main paths. The park sprawled vast and empty under a moonless sky, stars pricked like distant warnings. Rory's breath fogged in the cold, her straight black hair sticking to her neck from the hurried trek. She adjusted the silver chain beneath her jacket, the thumbnail-sized crimson gem pressing against her skin like a second heartbeat. It had grown warmer mile by mile, urging her deeper into the wilder sections where joggers never ventured after dark. She paused at a cluster of ancient oaks, their trunks twisted into shapes that suggested faces half-formed in the bark. The stranger's directions echoed in her mind: follow the deer path until the stones appear. Sure enough, there they stood—massive slabs of weathered oak, not stone at all, but petrified wood rising from the earth like forgotten sentinels. They formed a rough circle, maybe ten feet across, enclosing a clearing she swore hadn't been on any map she'd checked back at her flat. Rory stepped over the threshold, her torchlight catching on wildflowers blooming in defiant clusters along the ground. Daisies and violets, petals unfurling as if kissed by spring, though frost should have blackened them weeks ago. The air shifted, thicker here, carrying a scent like rain on stone mixed with something sweeter, almost cloying, like overripe fruit. She swung the torch around the perimeter. Nothing. Just the grove, isolated and still. She killed the light to listen. The city's hum had vanished entirely; no cars, no planes slicing overhead. Only the wind sifted through the branches, but it sounded wrong—too rhythmic, like whispers braided into the gusts. Rory shook her head, chalked it up to exhaustion from dodging traffic all day on her delivery bike. The pendant throbbed once, a gentle reminder. She knelt in the center of the clearing, pulling it free from her collar. The deep crimson gem caught no light, yet it glowed from within, faint as a dying ember. "What are you?" she muttered to the empty air, her voice flat and swallowed by the trees. No answer came, of course. She traced the scar on her left wrist, the small crescent from a tumble off her bike as a kid, grounding herself in the familiar sting of old skin. The tip had promised answers here—something about portals, realms bleeding into each other. Rory had laughed it off at first, but the pendant's pull had hooked her, dragging her out into this madness. Pre-Law dropout or not, she knew a lead when it tugged. A rustle snapped from the underbrush beyond the oaks. Her head jerked up. Squirrels, maybe, or a fox scavenging. Richmond Park teemed with wildlife at night. She waited, breath held, but the sound didn't repeat. The flowers at her feet swayed, though no breeze stirred the air inside the circle. Rory stood, pocketing the pendant's chain but leaving it out, the glow a dim beacon against her palm. She paced the boundary, boots crunching on moss that felt too soft, too alive underfoot. The oaks loomed taller from this angle, their branches interlocking overhead like a cage woven from bone. She reached out, fingers brushing one trunk. Warm. Not sun-warmed, but pulsing, as if sap coursed through it faster than blood in veins. She pulled back, heart kicking up a notch. Imagination. That's all. She circled again, slower, torch reignited to banish shadows. The light played tricks, stretching branches into claws that retracted when she blinked. At the far edge, something flickered—a shape darting between two oaks, gone before she could focus. A deer? Too quick, too low to the ground. "Ridiculous," she said aloud, forcing a scoff. But her voice echoed oddly, layering back at her from the trees, as if the grove mimicked her. The whispers in the wind picked up, fragments now: soft syllables that dissolved before meaning formed. Rory froze, straining to catch them. Leaves? No, voices, layered and distant, like a crowd murmuring from another room. She spun, torch beam sweeping wide. Empty. The flowers nodded in approval, their petals brushing her ankles like tiny fingers. She pressed on, reason be damned. The pendant burned hotter, guiding her to the northern arc of the circle. There, amid the roots, a seam in the earth yawned—a crack no wider than her hand, but deep, exhaling cool mist that carried the cloying sweetness stronger. Rory crouched, peering in. Darkness swallowed the light, but the whispers surged from below, clearer: names, perhaps, or pleas, twisting into English for a heartbeat. Her name? No, impossible. A twig snapped behind her, sharp as a bone breaking. She whirled, torch catching only air. But the shadows clung longer this time, pooling at the base of the oaks like ink seeking form. Something shifted in her periphery—a silhouette, humanoid, melting into the bark as she turned fully. Her pulse thrummed in her ears. Not alone. The certainty settled in her gut, cold and unyielding. "Who's there?" Rory called, voice steady despite the tremor in her chest. No response, but the flowers stilled, as if listening. She backed away from the crack, torch held high. The oaks creaked, though the wind had died. One branch dipped low, leaves rustling without cause, brushing her shoulder. She flinched, swatting it away. Fabric? No, just foliage. But the touch lingered, a chill seeping through her jacket. The whispers circled now, encircling her, words half-formed: "Stay... linger... join..." They pulled at her, threads of sound weaving into her thoughts. Rory clamped her hands over her ears, but they burrowed deeper, vibrating in her skull. The pendant flared, crimson light pulsing in time with the voices, drawing her back to the crack. She resisted, eyes darting to the boundary. Exit there, past the eastern oak. But as she moved, the ground softened, moss sucking at her boots like mud in a bog. The trees leaned inward, the circle shrinking, or was it her imagination stretching space? Time warped here; the stranger had warned of that. An hour inside could bleed into days. Another flicker—two this time, on opposite sides. Shapes peeled from the shadows, tall and slender, faces obscured by hanging vines that writhed like hair. They didn't approach, just watched, eyes glinting wetly in the torch's edge. Rory's breath came short. Fae. The word slammed into her mind, unbidden. The grove's pocket between worlds, alive with things that mimicked life but hungered for more. She bolted for the gap between oaks, torch bouncing wildly. The whispers chased her, swelling into a chorus that clawed at her back. Branches whipped close, snagging her sleeve, tearing fabric with deliberate tugs. The flowers surged upward, stems elongating to tangle her legs, petals unfurling into mocking smiles. Rory kicked free, lungs burning. The eastern oak rushed at her, but its trunk bulged, a handprint forming in the bark, fingers elongating toward her. She veered left, scraping past, the wood groaning in pursuit. The pendant scalded her skin, its glow illuminating eyes in the underbrush—dozens, unblinking, circling. She burst through the thicket outside the circle, collapsing onto solid path. The whispers faded to echoes, the air thinning to normal chill. But the grove watched. Oaks stood sentinel, their forms undulating subtly, inviting her return. Rory scrambled up, torch trembling in her grip. The pendant cooled, but its pulse lingered, a siren's call. She ran, park paths blurring, but behind her, the circle hummed, unsatisfied. The shapes stirred anew, slipping toward the boundary she had crossed. She didn't look back. The city's lights beckoned, but the wrongness clung, a shadow stitched to her heels. The grove remembered. And it waited. Deeper in, unnoticed, the crack in the earth widened a fraction, mist coiling like breath. The flowers bloomed brighter, petals whispering secrets to the night. Rory reached her bike, chained by the park entrance, hands shaking as she fumbled the lock. Pedal hard, she told herself. Home to the flat above the bar, to Eva's voice on the phone, to normalcy. But the pendant warmed again, faint, insistent. The stranger's tip had been truth, twisted. Portals, realms—Hel's echo, perhaps, bleeding through Fae veils. She mounted and pushed off, wind whipping her hair. Richmond Park receded, but the certainty gnawed: not alone anymore. The grove had marked her. Hours later—or was it minutes?—she slammed the door to her flat, heart still racing. Silas's bar thumped below, muffled laughter seeping through the floorboards. Safe. But the pendant dangled, crimson glow pulsing softly against her chest. She stripped it off, dropping it on the bedside table. Sleep clawed at her, but the whispers echoed in dreams waiting to form. Outside, in the park, the oaks creaked under starless sky. Shapes danced at the circle's edge, footfalls silent on wildflowers that never wilted. They hungered, patient, for the one who carried the Heartstone's fire. Rory bolted upright in bed, sweat-slicked. Dawn light filtered through grimy windows, but the clock read 3 AM. Time slipped. She grabbed the pendant—cold now, inert. Yet as she clutched it, a rustle sounded from the fire escape, soft as leaves on glass. She peered out. Empty alley, bins overflowing. But the air hummed, that cloying sweetness faint on the breeze. The door to her flat rattled, knob turning slow. Locked. She had locked it. Heart pounding, Rory slid from bed, grabbing the nearest thing—a lamp, heavy base in hand. The rattle stopped. Silence blanketed the room, thick as the grove's mist. Then, from the hallway outside, footsteps padded away. Light, bare soles on wood. She waited, breath shallow, until the bar's jukebox kicked in downstairs, shattering the quiet. Imagination, frayed by night. She sank back, but sleep evaded, chased by eyes in the dark. Morning came hesitant, gray light pushing shadows aside. Rory dressed for her shift, the pendant tucked away. Delivery routes would ground her—Yu-Fei's shouts, Eva's texts, the city's pulse. But as she descended to the bar, Silas nodded from behind the counter, wiping glasses. "Rough night? You look like you've seen ghosts." She forced a grin. "Just the park. Took a wrong turn." He chuckled, but his eyes lingered. "Richmond's got spots that bite back. Stick to the paths." She nodded, grabbing her bike keys. Outside, the streets bustled, oblivious. Yet the pendant warmed midway through her first run, pulsing as she neared the park's distant edge. Coincidence. She shook it off, pedaling harder. By evening, the pull returned, stronger. The grove called, voices threading through traffic noise. Rory ignored it, crashing early. But in dreams, the oaks encircled her bed, branches tapping windowpanes, flowers blooming on her pillow. She woke gasping, the pendant clutched in fist, crimson light bleeding through fingers. Not alone. Never again. The shapes waited, patient in the pocket realm, their forms coalescing from mist and shadow. One stepped forward in the grove, face half-human, eyes like the pendant's glow. It extended a hand, palm up, inviting. Join us, the whispers promised. Linger. Stay. Time stretched, an hour there equaling eternity here. Rory stirred in sleep, murmuring denial, but her fingers tightened on the chain.
created_at"2026-02-20T19:50:57.864Z" 2/20/2026, 7:50:57 PM
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native_tokens_reasoning388
native_tokens_cached151
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num_input_audio_prompt(null)
num_media_completion0
num_search_results(null)
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provider_responses
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she said aloud [aloud]"
dialogueSentences7
tagDensity0.571
leniency1
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.25
94.97% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1990
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
27.14% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1990
totalAiIsms29
found
0
word"chill"
count3
1
word"warmth"
count1
2
word"echoed"
count3
3
word"sentinels"
count1
4
word"rhythmic"
count1
5
word"throbbed"
count1
6
word"reminder"
count1
7
word"traced"
count1
8
word"familiar"
count1
9
word"beacon"
count1
10
word"loomed"
count1
11
word"flickered"
count1
12
word"pulse"
count3
13
word"flicker"
count1
14
word"glinting"
count1
15
word"echoes"
count1
16
word"sentinel"
count1
17
word"normalcy"
count1
18
word"echo"
count1
19
word"racing"
count1
20
word"pounding"
count1
21
word"silence"
count1
22
word"footsteps"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"warmth"
2"echoed"
3"sentinels"
4"rhythmic"
5"throbbed"
6"reminder"
7"traced"
8"familiar"
9"beacon"
10"loomed"
11"flickered"
12"pulse"
13"flicker"
14"glinting"
15"echoes"
16"sentinel"
17"normalcy"
18"echo"
19"racing"
20"pounding"
21"silence"
22"footsteps"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences185
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences185
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences188
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen49
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1968
ratio0
matches(empty)
97.22% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Pedal hard, she told herself."
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions43
wordCount1934
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity0.93
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Carter1
Richmond3
Park3
Silas3
Heartstone2
Golden1
Empress1
English1
Eva2
Hel1
Fae2
Rory18
Yu1
Fei1
Time3
persons
0"Carter"
1"Silas"
2"Heartstone"
3"Eva"
4"Hel"
5"Rory"
6"Fei"
7"Time"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Golden"
3"English"
4"Fae"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences142
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as if listening"
98.37% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.016
wordCount1968
matches
0"not stone at all, but petrified wood rising from the earth like forgotten sentinel"
1"Not sun-warmed, but pulsing, as if sap coursed through it faster than blood in v"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences188
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs49
mean40.16
std26.48
cv0.659
sampleLengths
0135
173
283
370
492
517
678
750
873
958
1025
1155
1275
1366
1421
1547
1654
1760
1863
1949
2049
2137
2241
2324
2425
2558
2624
2736
2823
2934
3043
3118
3229
3312
3413
3530
3628
3723
3811
3916
4028
417
4214
4321
4413
454
4635
477
4821
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences185
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs375
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount16
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences16
totalSentences188
ratio0.085
matches
0"She had come here on a whim, really—a tip from a stranger at Silas's bar, a murmured word about a place where the air hummed with secrets, where something ancient might explain the faint warmth that had started pulsing from the pendant around her neck two nights ago."
1"Sure enough, there they stood—massive slabs of weathered oak, not stone at all, but petrified wood rising from the earth like forgotten sentinels."
2"The city's hum had vanished entirely; no cars, no planes slicing overhead."
3"Only the wind sifted through the branches, but it sounded wrong—too rhythmic, like whispers braided into the gusts."
4"The tip had promised answers here—something about portals, realms bleeding into each other."
5"At the far edge, something flickered—a shape darting between two oaks, gone before she could focus."
6"There, amid the roots, a seam in the earth yawned—a crack no wider than her hand, but deep, exhaling cool mist that carried the cloying sweetness stronger."
7"Something shifted in her periphery—a silhouette, humanoid, melting into the bark as she turned fully."
8"Time warped here; the stranger had warned of that."
9"Another flicker—two this time, on opposite sides."
10"The pendant scalded her skin, its glow illuminating eyes in the underbrush—dozens, unblinking, circling."
11"Portals, realms—Hel's echo, perhaps, bleeding through Fae veils."
12"Hours later—or was it minutes?—she slammed the door to her flat, heart still racing."
13"She grabbed the pendant—cold now, inert."
14"Heart pounding, Rory slid from bed, grabbing the nearest thing—a lamp, heavy base in hand."
15"Delivery routes would ground her—Yu-Fei's shouts, Eva's texts, the city's pulse."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1957
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount58
adverbRatio0.02963719979560552
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.005620848237097598
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences188
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences188
mean10.47
std6.61
cv0.631
sampleLengths
024
118
248
322
423
515
618
720
820
920
1015
1123
1225
1317
1418
1521
167
171
186
196
2012
2118
2218
237
2414
2517
2617
275
2829
2913
3020
3111
329
334
346
357
369
3715
3818
3915
4017
417
421
4315
448
451
462
479
4813
4916
60.99% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.3723404255319149
totalSentences188
uniqueOpeners70
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences165
matches
0"Just the grove, isolated and"
1"Only the wind sifted through"
2"Too quick, too low to"
3"Then, from the hallway outside,"
4"Light, bare soles on wood."
ratio0.03
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount44
totalSentences165
matches
0"She had come here on"
1"She adjusted the silver chain"
2"It had grown warmer mile"
3"She paused at a cluster"
4"They formed a rough circle,"
5"She swung the torch around"
6"She killed the light to"
7"She knelt in the center"
8"she muttered to the empty"
9"She traced the scar on"
10"Her head jerked up."
11"She waited, breath held, but"
12"She paced the boundary, boots"
13"She reached out, fingers brushing"
14"She pulled back, heart kicking"
15"She circled again, slower, torch"
16"she said aloud, forcing a"
17"She spun, torch beam sweeping"
18"She pressed on, reason be"
19"She whirled, torch catching only"
ratio0.267
69.09% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount129
totalSentences165
matches
0"Aurora Carter pushed through the"
1"Leaves rustled under her boots,"
2"She had come here on"
3"The Heartstone, they called it,"
4"Curiosity had dragged her out"
5"The park sprawled vast and"
6"Rory's breath fogged in the"
7"She adjusted the silver chain"
8"It had grown warmer mile"
9"She paused at a cluster"
10"The stranger's directions echoed in"
11"They formed a rough circle,"
12"Rory stepped over the threshold,"
13"Daisies and violets, petals unfurling"
14"The air shifted, thicker here,"
15"She swung the torch around"
16"She killed the light to"
17"The city's hum had vanished"
18"Rory shook her head, chalked"
19"The pendant throbbed once, a"
ratio0.782
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences165
matches(empty)
ratio0
88.51% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences92
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"She had come here on a whim, really—a tip from a stranger at Silas's bar, a murmured word about a place where the air hummed with secrets, where something ancie…"
1"Rory stepped over the threshold, her torchlight catching on wildflowers blooming in defiant clusters along the ground."
2"She paced the boundary, boots crunching on moss that felt too soft, too alive underfoot."
3"Not sun-warmed, but pulsing, as if sap coursed through it faster than blood in veins."
4"The whispers in the wind picked up, fragments now: soft syllables that dissolved before meaning formed."
5"There, amid the roots, a seam in the earth yawned—a crack no wider than her hand, but deep, exhaling cool mist that carried the cloying sweetness stronger."
6"Oaks stood sentinel, their forms undulating subtly, inviting her return."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"she muttered, her voice flat and swallowed by the trees"
1"Rory called, voice steady despite the tremor in her chest"
7.14% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences7
tagDensity0.429
leniency0.857
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.286
78.1148%