Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY9QBNZRW32AG2MSXEV6NV3

Run Details

Duration:
33.6s
Cost:
$0.001672
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rain hammered the Soho pavements like a thousand tiny fists, turning the gutters into rushing black rivers. Detective Harlow Quinn sprinted through the downpour, her boots splashing through puddles that reflected the garish green neon glow of The Raven's Nest. The bar's sign flickered above the entrance, casting erratic shadows on the wet brick walls lined with old maps and faded photographs—relics of a city that hid more secrets than it revealed. She'd been watching the place for weeks, piecing together whispers of a clique operating in the shadows. Tonight, her gut had screamed when she'd spotted him: Tomás Herrera, the ex-paramedic with the Seville accent and the off-books clinic for lowlifes. He'd slipped out the back, clutching a satchel that bulged suspiciously, his short curly dark hair plastered to his olive-skinned forehead. Now he was her suspect, rabbiting through the labyrinth of London's night. "Stop! Police!" Harlow bellowed, her voice slicing through the storm's roar. Military precision guided her stride—shoulders squared, sharp jaw set like flint. Water streamed down her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair, stinging her brown eyes, but she didn't blink. Her worn leather watch on her left wrist ticked relentlessly, a metronome against the chaos: 11:47 PM. Three minutes since the chase began. Tomás darted left into an alley off Wardour Street, his Saint Christopher medallion glinting under a streetlamp before vanishing into the gloom. He was fast for a healer—5'10" of lean muscle honed from hauling stretchers and dodging knives. That scar on his left forearm flashed white as he shoved past a overflowing dumpster, the jagged line a souvenir from some street brawl. Harlow followed, vaulting a crate of sodden cardboard. Her lungs burned, but she pushed harder, coat flapping like a sodden cape. The alley narrowed, reeking of piss and rotting takeaway. He was heading north—toward Camden, away from the Thames' glow. Why? What was in that bag? Drugs? Stolen meds for his supernatural side-hustle patients? Her mind flashed to DS Morris, swallowed by shadows three years ago on a case that defied logic. Unexplained. Supernatural, though she'd never admit it aloud. A car horn blared as they burst onto Oxford Street. Traffic snarled, headlights slicing yellow beams through the sheets of rain. Tomás weaved between stalled taxis, his breath ragged gasps she could almost hear. He glanced back—warm brown eyes wide with panic—and shoved a pedestrian aside. The man yelped, umbrella spinning into the road. Harlow shouldered past, flashing her badge. "Met Police! Out of the way!" Tires screeched as she crossed against the lights. A bus loomed, wipers thrashing; she hurled herself forward, boot skidding on oil-slick asphalt. Heart slamming, she regained footing and plunged into the crowd on the far side. He was a shadow now, merging with the late-night stragglers under umbrellas. Soho's pulse faded behind them—pubs spilling laughter, the Raven's green sign a distant memory. Rain chilled her to the bone, but adrenaline fired her veins. She couldn't lose him. Not like Morris. They hit Regent Street, then veered into quieter backstreets, the city compressing into wet concrete canyons. Tomás's pace faltered; he clutched his side, medallion bouncing against his chest. Good—former paramedic or not, he wasn't built for marathons. Harlow closed the gap to twenty yards, her breaths syncing with the rain's rhythm. " Herrera! You're done running!" she shouted, voice raw. He didn't stop, ducking into a pedestrian underpass beneath Euston Road. The chase plunged into subterranean gloom, fluorescent strips buzzing overhead like angry wasps. Puddles deepened here, echoing their splashes. Footsteps doubled, tripled in the tiled confines. A homeless man stirred from a sleeping bag, muttering curses. Tomás emerged onto the Euston fringes, then north again—Camden's markets loomed in the distance, shuttered stalls ghostly under sodium lights. The rain eased to a relentless drizzle, but the streets grew treacherous: cobbles slick from canal overflow, bike lanes flooded. He stumbled, righting himself with a curse in Spanish—something about saints and madre de dios. Harlow's watch read 12:09. Sweat mixed with rain under her collar. Her mind raced: backup? Radio silent in the storm, signal jammed by the weather. Solo pursuit—stupid, but instinct overrode protocol. Always had. Camden Lock appeared, locks swollen and churning black water. Tomás scrambled over a low railing, dropping to a service path along the canal towpath. Moonlight pierced the clouds, full and bloated—not quite yet, but close. The Veil Market's cycle, she'd heard rumors in dive bars. Superstitious bollocks, or so she'd told herself. She mirrored his descent, fence wire snagging her coat. The path was mud-slick, narrow, flanked by graffiti-tagged walls. Barges rocked violently; a loose mooring rope whipped like a serpent. Tomás slipped ahead, splashing knee-deep into a puddle that hid a pothole. He yelped, twisting his ankle, but pressed on, limping now. "Give it up, Tommy!" she called, using the alias from her notes. "I know about the Nest. The off-books jobs. The clique." He shot her a feral glance over his shoulder, scar twisting with his grimace. "You don't know shit, detective!" His accent thickened with fear—Seville roots surfacing. He veered right, away from the canal, into Camden's underbelly: abandoned industrial yards, chain-link fences sagging under ivy. The air thickened, carrying a metallic tang beneath the rain—ozone, or something fouler. They rounded a derelict warehouse, its windows shattered eyes staring blind. Tomás halted at a rusted manhole cover half-hidden by pallets, breath heaving. He yanked a small bone token from his pocket—yellowed, carved with runes that gleamed unnaturally. With a grunt, he pried the cover, muscles straining, scar livid against his skin. Harlow skidded to a stop ten feet away, hand on her holstered Glock. Rain dripped from her sharp jaw, watch ticking: 12:22. "Freeze. Hands up." He met her eyes, warm brown pleading desperation. "Stay out, Quinn. This ain't your world." The cover grated open, revealing not sewer stench, but a spiral stair plunging into abyss. Faint glows emanated from below—torchlight? Candles? Voices murmured, exotic and layered, like a bazaar from hell. The Veil Market. She'd chased leads here before, but never entered. Whispers of enchanted blades that whispered lies, potions that twisted flesh, brokers peddling souls. Tomás dropped the satchel in first—clink of vials—then descended, token clutched like a talisman. His medallion caught the eerie light, Saint Christopher warding against what lurked below. Harlow's pulse thundered. Morris's face flashed—pale, eyes vacant, body found twisted in ways physics denied. Supernatural origins. She didn't understand it then; still didn't. But this clique... they danced on that edge. Herrera was key: healer for monsters. Follow him? Into the unknown, where her badge meant nothing, where shadows moved with intent. No backup, no light, just her service weapon and grit. The stairwell exhaled cool, fetid air—spice and blood and something electric. Shouts rose from below: haggling in tongues she half-recognized from old case files. Demons? Fae? Bollocks, but her skin crawled. Her radio crackled faintly—storm breaking? "Control to Quinn, status?" She thumbed it. "Pursuing suspect, Camden underbelly. Herrera. Request—" Static swallowed her. Decision crystallized. Lose him now, and the trail went colder than the rain. The clique laughed at her from the Raven's secret room. Morris's ghost demanded justice. Harlow holstered her radio, drew her Glock. Military bearing locked in: precise, unyielding. She glanced at her watch—12:24—then stepped to the edge. The bone token lay discarded; she snatched it, runes warm against her palm, pulsing like a heartbeat. "Fuck it," she muttered, and descended. The stairs spiraled tight, iron rungs slick with condensation. Torchlight grew brighter, walls shifting from concrete to rough-hewn stone etched with sigils that shimmered. Air hummed, thick with incense and murmurs. Her boots echoed wrong—amplified, mocking. At the bottom, the abandoned Tube platform sprawled: a cavernous bazaar under vaulted arches. Stalls crammed every inch—tattered awnings fluttering in unseen drafts. Vendors hawked glowing orbs that whispered prophecies, vials bubbling with liquid starlight, blades that sang when drawn. Patrons slithered through: scaled hides, elongated limbs, eyes like polished jet. A woman with ram's horns bartered fangs; a man whose shadow moved independently tallied coins. Tomás wove through the throng, satchel reclaimed, limping toward a shadowed alcove. He glanced back, horror dawning as he spotted her. Harlow gripped the token tighter, Glock low and ready. Whispers turned heads—human intruder. A growl rippled from a nearby stall, claws scraping stone. No turning back. She advanced, rain forgotten, into the vein of the city's hidden heart. Tension coiled as a hooded figure blocked Tomás's path, gesturing urgently. Herrera nodded, slipping a vial from the bag—payment? The figure's eyes gleamed inhuman. Harlow pushed forward, elbowing a furred creature aside. It snarled, fangs dripping ichor. "Back off," she hissed, badge flashing futilely. Eyes tracked her—predatory, amused. A voice slithered from the shadows: "Fresh meat, detective? The Market welcomes the bold... or the foolish." Her watch ticked: 12:28. Morris's warning echoed in her skull. But Herrera was cornered. She raised her voice. "Tomás Herrera! You're under arrest!" Laughter bubbled like boiling tar. The chase had ended; the real hunt began. Harlow's sharp jaw clenched, brown eyes scanning for exits that might not exist. The token burned in her fist—key or curse? Tomás vanished behind a curtain of beads, the hooded ally melting away. She lunged after, Glock barking a warning shot into the vaulted ceiling. Sparks rained; screams erupted. Chaos bloomed. Stalls overturned, potions shattering in coruscating sprays. A tentacled merchant lunged; she sidestepped, pistol-whipping its appendage. Pain flared in her side—claws raking coat, drawing blood. Deeper she plunged, the Market's pulse syncing with her heart. Whispers clawed her mind: *Join us. Forget. Understand.* No. Precision. Grit. For Morris. For the truth. Ahead, Tomás stumbled into a dead-end alcove, back to pulsating wall-veins. He whirled, hands raised. "Quinn, please. You don't get it. They're not criminals—they're survivors." She leveled the Glock, rain-slick grip steady. "Kneel. Now." The wall pulsed. Eyes opened in the stone—watching. Judging. Her watch: 12:32. Full moon cresting. The Market stirred, alive and hungry. Decision made long ago, in rain-soaked streets. She advanced.
created_at"2026-02-20T19:51:43.563Z" 2/20/2026, 7:51:43 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Her radio crackled faintly— [faintly]"
dialogueSentences26
tagDensity0.577
leniency1
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.067
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1712
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
21.14% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1712
totalAiIsms27
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"glinting"
count1
2
word"gloom"
count2
3
word"loomed"
count2
4
word"pulse"
count3
5
word"chilled"
count1
6
word"echoing"
count1
7
word"footsteps"
count1
8
word"treacherous"
count1
9
word"raced"
count1
10
word"churning"
count1
11
word"shattered"
count1
12
word"thundered"
count1
13
word"electric"
count1
14
word"crystallized"
count1
15
word"etched"
count1
16
word"shimmered"
count1
17
word"echoed"
count2
18
word"tension"
count1
19
word"jaw clenched"
count1
20
word"scanning"
count1
21
word"pulsed"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"glinting"
2"gloom"
3"loomed"
4"pulse"
5"chilled"
6"echoing"
7"footsteps"
8"treacherous"
9"raced"
10"churning"
11"shattered"
12"thundered"
13"electric"
14"crystallized"
15"etched"
16"shimmered"
17"echoed"
18"tension"
19"jaw clenched"
20"scanning"
21"pulsed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences70
matches
0"e with panic"
1"d with fear"
20.41% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount6
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences70
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences73
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen82
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords4
totalWords1661
ratio0.002
matches
0"Join us. Forget. Understand."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Tomás vanished behind a curtain of beads, the hooded ally melting away. She lunged after, Glock barking a warning shot i…"
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions89
wordCount1488
uniqueNames30
maxNameDensity0.87
worstName"Tomás"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Soho2
Harlow12
Quinn1
Raven3
Nest1
Tomás13
Herrera5
Seville2
London1
Military2
Wardour1
Street3
Saint2
Christopher2
Camden4
Oxford1
Morris5
Regent1
Euston2
Road1
Spanish1
Lock1
Veil2
Market5
Glock5
Tube1
Laughter1
Rain3
You3
Whispers3
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Raven"
3"Tomás"
4"Herrera"
5"Military"
6"Saint"
7"Christopher"
8"Camden"
9"Morris"
10"Lock"
11"Market"
12"Glock"
13"Laughter"
14"Rain"
15"You"
16"Whispers"
places
0"Soho"
1"Seville"
2"London"
3"Wardour"
4"Street"
5"Oxford"
6"Regent"
7"Euston"
8"Road"
9"Spanish"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences55
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"not quite yet, but close"
79.59% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.204
wordCount1661
matches
0"not quite yet, but close"
1"not sewer stench, but a spiral stair plunging into abyss"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences73
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs49
mean33.9
std19.85
cv0.585
sampleLengths
072
173
261
362
480
554
648
744
851
99
1047
1155
1233
1352
1451
1522
1619
1738
1852
1925
2015
2156
2227
2338
2456
259
2612
2727
2839
296
3036
3166
3221
3323
3415
3524
3620
3721
3823
3934
4028
4127
4218
438
4425
459
469
4712
489
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences70
matches
0"was cornered"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs320
matches
0"was heading"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount32
semicolonCount9
flaggedSentences30
totalSentences73
ratio0.411
matches
0"The bar's sign flickered above the entrance, casting erratic shadows on the wet brick walls lined with old maps and faded photographs—relics of a city that hid more secrets than it revealed."
1"Military precision guided her stride—shoulders squared, sharp jaw set like flint."
2"He was fast for a healer—5'10\" of lean muscle honed from hauling stretchers and dodging knives. That scar on his left forearm flashed white as he shoved past a overflowing dumpster, the jagged line a souvenir from some street brawl."
3"Harlow followed, vaulting a crate of sodden cardboard. Her lungs burned, but she pushed harder, coat flapping like a sodden cape. The alley narrowed, reeking of piss and rotting takeaway. He was heading north—toward Camden, away from the Thames' glow. Why? What was in that bag? Drugs? Stolen meds for his supernatural side-hustle patients? Her mind flashed to DS Morris, swallowed by shadows three years ago on a case that defied logic. Unexplained. Supernatural, though she'd never admit it aloud."
4"A car horn blared as they burst onto Oxford Street. Traffic snarled, headlights slicing yellow beams through the sheets of rain. Tomás weaved between stalled taxis, his breath ragged gasps she could almost hear. He glanced back—warm brown eyes wide with panic—and shoved a pedestrian aside. The man yelped, umbrella spinning into the road."
5"Out of the way!\" Tires screeched as she crossed against the lights. A bus loomed, wipers thrashing; she hurled herself forward, boot skidding on oil-slick asphalt. Heart slamming, she regained footing and plunged into the crowd on the far side."
6"He was a shadow now, merging with the late-night stragglers under umbrellas. Soho's pulse faded behind them—pubs spilling laughter, the Raven's green sign a distant memory. Rain chilled her to the bone, but adrenaline fired her veins. She couldn't lose him. Not like Morris."
7"They hit Regent Street, then veered into quieter backstreets, the city compressing into wet concrete canyons. Tomás's pace faltered; he clutched his side, medallion bouncing against his chest. Good—former paramedic or not, he wasn't built for marathons. Harlow closed the gap to twenty yards, her breaths syncing with the rain's rhythm."
8"Tomás emerged onto the Euston fringes, then north again—Camden's markets loomed in the distance, shuttered stalls ghostly under sodium lights. The rain eased to a relentless drizzle, but the streets grew treacherous: cobbles slick from canal overflow, bike lanes flooded. He stumbled, righting himself with a curse in Spanish—something about saints and madre de dios."
9"Harlow's watch read 12:09. Sweat mixed with rain under her collar. Her mind raced: backup? Radio silent in the storm, signal jammed by the weather. Solo pursuit—stupid, but instinct overrode protocol. Always had."
10"Camden Lock appeared, locks swollen and churning black water. Tomás scrambled over a low railing, dropping to a service path along the canal towpath. Moonlight pierced the clouds, full and bloated—not quite yet, but close. The Veil Market's cycle, she'd heard rumors in dive bars. Superstitious bollocks, or so she'd told herself."
11"She mirrored his descent, fence wire snagging her coat. The path was mud-slick, narrow, flanked by graffiti-tagged walls. Barges rocked violently; a loose mooring rope whipped like a serpent. Tomás slipped ahead, splashing knee-deep into a puddle that hid a pothole. He yelped, twisting his ankle, but pressed on, limping now."
12"His accent thickened with fear—Seville roots surfacing. He veered right, away from the canal, into Camden's underbelly: abandoned industrial yards, chain-link fences sagging under ivy. The air thickened, carrying a metallic tang beneath the rain—ozone, or something fouler."
13"They rounded a derelict warehouse, its windows shattered eyes staring blind. Tomás halted at a rusted manhole cover half-hidden by pallets, breath heaving. He yanked a small bone token from his pocket—yellowed, carved with runes that gleamed unnaturally. With a grunt, he pried the cover, muscles straining, scar livid against his skin."
14"The cover grated open, revealing not sewer stench, but a spiral stair plunging into abyss. Faint glows emanated from below—torchlight? Candles? Voices murmured, exotic and layered, like a bazaar from hell. The Veil Market. She'd chased leads here before, but never entered. Whispers of enchanted blades that whispered lies, potions that twisted flesh, brokers peddling souls."
15"Tomás dropped the satchel in first—clink of vials—then descended, token clutched like a talisman. His medallion caught the eerie light, Saint Christopher warding against what lurked below."
16"Harlow's pulse thundered. Morris's face flashed—pale, eyes vacant, body found twisted in ways physics denied. Supernatural origins. She didn't understand it then; still didn't. But this clique... they danced on that edge. Herrera was key: healer for monsters."
17"Follow him? Into the unknown, where her badge meant nothing, where shadows moved with intent. No backup, no light, just her service weapon and grit. The stairwell exhaled cool, fetid air—spice and blood and something electric. Shouts rose from below: haggling in tongues she half-recognized from old case files. Demons? Fae? Bollocks, but her skin crawled."
18"Her radio crackled faintly—storm breaking? \"Control to Quinn, status?\""
19"Harlow holstered her radio, drew her Glock. Military bearing locked in: precise, unyielding. She glanced at her watch—12:24—then stepped to the edge. The bone token lay discarded; she snatched it, runes warm against her palm, pulsing like a heartbeat."
20"The stairs spiraled tight, iron rungs slick with condensation. Torchlight grew brighter, walls shifting from concrete to rough-hewn stone etched with sigils that shimmered. Air hummed, thick with incense and murmurs. Her boots echoed wrong—amplified, mocking."
21"At the bottom, the abandoned Tube platform sprawled: a cavernous bazaar under vaulted arches. Stalls crammed every inch—tattered awnings fluttering in unseen drafts. Vendors hawked glowing orbs that whispered prophecies, vials bubbling with liquid starlight, blades that sang when drawn. Patrons slithered through: scaled hides, elongated limbs, eyes like polished jet. A woman with ram's horns bartered fangs; a man whose shadow moved independently tallied coins."
22"Harlow gripped the token tighter, Glock low and ready. Whispers turned heads—human intruder. A growl rippled from a nearby stall, claws scraping stone."
23"Tension coiled as a hooded figure blocked Tomás's path, gesturing urgently. Herrera nodded, slipping a vial from the bag—payment? The figure's eyes gleamed inhuman."
24"Eyes tracked her—predatory, amused. A voice slithered from the shadows: \"Fresh meat, detective?"
25"Laughter bubbled like boiling tar. The chase had ended; the real hunt began. Harlow's sharp jaw clenched, brown eyes scanning for exits that might not exist. The token burned in her fist—key or curse?"
26"Tomás vanished behind a curtain of beads, the hooded ally melting away. She lunged after, Glock barking a warning shot into the vaulted ceiling. Sparks rained; screams erupted."
27"Chaos bloomed. Stalls overturned, potions shattering in coruscating sprays. A tentacled merchant lunged; she sidestepped, pistol-whipping its appendage. Pain flared in her side—claws raking coat, drawing blood."
28"They're not criminals—they're survivors.\""
29"The wall pulsed. Eyes opened in the stone—watching. Judging."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount291
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"short curly dark hair"
adverbCount4
adverbRatio0.013745704467353952
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.01718213058419244
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences73
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences73
mean22.75
std18.17
cv0.799
sampleLengths
017
123
232
317
423
521
612
711
811
916
1017
116
1222
1340
1480
1554
168
1740
1844
1951
202
217
2247
2355
2433
2552
2651
2717
283
292
3019
3138
3252
3323
342
3511
364
3756
3827
3938
4056
419
427
431
444
4527
4639
476
4836
4966
83.11% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.5068493150684932
totalSentences73
uniqueOpeners37
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences64
matches(empty)
ratio0
88.75% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount21
totalSentences64
matches
0"She'd been watching the place"
1"He'd slipped out the back,"
2"Her worn leather watch on"
3"He was fast for a"
4"He was a shadow now,"
5"They hit Regent Street, then"
6"He didn't stop, ducking into"
7"She mirrored his descent, fence"
8"she called, using the alias"
9"He shot her a feral"
10"His accent thickened with fear—Seville"
11"They rounded a derelict warehouse,"
12"He met her eyes, warm"
13"Her radio crackled faintly—storm breaking?"
14"She thumbed it."
15"she muttered, and descended"
16"Her watch ticked: 12:28. Morris's"
17"You don't get it."
18"They're not criminals—they're"
19"She leveled the Glock, rain-slick"
ratio0.328
38.13% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount54
totalSentences64
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn sprinted through"
1"The bar's sign flickered above"
2"She'd been watching the place"
3"Tonight, her gut had screamed"
4"He'd slipped out the back,"
5"Harlow bellowed, her voice slicing"
6"Military precision guided her stride—shoulders"
7"Water streamed down her closely"
8"Her worn leather watch on"
9"Tomás darted left into an"
10"He was fast for a"
11"Harlow followed, vaulting a crate"
12"A car horn blared as"
13"Harlow shouldered past, flashing her"
14"He was a shadow now,"
15"They hit Regent Street, then"
16"He didn't stop, ducking into"
17"Tomás emerged onto the Euston"
18"Harlow's watch read 12:09. Sweat"
19"Camden Lock appeared, locks swollen"
ratio0.844
78.13% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences64
matches
0"Now he was her suspect,"
ratio0.016
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences40
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn sprinted through the downpour, her boots splashing through puddles that reflected the garish green neon glow of The Raven's Nest."
1"The bar's sign flickered above the entrance, casting erratic shadows on the wet brick walls lined with old maps and faded photographs—relics of a city that hid …"
2"He'd slipped out the back, clutching a satchel that bulged suspiciously, his short curly dark hair plastered to his olive-skinned forehead."
3"They hit Regent Street, then veered into quieter backstreets, the city compressing into wet concrete canyons. Tomás's pace faltered; he clutched his side, medal…"
4"She mirrored his descent, fence wire snagging her coat. The path was mud-slick, narrow, flanked by graffiti-tagged walls. Barges rocked violently; a loose moori…"
5"They rounded a derelict warehouse, its windows shattered eyes staring blind. Tomás halted at a rusted manhole cover half-hidden by pallets, breath heaving. He y…"
6"The cover grated open, revealing not sewer stench, but a spiral stair plunging into abyss. Faint glows emanated from below—torchlight? Candles? Voices murmured,…"
7"Harlow holstered her radio, drew her Glock. Military bearing locked in: precise, unyielding. She glanced at her watch—12:24—then stepped to the edge. The bone t…"
8"The stairs spiraled tight, iron rungs slick with condensation. Torchlight grew brighter, walls shifting from concrete to rough-hewn stone etched with sigils tha…"
9"At the bottom, the abandoned Tube platform sprawled: a cavernous bazaar under vaulted arches. Stalls crammed every inch—tattered awnings fluttering in unseen dr…"
10"Tension coiled as a hooded figure blocked Tomás's path, gesturing urgently. Herrera nodded, slipping a vial from the bag—payment? The figure's eyes gleamed inhu…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags5
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Harlow bellowed, her voice slicing through the storm's roar"
1"she hissed, badge flashing futilely"
73.08% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Harlow bellowed (bellow)"
1"she muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences26
tagDensity0.115
leniency0.231
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.154
75.8775%