Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY9QBWM396ZQ8WKAQJP8DW7

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Duration:
33.3s
Cost:
$0.001624
Provider:
xAI

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn descended the rusted metal stairs into the bowels of the abandoned Tube station beneath Camden, her worn leather watch ticking steadily against her left wrist. The air thickened with the stench of damp concrete and something sharper—ozone, like a storm trapped underground. Her torch beam sliced through the gloom, catching flickers of graffiti that glowed faintly under blacklight residue from forensics. Uniformed officers milled about the platform, their faces pale masks in the harsh portable lights, but Harlow moved with military precision, sharp jaw set, brown eyes scanning every shadow. The Veil Market. She'd heard whispers of it in the station's backrooms—supposed urban legend, a black market for the weird and forbidden, tucked away in places like this, vanishing every full moon. No one credible believed it existed, not until tonight. A body had turned up on what looked like a makeshift stall, surrounded by trinkets that screamed contraband: vials of shimmering liquid, amulets etched with symbols that made her skin crawl. PC Ellis had called it in as a junkie OD, but Harlow's gut twisted. Junkies didn't die clutching bone tokens carved like ancient keys. She ducked under the crime scene tape, salt-and-pepper hair brushing the low ceiling. DS Patel, her colleague from Vice, straightened from crouching beside the body. Mid-forties, rumpled suit, he flashed a tired grin. "Quinn. Glad you're here. This one's a head-scratcher." Harlow knelt beside the corpse, gloved hands hovering. Male, late thirties, gaunt face frozen in a rictus of terror. Throat slashed clean, arterial spray arcing across a stall piled with brass oddities and faded grimoires. No weapon in sight. Blood pooled thick on the cracked tiles, but it hadn't spread far—contained, almost deliberate. "Time of death?" she asked, voice clipped. "Coroner pegs it around midnight. Victim's name: Marcus Hale, small-time fence with priors for smuggling antiquities. Found by a couple of late-night ravers who slipped through a service hatch. They legged it before we could get names." Harlow's gaze flicked to the bone token in Hale's rigid fist, thumb-sized, etched with spirals that matched entry rumors for this so-called market. "Ravers don't wander into sealed stations. And this?" She nodded at the token. "Not your average rave accessory." Patel shrugged, rubbing his stubbled chin. "Kids these days. Probably part of some LARP cult or TikTok dare. Looks like he nicked something valuable, got jumped by rivals. Throat cut, wallet empty, stall ransacked. Classic robbery-homicide." She rose, torch sweeping the perimeter. The platform stretched into darkness, stalled train cars hulking like beached leviathans, their windows shattered into jagged teeth. Faded Tube signage hung crooked: "Mind the Gap." But gaps were everywhere here—gaping holes in the walls patched with modern concrete, as if the station had been hastily abandoned mid-repair. Her boot nudged a brass casing half-buried in debris: a compass, small, its face etched with protective sigils under a patina of verdigris. The needle quivered, not north, but toward a shadowed alcove where the air shimmered faintly, like heat haze. "Bag that," she told a SOCO tech, then turned back to Patel. "Ransacked? Those books are stacked neat as a library. Vials intact. Doesn't scream frenzy." He waved it off. "Perp grabbed the easy stuff. Hale surprised him mid-theft, slash and dash." Harlow's eyes narrowed. Military precision had taught her to question the obvious. She circled the body, noting the spray pattern: high velocity, but the arcs curved oddly, as if the blood had... hesitated mid-air before splattering. No footprints in the pool leading away, just Hale's own scuffed trainers. And the wounds—deep, precise, but no hesitation marks, no defensive cuts on his hands. Like he'd offered his throat willingly. Footsteps echoed from the stairs—soft, hesitant. A woman emerged into the light: curly red hair framing a freckled face, round glasses perched on a button nose, worn leather satchel slung over one shoulder, bulging with books. Eva Kowalski, 5'4" of nervous energy, tucking a strand behind her left ear. Harlow knew her by reputation—occult researcher at the British Museum's restricted archives, Oxford pedigree, and uncomfortably chummy with that Aurora girl her gut screamed was neck-deep in something shady. "Detective Quinn," Eva said, green eyes wide behind lenses. Voice breathy, academic. "They called me in for the symbols. British Museum consult." Patel nodded her over. "Kowalski here's our expert. Says it's some pagan ritual gig." Harlow's jaw tightened. Ritual. The word itched like an old scar—DS Morris, three years gone, vanished on a case with whispers of the unnatural. Unexplained. She gestured at the sigils on the compass. "Talk." Eva knelt, peering at the body, then the stall. Her fingers twitched toward her satchel, but she caught herself. "The token's a Veil Market pass—bone from a shade, or so the lore goes. This place... it's not just abandoned. It's a nexus. Full moon shifts it, but rifts linger." She pointed to the alcove where the compass needle strained. "Supernatural black market. Enchanted goods, alchemicals. Hale wasn't fencing junk; he dealt in the real stuff." Patel snorted. "Come on, Evie. Black market fairy tales? Killer's human, flesh and blood. Occam's razor—simplest explanation." Eva shot him a look, tucking hair again. "Simplest isn't always true. Look at the wounds. No blade leaves a cut that cauterizes itself." She indicated the throat: edges blackened, not ragged. "Like a plasma torch, or... energy discharge. And the blood—coagulated too fast. Not natural." Harlow crouched again, torch inches from the pool. Patel was right about one thing: simplest. But her instincts screamed otherwise. She traced the spray with her light. Droplets suspended? No—dried in mid-pattern, crystalline edges glinting. She scraped a sample into a vial, mind racing. Hale's eyes stared glassily at the alcove, pupils blown wide. Terror, yes, but pinpoint pupils under the dilation? Reaction to alkaloids? Or something mimicking them. "Compass," Harlow said, holding it up. Needle rigid, pointing dead at the alcove. She strode over, ignoring Patel's mutter of "waste of time." The air there hummed, a low vibration up her spine. Concrete wall, but irregular—scratches like claw marks, and a faint outline, rectangular, glowing under UV. Door? No hinges. Rift, the Compass said. Eva followed, whispering, "Veil Compass. Points to portals, rifts. Crafted by Shade artisans. If it's locked on this..." Harlow pressed a palm to the wall. Cold, but pulsing warmth beneath, like a vein. She glanced back—Patel's watching, skeptical, but the uniforms had edged away, spooked. Evidence didn't add up: no exit wounds on Hale, but blood everywhere. No weapon, but cauterized cut. Token gripped post-mortem rigor, as if he'd clutched it for entry after death. Impossible. Deduction clicked, piece by jagged piece. Hale hadn't been killed here. The body was staged. Blood spray wrong—gravity-defying arcs suggested vertical force, like he'd been dropped from height. But platform level. Unless... from above the rift. She scanned up: train car roof, accessible by ladder, undisturbed dust except one set of prints, size ten, Hale's. "Patel," she barked. "Ladder marks on the car. Hale climbs up, why?" "Lookout?" he hazarded. "No." Her voice hardened. "He came from there." She jabbed at the alcove. "Rift drops him, body hits stall, blood sprays. But coagulant in the air—rift residue? Explains the edges." Eva's eyes lit. "Supernatural bleed-through. Markets like this border realms. He crossed, something followed. Or he stole from it." Patel crossed his arms. "You're both mental. No such thing as rifts. Killer lured him here, did the deed, walked out the service hatch. Footprints'll match some Camden lowlife." Harlow ignored him, climbing the ladder with precise grips, torch probing. Train roof flat, littered with market leavings: empty vials, a singed feather that crumbled to ash. Drag marks—body weight, from alcove edge to here. Fresh. She dropped down, faced Patel. "No hatch prints outside. SOCO confirmed sealed. Killer didn't walk out." He faltered. "Hidden exit, then." "Or no killer." Harlow's mind whirred. Hale's terror—pre-death. Token in fist: he'd used it to enter the market, crossed a rift chasing a deal. Compass on stall—his? Stolen? Needle pointed to rift because that's where the action was. Symbols on stall matched compass sigils—protective. Hale activated them wrong, rift destabilized, energy backlash slashed him mid-crossing. Body tumbled back through, landed here. No human perp. Accidental death, supernatural style. But that gnawed. Her clique suspects—Aurora's crew, Eva's circle—trafficked here? Morris died chasing similar shadows. Harlow's gaze locked on Eva, who tucked hair nervously. "You know this market. Consults like this—how many?" Eva blinked. "First official. But the archives... rumors." "Lore," Harlow echoed, flat. "Hale fenced for your type. Occult enthusiasts. He crossed, paid the price. Evidence says accident, but staging? Someone wanted it found. Warning?" Patel's radio crackled—backup arriving. He shook his head. "You're seeing ghosts, Quinn. Write it as robbery gone wrong." She pocketed the compass vial, watch ticking eleven. Midnight toll. Full moon tomorrow—no, tonight crested. Market shifting? Air hummed louder. "Ghosts leave footprints. Get thermal on that alcove. And Kowalski—your books. Cross-reference sigils with Hale's priors." Eva nodded, satchel creaking. "Already on it." Harlow stepped back, platform lights flickering. Evidence didn't add up because it wasn't mundane. Rift, market, shades—real. Her partner had glimpsed it, paid. She wouldn't. Precision demanded truth, however shadowed. As techs swarmed the wall, needle in compass twitched—market calling, or fleeing. She glanced at Eva's freckled profile, green eyes sharp now. Colleague? Or thread to pull? The hum deepened. Something watched from the dark. Harlow's hand rested on her holster. Mystery half-cracked, but the real game's just begun.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags34
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.667
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
96.92% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1624
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"nervously"
count1
highlights
0"nervously"
60.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Marcus"
1"Patel"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
35.34% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1624
totalAiIsms21
found
0
word"gloom"
count1
1
word"scanning"
count1
2
word"etched"
count3
3
word"flicked"
count1
4
word"hulking"
count1
5
word"shattered"
count1
6
word"quivered"
count1
7
word"shimmered"
count1
8
word"footsteps"
count1
9
word"echoed"
count2
10
word"traced"
count1
11
word"crystalline"
count1
12
word"glinting"
count1
13
word"racing"
count1
14
word"blown wide"
count1
15
word"warmth"
count1
16
word"scanned"
count1
17
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"gloom"
1"scanning"
2"etched"
3"flicked"
4"hulking"
5"shattered"
6"quivered"
7"shimmered"
8"footsteps"
9"echoed"
10"traced"
11"crystalline"
12"glinting"
13"racing"
14"blown wide"
15"warmth"
16"scanned"
17"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences106
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences106
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences114
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen73
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1574
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions77
wordCount1276
uniqueNames22
maxNameDensity1.25
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Hale"
discoveredNames
Harlow16
Quinn1
Tube2
Camden2
Veil1
Market2
Ellis1
Patel11
Vice1
Hale11
Kowalski2
Eva11
British1
Museum1
Morris2
Compass2
Points1
Shade1
Aurora1
Occult1
Killer3
Evidence3
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Market"
3"Ellis"
4"Patel"
5"Hale"
6"Kowalski"
7"Eva"
8"Morris"
9"Compass"
10"Aurora"
11"Killer"
12"Evidence"
places
0"Museum"
globalScore0.873
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences52
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like a makeshift stall, surrounded"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.635
wordCount1574
matches
0"not north, but toward a shadowed alcove"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences114
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs39
mean40.36
std25.71
cv0.637
sampleLengths
093
196
241
360
437
541
636
795
826
916
1068
1178
1222
1314
1434
1575
1617
1746
1869
1955
2018
2158
2255
2312
243
2530
2619
2729
2852
295
3068
3132
328
3326
3418
3536
367
3757
3822
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences106
matches
0"been killed"
1"was staged"
2"been dropped"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs269
matches
0"wasn't fencing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount28
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences23
totalSentences114
ratio0.202
matches
0"The air thickened with the stench of damp concrete and something sharper—ozone, like a storm trapped underground."
1"She'd heard whispers of it in the station's backrooms—supposed urban legend, a black market for the weird and forbidden, tucked away in places like this, vanishing every full moon."
2"Blood pooled thick on the cracked tiles, but it hadn't spread far—contained, almost deliberate."
3"Faded Tube signage hung crooked: \"Mind the Gap.\" But gaps were everywhere here—gaping holes in the walls patched with modern concrete, as if the station had been hastily abandoned mid-repair."
4"And the wounds—deep, precise, but no hesitation marks, no defensive cuts on his hands."
5"Footsteps echoed from the stairs—soft, hesitant."
6"Harlow's jaw tightened. Ritual. The word itched like an old scar—DS Morris, three years gone, vanished on a case with whispers of the unnatural. Unexplained. She gestured at the sigils on the compass. \"Talk.\""
7"Hale wasn't fencing junk; he dealt in the real stuff.\""
8"Occam's razor—simplest explanation.\""
9"And the blood—coagulated too fast."
10"Harlow crouched again, torch inches from the pool. Patel was right about one thing: simplest. But her instincts screamed otherwise. She traced the spray with her light. Droplets suspended? No—dried in mid-pattern, crystalline edges glinting. She scraped a sample into a vial, mind racing. Hale's eyes stared glassily at the alcove, pupils blown wide. Terror, yes, but pinpoint pupils under the dilation? Reaction to alkaloids? Or something mimicking them."
11"\"Compass,\" Harlow said, holding it up. Needle rigid, pointing dead at the alcove. She strode over, ignoring Patel's mutter of \"waste of time.\" The air there hummed, a low vibration up her spine. Concrete wall, but irregular—scratches like claw marks, and a faint outline, rectangular, glowing under UV. Door? No hinges. Rift, the Compass said."
12"Harlow pressed a palm to the wall. Cold, but pulsing warmth beneath, like a vein. She glanced back—Patel's watching, skeptical, but the uniforms had edged away, spooked. Evidence didn't add up: no exit wounds on Hale, but blood everywhere. No weapon, but cauterized cut. Token gripped post-mortem rigor, as if he'd clutched it for entry after death. Impossible."
13"Deduction clicked, piece by jagged piece. Hale hadn't been killed here. The body was staged. Blood spray wrong—gravity-defying arcs suggested vertical force, like he'd been dropped from height. But platform level. Unless... from above the rift. She scanned up: train car roof, accessible by ladder, undisturbed dust except one set of prints, size ten, Hale's."
14"But coagulant in the air—rift residue?"
15"Harlow ignored him, climbing the ladder with precise grips, torch probing. Train roof flat, littered with market leavings: empty vials, a singed feather that crumbled to ash. Drag marks—body weight, from alcove edge to here. Fresh. She dropped down, faced Patel. \"No hatch prints outside."
16"\"Or no killer.\" Harlow's mind whirred. Hale's terror—pre-death. Token in fist: he'd used it to enter the market, crossed a rift chasing a deal. Compass on stall—his? Stolen? Needle pointed to rift because that's where the action was. Symbols on stall matched compass sigils—protective. Hale activated them wrong, rift destabilized, energy backlash slashed him mid-crossing. Body tumbled back through, landed here. No human perp. Accidental death, supernatural style."
17"But that gnawed. Her clique suspects—Aurora's crew, Eva's circle—trafficked here? Morris died chasing similar shadows. Harlow's gaze locked on Eva, who tucked hair nervously. \"You know this market."
18"Consults like this—how many?\""
19"Patel's radio crackled—backup arriving. He shook his head. \"You're seeing ghosts, Quinn."
20"She pocketed the compass vial, watch ticking eleven. Midnight toll. Full moon tomorrow—no, tonight crested. Market shifting? Air hummed louder. \"Ghosts leave footprints."
21"And Kowalski—your books."
22"Harlow stepped back, platform lights flickering. Evidence didn't add up because it wasn't mundane. Rift, market, shades—real. Her partner had glimpsed it, paid. She wouldn't. Precision demanded truth, however shadowed. As techs swarmed the wall, needle in compass twitched—market calling, or fleeing. She glanced at Eva's freckled profile, green eyes sharp now. Colleague? Or thread to pull?"
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount783
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.03065134099616858
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.008939974457215836
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences114
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences114
mean13.81
std14.65
cv1.061
sampleLengths
028
117
219
329
43
529
69
731
814
910
1013
1112
128
138
148
1511
1616
174
1814
197
2037
2123
2213
235
246
2530
266
2718
2830
2923
3018
3112
3214
334
3412
353
369
3720
384
3912
4014
416
426
4330
4442
4519
463
478
486
4934
97.08% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.5877192982456141
totalSentences114
uniqueOpeners67
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences93
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount16
totalSentences93
matches
0"Her torch beam sliced through"
1"She'd heard whispers of it"
2"She ducked under the crime"
3"she asked, voice clipped"
4"She nodded at the token"
5"She rose, torch sweeping the"
6"Her boot nudged a brass"
7"she told a SOCO tech,"
8"He waved it off."
9"She circled the body, noting"
10"it's not just abandoned."
11"It's a nexus."
12"Her voice hardened. She jabbed"
13"He crossed, something followed."
14"He crossed, paid the price."
15"She pocketed the compass vial,"
ratio0.172
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount65
totalSentences93
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn descended the"
1"The air thickened with the"
2"Her torch beam sliced through"
3"The Veil Market."
4"She'd heard whispers of it"
5"A body had turned up"
6"PC Ellis had called it"
7"Junkies didn't die clutching bone"
8"She ducked under the crime"
9"DS Patel, her colleague from"
10"Harlow knelt beside the corpse,"
11"Throat slashed clean, arterial spray"
12"Blood pooled thick on the"
13"she asked, voice clipped"
14"Harlow's gaze flicked to the"
15"She nodded at the token"
16"Patel shrugged, rubbing his stubbled"
17"She rose, torch sweeping the"
18"The platform stretched into darkness,"
19"Her boot nudged a brass"
ratio0.699
53.76% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences93
matches
0"If it's locked on"
ratio0.011
37.04% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences27
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Her torch beam sliced through the gloom, catching flickers of graffiti that glowed faintly under blacklight residue from forensics."
1"A body had turned up on what looked like a makeshift stall, surrounded by trinkets that screamed contraband: vials of shimmering liquid, amulets etched with sym…"
2"Harlow's gaze flicked to the bone token in Hale's rigid fist, thumb-sized, etched with spirals that matched entry rumors for this so-called market."
3"Harlow pressed a palm to the wall. Cold, but pulsing warmth beneath, like a vein. She glanced back—Patel's watching, skeptical, but the uniforms had edged away,…"
79.55% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags22
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"she asked, voice clipped"
1"Harlow echoed, flat"
91.18% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Faded Tube signage hung (hang)"
1"she barked (bark)"
2"He faltered. (falter)"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.137
leniency0.275
rawRatio0.429
effectiveRatio0.118
84.4733%