Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY9R7N3PGV99HD3Y5DJGWA3

Run Details

Duration:
3m 37s
Cost:
$0.018983
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory’s boot crunched over frost-dusted oak leaves as she tracked the glow of her phone’s flashlight toward the first of the ancient standing stones. She’d ducked out mid-delivery run for Yu-Fei’s Golden Empress, a steaming bag of pork dumplings abandoned in her bike’s basket at the edge of Richmond Park—she’d spotted the crumpled note under her delivery bag’s strap before her next drop, its ink smudged like it had been written in a hurry, words blaring Find the Grove—answers about the pendant wait. The Heartstone hung heavy at her throat, its crimson thumbnail-sized gem thrumming warmth into her sternum, a pulse she’d learned to trust only when it meant trouble. She paused at the stone’s gnarled base, her left wrist’s crescent scar tingling where the frost nipped at it; the scar’s childhood accident memory flickered—she’d scraped it on a broken fence while running from a stray dog, Evan later mocking her for crying—but she pushed it away. Cool-headed, quick thinking, that’s who she was, even when she was ditching deliveries to hunt fae-touched groves she’d only heard whispers of in her mom’s old Welsh folk stories. That’s a stupid risk. She tucked her phone into her jacket, the flashlight’s beam dying to a faint glow through the fabric. The standing stones’ oak grain twisted like frozen screams, and beyond them, a clearing bloomed with wildflowers—daffodils, poppies, clover, all pushing through frost, their petals glowing faintly in the moon’s weak light. That was the first wrongness: no wildflower blooms in London’s December frost, not even in Richmond Park’s most secluded corners. She stepped through the stone’s shadow, and the air shifted—thicker, sweeter, like overripe berries left in a closed jar. Her straight black shoulder-length hair caught on a low-hanging branch, and she tugged it free, her bright blue eyes scanning the clearing for any sign of the note’s sender. She’d hesitated before entering, Eva’s voice echoing in her head (Avoid strange places, Rory—you don’t need more trouble) but the Heartstone’s pulse had been too insistent, a warm thrum that matched the curiosity gnawing at her about the unknown benefactor who’d left it in her flat’s mailbox a month ago. Wildflowers in winter. That’s not natural. She glanced at her phone’s clock: 9:17 PM. She’d told Yu-Fei she’d be back in 20 minutes, but something in the air made the numbers on the screen blur, then snap back to 9:17, like time was holding its breath. The Heartstone’s pulse quickened, warmth seeping up her neck. She brushed a strand of hair from her eyes, her fingers grazing the scar on her left wrist—she’d never felt it throb like that, not since the accident. She bent to pluck a daffodil, its petals soft against her fingers, but when she lifted it to her face, the scent turned to rot—sharp, putrid, making her gag. She dropped it, and it vanished into the frost-dusted grass before it hit the ground. It just… disappeared. She stepped deeper into the clearing, her boot catching on a poppy’s stem. A sound pricked her ears: not the rustle of leaves, not the hoot of an owl, but the high, thin tinkle of a child’s wind chime—something that had no place in a hidden fae-touched grove. She spun, her jacket’s edge catching on a standing stone, but there was nothing there—only the dark between the oaks, shifting like a curtain pulled by invisible hands. The wildflowers around her had shifted, their petals now facing her, all of them, as if they were watching. She thought of the flat above Silas’ bar, where she’d spent countless nights poring over old pre-law textbooks, and how this grove felt like a twisted mirror of that quiet space—every sound amplified, every shadow a threat. Wind chimes? No one lives out here. She pressed her palm to the Heartstone, its glow now faint enough to see through her jacket fabric. The clock on her phone blurred again, this time snapping to 9:18, but the tightness in her chest told her more time had passed—maybe an hour, maybe more. She’d never been one for superstition, but the flat had its share of odd noises (a faint tap on her window at 3 AM, a glass falling off her shelf for no reason) and this grove felt like a more menacing version of that. She reached for her jacket pocket, where she kept a folded delivery receipt she used as a makeshift bookmark for her pre-law textbook—she’d tucked it there that morning before her shift, a reminder of the life she’d fled in Cardiff—but her hand came up empty. The receipt had vanished, just like the daffodil. My receipt’s gone. She turned in a slow circle, her boots crunching over grass that now felt like it was wrapping around her ankles—faint, almost imperceptible, but enough to make her yank her foot free. The Heartstone’s pulse grew so strong it made her fingers tingle. A faint movement caught her eye: a shadow slipping between two standing stones, its shape too tall to be a fox, too thin to be a deer. She froze, her bright blue eyes narrowing, her cool-headed streak keeping her from panicking—for now. She’d dealt with abusive Evan’s mind games, with Yu-Fei’s sharp reminders about late deliveries, but this shadow felt like something she couldn’t reason with, something that didn’t play by human rules. Who’s there? I’m not here to cause trouble. No answer, but the shadow shifted again, this time closer, so she could see a flash of something silver—like a chain, but not the thin silver chain of her Heartstone. She stumbled back, her boot hitting a standing stone, and the shadow vanished. The wildflowers’ glow dimmed, and the air’s sweet scent turned back to rot, thicker now, making her eyes water. She wiped at them with her sleeve, and when she looked again, the standing stones had shifted—their positions reversed, so she couldn’t tell which one she’d come through. She’d mapped their twist pattern when she entered, a trick she’d learned in pre-law to track witness testimonies, but now the grain was unrecognizable, a jumble of frozen screams. They moved. She pressed her back to a stone, her heart hammering now. The moon had shifted so far across the sky it was almost hidden by the oaks—proof that time was warping, just like the grove’s whispered tales she’d dismissed until now. She thought of her dad’s barrister lectures, of her mom’s Welsh folk stories she’d ignored as a kid, of Eva’s plea to flee Cardiff for London—all of them feeling like distant memories now. The Heartstone’s pulse had slowed to a faint throb, but her left wrist’s scar was throbbing so hard it made her wince. She’d covered the scar with a bandage for weeks after Evan mocked it, calling it a “baby’s scrape,” but now it felt like a beacon, drawing the shadowy figures closer. That scar’s never hurt like this. A faint whisper reached her ears, not a child’s chime, but a voice, low and rough, like someone gargling with leaves. It came from every direction at once, wrapping around her like a cold blanket. She leaned forward, her bright blue eyes scanning the clearing for the source, but there was nothing—only the black wildflowers (they’d turned black while she wasn’t looking, their petals curling into tiny fists) and the shifting dark between the oaks. She could feel the wildflowers’ tiny fists wrapping around her calves now, a gentle but unyielding pull that made her tug her legs free with a sharp gasp. What did you say? I can’t hear you. The whisper grew louder, but the words were unintelligible, a jumble of sounds that made her head ache. She clutched the Heartstone tighter, its warmth faded to cold. She glanced at her phone, and the screen was dead, black as the wildflowers’ petals. She’d charged it fully before her shift, but it now felt heavy and useless in her pocket. She pushed off the stone, her straight black hair falling in front of her eyes, and stepped toward the clearing’s center—she had to find the exit, had to get back to her bike, had to finish her delivery before Yu-Fei fired her. She’d worked too hard to keep her part-time job, too hard to build a quiet life in London after fleeing Evan, and she wasn’t going to throw it away for a mysterious pendant and a fae-touched grove. Come on. Think. The stones had a twist pattern when I came in. She scanned the standing stones, but their grain had shifted too, twisting into unrecognizable shapes. A movement caught her peripheral vision again—this time, multiple shadows, all shifting toward her, their shapes twisting like smoke. She tensed, her cool-headed thinking fraying at the edges. She’d never been trapped like this, not even when Evan had locked her in his apartment for three hours. The shadows drew closer, and she could hear the faint scuff of shoes on grass, multiple pairs now, and the whisper returned, more voices joining in, all unintelligible but menacing. She could feel their cold breath on her neck, a faint chill that cut through her jacket’s warmth. I shouldn’t have left the dumplings. Yu-Fei’s going to kill me. She pressed her left wrist to her chest, the crescent scar’s throbbing matching the faint pulse of the Heartstone. She thought of the unknown benefactor who’d left the pendant in her mailbox, of the note that had led her here, and wondered if they’d set a trap. She’d been so curious about the pendant’s origin, so desperate for answers about who’d given it to her and why, that she’d ignored every warning sign—Eva’s plea, Yu-Fei’s reminder, her own cool-headed sense of self-preservation. A shadow brushed her arm, cold as ice, and she jumped back, her boot slipping on the slick grass. She fell to her knees, her hands scraping the frost-dusted earth—she could feel the wildflowers’ tiny fists wrapping around her fingers, pulling her down. She tugged her hands free, her bright blue eyes widening as she saw a figure standing at the edge of the clearing, its face hidden by a hood, its left wrist bearing a scar that glinted in the moon’s faint light—same crescent shape as hers. The figure lifted a hand, and a silver chain dangled from its fingers, a crimson gem identical to her Heartstone glinting at its end. You have mine. I want it back.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags5
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences1
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1783
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
13.07% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1783
totalAiIsms31
found
0
word"warmth"
count4
1
word"pulse"
count6
2
word"flickered"
count1
3
word"scanning"
count2
4
word"echoing"
count1
5
word"quickened"
count1
6
word"throb"
count2
7
word"reminder"
count2
8
word"beacon"
count1
9
word"whisper"
count3
10
word"could feel"
count3
11
word"charged"
count1
12
word"scanned"
count1
13
word"chill"
count1
14
word"sense of"
count1
15
word"glinting"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"pulse"
2"flickered"
3"scanning"
4"echoing"
5"quickened"
6"throb"
7"reminder"
8"beacon"
9"whisper"
10"could feel"
11"charged"
12"scanned"
13"chill"
14"sense of"
15"glinting"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences86
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences86
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences86
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen63
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1735
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions44
wordCount1618
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity0.62
worstName"Heartstone"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Yu-Fei"
discoveredNames
Yu-Fei6
Golden1
Empress1
Richmond2
Park2
Find1
Grove1
Heartstone10
Evan5
Welsh2
London3
December1
Eva3
Avoid1
Rory2
Wind1
Cardiff2
persons
0"Yu-Fei"
1"Grove"
2"Heartstone"
3"Evan"
4"Eva"
5"Rory"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Find"
3"London"
4"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences66
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"felt like a more menacing version of th"
1"felt like it was wrapping around her an"
2"felt like something she couldn’t reason"
3"felt like a beacon, drawing the shadowy"
27.09% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.729
wordCount1735
matches
0"not the rustle of leaves, not the hoot of an owl, but the high, thin tinkle of a child’s wind chime"
1"not the hoot of an owl, but the high, thin tinkle of a child’s wind chime"
2"not a child’s chime, but a voice, low"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences86
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs24
mean72.29
std68.83
cv0.952
sampleLengths
0186
14
2168
36
4121
53
6132
77
8143
93
10116
118
12119
132
14126
156
16103
178
18139
1913
20110
2111
22194
237
97.10% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences86
matches
0"been written"
1"been trapped"
21.20% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount7
totalVerbs261
matches
0"was ditching"
1"was holding"
2"were watching"
3"was wrapping"
4"was warping"
5"was throbbing"
6"wasn’t looking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount25
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences22
totalSentences86
ratio0.256
matches
0"She’d ducked out mid-delivery run for Yu-Fei’s Golden Empress, a steaming bag of pork dumplings abandoned in her bike’s basket at the edge of Richmond Park—she’d spotted the crumpled note under her delivery bag’s strap before her next drop, its ink smudged like it had been written in a hurry, words blaring Find the Grove—answers about the pendant wait."
1"She paused at the stone’s gnarled base, her left wrist’s crescent scar tingling where the frost nipped at it; the scar’s childhood accident memory flickered—she’d scraped it on a broken fence while running from a stray dog, Evan later mocking her for crying—but she pushed it away."
2"She stepped through the stone’s shadow, and the air shifted—thicker, sweeter, like overripe berries left in a closed jar."
3"She’d hesitated before entering, Eva’s voice echoing in her head (Avoid strange places, Rory—you don’t need more trouble) but the Heartstone’s pulse had been too insistent, a warm thrum that matched the curiosity gnawing at her about the unknown benefactor who’d left it in her flat’s mailbox a month ago."
4"She brushed a strand of hair from her eyes, her fingers grazing the scar on her left wrist—she’d never felt it throb like that, not since the accident."
5"She bent to pluck a daffodil, its petals soft against her fingers, but when she lifted it to her face, the scent turned to rot—sharp, putrid, making her gag."
6"A sound pricked her ears: not the rustle of leaves, not the hoot of an owl, but the high, thin tinkle of a child’s wind chime—something that had no place in a hidden fae-touched grove."
7"She spun, her jacket’s edge catching on a standing stone, but there was nothing there—only the dark between the oaks, shifting like a curtain pulled by invisible hands."
8"The clock on her phone blurred again, this time snapping to 9:18, but the tightness in her chest told her more time had passed—maybe an hour, maybe more."
9"She reached for her jacket pocket, where she kept a folded delivery receipt she used as a makeshift bookmark for her pre-law textbook—she’d tucked it there that morning before her shift, a reminder of the life she’d fled in Cardiff—but her hand came up empty."
10"She turned in a slow circle, her boots crunching over grass that now felt like it was wrapping around her ankles—faint, almost imperceptible, but enough to make her yank her foot free."
11"She froze, her bright blue eyes narrowing, her cool-headed streak keeping her from panicking—for now."
12"No answer, but the shadow shifted again, this time closer, so she could see a flash of something silver—like a chain, but not the thin silver chain of her Heartstone."
13"She wiped at them with her sleeve, and when she looked again, the standing stones had shifted—their positions reversed, so she couldn’t tell which one she’d come through."
14"The moon had shifted so far across the sky it was almost hidden by the oaks—proof that time was warping, just like the grove’s whispered tales she’d dismissed until now."
15"She thought of her dad’s barrister lectures, of her mom’s Welsh folk stories she’d ignored as a kid, of Eva’s plea to flee Cardiff for London—all of them feeling like distant memories now."
16"She leaned forward, her bright blue eyes scanning the clearing for the source, but there was nothing—only the black wildflowers (they’d turned black while she wasn’t looking, their petals curling into tiny fists) and the shifting dark between the oaks."
17"She pushed off the stone, her straight black hair falling in front of her eyes, and stepped toward the clearing’s center—she had to find the exit, had to get back to her bike, had to finish her delivery before Yu-Fei fired her."
18"A movement caught her peripheral vision again—this time, multiple shadows, all shifting toward her, their shapes twisting like smoke."
19"She’d been so curious about the pendant’s origin, so desperate for answers about who’d given it to her and why, that she’d ignored every warning sign—Eva’s plea, Yu-Fei’s reminder, her own cool-headed sense of self-preservation."
20"She fell to her knees, her hands scraping the frost-dusted earth—she could feel the wildflowers’ tiny fists wrapping around her fingers, pulling her down."
21"She tugged her hands free, her bright blue eyes widening as she saw a figure standing at the edge of the clearing, its face hidden by a hood, its left wrist bearing a scar that glinted in the moon’s faint light—same crescent shape as hers."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount220
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"over frost-dusted oak"
adverbCount5
adverbRatio0.022727272727272728
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.00909090909090909
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences86
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences86
mean20.17
std13.46
cv0.667
sampleLengths
024
159
227
347
429
54
618
732
820
919
1029
1150
123
133
148
1532
169
1728
1829
1915
202
211
2213
2335
2428
2519
2637
272
285
2918
3028
3144
3245
338
343
3532
3611
3727
3815
3931
402
416
4230
4313
4419
4528
4629
472
4811
4930
32.56% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.2441860465116279
totalSentences86
uniqueOpeners21
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences77
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount49
totalSentences77
matches
0"She’d ducked out mid-delivery run"
1"She paused at the stone’s"
2"She tucked her phone into"
3"She stepped through the stone’s"
4"Her straight black shoulder-length hair"
5"She’d hesitated before entering, Eva’s"
6"She glanced at her phone’s"
7"She’d told Yu-Fei she’d be"
8"She brushed a strand of"
9"She bent to pluck a"
10"She dropped it, and it"
11"She stepped deeper into the"
12"She spun, her jacket’s edge"
13"She thought of the flat"
14"She pressed her palm to"
15"She’d never been one for"
16"She reached for her jacket"
17"My receipt’s gone."
18"She turned in a slow"
19"She froze, her bright blue"
ratio0.636
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount73
totalSentences77
matches
0"Rory’s boot crunched over frost-dusted"
1"She’d ducked out mid-delivery run"
2"The Heartstone hung heavy at"
3"She paused at the stone’s"
4"That’s a stupid risk."
5"She tucked her phone into"
6"That was the first wrongness:"
7"She stepped through the stone’s"
8"Her straight black shoulder-length hair"
9"She’d hesitated before entering, Eva’s"
10"Wildflowers in winter."
11"That’s not natural."
12"She glanced at her phone’s"
13"She’d told Yu-Fei she’d be"
14"The Heartstone’s pulse quickened, warmth"
15"She brushed a strand of"
16"She bent to pluck a"
17"She dropped it, and it"
18"She stepped deeper into the"
19"A sound pricked her ears:"
ratio0.948
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences77
matches(empty)
ratio0
40.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences56
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"Cool-headed, quick thinking, that’s who she was, even when she was ditching deliveries to hunt fae-touched groves she’d only heard whispers of in her mom’s old …"
1"She’d hesitated before entering, Eva’s voice echoing in her head (Avoid strange places, Rory—you don’t need more trouble) but the Heartstone’s pulse had been to…"
2"A sound pricked her ears: not the rustle of leaves, not the hoot of an owl, but the high, thin tinkle of a child’s wind chime—something that had no place in a h…"
3"She spun, her jacket’s edge catching on a standing stone, but there was nothing there—only the dark between the oaks, shifting like a curtain pulled by invisibl…"
4"The wildflowers around her had shifted, their petals now facing her, all of them, as if they were watching."
5"She turned in a slow circle, her boots crunching over grass that now felt like it was wrapping around her ankles—faint, almost imperceptible, but enough to make…"
6"She’d dealt with abusive Evan’s mind games, with Yu-Fei’s sharp reminders about late deliveries, but this shadow felt like something she couldn’t reason with, s…"
7"She tugged her hands free, her bright blue eyes widening as she saw a figure standing at the edge of the clearing, its face hidden by a hood, its left wrist bea…"
25.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags5
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"She glanced, and the screen was dead, black as the wildflowers’ petals"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
65.0278%