Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY9RK0HQ3HNERTF1E2DZZFJ

Run Details

Duration:
20.1s
Cost:
$0.001501
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rain hammered the pavements of Soho like a thousand tiny fists, turning the neon-lit streets into slick mirrors that reflected the blurred chaos of the night. Detective Harlow Quinn sprinted through the downpour, her boots splashing through puddles that swallowed her ankles. Water streamed down her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair, plastering it to her scalp, but she didn't pause to wipe it away. Her brown eyes, sharp and unyielding, locked on the figure ahead—a man in a dark hoodie, darting between the late-night revelers spilling out of pubs and clubs. "Stop! Police!" Her voice cut through the roar of the storm, but the suspect didn't falter. He was fast, weaving with the desperation of someone who knew exactly what capture meant. Quinn's lungs burned, her military precision kicking in as she calculated his path: left toward Greek Street, then a sharp right into the alley behind the theater district. She was gaining, her longer strides eating up the distance. At 5'9", she had the build for this—lean, relentless, forged from eighteen years on the force. The worn leather watch on her left wrist ticked steadily beneath the cuff of her soaked trench coat, a relic from her days with DS Morris. Three years ago, that watch had been the last thing she'd seen on his wrist before everything went to hell. Unexplained. Supernatural, though she'd never say it aloud. Not yet. But tonight, this chase felt like echoes of that case—shadowy figures, whispers of something beyond the veil of the ordinary world. The suspect glanced back, his face half-hidden by the hood, but Quinn caught a glimpse: olive skin, dark curls matted by rain, a flash of something metallic glinting at his neck. A medallion? She pushed harder, her sharp jaw set in determination. He couldn't be more than thirty, but he moved like a ghost, slipping past a cluster of drunken tourists without a sound. They burst out of the alley onto Charing Cross Road, the traffic a blurred smear of headlights through the sheets of rain. Horns blared as he dashed across, narrowly missing a black cab. Quinn followed, her coat flapping like broken wings. "Metropolitan Police! Halt!" A patrol car siren wailed in the distance—backup, finally—but it was too far off. This was her collar. The man veered eastward, toward the fringes of Camden, the streets narrowing as the party crowds thinned. The rain intensified, drumming against overflowing gutters, turning the sidewalks into rivers. Quinn's mind raced through the details: he'd come out of The Raven's Nest earlier that evening, that dimly lit hole-in-the-wall with its green neon sign flickering like a dying eye. She'd been watching it for weeks, tailing whispers of a "clique" involved in shady dealings—off-the-books meds, strange artifacts. This suspect matched the description of one of their runners: Tomás Herrera, ex-paramedic, lost his license after some unauthorized treatments. Supernatural patients, the rumors said. She'd seen his file—scar on the left forearm from a knife fight, born in Seville, now patching up the city's underbelly. He ducked into a side street off Camden High Street, the air thick with the scent of wet brick and distant weed smoke. Quinn's pulse thrummed in her ears, her breath coming in controlled bursts. She couldn't let him vanish into the night. Not when every lead pointed back to that bar, to the hidden back room behind the bookshelf where deals went down in shadows. The chase plunged deeper into the labyrinth of Camden's back alleys, away from the tourist traps and into the industrial underbelly. Abandoned warehouses loomed like silent sentinels, their windows shattered eyes staring into the storm. The suspect's pace faltered slightly—he was tiring, or maybe hurt. Quinn closed the gap to twenty yards, then ten. She could almost make out the scar on his arm as his sleeve rode up during a turn. " Herrera! I know who you are!" she shouted, her voice raw. He stumbled but recovered, shoving through a chain-link fence that rattled like bones in the wind. Quinn vaulted it without breaking stride, her coat snagging on the wire and tearing with a sharp rip. Pain lanced her side—a stitch from the run—but she ignored it. Precision. Always precision. They emerged onto a desolate stretch near the old Tube lines, the ground vibrating faintly from distant trains. The rain had carved gullies in the cracked asphalt, and Quinn's boots skidded on the mud. Ahead, the man halted at what looked like a derelict entrance—an abandoned station, one of the forgotten relics beneath Camden. Iron gates rusted ajar, graffiti scrawled across the faded signage: "No Entry. Condemned." He slipped through the gap, vanishing into the darkness. Quinn slowed, her chest heaving, water dripping from her chin. Backup was still minutes away, sirens a faint wail against the storm. She approached cautiously, her hand hovering near the holster at her hip. The air here felt thicker, charged, like the moments before a lightning strike. She'd heard stories—whispers from informants about an underground market, a place where the city's freaks and dealers traded in the impossible. The Veil Market, they called it. Bone tokens for entry, moves every full moon. Supernatural bullshit, she'd dismissed it as urban legend. But Morris's case... the shadows that didn't behave like shadows. Her watch read 11:47 PM. Close enough to midnight that the night's secrets might be stirring. She shone her torch through the gate, the beam cutting a pale swath into the gloom. Stairs descended into blackness, slick with moisture, echoing with the distant drip of water. Footsteps—faint, retreating—echoed from below. Quinn's mind raced. Follow him, and she stepped into the unknown. Unfamiliar territory, potentially crawling with his kind—the clique, the ones who'd evaded her for months. Dangerous, yes. Her radio crackled: "Quinn, this is dispatch. Location?" "Camden, old Tube station off Inverness. Suspect in pursuit. Send units." But even as she spoke, she knew they wouldn't make it in time. If she waited, he'd slip away, another thread unraveling in her web of suspicions. The sharp jaw clenched, her brown eyes narrowing against the rain. Military precision demanded assessment: risks versus rewards. The suspect—Herrera—knew things. About the Raven's Nest, the hidden room, the dealings that smelled of more than just drugs or smuggling. Echoes of Morris's death: the unnatural fog, the screams that weren't human. If the supernatural was real, this market might be its heart. She unclipped her torch from her belt, the beam steady in her grip. No turning back. Quinn squeezed through the gate, the metal groaning like a warning. The stairs spiraled down, each step a squelch of wet soles on concrete. The air grew cooler, mustier, laced with an undercurrent of incense and something metallic—blood? Ozone? Her skin prickled, instincts screaming trap. Deeper in, the station opened into a disused platform, the tracks long overgrown with moss and weeds pushing through cracks. But it wasn't empty. Dim lanterns hung from makeshift wires, casting flickering light on stalls shrouded in tarps and crates. Voices murmured in the shadows—accents thick with Eastern European grit, Cockney slang twisted with unfamiliar words. Figures moved like specters: a woman with eyes too bright, haggling over a vial that glowed faintly blue; a man with scales glinting on his neck, fingering a dagger etched with runes. Quinn's breath caught. This wasn't a flea market. It was a bazaar from nightmare. Enchanted goods lined the booths—amulets pulsing with inner light, bottles of swirling liquids that defied gravity, tomes bound in what looked like human skin. The air hummed with energy, a low vibration that set her teeth on edge. And there, ahead, ducking behind a stall piled with bone carvings: Herrera. He glanced back, his warm brown eyes widening in recognition. The Saint Christopher medallion swung free from his hoodie as he bolted again, shoving past a vendor who snarled something in a guttural tongue. The crowd parted like water, eyes turning to Quinn—curious, hostile, predatory. She pushed forward, her torch beam sweeping the throng. "Police! Out of the way!" But her words fell flat here, swallowed by the market's pulse. A hand grabbed her arm—a gnarled, claw-like grip from a figure in a hooded cloak. "No badges below, luv," it rasped, breath foul with decay. Quinn twisted free, her training snapping into action—a sharp elbow to the ribs, and the creature staggered back with a hiss. More eyes on her now, whispers rippling like wind through dry leaves. She spotted Herrera again, heading toward a far tunnel where the stalls thinned into darkness. Her heart pounded, adrenaline sharpening every sense. Dangerous? Hell yes. But hesitation had cost her Morris. Not again. She broke into a run, weaving through the market's chaos. A stall tipped as she brushed it, vials shattering in sprays of acrid smoke that burned her eyes. Shouts erupted behind her—angry, inhuman. The ground sloped downward, the air growing heavier, laced with the tang of alchemical fires. Herrera was close; she could hear his ragged breathing, see the scar on his forearm as he glanced back once more. The tunnel loomed, its mouth yawning black. No lanterns here, just the faint glow from the market fading behind. Quinn's torch cut through, illuminating graffiti that seemed to shift—symbols that twisted like living things. Footsteps echoed ahead, then a splash—water? A grate? She rounded a bend, the beam catching him: Herrera, fumbling at a rusted door half-submerged in a shallow pool. His hands shook as he pressed something small against a lock—a bone token, carved and yellowed. The door creaked open, revealing stairs descending into deeper abyss. "Stop," she commanded, her voice steady despite the tremor in her gut. He met her eyes, the medallion glinting like a plea from his god of travelers. For a split second, something passed between them—not defiance, but fear. Of her? Or what lay beyond? The door swung wider, and he vanished into the gloom. Quinn halted at the threshold, rain from above no longer reaching her, replaced by the chill draft rising from below. Backup would be here soon—surface units, oblivious to this underworld. But if she turned back now, he'd be gone, the clique's secrets buried deeper. Her watch ticked: 11:59. The decision crystallized in her mind, sharp as her jawline. Morris's face flashed—unexplained, unfinished. She stepped forward, the door grinding shut behind her with a finality that echoed like a tomb sealing. The stairs plunged into darkness, her torch the only light in a world that shouldn't exist. And somewhere below, the hunt continued.
created_at"2026-02-20T19:52:23.833Z" 2/20/2026, 7:52:23 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences16
tagDensity0.438
leniency0.875
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
94.41% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1788
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"cautiously"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"cautiously"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
18.90% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1788
totalAiIsms29
found
0
word"calculated"
count1
1
word"the last thing"
count1
2
word"echoes"
count2
3
word"glinting"
count3
4
word"raced"
count2
5
word"pulse"
count2
6
word"loomed"
count2
7
word"sentinels"
count1
8
word"shattered"
count1
9
word"charged"
count1
10
word"gloom"
count2
11
word"echoing"
count1
12
word"footsteps"
count2
13
word"echoed"
count3
14
word"unraveling"
count1
15
word"jaw clenched"
count1
16
word"etched"
count1
17
word"chill"
count1
18
word"crystallized"
count1
highlights
0"calculated"
1"the last thing"
2"echoes"
3"glinting"
4"raced"
5"pulse"
6"loomed"
7"sentinels"
8"shattered"
9"charged"
10"gloom"
11"echoing"
12"footsteps"
13"echoed"
14"unraveling"
15"jaw clenched"
16"etched"
17"chill"
18"crystallized"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences37
matches
0"t in determination"
0.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount5
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences37
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"know"
2"see"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences42
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen130
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1747
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
99.14% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions58
wordCount1573
uniqueNames26
maxNameDensity1.02
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Harlow1
Quinn16
Greek1
Street2
Morris5
Charing1
Cross1
Road1
Camden4
Raven2
Nest2
Tomás1
Herrera6
Seville1
High1
Tube1
Veil1
Market1
Suspect1
Eastern1
European1
Cockney1
Saint1
Christopher1
Supernatural3
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Morris"
3"Raven"
4"Tomás"
5"Herrera"
6"Suspect"
7"Saint"
8"Christopher"
places
0"Soho"
1"Greek"
2"Street"
3"Charing"
4"Cross"
5"Road"
6"Camden"
7"Seville"
8"High"
9"Veil"
10"Market"
globalScore0.991
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences32
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"felt like echoes of that case—shadowy f"
1"looked like a derelict entrance—an abando"
2"looked like human skin. The air hummed wi"
3"graffiti that seemed to shift—symbols that twisted like living things"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.572
wordCount1747
matches
0"not defiance, but fear"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences42
matches(empty)
57.84% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs28
mean62.39
std21.99
cv0.352
sampleLengths
090
185
277
364
462
5123
666
772
860
967
10109
1150
1236
1338
1462
1561
1688
1764
1845
1950
2066
2169
2242
2345
2444
2554
2636
2722
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences37
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs257
matches
0"was gaining"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount26
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences20
totalSentences42
ratio0.476
matches
0"Her brown eyes, sharp and unyielding, locked on the figure ahead—a man in a dark hoodie, darting between the late-night revelers spilling out of pubs and clubs."
1"The worn leather watch on her left wrist ticked steadily beneath the cuff of her soaked trench coat, a relic from her days with DS Morris. Three years ago, that watch had been the last thing she'd seen on his wrist before everything went to hell. Unexplained. Supernatural, though she'd never say it aloud. Not yet. But tonight, this chase felt like echoes of that case—shadowy figures, whispers of something beyond the veil of the ordinary world."
2"The man veered eastward, toward the fringes of Camden, the streets narrowing as the party crowds thinned. The rain intensified, drumming against overflowing gutters, turning the sidewalks into rivers. Quinn's mind raced through the details: he'd come out of The Raven's Nest earlier that evening, that dimly lit hole-in-the-wall with its green neon sign flickering like a dying eye. She'd been watching it for weeks, tailing whispers of a \"clique\" involved in shady dealings—off-the-books meds, strange artifacts. This suspect matched the description of one of their runners: Tomás Herrera, ex-paramedic, lost his license after some unauthorized treatments. Supernatural patients, the rumors said. She'd seen his file—scar on the left forearm from a knife fight, born in Seville, now patching up the city's underbelly."
3"The chase plunged deeper into the labyrinth of Camden's back alleys, away from the tourist traps and into the industrial underbelly. Abandoned warehouses loomed like silent sentinels, their windows shattered eyes staring into the storm. The suspect's pace faltered slightly—he was tiring, or maybe hurt. Quinn closed the gap to twenty yards, then ten. She could almost make out the scar on his arm as his sleeve rode up during a turn."
4"They emerged onto a desolate stretch near the old Tube lines, the ground vibrating faintly from distant trains. The rain had carved gullies in the cracked asphalt, and Quinn's boots skidded on the mud. Ahead, the man halted at what looked like a derelict entrance—an abandoned station, one of the forgotten relics beneath Camden. Iron gates rusted ajar, graffiti scrawled across the faded signage: \"No Entry."
5"He slipped through the gap, vanishing into the darkness. Quinn slowed, her chest heaving, water dripping from her chin. Backup was still minutes away, sirens a faint wail against the storm. She approached cautiously, her hand hovering near the holster at her hip. The air here felt thicker, charged, like the moments before a lightning strike. She'd heard stories—whispers from informants about an underground market, a place where the city's freaks and dealers traded in the impossible. The Veil Market, they called it. Bone tokens for entry, moves every full moon. Supernatural bullshit, she'd dismissed it as urban legend. But Morris's case... the shadows that didn't behave like shadows."
6"Her watch read 11:47 PM. Close enough to midnight that the night's secrets might be stirring. She shone her torch through the gate, the beam cutting a pale swath into the gloom. Stairs descended into blackness, slick with moisture, echoing with the distant drip of water. Footsteps—faint, retreating—echoed from below."
7"Quinn's mind raced. Follow him, and she stepped into the unknown. Unfamiliar territory, potentially crawling with his kind—the clique, the ones who'd evaded her for months. Dangerous, yes. Her radio crackled: \"Quinn, this is dispatch."
8"The sharp jaw clenched, her brown eyes narrowing against the rain. Military precision demanded assessment: risks versus rewards. The suspect—Herrera—knew things. About the Raven's Nest, the hidden room, the dealings that smelled of more than just drugs or smuggling. Echoes of Morris's death: the unnatural fog, the screams that weren't human. If the supernatural was real, this market might be its heart."
9"She unclipped her torch from her belt, the beam steady in her grip. No turning back. Quinn squeezed through the gate, the metal groaning like a warning. The stairs spiraled down, each step a squelch of wet soles on concrete. The air grew cooler, mustier, laced with an undercurrent of incense and something metallic—blood? Ozone? Her skin prickled, instincts screaming trap."
10"Deeper in, the station opened into a disused platform, the tracks long overgrown with moss and weeds pushing through cracks. But it wasn't empty. Dim lanterns hung from makeshift wires, casting flickering light on stalls shrouded in tarps and crates. Voices murmured in the shadows—accents thick with Eastern European grit, Cockney slang twisted with unfamiliar words. Figures moved like specters: a woman with eyes too bright, haggling over a vial that glowed faintly blue; a man with scales glinting on his neck, fingering a dagger etched with runes."
11"Quinn's breath caught. This wasn't a flea market. It was a bazaar from nightmare. Enchanted goods lined the booths—amulets pulsing with inner light, bottles of swirling liquids that defied gravity, tomes bound in what looked like human skin. The air hummed with energy, a low vibration that set her teeth on edge. And there, ahead, ducking behind a stall piled with bone carvings: Herrera."
12"He glanced back, his warm brown eyes widening in recognition. The Saint Christopher medallion swung free from his hoodie as he bolted again, shoving past a vendor who snarled something in a guttural tongue. The crowd parted like water, eyes turning to Quinn—curious, hostile, predatory."
13"Quinn twisted free, her training snapping into action—a sharp elbow to the ribs, and the creature staggered back with a hiss. More eyes on her now, whispers rippling like wind through dry leaves. She spotted Herrera again, heading toward a far tunnel where the stalls thinned into darkness. Her heart pounded, adrenaline sharpening every sense. Dangerous? Hell yes. But hesitation had cost her Morris. Not again."
14"She broke into a run, weaving through the market's chaos. A stall tipped as she brushed it, vials shattering in sprays of acrid smoke that burned her eyes. Shouts erupted behind her—angry, inhuman. The ground sloped downward, the air growing heavier, laced with the tang of alchemical fires. Herrera was close; she could hear his ragged breathing, see the scar on his forearm as he glanced back once more."
15"The tunnel loomed, its mouth yawning black. No lanterns here, just the faint glow from the market fading behind. Quinn's torch cut through, illuminating graffiti that seemed to shift—symbols that twisted like living things. Footsteps echoed ahead, then a splash—water? A grate?"
16"She rounded a bend, the beam catching him: Herrera, fumbling at a rusted door half-submerged in a shallow pool. His hands shook as he pressed something small against a lock—a bone token, carved and yellowed. The door creaked open, revealing stairs descending into deeper abyss."
17"\"Stop,\" she commanded, her voice steady despite the tremor in her gut. He met her eyes, the medallion glinting like a plea from his god of travelers. For a split second, something passed between them—not defiance, but fear. Of her? Or what lay beyond?"
18"The door swung wider, and he vanished into the gloom. Quinn halted at the threshold, rain from above no longer reaching her, replaced by the chill draft rising from below. Backup would be here soon—surface units, oblivious to this underworld. But if she turned back now, he'd be gone, the clique's secrets buried deeper."
19"Her watch ticked: 11:59. The decision crystallized in her mind, sharp as her jawline. Morris's face flashed—unexplained, unfinished. She stepped forward, the door grinding shut behind her with a finality that echoed like a tomb sealing."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount186
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount5
adverbRatio0.026881720430107527
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.010752688172043012
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences42
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences42
mean41.6
std28.8
cv0.692
sampleLengths
026
116
221
327
416
515
628
710
816
977
1064
1143
1219
13123
1466
1572
162
1758
1866
191
20109
2150
2235
231
246
253
2629
2762
2861
2988
3064
3145
3210
3340
3466
3569
3642
3745
3844
3954
4036
4122
80.95% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.5
totalSentences42
uniqueOpeners21
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences35
matches(empty)
ratio0
25.71% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount17
totalSentences35
matches
0"Her brown eyes, sharp and"
1"Her voice cut through the"
2"He was fast, weaving with"
3"She was gaining, her longer"
4"They burst out of the"
5"He ducked into a side"
6"I know who you"
7"They emerged onto a desolate"
8"He slipped through the gap,"
9"Her watch read 11:47 PM."
10"She unclipped her torch from"
11"He glanced back, his warm"
12"She pushed forward, her torch"
13"She broke into a run,"
14"She rounded a bend, the"
15"she commanded, her voice steady"
16"Her watch ticked: 11:59. The"
ratio0.486
17.14% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount31
totalSentences35
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn sprinted through"
1"Water streamed down her closely"
2"Her brown eyes, sharp and"
3"Her voice cut through the"
4"He was fast, weaving with"
5"Quinn's lungs burned, her military"
6"She was gaining, her longer"
7"The worn leather watch on"
8"The suspect glanced back, his"
9"They burst out of the"
10"The man veered eastward, toward"
11"He ducked into a side"
12"The chase plunged deeper into"
13"I know who you"
14"They emerged onto a desolate"
15"He slipped through the gap,"
16"Her watch read 11:47 PM."
17"Quinn's mind raced. Follow him,"
18"The sharp jaw clenched, her"
19"She unclipped her torch from"
ratio0.886
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences35
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences25
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"Rain hammered the pavements of Soho like a thousand tiny fists, turning the neon-lit streets into slick mirrors that reflected the blurred chaos of the night."
1"Detective Harlow Quinn sprinted through the downpour, her boots splashing through puddles that swallowed her ankles."
2"He slipped through the gap, vanishing into the darkness. Quinn slowed, her chest heaving, water dripping from her chin. Backup was still minutes away, sirens a …"
3"The sharp jaw clenched, her brown eyes narrowing against the rain. Military precision demanded assessment: risks versus rewards. The suspect—Herrera—knew things…"
4"Deeper in, the station opened into a disused platform, the tracks long overgrown with moss and weeds pushing through cracks. But it wasn't empty. Dim lanterns h…"
5"Quinn's breath caught. This wasn't a flea market. It was a bazaar from nightmare. Enchanted goods lined the booths—amulets pulsing with inner light, bottles of …"
6"He glanced back, his warm brown eyes widening in recognition. The Saint Christopher medallion swung free from his hoodie as he bolted again, shoving past a vend…"
7"Quinn twisted free, her training snapping into action—a sharp elbow to the ribs, and the creature staggered back with a hiss. More eyes on her now, whispers rip…"
8"She broke into a run, weaving through the market's chaos. A stall tipped as she brushed it, vials shattering in sprays of acrid smoke that burned her eyes. Shou…"
9"The tunnel loomed, its mouth yawning black. No lanterns here, just the faint glow from the market fading behind. Quinn's torch cut through, illuminating graffit…"
10"Her watch ticked: 11:59. The decision crystallized in her mind, sharp as her jawline. Morris's face flashed—unexplained, unfinished. She stepped forward, the do…"
11"The stairs plunged into darkness, her torch the only light in a world that shouldn't exist. And somewhere below, the hunt continued."
25.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags5
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she commanded, her voice steady despite the tremor in her gut"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
67.3036%