Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY9TBGNZRPEVT6B5AMMW203

Run Details

Duration:
25.1s
Cost:
$0.001183
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory squared her shoulders, the silver chain of the Heartstone pendant cool against her palm. The air smelled of damp earth and jasmine, sharp as a knife. Beyond the last row of trees, the standing stones loomed—ancient oaks hewn into rough columns, their bark furrowed like old skin. Eva’s letter had said *“Find the circle, follow the hum.”* She’d found the hum three days earlier, a low vibration in her bones that started when she’d passed the first stone and hadn’t let up. Now, Nyx hung back, their shadow form rippling like water over stone. “Go on,” they whispered, the sound lost in the rustle of leaves. Their violet eyes glowed faintly, cutting through the dappled sunlight. “I’ll watch.” Rory nodded, her boots crunching on gravel. The compass in her pocket spun wildly, needle spinning so fast it blurred. Not the first time magic had made it useless. She stepped between two stones, and the air shifted—thicker, warmer, like inhaling hot tea. A flower pushed through a crack in the stone, its petals a deep blue, veins of gold. She reached out, and it wilted instantly, blackening at the edges. Her hand flew back, heart racing. “Not all things bloom here,” Nyx said, materializing beside her. They stepped through the stones as if they were smoke; their shadow form didn’t part them, just flowed through. “Some things *remember* how to die.” Rory followed, her throat tight. The clearing hit her like a tide—wide, circular, ringed with more stones, each carved with spirals and stars. At the center, a fountain trickled, the water so clear it looked like air. But the sky—*the sky*—was a deep, endless indigo, streaked with clouds that glowed faintly, like embers. A breeze picked up, carrying a sound like a thousand voices whispering. Not words, exactly—more a hum, a melody in her bones. She pressed a hand to her wrist, where the scar curved like a crescent. The Heartstone pulsed, once, twice, a warm thrum against her skin. “Feels like home,” Nyx said, their voice softer. They stepped closer to the fountain, and their shadow grew, pulling taut, as if reaching for the water. “Funny, that. Home… isn’t a place, is it?” Rory didn’t reply. She’d run from Cardiff once, sure she’d never return. But here, in this alien light, she felt something else—*weight*. Like a stone lifted from her chest. She looked up, and there she was: Isolde, standing at the edge of the clearing, her silver hair catching the indigo sky. She wore a dress that looked like it was woven from mist, and her lavender eyes held a smile that didn’t reach her lips. “Took you long enough,” she said, her voice a lullaby. “The Veil’s thin here. You can almost *taste* the other side.” Rory fumbled for her dagger, the Fae-Forged Blade cold in its sheath. Isolde’s footprints—*none*—marked the grass, but Nyx tensed, their shadow coiling like a snake. “You’re not human,” Rory said, though it was more a statement. “Part,” Isolde said, stepping closer. “Enough. Come. The grove doesn’t like delays.” Nyx moved before she could ask more, gliding toward the center. The fountain’s water rippled, and the surface split, revealing a tunnel—black, smooth, like obsidian. Isolde waved a hand, and the tunnel lit up, a soft white glow seeping from the walls. “Old magic,” she said, as if reading her mind. “Keeps the rifts from feeding.” Rory hesitated, hand on the dagger hilt. The Heartstone pulsed again, harder this time, and she remembered the letter: *“The pendant works both ways. It leads to Hel, but it *glows* here, too. The Seer knows.”* She stepped forward, Nyx beside her, Isolde ahead. The tunnel floor sloped downward, and the air grew colder, clearer. She could hear her own heartbeat, loud in her ears, and Nyx’s whisper: “Careful. The stones… they *listen*.” They walked for what felt like hours, though the indigo sky above them never changed. The walls of the tunnel were lined with carvings—images of feasts, of people with antlers, of a woman with a dagger in her chest (Rory’s breath hitched at that one). Isolde stopped at a fork, pointing left. “Heed the hollow stone. It will show you what you seek, but you may not like it.” Rory looked at the stone, which was pockmarked, unremarkable. She hesitated, then touched it. Images flooded her: a hall of mirrors, each reflecting a different version of herself—Evan, the woman who’d screamed for help in the mirror, the girl who’d dared to run, the one in the mirror with the Fae blade, the pendant warm in her hand. She pulled back, gasping. “Gluttony,” Isolde said, quietly. “Dymas. The prince keeps a heart there. Not just any heart—*yours*.” Nyx’s shadow stilled. “Why?” they asked. Isolde smiled. “Because you’re a key. The Veil weakens at the solstice. He’ll tear through, and he’ll need a Mortal who can open a way. A Mortal with a heart unbroken by lies.” She tilted her head. “You’ve broken a few, Rory. That’s why he’s interested. That’s why *we* are.” Rory’s fingers brushed the pendant again. “Who are you, really?” “An exile,” Isolde said. “The Fae Courts don’t like seers who tell *the truth*. So I tell mortals instead. Easier. They don’t dare to question you. Not when they’re desperate for answers.” She stepped toward Rory, her lavender eyes bright. “The dagger. It will cut the wards. The pendant. It will unlock the door. But beware—he feeds on fear. Let it in, and you’ll become *his*.” Nyx’s shadow shifted, too dark, too thick. “We won’t let him,” they said. Isolde turned, heading for the right fork. “Good. The heart is in a garden. Exotic. Overflowing. You’ll want to touch it. You’ll *crave* it. But remember—gluttony isn’t about fullness. It’s about *hunger*. And he’ll starve you before you know it.” Rory followed, her hand on the dagger hilt, the pendant warm against her chest. The tunnel ended in a chamber, vast and domed. Sunlight poured through a hole in the ceiling, but it was a harsh, golden light, wrong for this place. Below, a garden stretched out—rows of fruit trees with leaves that shimmered like coins, bushes covered in berries the color of blood, flowers that smelled like candies and rot. At the center, a pedestal. On the pedestal, a heart—large, beating, floating in a pool of liquid that glowed like gold. Rory stepped forward, the dagger forgotten. The pendant burned, searing through her clothes, and she fell to her knees. The heart reached for her, a voice in her head: *Come. It’s yours. All of it. No more pain. No more hunger.* “Rory!” Nyx’s voice, urgent. She looked up. Nyx was beside her, their shadow form twisted, as if trying to protect her. Isolde stood at the edge of the garden, her hands raised, a faint glow around her. “The Veil’s thinning,” she said. “The prince is close. Flee—” A roar shook the chamber. The heart lunged, a mass of writhing veins and teeth. Rory scrambled back, tripping over a root. The dagger was in her hand before she knew it, the moonsilver blade cool against her palm. The heart reached for her, and she plunged the dagger into its side. It howled, smoke curling from the wound. Rory stood, gasping, as the dagger burned hot in her hand. “Now!” Isolde shouted. The garden trembled. Nyx grabbed Rory’s arm, pulling her toward the tunnel. The heart lunged again, but Isolde raised her hands, and a wall of flowers sprouted from the ground, blocking its path. “Go!” she screamed. “The pendant—*use it*!” Rory fumbled with the pendant, yanking it from her neck. The heart was still thrashing, the wound in its side smoking. She held the pendant high, and it glowed, a bright red light. The heart howled, a sound like a thousand wolves, and dissolved into smoke. The chamber collapsed. Rory hit the ground, dirt and stones raining down. Nyx was on top of her, shielding her. Isolde’s voice, clear now, over the noise: “The solstice. Meet me here. The Veil will be a trickle. And he… he won’t be far.” Then it was quiet. The indigo sky reappeared, the standing stones visible once more. Rory pushed herself up, Nyx beside her. The pendant hung around her neck, dim now, the glow fading. She touched the dagger hilt, the blade cool. “Ready to go home?” Nyx asked. Rory looked at the clearing, at the fountain, at the carvings in the stone. Home, she thought, wasn’t a place. It was the shadow that didn’t leave you, the friend who knew your scars, the dagger that cut through lies. She nodded. “Let’s go.” They stepped through the standing stones, and the world shifted back—warmer, calmer, the compass steady in Rory’s pocket. The Heartstone pulsed once more, a soft goodbye. Behind them, the grove retreated, the flowers wilting, the stones fading. But Rory knew it was there—always, waiting, for the solstice. And the prince. And her. This scene follows the group's first entry into the Fae Grove, weaving world-building through sensory details (indigo sky, talking flowers, the Heartstone's glow) and character interactions. It includes moments of discovery (the time difference, Isolde's riddles), unease (the heart's allure, the collapsing chamber), and wonder (the ethereal grove, Isolde's presence). The Veil's thinning and Dymas' connection to the Heartstone emerge through Rory's experience, avoiding exposition.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.541
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
96.82% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1572
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
65.01% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1572
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"loomed"
count1
1
word"furrowed"
count1
2
word"racing"
count1
3
word"pulsed"
count3
4
word"weight"
count1
5
word"whisper"
count1
6
word"shimmered"
count1
7
word"searing"
count1
8
word"trembled"
count1
highlights
0"loomed"
1"furrowed"
2"racing"
3"pulsed"
4"weight"
5"whisper"
6"shimmered"
7"searing"
8"trembled"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences120
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences120
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences135
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen45
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans16
markdownWords46
totalWords1558
ratio0.03
matches
0"“Find the circle, follow the hum.”"
1"remember"
2"the sky"
3"weight"
4"taste"
5"none"
6"“The pendant works both ways. It leads to Hel, but it *glows"
7"listen"
8"yours"
9"we"
10"the truth"
11"his"
12"crave"
13"hunger"
14"Come. It’s yours. All of it. No more pain. No more hunger."
15"use it"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions20
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
62.14% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions67
wordCount1252
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1.76
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Isolde"
discoveredNames
Heartstone5
Nyx15
Cardiff1
Isolde16
Rory22
Fae-Forged1
Blade1
Evan1
Fae3
Grove1
Veil1
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Nyx"
2"Isolde"
3"Rory"
4"Evan"
5"Veil"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"Fae"
2"Grove"
globalScore0.621
windowScore0.667
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences87
glossingSentenceCount7
matches
0"looked like air"
1"as if reaching for the water"
2"looked like it was woven from mist, and h"
3"as if reading her mind"
4"felt like hours, though the indigo sky"
5"smelled like candies and rot"
6"as if trying to protect her"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1558
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences135
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs36
mean43.28
std27.28
cv0.63
sampleLengths
095
124
277
335
4100
534
675
721
836
912
1056
1173
1269
1362
1415
156
1650
1710
1866
1913
2040
2192
2241
234
2443
2570
263
2739
2846
293
3041
3140
326
3344
3452
3565
96.49% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences120
matches
0"was woven"
1"were lined"
2"was pockmarked"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs220
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount16
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences15
totalSentences135
ratio0.111
matches
0"Beyond the last row of trees, the standing stones loomed—ancient oaks hewn into rough columns, their bark furrowed like old skin."
1"She stepped between two stones, and the air shifted—thicker, warmer, like inhaling hot tea."
2"They stepped through the stones as if they were smoke; their shadow form didn’t part them, just flowed through."
3"The clearing hit her like a tide—wide, circular, ringed with more stones, each carved with spirals and stars."
4"But the sky—*the sky*—was a deep, endless indigo, streaked with clouds that glowed faintly, like embers."
5"Not words, exactly—more a hum, a melody in her bones."
6"But here, in this alien light, she felt something else—*weight*."
7"Isolde’s footprints—*none*—marked the grass, but Nyx tensed, their shadow coiling like a snake."
8"The fountain’s water rippled, and the surface split, revealing a tunnel—black, smooth, like obsidian."
9"The walls of the tunnel were lined with carvings—images of feasts, of people with antlers, of a woman with a dagger in her chest (Rory’s breath hitched at that one)."
10"Images flooded her: a hall of mirrors, each reflecting a different version of herself—Evan, the woman who’d screamed for help in the mirror, the girl who’d dared to run, the one in the mirror with the Fae blade, the pendant warm in her hand."
11"Below, a garden stretched out—rows of fruit trees with leaves that shimmered like coins, bushes covered in berries the color of blood, flowers that smelled like candies and rot."
12"On the pedestal, a heart—large, beating, floating in a pool of liquid that glowed like gold."
13"They stepped through the standing stones, and the world shifted back—warmer, calmer, the compass steady in Rory’s pocket."
14"But Rory knew it was there—always, waiting, for the solstice."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1264
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount48
adverbRatio0.0379746835443038
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.005537974683544304
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences135
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences135
mean11.54
std8.18
cv0.709
sampleLengths
015
112
221
335
412
512
610
72
87
913
109
1114
1217
1311
146
1510
1619
176
185
1918
2014
2116
2212
2310
2414
2511
268
2718
288
293
309
3110
327
3322
3424
3510
3611
3712
3813
3911
405
417
4211
4314
4417
459
465
477
4837
4911
55.06% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.37037037037037035
totalSentences135
uniqueOpeners50
30.58% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences109
matches
0"Then it was quiet."
ratio0.009
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences109
matches
0"they whispered, the sound lost"
1"Their violet eyes glowed faintly,"
2"She stepped between two stones,"
3"She reached out, and it"
4"Her hand flew back, heart"
5"They stepped through the stones"
6"She pressed a hand to"
7"They stepped closer to the"
8"She’d run from Cardiff once,"
9"She looked up, and there"
10"She wore a dress that"
11"she said, her voice a"
12"she said, as if reading"
13"She could hear her own"
14"They walked for what felt"
15"She hesitated, then touched it."
16"She pulled back, gasping."
17"She tilted her head"
18"She stepped toward Rory, her"
19"She looked up."
ratio0.239
42.57% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount91
totalSentences109
matches
0"Rory squared her shoulders, the"
1"The air smelled of damp"
2"Eva’s letter had said She’d"
3"they whispered, the sound lost"
4"Their violet eyes glowed faintly,"
5"Rory nodded, her boots crunching"
6"The compass in her pocket"
7"She stepped between two stones,"
8"A flower pushed through a"
9"She reached out, and it"
10"Her hand flew back, heart"
11"Nyx said, materializing beside her"
12"They stepped through the stones"
13"Rory followed, her throat tight."
14"The clearing hit her like"
15"A breeze picked up, carrying"
16"She pressed a hand to"
17"The Heartstone pulsed, once, twice,"
18"Nyx said, their voice softer"
19"They stepped closer to the"
ratio0.835
45.87% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences109
matches
0"Now, Nyx hung back, their"
ratio0.009
79.08% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences56
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"They stepped through the stones as if they were smoke; their shadow form didn’t part them, just flowed through."
1"Images flooded her: a hall of mirrors, each reflecting a different version of herself—Evan, the woman who’d screamed for help in the mirror, the girl who’d dare…"
2"Below, a garden stretched out—rows of fruit trees with leaves that shimmered like coins, bushes covered in berries the color of blood, flowers that smelled like…"
3"Nyx was beside her, their shadow form twisted, as if trying to protect her."
4"It was the shadow that didn’t leave you, the friend who knew your scars, the dagger that cut through lies."
25.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags20
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"Nyx said, their voice softer"
1"she said, her voice a lullaby"
2"she said, as if reading her mind"
3"Isolde said, quietly"
41.89% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags16
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"Eva’s letter had (have)"
1"they whispered (whisper)"
2"Isolde shouted (shout)"
3"she screamed (scream)"
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.432
leniency0.865
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.216
78.0174%