Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY9TC77KBK6VQF5AHJ59WVH

Run Details

Duration:
4.5s
Cost:
$0.000535
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The neon glow of *The Raven’s Nest* pulsed like a slow heartbeat against the Soho night, casting jagged shadows across the bar’s worn wooden floor. Aurora Carter—Rory, to those who knew her—leaned against the bar, her fingers tracing the rim of a glass half-full of something dark and bitter. The scent of aged whiskey and damp stone clung to the air, thick enough to swallow. She hadn’t come here for the drink. She’d come for the man who used to be her best friend. Silas Blackwood—Si, to those who still called him that—turned from the counter, his hazel eyes flicking over her with the kind of quiet intensity that always made Rory’s stomach twist. He was taller now, broader, his grey-streaked auburn hair longer, the kind of change that didn’t just happen overnight. The bar’s dim light caught the silver signet ring on his right hand, the only thing about him that still felt familiar. “You’re here,” he said, voice low, like he was afraid she wouldn’t hear. Rory exhaled through her nose, the breath curling around her lips. “I came for a drink. You know that.” “And I came for you.” His voice dropped, rougher than she remembered. “You look different.” She didn’t answer. Instead, she slid off the barstool and stepped closer, the weight of years pressing down on her like a second skin. “You look like you’ve been carrying a knife in your pocket for a while.” Silas didn’t flinch. “I’ve been doing a lot of things.” The air between them thickened, charged with something older than the bar itself. Rory’s fingers tightened around the glass, the ice inside clinking against the stem. “You’re not the same man I left you with.” “No,” he said, “I’m not.” She turned away, her back to him, and took a slow sip of her drink. The whiskey burned, but it wasn’t the taste that made her flinch. It was the memory of what she’d left behind—Evan, the abuse, the way her life had unraveled like a thread. “You still run this place?” “Still do.” His voice was steady, but there was a tremor beneath it, something raw. “You still work at Golden Empress?” “Same.” She didn’t look at him. “You ever miss it?” Silas’s jaw tightened. “Miss what?” “London. The city. The way it used to be.” He didn’t answer right away. Then, quietly: “You ever miss Cardiff?” The question hit her like a punch. Rory’s breath hitched. “I don’t miss it.” “You should.” His voice was softer now, almost gentle. “You were happy there.” She turned back to face him, the glass trembling in her hand. “I was happy before Evan.” Silas’s expression darkened. “Evan was a mistake.” “No.” Rory’s voice was sharp. “He was a choice. And I made it.” A beat of silence. Then, from the back of the bar, a voice cut through the tension—low, amused. “Well, well. If it isn’t the two of you.” Aurora and Silas both turned to see Eva Carter, Rory’s childhood friend, leaning against the wall, arms crossed. Her dark eyes were sharp, her smile knowing. “You look like shit, Rory.” Rory’s fingers curled around the glass until her knuckles turned white. “I look like I’ve been running.” Eva stepped forward, her presence filling the space between them. “You’ve been running for years.” Silas’s signet ring caught the light as he reached for his drink. “Eva, this is—” “No.” She cut him off, her voice cutting through the tension like a blade. “I know who she is. And I know what she’s done.” Rory’s chest tightened. “You don’t know shit.” Eva’s laugh was bitter. “Oh, I know plenty. Brendan’s been asking about you. Said you’d ‘gone soft.’ Said you were ‘too easy.’” Silas’s voice was a growl. “Eva, this isn’t—” “It’s time,” she said, turning to Rory. “Time to face the truth.” The air between them crackled, heavy with something that wasn’t just anger—it was the weight of secrets, of lies, of a life that had been built on something that wasn’t real. Rory’s breath came fast, her pulse hammering in her ears. She looked at Silas, at Eva, at the bar’s dim glow, and for the first time in years, she felt the old fear clawing up from the depths. “You’re not leaving,” Silas said, his voice rough. “Not tonight.” But Rory already knew that. She knew what she had to do. And the weight of it pressed down on her like a physical force, something she’d been carrying for too long. Eva’s smile didn’t reach her eyes. “Good. Because I’m not done with you yet.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags8
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.211
leniency0.421
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount775
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
9.68% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount775
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"pulsed"
count1
1
word"tracing"
count1
2
word"intensity"
count1
3
word"stomach"
count1
4
word"familiar"
count1
5
word"weight"
count3
6
word"charged"
count1
7
word"silence"
count1
8
word"tension"
count2
9
word"pulse"
count1
10
word"depths"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"tracing"
2"intensity"
3"stomach"
4"familiar"
5"weight"
6"charged"
7"silence"
8"tension"
9"pulse"
10"depths"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"knuckles turned white"
count1
highlights
0"knuckles turned white"
92.32% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences51
matches
0"was afraid"
1"was bitter"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences51
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences78
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords3
totalWords766
ratio0.004
matches
0"The Raven’s Nest"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
44.55% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions33
wordCount569
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity2.11
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Soho1
Carter2
Rory12
Blackwood1
Si1
Evan1
Silas9
Eva5
persons
0"Raven"
1"Carter"
2"Rory"
3"Blackwood"
4"Si"
5"Evan"
6"Silas"
7"Eva"
places
0"Soho"
globalScore0.446
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences34
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount766
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences78
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs34
mean22.53
std19.26
cv0.855
sampleLengths
084
171
213
319
415
538
610
735
85
952
1021
1110
125
139
1411
1514
1613
1717
187
1913
2027
2131
2217
2315
2415
2525
267
2722
288
2912
3069
3110
3232
3314
98.38% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences51
matches
0"been built"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs93
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences78
ratio0.064
matches
0"Aurora Carter—Rory, to those who knew her—leaned against the bar, her fingers tracing the rim of a glass half-full of something dark and bitter."
1"Silas Blackwood—Si, to those who still called him that—turned from the counter, his hazel eyes flicking over her with the kind of quiet intensity that always made Rory’s stomach twist."
2"It was the memory of what she’d left behind—Evan, the abuse, the way her life had unraveled like a thread."
3"Then, from the back of the bar, a voice cut through the tension—low, amused."
4"The air between them crackled, heavy with something that wasn’t just anger—it was the weight of secrets, of lies, of a life that had been built on something that wasn’t real."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount578
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount22
adverbRatio0.03806228373702422
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.0034602076124567475
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences78
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences78
mean9.82
std6.85
cv0.698
sampleLengths
025
124
216
37
412
530
619
722
813
911
108
1112
123
133
1421
1514
163
177
1813
1913
209
215
2215
2312
2420
255
2615
276
286
294
303
312
329
335
346
357
363
374
389
394
4012
415
423
434
445
458
464
4714
489
4918
55.13% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.34615384615384615
totalSentences78
uniqueOpeners27
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences49
matches
0"Instead, she slid off the"
1"Then, from the back of"
ratio0.041
73.06% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount18
totalSentences49
matches
0"She hadn’t come here for"
1"She’d come for the man"
2"He was taller now, broader,"
3"he said, voice low, like"
4"His voice dropped, rougher than"
5"She didn’t answer."
6"She turned away, her back"
7"It was the memory of"
8"His voice was steady, but"
9"She didn’t look at him"
10"He didn’t answer right away."
11"His voice was softer now,"
12"She turned back to face"
13"Her dark eyes were sharp,"
14"She cut him off, her"
15"she said, turning to Rory"
16"She looked at Silas, at"
17"She knew what she had"
ratio0.367
0.82% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount45
totalSentences49
matches
0"The neon glow of *The"
1"Aurora Carter—Rory, to those who"
2"The scent of aged whiskey"
3"She hadn’t come here for"
4"She’d come for the man"
5"Silas Blackwood—Si, to those who"
6"He was taller now, broader,"
7"The bar’s dim light caught"
8"he said, voice low, like"
9"Rory exhaled through her nose,"
10"His voice dropped, rougher than"
11"She didn’t answer."
12"Silas didn’t flinch."
13"The air between them thickened,"
14"Rory’s fingers tightened around the"
15"She turned away, her back"
16"The whiskey burned, but it"
17"It was the memory of"
18"His voice was steady, but"
19"She didn’t look at him"
ratio0.918
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences49
matches(empty)
ratio0
83.33% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences24
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"He was taller now, broader, his grey-streaked auburn hair longer, the kind of change that didn’t just happen overnight."
1"The air between them crackled, heavy with something that wasn’t just anger—it was the weight of secrets, of lies, of a life that had been built on something tha…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags8
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"She cut, her voice cutting through the tension like a blade"
1"Silas said, his voice rough"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"His voice (his voice)"
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.132
leniency0.263
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.053
78.5757%