Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY9Y1WAMB04P0B803V5JRAK

Run Details

Duration:
2m 53s
Cost:
$0.015941
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The rain lashed Harlow’s closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair into sharp spikes against her sharp jaw, each drop a cold prod to her focus as she leaned against a Soho brick wall. Her worn leather watch—scuffed at the lugs from three years of gripping Morris’s service weapon at crime scenes—ticked against her left wrist: 1:17 a.m.—a steady metronome for the three hours she’d staked The Raven’s Nest. The bar’s distinctive green neon sign bleeded into the downpour, turning the puddles at her feet to murky lime that sloshed over her scuffed boots. Through the fogged window, she’d mapped every crevice of the dim interior: a frayed 1920s map of the Thames peeling from the north wall, its edges blackened by cigarette smoke; black-and-white photos of long-dead sailors nailed crookedly beside it, some clutching strange amulets she’d never seen in museum exhibits; the hush of clandestine conversations that made her skin prickle like Morris’s final radio call had. Three years ago, he’d been staking this same bar when he’d radioed in a garbled cry about “a market of shadows” before his body was found in a nearby alley—no wounds, no signs of struggle, just his eyes wide with unnameable terror. Harlow’s military training kept her still, her breath shallow enough that the rain drowned out its sound. She’d tucked her badge into her trench coat’s inner pocket, her service weapon holstered low on her hip where it wouldn’t catch the neon glow. The bar’s door creaked open, and a blast of beer-scented warmth fogged the window further. Then he emerged: Jax, the clique enforcer she’d been tracking for six weeks, his torn black parka hood pulled low but not low enough to hide the faint glint of a silver ring etched with a raven—clique insignia she’d seen on the pocket of Morris’s last case file. His boots sloshed through the lime puddles, and Harlow pushed off the wall, melting into the shadow of a fire escape before he could glance back. The chase stretched through Soho’s narrow streets, rain turning the pavements to glass that made Jax’s steps slip and stutter. Harlow matched his pace, her military stride keeping her balanced even when a gust of wind sent a trash can clattering into her path. She noted every detail: the way he kept his hand in his parka pocket (a switchblade, she guessed), the frayed edge of his red scarf catching on a metal bus stop pole and tearing free, the way he veered toward Camden as if following a pre-plotted route. She scooped the torn scarf edge into her coat pocket—a small trophy, a link to the case that had consumed her since Morris’s death. By the time they reached Camden, the rain had softened to a drizzle, but the air smelled of damp concrete and rot—fitting for the abandoned Tube station she’d dug up in her late-night file searches, the current home of the Veil Market. Jax darted down an alley choked with discarded mattresses and broken glass, his parka slipping off one shoulder to reveal a gnarled tattoo of a veil on his bicep—another clique marker, one she’d never seen in any official report. Harlow skidded to a halt at the alley mouth, her hand hovering over her service weapon. The alley ended at a rusted metal door set into a brick wall—she recognized the faint scratch marks around the handle, the telltale sign of the Veil Market’s doorman’s clawed fingers. Morris had mentioned a door like this in his final call, his voice cracking with fear. She hesitated, her leather watch ticking louder in her ears—what if this was the same thing that had snuffed out Morris’s life without a trace? But then she pictured his empty desk at the precinct, the photo of them at their promotion ceremony tucked under her notebook (his grin wide, hers tight with military discipline), and pushed forward. She pressed her ear to the brick wall, the cold seeping through her trench coat as she listened to the low murmur of voices beyond. Jax’s voice cut through the hum: “Bone token for entry—here to drop off the shipment of wisp powder.” A guttural response rumbled back—too deep for a human throat, Harlow thought—and then the scrape of the door opening. She peeked around the corner just in time to see Jax press a small, yellowed bone token into a doorman’s palm—an old man with skin like cracked earth, his eyes milky white but sharp enough to pin Jax with a glare that made the enforcer flinch. The door closed behind him, and Harlow’s throat went dry. The Veil Market’s entry requirement was non-negotiable, according to her fleeting intel—no bone token, no entry. She’d spent months trying to track down a token, but they’d all vanished with the market’s monthly full-moon moves. Then she saw him. A man with short curly dark brown hair and olive skin leaned against a nearby dumpster, his Saint Christopher medallion glinting in the faint glow of a flickering streetlight. Harlow’s gaze darted to his left forearm—there it was, the thin scar running along the length of it, a knife wound from a clique dispute she’d noted in his file (he’d been defending a supernatural patient from a group of thugs outside a Camden café). Tomás Herrera. Former NHS paramedic, born in Seville, who’d moved to London to care for his ailing grandmother before losing his license after administering unauthorized treatments to that same supernatural patient—someone the NHS had refused to treat because they couldn’t explain their glowing blue bruises. She’d tracked his ties to the clique for months, knowing he provided off-the-books medical care for their members, slipping enchanted salves into their pockets after late-night meetings at The Raven’s Nest. Tomás adjusted his medallion, his fingers brushing the scar as if it still ached, and pulled a small leather satchel from his shoulder—she guessed it held bandages soaked in moonwater and alchemical painkillers for the market’s patrons. He glanced at his phone, then toward the metal door, and Harlow realized he was waiting for someone to let him in. A plan sparked: distract him, steal whatever token he had, slip into the market before Jax could disappear with the wisp powder—a substance she’d found a trace of on Morris’s coat, a substance that could erase memories or kill, depending on its purity. But as she took a step forward, her boot crunched on a shard of glass. Tomás’s warm brown eyes snapped to her, and he tensed, his hand curling around the satchel’s strap. “Detective Quinn,” he said, his Seville accent thick with caution, like he’d been practicing her name in case they met. “I thought you’d be smarter than to stake a place like this alone. The clique’s lookouts have been watching for you.” Harlow froze, her hand still hovering over her weapon. The rain dripped from her salt-and-pepper hair onto her sharp jaw, and she wiped it away with a gloved hand. “Herrera,” she said, her voice steady despite the hammering of her heart. “You’re here to treat the clique’s supernatural pets. Just like you lost your license for—treating things the NHS can’t be bothered to understand.” Tomás’s jaw tightened, and Harlow saw a flash of grief in his eyes—grief for his lost license, for his grandmother who’d died shortly after he’d been fired, for the patients he couldn’t help. “They’re people,” he said, his gaze flicking to the metal door. “People with wounds that won’t heal, with illnesses that make doctors cross themselves and walk away. I learned to treat them in Seville, from my abuela—she was a curandera. You don’t know what’s in that market. What’s happened to the ones who go in unprepared. The last cop who tried to infiltrate vanished. No body, no trace. Just like your partner.” Harlow’s blood ran cold. She thought of Morris’s empty chair at the precinct, of the way his mother had hugged her at his funeral and asked if she’d find who’d killed him. She thought of her worn leather watch, which he’d given her for her 38th birthday, saying it would keep her on time for the cases that mattered. “I know what happens to the ones who walk away,” she said, her voice cracking just a little. “My partner died because he didn’t follow this trail to the end. I’m not making the same mistake.” Tomás sighed, reaching into his satchel and pulling out a small bone token—carved with the face of Saint Christopher, probably matched to his medallion. The bone was smooth from years of handling, and Harlow could see faint scratch marks on its edge. “You’ll need this if you go in,” he said, but he didn’t hand it over. “But be warned: the market’s vendors don’t take kindly to cops. They’ll sell you to the highest bidder, or feed you to their enchanted hounds. You’re out of your depth here, Detective. Your military training won’t save you from the things that hide in these tunnels.” Harlow’s internal conflict raged. She could turn back, file a report, wait for backup that would never believe her when she mentioned wisp powder and supernatural markets. She could go home, make a cup of tea, and try to forget Morris’s wide eyes. Or she could take the token, step into the unknown, and finally uncover the truth about his death. She glanced at her leather watch—1:43 a.m.—and thought of the 1920s map in The Raven’s Nest, of the sailors with strange amulets, of the wisp powder that had haunted her for three years. She reached for the token. “Give it to me,” she said, her voice firm again, her military bearing kicking back in. Tomás hesitated, his gaze flickering between her face and the metal door. He thought of his abuela’s words—help the ones who can’t help themselves—and pressed the token into her palm. The bone was cold, and it hummed faintly under her touch, like it held a piece of his abuela’s magic. “Don’t say I didn’t warn you,” he said. “And if you get hurt? Don’t come looking for me. I don’t treat cops anymore. Not after the last one turned on me.” He turned and rapped on the metal door three times—two short, one long—a code Harlow made a mental note of. The doorman’s clawed hand yanked it open just enough for Tomás to slip through, and Harlow heard a guttural murmur before the door closed. She tucked the token into her coat pocket, her service weapon unholstered at her side, and took a deep breath. The air smelled of rot and magic, of things she couldn’t explain, but it also smelled of truth. She rapped on the door three times—two short, one long—and when the doorman’s milky eyes locked on her, she pulled out the bone token and held it up. The doorman grunted, yanking the door open wider. Harlow stepped through, her boots hitting a stone floor that smelled of ancient dirt and burnt alchemical substances. The Veil Market stretched out before her: stalls lit by flickering torchlight, their vendors selling enchanted herbs and banned alchemical potions, their patrons a mix of humans and things she couldn’t quite name (one had antlers sprouting from their head, another’s skin glowed like bioluminescent algae). Somewhere in the crowd, Jax was disappearing with the wisp powder. Somewhere in the shadows, the truth about Morris’s death waited. And Harlow Quinn, military-trained detective with 18 years of decorated service, was finally going to find it—even if it killed her.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
88.89% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"A guttural response rumbled back [back]"
dialogueSentences15
tagDensity0.6
leniency1
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.111
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1960
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
84.69% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1960
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"clandestine"
count1
1
word"warmth"
count1
2
word"glint"
count1
3
word"etched"
count1
4
word"fleeting"
count1
5
word"glinting"
count1
highlights
0"clandestine"
1"warmth"
2"glint"
3"etched"
4"fleeting"
5"glinting"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"blood ran cold"
count1
highlights
0"blood ran cold"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences73
matches
0"g with fear"
45.01% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences73
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"try to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences79
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen68
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1915
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"She noted every detail: the way he kept his hand in his parka pocket (a switchblade, she guessed), the frayed edge of hi…"
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions73
wordCount1675
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity1.07
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Harlow18
Soho2
Morris10
Raven3
Nest3
Thames1
Jax8
Camden3
Tube1
Veil4
Market4
Saint2
Christopher2
Herrera1
Seville2
London1
Tomás7
Quinn1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Morris"
2"Jax"
3"Market"
4"Saint"
5"Christopher"
6"Herrera"
7"Tomás"
8"Quinn"
places
0"Soho"
1"Thames"
2"Camden"
3"Seville"
4"London"
globalScore0.963
windowScore0.833
75.37% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences67
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"as if following a pre-plotted route"
1"quite name (one had antlers sprouting from their head, another’s skin glowed like bioluminescent algae"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1915
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences79
matches(empty)
69.27% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs17
mean112.65
std44.21
cv0.392
sampleLengths
0198
1131
2115
3202
4153
5154
6102
773
864
9105
1095
11103
1294
1321
1481
15110
16114
95.65% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences73
matches
0"was found"
1"been fired"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs268
matches
0"was waiting"
1"was disappearing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount29
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences23
totalSentences79
ratio0.291
matches
0"Her worn leather watch—scuffed at the lugs from three years of gripping Morris’s service weapon at crime scenes—ticked against her left wrist: 1:17 a.m.—a steady metronome for the three hours she’d staked The Raven’s Nest."
1"Through the fogged window, she’d mapped every crevice of the dim interior: a frayed 1920s map of the Thames peeling from the north wall, its edges blackened by cigarette smoke; black-and-white photos of long-dead sailors nailed crookedly beside it, some clutching strange amulets she’d never seen in museum exhibits; the hush of clandestine conversations that made her skin prickle like Morris’s final radio call had."
2"Three years ago, he’d been staking this same bar when he’d radioed in a garbled cry about “a market of shadows” before his body was found in a nearby alley—no wounds, no signs of struggle, just his eyes wide with unnameable terror."
3"Then he emerged: Jax, the clique enforcer she’d been tracking for six weeks, his torn black parka hood pulled low but not low enough to hide the faint glint of a silver ring etched with a raven—clique insignia she’d seen on the pocket of Morris’s last case file."
4"She scooped the torn scarf edge into her coat pocket—a small trophy, a link to the case that had consumed her since Morris’s death."
5"By the time they reached Camden, the rain had softened to a drizzle, but the air smelled of damp concrete and rot—fitting for the abandoned Tube station she’d dug up in her late-night file searches, the current home of the Veil Market."
6"Jax darted down an alley choked with discarded mattresses and broken glass, his parka slipping off one shoulder to reveal a gnarled tattoo of a veil on his bicep—another clique marker, one she’d never seen in any official report."
7"The alley ended at a rusted metal door set into a brick wall—she recognized the faint scratch marks around the handle, the telltale sign of the Veil Market’s doorman’s clawed fingers."
8"She hesitated, her leather watch ticking louder in her ears—what if this was the same thing that had snuffed out Morris’s life without a trace?"
9"Jax’s voice cut through the hum: “Bone token for entry—here to drop off the shipment of wisp powder.” A guttural response rumbled back—too deep for a human throat, Harlow thought—and then the scrape of the door opening."
10"She peeked around the corner just in time to see Jax press a small, yellowed bone token into a doorman’s palm—an old man with skin like cracked earth, his eyes milky white but sharp enough to pin Jax with a glare that made the enforcer flinch."
11"The Veil Market’s entry requirement was non-negotiable, according to her fleeting intel—no bone token, no entry."
12"Harlow’s gaze darted to his left forearm—there it was, the thin scar running along the length of it, a knife wound from a clique dispute she’d noted in his file (he’d been defending a supernatural patient from a group of thugs outside a Camden café)."
13"Former NHS paramedic, born in Seville, who’d moved to London to care for his ailing grandmother before losing his license after administering unauthorized treatments to that same supernatural patient—someone the NHS had refused to treat because they couldn’t explain their glowing blue bruises."
14"Tomás adjusted his medallion, his fingers brushing the scar as if it still ached, and pulled a small leather satchel from his shoulder—she guessed it held bandages soaked in moonwater and alchemical painkillers for the market’s patrons."
15"A plan sparked: distract him, steal whatever token he had, slip into the market before Jax could disappear with the wisp powder—a substance she’d found a trace of on Morris’s coat, a substance that could erase memories or kill, depending on its purity."
16"Tomás’s jaw tightened, and Harlow saw a flash of grief in his eyes—grief for his lost license, for his grandmother who’d died shortly after he’d been fired, for the patients he couldn’t help."
17"Tomás sighed, reaching into his satchel and pulling out a small bone token—carved with the face of Saint Christopher, probably matched to his medallion."
18"She glanced at her leather watch—1:43 a.m.—and thought of the 1920s map in The Raven’s Nest, of the sailors with strange amulets, of the wisp powder that had haunted her for three years."
19"He thought of his abuela’s words—help the ones who can’t help themselves—and pressed the token into her palm."
20"He turned and rapped on the metal door three times—two short, one long—a code Harlow made a mental note of."
21"She rapped on the door three times—two short, one long—and when the doorman’s milky eyes locked on her, she pulled out the bone token and held it up."
22"And Harlow Quinn, military-trained detective with 18 years of decorated service, was finally going to find it—even if it killed her."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1717
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"same supernatural patient—someone"
adverbCount37
adverbRatio0.021549213744903904
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.0052417006406523005
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences79
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences79
mean24.24
std13.03
cv0.538
sampleLengths
031
135
225
365
442
517
625
715
848
926
1020
1124
1247
1324
1442
1539
1616
1731
1816
1925
2033
2125
2237
2346
2410
2516
2619
274
2829
2945
302
3143
3231
3337
3422
3543
3615
3717
3820
3921
409
4120
4212
4323
4433
4511
4661
474
4828
4927
51.48% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.35443037974683544
totalSentences79
uniqueOpeners28
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences71
matches
0"Then he emerged: Jax, the"
1"Then she saw him."
2"Somewhere in the crowd, Jax"
3"Somewhere in the shadows, the"
ratio0.056
67.89% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences71
matches
0"Her worn leather watch—scuffed at"
1"She’d tucked her badge into"
2"His boots sloshed through the"
3"She noted every detail: the"
4"She scooped the torn scarf"
5"She hesitated, her leather watch"
6"She pressed her ear to"
7"She peeked around the corner"
8"She’d spent months trying to"
9"She’d tracked his ties to"
10"He glanced at his phone,"
11"he said, his Seville accent"
12"she said, her voice steady"
13"he said, his gaze flicking"
14"She thought of Morris’s empty"
15"She thought of her worn"
16"she said, her voice cracking"
17"he said, but he didn’t"
18"She could turn back, file"
19"She could go home, make"
ratio0.38
44.51% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount59
totalSentences71
matches
0"The rain lashed Harlow’s closely"
1"Her worn leather watch—scuffed at"
2"The bar’s distinctive green neon"
3"Harlow’s military training kept her"
4"She’d tucked her badge into"
5"The bar’s door creaked open,"
6"His boots sloshed through the"
7"The chase stretched through Soho’s"
8"Harlow matched his pace, her"
9"She noted every detail: the"
10"She scooped the torn scarf"
11"Jax darted down an alley"
12"Harlow skidded to a halt"
13"The alley ended at a"
14"Morris had mentioned a door"
15"She hesitated, her leather watch"
16"She pressed her ear to"
17"Jax’s voice cut through the"
18"She peeked around the corner"
19"The door closed behind him,"
ratio0.831
70.42% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences71
matches
0"By the time they reached"
ratio0.014
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences57
technicalSentenceCount15
matches
0"The bar’s distinctive green neon sign bleeded into the downpour, turning the puddles at her feet to murky lime that sloshed over her scuffed boots."
1"Through the fogged window, she’d mapped every crevice of the dim interior: a frayed 1920s map of the Thames peeling from the north wall, its edges blackened by …"
2"The chase stretched through Soho’s narrow streets, rain turning the pavements to glass that made Jax’s steps slip and stutter."
3"She noted every detail: the way he kept his hand in his parka pocket (a switchblade, she guessed), the frayed edge of his red scarf catching on a metal bus stop…"
4"She scooped the torn scarf edge into her coat pocket—a small trophy, a link to the case that had consumed her since Morris’s death."
5"She hesitated, her leather watch ticking louder in her ears—what if this was the same thing that had snuffed out Morris’s life without a trace?"
6"She peeked around the corner just in time to see Jax press a small, yellowed bone token into a doorman’s palm—an old man with skin like cracked earth, his eyes …"
7"Former NHS paramedic, born in Seville, who’d moved to London to care for his ailing grandmother before losing his license after administering unauthorized treat…"
8"Tomás adjusted his medallion, his fingers brushing the scar as if it still ached, and pulled a small leather satchel from his shoulder—she guessed it held banda…"
9"A plan sparked: distract him, steal whatever token he had, slip into the market before Jax could disappear with the wisp powder—a substance she’d found a trace …"
10"Tomás’s jaw tightened, and Harlow saw a flash of grief in his eyes—grief for his lost license, for his grandmother who’d died shortly after he’d been fired, for…"
11"She thought of her worn leather watch, which he’d given her for her 38th birthday, saying it would keep her on time for the cases that mattered."
12"He thought of his abuela’s words—help the ones who can’t help themselves—and pressed the token into her palm."
13"Harlow stepped through, her boots hitting a stone floor that smelled of ancient dirt and burnt alchemical substances."
14"The Veil Market stretched out before her: stalls lit by flickering torchlight, their vendors selling enchanted herbs and banned alchemical potions, their patron…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"she said, her voice steady despite the hammering of her heart"
1"he said, his gaze flicking to the metal door"
2"she said, her voice cracking just a little"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences15
tagDensity0.467
leniency0.933
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
79.0170%