Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYA0F6WTMQRED1EZG2N3E10

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Duration:
1m 14s
Cost:
$0.007736
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
I yank the third deadbolt free and fling Eva’s flat door open before the knocks can rattle the curry house’s ceiling joists above. Lucien stands on the step, tailored charcoal suit brushing the damp brickwork, his heterochromatic eyes pinning me to the doorframe. I’d thought I’d shaken him three months prior, when he vanished mid-negotiation with a vampire clan that’d targeted my delivery route—left me hiding in a skip behind Golden Empress, my left wrist’s crescent scar throbbing from where the vampire’s claw had nicked it while I fumbled for a delivery bag’s hidden pepper spray. Curry steam curls through the flat’s floor vents, spicing the air with turmeric and fenugreek. Ptolemy’s tabby form streaks from the book-cluttered sofa to the windowsill, hissing once before flattening his ears against his skull. Lucien’s ivory-handled cane taps the stone threshold twice, the sound sharp enough to cut through the distant clatter of Brick Lane’s curry house kitchens. “Why are you here?” “Information. You have something I need.” “You left me to bleed into a skip last time we spoke. Information’s a two-way street you burned to ash.” I grip the doorframe, my crescent scar tugging as my fingers curl into the chipped paint. Lucien’s amber eye narrows; his black eye glints like polished obsidian in the streetlight. He steps forward, his suit’s fabric brushing my arm, and I flinch back—memories of his sudden disappearance flooding in, how I’d called every number he’d given me only to hit dead lines, how I’d spent three nights checking Silas’ bar for any sign of him before Eva talked me into laying low. “The vampire clan had a mole in my network. I couldn’t risk leading them to you.” “I didn’t ask for your protection. I asked for you to keep Evan off my back—you promised that.” “Evan’s not the problem anymore.” I nod to the crumpled flyer on Eva’s coffee table—one I’d taped there last week, a blurry photo of Evan loitering outside Silas’ bar, his jaw set in the same angry line that used to make me flinch before I fled Cardiff. Lucien’s gaze follows mine, his cane’s handle twisting slightly—his tell, when he’s holding back a truth. I step back, my bare feet pressing into a crumpled scroll of Eva’s supernatural research—something about half-demons from Avaros, Lucien’s father’s realm. I grab a nearby stack of books to steady myself, their worn spines digging into my palm. “You’ve been digging into my bloodline.” “Eva’s research. She’s scared you’ll drag me into your underworld mess.” “Your ex isn’t just human anymore. He made a bargain with a demon from Avaros—my father’s faction.” That’s impossible. My throat tightens; I rub my left wrist’s scar, the memory of Evan’s grip on it flooding back—he’d slammed my hand into a kitchen counter when I tried to leave, the shard of a broken mug leaving the crescent mark. I’d lied to my parents about it, said I’d tripped over a garden fence while walking Ptolemy (back when I’d had a cat of my own in Cardiff). Lucien steps inside, his cane’s blade edge grazing the doorframe before he snaps it back into place—proof he’s prepared for a fight. The flat’s main room crams into a narrow space, its walls plastered with Eva’s scrawled notes—cross-referenced demon sigils, delivery route maps marked with red Xs where supernatural threats had struck, photos of Cardiff’s skyline taped next to London’s. A half-eaten plate of samosas sits on the coffee table, their oil soaking into a research paper about vampire weaknesses. “I tracked his bargain to a ritual in Camden’s occult supply shop. He traded his soul for the power to find you.” “Why would you tell me this now?” “I owe you. I left you exposed last time. My father’s faction is hunting him too—he stole a relic that could unravel the barrier between Avaros and Earth.” I drop the stack of books. They thud to the floor, scattering pages of Eva’s research across the carpet. Ptolemy yowls and leaps onto the windowsill, his paws tap-tap-tapping against the glass. Lucien’s cane taps the floor once, a signal I’d learned during our brief alliance—stay alert. I reach for the delivery bag from Golden Empress by the door, its worn leather strap digging into my shoulder as I fumble for the hidden pepper spray. “Where’s the relic?” “He’s hiding it in your old Cardiff flat. He plans to use it to drag you back there—make you watch as he opens the barrier.” “You knew about this all along.” “I had to confirm the mole’s identity first. He’s a server at Golden Empress—Yu-Fei’s nephew.” My blood runs cold. I’d worked with the nephew for two months, laughed at his jokes about the lunch rush, let him borrow my phone once to call his mother. I’d thought he was just a quiet kid trying to save for university. Lucien grabs my wrist, his touch burning slightly—a hint of his demon blood seeping through his skin. I yank away, my scar throbbing worse than before. “Let go of me.” “I’m not letting him hurt you again. I’ve got a team waiting outside to take down the mole.” “You left me once. Why should I trust you now?” Lucien pulls a small silver locket from his suit pocket—one I’d lost during the vampire skirmish, the one with a photo of my parents inside. He hands it to me, its cold metal pressing into my palm. I’d thought it was gone forever, swallowed by the skip’s rotting garbage. A loud crash echoes from the curry house below, followed by a guttural roar that isn’t human. Ptolemy screeches and leaps from the windowsill, crashing into a stack of scrolls. Lucien’s amber eye flares, and he twists his cane’s handle, the thin blade sliding out an inch. I rush to the window, yanking back the curtain. A shadow stretches up the brickwork, its form twisting into Evan’s silhouette—horns sprouting from his temples, his hands clawed like the vampire’s that’d nicked my wrist. He locks eyes with me, his grin sharp and inhuman, and slams his fist into the window. The glass cracks, spiderwebbing across the pane. I stumble back, the silver locket slipping from my hand. Lucien steps between me and the window, his cane raised, and yells, “He’s here!” as Evan’s second fist slams into the glass, shattering it into a thousand glittering shards that rain down onto the carpet.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags3
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences20
tagDensity0.15
leniency0.3
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
90.88% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1096
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
highlights
0"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
90.88% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1096
totalAiIsms2
found
0
word"unravel"
count1
1
word"echoes"
count1
highlights
0"unravel"
1"echoes"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences41
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences41
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences60
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen55
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1069
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
80.56% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions35
wordCount792
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity1.39
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Eva5
Golden2
Empress2
Brick1
Lane1
Evan4
Lucien11
Avaros1
Ptolemy4
Cardiff2
Xs1
London1
persons
0"Eva"
1"Evan"
2"Lucien"
3"Ptolemy"
places
0"Golden"
1"Brick"
2"Lane"
3"Avaros"
4"Cardiff"
5"London"
globalScore0.806
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences39
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1069
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences60
matches(empty)
94.12% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs15
mean71.27
std34.17
cv0.479
sampleLengths
043
1112
230
382
439
597
634
7150
857
975
1049
1169
1232
1396
14104
96.71% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences41
matches
0"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs137
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount13
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences13
totalSentences60
ratio0.217
matches
0"I’d thought I’d shaken him three months prior, when he vanished mid-negotiation with a vampire clan that’d targeted my delivery route—left me hiding in a skip behind Golden Empress, my left wrist’s crescent scar throbbing from where the vampire’s claw had nicked it while I fumbled for a delivery bag’s hidden pepper spray."
1"Lucien’s amber eye narrows; his black eye glints like polished obsidian in the streetlight."
2"He steps forward, his suit’s fabric brushing my arm, and I flinch back—memories of his sudden disappearance flooding in, how I’d called every number he’d given me only to hit dead lines, how I’d spent three nights checking Silas’ bar for any sign of him before Eva talked me into laying low."
3"I nod to the crumpled flyer on Eva’s coffee table—one I’d taped there last week, a blurry photo of Evan loitering outside Silas’ bar, his jaw set in the same angry line that used to make me flinch before I fled Cardiff."
4"Lucien’s gaze follows mine, his cane’s handle twisting slightly—his tell, when he’s holding back a truth."
5"I step back, my bare feet pressing into a crumpled scroll of Eva’s supernatural research—something about half-demons from Avaros, Lucien’s father’s realm."
6"My throat tightens; I rub my left wrist’s scar, the memory of Evan’s grip on it flooding back—he’d slammed my hand into a kitchen counter when I tried to leave, the shard of a broken mug leaving the crescent mark."
7"Lucien steps inside, his cane’s blade edge grazing the doorframe before he snaps it back into place—proof he’s prepared for a fight."
8"The flat’s main room crams into a narrow space, its walls plastered with Eva’s scrawled notes—cross-referenced demon sigils, delivery route maps marked with red Xs where supernatural threats had struck, photos of Cardiff’s skyline taped next to London’s."
9"Lucien’s cane taps the floor once, a signal I’d learned during our brief alliance—stay alert."
10"Lucien grabs my wrist, his touch burning slightly—a hint of his demon blood seeping through his skin."
11"Lucien pulls a small silver locket from his suit pocket—one I’d lost during the vampire skirmish, the one with a photo of my parents inside."
12"A shadow stretches up the brickwork, its form twisting into Evan’s silhouette—horns sprouting from his temples, his hands clawed like the vampire’s that’d nicked my wrist."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount413
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount11
adverbRatio0.026634382566585957
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.004842615012106538
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences60
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences60
mean17.82
std11.11
cv0.624
sampleLengths
023
120
253
315
420
524
64
76
820
916
1014
1152
1216
1318
145
1542
1616
1722
1817
196
2011
2117
222
2340
2428
2522
2638
2720
2822
297
3028
316
3213
3313
3415
3528
363
3725
386
3915
404
4126
4213
4317
449
454
4618
4710
4825
4912
45.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.3
totalSentences60
uniqueOpeners18
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences40
matches(empty)
ratio0
10.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount21
totalSentences40
matches
0"I yank the third deadbolt"
1"I’d thought I’d shaken him"
2"I grip the doorframe, my"
3"He steps forward, his suit’s"
4"I nod to the crumpled"
5"I step back, my bare"
6"I grab a nearby stack"
7"My throat tightens; I rub"
8"I’d lied to my parents"
9"I drop the stack of"
10"They thud to the floor,"
11"I reach for the delivery"
12"My blood runs cold."
13"I’d worked with the nephew"
14"I’d thought he was just"
15"I yank away, my scar"
16"He hands it to me,"
17"I’d thought it was gone"
18"I rush to the window,"
19"He locks eyes with me,"
ratio0.525
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount40
totalSentences40
matches
0"I yank the third deadbolt"
1"Lucien stands on the step,"
2"I’d thought I’d shaken him"
3"Curry steam curls through the"
4"Ptolemy’s tabby form streaks from"
5"Lucien’s ivory-handled cane taps the"
6"I grip the doorframe, my"
7"Lucien’s amber eye narrows; his"
8"He steps forward, his suit’s"
9"I nod to the crumpled"
10"Lucien’s gaze follows mine, his"
11"I step back, my bare"
12"I grab a nearby stack"
13"My throat tightens; I rub"
14"I’d lied to my parents"
15"Lucien steps inside, his cane’s"
16"The flat’s main room crams"
17"A half-eaten plate of samosas"
18"I drop the stack of"
19"They thud to the floor,"
ratio1
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences40
matches(empty)
ratio0
53.57% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences32
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"I’d thought I’d shaken him three months prior, when he vanished mid-negotiation with a vampire clan that’d targeted my delivery route—left me hiding in a skip b…"
1"Lucien’s gaze follows mine, his cane’s handle twisting slightly—his tell, when he’s holding back a truth."
2"Lucien grabs my wrist, his touch burning slightly—a hint of his demon blood seeping through his skin."
3"A shadow stretches up the brickwork, its form twisting into Evan’s silhouette—horns sprouting from his temples, his hands clawed like the vampire’s that’d nicke…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags3
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
78.7235%