Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYA3M5E0SC7TX52K9SP51QE

Run Details

Duration:
36.4s
Cost:
$0.001960
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rain hammered the pavements of Soho, turning the gutters into rushing black rivers that swallowed cigarette butts and crumpled flyers. Detective Harlow Quinn sprinted through the downpour, her boots slapping against the slick asphalt. Water streamed from her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair, plastering strands to her forehead. She wiped her face with the back of her hand, breath coming in sharp bursts. The worn leather watch on her left wrist ticked relentlessly, its face fogged under the relentless assault from the sky. Ahead, the figure darted between parked cars, a shadow in a hooded jacket that blended with the night. Quinn's sharp jaw clenched as she pumped her legs harder. She had tailed him from The Raven's Nest, that dimly lit hole in the wall where maps and faded photographs peeled from the walls like forgotten secrets. He'd slipped out the back, past the green neon sign that buzzed like a dying insect, and now he weaved through the narrow streets, heading north toward Camden. "Stop!" Quinn shouted, her voice cutting through the roar of the storm. No response. The suspect vaulted a low fence into an alley, his form vanishing around a corner stacked with overflowing bins. She followed, vaulting the fence herself, landing with a splash that soaked her trousers to the knees. Her military precision kept her steady—eighteen years on the force drilled that into her bones. The alley reeked of rotting rubbish and stale piss, but she pushed on, flashlight beam from her phone slicing the darkness. Rain blurred the light, but she caught a glimpse of movement: short curly dark hair peeking from under the hood as he glanced back. Tomás Herrera. She knew that face from blurry surveillance shots, the olive-skinned medic who'd lost his license patching up shadows the NHS wouldn't touch. Suspected ties to that clique of freaks operating under the radar. Tonight, he'd met someone shady at the bar, exchanged a package, and bolted when Quinn made her approach. He burst out of the alley onto a wider street, tires hissing past as cars hydroplaned through puddles. Quinn emerged seconds later, lungs burning. Horns blared as she dashed across, narrowly avoiding a black cab that swerved. The suspect—Tommy, they called him—glanced over his shoulder again, warm brown eyes wide in the sodium glow of streetlamps. He clutched something at his neck, a glint of metal: that Saint Christopher medallion, swinging like a talisman against the chaos. Quinn gained ground, her longer strides eating up the distance. "Herrera! Metropolitan Police! You're under arrest!" He didn't stop. Instead, he veered left, plunging into the throng of late-night revelers spilling from pubs. Bodies jostled her—drunken laughter, the sharp tang of spilled beer mixing with the ozone of rain. She shoved through, elbowing a man in a leather jacket who spun with a curse. "Watch it, love!" "Out of the way," she growled, flashing her badge without breaking stride. The crowd thinned as they hit the edge of Soho, the streets narrowing toward the labyrinth of Camden. Rain lashed harder, wind whipping it sideways, stinging her cheeks. Herrera ducked under a scaffold, his scar— that jagged line along his left forearm—flashing white as he pushed up his sleeve to check something. A token? Quinn's mind raced. Intel whispered of underground dealings, markets that didn't exist on any map. He led her onto Euston Road, the massive bulk of St. Pancras looming like a gothic sentinel through the sheets of water. Traffic roared, headlights cutting fog. Herrera sprinted across, weaving between lorries that bellowed horns. Quinn hesitated a split second—forty-one years old, not as spry as in her rookie days—then bolted after him, a driver slamming brakes as she cleared the hood by inches. Metal screeched. "Bloody idiot!" She ignored it, focus locked on his retreating back. He slipped into a side street, shadowed by Victorian terraces now converted to flats. The rain turned the world to a monochrome blur, every step a fight against the slip and slide of the ground. Quinn's coat clung heavy, weighing her down, but she pressed on, hand hovering near her holster. No backup tonight; this was off-books, a hunch about the clique tying back to her partner's disappearance three years ago. DS Morris, gone in a puff of the unnatural. She wouldn't let it slide again. Herrera reached a chain-link fence bordering an abandoned stretch of the old Tube line. The entrance to the disused station gaped like a wound in the earth, boarded up with weathered plywood that flapped in the gale. He yanked at a loose panel, the wood splintering under his grip, and squeezed through. Quinn arrived moments later, chest heaving. She scanned the fence—rusted links, topped with barbed wire that glistened wet. No time for finesse. She gripped the chain-link, hauling herself up, the metal biting into her palms. Rain made it treacherous; her foot slipped once, boot skidding on concrete, but she caught herself, swinging a leg over the top. Barbs snagged her coat, tearing fabric with a rip. She dropped to the other side, landing in a crouch amid puddles that reflected fractured streetlight. The suspect's footsteps echoed down cracked stairs descending into the station. Abandoned for decades, the place was a relic: faded posters for long-gone shows curling from tiled walls, air thick with damp and decay. Quinn drew her pistol, the weight familiar in her rain-slick hand. She flicked on her torch, beam dancing over graffiti tags and shattered glass crunching underfoot. "Herrera, this ends now," she called, voice echoing off the arches. "Come out with your hands up." Silence, broken only by dripping water and the distant rumble of trains above. She descended, steps deliberate, pistol raised. The stairs spiraled down, air growing cooler, mustier. At the bottom, a platform stretched into shadow, tracks long overgrown with weeds pushing through gravel. No sign of him, but a faint scuffle led toward a bricked-up tunnel. She followed, torchlight picking out his trail: a smudge of mud, a dropped leaflet sodden and useless. The tunnel mouth loomed, bricks loose in places, mortar eroded. Herrera must have squeezed through a gap. Quinn holstered her gun for a moment, wedging her fingers into the cracks. Stones shifted, dust cascading like gray snow. She pushed, body straining, until a hole yawned wide enough. Emerging into the tunnel proper, the darkness pressed in. Her torch revealed a narrow passage, rails rusted and twisted, walls slick with condensation. Footsteps ahead—faint, retreating. She gave chase again, the confined space amplifying every sound: her breaths, the patter of water, his fading echoes. The tunnel opened into a chamber, vast and echoing, the air humming with something electric. Voices murmured from the gloom—low, urgent, laced with accents she couldn't place. Lantern light flickered, casting long shadows that danced like living things. Stalls emerged from the murk: rickety tables laden with vials glowing faint blue, amulets carved from bone, scrolls yellowed and inscribed with symbols that twisted her gut. The Veil Market. Whispers from informants painted it as myth, a black bazaar for the unnatural, tucked beneath Camden in an abandoned Tube ghost. It shifted every full moon, accessible only to those with the right token. Herrera stood at the edge, haggling with a hooded vendor over a shimmering pouch. His medallion caught the lantern glow, and that scar on his forearm flexed as he gestured. Eyes turned toward her—dozens, from faces human and not. A woman with eyes like polished obsidian hissed something in a tongue that slithered. A man with skin like cracked leather fingered a dagger at his belt. The air thrummed with tension, scents of herbs and ozone mingling with the metallic tang of blood. Quinn froze at the threshold, pistol half-drawn. Her watch beeped softly—low battery on the torch, but worse was the uncertainty gnawing at her. This place reeked of the supernatural, the same veil that swallowed Morris. Follow him in, and she dove headfirst into the unknown: deals in the dark, creatures that didn't bleed right, alliances she couldn't predict. Turn back, call for backup, and he vanishes into this warren, the trail cold again. Herrera spotted her, eyes widening. He snatched the pouch from the vendor, tossing a bone token that clattered across the stone. "You shouldn't be here, Detective." The vendor snatched the token, vanishing behind a curtain of hanging vines that rustled unnaturally. Whispers swelled, bodies shifting closer. A figure detached from the crowd—tall, cloaked, face obscured—watched her with interest that prickled her skin. Quinn's hand tightened on her gun. Rain still drummed above, a distant roar, but down here, the world narrowed to this: the chase's end, or its plunge into madness. She stepped forward, boot echoing, heart pounding against her ribs. Herrera backed away, melting into the throng. "This isn't your fight. Go back." She didn't. The decision locked in her jaw, sharp as ever. One foot after the other, into the heart of the market, where shadows whispered promises of truths she'd chased for years. The crowd parted reluctantly, murmurs turning to growls. A stall nearby offered elixirs bubbling in skulls, another blades etched with runes that hummed when she passed. Herrera dodged between legs and crates, heading deeper, toward tunnels branching like veins. Quinn pursued, ignoring the stares, the hands that brushed too close. "Stop him," she barked at a cluster of onlookers, flashing her badge. Laughter rippled back, hollow and mocking. One, a wiry man with tattoos coiling up his neck, stepped forward. "Police? Down here? You lost, darling?" "Out of my way." She shouldered past, gun now fully drawn, sweeping the barrel in an arc. Herrera glanced back, scar stark under the erratic lights. He clutched the pouch tighter, medallion bouncing. The market pulsed around them—deals struck in code, eyes gleaming with forbidden knowledge. A woman vended information, her booth a web of glowing threads; she spun toward Quinn, lips curling. "Curious, Detective Quinn. Chasing ghosts again?" Quinn faltered, but only a beat. How did she know her name? No time. Herrera vanished around a corner of stacked crates, the air growing thicker, laced with incense that burned her throat. She rounded the bend, torch cutting through smoke. The passage narrowed, walls closing in, etched with wards that prickled her skin like static. Footsteps ahead, splashing through shallow water pooling on the floor. Her own splashed in pursuit, echoes merging. The tunnel spat them into another chamber, larger, alive with haggling. Voices overlapped: "Fresh mandrake root, potent as sin." "Cursed relic, half price if you take the hex." Bodies pressed, furred limbs, scaled hides brushing her arm. She stifled a gasp—real, not hallucination. This was Morris's world, the supernatural underbelly she'd glimpsed in reports dismissed as delirium. Herrera climbed a makeshift stair of crates, leaping to a raised platform where alchemists stirred cauldrons. Steam rose, hissing. He dropped into the crowd below, weaving toward a far exit: a archway guarded by two bruisers, tusks glinting. Quinn shoved through, elbowing a patron who snarled, fangs bared. "Back off!" The guard at the arch loomed, arms like tree trunks. "Token?" Herrera flashed his—another bone sliver, carved intricate. They waved him through. Quinn reached them, panting. "Police. Let me pass." The left guard chuckled, breath foul. "No badge works here, copper. Turn tail." She raised her gun, steady despite the tremor in her legs. Rain's echo faded; down here, only the market's heartbeat thrummed. Follow, and risk everything—life, sanity, the job. But Herrera was the key, the thread to the clique, to what took Morris. "Move," she said, voice steel. They didn't. Instead, the crowd closed in, a living wall. Whispers built to a chant, low and rhythmic. Herrera's shadow flickered beyond the arch, pouch secure. Her finger hovered on the trigger. Decision time: fire a warning, blast through, or retreat to the surface, radio for the cavalry that might never believe her. The watch on her wrist ticked louder in the din, counting down. She stepped forward, gun barking once into the air. The shot echoed like thunder, stalls shuddering. Chaos erupted—screams, overturning tables, vials shattering in sprays of color. The guards lunged, but she dodged, pistol whipping the first across the jaw. Bone cracked. Herrera bolted into the archway, gone. Quinn followed, firing another shot that splintered the frame. Darkness swallowed her, the market's roar fading behind. The passage twisted, damp walls brushing her shoulders. Torchlight dimmed, battery dying, but she ran on, senses sharp. Water trickled, voices echoing from side chambers—deals in the black. Up ahead, a glow: Herrera, pouch in hand, meeting a figure in the gloom. "Got it. For the clique." The figure nodded, hooded. "Quinn's close. Lose her." She burst into the light, gun leveled. "Freeze! Both of you!" They spun. Herrera's eyes—warm brown, now fierce—locked on hers. The figure melted back, vanishing into cracks. "Detective, please." Herrera raised hands, empty. "You don't understand." "Hands where I can see them." She advanced, cuff out. He edged back, scar twitching. "This market... it's not for you. Dangers you can't—" A rumble shook the tunnel, dust sifting. The figure's voice slithered from shadow: "Let her come. She seeks answers." Quinn cuffed Herrera's wrist, yanking him close. "What was in the Nest? The package?" He winced, medallion pressing into her arm. "Medicine. For those who need it." "Lies." She dragged him toward a side exit, stairs ascending to street level. But the rumble grew—full moon shift? The market moved, walls groaning. Cracks spiderwebbed the floor. "Run!" Herrera yelled, pulling her back. She hesitated, the unknown pulling like gravity. Surface safety, or deeper truths? The ground buckled, and she chose—downward, into the fray.
created_at"2026-02-20T19:58:25.464Z" 2/20/2026, 7:58:25 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.387
leniency0.774
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.66% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2303
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"reluctantly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"reluctantly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
4.47% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2303
totalAiIsms44
found
0
word"jaw clenched"
count1
1
word"glint"
count1
2
word"raced"
count1
3
word"looming"
count1
4
word"sentinel"
count1
5
word"scanned"
count1
6
word"treacherous"
count1
7
word"fractured"
count1
8
word"footsteps"
count3
9
word"echoed"
count2
10
word"weight"
count1
11
word"familiar"
count1
12
word"flicked"
count1
13
word"dancing"
count1
14
word"shattered"
count1
15
word"echoing"
count4
16
word"silence"
count1
17
word"loomed"
count2
18
word"cascading"
count1
19
word"echoes"
count2
20
word"electric"
count1
21
word"gloom"
count2
22
word"flickered"
count2
23
word"tension"
count1
24
word"pounding"
count1
25
word"etched"
count2
26
word"stark"
count1
27
word"pulsed"
count1
28
word"gleaming"
count1
29
word"glinting"
count1
30
word"intricate"
count1
31
word"echo"
count1
32
word"rhythmic"
count1
highlights
0"jaw clenched"
1"glint"
2"raced"
3"looming"
4"sentinel"
5"scanned"
6"treacherous"
7"fractured"
8"footsteps"
9"echoed"
10"weight"
11"familiar"
12"flicked"
13"dancing"
14"shattered"
15"echoing"
16"silence"
17"loomed"
18"cascading"
19"echoes"
20"electric"
21"gloom"
22"flickered"
23"tension"
24"pounding"
25"etched"
26"stark"
27"pulsed"
28"gleaming"
29"glinting"
30"intricate"
31"echo"
32"rhythmic"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences187
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences187
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"know"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences206
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2267
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"The suspect—Tommy, they called him—glanced over his shoulder again, warm brown eyes wide in the sodium glow of streetlam…"
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions78
wordCount2128
uniqueNames23
maxNameDensity0.99
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Herrera"
discoveredNames
Soho2
Harlow1
Quinn21
Raven1
Nest1
Camden3
Herrera21
Tommy1
Saint1
Christopher1
Euston1
Road1
St1
Victorian1
Morris4
Tube2
Silence1
Veil1
Market1
Laughter1
Bodies2
Rain6
Whispers3
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Herrera"
3"Tommy"
4"Saint"
5"Christopher"
6"Morris"
7"Silence"
8"Market"
9"Laughter"
10"Bodies"
11"Rain"
12"Whispers"
places
0"Soho"
1"Raven"
2"Camden"
3"Euston"
4"Road"
5"St"
6"Victorian"
globalScore1
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences158
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2267
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences206
matches
0"knew that face"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs65
mean34.88
std24.42
cv0.7
sampleLengths
082
183
233
377
453
577
616
748
83
912
1069
1165
124
1395
1452
1582
1660
1717
1856
1964
2045
2165
2267
2353
2473
2526
2636
2739
2813
2932
3050
3118
3218
3317
3446
356
3633
3740
3857
3938
4012
4111
4211
438
4413
4542
465
4726
4839
4941
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences187
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs432
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount26
semicolonCount4
flaggedSentences24
totalSentences206
ratio0.117
matches
0"Her military precision kept her steady—eighteen years on the force drilled that into her bones."
1"The suspect—Tommy, they called him—glanced over his shoulder again, warm brown eyes wide in the sodium glow of streetlamps."
2"Bodies jostled her—drunken laughter, the sharp tang of spilled beer mixing with the ozone of rain."
3"Herrera ducked under a scaffold, his scar— that jagged line along his left forearm—flashing white as he pushed up his sleeve to check something."
4"Quinn hesitated a split second—forty-one years old, not as spry as in her rookie days—then bolted after him, a driver slamming brakes as she cleared the hood by inches."
5"No backup tonight; this was off-books, a hunch about the clique tying back to her partner's disappearance three years ago."
6"She scanned the fence—rusted links, topped with barbed wire that glistened wet."
7"Rain made it treacherous; her foot slipped once, boot skidding on concrete, but she caught herself, swinging a leg over the top."
8"Footsteps ahead—faint, retreating."
9"Voices murmured from the gloom—low, urgent, laced with accents she couldn't place."
10"Eyes turned toward her—dozens, from faces human and not."
11"Her watch beeped softly—low battery on the torch, but worse was the uncertainty gnawing at her."
12"A figure detached from the crowd—tall, cloaked, face obscured—watched her with interest that prickled her skin."
13"The market pulsed around them—deals struck in code, eyes gleaming with forbidden knowledge."
14"A woman vended information, her booth a web of glowing threads; she spun toward Quinn, lips curling."
15"She stifled a gasp—real, not hallucination."
16"Herrera flashed his—another bone sliver, carved intricate."
17"Rain's echo faded; down here, only the market's heartbeat thrummed."
18"Follow, and risk everything—life, sanity, the job."
19"Chaos erupted—screams, overturning tables, vials shattering in sprays of color."
20"Water trickled, voices echoing from side chambers—deals in the black."
21"Herrera's eyes—warm brown, now fierce—locked on hers."
22"But the rumble grew—full moon shift?"
23"The ground buckled, and she chose—downward, into the fray."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2164
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"short curly dark hair"
adverbCount46
adverbRatio0.021256931608133085
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.006469500924214418
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences206
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences206
mean11
std6.12
cv0.556
sampleLengths
020
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213
315
420
518
610
727
828
912
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1217
1315
1421
1524
162
1722
1811
1918
2018
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2213
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2421
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2814
2916
3015
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3410
3524
362
373
3812
3911
4011
415
429
4329
442
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4821
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57.77% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.34951456310679613
totalSentences206
uniqueOpeners72
37.45% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences178
matches
0"Instead, he veered left, plunging"
1"Instead, the crowd closed in,"
ratio0.011
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount49
totalSentences178
matches
0"She wiped her face with"
1"She had tailed him from"
2"He'd slipped out the back,"
3"She followed, vaulting the fence"
4"Her military precision kept her"
5"She knew that face from"
6"He burst out of the"
7"He clutched something at his"
8"He didn't stop."
9"She shoved through, elbowing a"
10"she growled, flashing her badge"
11"He led her onto Euston"
12"She ignored it, focus locked"
13"He slipped into a side"
14"She wouldn't let it slide"
15"He yanked at a loose"
16"She scanned the fence—rusted links,"
17"She gripped the chain-link, hauling"
18"She dropped to the other"
19"She flicked on her torch,"
ratio0.275
21.80% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount156
totalSentences178
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn sprinted through"
1"Water streamed from her closely"
2"She wiped her face with"
3"The worn leather watch on"
4"Quinn's sharp jaw clenched as"
5"She had tailed him from"
6"He'd slipped out the back,"
7"Quinn shouted, her voice cutting"
8"The suspect vaulted a low"
9"She followed, vaulting the fence"
10"Her military precision kept her"
11"The alley reeked of rotting"
12"Rain blurred the light, but"
13"She knew that face from"
14"Tonight, he'd met someone shady"
15"He burst out of the"
16"Quinn emerged seconds later, lungs"
17"Horns blared as she dashed"
18"The suspect—Tommy, they called him—glanced"
19"He clutched something at his"
ratio0.876
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences178
matches(empty)
ratio0
81.04% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences104
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"Rain hammered the pavements of Soho, turning the gutters into rushing black rivers that swallowed cigarette butts and crumpled flyers."
1"He'd slipped out the back, past the green neon sign that buzzed like a dying insect, and now he weaved through the narrow streets, heading north toward Camden."
2"The alley reeked of rotting rubbish and stale piss, but she pushed on, flashlight beam from her phone slicing the darkness."
3"She knew that face from blurry surveillance shots, the olive-skinned medic who'd lost his license patching up shadows the NHS wouldn't touch."
4"She dropped to the other side, landing in a crouch amid puddles that reflected fractured streetlight."
5"Lantern light flickered, casting long shadows that danced like living things."
6"Stalls emerged from the murk: rickety tables laden with vials glowing faint blue, amulets carved from bone, scrolls yellowed and inscribed with symbols that twi…"
7"Follow him in, and she dove headfirst into the unknown: deals in the dark, creatures that didn't bleed right, alliances she couldn't predict."
8"The vendor snatched the token, vanishing behind a curtain of hanging vines that rustled unnaturally."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"Quinn shouted, her voice cutting through the roar of the storm"
1"she called, voice echoing off the arches"
2"Herrera raised, empty"
3"She dragged, stairs ascending to street level"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Quinn shouted (shout)"
1"she growled (growl)"
2"she barked (bark)"
3"Voices overlapped: (overlap)"
4"Herrera yelled (yell)"
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.226
leniency0.452
rawRatio0.714
effectiveRatio0.323
75.2953%