Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYA5JCZPAFGSJJE3KR76562

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Duration:
52.9s
Cost:
$0.001619
Provider:
xAI

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn descended the rusted metal stairs into the bowels of what had once been a forgotten spur of the Northern Line, her worn leather watch ticking steadily against her left wrist. The air thickened with the stench of damp concrete and something sharper—ozone, like a storm trapped underground. Flashlights from the forensics team bobbed like fireflies in the gloom, casting jagged shadows across graffiti-scarred tiles that peeled like old skin. This wasn't just any crime scene; it was the Veil Market, or what was left of it after the raid two nights ago. An abandoned Tube station beneath Camden, hidden behind wards and whispers, accessible only with a bone token she'd pried from a snitch's cold fingers. Her sharp jaw clenched as she ducked under the yellow crime-scene tape, military precision in every step. Uniforms milled about, their faces pale under the harsh portable lights. The market's stalls—ramshackle booths of black-market oddities—lay in splintered ruin. Jars of glowing sludge had shattered, vials of iridescent powders crunched underfoot, and grimoires fluttered like startled pigeons before being bagged as evidence. But it was the body that drew her: sprawled in the center of the main aisle, amid a circle of toppled crates, lay a man in his fifties, throat slashed ear to ear, blood pooled black and congealing on the cracked platform floor. His eyes stared blankly at the vaulted ceiling, where bioluminescent fungi clung like forgotten stars. "Detective Quinn," Sergeant Patel called from the perimeter, his voice echoing off the tiled walls. He was a sturdy man with a mustache that drooped like wet wool. "Glad you're here. SOCO's finished the prelims. Looks like a robbery gone bad. Pockets turned out, stall ransacked." Quinn crouched beside the corpse, gloved hands hovering over the wounds. The cut was clean, deep—a single stroke from left to right, consistent with a right-handed attacker standing over the victim. No hesitation marks. She noted the victim's attire: a threadbare velvet coat heavy with enchanted trinkets—silver amulets etched with sigils, a ring that hummed faintly under her touch. Around his neck dangled a chain snapped in two, the pendant missing. His stall had sold "rift-touched relics," according to the scribbled ledger nearby. "Time of death?" she asked, her brown eyes scanning the pooling blood. No spatter on the walls, just a neat halo around the body. Odd. "Between midnight and two a.m., ma'am," Patel replied, consulting his notepad. "Witnesses—well, buyers who scarpered—say they heard a scuffle, then silence. Place cleared out fast when the first blues showed." Quinn straightened, her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair catching the light. Eighteen years on the force, and she'd chased leads into stranger dens than this. But something gnawed at her. The blood. Too contained. A throat slash like that should spray meters, paint the tiles in arcs. Here, it was as if the body had been laid out post-mortem, the flow directed. She paced the perimeter, boots scraping grit. Footprints in the dust—multiple sets, chaotic, leading away toward the emergency exit tunnel. But no drag marks from the body. Whoever did this killed him here, in the thick of the market, and no one saw? "Any CCTV?" Silly question. This was the Veil Market; cameras fried on entry. Patel shook his head. "Nada. But we got this." He held up an evidence bag: a small brass compass, its casing patinaed with verdigris, face etched with protective sigils. The needle quivered, not toward magnetic north, but spinning lazily toward a shattered stall in the corner. "Found it clutched in his right hand. Victim's?" Quinn took the bag, turning it in the light. Veil Compass. She'd heard whispers—attuned to supernatural rifts, portals. Crafted by Shade artisans, or so the underworld murmured. Why grip it in death? She slipped it into her coat pocket for later. Footsteps echoed from the stairs—light, hesitant. Quinn turned as Eva Kowalski emerged from the shadows, her curly red hair a wild halo under the lights, round glasses slipping down her freckled nose. She clutched a worn leather satchel bulging with books, tucking a stray lock behind her left ear—a nervous tic Quinn had clocked years ago during interrogations. Eva, the occult researcher from the British Museum's restricted archives. Childhood friend to that slippery Aurora type Quinn had been tailing. Not a colleague, exactly, but consulted on "weird cases" since DS Morris vanished three years back. Supernatural bollocks, Quinn had dismissed then. Still did, mostly. "Detective," Eva said breathlessly, green eyes wide. "Museum sent me. Heard about the market breach. This is... catastrophic." Quinn's gaze hardened. "Kowalski. Briefing?" Eva knelt by the body, unflinching, her satchel thumping beside her. "Vincent Hale. Vendor here for a decade. Dealt in rift artifacts. Low-level stuff—compasses, wards. Not the heavy alchemists." She gestured to the wreckage. "But look at the sigils on those crates. Protection runes, Hale's specialty. They're intact. No scorch marks, no residue." Patel nodded. "Like I said, robbery. Killer grabs the good stuff, slits his throat. Pendant's gone—probably a high-value charm." Quinn circled the body again, flashlight beam cutting the dark. The blood pool gleamed unnaturally viscous, almost oily. She knelt, sniffed—faint metallic tang, not just hemoglobin. Alchemical? No. Something else. Her mind flashed to Morris: gutted in a warehouse, wounds that defied physics, shadows that moved wrong. Dismissed as gang hit. She pushed it down. "Doesn't add up," Quinn muttered. "Blood's wrong. Too little spray for the depth of cut. And position—arms at sides, legs straight. Like he dropped in place." Eva adjusted her glasses. "It's not a robbery, Detective. Look closer." She pointed to the victim's hand. "Bruising on the knuckles, defensive. But no blood on his nails, no skin under them. He didn't fight back effectively." "Stunned first?" Patel suggested. "Blunt force?" Quinn shook her head, eyes tracing the floor. Dust patterns—scuffed, but no blood trail to or from the body. The victim had been standing dead center of the aisle, market bustling around him. A killing in plain sight? Implausible. She followed the footprints: most veered away chaotically, but one set—small boots, size six—circled the body once, then vanished toward the north tunnel. No corresponding exit prints. Her watch beeped—low battery warning. She ignored it, pulling the compass from her pocket. The needle snapped north, toward the platform's edge, where a grate hung loose. Rift? She pried it open, shining her light down. A service tunnel, dripping wet, leading deeper. "Eva," Quinn said, voice low. "Your take?" Eva hesitated, tucking hair again. "Supernatural. Hale was attuned—those compasses detect rifts. Market moves every full moon, but this one's fixed under Camden because of a weak veil here. Thin spot to the Shade realms. Killer wasn't human. Pulled him through a micro-rift, slit him mid-market, dropped the body back. Explains no drag, contained blood—rift sealed it. Pendant was a stabilizer; without it, he's bait." Patel snorted. "Ghosts now? Come on." Quinn's jaw tightened. Shades. Portals. The same rot that swallowed Morris. She wanted to scoff, but the evidence piled: no attacker prints matching the kill zone, blood viscosity screaming anomaly, compass pointing to that grate. She dropped to her belly, peering into the tunnel. Faint glow—verdant, pulsing. Air hummed, raising neck hairs. Not natural. "Patel, bag those boot prints. Size six, distinctive tread—hobnails." She stood, mind racing. Robbery was too neat. Witnesses heard scuffle, but no screams? Market full of paranoids who'd bolt at a shadow. Killer trusted the crowd to scatter. Eva watched her, expectant. "You see it, don't you? The veil's tearing. Hale's death is a message." Quinn pocketed the compass, its weight grounding her. "Message or not, someone's walking out of here rich. Pendant's key." She strode to Hale's stall, rifling ledgers. Entries in code—sales of "shadow needles," "bone keys." Last one: "E.K. - Compass trade. Midnight." E.K. Eva Kowalski? Quinn whipped around. "You were here?" Eva paled, satchel clutched tight. "Research. Legit trade. He had a map—" "Bullshit." Quinn's voice cracked like a whip. "Your boots match those circling the body. Prints stop at the grate. You trade, argue, rift opens—" "No!" Eva backed up, hands raised. "Vincent was alive when I left. Check timestamps. I was gone before—" Quinn seized her arm, military grip firm. Forensics techs froze. "Satchel. Now." Eva complied, trembling. Books tumbled: grimoires on rifts, Shade lore. Tucked in a pocket: a bone token, still warm. And a pendant—identical chain to Hale's, sigil glowing faintly. "Explains the entry," Quinn growled. "But not the kill." Patel's radio crackled—backup en route. Quinn's mind whirred. Eva's theory held water now: micro-rift, body dropped. But bruising on Hale's hands? Defensive, yet no fight residue. Unless the attacker phased through. No—too far. She snatched the compass. Needle spun wildly toward Eva's satchel. Toward the pendant inside. Quinn yanked it free. The sigil pulsed, matching the etchings on the compass. Hale's pendant wasn't stolen—it was duplicated. Trade. But why kill? Flashback: Morris's body, shadows clinging. A Shade artisan's mark on his watch—same verdigris patina. "The Compass," Quinn breathed. "It points to rifts... or fakes." Eva's eyes widened. "What?" Quinn held it up. "Hale sold knockoffs. Real ones detect true rifts. Fakes? Point to buyers, mark them for Shades. You bought one. Rift opened on you, grabbed Hale instead—wrong sigil resonance." Eva gasped. "He scammed me. The killer's Shade retaliation." Patel whistled. "Bloody hell." Quinn nodded, pieces locking. Evidence didn't add up because it wasn't a human crime. Military precision snapped in: secure the grate, call in specialists—not museum eggheads, but real containment. Her partner’s ghost stirred; this time, she'd understand. "Seal the tunnels," she ordered. "Kowalski, you're with me. Market's closed—for good." As they moved, compass steady in her fist, Quinn felt the underground hum deepen. The veil thinned, but her eyes saw through it now. What others missed: the scam, the Shade's justice. And the clique? Aurora's friends like Eva danced too close. Time to pull the thread. (Word count: 1427)
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags19
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Eva said breathlessly [breathlessly]"
1"Quinn's voice cracked like [like]"
dialogueSentences47
tagDensity0.404
leniency0.809
rawRatio0.105
effectiveRatio0.085
97.04% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1690
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"lazily"
count1
highlights
0"lazily"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Patel"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
31.95% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1690
totalAiIsms23
found
0
word"gloom"
count1
1
word"jaw clenched"
count1
2
word"shattered"
count2
3
word"fluttered"
count1
4
word"echoing"
count1
5
word"sturdy"
count1
6
word"velvet"
count1
7
word"etched"
count2
8
word"scanning"
count1
9
word"silence"
count1
10
word"chaotic"
count1
11
word"quivered"
count1
12
word"magnetic"
count1
13
word"footsteps"
count1
14
word"echoed"
count1
15
word"charm"
count1
16
word"tracing"
count1
17
word"racing"
count1
18
word"weight"
count1
19
word"pulsed"
count1
20
word"resonance"
count1
highlights
0"gloom"
1"jaw clenched"
2"shattered"
3"fluttered"
4"echoing"
5"sturdy"
6"velvet"
7"etched"
8"scanning"
9"silence"
10"chaotic"
11"quivered"
12"magnetic"
13"footsteps"
14"echoed"
15"charm"
16"tracing"
17"racing"
18"weight"
19"pulsed"
20"resonance"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
1"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences152
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences152
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences178
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen63
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1648
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions82
wordCount1243
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity2.01
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn25
Northern1
Line1
Veil3
Market3
Tube1
Camden1
Patel8
Compass1
Shade4
Eva16
Kowalski2
British1
Museum1
Aurora2
Morris4
Robbery1
Hale4
Entries1
Last1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Veil"
3"Camden"
4"Patel"
5"Compass"
6"Shade"
7"Eva"
8"Kowalski"
9"Museum"
10"Aurora"
11"Morris"
12"Hale"
places
0"British"
globalScore0.494
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences83
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"it was as if the body had been laid out post-mortem, the flow directed"
17.96% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.82
wordCount1648
matches
0"not toward magnetic north, but spinning lazily toward a shattered stall in the corner"
1"Not a colleague, exactly, but consulted on \"weird cases\" since DS Morris vanished three ye"
2"not museum eggheads, but real containment"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences178
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs49
mean33.63
std30.29
cv0.901
sampleLengths
0136
1102
246
383
425
530
6104
713
854
941
10104
1118
125
1353
1419
1555
1626
1737
186
1966
2043
217
2265
236
2454
2538
2617
2741
283
296
3012
3124
3218
3312
3428
359
3633
3714
3823
3914
4010
414
4232
439
444
4537
4612
4747
483
98.34% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences152
matches
0"being bagged"
1"been laid"
2"was duplicated"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs242
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount22
semicolonCount4
flaggedSentences24
totalSentences178
ratio0.135
matches
0"The air thickened with the stench of damp concrete and something sharper—ozone, like a storm trapped underground."
1"This wasn't just any crime scene; it was the Veil Market, or what was left of it after the raid two nights ago."
2"The market's stalls—ramshackle booths of black-market oddities—lay in splintered ruin."
3"The cut was clean, deep—a single stroke from left to right, consistent with a right-handed attacker standing over the victim."
4"She noted the victim's attire: a threadbare velvet coat heavy with enchanted trinkets—silver amulets etched with sigils, a ring that hummed faintly under her touch."
5"Footprints in the dust—multiple sets, chaotic, leading away toward the emergency exit tunnel."
6"This was the Veil Market; cameras fried on entry."
7"She'd heard whispers—attuned to supernatural rifts, portals."
8"Footsteps echoed from the stairs—light, hesitant."
9"She clutched a worn leather satchel bulging with books, tucking a stray lock behind her left ear—a nervous tic Quinn had clocked years ago during interrogations."
10"She knelt, sniffed—faint metallic tang, not just hemoglobin."
11"Dust patterns—scuffed, but no blood trail to or from the body."
12"She followed the footprints: most veered away chaotically, but one set—small boots, size six—circled the body once, then vanished toward the north tunnel."
13"Her watch beeped—low battery warning."
14"\"Supernatural. Hale was attuned—those compasses detect rifts. Market moves every full moon, but this one's fixed under Camden because of a weak veil here. Thin spot to the Shade realms. Killer wasn't human. Pulled him through a micro-rift, slit him mid-market, dropped the body back. Explains no drag, contained blood—rift sealed it. Pendant was a stabilizer; without it, he's bait.\""
15"Faint glow—verdant, pulsing."
16"Entries in code—sales of \"shadow needles,\" \"bone keys.\" Last one: \"E.K. - Compass trade. Midnight.\""
17"And a pendant—identical chain to Hale's, sigil glowing faintly."
18"Patel's radio crackled—backup en route."
19"No—too far."
20"Hale's pendant wasn't stolen—it was duplicated."
21"A Shade artisan's mark on his watch—same verdigris patina."
22"Military precision snapped in: secure the grate, call in specialists—not museum eggheads, but real containment."
23"Her partner’s ghost stirred; this time, she'd understand."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1272
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount43
adverbRatio0.03380503144654088
lyAdverbCount18
lyAdverbRatio0.014150943396226415
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences178
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences178
mean9.26
std8.08
cv0.872
sampleLengths
033
117
222
323
424
517
611
710
823
943
1015
1115
1213
1318
1411
1520
163
1725
1812
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2012
2112
221
2311
2419
2510
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275
282
292
3013
3115
327
3313
347
3516
364
379
384
3925
4017
418
429
432
447
459
465
479
486
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84.64% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.5112359550561798
totalSentences178
uniqueOpeners91
26.46% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences126
matches
0"Still did, mostly."
ratio0.008
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences126
matches
0"Her sharp jaw clenched as"
1"His eyes stared blankly at"
2"He was a sturdy man"
3"She noted the victim's attire:"
4"His stall had sold according"
5"she asked, her brown eyes"
6"She paced the perimeter, boots"
7"He held up an evidence"
8"She'd heard whispers—attuned to supernatural"
9"She slipped it into her"
10"She clutched a worn leather"
11"She gestured to the wreckage"
12"She knelt, sniffed—faint metallic tang,"
13"Her mind flashed to Morris:"
14"She pushed it down."
15"She pointed to the victim's"
16"She followed the footprints: most"
17"Her watch beeped—low battery warning."
18"She ignored it, pulling the"
19"She pried it open, shining"
ratio0.206
75.08% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount97
totalSentences126
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn descended the"
1"The air thickened with the"
2"Flashlights from the forensics team"
3"This wasn't just any crime"
4"An abandoned Tube station beneath"
5"Her sharp jaw clenched as"
6"Uniforms milled about, their faces"
7"The market's stalls—ramshackle booths of"
8"Jars of glowing sludge had"
9"His eyes stared blankly at"
10"Sergeant Patel called from the"
11"He was a sturdy man"
12"Quinn crouched beside the corpse,"
13"The cut was clean, deep—a"
14"She noted the victim's attire:"
15"His stall had sold according"
16"she asked, her brown eyes"
17"Patel replied, consulting his notepad"
18"Quinn straightened, her closely cropped"
19"A throat slash like that"
ratio0.77
39.68% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences126
matches
0"Whoever did this killed him"
ratio0.008
57.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences42
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"Flashlights from the forensics team bobbed like fireflies in the gloom, casting jagged shadows across graffiti-scarred tiles that peeled like old skin."
1"But it was the body that drew her: sprawled in the center of the main aisle, amid a circle of toppled crates, lay a man in his fifties, throat slashed ear to ea…"
2"She noted the victim's attire: a threadbare velvet coat heavy with enchanted trinkets—silver amulets etched with sigils, a ring that hummed faintly under her to…"
3"Here, it was as if the body had been laid out post-mortem, the flow directed."
4"Eva knelt by the body, unflinching, her satchel thumping beside her."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"Sergeant Patel called, his voice echoing off the tiled walls"
1"she asked, her brown eyes scanning the pooling blood"
2"He held up, its casing patinaed with verdigris, face etched with protective sigils"
3"Quinn said, voice low"
4"Eva backed up, hands raised"
43.62% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Quinn muttered (mutter)"
1"Patel suggested (suggest)"
2"Quinn growled (growl)"
3"Quinn breathed (breathe)"
4"she ordered (order)"
dialogueSentences47
tagDensity0.213
leniency0.426
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.213
75.0865%