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Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYA6KH6C8TS7KYFGTKJ7GY1
Run Details
Model:
Grok 4
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Literary fiction: old friends reunite
Duration:
2m 3s
Cost:
$0.053758
Provider:
xAI
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
88.72%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
23.86%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
66.67%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
100.00%
Name drop frequency
(details)
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
25.90%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
77.00%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
27.78%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
1.67%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
65.64%
Technical jargon density
(details)
0.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
12.50%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
72.9907%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
The green neon sign flickered
above the entrance to The Raven's Nest, casting erratic shadows on the rain-slicked pavement of Soho. Inside, the air hung thick with the scent of aged whiskey and polished oak.
Silas Blackwood leaned against the
bar, his silver signet ring tapping a slow rhythm on the wood as he wiped down a glass.
His hazel eyes scanned the
room out of habit, noting the cluster of regulars nursing pints in the dim light.
Maps on the walls whispered
of forgotten borders, black-and-white photos capturing faces long erased by time.
The door creaked open, letting
in a draft that stirred the dust.
A woman stepped in, shaking
droplets from her straight black hair.
She paused, bright blue eyes
adjusting to the
gloom
.
Aurora Carter—Rory, as she'd once
insisted he call her—
scanned
the room. Her gaze landed on him. She froze.
Silas straightened, the glass slipping
from his fingers.
It hit the floor with
a sharp crack, but neither moved.
His slight limp betrayed him
as he shifted
weight
off his left knee, the old injury flaring like a ghost. "Rory?"
The word escaped him, rough
and low, laced with disbelief.
She crossed the threshold, boots
thudding
softly
on the worn floorboards. Water pooled at her feet. "Silas. Bloody hell."
He rounded the bar, ignoring
the twinge in his leg. Up close, she looked different—sharper edges to her face, a wariness in those blue eyes that hadn't been there before.
The crescent scar on her
left wrist peeked from under her sleeve, unchanged, a relic from the girl he'd known. But the rest?
Time had carved her into
something harder. "You look like you've seen a ghost." She slid onto a stool, her voice steady, but her fingers drummed the bar top. "I might have."
He poured two whiskeys without
asking, sliding one her way. The liquid burned amber in the low light. "Last I heard, you were buried in books at Cardiff Uni. Pre-Law, wasn't it? Following in Brendan's
footsteps
."
She snorted, wrapping her hand
around the glass. The scar flexed. "That was the plan. Dad's grand vision. But plans change." He leaned on the bar, his grey-streaked auburn beard catching the light. The signet ring glinted as he raised his own glass. "To changed plans, then."
They clinked, the sound sharp
in the quiet.
She took a sip, eyes
never leaving his. "You grew a beard. Suits you. Makes you look... distinguished. Less like the reckless bastard who used to drag me into trouble." A laugh rumbled from him, but it carried an edge. "Reckless? Me? You were the one sneaking out to meet me at those dodgy cafes in Cardiff. What were you, sixteen? Your mum would have skinned me alive if she'd known." "Seventeen."
She corrected him, a faint
smile tugging her lips. But it faded quick. "And yeah, Jen would have. But you were the family friend with all the stories. MI6 this, covert op that. Made my boring life sound like a fairy tale."
He swirled his whiskey, watching
the liquid cling to the glass. The bar's hum filled the
silence
—murmurs from the corner booth, the clink of ice in someone else's drink.
His knee throbbed, a reminder
of how far from those stories he'd fallen. "Fairy tales end. Reality kicks in."
She tilted her head, studying
him. "What's with the limp? You didn't have that last time." "Prague."
He set the glass down
harder than intended. "Botched job. Knee took a bullet. Or three. Retired me out."
Her eyes widened for a
fraction, then narrowed. "Retired? You? The Spymaster himself, running a bar in Soho? That's... not you." "Isn't it?" He gestured to the room, the maps fluttering
slightly
in the draft. "The Raven's Nest. My little kingdom. Beats dodging shadows in Eastern Europe." She
traced
the rim of her glass. "Sounds like settling. You used to talk about the thrill, the edge. Now you're polishing glasses?" "And you?"
He countered, voice dropping
. "What happened to the girl who dreamed of courtrooms and justice? Delivery job for some Chinese takeaway? Living above a pub?" Her jaw tightened. "Golden Empress. Yu-Fei's place. Pays the bills." "Bills." He
echoed
the word, letting it hang. The regret seeped in then,
unspoken
but heavy. He'd known her father, Brendan, back when Silas was fresh out of training, consulting on cases that blurred lines between law and espionage. Rory had been a kid, wide-eyed, hanging on his tales during family dinners. He'd encouraged her fire, her quick mind.
Then life pulled them apart—his
ops, her studies. Years slipped by without a word. She downed the rest of her whiskey, the burn chasing down regrets of her own. "Evan happened." He froze. "The ex? The one Brendan mentioned in passing?" "Yeah." She stared at the empty glass, voice flat. "Abusive prick. Thought he owned me. I left Cardiff, fled to London on Eva's advice. Childhood mate, you remember her? She said start over. So I did." His
fist clenched
under the bar. "Why didn't you call? I would have—" "What? Swooped in like some knight? You were off the grid, Silas. Last postcard was from Berlin, five years back." He rubbed his beard, the grey streaks mocking him. "Fair point. But still. Family friend, right? That's what I was." "Were." She emphasized the word, but her tone softened. "Time changes things. I'm not that girl anymore." "No." He agreed, pouring them both another round. The liquid sloshed. "And I'm not that agent. Knee's a constant
reminder
. Every step." She reached across, her fingers brushing his hand. The contact jolted them both. "Does it hurt?" "Every damn day." He didn't pull away. "But you adapt. Or you break." "I adapted." She withdrew her hand, flexing the scarred wrist. "Got this when I was ten, remember? Fell off that stupid bike you lent me. You patched me up, told me scars build character." He chuckled, but it rang hollow. "Did I? Wise words from a fool." "They stuck."
She leaned in, voice lowering
. "But Evan... he left worse scars. Invisible ones. Made me question everything—Dad's path, my choices. So I ran. Landed here, of all places. Above your bar, actually. Fate's a twisted bitch." His eyes sharpened. "Above here? You're kidding." "Nope." She grinned, but it didn't reach her eyes. "Flat's cozy. View of the alley. Heard the bar's name, remembered your stories about ravens in intel lore. Figured it was a sign." He shook his head, the
weight
pressing down. All these months—years,
really
—she'd been right upstairs, and he hadn't known. The missed calls, the unsent letters. Regret clawed at him. "Why not come down sooner? Say hello?" "Fear." She admitted, staring into her glass. "What if you were different? What if I was? Easier to hide." "Hide from what?" He pressed, his limp evident as he moved closer. "From this." She gestured between them. "The gap. You were my hero, Silas. The one who showed me the world was bigger than Cardiff. Now look at us. Limping barman and delivery girl." "Hero."
He scoffed, but his voice cracked
. "Heroes don't fail. That Prague op—I lost good people. Walked away with this." He slapped his thigh. "And regrets." She met his gaze, bright blue piercing hazel. "We all have them. I regret not fighting Evan sooner. Regret dropping uni. Regret not reaching out." The bar door opened again, letting in a gust that flipped a photo on the wall. Neither looked. The
tension
coiled, years of
silence
unraveling
in fragments. "Then why now?" He asked, ring tapping the bar. "Rainy night. Craved a drink. Saw the sign."
She shrugged, but her eyes betrayed more
. "Or maybe I got tired of regretting." He nodded, the
unspoken
hanging thick. "Stay awhile. Catch up properly." She hesitated, then nodded. "Yeah. Pour another." As he did, the maps on the walls
seemed to
shift, borders redrawn by time. Their conversation flowed, tentative at first, probing the chasms. She spoke of London nights, dodging traffic on her delivery bike, the anonymity that healed her. He shared scraps of ops, sanitized versions that hid the blood. Laughter punctuated the gaps, but regret lingered, a shadow in every pause. "You ever think about going back?" She asked later, after the third round. The bar had emptied, just them and the neon hum. "To the field?" He glanced at his knee. "Can't. Desk job maybe, but that's not me." "No." She clarified. "To who you were. Before the limp." He pondered, beard scratching as he rubbed his chin. "Every day. But time doesn't reverse. You?" She
traced
her scar. "Sometimes. But that girl's gone. This one's tougher." "Tougher, yeah."
He agreed, but his eyes held sorrow
. "Miss the old you, though." "Me too." She whispered, the admission raw. They sat in
silence
, glasses empty. The hidden back room
loomed
behind the bookshelf, a remnant of his past life, but he didn't mention it. She didn't ask. Outside, rain pounded the streets, washing away nothing. Hours slipped by, words weaving through the dim light. She laughed at a memory—him teaching her basic codes over tea in her parents' kitchen. He grinned at her recounting a botched delivery that ended in a chase through Covent Garden. But beneath it, the
tension
simmered. Who they'd become stared back at who they'd been, the years a chasm neither could bridge fully. "You got grey in that hair." She noted, reaching out to tug a strand. "Age does that." He caught her hand, held it a beat too long. "You got steel in those eyes." "Survival does that." She pulled back, but
gently
. The clock ticked past midnight. Regrets surfaced in anecdotes—missed birthdays,
unspoken
farewells. He regretted not checking in after her uni started. She regretted ignoring his last message before Prague. Time's
weight
pressed,
unspoken
but
palpable
. "Ever wonder what if?"
He ventured, voice low
. "What if we'd stayed in touch?" She finished. "All the time." He poured one last round. "To what ifs." They drank, the burn a temporary balm. The bar felt smaller, the maps mocking their static lives. She stood eventually, coat dripping anew from the hook. "Don't be a stranger now." He said, limp hobbling him as he walked her to the door. "Won't."
She promised, but her eyes held doubt
. As she stepped out, the neon sign bathed her in green. He watched her ascend the stairs to the flat above, the one he'd never known was hers. The door shut behind him, leaving the bar empty save for
echoes
.
created_at
"2026-02-20T20:00:03.131Z"
2/20/2026, 8:00:03 PM
model
"x-ai/grok-4-07-09"
4/7/2009, 12:00:00 AM
app_id
182717
external_user
(null)
streamed
true
cancelled
false
latency
33772
moderation_latency
(null)
generation_time
122503
tokens_prompt
1094
tokens_completion
2683
native_tokens_prompt
1634
native_tokens_completion
3502
native_tokens_completion_images
0
native_tokens_reasoning
1138
native_tokens_cached
1633
num_media_prompt
(null)
num_input_audio_prompt
(null)
num_media_completion
0
num_search_results
(null)
origin
"https://ncbench.com/"
is_byok
false
finish_reason
"stop"
native_finish_reason
"completed"
usage
0.05375775
router
(null)
provider_responses
0
endpoint_id
"d40bef9d-6936-4c57-9749-bf7399de4a77"
id
"a5667cdd-8911-86b9-4263-a10964b5acdf"
is_byok
false
latency
152
model_permaslug
"x-ai/grok-4-07-09"
4/7/2009, 12:00:00 AM
provider_name
"xAI"
status
200
api_type
"completions"
id
"gen-1771617603-cMgF2Bx83Q7KDgNBdIXj"
upstream_id
"a5667cdd-8911-86b9-4263-a10964b5acdf"
total_cost
0.05375775
cache_discount
0.00367425
upstream_inference_cost
0
provider_name
"xAI"
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
35
adverbTagCount
1
adverbTags
0
"She pulled back [back]"
dialogueSentences
80
tagDensity
0.438
leniency
0.875
rawRatio
0.029
effectiveRatio
0.025
88.72%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
1773
totalAiIsmAdverbs
4
found
0
adverb
"softly"
count
1
1
adverb
"slightly"
count
1
2
adverb
"really"
count
1
3
adverb
"gently"
count
1
highlights
0
"softly"
1
"slightly"
2
"really"
3
"gently"
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0
"Blackwood"
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
23.86%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
1773
totalAiIsms
27
found
0
word
"flickered"
count
1
1
word
"scanned"
count
2
2
word
"gloom"
count
1
3
word
"weight"
count
3
4
word
"footsteps"
count
1
5
word
"silence"
count
3
6
word
"throbbed"
count
1
7
word
"reminder"
count
2
8
word
"traced"
count
2
9
word
"echoed"
count
1
10
word
"unspoken"
count
4
11
word
"tension"
count
2
12
word
"unraveling"
count
1
13
word
"loomed"
count
1
14
word
"palpable"
count
1
15
word
"echoes"
count
1
highlights
0
"flickered"
1
"scanned"
2
"gloom"
3
"weight"
4
"footsteps"
5
"silence"
6
"throbbed"
7
"reminder"
8
"traced"
9
"echoed"
10
"unspoken"
11
"tension"
12
"unraveling"
13
"loomed"
14
"palpable"
15
"echoes"
66.67%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
2
maxInWindow
2
found
0
label
"eyes widened/narrowed"
count
1
1
label
"jaw/fists clenched"
count
1
highlights
0
"eyes widened"
1
"fist clenched"
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
1
narrationSentences
125
matches
0
"d with disbelief"
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
1
narrationSentences
125
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
171
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
32
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
1756
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
26
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
15
wordCount
1120
uniqueNames
12
maxNameDensity
0.27
worstName
"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity
1
worstWindowName
"Silas"
discoveredNames
Raven
1
Nest
1
Soho
1
Blackwood
1
Carter
1
Rory
2
Brendan
1
Silas
3
London
1
Covent
1
Garden
1
Prague
1
persons
0
"Nest"
1
"Blackwood"
2
"Carter"
3
"Rory"
4
"Brendan"
5
"Silas"
places
0
"Raven"
1
"Soho"
2
"London"
3
"Covent"
4
"Garden"
5
"Prague"
globalScore
1
windowScore
1
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
96
glossingSentenceCount
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
0
per1kWords
0
wordCount
1756
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
171
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
69
mean
25.45
std
17
cv
0.668
sampleLengths
0
94
1
50
2
39
3
11
4
19
5
60
6
22
7
39
8
21
9
26
10
38
11
41
12
43
13
48
14
16
15
20
16
21
17
26
18
23
19
27
20
10
21
73
22
17
23
10
24
36
25
13
26
20
27
20
28
17
29
22
30
16
31
13
32
34
33
13
34
38
35
7
36
32
37
36
38
19
39
12
40
33
41
26
42
25
43
27
44
9
45
22
46
11
47
7
48
63
49
23
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
0
totalSentences
125
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
234
matches
(empty)
25.90%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
9
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
7
totalSentences
171
ratio
0.041
matches
0
"Aurora Carter—Rory, as she'd once insisted he call her—scanned the room."
1
"Up close, she looked different—sharper edges to her face, a wariness in those blue eyes that hadn't been there before."
2
"The bar's hum filled the silence—murmurs from the corner booth, the clink of ice in someone else's drink."
3
"Then life pulled them apart—his ops, her studies."
4
"All these months—years, really—she'd been right upstairs, and he hadn't known."
5
"She laughed at a memory—him teaching her basic codes over tea in her parents' kitchen."
6
"Regrets surfaced in anecdotes—missed birthdays, unspoken farewells."
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
961
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
17
adverbRatio
0.01768990634755463
lyAdverbCount
4
lyAdverbRatio
0.004162330905306972
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
171
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
171
mean
10.27
std
6.02
cv
0.587
sampleLengths
0
21
1
14
2
23
3
20
4
16
5
12
6
11
7
9
8
11
9
5
10
2
11
8
12
11
13
20
14
11
15
11
16
5
17
3
18
10
19
20
20
20
21
3
22
7
23
22
24
13
25
8
26
18
27
8
28
3
29
10
30
12
31
10
32
4
33
8
34
8
35
22
36
10
37
31
38
10
39
4
40
29
41
11
42
18
43
13
44
6
45
6
46
10
47
9
48
11
49
8
77.00%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
0
diversityRatio
0.4619883040935672
totalSentences
171
uniqueOpeners
79
27.78%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
1
totalSentences
120
matches
0
"Then life pulled them apart—his"
ratio
0.008
0.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
75
totalSentences
120
matches
0
"His hazel eyes scanned the"
1
"She paused, bright blue eyes"
2
"Her gaze landed on him."
3
"It hit the floor with"
4
"His slight limp betrayed him"
5
"She crossed the threshold, boots"
6
"He rounded the bar, ignoring"
7
"She slid onto a stool,"
8
"He poured two whiskeys without"
9
"She snorted, wrapping her hand"
10
"He leaned on the bar,"
11
"They clinked, the sound sharp"
12
"She took a sip, eyes"
13
"She corrected him, a faint"
14
"He swirled his whiskey, watching"
15
"His knee throbbed, a reminder"
16
"She tilted her head, studying"
17
"He set the glass down"
18
"Her eyes widened for a"
19
"He gestured to the room,"
ratio
0.625
1.67%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
110
totalSentences
120
matches
0
"The green neon sign flickered"
1
"Silas Blackwood leaned against the"
2
"His hazel eyes scanned the"
3
"Maps on the walls whispered"
4
"The door creaked open, letting"
5
"A woman stepped in, shaking"
6
"She paused, bright blue eyes"
7
"Aurora Carter—Rory, as she'd once"
8
"Her gaze landed on him."
9
"Silas straightened, the glass slipping"
10
"It hit the floor with"
11
"His slight limp betrayed him"
12
"The word escaped him, rough"
13
"She crossed the threshold, boots"
14
"Water pooled at her feet."
15
"He rounded the bar, ignoring"
16
"The crescent scar on her"
17
"Time had carved her into"
18
"She slid onto a stool,"
19
"He poured two whiskeys without"
ratio
0.917
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
0
totalSentences
120
matches
(empty)
ratio
0
65.64%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
37
technicalSentenceCount
4
matches
0
"Up close, she looked different—sharper edges to her face, a wariness in those blue eyes that hadn't been there before."
1
"He'd known her father, Brendan, back when Silas was fresh out of training, consulting on cases that blurred lines between law and espionage."
2
"She spoke of London nights, dodging traffic on her delivery bike, the anonymity that healed her."
3
"He shared scraps of ops, sanitized versions that hid the blood."
0.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
35
uselessAdditionCount
12
matches
0
"She slid, her voice steady, but her fingers drummed the bar top"
1
"She corrected, a faint smile tugging her lips"
2
"He gestured, the maps fluttering slightly in the draft"
3
"He countered, voice dropping"
4
"She stared, voice flat"
5
"She emphasized, but her tone softened"
6
"She leaned in, voice lowering"
7
"He scoffed, but his voice cracked"
8
"She shrugged, but her eyes betrayed more"
9
"He agreed, but his eyes held sorrow"
10
"He ventured, voice low"
11
"She promised, but her eyes held doubt"
12.50%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
14
fancyCount
11
fancyTags
0
"He poured (pour)"
1
"She corrected (correct)"
2
"He agreed (agree)"
3
"She admitted (admit)"
4
"He pressed (press)"
5
"She clarified (clarify)"
6
"He agreed (agree)"
7
"She whispered (whisper)"
8
"She laughed (laugh)"
9
"She noted (note)"
10
"She promised (promise)"
dialogueSentences
80
tagDensity
0.175
leniency
0.35
rawRatio
0.786
effectiveRatio
0.275
72.9907%