Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYA91BX71KCHAH1443B6DRN

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Duration:
19.8s
Cost:
$0.001494
Provider:
xAI

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn descended the rusted metal stairs into the bowels of the abandoned Tube station, her worn leather watch ticking steadily against her left wrist like a metronome counting down to some inevitable revelation. The air grew thick and stale, laced with the metallic tang of old rails and something sharper—ozone, perhaps, or the faint rot of forbidden things. Her brown eyes, sharp beneath the brim of her trench coat hood, scanned the dim expanse as she gripped the bone token in her pocket, its carved surface warm against her palm from the entry ritual she'd performed above ground. Camden's streets bustled obliviously overhead, but down here, beneath the cracked concrete canopy of what was once the Northern Line, the Veil Market pulsed with secrets. She'd gotten the tip from a snitch in the occult underbelly—a body, fresh and unnatural, dumped in one of the market's shadowed alcoves. The Metropolitan Police weren't supposed to know about places like this; officially, the station had been shuttered since the Blitz, its tunnels sealed with bureaucratic finality. But Quinn had eighteen years of decorated service under her belt, and losses like DS Morris three years back had taught her to chase shadows where others saw only walls. Her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair caught the faint glow of her flashlight as she moved with military precision, boots echoing softly on the uneven platform. The market wasn't in full swing tonight; it shifted locations every full moon, slinking like a living thing through London's forgotten veins. But remnants lingered: stalls shrouded in tattered black cloth, their wares—enchanted trinkets, vials of shimmering alchemical sludge—hastily abandoned. The air hummed with residual magic, a vibration that set her teeth on edge. Quinn's sharp jaw tightened as she rounded a corner, her beam cutting through the gloom to illuminate the scene. A man lay sprawled in a puddle of his own blood, his body twisted at an impossible angle against a graffiti-scarred pillar. Mid-forties, by the look of him, dressed in the threadbare finery of a market regular: a velvet waistcoat stained crimson, trousers caked in the grime of subterranean dealings. His eyes stared blankly at the vaulted ceiling, where bioluminescent fungi clung like forgotten stars. Knife wounds marred his chest—three precise slashes, deep enough to kill but not to mutilate. Around him, signs of a struggle: overturned crates spilling vials that fizzed and smoked on contact with the damp floor, a scattering of bone dice, and a faint scorch mark on the pillar, as if something had burned hot and fast. Quinn knelt beside the body, gloved hands hovering over the wounds without touching. The blood was still tacky, no more than two hours old. She noted the lack of defensive marks on his hands—clean nails, no scratches. Odd for a fight. Her gaze flicked to the stall behind him, its sign in faded Enochian script: "Rifts and Relics." Empty now, save for a bare pedestal where something valuable had clearly sat. "Detective Quinn," a voice called from the shadows, soft but steady, laced with the lilt of someone who'd spent too many nights poring over ancient tomes. Eva Kowalski emerged from behind a nearby archway, her curly red hair catching the flashlight's beam like embers. At 5'4", she looked almost swallowed by the cavernous space, her round glasses perched on a freckled nose, a worn leather satchel bulging with books slung over one shoulder. She tucked a stray curl behind her left ear, a nervous tic Quinn had come to recognize from their sporadic consultations. Eva wasn't police, but her gig at the British Museum's restricted archives made her invaluable for cases that veered into the esoteric—cases like this one. "Evie," Quinn acknowledged, rising with a nod. "You beat me here. How?" Eva adjusted her satchel, green eyes darting to the body. "One of my contacts in the archives got wind of the disturbance. Said it felt like a rift echo—supernatural backlash. I used a shadow key to slip in through a side tunnel. British Museum perks." She stepped closer, careful not to disturb the scene, her freckled cheeks paling slightly in the dim light. "This is bad, Harlow. The Veil Market doesn't tolerate outsiders, and you're definitely one." Quinn ignored the warning, her focus sharpening on the evidence. "Walk me through what you see. Unofficially, of course." Eva crouched, peering at the wounds without gloves—researcher habits died hard. "Robbery gone wrong, I'd wager. Look at the pedestal— that's where the Veil Compass was displayed. Crafted by a Shade artisan, small brass thing with a verdigris patina, face etched with protective sigils. Needle points to the nearest supernatural rift or portal. Priceless for anyone chasing thresholds between worlds. Vendor probably caught the thief in the act, hence the stabbing." Quinn's brow furrowed. The compass angle fit; she'd heard whispers of it in her investigations into that clique of suspected occult enthusiasts—Aurora and her circle, always one step ahead. But something nagged. She shone her light on the scorch mark: not random charring, but a deliberate pattern—sigils, faint and interlocking, like wards hastily drawn. "Stabbing implies rage or panic," she said, voice low and measured. "But these cuts are too clean. Surgical, almost. And no blood on the pillar or crates. If he was fighting back, there'd be spray." Eva tilted her head, glasses glinting. "Maybe the thief had a enchanted blade—something that cauterizes as it cuts. Market's full of those. Alchemical residue could explain the lack of spatter." She gestured to a nearby vial, its contents now evaporated into a hazy mist. "Banned substances like rift-dust; inhales it, and you're seeing portals where there aren't any. Disorients the victim, makes the kill easy." Quinn straightened, her military bearing evident in the crisp line of her shoulders. She paced the perimeter, boots scuffing against the grit-strewn floor. The market's ambient hum seemed to grow louder, or perhaps it was just her pulse. She examined the body again, noting the man's left hand: fingers splayed, as if reaching for something dropped. No weapon nearby, but embedded in his palm—a sliver of brass, verdigris-flecked. She extracted it carefully with tweezers, holding it to the light. Part of the compass casing, etched with a partial sigil. "Compass fragment," Eva confirmed, leaning in. "He must've grabbed it during the struggle. Thief took the rest—probably panicked and fled through a rift." Quinn's mind raced, piecing it together. The wounds, the scorch mark, the fragment. "No," she murmured, more to herself than Eva. "This isn't a robbery. Look at the angle of the slashes—from above, downward. Killer was taller, stronger, and the victim didn't resist because... he couldn't." She pointed to the man's neck: a faint puncture, easy to miss amid the blood, like a needle prick. "Sedative? But in the market? Too risky." Eva frowned, tucking her hair again. "Or a Shade toxin. Quick paralysis, then the knife. Fits the supernatural angle—thieves here don't play by human rules." Quinn shook her head, her sharp jaw set. She swept her light across the floor, illuminating a trail of droplets—not blood, but a silvery iridescence, trailing toward a shadowed alcove. "Follow that," she instructed Eva, who nodded and trailed after her. The alcove concealed a makeshift rift: a shimmering tear in the air, no wider than a door, edges fraying like smoke. The Veil Compass would've pointed straight to it, Quinn realized. But the droplets led into it, vanishing at the threshold. She knelt, scraping a sample into an evidence vial. The substance gleamed, viscous and otherworldly—ectoplasm? No, something engineered. "Thief went through," Eva said, voice hushed. "Rifts like this pop up in the market, temporary portals to shadow realms. But why kill? Compass theft could've been silent." Quinn's eyes narrowed, deduction crystallizing. "Because it wasn't theft for profit. This was staged." She gestured back to the body. "The fragment in his hand—deliberately left. The sigils on the pillar? Not defensive wards; they're summoning marks, inverted. Someone wanted to draw attention, make it look like a market hit. But the real play..." She followed the logic thread, her voice gaining edge. "The victim's eyes—dilated, not from fear, but glamour. He wasn't seeing the killer; he was compelled to stage his own death." Eva's green eyes widened behind her glasses. "A pact gone wrong? Or... insider job. The vendor's no victim; he's the patsy." Quinn nodded, the pieces slotting into place with grim satisfaction. "Exactly. The 'thief' was an accomplice—tall, precise, used a paralytic dart from the shadows. They killed him to tie up loose ends, left the compass piece as bait to lure investigators like me. But I see it now: the scorch mark's not from a blade; it's residue from a rift stabilizer, the kind used to anchor portals long-term. This wasn't random violence; it's a gateway operation. Someone's using the market to smuggle bigger than trinkets—maybe entities, or worse." Eva swallowed, satchel strap twisting in her grip. "Harlow, if you're right, we're standing on the edge of something massive. The clique—" "Don't say it," Quinn cut her off, her bearing unyielding. "But yeah. Aurora's friends have been too quiet lately. This is their trail." She pocketed the brass sliver, sealing the vial of iridescent fluid. The rift hummed, threatening to widen, and Quinn felt the weight of three years' ghosts pressing in—DS Morris, lost to unexplained shadows. Not again. As they backed away, the market's fungi pulsed brighter, as if awakening to their intrusion. Quinn's watch ticked on, a reminder that time in places like this bent strangely. She'd call in a discreet team, seal the rift before it swallowed more secrets. But the deduction burned in her: the evidence hadn't added up because it wasn't meant to. It was a lure, and she'd taken the hook—but now, she was reeling in the line. Eva glanced at her, admiration flickering in her eyes. "You always see the cracks others miss." Quinn grunted, holstering her light. "That's why I'm still here." The stairs awaited, leading back to the rational world above, but the Veil's chill clung to her coat. The mystery wasn't solved—not yet—but the first thread had unraveled, pointing deeper into the dark.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags29
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.707
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
88.41% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1725
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"carefully"
count1
3
adverb"deliberately"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"slightly"
2"carefully"
3"deliberately"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
42.03% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1725
totalAiIsms20
found
0
word"scanned"
count1
1
word"pulsed"
count2
2
word"echoing"
count1
3
word"gloom"
count1
4
word"velvet"
count1
5
word"flicked"
count1
6
word"lilt"
count1
7
word"echo"
count1
8
word"etched"
count2
9
word"furrowed"
count1
10
word"measured"
count1
11
word"glinting"
count1
12
word"pulse"
count1
13
word"raced"
count1
14
word"otherworldly"
count1
15
word"weight"
count1
16
word"reminder"
count1
17
word"chill"
count1
highlights
0"scanned"
1"pulsed"
2"echoing"
3"gloom"
4"velvet"
5"flicked"
6"lilt"
7"echo"
8"etched"
9"furrowed"
10"measured"
11"glinting"
12"pulse"
13"raced"
14"otherworldly"
15"weight"
16"reminder"
17"chill"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count2
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences89
matches(empty)
62.60% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences89
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"look"
2"see"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences90
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen92
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1691
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions57
wordCount1348
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity1.19
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Harlow2
Quinn16
Tube1
Northern1
Line1
Veil5
Market3
Metropolitan1
Police1
Blitz1
Morris1
London1
Enochian1
Empty1
Eva12
Kowalski1
Museum1
Compass3
Shade1
Aurora2
Thief1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Veil"
3"Market"
4"Morris"
5"Eva"
6"Kowalski"
7"Compass"
8"Aurora"
places
0"Line"
1"London"
globalScore0.907
windowScore0.833
39.71% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences68
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"felt like a rift echo—supernatural back"
1"as if reaching for something dropped"
2"as if awakening to their intrusion"
22.59% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.774
wordCount1691
matches
0"not random charring, but a deliberate pattern"
1"not blood, but a silvery iridescence, trailing toward a shadowed alcove"
2"not from fear, but glamour"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences90
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs27
mean62.63
std33.67
cv0.538
sampleLengths
0126
1104
273
3121
471
5119
612
777
819
971
1089
1165
1289
1323
1472
1525
1641
1759
1828
1984
2021
2188
2222
2358
2475
2516
2643
93.44% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences89
matches
0"been shuttered"
1"was displayed"
2"was compelled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs243
matches
0"was fighting"
1"wasn't seeing"
2"was reeling"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount23
semicolonCount9
flaggedSentences28
totalSentences90
ratio0.311
matches
0"The air grew thick and stale, laced with the metallic tang of old rails and something sharper—ozone, perhaps, or the faint rot of forbidden things."
1"She'd gotten the tip from a snitch in the occult underbelly—a body, fresh and unnatural, dumped in one of the market's shadowed alcoves."
2"The Metropolitan Police weren't supposed to know about places like this; officially, the station had been shuttered since the Blitz, its tunnels sealed with bureaucratic finality."
3"The market wasn't in full swing tonight; it shifted locations every full moon, slinking like a living thing through London's forgotten veins."
4"But remnants lingered: stalls shrouded in tattered black cloth, their wares—enchanted trinkets, vials of shimmering alchemical sludge—hastily abandoned."
5"Knife wounds marred his chest—three precise slashes, deep enough to kill but not to mutilate."
6"She noted the lack of defensive marks on his hands—clean nails, no scratches."
7"Said it felt like a rift echo—supernatural backlash."
8"Eva crouched, peering at the wounds without gloves—researcher habits died hard. \"Robbery gone wrong, I'd wager."
9"Look at the pedestal— that's where the Veil Compass was displayed."
10"Quinn's brow furrowed. The compass angle fit; she'd heard whispers of it in her investigations into that clique of suspected occult enthusiasts—Aurora and her circle, always one step ahead. But something nagged. She shone her light on the scorch mark: not random charring, but a deliberate pattern—sigils, faint and interlocking, like wards hastily drawn. \"Stabbing implies rage or panic,\" she said, voice low and measured. \"But these cuts are too clean."
11"Alchemical residue could explain the lack of spatter.\" She gestured to a nearby vial, its contents now evaporated into a hazy mist. \"Banned substances like rift-dust; inhales it, and you're seeing portals where there aren't any."
12"Quinn straightened, her military bearing evident in the crisp line of her shoulders. She paced the perimeter, boots scuffing against the grit-strewn floor. The market's ambient hum seemed to grow louder, or perhaps it was just her pulse. She examined the body again, noting the man's left hand: fingers splayed, as if reaching for something dropped. No weapon nearby, but embedded in his palm—a sliver of brass, verdigris-flecked. She extracted it carefully with tweezers, holding it to the light. Part of the compass casing, etched with a partial sigil."
13"Thief took the rest—probably panicked and fled through a rift.\""
14"Look at the angle of the slashes—from above, downward."
15"Fits the supernatural angle—thieves here don't play by human rules.\""
16"Quinn shook her head, her sharp jaw set. She swept her light across the floor, illuminating a trail of droplets—not blood, but a silvery iridescence, trailing toward a shadowed alcove. \"Follow that,\" she instructed Eva, who nodded and trailed after her."
17"The alcove concealed a makeshift rift: a shimmering tear in the air, no wider than a door, edges fraying like smoke. The Veil Compass would've pointed straight to it, Quinn realized. But the droplets led into it, vanishing at the threshold. She knelt, scraping a sample into an evidence vial. The substance gleamed, viscous and otherworldly—ectoplasm? No, something engineered."
18"This was staged.\" She gestured back to the body. \"The fragment in his hand—deliberately left."
19"Not defensive wards; they're summoning marks, inverted."
20"But the real play...\" She followed the logic thread, her voice gaining edge. \"The victim's eyes—dilated, not from fear, but glamour."
21"He wasn't seeing the killer; he was compelled to stage his own death.\""
22"The vendor's no victim; he's the patsy.\""
23"But I see it now: the scorch mark's not from a blade; it's residue from a rift stabilizer, the kind used to anchor portals long-term."
24"This wasn't random violence; it's a gateway operation."
25"Someone's using the market to smuggle bigger than trinkets—maybe entities, or worse.\""
26"As they backed away, the market's fungi pulsed brighter, as if awakening to their intrusion. Quinn's watch ticked on, a reminder that time in places like this bent strangely. She'd call in a discreet team, seal the rift before it swallowed more secrets. But the deduction burned in her: the evidence hadn't added up because it wasn't meant to. It was a lure, and she'd taken the hook—but now, she was reeling in the line."
27"Quinn grunted, holstering her light. \"That's why I'm still here.\" The stairs awaited, leading back to the rational world above, but the Veil's chill clung to her coat. The mystery wasn't solved—not yet—but the first thread had unraveled, pointing deeper into the dark."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount930
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount33
adverbRatio0.035483870967741936
lyAdverbCount16
lyAdverbRatio0.017204301075268817
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences90
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences90
mean18.79
std16.81
cv0.895
sampleLengths
035
125
240
326
423
526
630
725
822
918
1014
1119
1222
1328
1415
1515
1641
1713
1811
1913
204
2130
2226
2318
2475
2511
261
2722
288
2912
3025
3110
3216
333
3416
3511
3617
379
387
3911
4071
412
428
438
4418
454
4636
477
4889
4913
88.89% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.5333333333333333
totalSentences90
uniqueOpeners48
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences80
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount9
totalSentences80
matches
0"Her brown eyes, sharp beneath"
1"She'd gotten the tip from"
2"Her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair"
3"His eyes stared blankly at"
4"She noted the lack of"
5"Her gaze flicked to the"
6"I used a shadow key"
7"He wasn't seeing the killer;"
8"They killed him to tie"
ratio0.113
97.50% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount58
totalSentences80
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn descended the"
1"The air grew thick and"
2"Her brown eyes, sharp beneath"
3"Camden's streets bustled obliviously overhead,"
4"She'd gotten the tip from"
5"The Metropolitan Police weren't supposed"
6"Her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair"
7"The market wasn't in full"
8"The air hummed with residual"
9"Quinn's sharp jaw tightened as"
10"A man lay sprawled in"
11"His eyes stared blankly at"
12"Knife wounds marred his chest—three"
13"Quinn knelt beside the body,"
14"The blood was still tacky,"
15"She noted the lack of"
16"Her gaze flicked to the"
17"a voice called from the"
18"Eva Kowalski emerged from behind"
19"Quinn acknowledged, rising with a"
ratio0.725
62.50% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences80
matches
0"If he was fighting back,"
ratio0.013
53.57% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences32
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"The air hummed with residual magic, a vibration that set her teeth on edge."
1"Around him, signs of a struggle: overturned crates spilling vials that fizzed and smoked on contact with the damp floor, a scattering of bone dice, and a faint …"
2"Quinn straightened, her military bearing evident in the crisp line of her shoulders. She paced the perimeter, boots scuffing against the grit-strewn floor. The …"
3"As they backed away, the market's fungi pulsed brighter, as if awakening to their intrusion. Quinn's watch ticked on, a reminder that time in places like this b…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"Her gaze flicked, its sign in faded Enochian script:"
1"she said, voice low and measured"
2"she murmured, more to herself than Eva"
3"Eva said, voice hushed"
4"Quinn cut, her bearing unyielding"
52.44% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"Quinn acknowledged (acknowledge)"
1"Alchemical residue could (could)"
2"Eva confirmed (confirm)"
3"Quinn grunted (grunt)"
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.146
leniency0.293
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.195
75.1222%