Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYAB9BHX4HX7RV8DT48BV8M

Run Details

Duration:
2m 46s
Cost:
$0.014641
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rory pushed brambles aside with a scuffed work boot, the Golden Empress restaurant logo on her jacket catching the late autumn sun. Her straight black shoulder-length hair stuck to the sweat on her neck, and she fidgeted with the silver chain of the Heartstone Pendant tucked under her collar—thumbnail-sized deep crimson gem, faint inner glow, a gift from a stranger who’d pressed it into her hand after a delivery run to a derelict warehouse last week. Nyx trailed at her heels, a humanoid shadow that shifted between incorporeal wisp and solid silhouette, their faintly glowing violet eyes cutting through the dappled shade of Richmond Park’s oak trees. “This is foolish,” Nyx’s voice whispered, carried on the wind as if filtered through dead leaves. “Seers trade riddles for regrets. Your flat above Silas’ bar is safer than chasing ghostly prophecies.” Rory’s bright blue eyes darted to the gnarled oak standing stones ahead—ancient, their bark carved with faint, twisting marks she couldn’t place. “Eva said Isolde’s the only one who can explain why this thing pulses when I pass abandoned subway tunnels,” she said, lifting her left wrist to brush the small crescent scar there—childhood accident with a broken teacup, her father’s barrister papers scattered across the kitchen table that day, her mother’s Welsh teacher’s voice softening the sting of the cut. She’d fled Cardiff and her Pre-Law studies six months ago, running from Evan’s shattered beer bottles and sharp words, Eva’s text (“London’s waiting—come crash with me”) her lifeline. The delivery job at Yu-Fei Cheung’s restaurant paid just enough for rent, but the pendant’s mysterious pulse had turned her quiet nights above the bar into sleepless hours of speculation. Then Isolde appeared, sitting on a mossy stone at the center of the standing stones, no footprints marring the dew-dusted grass around her. Her silver waist-length hair cascaded over her ethereal shoulders, pale lavender eyes fixed on Rory’s pendant as if she could see its glow through the jacket fabric. “The scar that bleeds memory meets the stone that binds worlds,” she said, her voice like wind through chimes, light but unyielding. “You carry a piece of the amber sky.” Rory paused, her cool-headed intelligence kicking in. “Amber sky? What does that mean?” Nyx’s silhouette stretched, solidifying just enough to reveal the line of their jaw. “Dymas,” they whispered. “The Gluttony realm of Hel—its sky is warm amber. The pendant’s origin, perhaps?” They were once Aldric, a human sorcerer trapped between realms in 1643 during a failed summoning, and the name Dymas made their shadow form flicker, a reminder of the helbound souls they’d once seen slipping through rifts. Isolde’s lips curved into a faint smile, and she glided to the edge of the standing stones, no sound of footsteps disturbing the grass. “Cross the oak’s bond, and the veil between what is and what was will thin,” she riddled. “But beware: an hour here is a breath or a lifetime out there.” Rory glanced at her mother’s vintage watch, its leather strap cracked from years of use. 3:17 PM. She stepped over the base of a standing stone, and the watch’s hands froze. When she blinked, they spun forward three hours, then back ten minutes, the ticking restarting in a frantic staccato. Nyx followed, their solid form reaching 6’2” as they stepped into the clearing beyond, their violet eyes widening at the sight before them. The Fae Grove burst with life that defied late November. Wildflowers bloomed in a riot—crimson poppies, snow-white daisies, deep blue bluebells—all tangled together, their petals glistening with dew that never evaporated. The air smelled like honey and crushed mint, and the sky hung low, a soft iridescent blue that didn’t match the overcast gray of Richmond Park outside. Rory knelt, her work jacket brushing the flowers, and touched a clover with four leaves; it glowed faintly under her fingers, the light seeping into her skin like a warm breath. “It’s impossible,” she murmured. “Wildflowers don’t bloom in winter.” “Time is a toy here,” Nyx’s voice whispered, their shadow form contracting as they leaned against a standing stone. “The Grove exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm—its seasons feed on wonder, not the sun’s cycle.” Their shadow flickered again, a ghost of Aldric’s failed ritual echoing in the shift. Rory stood, brushing flower petals from her jeans, and the Heartstone Pendant began to pulse—warm, insistent, its deep crimson glow brightening until it cast a faint red hue on her collar. She gasped, yanking it from under her jacket, the silver chain digging into her neck. “It’s never done this before,” she said, her cool composure wavering for a split second. Nyx’s silhouette tensed. “Hel portal,” they whispered, their voice sharp with warning. “The pendant pulses near rifts between Earth and Hel. Aldric’s old notes spoke of such artifacts from Dymas, carried by helbound souls who escape the vineyards of excess—chefs contracted from Earth to cook for Belphegor’s grand feasts.” Isolde glided over, her silver hair catching the Grove’s iridescent light, and nodded. “I cannot lie,” she said, her Fae compulsion tying her words to truth, “but I can lead you to the edge of the story. The amber sky’s children crave the Fae’s breath—they slip through the Veil’s winter weakening, when it’s thinnest, to barter for freedom. The stranger who gave you the pendant was a helbound soul, a chef from Dymas’ vineyards who escaped a portal near your Cardiff flat’s old subway tunnel.” Rory’s eyes widened. Her childhood flat in Cardiff had been above an abandoned subway tunnel, the same one where she’d cut her wrist on the teacup—during a winter solstice, when the wind had howled so loud she’d thought the walls would cave in. “My accident,” she said, touching the crescent scar. “That was during a winter solstice. The Veil was weak then?” Isolde’s lavender eyes softened. “The scar is a mark,” she riddled. “It’s the Veil’s breath touching your skin, a reminder that you’ve always been closer to the rifts than you think. The chef left the pendant to warn you—Dymas’ Prince Belphegor is sending helbound souls to find Fae-touched portals, to steal the Grove’s magic for his gluttonous feasts. He craves the Fae’s time-bending power to make his feasts last forever.” Nyx’s shadow form flared, their violet eyes blazing. “Belphegor’s competitions force helbound souls to cook for his amusement,” they whispered. “If he finds this portal, he’ll drain the Grove dry to feed his excess.” Rory’s cool-headed thinking kicked back in, and she folded her arms. “What can I do? I’m a delivery person, not a soldier.” Isolde glided to a mossy rock and picked up a slender, leaf-shaped dagger, its moonsilver blade catching the Grove’s light. It was cold to the touch when she pressed it into Rory’s hand, the metal sending a shiver up her arm. “This Fae-Forged Blade cuts through magical wards, and it’s deadly to demons,” she said. “A gift for the one who carries the amber sky’s stone. It will protect you when the rifts open wider.” The dagger’s frostbit edge pressed into Rory’s palm, a tangible reminder of the Fae’s exiled power—Isolde had been cast out of the Courts for sharing visions with mortals, and this blade was a piece of the home she’d lost. Rory turned the dagger over, her fingers wrapping around the hilt. The cold seeped into her bones, but it felt like an anchor—something solid in a world of shifting time and riddles. “Why me?” she asked. Isolde’s voice softened, her riddles fading for a moment. “You fled excess once—Evan’s controlling rage, your father’s insistence on Pre-Law. You know how to outthink gluttony’s pull. The Veil chose you because you don’t crave more than you need.” She paused, then added, “But beware: the pendant’s pulse will grow stronger as Belphegor’s portals multiply. The winter solstice is coming, and the Veil will weaken again.” Rory glanced at her mother’s watch. It now read 5:23 PM, but when she pulled her phone from her jacket pocket—she’d forgotten to turn it off—the lock screen showed that two days had passed since she’d left her flat above Silas’ bar. Nyx’s shadow form contracted, and they whispered, “We need to leave. Your delivery shift is long over—Yu-Fei will be wondering where you are. The bar’s regulars will ask about your absence, too.” Rory nodded, tucking the dagger into her jacket pocket and the pendant back under her collar. She stepped back over the standing stone, and the watch’s hands reset to 3:18 PM, the ticking steady again. The wildflowers faded from her sight, replaced by the bare brambles of late autumn, and Isolde’s form vanished, leaving no trace of her presence save for the faint smell of honey in the air. As they walked back toward the park’s exit, Rory touched the crescent scar on her wrist, then the dagger in her pocket. The Heartstone Pendant pulsed faintly under her collar, a quiet warning of the amber sky’s children waiting beyond the Veil. She was a delivery person from Cardiff, a girl who’d fled an abusive ex and a life she didn’t want—but now, she carried a blade from the Fae, a stone from Hel, and a riddle that tied her childhood scar to the fate of two realms. The wind picked up, carrying Nyx’s whispery voice: “The Veil’s weakening is coming. We’ll need to be ready.” Rory’s bright blue eyes fixed on the subway tunnel entrance in the distance, and she nodded—cool-headed, intelligent, already spinning the first threads of an out-of-the-box plan to outwit a prince of gluttony.
created_at"2026-02-20T20:02:36.541Z" 2/20/2026, 8:02:36 PM
model"bytedance-seed/seed-1.6-20250625"
app_id182717
external_user(null)
streamedtrue
cancelledfalse
latency1927
moderation_latency(null)
generation_time165939
tokens_prompt1590
tokens_completion7796
native_tokens_prompt1738
native_tokens_completion7103
native_tokens_completion_images(null)
native_tokens_reasoning4828
native_tokens_cached0
num_media_prompt(null)
num_input_audio_prompt(null)
num_media_completion0
num_search_results(null)
origin"https://ncbench.com/"
is_byokfalse
finish_reason"stop"
native_finish_reason"stop"
usage0.0146405
router(null)
provider_responses
0
endpoint_id"d85c3862-4e0d-4f8d-955b-babc62f98124"
id"02177161775676440df8d8926005c369421892d4819382e164c3f"
is_byokfalse
latency1927
model_permaslug"bytedance-seed/seed-1.6-20250625"
provider_name"Seed"
status200
api_type"completions"
id"gen-1771617756-DhCRJ7UyEZK08sJoR0B8"
upstream_id"02177161775676440df8d8926005c369421892d4819382e164c3f"
total_cost0.0146405
cache_discount(null)
upstream_inference_cost0
provider_name"Seed"

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags30
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"they walked back [back]"
dialogueSentences36
tagDensity0.833
leniency1
rawRatio0.033
effectiveRatio0.033
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1630
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
53.99% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1630
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"shattered"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count3
2
word"flicker"
count1
3
word"reminder"
count3
4
word"footsteps"
count1
5
word"glistening"
count1
6
word"flickered"
count1
7
word"echoing"
count1
8
word"wavering"
count1
9
word"tangible"
count1
10
word"pulsed"
count1
highlights
0"shattered"
1"pulse"
2"flicker"
3"reminder"
4"footsteps"
5"glistening"
6"flickered"
7"echoing"
8"wavering"
9"tangible"
10"pulsed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences51
matches(empty)
30.81% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences51
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"know"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences55
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen102
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1595
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
90.53% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions77
wordCount1177
uniqueNames27
maxNameDensity1.19
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Golden1
Empress1
Heartstone3
Pendant3
Richmond2
Park2
Rory14
Welsh1
Cardiff3
Pre-Law1
Evan1
Eva1
Yu-Fei1
Cheung1
Isolde7
Aldric3
Dymas2
Fae5
Grove3
November1
Earth1
Belphegor2
Veil5
Nyx8
Yu2
Fei2
Hel1
persons
0"Pendant"
1"Rory"
2"Evan"
3"Eva"
4"Cheung"
5"Isolde"
6"Aldric"
7"Dymas"
8"Belphegor"
9"Veil"
10"Nyx"
11"Fei"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Cardiff"
3"Fae"
4"Grove"
5"Earth"
6"Yu"
7"Hel"
globalScore0.905
windowScore1
41.30% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences46
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"smelled like honey and crushed mint, and t"
1"felt like an anchor—something solid in"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1595
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences55
matches(empty)
93.26% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs22
mean72.5
std34.54
cv0.476
sampleLengths
0139
1139
280
313
466
554
673
798
853
961
1049
1185
1262
1370
1434
1522
16114
1736
1866
1974
2069
21138
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences51
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs201
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount17
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences13
totalSentences55
ratio0.236
matches
0"Her straight black shoulder-length hair stuck to the sweat on her neck, and she fidgeted with the silver chain of the Heartstone Pendant tucked under her collar—thumbnail-sized deep crimson gem, faint inner glow, a gift from a stranger who’d pressed it into her hand after a delivery run to a derelict warehouse last week."
1"Rory’s bright blue eyes darted to the gnarled oak standing stones ahead—ancient, their bark carved with faint, twisting marks she couldn’t place."
2"“Eva said Isolde’s the only one who can explain why this thing pulses when I pass abandoned subway tunnels,” she said, lifting her left wrist to brush the small crescent scar there—childhood accident with a broken teacup, her father’s barrister papers scattered across the kitchen table that day, her mother’s Welsh teacher’s voice softening the sting of the cut."
3"The Fae Grove burst with life that defied late November. Wildflowers bloomed in a riot—crimson poppies, snow-white daisies, deep blue bluebells—all tangled together, their petals glistening with dew that never evaporated. The air smelled like honey and crushed mint, and the sky hung low, a soft iridescent blue that didn’t match the overcast gray of Richmond Park outside. Rory knelt, her work jacket brushing the flowers, and touched a clover with four leaves; it glowed faintly under her fingers, the light seeping into her skin like a warm breath. “It’s impossible,” she murmured. “Wildflowers don’t bloom in winter.”"
4"Rory stood, brushing flower petals from her jeans, and the Heartstone Pendant began to pulse—warm, insistent, its deep crimson glow brightening until it cast a faint red hue on her collar. She gasped, yanking it from under her jacket, the silver chain digging into her neck. “It’s never done this before,” she said, her cool composure wavering for a split second."
5"Aldric’s old notes spoke of such artifacts from Dymas, carried by helbound souls who escape the vineyards of excess—chefs contracted from Earth to cook for Belphegor’s grand feasts.”"
6"The amber sky’s children crave the Fae’s breath—they slip through the Veil’s winter weakening, when it’s thinnest, to barter for freedom."
7"Rory’s eyes widened. Her childhood flat in Cardiff had been above an abandoned subway tunnel, the same one where she’d cut her wrist on the teacup—during a winter solstice, when the wind had howled so loud she’d thought the walls would cave in. “My accident,” she said, touching the crescent scar. “That was during a winter solstice."
8"The chef left the pendant to warn you—Dymas’ Prince Belphegor is sending helbound souls to find Fae-touched portals, to steal the Grove’s magic for his gluttonous feasts."
9"Rory turned the dagger over, her fingers wrapping around the hilt. The cold seeped into her bones, but it felt like an anchor—something solid in a world of shifting time and riddles. “Why me?” she asked."
10"Rory glanced at her mother’s watch. It now read 5:23 PM, but when she pulled her phone from her jacket pocket—she’d forgotten to turn it off—the lock screen showed that two days had passed since she’d left her flat above Silas’ bar. Nyx’s shadow form contracted, and they whispered, “We need to leave."
11"Your delivery shift is long over—Yu-Fei will be wondering where you are."
12"As they walked back toward the park’s exit, Rory touched the crescent scar on her wrist, then the dagger in her pocket. The Heartstone Pendant pulsed faintly under her collar, a quiet warning of the amber sky’s children waiting beyond the Veil. She was a delivery person from Cardiff, a girl who’d fled an abusive ex and a life she didn’t want—but now, she carried a blade from the Fae, a stone from Hel, and a riddle that tied her childhood scar to the fate of two realms. The wind picked up, carrying Nyx’s whispery voice: “The Veil’s weakening is coming."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount843
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"slender, leaf-shaped dagger,"
adverbCount14
adverbRatio0.0166073546856465
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.0011862396204033216
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences55
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences55
mean29
std21.87
cv0.754
sampleLengths
022
154
231
316
416
522
659
728
830
923
1027
1122
128
137
146
1513
163
1750
1824
1917
2013
2115
222
2314
2419
2523
2698
2753
2861
2921
3028
3137
3221
3327
3457
355
3631
3727
3812
3934
4015
417
4266
4348
4436
4520
467
4728
4811
4953
72.12% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.45454545454545453
totalSentences55
uniqueOpeners25
69.44% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences48
matches
0"Then Isolde appeared, sitting on"
ratio0.021
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount13
totalSentences48
matches
0"Her straight black shoulder-length hair"
1"she said, lifting her left"
2"She’d fled Cardiff and her"
3"Her silver waist-length hair cascaded"
4"she said, her voice like"
5"They were once Aldric, a"
6"She stepped over the base"
7"He craves the Fae’s time-bending"
8"I’m a delivery person, not"
9"It will protect you when"
10"You know how to outthink"
11"Your delivery shift is long"
12"We’ll need to be"
ratio0.271
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount45
totalSentences48
matches
0"Rory pushed brambles aside with"
1"Her straight black shoulder-length hair"
2"Nyx trailed at her heels,"
3"Nyx’s voice whispered, carried on"
4"Rory’s bright blue eyes darted"
5"she said, lifting her left"
6"She’d fled Cardiff and her"
7"The delivery job at Yu-Fei"
8"Her silver waist-length hair cascaded"
9"she said, her voice like"
10"Rory paused, her cool-headed intelligence"
11"Nyx’s silhouette stretched, solidifying just"
12"They were once Aldric, a"
13"Isolde’s lips curved into a"
14"Rory glanced at her mother’s"
15"She stepped over the base"
16"Nyx followed, their solid form"
17"The Fae Grove burst with"
18"Nyx’s voice whispered, their shadow"
19"Rory stood, brushing flower petals"
ratio0.938
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences48
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences15
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Her straight black shoulder-length hair stuck to the sweat on her neck, and she fidgeted with the silver chain of the Heartstone Pendant tucked under her collar…"
1"Nyx trailed at her heels, a humanoid shadow that shifted between incorporeal wisp and solid silhouette, their faintly glowing violet eyes cutting through the da…"
2"Her silver waist-length hair cascaded over her ethereal shoulders, pale lavender eyes fixed on Rory’s pendant as if she could see its glow through the jacket fa…"
41.67% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags30
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"Nyx followed, their solid form reaching 6’2"
1"she said, her cool composure wavering for a split second"
2"they whispered, their voice sharp with warning"
3"she said, her Fae compulsion tying her words to truth,"
4"The bar’s regulars will, too"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"Nyx’s voice whispered (whisper)"
1"they whispered (whisper)"
2"Nyx’s voice whispered (whisper)"
3"Nyx’s silhouette tensed. (tense)"
4"old notes spoke (speak)"
5"The bar’s regulars will (will)"
dialogueSentences36
tagDensity0.222
leniency0.444
rawRatio0.75
effectiveRatio0.333
72.9043%