Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYABY3Q0AZC0S3RAWHTNM0T

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Duration:
10.3s
Cost:
$0.001081
Provider:
Mistral

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The neon green sign of *The Raven’s Nest* flickered like a dying heartbeat, its glow casting jagged shadows across the wet pavement. Rory Carter wiped rain from her forehead with the back of her hand, the scent of damp wool and stale beer already clinging to her as she pushed through the door. The bell above jingled, but no one looked up from their drinks. Then she saw him. Silas Blackwood sat in his usual corner booth, the one with the cracked leather and the view of the back alley. His auburn hair, now streaked with silver, was combed back neatly, but his hazel eyes—sharp as ever—locked onto hers the moment she stepped inside. A slow, knowing smile curled his lips. Rory’s stomach twisted. She hadn’t expected this. The last time she’d seen him, he’d been leaning against the hood of her father’s old Volvo, laughing as she swore she’d never set foot in London again. That was before Evan. Before the flat above his bar became her sanctuary. Before she learned the weight of a name like *Silas Blackwood*. She hesitated by the bar, fingers tightening around the strap of her delivery bag. The bartender, a wiry man with a shaved head, slid a pint toward her without a word. She didn’t take it. Silas stood, his limp more pronounced than she remembered. The years had etched lines around his mouth, but his posture still carried that quiet authority, like a man who’d spent a lifetime giving orders and never taking them back. “Rory,” he said. Not a question. Not an invitation. She exhaled, the word sticking in her throat. “Si.” The air between them hummed with everything unsaid. The way he’d slipped out of her life after Prague. The way she’d never asked why. The way she’d spent the last three years pretending she didn’t still think about him sometimes, in the dead of night, when the city outside her window was too loud and too quiet all at once. Silas gestured to the booth. “Sit. Or don’t. I’m not stopping you.” She did. The leather creaked under her, the scent of old wood and whiskey wrapping around her like a ghost. Silas slid into the seat across from her, his signet ring catching the dim light. “You look well,” he said, though his eyes did the opposite. Rory traced the rim of her glass with her thumb, the scar on her wrist catching the light. “You too.” A beat. Then, quieter: “Liar.” She didn’t deny it. Silas leaned back, his fingers tapping once against the table. “Heard you were working for Yu-Fei.” “News travels fast.” “In this city?” He smirked. “It’s the only thing that moves faster than the Underground.” Rory took a slow sip of her drink, the bitterness grounding her. “You still running your little network?” His smile didn’t reach his eyes. “Still running *something*.” She should’ve left it there. Should’ve laughed, changed the subject, pretended this was just another night at the bar. But the words slipped out before she could stop them. “You ever think about Prague?” Silas’s fingers stilled. The air between them turned to ice. “No,” he said finally. Too fast. Too sharp. Rory studied him—the way his jaw tightened, the way his thumb brushed against the signet ring like a nervous tic. She knew that look. Knew the way his mind was already calculating exits, excuses, the dozen ways this conversation could go sideways. “You left,” she said. “Just like that.” “You were alive.” “And you weren’t.” A muscle twitched in his cheek. “I had a job to do.” “A job.” She scoffed, low and bitter. “Funny how that worked out.” Silas’s voice dropped, rough as gravel. “You think I don’t know that?” She should’ve stopped. Should’ve let it go. But the years of silence, of pretending she didn’t still hear his voice in the static of her headphones, of wondering if he ever thought of her—it all spilled out. “You just *left*. No note. No call. Nothing.” “I was under orders.” “Orders.” Rory’s laugh was hollow. “Or was it guilt?” Silas’s hand shot out, gripping her wrist before she could pull away. His fingers were warm, calloused. “Don’t.” She didn’t flinch. Didn’t look away. For a long moment, neither of them moved. Then, slowly, he released her. The silence that followed was heavier than the weight of the past. Rory broke first. “You ever wonder what would’ve happened if you’d stayed?” Silas’s gaze darkened. “I wonder what would’ve happened if I hadn’t.” The words hung between them, raw and unspoken. The kind of truth that could either break you or set you free. Rory stood abruptly, her chair scraping against the floor. “I’ve got deliveries.” Silas didn’t stop her. Didn’t call her back. But as she walked toward the door, his voice cut through the noise of the bar, low and rough: “You still running, Rory?” She didn’t turn around. But she knew the answer. And so did he.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"he said finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.194
leniency0.387
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.065
94.01% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount835
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
34.13% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount835
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"stomach"
count1
2
word"sanctuary"
count1
3
word"weight"
count2
4
word"etched"
count1
5
word"traced"
count1
6
word"calculating"
count1
7
word"silence"
count2
8
word"unspoken"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"stomach"
2"sanctuary"
3"weight"
4"etched"
5"traced"
6"calculating"
7"silence"
8"unspoken"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences76
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences76
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences99
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen36
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans4
markdownWords7
totalWords830
ratio0.008
matches
0"The Raven’s Nest"
1"Silas Blackwood"
2"something"
3"left"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
72.10% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions27
wordCount706
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity1.56
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Carter1
Blackwood2
Volvo1
London1
Evan1
Prague1
Rory8
Silas11
persons
0"Raven"
1"Carter"
2"Blackwood"
3"Volvo"
4"Evan"
5"Rory"
6"Silas"
places
0"London"
1"Prague"
globalScore0.721
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences40
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount830
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences99
matches
0"knew that look"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs48
mean17.29
std16.46
cv0.952
sampleLengths
065
14
252
37
452
535
639
79
89
960
1012
112
1244
1320
145
154
1616
173
1815
1918
209
2134
2210
238
2442
257
263
273
2812
2912
3012
3145
324
339
3418
356
3613
3712
3812
3911
4021
4112
428
4319
444
454
465
474
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences76
matches
0"was combed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs121
matches(empty)
56.28% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences99
ratio0.03
matches
0"His auburn hair, now streaked with silver, was combed back neatly, but his hazel eyes—sharp as ever—locked onto hers the moment she stepped inside."
1"Rory studied him—the way his jaw tightened, the way his thumb brushed against the signet ring like a nervous tic."
2"But the years of silence, of pretending she didn’t still hear his voice in the static of her headphones, of wondering if he ever thought of her—it all spilled out."
93.10% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount710
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount34
adverbRatio0.04788732394366197
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.005633802816901409
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences99
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences99
mean8.38
std7.29
cv0.869
sampleLengths
022
131
212
34
421
524
67
73
84
928
104
119
1211
1314
1417
154
169
1730
183
193
203
218
221
238
2410
256
2636
275
287
292
3018
3115
3211
3318
342
352
363
374
3810
396
403
415
4210
4312
446
456
463
475
4814
4910
46.80% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.32323232323232326
totalSentences99
uniqueOpeners32
98.04% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences68
matches
0"Then she saw him."
1"Then, slowly, he released her."
ratio0.029
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount16
totalSentences68
matches
0"His auburn hair, now streaked"
1"She hadn’t expected this."
2"She hesitated by the bar,"
3"She didn’t take it."
4"She exhaled, the word sticking"
5"he said, though his eyes"
6"She didn’t deny it."
7"His smile didn’t reach his"
8"She should’ve left it there."
9"he said finally"
10"She knew that look."
11"She scoffed, low and bitter"
12"She should’ve stopped."
13"His fingers were warm, calloused."
14"She didn’t flinch."
15"She didn’t turn around."
ratio0.235
85.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount51
totalSentences68
matches
0"The neon green sign of"
1"Rory Carter wiped rain from"
2"The bell above jingled, but"
3"Silas Blackwood sat in his"
4"His auburn hair, now streaked"
5"A slow, knowing smile curled"
6"Rory’s stomach twisted."
7"She hadn’t expected this."
8"The last time she’d seen"
9"That was before Evan."
10"She hesitated by the bar,"
11"The bartender, a wiry man"
12"She didn’t take it."
13"Silas stood, his limp more"
14"The years had etched lines"
15"She exhaled, the word sticking"
16"The air between them hummed"
17"The way he’d slipped out"
18"The way she’d never asked"
19"The way she’d spent the"
ratio0.75
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences68
matches
0"Before the flat above his"
1"Before she learned the weight"
ratio0.029
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences26
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"The years had etched lines around his mouth, but his posture still carried that quiet authority, like a man who’d spent a lifetime giving orders and never takin…"
41.67% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"he said, though his eyes did the opposite"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.129
leniency0.258
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
90.7041%