Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYACAE2PVWYXFJ48PSGEZ6E

Run Details

Duration:
7.3s
Cost:
$0.000849
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
--- The door to *The Raven’s Nest* swung open with a *clang* of brass hinges, and the sudden gust of cold air carried with it the scent of damp wool and something sharper—gun oil, maybe, or the faint metallic tang of old blood. Rory Carter froze mid-step, her fingers tightening around the handle of the delivery bag she’d just dropped off for Golden Empress. The bar’s neon sign flickered green above her, casting jagged shadows across the pavement like the teeth of some long-dead beast. Then she saw him. Silas Blackwood stood at the bar, his back to her, one hand braced against the polished wood while the other lifted a glass to his lips. His auburn hair was longer now, streaked with silver, and the way he moved—just a little slower, just a little more deliberate—made her chest tighten. He wasn’t just older. He was *different*. The man who’d once been her mentor, her guide through the murky waters of London’s underbelly, had become something else entirely. A ghost of the man she remembered. “You’re late,” he said, voice rough as gravel, without turning around. Rory’s pulse spiked. “Silas?” His head snapped up. The hazel in his eyes had deepened, darkened by years she couldn’t begin to count. “Rory.” His lips twitched, just once, like he was trying to remember how to smile. “Or should I call you *Aurora* now?” The name stung. She’d buried that version of herself years ago. “Just Rory.” “Suit yourself.” He gestured to the stool beside him. “Sit. You look like you’ve been running.” She didn’t move. “You look like you’ve been *living*.” That got a real smile out of him—sharp, knowing, the kind that promised secrets. “And you look like you’ve been *surviving*.” Rory exhaled through her nose, a sound that was half-laugh, half-frustration. “I didn’t know you still ran this place.” “Neither did I, until a few months ago.” He swirled the amber liquid in his glass. “Turns out, when you’ve got nothing left to lose, you can always buy a bar.” “Or a life,” she muttered. His gaze flicked to her, assessing. “You always were good at reading between the lines.” “And you always were terrible at taking advice.” The corner of his mouth quirked. “Advice I ignored led me here. So maybe I’m not so bad.” Rory finally sat, sliding onto the stool with the deliberate slowness of a woman who’d spent too many nights wondering if she’d made the right choices. The leather creaked under her. “What are you drinking?” “Something that doesn’t taste like regret.” He held up the glass. “Whiskey. Neat.” “You’ve always had a thing for whiskey.” “And you’ve always had a thing for underestimating me.” His voice dropped, just slightly. “Careful, Rory. I might start believing it.” She bristled. “I didn’t say—” “You didn’t have to.” He took a slow sip, then set the glass down with a *thunk*. “You’re still delivering for Golden Empress, I see.” Rory’s fingers twitched around the edge of the stool. “Part-time. Barely makes ends meet.” “Ah.” He leaned forward, elbows on the bar. “So the law didn’t work out.” “It wasn’t the law.” She swallowed. “It was me.” Silas studied her for a long moment. Then, quietly: “You ever think about why?” The question hit her like a punch to the gut. “Why what?” “Why you left.” His voice was gentle, almost pitying. “Why you ran.” Rory’s throat tightened. She’d spent years telling herself it was Evan. That it was the abuse, the threats, the way he’d made her feel like she was nothing without him. But she knew better now. She’d run because she’d been afraid. Afraid of the weight of the world on her shoulders, afraid of the choices she’d made, afraid of the man she’d become if she stayed. “It wasn’t just him,” she admitted, her voice barely above a whisper. Silas nodded, as if he’d expected nothing less. “Of course it wasn’t.” A silence settled between them, thick and heavy. Rory could feel the years stretching out like a taut wire between them, each one a mistake, a regret, a path not taken. She wanted to ask him about the years she’d missed. About the woman he’d become. But the words stuck in her throat. Instead, she changed the subject. “You ever see Eva?” His expression darkened. “Not in years.” “She’s still in Cardiff. Teaching.” “Teaching?” He scoffed. “Eva? She’d burn the place down before she let anyone else near her students.” Rory smiled faintly. “She’d do it too.” Silas’s gaze sharpened. “You talk to her often?” “Not as much as I should.” She hesitated. “She’s worried about me.” “And you?” Rory’s fingers drummed against the bar. “I’m worried about myself.” Silas studied her for a long moment, then reached into his pocket and slid a business card across the counter. It was old, the edges worn, but the ink was still sharp. “My number’s on there. If you ever need to talk—about anything—you call me.” Rory picked it up, her fingers brushing against his. “I don’t know if I do.” “You will.” He stood, his limp more pronounced now. “Or you’ll regret it.” She watched him walk away, his shoulders broad, his stride sure. The door swung shut behind him with a *click*, and the bar was quiet again, save for the hum of the neon sign and the distant chatter of patrons. Rory stared at the card in her hand. She could feel the weight of it, the promise of something she wasn’t sure she was ready for. Then her phone buzzed in her pocket. A text from an unknown number: *You left your bag at the restaurant. It’s in the office.* Rory’s blood ran cold. She knew that handwriting. She knew that number. And she knew, with a certainty that settled in her bones like lead, that she was about to walk into a nightmare.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"His lips twitched just [just]"
1"His voice dropped just [just]"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.275
leniency0.549
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.078
89.93% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount993
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"barely above a whisper"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
54.68% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount993
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count1
2
word"flicked"
count1
3
word"weight"
count2
4
word"whisper"
count1
5
word"silence"
count1
6
word"could feel"
count2
highlights
0"flickered"
1"pulse"
2"flicked"
3"weight"
4"whisper"
5"silence"
6"could feel"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"blood ran cold"
count1
highlights
0"blood ran cold"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences74
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences74
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"begin to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences109
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans9
markdownWords21
totalWords983
ratio0.021
matches
0"The Raven’s Nest"
1"clang"
2"different"
3"Aurora"
4"living"
5"surviving"
6"thunk"
7"click"
8"You left your bag at the restaurant. It’s in the office."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions8
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.32% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions24
wordCount717
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity1.67
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Carter1
Golden1
Empress1
Blackwood1
London1
Rory12
Silas5
Evan1
persons
0"Carter"
1"Blackwood"
2"Rory"
3"Silas"
4"Evan"
places
0"Raven"
1"London"
globalScore0.663
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences47
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount983
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences109
matches
0"buried that version"
1"knew that number"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs53
mean18.55
std18.54
cv1
sampleLengths
01
184
24
386
411
54
641
713
816
99
1021
1119
1231
135
1415
158
1618
1735
1813
197
2021
215
2225
2314
2414
259
2614
2712
2812
2966
3012
3112
3253
339
346
355
3617
377
388
3912
402
4110
4245
4315
4413
4540
4626
4713
4811
494
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences74
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs126
matches
0"was trying"
64.22% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences109
ratio0.028
matches
0"The door to *The Raven’s Nest* swung open with a *clang* of brass hinges, and the sudden gust of cold air carried with it the scent of damp wool and something sharper—gun oil, maybe, or the faint metallic tang of old blood."
1"His auburn hair was longer now, streaked with silver, and the way he moved—just a little slower, just a little more deliberate—made her chest tighten."
2"That got a real smile out of him—sharp, knowing, the kind that promised secrets."
95.23% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount726
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount33
adverbRatio0.045454545454545456
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.009641873278236915
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences109
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences109
mean9.01
std7.05
cv0.783
sampleLengths
042
121
221
34
426
525
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821
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1011
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121
134
1415
1515
167
173
188
192
209
217
223
236
2414
257
2611
278
2816
2915
305
316
329
338
346
3512
3626
375
384
3911
402
417
4214
437
442
453
4617
478
489
495
51.07% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.3394495412844037
totalSentences109
uniqueOpeners37
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences68
matches
0"Then she saw him."
1"Instead, she changed the subject."
2"Then her phone buzzed in"
ratio0.044
49.41% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences68
matches
0"His auburn hair was longer"
1"He wasn’t just older."
2"He was *different*."
3"he said, voice rough as"
4"His head snapped up."
5"His lips twitched, just once,"
6"She’d buried that version of"
7"He gestured to the stool"
8"She didn’t move."
9"He swirled the amber liquid"
10"His gaze flicked to her,"
11"He held up the glass"
12"His voice dropped, just slightly"
13"He took a slow sip,"
14"He leaned forward, elbows on"
15"His voice was gentle, almost"
16"She’d spent years telling herself"
17"She’d run because she’d been"
18"she admitted, her voice barely"
19"She wanted to ask him"
ratio0.426
18.82% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount60
totalSentences68
matches
0"The door to *The Raven’s"
1"Rory Carter froze mid-step, her"
2"The bar’s neon sign flickered"
3"Silas Blackwood stood at the"
4"His auburn hair was longer"
5"He wasn’t just older."
6"He was *different*."
7"The man who’d once been"
8"A ghost of the man"
9"he said, voice rough as"
10"Rory’s pulse spiked."
11"His head snapped up."
12"The hazel in his eyes"
13"His lips twitched, just once,"
14"The name stung."
15"She’d buried that version of"
16"He gestured to the stool"
17"She didn’t move."
18"That got a real smile"
19"Rory exhaled through her nose,"
ratio0.882
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences68
matches(empty)
ratio0
74.83% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences21
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Rory exhaled through her nose, a sound that was half-laugh, half-frustration."
1"Rory finally sat, sliding onto the stool with the deliberate slowness of a woman who’d spent too many nights wondering if she’d made the right choices."
53.57% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"he said, voice rough as gravel, without turning around"
1"she admitted, her voice barely above a whisper"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"she admitted (admit)"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.059
leniency0.118
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.078
83.9362%