Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYAD19HRKN417TMHTXR727R

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Duration:
1m 55s
Cost:
$0.011202
Provider:
Seed

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Harlow slams her shoulder into the rusted Tube door, metal groaning before it gives. She adjusts her grip on her baton, military precision tightening her stance until every muscle hums with the familiar, controlled tension of a high-risk call. The abandoned Camden station’s stench—rust crusted into every crevice, damp rot from a leaking tunnel ceiling, and a faint, acrid ozone that pricks the back of her throat—stings her nostrils. She’s tracked the lead here for three weeks, ever since a homeless man huddled in a Camden alley mumbled about a “bone-locked market” and a “man who fell silent mid-step” tied to the station. The lead had clung to her like a burr; it was the first whisper of connection to DS Morris’s unexplained collapse three years prior. A figure kneels by a crumpled form in the platform’s deepest shadow. Round glasses catch the flicker of Harlow’s torch, turning the lenses into tiny pools of gold. Curly red hair tucks behind a left ear—a nervous habit she notes in a split second, her detective’s eye cataloging every detail before she speaks. “State your business.” “I’m researching the station’s occult history.” “Research doesn’t include trespassing on a crime scene.” The figure stands, worn leather satchel bumping her hip hard enough to make a stack of ancient leather-bound tomes peek from its unfastened slots—their gilded spines faded but still bright enough to signal rare, restricted material. Freckles dust her nose, visible even in the dim light. “Eva Kowalski. British Museum restricted archives research assistant.” Harlow’s sharp jaw tightens until she feels the grind of her molars. She checks her worn leather watch—7:14, but time feels irrelevant here, the station’s lack of clocks and natural light wrapping it in a timeless, suffocating bubble. The body at their feet is a man in his late thirties, his business suit still pressed despite the grime on his shoes. His hands clutch a small brass compass so tight his knuckles are white, its face etched with intricate protective sigils and coated in a thick, green verdigris that flaks when Harlow prods it with her baton. No visible wounds mar the corpse’s throat, no bruises on its wrists, no blood to sting her nostrils beyond the faint copper tang of old pipe rust. Harlow has processed 127 bodies in her 18 years of decorated Met service; this one’s complete lack of a discernible cause stumps her. “Cause of death?” “None that a standard autopsy will find. The guardians don’t leave marks.” “Quit spouting supernatural nonsense. I deal in facts—fingerprints, DNA, motive.” Eva taps the compass with a gloved finger, her touch light as she handles the delicate artifact. “That’s a Veil Compass. Crafted exclusively by a Shade artisan for the Veil Market—this station’s current host. It points to the nearest supernatural rift, but it’s a double-edged tool. If you carry it without a bone token—the market’s mandatory entry pass—it marks you as a trespasser.” Harlow’s gut twists so hard she has to shift her weight to steady herself. Morris’s body had been found with a similar unmarked collapse, his jacket caked in a strange green dust she’d brushed off as construction grit at the time. Now the ozone smell tugs at that memory, wrapping around it like a cold hand. “Market’s entry requires a bone token. Did you find one on him?” Harlow glances at the corpse’s pockets—she’d frisked them ten minutes prior, her military-trained hands sweeping every crevice for ID, wallets, or weapons. Empty. “No. Not a coin, not a shard of bone, nothing.” “Then he didn’t belong here. Trespassers who skip the token check get bound by the market’s guardians. The sigils on the wall trap their life force until it drains completely.” Eva gestures to the wall behind the body, her gloved hand sweeping over a section of rusted tile Harlow had mistaken for faded graffiti. Harlow’s torch beam catches the faint, waxy curves of the marks—they’re not spray paint, she realizes now, but a thick, resin-like substance that glistens when the light hits it at the right angle. “Those are binding sigils. Shades mix their own shadow essence with beeswax to etch them. They’re invisible to standard torches, but…” Eva pulls a small UV light from her satchel, flicks it on with a quiet click. The sigils flare neon blue, their intricate patterns wrapping around the tile like a cage. Harlow’s breath catches in her throat. She’d missed that—her singular focus on the body’s lack of wounds had blinded her to the wall, a rookie mistake she’d not made since her first year on the beat. “Morris had similar marks on his jacket. I thought it was dirt.” Eva’s green eyes widen behind her round glasses, and she tucks her red hair behind her left ear again—this time so hard her earlobe flushes pink. “You knew someone else with this? The guardians rarely leave their market’s bounds. Morris’s death—was it unexplained too?” “Collapsed mid-surveillance. Paramedics said it was a heart attack, but his autopsy showed no blockages. No drugs, no poison. Nothing.” Eva grabs a leather-bound tome from her satchel, flips it to a marked page with a quick, practiced motion. The page is covered in hand-drawn sigils, each labeled with tiny, neat script. “The Veil Market moves every full moon. Last night was full moon—they’d have locked the station down to complete the shift. This man must have stumbled in during the transition, curious about the strange lights a local reported. He picked up the compass, didn’t know the rules, and the guardians marked him.” Harlow kneels again, her knees scraping the gritty platform floor, and wraps her gloved fingers around the corpse’s wrist. The skin is cold, but not as cold as Morris’s had been when she found him. She prods the compass again, and this time the needle twitches—once, twice—before spinning wildly, its metal point whirring against the brass casing so fast it makes a high-pitched whine. “What’s happening?” “The compass is reacting to a rift opening. The sigils are failing—they can’t hold the guardians forever when a trespasser’s life force drains completely.” Ozone stings her nostrils worse now, thick enough to make her cough. A low, guttural hum vibrates through the station’s floors, making the rusted pipes rattle above their heads. Harlow stands, her baton raised to her shoulder, her military precision kicking in as she scans the tunnel mouth for any sign of movement. Eva grabs another book from her satchel, her hands shaking slightly as she flips through its pages. “The guardians are coming. They don’t like outsiders poking into their market’s business.” A shadow detaches from the tunnel’s deepest darkness. It has no face, no form—just a swirling mass of inky black smoke that drags a clawed appendage along the tile, leaving a trail of the same green verdigris that coats the compass. The sound of scraping metal echoes through the empty station, loud enough to make Harlow’s ears ring. She’d spent three years wondering what killed Morris, three years chasing dead ends and dismissing supernatural whispers as nonsense. Now she’s staring at it, the shadow advancing slow enough to let her feel the weight of her mistake before it lunges for her throat.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences20
tagDensity0.05
leniency0.1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
87.76% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1225
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"completely"
count2
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"completely"
1"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
42.86% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1225
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"familiar"
count1
1
word"tension"
count1
2
word"whisper"
count1
3
word"flicker"
count1
4
word"etched"
count1
5
word"intricate"
count2
6
word"processed"
count1
7
word"standard"
count2
8
word"weight"
count2
9
word"etch"
count1
10
word"echoes"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"tension"
2"whisper"
3"flicker"
4"etched"
5"intricate"
6"processed"
7"standard"
8"weight"
9"etch"
10"echoes"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences43
matches(empty)
76.41% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences43
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"feel"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences62
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen53
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1197
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions27
wordCount880
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity1.48
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Tube1
Camden2
Morris4
Harlow13
Met1
Eva6
persons
0"Morris"
1"Harlow"
2"Eva"
places
0"Camden"
globalScore0.761
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences42
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.835
wordCount1197
matches
0"not spray paint, she realizes now, but a thick, resin-like substance"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences62
matches
0"missed that—her"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs29
mean41.28
std36.37
cv0.881
sampleLengths
014
1113
253
33
46
58
654
7147
83
912
1010
1163
1256
1312
1433
1530
1657
1721
1867
1912
2044
2120
2284
2364
242
2524
2670
2713
28102
88.94% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences43
matches
0"been found"
1"is covered"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs118
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences62
ratio0.194
matches
0"The abandoned Camden station’s stench—rust crusted into every crevice, damp rot from a leaking tunnel ceiling, and a faint, acrid ozone that pricks the back of her throat—stings her nostrils."
1"The lead had clung to her like a burr; it was the first whisper of connection to DS Morris’s unexplained collapse three years prior."
2"Curly red hair tucks behind a left ear—a nervous habit she notes in a split second, her detective’s eye cataloging every detail before she speaks."
3"The figure stands, worn leather satchel bumping her hip hard enough to make a stack of ancient leather-bound tomes peek from its unfastened slots—their gilded spines faded but still bright enough to signal rare, restricted material."
4"She checks her worn leather watch—7:14, but time feels irrelevant here, the station’s lack of clocks and natural light wrapping it in a timeless, suffocating bubble."
5"Harlow has processed 127 bodies in her 18 years of decorated Met service; this one’s complete lack of a discernible cause stumps her."
6"Harlow glances at the corpse’s pockets—she’d frisked them ten minutes prior, her military-trained hands sweeping every crevice for ID, wallets, or weapons."
7"Harlow’s torch beam catches the faint, waxy curves of the marks—they’re not spray paint, she realizes now, but a thick, resin-like substance that glistens when the light hits it at the right angle."
8"She’d missed that—her singular focus on the body’s lack of wounds had blinded her to the wall, a rookie mistake she’d not made since her first year on the beat."
9"Eva’s green eyes widen behind her round glasses, and she tucks her red hair behind her left ear again—this time so hard her earlobe flushes pink."
10"She prods the compass again, and this time the needle twitches—once, twice—before spinning wildly, its metal point whirring against the brass casing so fast it makes a high-pitched whine."
11"It has no face, no form—just a swirling mass of inky black smoke that drags a clawed appendage along the tile, leaving a trail of the same green verdigris that coats the compass."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount898
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"ancient leather-bound tomes"
adverbCount23
adverbRatio0.025612472160356347
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.0033407572383073497
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences62
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences62
mean19.31
std10.25
cv0.531
sampleLengths
014
125
230
334
424
512
616
725
83
96
108
1136
1210
138
1412
1526
1623
1736
1827
1923
203
2112
2210
2317
2446
2514
2627
2715
2812
2922
301
3110
3230
3324
3433
3521
3616
3715
386
3930
4012
4126
4218
4320
4419
4513
4652
4719
4816
4929
73.66% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.45161290322580644
totalSentences62
uniqueOpeners28
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences42
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount8
totalSentences42
matches
0"She adjusts her grip on"
1"She’s tracked the lead here"
2"She checks her worn leather"
3"His hands clutch a small"
4"She’d missed that—her singular focus"
5"She prods the compass again,"
6"It has no face, no"
7"She’d spent three years wondering"
ratio0.19
19.52% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount37
totalSentences42
matches
0"Harlow slams her shoulder into"
1"She adjusts her grip on"
2"The abandoned Camden station’s stench—rust"
3"She’s tracked the lead here"
4"The lead had clung to"
5"A figure kneels by a"
6"The figure stands, worn leather"
7"Freckles dust her nose, visible"
8"Harlow’s sharp jaw tightens until"
9"She checks her worn leather"
10"The body at their feet"
11"His hands clutch a small"
12"Harlow has processed 127 bodies"
13"Eva taps the compass with"
14"Harlow’s gut twists so hard"
15"Morris’s body had been found"
16"Harlow glances at the corpse’s"
17"Eva gestures to the wall"
18"Harlow’s torch beam catches the"
19"Eva pulls a small UV"
ratio0.881
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences42
matches
0"Now the ozone smell tugs"
1"Now she’s staring at it,"
ratio0.048
69.60% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences39
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"The abandoned Camden station’s stench—rust crusted into every crevice, damp rot from a leaking tunnel ceiling, and a faint, acrid ozone that pricks the back of …"
1"His hands clutch a small brass compass so tight his knuckles are white, its face etched with intricate protective sigils and coated in a thick, green verdigris …"
2"Harlow’s torch beam catches the faint, waxy curves of the marks—they’re not spray paint, she realizes now, but a thick, resin-like substance that glistens when …"
3"It has no face, no form—just a swirling mass of inky black smoke that drags a clawed appendage along the tile, leaving a trail of the same green verdigris that …"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags1
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
83.9804%