Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYADZFFKMD4THZNA64CF2TZ

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Duration:
43.7s
Cost:
$0.001723
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rain hammered the Soho pavements like a thousand tiny fists, turning the gutters into raging torrents that snatched at Detective Harlow Quinn's boots. She sprinted through the downpour, her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair plastered flat against her scalp, brown eyes locked on the figure ahead. Tomás Herrera—Tommy to his mates, the ghost paramedic who'd lost his license treating God-knows-what freaks—zigzagged through the neon-drenched streets, his short curly dark hair gleaming under streetlamps like wet coal. He was fast for a healer, olive skin slick with rain, the Saint Christopher medallion at his neck bouncing wildly as he vaulted a low barrier. Quinn's lungs burned, but her military precision kept her strides even, relentless. Eighteen years on the force, decorated for takedowns that lesser cops would piss themselves over, and she wasn't letting this slippery bastard vanish into the night. Not after the tip from her CI: Herrera patching up that clique of Soho weirdos, the ones peddling whispers of unnatural shit. Her worn leather watch ticked against her left wrist, soaked but steadfast, marking 11:47 PM. Partner gone three years now—DS Morris, ripped apart by something she still couldn't name—and she'd be damned if she let another thread unravel. "Police! Stop, Herrera!" Her shout cut through the roar of tires on wet asphalt, but he didn't flinch. A black cab swerved, horn blaring, as he plunged into a narrow alley off Dean Street. Quinn followed, boots splashing ankle-deep puddles that mirrored the green neon haze from The Raven's Nest sign flickering two blocks back. She'd been staking it out for hours, nursing a flat pint amid the old maps and faded photos on the walls, waiting for a face from the clique to show. Herrera had slipped out the hidden back room—bookshelf ajar just long enough for her trained eye—clutching a satchel that bulged suspiciously. He burst onto Charing Cross Road, weaving through late-night revelers huddled under umbrellas, their laughter brittle against the storm. Quinn shoved past a cluster of pissheads, elbow cracking a jaw by accident—or not. Pain flared in her shoulder, but she ignored it, sharp jaw set like granite. At 5'9", she matched his height, but he had youth on his side—29, wiry from Seville streets. She glimpsed the scar snaking his left forearm as he yanked up his sleeve to check traffic, a jagged reminder of some knife-happy night. North they raced, the chase pulling them from Soho's velvet underbelly toward Camden's edgier sprawl. Rain sheeted off shop awnings, blurring the glow of kebab joints and tattoo parlors. Herrera dodged a cyclist, cut left into a pedestrianized stretch near Cambridge Circus, his satchel slapping his thigh. Quinn's coat clung like a second skin, heavy with water, but she gained ground. Her radio crackled in her pocket—backup en route, but too slow in this slop. This was personal now. He vaulted a construction barrier, dropping into a service lane littered with sodden cardboard. Quinn hurdled it without breaking stride, landing in a skid that sprayed filth up her calves. Heart pounding like a war drum, she pictured Morris's file: unexplained wounds, shadows on CCTV that forensics couldn't explain. Herrera knew something. The clique knew. And that satchel? Propped open for a split second in the Nest's gloom—vials glinting, something iridescent. Camden Lock materialized through the haze, the canal a black mirror shattered by raindrops. Crowds thinned here, the market stalls shuttered ghosts under tarps. Herrera veered right, toward the old rail yard, his breath ragged now—she could hear it over the deluge. Quinn closed to twenty yards, her boots pounding rhythmically. "Herrera! You're done running!" He shot a glance back, warm brown eyes wide with feral calculation, then ducked under a chain-link fence bordering an abandoned stretch of the Tube. The North London Line, derelict since the Blitz rebuilds, its entrance a yawning brick maw choked with weeds and graffiti. Warning signs flapped in the wind: DANGER - NO ENTRY. Quinn hit the fence seconds later, gripping the cold metal, rain stinging her face. He was already vanishing down cracked steps slick with moss, the satchel's strap glinting. She vaulted the fence, razor wire snagging her coat with a rip. No time for subtlety. The stairs plunged into shadow, air thickening with the metallic tang of rust and something earthier—decay, or worse. Her hand dropped to her holstered Glock, thumb flicking the safety. Torch beam from her phone cut the dark, revealing graffiti-smeared walls pulsing with moisture. Footsteps echoed below, splashing through shallow water. "Herrera!" Echoes bounced back mockingly. The steps bottomed out into a tiled platform, abandoned tracks stretching into blackness. Puddles gleamed like oil slicks under her light, reflecting faded ads for Bovril and forgotten cigarettes. This was no tourist ghost station; it reeked of secrets, the air humming with a low vibration she felt in her teeth. A scuffle ahead—Herrera scrambling over rubble, toward a rusted door half-ajar at the platform's end. Quinn sprinted, boots slipping on tiles, torch beam jerking wildly. She hit the door as it groaned wider, slamming it open with her shoulder. Beyond lay a tunnel mouth, bricked up but cracked, vines snaking through like veins. No— not vines. Roots? The air shifted, warmer, laced with incense and ozone. Herrera twisted, fumbling in his pocket. A small bone token materialized in his scarred hand—yellowed, carved with spirals that seemed to writhe in her light. He slapped it against a concealed panel in the brick, and with a grind like bones shifting, a section swung inward. A waft of voices, muffled laughter, the clink of glass. He dove through, the panel starting to seal. Quinn lunged, jamming her boot in the gap. Pain lanced her ankle as gears ground against leather. "Not so fast!" She wrenched it free, squeezing through into a cavernous space that defied the world above. The Veil Market unfolded like a fever dream. Dim lanterns swung from arched ceilings—once Tube vaults, now strung with cobwebs heavy with glowing motes. Stalls crammed the platforms: rickety tables laden with jars of writhing shadows, blades that hummed faintly, potions bubbling in hues no chemist brewed. Figures moved in the gloom—cloaked humans rubbing shoulders with... things. A woman with eyes like polished opals hawking fangs that elongated before retracting. A hulking brute with scales haggling over a cage of chittering imps. The air thrummed with power, unnatural, the kind that had torn Morris apart. Herrera melted into the crowd, satchel clutched tight, heading for a far stall piled with alchemical vials. Voices hissed in tongues Quinn half-recognized—Latin? Aramaic?—and eyes turned her way, gleaming with predatory curiosity. No badges here meant safety; her coat screamed outsider. Her watch read 12:13 AM. Backup wouldn't find her down here; phones died in the damp, signals choked. Duty screamed follow—collar him, crack the clique. But Morris's ghost whispered caution: this was the unexplained, the supernatural she'd buried under case files. One wrong step, and she'd be the next unexplained circumstance. Pulse thundering, Quinn drew her Glock low, thumb on the decocker. The crowd parted slightly, sensing predator versus prey. Herrera glanced back, vanishing behind a curtain of hanging herbs that sparked like fireflies. A vendor—a gaunt man with slits for nostrils—grinned at her, teeth filed to points. "First time, copper? Token or tribute, love." She ignored him, slipping into the throng. Bodies pressed close, scents assaulting: blood-iron, sulfur-sweet, rot masked by jasmine. A hand brushed her arm—clawed?—and she jerked away, gun hand twitching. Deeper in, the market sprawled: tunnels branching to side bazaars, one echoing with chants, another with moans that raised neck hairs. Herrera darted left, into a shadowed alcove. Quinn pursued, torch off now to blend, eyes adjusting to the bioluminescent haze. Her sharp jaw clenched; precision demanded assessment. Armed? Yes, but numbers favored them. Backup? Hours away. Intel? Zero on this pit. He rounded a pillar etched with glowing runes, nearly colliding with a stall of enchanted blades. Quinn closed, breath steady despite the adrenaline spike. "Herrera!" He spun, eyes wild, medallion swinging. "Stay out, Quinn! You don't know—" She tackled him into the stall, vials shattering in sprays of acrid smoke. They rolled, her pinning his scarred arm, Glock at his throat. "What the fuck is this place? The clique's poison lab?" Laughter rippled from nearby stalls, figures circling like hyenas. A woman with serpentine tattoos hissed, "Feddie meat. Fresh." Herrera bucked, knee driving for her gut. She absorbed it, twisting his wrist until the satchel spilled: vials of shimmering blue, labels in runes. One rolled toward a boot—clawed, booted in hide. Panic clawed Quinn's gut. Abort? Radio silence up top meant isolation. But retreat was surrender, Morris's death unavenged. Her watch ticked—12:19. Full moon tomorrow; whispers said markets like this shifted then. A shadow loomed—a brute twice her size, scales rippling. "Token, outsider. Or we take it." Quinn surged up, dragging Herrera with her, gun sweeping the encroaching faces. "Back off!" The word cracked like thunder, her bearing unyielding. Herrera twisted free, bolting anew toward a glowing archway—exit? Auction pit? She decided in a heartbeat: follow. Into the viper's nest. Precision over fear. She plunged after, the market swallowing them both in its throbbing heart. The chase twisted through sub-tunnels, stalls blurring into a kaleidoscope of horror. Herrera panted, clutching a vial like salvation, his medallion a silver blur. Quinn's coat tore further on jagged stalactites, blood mixing with rain. Voices swelled—a chant rising, rhythmic, pulling at her skull. Ahead, a platform thronged with bidders, a pedestal holding a chained... thing. Eyes multiplied, tentacles writhing. Herrera shoved through, aiming for a service ladder beyond. Quinn fired a warning shot—crack!—ceiling crumbling dust. Panic erupted: screams, stalls overturning, shadows fleeing. She gained, slamming into his back at the ladder. They grappled, fists flying, her precision against his desperation. "You lost Morris to this," he gasped, elbow cracking her ribs. "They'll eat you alive!" She kneed his scar, eliciting a howl. "Better than running." Zip-ties snapped from her pocket—backup's gift—binding his wrists. Satchel secured, she hauled him up the ladder, market howling below. Surface air hit like salvation, rain cleansing the grime. Sirens wailed distant—backup. Quinn shoved Herrera face-down in mud, knee in his spine. "Game over, Tommy." But as cuffs clicked, doubt gnawed. The vial in her pocket pulsed warm. Unexplained. Again. Her watch: 12:37. The night wasn't done.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences21
tagDensity0.762
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
97.17% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1764
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
20.63% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1764
totalAiIsms28
found
0
word"gleaming"
count2
1
word"unravel"
count1
2
word"reminder"
count1
3
word"raced"
count1
4
word"velvet"
count1
5
word"pounding"
count2
6
word"gloom"
count2
7
word"glinting"
count2
8
word"shattered"
count1
9
word"maw"
count1
10
word"footsteps"
count1
11
word"echoed"
count1
12
word"echoes"
count1
13
word"hulking"
count1
14
word"pulse"
count1
15
word"predator"
count1
16
word"echoing"
count1
17
word"jaw clenched"
count1
18
word"etched"
count1
19
word"silence"
count1
20
word"loomed"
count1
21
word"kaleidoscope"
count1
22
word"rhythmic"
count1
23
word"pulsed"
count1
highlights
0"gleaming"
1"unravel"
2"reminder"
3"raced"
4"velvet"
5"pounding"
6"gloom"
7"glinting"
8"shattered"
9"maw"
10"footsteps"
11"echoed"
12"echoes"
13"hulking"
14"pulse"
15"predator"
16"echoing"
17"jaw clenched"
18"etched"
19"silence"
20"loomed"
21"kaleidoscope"
22"rhythmic"
23"pulsed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences54
matches(empty)
10.58% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences54
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences55
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen97
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1717
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions77
wordCount1629
uniqueNames31
maxNameDensity1.17
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Herrera"
discoveredNames
Soho3
Detective1
Harlow1
Quinn19
Herrera17
Tommy1
God-knows-what1
Saint1
Christopher1
Morris5
Dean1
Street1
Raven1
Nest2
Charing1
Cross1
Road1
North2
Camden2
Cambridge1
Circus1
Lock1
Tube2
London1
Line1
Blitz1
Glock3
Bovril1
Veil1
Market1
Laughter1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Herrera"
3"Tommy"
4"Saint"
5"Christopher"
6"Morris"
7"Lock"
8"Blitz"
9"Market"
10"Laughter"
places
0"Soho"
1"Detective"
2"Dean"
3"Street"
4"Raven"
5"Nest"
6"Charing"
7"Cross"
8"Road"
9"North"
10"Camden"
11"Cambridge"
12"London"
globalScore0.917
windowScore0.833
97.92% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences48
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"spirals that seemed to writhe in her light"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1717
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences55
matches
0"up that clique"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs35
mean49.06
std26.9
cv0.548
sampleLengths
0101
198
2106
388
479
571
655
783
866
956
1066
1164
1235
1395
1441
1551
1654
1750
1841
1925
2012
2134
2218
2332
2431
2515
2622
2736
2844
2925
3032
3115
3229
3325
3422
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences54
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs328
matches
0"wasn't letting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount33
semicolonCount5
flaggedSentences26
totalSentences55
ratio0.473
matches
0"Tomás Herrera—Tommy to his mates, the ghost paramedic who'd lost his license treating God-knows-what freaks—zigzagged through the neon-drenched streets, his short curly dark hair gleaming under streetlamps like wet coal."
1"Partner gone three years now—DS Morris, ripped apart by something she still couldn't name—and she'd be damned if she let another thread unravel."
2"Herrera had slipped out the hidden back room—bookshelf ajar just long enough for her trained eye—clutching a satchel that bulged suspiciously."
3"Quinn shoved past a cluster of pissheads, elbow cracking a jaw by accident—or not."
4"North they raced, the chase pulling them from Soho's velvet underbelly toward Camden's edgier sprawl. Rain sheeted off shop awnings, blurring the glow of kebab joints and tattoo parlors. Herrera dodged a cyclist, cut left into a pedestrianized stretch near Cambridge Circus, his satchel slapping his thigh. Quinn's coat clung like a second skin, heavy with water, but she gained ground. Her radio crackled in her pocket—backup en route, but too slow in this slop. This was personal now."
5"He vaulted a construction barrier, dropping into a service lane littered with sodden cardboard. Quinn hurdled it without breaking stride, landing in a skid that sprayed filth up her calves. Heart pounding like a war drum, she pictured Morris's file: unexplained wounds, shadows on CCTV that forensics couldn't explain. Herrera knew something. The clique knew. And that satchel? Propped open for a split second in the Nest's gloom—vials glinting, something iridescent."
6"Camden Lock materialized through the haze, the canal a black mirror shattered by raindrops. Crowds thinned here, the market stalls shuttered ghosts under tarps. Herrera veered right, toward the old rail yard, his breath ragged now—she could hear it over the deluge. Quinn closed to twenty yards, her boots pounding rhythmically. \"Herrera!"
7"He shot a glance back, warm brown eyes wide with feral calculation, then ducked under a chain-link fence bordering an abandoned stretch of the Tube. The North London Line, derelict since the Blitz rebuilds, its entrance a yawning brick maw choked with weeds and graffiti. Warning signs flapped in the wind: DANGER - NO ENTRY. Quinn hit the fence seconds later, gripping the cold metal, rain stinging her face. He was already vanishing down cracked steps slick with moss, the satchel's strap glinting."
8"She vaulted the fence, razor wire snagging her coat with a rip. No time for subtlety. The stairs plunged into shadow, air thickening with the metallic tang of rust and something earthier—decay, or worse. Her hand dropped to her holstered Glock, thumb flicking the safety. Torch beam from her phone cut the dark, revealing graffiti-smeared walls pulsing with moisture. Footsteps echoed below, splashing through shallow water."
9"\"Herrera!\" Echoes bounced back mockingly. The steps bottomed out into a tiled platform, abandoned tracks stretching into blackness. Puddles gleamed like oil slicks under her light, reflecting faded ads for Bovril and forgotten cigarettes. This was no tourist ghost station; it reeked of secrets, the air humming with a low vibration she felt in her teeth."
10"A scuffle ahead—Herrera scrambling over rubble, toward a rusted door half-ajar at the platform's end. Quinn sprinted, boots slipping on tiles, torch beam jerking wildly. She hit the door as it groaned wider, slamming it open with her shoulder. Beyond lay a tunnel mouth, bricked up but cracked, vines snaking through like veins. No— not vines. Roots? The air shifted, warmer, laced with incense and ozone."
11"Herrera twisted, fumbling in his pocket. A small bone token materialized in his scarred hand—yellowed, carved with spirals that seemed to writhe in her light. He slapped it against a concealed panel in the brick, and with a grind like bones shifting, a section swung inward. A waft of voices, muffled laughter, the clink of glass. He dove through, the panel starting to seal."
12"The Veil Market unfolded like a fever dream. Dim lanterns swung from arched ceilings—once Tube vaults, now strung with cobwebs heavy with glowing motes. Stalls crammed the platforms: rickety tables laden with jars of writhing shadows, blades that hummed faintly, potions bubbling in hues no chemist brewed. Figures moved in the gloom—cloaked humans rubbing shoulders with... things. A woman with eyes like polished opals hawking fangs that elongated before retracting. A hulking brute with scales haggling over a cage of chittering imps. The air thrummed with power, unnatural, the kind that had torn Morris apart."
13"Herrera melted into the crowd, satchel clutched tight, heading for a far stall piled with alchemical vials. Voices hissed in tongues Quinn half-recognized—Latin? Aramaic?—and eyes turned her way, gleaming with predatory curiosity. No badges here meant safety; her coat screamed outsider."
14"Her watch read 12:13 AM. Backup wouldn't find her down here; phones died in the damp, signals choked. Duty screamed follow—collar him, crack the clique. But Morris's ghost whispered caution: this was the unexplained, the supernatural she'd buried under case files. One wrong step, and she'd be the next unexplained circumstance."
15"Pulse thundering, Quinn drew her Glock low, thumb on the decocker. The crowd parted slightly, sensing predator versus prey. Herrera glanced back, vanishing behind a curtain of hanging herbs that sparked like fireflies. A vendor—a gaunt man with slits for nostrils—grinned at her, teeth filed to points. \"First time, copper?"
16"She ignored him, slipping into the throng. Bodies pressed close, scents assaulting: blood-iron, sulfur-sweet, rot masked by jasmine. A hand brushed her arm—clawed?—and she jerked away, gun hand twitching. Deeper in, the market sprawled: tunnels branching to side bazaars, one echoing with chants, another with moans that raised neck hairs."
17"Herrera darted left, into a shadowed alcove. Quinn pursued, torch off now to blend, eyes adjusting to the bioluminescent haze. Her sharp jaw clenched; precision demanded assessment. Armed? Yes, but numbers favored them. Backup? Hours away. Intel? Zero on this pit."
18"Herrera bucked, knee driving for her gut. She absorbed it, twisting his wrist until the satchel spilled: vials of shimmering blue, labels in runes. One rolled toward a boot—clawed, booted in hide."
19"Panic clawed Quinn's gut. Abort? Radio silence up top meant isolation. But retreat was surrender, Morris's death unavenged. Her watch ticked—12:19. Full moon tomorrow; whispers said markets like this shifted then."
20"A shadow loomed—a brute twice her size, scales rippling. \"Token, outsider."
21"Herrera twisted free, bolting anew toward a glowing archway—exit? Auction pit? She decided in a heartbeat: follow. Into the viper's nest. Precision over fear. She plunged after, the market swallowing them both in its throbbing heart."
22"The chase twisted through sub-tunnels, stalls blurring into a kaleidoscope of horror. Herrera panted, clutching a vial like salvation, his medallion a silver blur. Quinn's coat tore further on jagged stalactites, blood mixing with rain. Voices swelled—a chant rising, rhythmic, pulling at her skull."
23"Quinn fired a warning shot—crack!—ceiling crumbling dust. Panic erupted: screams, stalls overturning, shadows fleeing. She gained, slamming into his back at the ladder. They grappled, fists flying, her precision against his desperation."
24"She kneed his scar, eliciting a howl. \"Better than running.\" Zip-ties snapped from her pocket—backup's gift—binding his wrists. Satchel secured, she hauled him up the ladder, market howling below."
25"Surface air hit like salvation, rain cleansing the grime. Sirens wailed distant—backup. Quinn shoved Herrera face-down in mud, knee in his spine. \"Game over, Tommy.\""
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount396
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"short curly dark hair"
adverbCount11
adverbRatio0.027777777777777776
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.010101010101010102
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences55
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences55
mean31.22
std21.52
cv0.689
sampleLengths
023
122
230
326
412
526
622
715
823
918
1016
1121
1230
1321
1419
1514
1614
1741
1879
1971
2052
213
2283
2366
2456
2566
2664
2735
2895
2941
3051
3150
324
3350
3441
3525
369
373
3830
394
4017
411
4232
4331
4411
454
4622
4736
4844
4925
80.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.4909090909090909
totalSentences55
uniqueOpeners27
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences51
matches(empty)
ratio0
94.51% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount16
totalSentences51
matches
0"She sprinted through the downpour,"
1"He was fast for a"
2"Her worn leather watch ticked"
3"Her shout cut through the"
4"She'd been staking it out"
5"He burst onto Charing Cross"
6"He vaulted a construction barrier,"
7"He shot a glance back,"
8"She vaulted the fence, razor"
9"Her watch read 12:13 AM."
10"She ignored him, slipping into"
11"He rounded a pillar etched"
12"He spun, eyes wild, medallion"
13"She tackled him into the"
14"he gasped, elbow cracking her"
15"She kneed his scar, eliciting"
ratio0.314
48.24% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount42
totalSentences51
matches
0"She sprinted through the downpour,"
1"Tomás Herrera—Tommy to his mates,"
2"He was fast for a"
3"Quinn's lungs burned, but her"
4"Her worn leather watch ticked"
5"Partner gone three years now—DS"
6"Her shout cut through the"
7"A black cab swerved, horn"
8"Quinn followed, boots splashing ankle-deep"
9"She'd been staking it out"
10"Herrera had slipped out the"
11"He burst onto Charing Cross"
12"Quinn shoved past a cluster"
13"Pain flared in her shoulder,"
14"He vaulted a construction barrier,"
15"Camden Lock materialized through the"
16"He shot a glance back,"
17"She vaulted the fence, razor"
18"Echoes bounced back mockingly. The"
19"A scuffle ahead—Herrera scrambling over"
ratio0.824
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences51
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences34
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"Rain hammered the Soho pavements like a thousand tiny fists, turning the gutters into raging torrents that snatched at Detective Harlow Quinn's boots."
1"Quinn followed, boots splashing ankle-deep puddles that mirrored the green neon haze from The Raven's Nest sign flickering two blocks back."
2"Herrera had slipped out the hidden back room—bookshelf ajar just long enough for her trained eye—clutching a satchel that bulged suspiciously."
3"North they raced, the chase pulling them from Soho's velvet underbelly toward Camden's edgier sprawl. Rain sheeted off shop awnings, blurring the glow of kebab …"
4"He vaulted a construction barrier, dropping into a service lane littered with sodden cardboard. Quinn hurdled it without breaking stride, landing in a skid that…"
5"He shot a glance back, warm brown eyes wide with feral calculation, then ducked under a chain-link fence bordering an abandoned stretch of the Tube. The North L…"
6"Herrera twisted, fumbling in his pocket. A small bone token materialized in his scarred hand—yellowed, carved with spirals that seemed to writhe in her light. H…"
7"The Veil Market unfolded like a fever dream. Dim lanterns swung from arched ceilings—once Tube vaults, now strung with cobwebs heavy with glowing motes. Stalls …"
8"She ignored him, slipping into the throng. Bodies pressed close, scents assaulting: blood-iron, sulfur-sweet, rot masked by jasmine. A hand brushed her arm—claw…"
13.89% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"The word cracked like, her bearing unyielding"
1"he gasped, elbow cracking her ribs"
54.76% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Her shout (shout)"
1"he gasped (gasp)"
dialogueSentences21
tagDensity0.095
leniency0.19
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.19
73.1676%