Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYAEWV41WDFHXTXWD4VEPXB

Run Details

Model:
Grok 4
Duration:
2m 2s
Cost:
$0.051534
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rory's boots crunched over the frost-kissed grass of Richmond Park, the winter chill nipping at her exposed neck despite the woolen scarf she'd wrapped tight. The Heartstone Pendant hung heavy against her chest, its faint warmth a constant reminder of the unknown benefactor who'd slipped it into her delivery bag weeks ago. She glanced sideways at Nyx, who glided beside her in their semi-solid form—a towering silhouette of swirling shadows, edges blurring into the dim twilight like ink bleeding on wet paper. Their violet eyes glowed faintly, scanning the treeline ahead. "You sense it too?" Rory asked, her voice low, breath fogging the air. The park felt wrong tonight, the usual joggers and dog-walkers absent, as if the world had conspired to empty the space for them. Nyx's response came as a whisper on the wind, threading through the bare branches overhead. "The air shimmers. A tear in the Veil, perhaps. Or something older." They'd come seeking answers—rumors of a seer in the park, a half-fae exile who spoke in riddles but never lied. Eva had mentioned her once, in a hushed tone over pints at Silas' bar, but Rory hadn't believed it until the pendant started pulsing during her last delivery shift, leading her here like a compass needle. Nyx had tagged along uninvited, their shadowy form slipping from an alleyway as if summoned by her unease. Up ahead, a cluster of ancient oaks loomed, their trunks twisted into shapes that mimicked standing stones—gnarled roots forming archways, bark etched with symbols that seemed to shift when Rory blinked. She hesitated, fingers brushing the small crescent scar on her left wrist, a habit from childhood accidents that always surfaced when nerves prickled. "Through there," Nyx murmured, their form flickering incorporeal for a moment, tendrils of shadow testing the air like curious fingers. Rory nodded, steeling herself, and stepped forward. The moment her foot crossed the invisible threshold between the oaks, the world tilted. A faint shimmering distortion rippled across her vision, like heat haze over pavement, and then it was gone. But everything changed. The chill vanished, replaced by a balmy warmth that smelled of blooming jasmine and wild honey. Wildflowers erupted underfoot—vibrant poppies, lupines, and foxgloves in riotous colors, blooming impossibly in what should have been midwinter. They carpeted the ground in a living mosaic, petals unfurling as if greeting intruders. Rory knelt, touching one tentatively; it was soft as silk, releasing a scent that made her head swim with memories of sun-drenched Welsh fields from her childhood. "This isn't right," she whispered, standing. The sky above was no longer the slate-gray of London dusk but a canopy of interwoven branches forming a verdant dome, sunlight filtering through in golden shafts that danced like fireflies. But it wasn't sunlight—not truly. It pulsed with an inner rhythm, warm and alive, casting no shadows where shadows should fall. Nyx solidified beside her, their humanoid shape more defined now, standing at their full six-foot-two height. "Time bends here. An hour inside might steal days outside. Or minutes." Their voice echoed strangely, as if carried from a great distance, though they stood close enough for Rory to feel the cool void emanating from their form. Unease coiled in her gut. She thought of her flat above the bar, the part-time shifts at Golden Empress, the life she'd scraped together after fleeing Cardiff and Evan. This place felt like a dream she'd once had, vivid and inescapable, where stepping wrong meant never waking. "We should find her quickly. The seer—Isolde, right?" Nyx nodded, their violet eyes narrowing. "She is near. The shadows whisper of her presence." They pressed deeper into the grove, the pathless clearing unfolding like a labyrinth that reshaped itself. Vines twisted up tree trunks, bearing fruits Rory didn't recognize—plump orbs that glowed faintly, emitting a soft hum like distant bees. One brushed her arm as she passed, and a jolt of energy surged through her, sharpening her senses. She heard things now: the rustle of leaves that sounded like murmured secrets, the trickle of a stream she couldn't see, and farther off, a melodic chime like wind through crystal. Discovery came in waves. They crested a gentle rise, and there it was—a crystal-clear pool nestled in a hollow, its surface mirror-smooth, reflecting not the grove but starry skies that didn't match the dome above. Rory leaned over, her bright blue eyes staring back from the water, framed by her straight black hair. But in the reflection, her scar on the wrist gleamed silver, and faint lines of light traced her veins, as if the pool revealed hidden truths. "What is this?" she breathed, dipping a finger in. The water was warm, rippling outward in perfect circles that distorted the stars into swirling galaxies. A fish—or something like it—darted beneath, scales iridescent and shifting colors like oil on water. "A scrying pool, perhaps," Nyx said, their form bending low without disturbing the surface. "Fae-touched. It shows what might be, or what was." They reached out a shadowy hand, and the water recoiled, forming tiny waves that lapped at the edges with a sound like laughter. Rory pulled back, a shiver of wonder mixing with dread. The grove was beautiful, yes—wondrous in its defiance of seasons and logic—but it felt watchful, as if the flowers turned their faces to follow her, and the trees leaned in to listen. She clutched the Heartstone Pendant through her shirt; it pulsed warmer here, though this wasn't Hel. Was it reacting to the thinned Veil? The barrier between worlds, she'd heard Nyx call it once, weakening in winter like now, during the solstice approach. Deeper they went, the air growing thicker with that honeyed scent, almost cloying. Unease gnawed at her when they stumbled upon a ring of mushrooms, perfect white caps forming a fairy circle that hummed with faint energy. Rory circled it warily, remembering old Welsh tales her mother spun about fae traps. "Don't step in," she warned Nyx, though the shade needed no such caution—their form simply flowed around it, incorporeal wisps teasing the edges. But Nyx paused, their violet glow intensifying. "Something stirs." Their voice dropped to a bare whisper, wind rustling leaves. Rory froze, heart pounding. From the underbrush emerged... nothing at first. Then she saw it: no footprints marred the soft earth, but wildflowers bent aside as if pushed by an invisible walker. A figure materialized from the haze—an ethereal woman with waist-length silver hair that flowed like liquid moonlight, pale lavender eyes locking onto them with unnerving intensity. She was shorter than Rory, about five-foot-five, but her presence filled the grove like an ancient oak. Isolde Varga, the Seer. "You tread where mortals falter," Isolde said, her voice a riddle wrapped in melody, each word twisting like vines. "A shadow without sun, and a heart that pulses with stolen fire. What seeks you in my grove?" Rory swallowed, stepping forward despite the knot of unease twisting tighter. The woman's gaze pierced her, seeing too much, and yet her feet left no mark on the grass—no footprints, as if she floated just above the world. "We're looking for answers. About this." Rory pulled out the Heartstone Pendant, its deep crimson gem catching the false sunlight, glowing with an inner fire. Isolde tilted her head, silver hair cascading. "Ah, the glutton's bauble, from Dymas where feasts never end and bellies burst with longing. It warms near the gates of Hel, does it not? But here, in this pocket between realms, it hungers for more." She couldn't lie—Rory had heard that much about fae—but her words misled, circling the truth like predators. Nyx shifted, their form solidifying protectively beside Rory. "We seek the one who gave it. And knowledge of the Veil's rifts. Shadows speak of unrest." Isolde's lavender eyes sparkled with amusement or warning—hard to tell. "Unrest brews where barriers thin, especially now, as winter's breath weakens the shroud. But gifts from Hel carry prices, mortal child. Indulgence lures, yet devours." She glided closer, leaving no trail, and extended a hand. From nowhere, she produced a slender dagger—moonsilver blade, leaf-shaped and cold to the touch, faintly luminescent even in the grove's light. "Take this, forged in courts I once called home. It cuts wards and demons alike. A gift, for the path ahead grows thorny." Rory accepted it hesitantly, the hilt chilling her palm like frost. Wonder bloomed in her chest—this blade, a piece of fae legend, now hers. But unease lingered; why give it? What did Isolde see in her visions that she wouldn't say outright? As they spoke, time's trickery revealed itself. What felt like minutes stretched—the golden light in the grove shifted to a softer amber, as if hours had passed, though Rory's watch had stopped the moment they entered. Outside, in the mortal park, who knew how long they'd been gone? Days? Weeks? The thought sent a chill through her, despite the warmth. They delved into questions, Isolde's riddles unfolding layers of lore. She spoke of the Veil's shimmering distortions, visible only to those like Nyx with supernatural sight, monitored by wardens Rory had never heard of. Of Hel's realms, like Dymas with its amber skies and endless orchards, ruled by a prince of sloth and excess. Of fae courts where time twisted even more capriciously than here. Discovery peaked when Isolde led them to the grove's heart—a massive oak, its trunk hollowed into a natural chamber lined with glowing fungi that pulsed like heartbeats. Inside, visions danced on the walls: fleeting images of Rory's past—her father's stern face in Cardiff, Evan's cruel grip, the flight to London—and futures hazy, portals yawning open to worlds of shadow and flame. Unease crested into near-panic when a low rumble shook the grove, vines tightening like snares. "The Veil strains," Isolde warned, her riddles sharpening. "Intruders probe from beyond. Demons scent weakness." Nyx's form darkened, ready to slip into shadows. Rory gripped the fae-forged blade, its cold edge a comfort. Wonder warred with fear—this place, alien and alive, had peeled back layers of her world, revealing wonders she'd never imagined. But as they prepared to leave, the standing stones humming with farewell, Rory couldn't shake the feeling that stepping out would change everything, the grove's magic clinging to her like pollen, promising more discoveries—and dangers—yet to come.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Their voice echoed strangely [strangely]"
dialogueSentences21
tagDensity0.714
leniency1
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.067
88.64% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1761
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"truly"
count1
1
adverb"quickly"
count1
2
adverb"warily"
count1
3
adverb"hesitantly"
count1
highlights
0"truly"
1"quickly"
2"warily"
3"hesitantly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
14.82% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1761
totalAiIsms30
found
0
word"chill"
count3
1
word"warmth"
count3
2
word"reminder"
count1
3
word"scanning"
count1
4
word"whisper"
count3
5
word"loomed"
count1
6
word"etched"
count1
7
word"mosaic"
count1
8
word"silk"
count1
9
word"pulsed"
count3
10
word"echoed"
count1
11
word"crystal"
count2
12
word"traced"
count1
13
word"perfect"
count2
14
word"pounding"
count1
15
word"intensity"
count1
16
word"cascading"
count1
17
word"chilling"
count1
18
word"delved"
count1
19
word"fleeting"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"warmth"
2"reminder"
3"scanning"
4"whisper"
5"loomed"
6"etched"
7"mosaic"
8"silk"
9"pulsed"
10"echoed"
11"crystal"
12"traced"
13"perfect"
14"pounding"
15"intensity"
16"cascading"
17"chilling"
18"delved"
19"fleeting"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"sent a shiver through"
count1
highlights
0"sent a chill through"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences94
matches
0"g with dread"
1"d with fear"
97.26% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences94
filterMatches
0"see"
1"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences101
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen55
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1716
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions20
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions71
wordCount1481
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity1.49
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Heartstone3
Pendant3
Nyx13
Rory22
Welsh2
London2
Unease3
Golden1
Empress1
Cardiff2
Evan2
Hel2
Veil2
Varga1
Seer1
Isolde8
Dymas1
persons
0"Pendant"
1"Nyx"
2"Rory"
3"Unease"
4"Evan"
5"Hel"
6"Veil"
7"Isolde"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Golden"
4"Cardiff"
globalScore0.757
windowScore0.667
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences82
glossingSentenceCount6
matches
0"symbols that seemed to shift when Rory blinked"
1"as if greeting intruders"
2"felt like a dream she'd once had, vivid"
3"sounded like murmured secrets, the trickle"
4"something like it—darted beneath, scales iri"
5"felt like minutes stretched—the golden"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.583
wordCount1716
matches
0"not the grove but starry skies"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences101
matches
0"heard that much"
70.47% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs31
mean55.35
std21.96
cv0.397
sampleLengths
091
136
227
374
454
520
642
775
858
955
1055
1115
1286
1379
1440
1546
1684
1774
1819
1979
2037
2163
2260
2325
2489
2542
2660
2765
2861
2930
3075
97.80% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences94
matches
0"was gone"
1"been gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs274
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount26
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences24
totalSentences101
ratio0.238
matches
0"She glanced sideways at Nyx, who glided beside her in their semi-solid form—a towering silhouette of swirling shadows, edges blurring into the dim twilight like ink bleeding on wet paper."
1"They'd come seeking answers—rumors of a seer in the park, a half-fae exile who spoke in riddles but never lied."
2"Up ahead, a cluster of ancient oaks loomed, their trunks twisted into shapes that mimicked standing stones—gnarled roots forming archways, bark etched with symbols that seemed to shift when Rory blinked."
3"Wildflowers erupted underfoot—vibrant poppies, lupines, and foxgloves in riotous colors, blooming impossibly in what should have been midwinter."
4"Rory knelt, touching one tentatively; it was soft as silk, releasing a scent that made her head swim with memories of sun-drenched Welsh fields from her childhood."
5"But it wasn't sunlight—not truly."
6"Vines twisted up tree trunks, bearing fruits Rory didn't recognize—plump orbs that glowed faintly, emitting a soft hum like distant bees."
7"They crested a gentle rise, and there it was—a crystal-clear pool nestled in a hollow, its surface mirror-smooth, reflecting not the grove but starry skies that didn't match the dome above."
8"A fish—or something like it—darted beneath, scales iridescent and shifting colors like oil on water."
9"The grove was beautiful, yes—wondrous in its defiance of seasons and logic—but it felt watchful, as if the flowers turned their faces to follow her, and the trees leaned in to listen."
10"She clutched the Heartstone Pendant through her shirt; it pulsed warmer here, though this wasn't Hel."
11"\"Don't step in,\" she warned Nyx, though the shade needed no such caution—their form simply flowed around it, incorporeal wisps teasing the edges."
12"A figure materialized from the haze—an ethereal woman with waist-length silver hair that flowed like liquid moonlight, pale lavender eyes locking onto them with unnerving intensity."
13"The woman's gaze pierced her, seeing too much, and yet her feet left no mark on the grass—no footprints, as if she floated just above the world."
14"\"Ah, the glutton's bauble, from Dymas where feasts never end and bellies burst with longing. It warms near the gates of Hel, does it not? But here, in this pocket between realms, it hungers for more.\" She couldn't lie—Rory had heard that much about fae—but her words misled, circling the truth like predators."
15"Isolde's lavender eyes sparkled with amusement or warning—hard to tell."
16"From nowhere, she produced a slender dagger—moonsilver blade, leaf-shaped and cold to the touch, faintly luminescent even in the grove's light."
17"Wonder bloomed in her chest—this blade, a piece of fae legend, now hers."
18"But unease lingered; why give it?"
19"What felt like minutes stretched—the golden light in the grove shifted to a softer amber, as if hours had passed, though Rory's watch had stopped the moment they entered."
20"Discovery peaked when Isolde led them to the grove's heart—a massive oak, its trunk hollowed into a natural chamber lined with glowing fungi that pulsed like heartbeats."
21"Inside, visions danced on the walls: fleeting images of Rory's past—her father's stern face in Cardiff, Evan's cruel grip, the flight to London—and futures hazy, portals yawning open to worlds of shadow and flame."
22"Wonder warred with fear—this place, alien and alive, had peeled back layers of her world, revealing wonders she'd never imagined."
23"But as they prepared to leave, the standing stones humming with farewell, Rory couldn't shake the feeling that stepping out would change everything, the grove's magic clinging to her like pollen, promising more discoveries—and dangers—yet to come."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount335
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount5
adverbRatio0.014925373134328358
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.008955223880597015
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences101
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences101
mean16.99
std9.79
cv0.576
sampleLengths
025
127
230
39
413
523
615
712
820
936
1018
1131
1223
1320
147
1514
1618
173
1816
1918
2014
2127
226
2331
245
2516
2616
2739
285
2924
3018
318
326
339
3416
3521
3618
3731
384
3931
4018
4126
429
4316
4415
4514
4632
4710
4832
4916
67.33% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.4158415841584158
totalSentences101
uniqueOpeners42
36.23% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences92
matches
0"Then she saw it: no"
ratio0.011
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount22
totalSentences92
matches
0"She glanced sideways at Nyx,"
1"Their violet eyes glowed faintly,"
2"They'd come seeking answers—rumors of"
3"She hesitated, fingers brushing the"
4"They carpeted the ground in"
5"she whispered, standing"
6"It pulsed with an inner"
7"Their voice echoed strangely, as"
8"She thought of her flat"
9"They pressed deeper into the"
10"She heard things now: the"
11"They crested a gentle rise,"
12"she breathed, dipping a finger"
13"They reached out a shadowy"
14"She clutched the Heartstone Pendant"
15"she warned Nyx, though the"
16"Their voice dropped to a"
17"She was shorter than Rory,"
18"She couldn't lie—Rory had heard"
19"She glided closer, leaving no"
ratio0.239
68.70% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount72
totalSentences92
matches
0"Rory's boots crunched over the"
1"The Heartstone Pendant hung heavy"
2"She glanced sideways at Nyx,"
3"Their violet eyes glowed faintly,"
4"Rory asked, her voice low,"
5"The park felt wrong tonight,"
6"Nyx's response came as a"
7"They'd come seeking answers—rumors of"
8"Eva had mentioned her once,"
9"Nyx had tagged along uninvited,"
10"She hesitated, fingers brushing the"
11"Nyx murmured, their form flickering"
12"Rory nodded, steeling herself, and"
13"The moment her foot crossed"
14"A faint shimmering distortion rippled"
15"The chill vanished, replaced by"
16"Wildflowers erupted underfoot—vibrant poppies, lupines,"
17"They carpeted the ground in"
18"Rory knelt, touching one tentatively;"
19"she whispered, standing"
ratio0.783
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences92
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences59
technicalSentenceCount19
matches
0"The Heartstone Pendant hung heavy against her chest, its faint warmth a constant reminder of the unknown benefactor who'd slipped it into her delivery bag weeks…"
1"She glanced sideways at Nyx, who glided beside her in their semi-solid form—a towering silhouette of swirling shadows, edges blurring into the dim twilight like…"
2"The park felt wrong tonight, the usual joggers and dog-walkers absent, as if the world had conspired to empty the space for them."
3"They'd come seeking answers—rumors of a seer in the park, a half-fae exile who spoke in riddles but never lied."
4"Up ahead, a cluster of ancient oaks loomed, their trunks twisted into shapes that mimicked standing stones—gnarled roots forming archways, bark etched with symb…"
5"They carpeted the ground in a living mosaic, petals unfurling as if greeting intruders."
6"Rory knelt, touching one tentatively; it was soft as silk, releasing a scent that made her head swim with memories of sun-drenched Welsh fields from her childho…"
7"The sky above was no longer the slate-gray of London dusk but a canopy of interwoven branches forming a verdant dome, sunlight filtering through in golden shaft…"
8"They pressed deeper into the grove, the pathless clearing unfolding like a labyrinth that reshaped itself."
9"Vines twisted up tree trunks, bearing fruits Rory didn't recognize—plump orbs that glowed faintly, emitting a soft hum like distant bees."
10"They crested a gentle rise, and there it was—a crystal-clear pool nestled in a hollow, its surface mirror-smooth, reflecting not the grove but starry skies that…"
11"But in the reflection, her scar on the wrist gleamed silver, and faint lines of light traced her veins, as if the pool revealed hidden truths."
12"The water was warm, rippling outward in perfect circles that distorted the stars into swirling galaxies."
13"The grove was beautiful, yes—wondrous in its defiance of seasons and logic—but it felt watchful, as if the flowers turned their faces to follow her, and the tre…"
14"Unease gnawed at her when they stumbled upon a ring of mushrooms, perfect white caps forming a fairy circle that hummed with faint energy."
15"Then she saw it: no footprints marred the soft earth, but wildflowers bent aside as if pushed by an invisible walker."
16"A figure materialized from the haze—an ethereal woman with waist-length silver hair that flowed like liquid moonlight, pale lavender eyes locking onto them with…"
17"The woman's gaze pierced her, seeing too much, and yet her feet left no mark on the grass—no footprints, as if she floated just above the world."
18"But as they prepared to leave, the standing stones humming with farewell, Rory couldn't shake the feeling that stepping out would change everything, the grove's…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"Rory asked, her voice low, breath fogging the air"
1"Their voice echoed strangely, as if carried from a great distance, though they stood close enough for Rory to feel the cool void emanating from their form"
2"Nyx said, their form bending low without disturbing the surface"
3"They reached out, and the water recoiled, forming tiny waves that lapped at the edges with a sound like laughter"
4"she warned, though the shade needed no such caution—their form simply flowed around it, incorporeal wisps teasing the edges"
5"Isolde warned, her riddles sharpening"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount7
fancyTags
0"Eva had (have)"
1"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
2"she whispered (whisper)"
3"she breathed (breathe)"
4"she warned (warn)"
5"She couldn't (could)"
6"Isolde warned (warn)"
dialogueSentences21
tagDensity0.476
leniency0.952
rawRatio0.7
effectiveRatio0.667
70.2637%