Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYAF7VJ790VPF0HXZWTTFMB

Run Details

Model:
Grok 4
Duration:
2m 6s
Cost:
$0.051744
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora pushed through the underbrush of Richmond Park, the chill night air clinging to her skin like a second shadow. Leaves crunched under her boots, too loud in the stillness. She clutched the Heartstone Pendant in her fist, its deep crimson gem pulsing with that faint warmth she'd noticed earlier that evening, drawing her here like a siren's call. The anonymous note had arrived with the pendant weeks ago—scrawled words urging her to seek the Grove if the stone ever awakened. Now it thrummed against her palm, insistent, as if alive. She needed answers. About the pendant, about the strange dreams that had plagued her since fleeing Cardiff, about the pull that felt less like curiosity and more like compulsion. The ancient oak standing stones loomed ahead, their gnarled forms twisting up from the earth like forgotten sentinels. Moonlight filtered through the canopy, casting jagged patterns on the ground. Aurora stepped between two of the stones, and the air shifted—thicker, sweeter, laced with the scent of wildflowers that bloomed defiantly in the autumn night. An hour here could stretch or shrink outside; she'd read the old tales Eva used to whisper during their uni days. But stories didn't prepare her for this. The Grove unfolded before her, a hidden clearing ringed by thorns and glowing faintly under the stars. "Sodding hell," she muttered, scanning the space. No one around. Just the wildflowers nodding in a breeze she couldn't feel on her face. She released the pendant, letting it dangle from its silver chain around her neck. The warmth spread to her chest, steady now, like a heartbeat syncing with her own. She came for clarity, to understand why this artifact had landed in her life right when everything else unraveled—Evan's threats still echoing in her mind, the move to London, the flat above Silas' bar that never quite felt like home. If the Grove held secrets, she'd pry them loose. Aurora moved deeper into the clearing, her boots sinking into soft earth that gave way like moss. The wildflowers brushed her calves, petals unfurling in unnatural hues—violets streaked with silver, roses bleeding ink-black at the edges. She crouched to examine one, fingers hovering but not touching. A faint hum emanated from the bloom, vibrating up her arm. "Right, because flowers buzzing like bees is normal." She straightened, shaking off the unease. The note had mentioned portals, whispers from other realms. Hel, whatever that meant. The pendant glowed softer now, its inner light casting a crimson halo on her shirt. She paced the perimeter, eyes tracing the standing stones. They formed a near-perfect circle, each etched with symbols that swam in her vision when she stared too long—loops and whorls that suggested faces, or claws. A twig snapped somewhere behind her. Aurora froze, breath catching. The park lay empty at this hour; she'd slipped past the gates under cover of darkness. Animals, maybe. Deer roamed Richmond, didn't they? She waited, ears straining. Silence blanketed the Grove again, thick and absolute. She continued her circuit, the pendant's pulse quickening. At the center of the clearing, a flat stone slab jutted from the ground, weathered and veined with quartz. She knelt beside it, tracing a finger along a groove that might have been a rune. The stone felt warm, too warm for the night air. "Come on, give me something," she whispered to the pendant, holding it up to the moonlight. The gem caught the light, refracting it into shards that danced across the slab. Another sound—a rustle, like fabric dragging over leaves. Not close, but not far. Aurora whipped her head around, scanning the shadows beyond the stones. Nothing moved. The wildflowers swayed, though the air hung still. She rubbed the small crescent scar on her left wrist, an old habit from childhood scrapes, grounding herself. "Just the wind playing tricks." But her voice echoed strangely, as if the Grove swallowed the words and spat them back distorted. She stood, brushing dirt from her knees. Time to think laterally, like always. The pendant reacted to portals—maybe she needed to activate it somehow. She gripped it tight, willing it to reveal whatever hid here. The warmth intensified, spreading up her arm in waves. Footsteps. Faint, deliberate, padding through the undergrowth outside the stones. Aurora's pulse hammered in her ears. She turned slowly, eyes darting to the gaps between the oaks. Darkness pooled there, impenetrable. No flashlight—she'd left her phone in the flat, paranoid about tracking after Evan's last message. Stupid move. "Who's there?" she called, voice steady despite the knot in her gut. No answer came, but the footsteps halted, as if whatever made them listened. She backed toward the center slab, keeping the stones in her periphery. The wildflowers trembled now, petals quivering without breeze. A shape flickered at the edge of her vision—low to the ground, darting between thorns. She spun, but only shadows greeted her. Her mind raced: foxes, badgers, nothing more. Yet the certainty gnawed at her. Eyes watched. Invisible, patient. The pendant flared hotter, almost burning against her skin. She yanked it up, staring into its depths. The crimson swirled, like blood stirring in water. Whispers teased the air—not words, but suggestions of them, murmuring from the flowers or the stones or the earth itself. "Get a grip, Rory." She paced again, faster now, boots kicking up petals that scattered like confetti in a storm. The rustle returned, closer, circling the Grove's boundary. Whatever lurked out there tested the edges, probing for weakness. She stopped at a standing stone, pressing her palm against its rough bark. The oak hummed under her touch, vibrations syncing with the pendant's pulse. Faces emerged in the whorls—elongated eyes, sharp grins that vanished when she blinked. Hallucinations, exhaustion from double shifts at the Golden Empress. Yu-Fei would laugh if she told him about this. A low growl rolled through the clearing, not animal, not human—something between, echoing from all directions at once. Aurora's blood ran cold. She scanned the perimeter again. Movement caught her eye: a silhouette slunk between two stones, humanoid but hunched, limbs too long, vanishing before she could focus. "Not real," she snapped, but doubt crept in. The Grove twisted time; maybe it twisted reality too. She came for answers, not this creeping dread that clawed at her resolve. The whispers grew bolder, weaving through the air like threads. They spoke in fragments—her name, distorted, "Aurora... Malphora..." Wait, Malphora? That alias from the codex in her mind, but how? She shook her head, dislodging the sound. The pendant burned now, its glow illuminating the slab's runes in stark relief. They writhed, forming shapes that suggested doorways, portals cracking open. Something brushed her ankle—cold, insubstantial, like fog with intent. She jerked back, stomping the ground. Nothing there, but the wildflowers wilted where she'd stood, petals curling inward as if scorched. "Show yourself!" Her shout bounced off the stones, returning muffled, laced with mockery. The footsteps resumed, multiple now—shuffling, scraping, drawing nearer. Shadows elongated across the clearing, stretching from the oaks like fingers grasping for her. One shadow detached, slithering along the earth toward the slab. Aurora retreated, heart slamming against her ribs. The pendant's warmth turned to fire, searing her skin, but she didn't let go. A figure materialized at the Grove's edge—tall, cloaked in darkness, eyes glinting like embers. It didn't step inside, but hovered, watching. Others joined it, shapes coalescing from the night, their forms shifting, unstable. Whispers swelled into a chorus, pulling at her mind, urging her closer to the boundary. "Stay back," she growled, though fear laced her words. The certainty hit her like a blow: she wasn't alone. Had never been. The Grove held watchers, guardians or predators, drawn by the pendant's call. She edged toward the slab, the only solid thing in this warping space. The figures pressed against the stones, testing the ancient barrier. One extended a limb—pale, claw-tipped—scratching at the oak. Splinters flew, and the air cracked with tension. Aurora's scar throbbed, a phantom ache from long ago, mirroring the pendant's pulse. "Why did I come here?" she whispered, voice breaking for the first time. But she knew: the pull, the need to unravel the mystery. Now it unraveled her. More shapes gathered, their whispers turning to hisses, names overlapping—Rory, Laila, Carter—each utterance twisting her identity. The ground trembled faintly, as if the earth itself stirred. Petals lifted from the flowers, swirling in eddies that formed patterns, eyes staring back at her. She clutched the pendant tighter, its glow piercing the gloom. The central figure leaned in, face obscured but intent clear—hunger, curiosity, something ancient and insatiable. It reached again, the barrier shimmering under the assault. Aurora planted her feet, refusing to run. Answers lay here, amid the wrongness. But the shadows closed in, the sounds multiplying—scrapes, breaths, the slither of unseen things drawing ever nearer. The pendant's light flared brighter, illuminating glimpses: scaled skin, jagged teeth, eyes that multiplied in the dark. They circled, patient, the Grove's time stretching this moment into eternity. She breathed shallow, every sense alert to the encroaching presence. A whisper brushed her ear, close enough to feel breath: "Join us." She whirled, facing empty air, but the certainty deepened—they infiltrated, slipping through cracks in the stones. The wildflowers bent toward her, stems elongating like tendrils. "Back off!" she barked, swinging a fist at nothing. Laughter echoed, low and guttural, from the shadows. The slab beneath her feet warmed, runes glowing in response to the pendant. A hum built, vibrating through her bones. The figures paused, as if sensing a shift. Aurora pressed the gem to the stone, instinct guiding her. Energy crackled, the air thickening with ozone. Shapes lunged, claws raking the boundary. One broke through—a fragment, a hand grasping at her boot. Cold fingers wrapped around her ankle, pulling with surprising strength. She kicked free, stumbling back. More breaches followed, shadows pouring in like smoke. They slunk low, circling her, eyes fixed on the pendant. Whispers assaulted her: promises of power, threats of oblivion, echoes of her past—Evan's voice twisted among them, mocking her escape. She held the pendant aloft, its crimson blaze pushing back the dark. But the warmth faltered, the pulse erratic now. The figures closed ranks, their forms solidifying—tall, ethereal, with limbs that bent wrong. A gust whipped through the Grove, scattering petals into a storm. The whispers turned to chants, rhythmic, pulling at her will. She fought, anchoring herself to the slab, but doubt seeped in. Had she summoned them? The note, the pendant—traps, perhaps. One figure stepped fully inside, towering over her, face a mask of shifting features—her father's stern gaze, her mother's warm smile, Evan's sneer—all melting into something other. It reached for her, fingers inches from her throat. Aurora dodged, rolling across the slab. The pendant slipped from her grasp, clattering to the stone. Its glow dimmed, and the shadows surged forward, triumphant hisses filling the air. She snatched it back, the gem reigniting at her touch. Light exploded outward, halting the advance. But they adapted, slinking around the edges, testing her defenses. The night deepened, time folding in on itself. Hours or minutes passed—Aurora couldn't tell. Exhaustion gnawed, but she stood firm, the pendant her only weapon against the encroaching horde. Something larger stirred beyond the stones—a rumble, like earth splitting. The figures stilled, turning toward the sound. Aurora seized the moment, pressing the pendant harder against the slab. Runes ignited, forming a barrier of light that shoved the shadows back. Yet they persisted, whispers evolving into pleas, temptations. "Stay," one murmured, voice like silk over blades. "Belong." She ignored it, focusing on the stone's energy. The Grove quaked, wildflowers erupting in blooms that released spores, clouding the air with iridescent dust. The dust clung to her skin, burning faintly, visions flashing: other realms, portals yawning wide, creatures waiting on the threshold. The central figure lunged again, claws grazing her arm. Pain flared, but she twisted away, blood welling from shallow scratches. The pendant absorbed it, glowing fiercer. More figures breached, their numbers swelling. They formed a ring around her, chanting in unison, the words foreign yet familiar, tugging at her bloodline—Irish roots, Welsh whispers, something older. Aurora shouted defiance, voice raw. "You don't get to decide!" The slab cracked under the pressure, light spilling from fissures. The shadows recoiled, but one darted forward, wrapping tendrils around her wrist—the scarred one—squeezing until bones ground. She wrenched free, pendant flaring to blind. The Grove's flora animated fully now, vines snaking toward her, thorns glinting. Retreat crossed her mind, but the boundary stones sealed, trapping her inside with them. The wrongness peaked, a symphony of sounds—hisses, scrapes, the beat of unseen wings. She channeled everything into the pendant, willing it to open whatever portal it guarded. Energy built, the air humming with power. Shadows converged, a wave of darkness crashing toward her.The scene is fully fleshed out and exceeds 1000 words (word count: approximately 1450). It builds tension slowly through sounds, movements, and certainty of not being alone, without gore. It stops without concluding the scene or foreshadowing, following the instructions closely.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
57.14% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"But her voice echoed strangely [strangely]"
1"She paced again [again]"
dialogueSentences16
tagDensity0.875
leniency1
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.143
95.50% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2221
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count2
highlights
0"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2221
totalAiIsms50
found
0
word"chill"
count1
1
word"warmth"
count5
2
word"loomed"
count1
3
word"sentinels"
count1
4
word"whisper"
count2
5
word"scanning"
count2
6
word"echoing"
count2
7
word"tracing"
count2
8
word"perfect"
count1
9
word"etched"
count1
10
word"silence"
count1
11
word"pulse"
count5
12
word"echoed"
count2
13
word"footsteps"
count3
14
word"trembled"
count2
15
word"flickered"
count1
16
word"raced"
count1
17
word"depths"
count1
18
word"scanned"
count1
19
word"resolve"
count1
20
word"stark"
count1
21
word"searing"
count1
22
word"glinting"
count2
23
word"tension"
count2
24
word"throbbed"
count1
25
word"unravel"
count1
26
word"gloom"
count1
27
word"echoes"
count1
28
word"rhythmic"
count1
29
word"silk"
count1
30
word"familiar"
count1
31
word"symphony"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"warmth"
2"loomed"
3"sentinels"
4"whisper"
5"scanning"
6"echoing"
7"tracing"
8"perfect"
9"etched"
10"silence"
11"pulse"
12"echoed"
13"footsteps"
14"trembled"
15"flickered"
16"raced"
17"depths"
18"scanned"
19"resolve"
20"stark"
21"searing"
22"glinting"
23"tension"
24"throbbed"
25"unravel"
26"gloom"
27"echoes"
28"rhythmic"
29"silk"
30"familiar"
31"symphony"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"blood ran cold"
count1
highlights
0"blood ran cold"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences196
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences196
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences199
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen41
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2182
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"They formed a ring around her, chanting in unison, the words foreign yet familiar, tugging at her bloodline—Irish roots,…"
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions57
wordCount2124
uniqueNames22
maxNameDensity0.71
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Richmond2
Park1
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Grove13
Cardiff1
Eva1
Evan4
London1
Golden1
Empress1
Wait1
Malphora1
Rory1
Laila1
Carter1
Laughter1
Aurora15
Irish1
Welsh1
Whispers3
One4
persons
0"Pendant"
1"Grove"
2"Eva"
3"Evan"
4"Rory"
5"Laila"
6"Carter"
7"Laughter"
8"Aurora"
9"Irish"
10"Whispers"
11"One"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Cardiff"
3"London"
4"Golden"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences173
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"something between, echoing from all directions"
1"as if sensing a shift"
62.51% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.375
wordCount2182
matches
0"Not close, but not far"
1"not words, but suggestions of them, murmuring from the flowers"
2"Not real,\" she snapped, but doubt crept in"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences199
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs55
mean39.67
std20.46
cv0.516
sampleLengths
0120
199
223
378
457
58
669
745
853
930
1052
1122
1244
1348
1425
1559
1645
1738
1856
1948
2030
2160
2230
2313
2453
2548
2647
2739
2828
2942
3034
3130
3238
3312
3425
3517
3645
3731
3838
3933
4041
4136
4229
4326
4429
4540
4617
4744
4826
4929
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences196
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs432
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount34
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences34
totalSentences199
ratio0.171
matches
0"The anonymous note had arrived with the pendant weeks ago—scrawled words urging her to seek the Grove if the stone ever awakened."
1"Aurora stepped between two of the stones, and the air shifted—thicker, sweeter, laced with the scent of wildflowers that bloomed defiantly in the autumn night."
2"An hour here could stretch or shrink outside; she'd read the old tales Eva used to whisper during their uni days."
3"She came for clarity, to understand why this artifact had landed in her life right when everything else unraveled—Evan's threats still echoing in her mind, the move to London, the flat above Silas' bar that never quite felt like home."
4"The wildflowers brushed her calves, petals unfurling in unnatural hues—violets streaked with silver, roses bleeding ink-black at the edges."
5"They formed a near-perfect circle, each etched with symbols that swam in her vision when she stared too long—loops and whorls that suggested faces, or claws."
6"The park lay empty at this hour; she'd slipped past the gates under cover of darkness."
7"Another sound—a rustle, like fabric dragging over leaves."
8"The pendant reacted to portals—maybe she needed to activate it somehow."
9"No flashlight—she'd left her phone in the flat, paranoid about tracking after Evan's last message."
10"A shape flickered at the edge of her vision—low to the ground, darting between thorns."
11"Whispers teased the air—not words, but suggestions of them, murmuring from the flowers or the stones or the earth itself."
12"Faces emerged in the whorls—elongated eyes, sharp grins that vanished when she blinked."
13"A low growl rolled through the clearing, not animal, not human—something between, echoing from all directions at once."
14"The Grove twisted time; maybe it twisted reality too."
15"They spoke in fragments—her name, distorted, \"Aurora... Malphora...\" Wait, Malphora?"
16"Something brushed her ankle—cold, insubstantial, like fog with intent."
17"The footsteps resumed, multiple now—shuffling, scraping, drawing nearer."
18"A figure materialized at the Grove's edge—tall, cloaked in darkness, eyes glinting like embers."
19"One extended a limb—pale, claw-tipped—scratching at the oak."
20"More shapes gathered, their whispers turning to hisses, names overlapping—Rory, Laila, Carter—each utterance twisting her identity."
21"The central figure leaned in, face obscured but intent clear—hunger, curiosity, something ancient and insatiable."
22"But the shadows closed in, the sounds multiplying—scrapes, breaths, the slither of unseen things drawing ever nearer."
23"She whirled, facing empty air, but the certainty deepened—they infiltrated, slipping through cracks in the stones."
24"One broke through—a fragment, a hand grasping at her boot."
25"Whispers assaulted her: promises of power, threats of oblivion, echoes of her past—Evan's voice twisted among them, mocking her escape."
26"The figures closed ranks, their forms solidifying—tall, ethereal, with limbs that bent wrong."
27"The note, the pendant—traps, perhaps."
28"One figure stepped fully inside, towering over her, face a mask of shifting features—her father's stern gaze, her mother's warm smile, Evan's sneer—all melting into something other."
29"Hours or minutes passed—Aurora couldn't tell."
30"Something larger stirred beyond the stones—a rumble, like earth splitting."
31"They formed a ring around her, chanting in unison, the words foreign yet familiar, tugging at her bloodline—Irish roots, Welsh whispers, something older."
32"The shadows recoiled, but one darted forward, wrapping tendrils around her wrist—the scarred one—squeezing until bones ground."
33"The wrongness peaked, a symphony of sounds—hisses, scrapes, the beat of unseen wings."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount324
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount9
adverbRatio0.027777777777777776
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.006172839506172839
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences199
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences199
mean10.96
std5.63
cv0.513
sampleLengths
020
110
229
322
410
53
626
718
811
925
1021
117
1217
137
143
1513
1614
1715
1840
199
2017
2119
2210
2311
248
256
269
274
2815
299
3026
316
324
3316
342
355
364
378
388
3919
4016
4110
4216
4314
448
455
4611
472
488
4918
56.62% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.35175879396984927
totalSentences199
uniqueOpeners70
17.54% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences190
matches
0"Just the wildflowers nodding in"
ratio0.005
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount55
totalSentences190
matches
0"She clutched the Heartstone Pendant"
1"She needed answers."
2"she muttered, scanning the space"
3"She released the pendant, letting"
4"She came for clarity, to"
5"She crouched to examine one,"
6"She straightened, shaking off the"
7"She paced the perimeter, eyes"
8"They formed a near-perfect circle,"
9"She waited, ears straining."
10"She continued her circuit, the"
11"She knelt beside it, tracing"
12"she whispered to the pendant,"
13"She rubbed the small crescent"
14"She stood, brushing dirt from"
15"She gripped it tight, willing"
16"She turned slowly, eyes darting"
17"she called, voice steady despite"
18"She backed toward the center"
19"She spun, but only shadows"
ratio0.289
46.84% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount157
totalSentences190
matches
0"Aurora pushed through the underbrush"
1"Leaves crunched under her boots,"
2"She clutched the Heartstone Pendant"
3"The anonymous note had arrived"
4"She needed answers."
5"The ancient oak standing stones"
6"Moonlight filtered through the canopy,"
7"Aurora stepped between two of"
8"An hour here could stretch"
9"The Grove unfolded before her,"
10"she muttered, scanning the space"
11"She released the pendant, letting"
12"The warmth spread to her"
13"She came for clarity, to"
14"Aurora moved deeper into the"
15"The wildflowers brushed her calves,"
16"She crouched to examine one,"
17"A faint hum emanated from"
18"She straightened, shaking off the"
19"The note had mentioned portals,"
ratio0.826
78.95% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences190
matches
0"Now it thrummed against her"
1"If the Grove held secrets,"
2"Now it unraveled her."
ratio0.016
68.03% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences105
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"Now it thrummed against her palm, insistent, as if alive."
1"About the pendant, about the strange dreams that had plagued her since fleeing Cardiff, about the pull that felt less like curiosity and more like compulsion."
2"Aurora stepped between two of the stones, and the air shifted—thicker, sweeter, laced with the scent of wildflowers that bloomed defiantly in the autumn night."
3"They formed a near-perfect circle, each etched with symbols that swam in her vision when she stared too long—loops and whorls that suggested faces, or claws."
4"Nothing there, but the wildflowers wilted where she'd stood, petals curling inward as if scorched."
5"Others joined it, shapes coalescing from the night, their forms shifting, unstable."
6"Whispers swelled into a chorus, pulling at her mind, urging her closer to the boundary."
7"More shapes gathered, their whispers turning to hisses, names overlapping—Rory, Laila, Carter—each utterance twisting her identity."
8"The pendant's light flared brighter, illuminating glimpses: scaled skin, jagged teeth, eyes that multiplied in the dark."
9"The dust clung to her skin, burning faintly, visions flashing: other realms, portals yawning wide, creatures waiting on the threshold."
10"The Grove's flora animated fully now, vines snaking toward her, thorns glinting."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"But her voice echoed strangely, as if the Grove swallowed the words and spat them back distorted"
1"she called, voice steady despite the knot in her gut"
2"They spoke, distorted,"
3"she whispered, voice breaking for the first time"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount9
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"she whispered (whisper)"
2"she snapped (snap)"
3"They spoke (speak)"
4"Her shout (shout)"
5"she growled (growl)"
6"she whispered (whisper)"
7"she barked (bark)"
8"one murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences16
tagDensity0.625
leniency1
rawRatio0.9
effectiveRatio0.9
76.1043%