Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYAFNDNA1P9AH3WFFP97G36

Run Details

Duration:
2m 24s
Cost:
$0.012419
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory adjusted her Golden Empress delivery bag’s strap, the fabric scratchy against her left wrist—her crescent scar pulled faintly, a ghost of childhood broken glass. She stepped over a frosted dandelion in Richmond Park’s usual oak-lined path, then froze. Isolde stood ten feet ahead, silver waist-length hair catching the gray winter sun, and not a single footprint marred the frosted grass beneath her pale boots. Nyx loomed beside Rory, their solid 6'2" form’s shadowy edges flickering like a dying candle’s flame; their faintly glowing violet eyes locked on the circle of gnarled oak standing stones Isolde now faced. Rory’s Heartstone pendant—crimson, thumbnail-sized, strung on a thin silver chain—throbbed against her chest, a warm pulse that seeped through her wool sweater. She pressed a finger to it, the metal cold even with the pendant’s heat. "No marks." Isolde turned, her pale lavender eyes unblinking. Her lips curved in a faint, ethereal smile, and she stepped closer—still no footprints, even as she shifted her weight. "Roots drink what steps deny; the unweighted find the hidden sky." Nyx’s voice curled around Rory’s ears, a whisper carried on a wind that didn’t stir the nearby mortal trees. They shifted their stance, their shadowy hand brushing Rory’s delivery bag; the fabric dimmed for a split second, as if drained of color. "The Veil’s shimmer clings here—threads of Fae weave through mortal dirt. My solid form strains; the Grove’s magic tugs at the realm-bound edges of my shadow." Rory nodded, her cool-headed wit kicking in. She’d fled Cardiff for London to escape Evan, to take her delivery job and crash in the flat above Silas’ bar—she was used to adapting to strange shifts, but this felt bigger than a missed delivery or a bar brawl. She stepped toward the standing stones, her boot crunching the frost; Isolde’s hand shot out, her fingers cold as the Fae-Forged Blade she’d gifted Rory (she’d tucked it into her delivery bag that morning, its moonsilver edge glinting when she’d checked). "Pause. The threshold bites those who rush the song." Rory halted. She glanced at Nyx, who’d let their shadowy edges bleed into the mortal grass—no bend, no trace of their touch. She then looked back at the standing stones: their bark was etched with faint, swirling runes she couldn’t read, and the air between them hummed like a beehive she’d stumbled on during a delivery to a suburban garden. She pulled her phone from her pocket, checking the time—3:17 p.m.—then stuffed it back. When she stepped through the standing stones with Isolde and Nyx, she froze again. The grass beneath her boots was soft, not frosted. Wildflowers bloomed in a riot around her: bluebells, poppies, daisies, all blooming at once, their petals glowing with a faint inner light. The sky above was a soft silver, not the gray London overcast, and the air smelled like honey and burnt cedar—something she’d never encountered on a delivery route. She pulled her phone out again; the screen was black, dead, and when she pressed the power button, nothing happened. "My phone’s dead. Clock read 3:17 five minutes ago—now it’s stuck." Isolde wandered toward a cluster of wildflowers, plucking one between her fingers; it didn’t wilt, even as she crushed its petal slightly. She turned back, her voice laced with riddle. "Sand slips fast where petals stay; an hour’s song may outlast a day." Nyx’s solid form flickered, their violet eyes flaring brighter. They reached for a wildflower, but their shadowy hand passed through it, leaving a faint trail of shimmering dust. They let out a quiet, wind-whispered exclamation. "My shadow cannot grasp the Grove’s life. Aldric’s old sorcerer senses tingle—this place holds memories I thought I’d lost to the realm between." Rory’s crescent scar throbbed again, louder this time. She pulled the Fae-Forged Blade from her delivery bag, its moonsilver edge glowing faintly in the Grove’s silver light; it was cold to the touch, as always, and she gripped it tightly, her cool-headed focus cutting through the rising unease. She scanned the clearing, noticing a small pool of water tucked between two oak trees—its surface was still, but when she stepped closer, she didn’t see her reflection. She saw her old Cardiff flat: Evan’s fist slamming into the wall, her shoving clothes into a duffel bag, Eva’s text popping up on her old phone—Flee to London. I’ve got a couch for you. "That’s my old flat in Cardiff—when I packed my bag for London." Isolde joined her at the pool, her silver hair brushing the water’s surface; no ripples formed. She spoke, her riddle sharp. "Reflection’s breath is not your own; it feeds on what you’ve left unknown." Nyx leaned over the pool, their shadowy form stretching over the water. They let out a wind-whispered gasp. "My sorcerer self’s face flickers there—Aldric’s failed summoning ritual in 1643, the circle of candles melting into the stone floor, the Veil swallowing me whole. The Grove’s water weaves the forgotten into its skin." Rory’s delivery bag felt heavier suddenly, as if it was filled with Evan’s old letters, with her Pre-Law textbooks she’d left in Cardiff, with all the things she’d tried to leave behind. She slung it off her shoulder, dumping it onto the soft grass; only her delivery slips, a leftover spring roll from Golden Empress, and the Fae-Forged Blade’s sheath tumbled out. She stared at the spring roll, its wrapper slightly crinkled—she’d grabbed it during her lunch break, forgetting to eat it. Nyx’s shadowy hand brushed the spring roll; the wrapper dimmed, then brightened again, as if the Grove was testing its mortal texture. They turned to Rory, their voice steadying. "The Grove does not recognize mortal scraps. It judges what’s bound to your soul, not your bag." Isolde wandered away from the pool, toward a cluster of taller oak trees. She called back, her riddle echoing through the Grove’s quiet. "The standing stones guard the door; the pool tells the unspoken core." Rory knelt, picking up the spring roll. She took a bite, the sweet and savory flavors bursting on her tongue—something normal, something mortal, in this alien place. She stood, gripping the Fae-Forged Blade in one hand and the half-eaten spring roll in the other. She glanced at Nyx, who’d shifted to a slightly incorporeal form, their shadowy edges blending with the oak trees’ shadows but not dissolving. "The Veil’s rift here—does it link to Hel too? My Heartstone’s still pulsing." She pressed a finger to her pendant, the warm pulse still thrumming against her chest. Nyx’s violet eyes locked on the pendant, their voice curving with curiosity. "Hel’s portals hum with a different heat, but the Veil’s threads are tangled here—Fae and mortal and Hel, all woven into the Grove’s roots. Your pendant senses the tangled rift, not just Hel’s doors." Isolde stopped at the taller oak trees, turning back. She had no footprints leading to her, no trace of her passage through the wildflowers. She spoke, her riddle sharpened by the Grove’s magic. "Tangled threads do not break; they weave the path you cannot take." Rory’s cool-headed thinking kicked in. She tucked the Fae-Forged Blade back into her delivery bag, slinging the strap over her shoulder. She stepped toward Isolde, her boot pressing a wildflower’s petal— it glowed brighter, then curled slightly, as if acknowledging her presence. Nyx followed, their solid form flickering again, their shadowy hand brushing Rory’s arm; she didn’t feel a touch, just a faint chill that seeped through her sweater. She noticed a faint shimmer in the air above the taller oak trees—The Veil’s appearance, visible only to those with supernatural sight. Nyx pointed to it, their wind-whisper voice tight. "The Veil’s shimmer—here’s the rift point the Wardens monitor. They haven’t found it yet; the Grove’s magic hides it." Rory nodded. She’d never thought her delivery job would lead her to a Fae-touched Grove, to a Shade and a Half-Fae seer, to a rift in the Veil that hid forgotten memories. She took another bite of the spring roll, savoring the mortal flavor, as she followed Isolde deeper into the Grove’s wildflower-lined path. The Heartstone pendant pulsed again, warmer this time, and her crescent scar pulled faintly— a reminder of her past, of her present, of the unknown she was now stepping into. She glanced at the wildflowers passing by, their glowing petals painting streaks of color across her peripheral vision, and noted that Nyx’s shadowy edges now clung to the flowers’ light, as if the Grove’s magic was beginning to soften the realm-bound strain of their form.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences26
tagDensity0.423
leniency0.846
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
79.51% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1464
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count4
1
adverb"tightly"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"tightly"
2"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
41.94% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1464
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"loomed"
count1
1
word"throbbed"
count2
2
word"pulse"
count2
3
word"weight"
count1
4
word"whisper"
count2
5
word"glinting"
count1
6
word"etched"
count1
7
word"flickered"
count1
8
word"scanned"
count1
9
word"echoing"
count1
10
word"unspoken"
count1
11
word"chill"
count1
12
word"pulsed"
count1
13
word"reminder"
count1
highlights
0"loomed"
1"throbbed"
2"pulse"
3"weight"
4"whisper"
5"glinting"
6"etched"
7"flickered"
8"scanned"
9"echoing"
10"unspoken"
11"chill"
12"pulsed"
13"reminder"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences34
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences34
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences50
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen133
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1423
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions79
wordCount1132
uniqueNames22
maxNameDensity1.24
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Golden2
Empress2
Richmond1
Park1
Rory14
Heartstone3
Grove9
Cardiff3
London3
Evan3
Nyx12
Isolde9
Fae-Forged4
Blade4
Eva1
Flee1
Pre-Law1
Hel1
Veil2
Fae-touched1
Shade1
Half-Fae1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Heartstone"
2"Grove"
3"Evan"
4"Nyx"
5"Isolde"
6"Blade"
7"Eva"
8"Hel"
places
0"Golden"
1"Richmond"
2"Park"
3"Cardiff"
4"London"
5"Veil"
6"Fae-touched"
7"Shade"
globalScore0.882
windowScore0.667
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences33
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"smelled like honey and burnt cedar—somethi"
1"as if acknowledging her presence"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1423
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences50
matches
0"noted that Nyx’s"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs38
mean37.45
std30.7
cv0.82
sampleLengths
098
136
22
327
411
542
626
788
89
960
1028
1179
1211
1330
1413
1535
1623
17111
1812
1921
2013
2118
2234
2382
2429
2517
2623
2712
2867
2913
3027
3134
3233
3312
3469
3530
3619
37129
74.30% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences34
matches
0"was etched"
1"was filled"
2"bound"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs187
matches
0"was testing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount17
semicolonCount17
flaggedSentences27
totalSentences50
ratio0.54
matches
0"Rory adjusted her Golden Empress delivery bag’s strap, the fabric scratchy against her left wrist—her crescent scar pulled faintly, a ghost of childhood broken glass."
1"Nyx loomed beside Rory, their solid 6'2\" form’s shadowy edges flickering like a dying candle’s flame; their faintly glowing violet eyes locked on the circle of gnarled oak standing stones Isolde now faced."
2"Rory’s Heartstone pendant—crimson, thumbnail-sized, strung on a thin silver chain—throbbed against her chest, a warm pulse that seeped through her wool sweater. She pressed a finger to it, the metal cold even with the pendant’s heat."
3"Isolde turned, her pale lavender eyes unblinking. Her lips curved in a faint, ethereal smile, and she stepped closer—still no footprints, even as she shifted her weight."
4"\"Roots drink what steps deny; the unweighted find the hidden sky.\""
5"Nyx’s voice curled around Rory’s ears, a whisper carried on a wind that didn’t stir the nearby mortal trees. They shifted their stance, their shadowy hand brushing Rory’s delivery bag; the fabric dimmed for a split second, as if drained of color."
6"My solid form strains; the Grove’s magic tugs at the realm-bound edges of my shadow.\""
7"Rory nodded, her cool-headed wit kicking in. She’d fled Cardiff for London to escape Evan, to take her delivery job and crash in the flat above Silas’ bar—she was used to adapting to strange shifts, but this felt bigger than a missed delivery or a bar brawl. She stepped toward the standing stones, her boot crunching the frost; Isolde’s hand shot out, her fingers cold as the Fae-Forged Blade she’d gifted Rory (she’d tucked it into her delivery bag that morning, its moonsilver edge glinting when she’d checked)."
8"Rory halted. She glanced at Nyx, who’d let their shadowy edges bleed into the mortal grass—no bend, no trace of their touch. She then looked back at the standing stones: their bark was etched with faint, swirling runes she couldn’t read, and the air between them hummed like a beehive she’d stumbled on during a delivery to a suburban garden."
9"She pulled her phone from her pocket, checking the time—3:17 p.m.—then stuffed it back. When she stepped through the standing stones with Isolde and Nyx, she froze again."
10"The grass beneath her boots was soft, not frosted. Wildflowers bloomed in a riot around her: bluebells, poppies, daisies, all blooming at once, their petals glowing with a faint inner light. The sky above was a soft silver, not the gray London overcast, and the air smelled like honey and burnt cedar—something she’d never encountered on a delivery route. She pulled her phone out again; the screen was black, dead, and when she pressed the power button, nothing happened."
11"Clock read 3:17 five minutes ago—now it’s stuck.\""
12"Isolde wandered toward a cluster of wildflowers, plucking one between her fingers; it didn’t wilt, even as she crushed its petal slightly. She turned back, her voice laced with riddle."
13"\"Sand slips fast where petals stay; an hour’s song may outlast a day.\""
14"Aldric’s old sorcerer senses tingle—this place holds memories I thought I’d lost to the realm between.\""
15"Rory’s crescent scar throbbed again, louder this time. She pulled the Fae-Forged Blade from her delivery bag, its moonsilver edge glowing faintly in the Grove’s silver light; it was cold to the touch, as always, and she gripped it tightly, her cool-headed focus cutting through the rising unease. She scanned the clearing, noticing a small pool of water tucked between two oak trees—its surface was still, but when she stepped closer, she didn’t see her reflection. She saw her old Cardiff flat: Evan’s fist slamming into the wall, her shoving clothes into a duffel bag, Eva’s text popping up on her old phone—Flee to London. I’ve got a couch for you."
16"Isolde joined her at the pool, her silver hair brushing the water’s surface; no ripples formed. She spoke, her riddle sharp."
17"\"Reflection’s breath is not your own; it feeds on what you’ve left unknown.\""
18"Rory’s delivery bag felt heavier suddenly, as if it was filled with Evan’s old letters, with her Pre-Law textbooks she’d left in Cardiff, with all the things she’d tried to leave behind. She slung it off her shoulder, dumping it onto the soft grass; only her delivery slips, a leftover spring roll from Golden Empress, and the Fae-Forged Blade’s sheath tumbled out. She stared at the spring roll, its wrapper slightly crinkled—she’d grabbed it during her lunch break, forgetting to eat it."
19"Nyx’s shadowy hand brushed the spring roll; the wrapper dimmed, then brightened again, as if the Grove was testing its mortal texture. They turned to Rory, their voice steadying."
20"\"The standing stones guard the door; the pool tells the unspoken core.\""
21"Rory knelt, picking up the spring roll. She took a bite, the sweet and savory flavors bursting on her tongue—something normal, something mortal, in this alien place. She stood, gripping the Fae-Forged Blade in one hand and the half-eaten spring roll in the other. She glanced at Nyx, who’d shifted to a slightly incorporeal form, their shadowy edges blending with the oak trees’ shadows but not dissolving."
22"\"Tangled threads do not break; they weave the path you cannot take.\""
23"Rory’s cool-headed thinking kicked in. She tucked the Fae-Forged Blade back into her delivery bag, slinging the strap over her shoulder. She stepped toward Isolde, her boot pressing a wildflower’s petal— it glowed brighter, then curled slightly, as if acknowledging her presence. Nyx followed, their solid form flickering again, their shadowy hand brushing Rory’s arm; she didn’t feel a touch, just a faint chill that seeped through her sweater."
24"She noticed a faint shimmer in the air above the taller oak trees—The Veil’s appearance, visible only to those with supernatural sight. Nyx pointed to it, their wind-whisper voice tight."
25"They haven’t found it yet; the Grove’s magic hides it.\""
26"Rory nodded. She’d never thought her delivery job would lead her to a Fae-touched Grove, to a Shade and a Half-Fae seer, to a rift in the Veil that hid forgotten memories. She took another bite of the spring roll, savoring the mortal flavor, as she followed Isolde deeper into the Grove’s wildflower-lined path. The Heartstone pendant pulsed again, warmer this time, and her crescent scar pulled faintly— a reminder of her past, of her present, of the unknown she was now stepping into. She glanced at the wildflowers passing by, their glowing petals painting streaks of color across her peripheral vision, and noted that Nyx’s shadowy edges now clung to the flowers’ light, as if the Grove’s magic was beginning to soften the realm-bound strain of their form."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount312
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"usual oak-lined path,"
adverbCount6
adverbRatio0.019230769230769232
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.003205128205128205
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences50
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences50
mean28.46
std28.16
cv0.989
sampleLengths
025
114
226
333
436
52
627
711
842
911
1015
1188
121
138
1460
1528
1679
173
188
1930
2013
2135
227
2316
24111
2512
2621
2713
2818
2925
309
3182
3229
337
3410
3523
3612
3767
389
394
4027
4124
4210
4333
4412
4569
4630
479
4810
49129
63.33% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.38
totalSentences50
uniqueOpeners19
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences34
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount9
totalSentences34
matches
0"She stepped over a frosted"
1"My solid form strains; the"
2"She pulled her phone from"
3"It judges what’s bound to"
4"My Heartstone’s still"
5"She pressed a finger to"
6"Your pendant senses the tangled"
7"She noticed a faint shimmer"
8"They haven’t found it yet;"
ratio0.265
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount34
totalSentences34
matches
0"Rory adjusted her Golden Empress"
1"She stepped over a frosted"
2"Isolde stood ten feet ahead,"
3"Nyx loomed beside Rory, their"
4"Rory’s Heartstone pendant—crimson, thumbnail-sized, strung"
5"Isolde turned, her pale lavender"
6"Nyx’s voice curled around Rory’s"
7"My solid form strains; the"
8"Rory nodded, her cool-headed wit"
9"The threshold bites those who"
10"Rory halted. She glanced at"
11"She pulled her phone from"
12"The grass beneath her boots"
13"Clock read 3:17 five minutes"
14"Isolde wandered toward a cluster"
15"Nyx’s solid form flickered, their"
16"Aldric’s old sorcerer senses tingle—this"
17"Rory’s crescent scar throbbed again,"
18"Isolde joined her at the"
19"Nyx leaned over the pool,"
ratio1
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences34
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences21
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"Rory’s Heartstone pendant—crimson, thumbnail-sized, strung on a thin silver chain—throbbed against her chest, a warm pulse that seeped through her wool sweater.…"
1"Nyx’s voice curled around Rory’s ears, a whisper carried on a wind that didn’t stir the nearby mortal trees. They shifted their stance, their shadowy hand brush…"
2"Rory halted. She glanced at Nyx, who’d let their shadowy edges bleed into the mortal grass—no bend, no trace of their touch. She then looked back at the standin…"
3"Rory’s crescent scar throbbed again, louder this time. She pulled the Fae-Forged Blade from her delivery bag, its moonsilver edge glowing faintly in the Grove’s…"
4"Rory’s delivery bag felt heavier suddenly, as if it was filled with Evan’s old letters, with her Pre-Law textbooks she’d left in Cardiff, with all the things sh…"
5"Nyx’s shadowy hand brushed the spring roll; the wrapper dimmed, then brightened again, as if the Grove was testing its mortal texture. They turned to Rory, thei…"
6"She pressed a finger to her pendant, the warm pulse still thrumming against her chest. Nyx’s violet eyes locked on the pendant, their voice curving with curiosi…"
7"Rory’s cool-headed thinking kicked in. She tucked the Fae-Forged Blade back into her delivery bag, slinging the strap over her shoulder. She stepped toward Isol…"
79.55% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Your pendant senses, not just Hel’s doors"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"It judges (judge)"
dialogueSentences26
tagDensity0.038
leniency0.077
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.077
73.3099%