Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYAH4ZDN0YHDF8MJTSD2GM5

Run Details

Duration:
31.9s
Cost:
$0.001697
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn descended the rusted metal stairs, her boots clanging against each step like a metronome counting down to chaos. The air thickened with the scent of damp stone and something sharper—ozone, maybe, or the metallic tang of blood mixed with herbs she couldn't name. Flashlights bobbed ahead, cutting through the gloom of the abandoned Tube station beneath Camden. Uniformed officers milled about the platform, their faces pale under the harsh beams, voices hushed as if speaking too loud might summon whatever had turned this place into a slaughterhouse. She checked her worn leather watch: 2:17 a.m. The call had yanked her from a fitful sleep, the kind haunted by echoes of DS Morris's last breath three years back. Unexplained. Supernatural, her gut screamed, but reports dismissed it. Not tonight. This crime scene reeked of the same shadows. "Quinn," a sergeant grunted from the edge of the taped-off area, a coil of yellow barrier fluttering in the stale draft. "Down here. Worst I've seen in years." She nodded, eyes scanning the tiled walls cracked like old porcelain, faded advertisements for long-gone cigarettes peeling under grime. The platform stretched into darkness, track beds empty and choked with debris. But this wasn't just any derelict spot. Whispers in the precinct spoke of the Veil Market—some underground bazaar peddling forbidden trinkets, vanishing every full moon. Tonight's moon hung fat overhead, though buried deep, its pull felt in the chill that seeped into her bones. Her gaze locked on the body sprawled across the center of the platform. A man, mid-forties, dressed in a threadbare coat stained with what looked like ink and worse. His throat gaped open, a ragged slash that wept dark fluid onto the concrete. No pool of blood, though—just smears trailing toward a nearby archway, as if he'd crawled after the attack. Around him, scattered stalls of makeshift tables: vials of shimmering liquid, amulets etched with symbols that twisted her stomach, bundles of dried roots. The market's remnants, raided or abandoned in haste. "Victim's name is Elias Thorne," the sergeant continued, flipping open a notebook. "Local fence, they say. Known for dealing in oddities. Found him like this an hour ago by a patrol that chased a tip. No weapon. No witnesses. But get this—wounds look like claws, not a blade." Claws. Quinn crouched beside the body, gloved hands hovering over the edges of the cut. The flesh parted clean, no jagged tears, but the depth suggested force beyond human grip. She traced the air above the neck, noting how the skin puckered unnaturally, as if seared from the inside. Blood should have sprayed, arced across the tiles. Instead, it congealed fast, almost dry. She straightened, jaw tightening. Military precision in her stance kept her steady, but her mind raced. Footsteps echoed from the stairs—light, hurried. Eva Kowalski emerged, curly red hair frizzing in the humidity, round glasses slipping down her freckled nose. She clutched her worn leather satchel, stuffed with books that thudded against her hip. At 5'4", she looked swallowed by the station's vastness, but her green eyes sharpened on the scene, tucking a stray curl behind her left ear—a tell Quinn had clocked during their reluctant consultations. "Harlow," Eva said, voice steady despite the flicker of unease. She sidestepped an officer, dropping to her knees beside the body without invitation. "Museum got the alert. Restricted archives flagged this location hours ago. You're welcome." Quinn crossed her arms. "Didn't call for you, Kowalski. This is a crime scene, not a field trip." Eva ignored her, pulling a small notebook from her satchel. Her fingers flew across the page, sketching the amulets nearby. "Elias Thorne. Dealt in Veil Market scraps. See those vials? Essence of nightshade, banned since the 1800s. Alchemical. And this—" She pointed to a sigil carved into the platform stone, faint but deliberate. "Warding rune. Meant to keep shades out. Failed spectacularly." Shades. Quinn's pulse quickened. The word dragged up Morris's file—shadowy figures glimpsed in witness statements, dismissed as hysteria. Eva pushed her glasses up, meeting Quinn's stare. "Look at the wounds. Not claws. Energy residue. Supernatural tear. Whatever got him phased through the ward, drained him dry. No blood spray because it evaporated—siphoned into the ether." Quinn knelt again, closer this time, her brown eyes narrowing on the body's hand. Clutched in his fist, half-crushed, a small brass compass. Patina of verdigris coated its face, etched with sigils that matched the platform's rune. The needle spun lazily, not pointing north, but twitching toward the archway where the blood trail vanished. "Energy residue," Quinn echoed, voice flat. She pried the compass free, holding it to the light. "You mean fairy tales. Evidence says attack from behind—struggle marks on his coat, fibers caught in the wound edges. Human height, based on angle. Killer dragged him, then bolted when patrol showed." Eva snorted, standing with a rustle of her satchel. "Struggle marks? That's residue from the rift. Veil Market sits on a nexus point. Portals bleed energy here. Thorne probably triggered something—crossed a shade or worse. Fibers? Could be from the other side. Look at the trail. It stops cold under the arch. No footprints beyond. Killer didn't drag him; the body phased partway." Quinn followed the trail with her flashlight. Smears of blood, yes, but they thinned abruptly, dissolving into faint scorch marks on the concrete. No scuffs, no drag lines in the dust. Her sharp jaw clenched. Officers murmured nearby, one snapping photos of the stalls, another bagging a vial that hissed when touched. "Phased," Quinn repeated, turning the compass in her palm. The needle jerked sharper now, aligning toward the archway's shadow. She glanced at Eva. "What's this thing?" Eva leaned in, breath catching. "Veil Compass. Points to rifts. Crafted by Shade artisans—traders from the market. If it's active, there's an open portal right there. Thorne must've been using it to navigate deals. Got too close." Quinn pocketed the compass, ignoring the faint hum against her skin. She paced to the archway, beam cutting through cobwebs thick as veils. Beyond, the tunnel swallowed light, but her eyes caught anomalies: tiles shifted, not cracked but displaced, as if pushed by an unseen force. Dust patterns swirled in unnatural eddies, circulating without wind. She knelt, gloved finger tracing a groove in the wall—too precise for decay, like a claw but elongated, phased through stone. "Human killer bolts," Quinn muttered. "But why no blood pool? Coagulant on the blade? Or..." She stood, facing Eva. "Your rift theory. If energy siphoned it, the body's desiccated fast. Matches the lack of spray." Eva's eyes widened, tucking hair again. "Finally seeing it? Shades don't leave bodies whole. They consume. But this one's intact—partial feed. Interrupted." Quinn shook her head, mind piecing fragments. The compass's hum grew insistent, vibrating through her watchband. She pulled it out, watching the needle dance. Not random—pulsing in rhythm with a low thrum from the tunnel, felt more than heard. Officers paused, heads tilting as if catching it too. "Interruptus," Quinn said. "Patrol spooked it. But Thorne's hand—clutching the compass. Defensive. He knew it was coming." Eva nodded, flipping her notebook. "Market lore: compasses attune to users. If he was marked—tattoo or pact—it locked on him. Shades track that energy." Quinn's gaze snapped to Thorne's wrist, sleeve ridden up in the fall. Faint ink there, a sigil mirroring the compass's etchings. Fresh, by the redness. "He summoned it. Or bought it wrong." She strode toward the tunnel, Eva trailing. "Hold up, Harlow. Without wards, you step in, you're next." Quinn flashed her light deeper. Shadows writhed, not tricks of the beam—tendrils coiling like smoke. The thrum intensified, compass burning hot in her pocket. Deduction clicked: no human killer fled; the entity retreated, wounded or sated, but left echoes. The evidence—dissolved blood, phased trail, active compass—pointed not to a partner or rival, but to the Veil's underbelly bleeding into their world. "Sergeant!" Quinn barked over her shoulder. "Seal this tunnel. No one enters." The man hustled over, face ashen. "Ma'am?" She jabbed a finger toward the arch. "Supernatural breach. That's the missing piece. Thorne opened a door; it bit back." Eva gripped her satchel strap, voice low. "Told you. Now what? Close it?" Quinn drew her sidearm, the weight familiar, grounding. The compass's needle steadied, pointing into the dark. "We follow. Carefully." The thrum pulsed once more, and a whisper slithered from the shadows—inhuman, beckoning. Officers froze, flashlights wavering. Quinn stepped forward, Eva at her side, the station's chill giving way to an unnatural warmth, as if the Veil hungered for more. Deeper in, the walls shimmered, tiles blurring at the edges. Quinn's boot crunched on something brittle—not debris, but bone, etched with the same sigils. Another victim? No, older, part of the market's foundation. The air hummed with latent power, vials from the stalls glowing faintly in officers' evidence bags, as if awakening. Eva whispered, "The compass—it's pulling us to the rift's heart. Thorne must've crossed a dealer. Shades don't forgive debts." Quinn nodded, piecing it: the wound's angle suggested attack from above, not behind. Phasing entity, dropping through the ward. Fibers? Not coat threads—ethereal wisps, caught in the tear. She scanned the ceiling, light catching faint cracks radiating from a central point. Entry vector. "Up there," she said. "It came from the nexus." Eva sketched furiously. "Classic Shade ambush. They mimic rifts, slip in silent." A officer yelped behind them, dropping a bagged amulet. It shattered on the ground, releasing a puff of green mist that twisted into shapes—faces, fleeting. Panic rippled through the team. "Contain it!" Quinn ordered, voice cutting sharp. She advanced, compass out now, its verdigris face pulsing like a heartbeat. The needle locked, unwavering. The tunnel widened into a chamber, market stalls crumbling against walls alive with graffiti—symbols that seemed to shift when unobserved. In the center, a swirl of darkness hung, a tear in reality, edges frayed like torn fabric. The blood trail ended there, absorbed into the void. Quinn halted, gun raised. "That's our killer's exit." Eva's breath hitched. "Or entry. Touch it, and you're through." Observation locked it: the swirl contracted slightly, as if breathing. Inside, glimpses—stalls, figures cloaked in shadow, the market in full swing elsewhere. Thorne's slash? A backlash from crossing unprepared. Quinn holstered her weapon, mind racing deductions. No human handiwork. The colleague's words rang true, but incomplete. Shades followed pacts; the compass tied Thorne to it. Destroy it, seal the rift? She extended the device toward the swirl. It resisted, needle bending backward. "Not that simple," Eva murmured. "Bound item. Needs ritual." Quinn's eyes narrowed. The pieces aligned: the entity's retreat left a echo-trail, compass as lure. Others missed the supernatural overlay, chalking it to drugs or gang hit. But she saw—the patina's glow, sigils igniting faintly. Deduction whispered: Thorne wasn't victim; bait. A low growl emanated from the swirl, shadows lengthening. Quinn tensed, ready.
created_at"2026-02-20T20:05:48.663Z" 2/20/2026, 8:05:48 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags37
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Eva sketched furiously. [furiously]"
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.685
leniency1
rawRatio0.027
effectiveRatio0.027
91.87% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1844
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"lazily"
count1
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"lazily"
1"carefully"
2"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1844
totalAiIsms37
found
0
word"gloom"
count1
1
word"echoes"
count2
2
word"scanning"
count1
3
word"porcelain"
count1
4
word"chill"
count2
5
word"etched"
count3
6
word"stomach"
count1
7
word"traced"
count1
8
word"raced"
count1
9
word"footsteps"
count1
10
word"echoed"
count2
11
word"flicker"
count1
12
word"pulse"
count1
13
word"quickened"
count1
14
word"jaw clenched"
count1
15
word"navigate"
count1
16
word"tracing"
count1
17
word"dance"
count1
18
word"weight"
count1
19
word"familiar"
count1
20
word"pulsed"
count1
21
word"whisper"
count1
22
word"wavering"
count1
23
word"warmth"
count1
24
word"shimmered"
count1
25
word"scanned"
count1
26
word"shattered"
count1
27
word"fleeting"
count1
28
word"unwavering"
count1
29
word"racing"
count1
30
word"aligned"
count1
31
word"echo"
count1
highlights
0"gloom"
1"echoes"
2"scanning"
3"porcelain"
4"chill"
5"etched"
6"stomach"
7"traced"
8"raced"
9"footsteps"
10"echoed"
11"flicker"
12"pulse"
13"quickened"
14"jaw clenched"
15"navigate"
16"tracing"
17"dance"
18"weight"
19"familiar"
20"pulsed"
21"whisper"
22"wavering"
23"warmth"
24"shimmered"
25"scanned"
26"shattered"
27"fleeting"
28"unwavering"
29"racing"
30"aligned"
31"echo"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count2
1
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
1"eyes narrowed"
2"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences133
matches
0"the flicker of unease"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences133
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences138
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen77
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1811
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
71.04% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions79
wordCount1583
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity1.58
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn25
Tube1
Camden1
Morris2
Veil5
Market3
Claws1
Kowalski1
Eva16
Restricted1
Shades5
Evidence1
Shade1
Coagulant1
Thorne9
Observation1
Needs1
Officers3
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Morris"
3"Kowalski"
4"Eva"
5"Restricted"
6"Shades"
7"Evidence"
8"Thorne"
9"Observation"
10"Needs"
11"Officers"
places
0"Veil"
globalScore0.71
windowScore0.833
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences78
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"as if speaking too loud might summon whatever had turned this place into a slaughterhouse"
1"looked like ink and worse"
2"as if catching it too"
3"symbols that seemed to shift when unobserved"
4"as if breathing"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords2.209
wordCount1811
matches
0"not pointing north, but twitching toward the archway"
1"not cracked but displaced, as if pushed by an unseen force"
2"not to a partner or rival, but to the Veil's underbelly bleeding into their world"
3"not debris, but bone, etched with the same sigils"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences138
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs50
mean36.22
std22.47
cv0.62
sampleLengths
090
149
228
375
492
548
679
770
836
918
1062
1126
1229
1354
1448
1563
1652
1726
1837
1976
2035
2122
2248
2317
2424
2532
2617
2761
2812
297
3020
3113
3219
3340
3452
3519
3643
379
3812
3930
4023
4146
428
4310
4429
4531
4612
479
4841
4912
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences133
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs338
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount25
semicolonCount5
flaggedSentences25
totalSentences138
ratio0.181
matches
0"The air thickened with the scent of damp stone and something sharper—ozone, maybe, or the metallic tang of blood mixed with herbs she couldn't name."
1"Whispers in the precinct spoke of the Veil Market—some underground bazaar peddling forbidden trinkets, vanishing every full moon."
2"No pool of blood, though—just smears trailing toward a nearby archway, as if he'd crawled after the attack."
3"Footsteps echoed from the stairs—light, hurried."
4"Shades. Quinn's pulse quickened. The word dragged up Morris's file—shadowy figures glimpsed in witness statements, dismissed as hysteria. Eva pushed her glasses up, meeting Quinn's stare."
5"No blood spray because it evaporated—siphoned into the ether.\""
6"Evidence says attack from behind—struggle marks on his coat, fibers caught in the wound edges."
7"Thorne probably triggered something—crossed a shade or worse."
8"Killer didn't drag him; the body phased partway.\""
9"Crafted by Shade artisans—traders from the market."
10"Quinn pocketed the compass, ignoring the faint hum against her skin. She paced to the archway, beam cutting through cobwebs thick as veils. Beyond, the tunnel swallowed light, but her eyes caught anomalies: tiles shifted, not cracked but displaced, as if pushed by an unseen force. Dust patterns swirled in unnatural eddies, circulating without wind. She knelt, gloved finger tracing a groove in the wall—too precise for decay, like a claw but elongated, phased through stone."
11"But this one's intact—partial feed."
12"Quinn shook her head, mind piecing fragments. The compass's hum grew insistent, vibrating through her watchband. She pulled it out, watching the needle dance. Not random—pulsing in rhythm with a low thrum from the tunnel, felt more than heard. Officers paused, heads tilting as if catching it too."
13"But Thorne's hand—clutching the compass."
14"If he was marked—tattoo or pact—it locked on him."
15"Quinn flashed her light deeper. Shadows writhed, not tricks of the beam—tendrils coiling like smoke. The thrum intensified, compass burning hot in her pocket. Deduction clicked: no human killer fled; the entity retreated, wounded or sated, but left echoes. The evidence—dissolved blood, phased trail, active compass—pointed not to a partner or rival, but to the Veil's underbelly bleeding into their world."
16"Thorne opened a door; it bit back.\""
17"The thrum pulsed once more, and a whisper slithered from the shadows—inhuman, beckoning. Officers froze, flashlights wavering. Quinn stepped forward, Eva at her side, the station's chill giving way to an unnatural warmth, as if the Veil hungered for more."
18"Deeper in, the walls shimmered, tiles blurring at the edges. Quinn's boot crunched on something brittle—not debris, but bone, etched with the same sigils. Another victim? No, older, part of the market's foundation. The air hummed with latent power, vials from the stalls glowing faintly in officers' evidence bags, as if awakening."
19"Quinn nodded, piecing it: the wound's angle suggested attack from above, not behind. Phasing entity, dropping through the ward. Fibers? Not coat threads—ethereal wisps, caught in the tear. She scanned the ceiling, light catching faint cracks radiating from a central point. Entry vector."
20"A officer yelped behind them, dropping a bagged amulet. It shattered on the ground, releasing a puff of green mist that twisted into shapes—faces, fleeting. Panic rippled through the team."
21"The tunnel widened into a chamber, market stalls crumbling against walls alive with graffiti—symbols that seemed to shift when unobserved. In the center, a swirl of darkness hung, a tear in reality, edges frayed like torn fabric. The blood trail ended there, absorbed into the void."
22"Observation locked it: the swirl contracted slightly, as if breathing. Inside, glimpses—stalls, figures cloaked in shadow, the market in full swing elsewhere. Thorne's slash? A backlash from crossing unprepared."
23"Quinn holstered her weapon, mind racing deductions. No human handiwork. The colleague's words rang true, but incomplete. Shades followed pacts; the compass tied Thorne to it. Destroy it, seal the rift?"
24"Quinn's eyes narrowed. The pieces aligned: the entity's retreat left a echo-trail, compass as lure. Others missed the supernatural overlay, chalking it to drugs or gang hit. But she saw—the patina's glow, sigils igniting faintly. Deduction whispered: Thorne wasn't victim; bait."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount788
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount16
adverbRatio0.02030456852791878
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.0038071065989847717
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences138
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences138
mean13.12
std13.45
cv1.025
sampleLengths
021
125
214
330
48
522
61
78
82
98
1021
117
1219
1312
147
1518
1619
1713
1816
1914
2018
2123
228
2312
2436
251
2614
2715
2819
298
306
314
3212
336
3417
3514
3633
3727
387
392
409
419
4222
435
443
457
461
4717
485
492
91.79% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.5507246376811594
totalSentences138
uniqueOpeners76
30.86% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences108
matches
0"Instead, it congealed fast, almost"
ratio0.009
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount13
totalSentences108
matches
0"She checked her worn leather"
1"She nodded, eyes scanning the"
2"Her gaze locked on the"
3"His throat gaped open, a"
4"She traced the air above"
5"She straightened, jaw tightening."
6"She clutched her worn leather"
7"It stops cold under the"
8"He knew it was"
9"She strode toward the tunnel,"
10"She jabbed a finger toward"
11"They mimic rifts, slip in"
12"She extended the device toward"
ratio0.12
80.37% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount82
totalSentences108
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn descended the"
1"The air thickened with the"
2"Flashlights bobbed ahead, cutting through"
3"She checked her worn leather"
4"The call had yanked her"
5"This crime scene reeked of"
6"a sergeant grunted from the"
7"She nodded, eyes scanning the"
8"The platform stretched into darkness,"
9"Whispers in the precinct spoke"
10"Tonight's moon hung fat overhead,"
11"Her gaze locked on the"
12"A man, mid-forties, dressed in"
13"His throat gaped open, a"
14"The market's remnants, raided or"
15"the sergeant continued, flipping open"
16"Quinn crouched beside the body,"
17"The flesh parted clean, no"
18"She traced the air above"
19"Blood should have sprayed, arced"
ratio0.759
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences108
matches
0"If it's active, there's an"
1"If energy siphoned it, the"
2"If he was marked—tattoo or"
ratio0.028
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences38
technicalSentenceCount13
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn descended the rusted metal stairs, her boots clanging against each step like a metronome counting down to chaos."
1"Uniformed officers milled about the platform, their faces pale under the harsh beams, voices hushed as if speaking too loud might summon whatever had turned thi…"
2"Tonight's moon hung fat overhead, though buried deep, its pull felt in the chill that seeped into her bones."
3"Around him, scattered stalls of makeshift tables: vials of shimmering liquid, amulets etched with symbols that twisted her stomach, bundles of dried roots."
4"She clutched her worn leather satchel, stuffed with books that thudded against her hip."
5"Quinn knelt again, closer this time, her brown eyes narrowing on the body's hand. Clutched in his fist, half-crushed, a small brass compass. Patina of verdigris…"
6"Quinn followed the trail with her flashlight. Smears of blood, yes, but they thinned abruptly, dissolving into faint scorch marks on the concrete. No scuffs, no…"
7"Quinn pocketed the compass, ignoring the faint hum against her skin. She paced to the archway, beam cutting through cobwebs thick as veils. Beyond, the tunnel s…"
8"Quinn shook her head, mind piecing fragments. The compass's hum grew insistent, vibrating through her watchband. She pulled it out, watching the needle dance. N…"
9"The thrum pulsed once more, and a whisper slithered from the shadows—inhuman, beckoning. Officers froze, flashlights wavering. Quinn stepped forward, Eva at her…"
10"A officer yelped behind them, dropping a bagged amulet. It shattered on the ground, releasing a puff of green mist that twisted into shapes—faces, fleeting. Pan…"
11"The tunnel widened into a chamber, market stalls crumbling against walls alive with graffiti—symbols that seemed to shift when unobserved. In the center, a swir…"
12"Observation locked it: the swirl contracted slightly, as if breathing. Inside, glimpses—stalls, figures cloaked in shadow, the market in full swing elsewhere. T…"
34.09% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags22
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"a sergeant grunted, a coil of yellow barrier fluttering in the stale draft"
1"Eva said, voice steady despite the flicker of unease"
2"Quinn echoed, voice flat"
3"Quinn ordered, voice cutting sharp"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount9
fancyTags
0"a sergeant grunted (grunt)"
1"the sergeant continued (continue)"
2"Quinn repeated (repeat)"
3"Quinn muttered (mutter)"
4"Quinn's gaze snapped (snap)"
5"Quinn barked (bark)"
6"Eva whispered (whisper)"
7"Quinn ordered (order)"
8"Eva murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.222
leniency0.444
rawRatio0.75
effectiveRatio0.333
72.2227%