Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYAM3Y6R3JV17A4VZ9G1289

Run Details

Duration:
2m 22s
Cost:
$0.012826
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory clutches the crimson Heartstone Pendant at her throat, its faint warmth seeping through the silver chain to press against the crescent scar on her left wrist. She shifts her delivery bag’s strap higher on her shoulder—still dusted with flour from the Golden Empress’s morning dumplings—and glares at the faint shimmering distortion winking between two ancient oak standing stones marking Isolde’s grove boundary. Isolde stands beside her, silver waist-length hair catching no wind, her pale lavender eyes fixed on the rift. Nyx drifts a foot off the ground, their humanoid shadow form rippling as they test the Veil’s weakening winter solstice pulse. The pendant flutters like a living thing. Rory’s fingers curl tighter around the gem. The stones hum. Vine’s breath lures the hungry, scar’s weight anchors the lost; the amber gate eats time but spits back what it costs. Rory’s quick thinking ties the riddle to her pendant’s warmth and the scar’s childhood anchor. She taps the gem with a nail. The cost’s tied to the souls here, isn’t it? Nyx solidifies, their 6’2” form casting no shadow in the grove’s dappled light, their faintly glowing violet eyes narrowing at the rift’s edge. The Veil’s tear reeks of excess—Hel’s gluttony clings to every wisp of energy. They step through the rift first, their shadow form flickering as they breach the barrier. Rory follows, her boots hitting soil that thrums under her soles. Isolde glides after, leaving no footprints. Amber bleeds over the horizon. Vineyards strung with grapes the color of crushed amethyst curl up sloping hills, their leaves glistening with a dew that catches the strange light and drips into soil that hums with a low, thrumming energy. Orchards burst with fruit she’s never seen—melon-sized orbs striped with emerald and gold, their rinds glowing faintly, their scent a mix of burnt honey and jasmine. A river of thick, syrupy nectar twists through the valleys, its surface dotted with floating wine goblets that clink together without wind. Rory stops. She plucks a gold-striped orb from a low-hanging branch. Its skin gives under her fingers, oozing a clear liquid that stings her scar when a drop falls. A figure slumps past her—thin, gaunt, their skin a sickly gray, their hands calloused from tending vines. They don’t glance at her; their eyes are blank, as if their thoughts have been scraped clean. Nyx shifts to incorporeal form, drifting through the soul’s body without resistance. They re-solidify beside Rory, their whisper voice cutting through the hum of the soil. They signed contracts for taste—traded their mortal freedom for a lifetime of plucking fruit no human tongue can bear without madness. Isolde glides to the soul’s side, her pale lavender eyes tracing the lines of their calloused hands. The fruit’s song hooks the greedy, the lost’s chains feed the vine; the prince’s table waits for those who won’t decline. Rory drops the orb. It splatters on the soil, and the hum of the ground intensifies for a heartbeat before fading. She brushes the sticky liquid from her fingers, her gaze darting to the distant sky where a column of sweet-smelling smoke rises. A grand feast unfolds on a hilltop ahead—long tables heaped with pastries tall enough to touch the amber sky, roasts of exotic beasts with scales that glint like polished copper, bowls of jellies that shift color with every breath. Figures in elaborate silk robes laugh and gorge themselves, their mouths stuffed with food, their eyes wild with excess. Helbound souls weave between the tables, refilling goblets and replacing empty plates without a word. Rory’s pendant pulses faster, its warmth spreading up her neck to her jaw. She clutches it, her scar throbbing in time with the gem’s beat. She spots a warden’s badge glinting on one of the feast’s servers—a small, silver token she’s seen pinned to the coats of men who patrolled the park’s rift points. The server’s eyes are blank, too; the badge hangs loose, as if it’s a leftover from a life they no longer remember. Nyx drifts toward the feast, their shadow form rippling as they pass through a floating goblet. The goblet’s wine freezes for a heartbeat before flowing again. The wardens didn’t catch this rift—its pulse was hidden by the grove’s time warp. Rory’s quick mind connects the dots: Isolde’s grove’s time distortion masked the Hel portal from the Wardens. She steps toward the feast, her delivery bag bouncing against her hip. Isolde glides beside her, her silver hair catching the amber light for the first time, casting no shadow. The rift’s hide is the grove’s breath, the pendant’s beat is the door’s key; the prince’s secret waits where the nectar runs free. Rory follows the river of nectar upstream, away from the feast’s chaos. The vineyards thicken here, their amethyst grapes clinging so tightly to the branches they bend under the weight. A giant tree looms ahead—its trunk wide enough to fit three of her side by side, its branches dripping with fruit that glows like molten ruby. Helbound souls circle the tree, their hands moving in a rhythmic pattern as they pluck the ruby fruit and toss it into wicker baskets that float beside them. Rory stops. She notices a crack in the tree’s trunk—faint, shimmering, the same color as the Veil’s rift. Her pendant pulses so hard she can feel it through her coat. She leans in, her scar brushing the tree’s bark. The bark is warm, like the pendant, and it hums in time with the gem’s beat. Nyx solidifies beside her, their faintly glowing violet eyes fixed on the crack. That’s a secondary rift—leads deeper into Dymas, to the prince’s private gardens. Isolde glides to the crack, her pale lavender eyes tracing its edges. The crack’s breath is the prince’s greed, the soul’s toil is the fruit’s seed; the blade’s cold will cut what the pendant’s heat will feed. Rory’s hand flies to the Fae-Forged Blade she tucked into her delivery bag—Isolde’s gift, moonsilver, always cold to the touch. She’d forgotten it was there until Isolde’s riddle triggered the memory. A helbound soul drifts to her side, their gray hand holding out a ruby fruit. They don’t speak; their blank eyes fix on her scar. Rory takes the fruit. Its skin is warm, like the pendant, and it pulses in her hand. Nyx shifts to incorporeal form, drifting through the crack. They re-solidify on the other side, their whisper voice carrying back through the rift. The gardens hold more than fruit—they hold the contract that binds these souls to the prince. Rory tucks the fruit into her delivery bag, her fingers brushing the cold moonsilver blade. She clutches the Heartstone Pendant, her scar throbbing in time with its pulse. The amber sky darkens a fraction, as if the realm itself is watching them. Isolde glides to the crack, her silver hair flowing behind her though there’s no wind. The time’s thread is fraying, the rift’s breath is weak; the choice’s weight is the scar’s silent speak. Rory steps toward the crack. She places a boot on the other side, the soil’s hum vibrating up her leg. Nyx drifts beside her, their shadow form wrapping around her arm for a heartbeat—cold, like the Fae blade—before shifting back to incorporeal. The souls’ memories are trapped in the garden’s flowers; we can free them if we find the prince’s ledger. Rory glances at the helbound soul still standing beside her. They’ve turned back to the giant tree, their hands resuming their rhythmic plucking. She takes another step into the secondary rift’s other side. The vineyards here are thicker, the fruit glows brighter, and the hum of the soil is louder. She can hear the distant clink of goblets from the feast, but it’s muted now, as if she’s stepped into a secret corner of Dymas. A giant butterfly flutters past her—its wings the color of burnt amber, its body made of swirling shadow. It lands on her delivery bag, and her pendant pulses once, twice, before settling into a faint warmth. Rory stops. She stares at the butterfly. Nyx solidifies beside her, their faintly glowing violet eyes tracing the butterfly’s shadowy wings. That’s a messenger of Prince Belphegor—he knows we’re here. Isolde glides to the butterfly, her pale lavender eyes fixed on its wings. The messenger’s song is the prince’s gaze, the blade’s cut is the cage’s haze; the memory’s key is the scar’s hidden blaze. Rory clutches her left wrist, her crescent scar throbbing. She’d never thought her childhood accident’s mark would mean anything more than a reminder of a broken bike and a bloody knee. Now, it’s tied to the pendant, the blade, the rift—everything. She plucks the butterfly from her bag. It doesn’t flutter away; it sits in her palm, its shadowy body warming slightly. She takes another step deeper into the prince’s private gardens. The vineyards give way to a garden of giant flowers—their petals the color of crushed velvet, their centers oozing a sweet nectar that drips into the soil. Helbound souls tend to the flowers, their hands moving in the same rhythmic pattern as the fruit pickers. Rory’s delivery bag brushes a flower’s petal. A drop of nectar falls on her scar, and the Heartstone Pendant pulses so hard she gasps. She looks up. A grand palace looms ahead—its walls made of polished amber, its towers twisting toward the darkening sky. Goblets float around its entrance, their wine glinting like liquid fire. Nyx shifts to incorporeal form, drifting toward the palace’s entrance. The ledger’s in the palace’s library—tied to a vine that grows through the window. Isolde glides beside Rory, her pale lavender eyes fixed on the palace. The palace’s doors are the greed’s gate, the ledger’s words are the souls’ fate; the scar’s fire is the escape’s date. Rory grips the Fae-Forged Blade’s hilt through her delivery bag. The blade’s cold seeps through the fabric, calming her racing heart. She’s a delivery person from Cardiff, a pre-law dropout who fled an abusive ex—she’s not a hero. But her quick thinking has gotten her out of tighter spots than this. She steps toward the palace’s entrance. A helbound soul stands guard at the doors—tall, broad, their skin a sickly gray, their hand resting on a sword hilt that glints like molten iron. They don’t glance at her; their eyes are blank. Rory stops. She pulls the Heartstone Pendant from under her coat, holding it up to the guard’s blank eyes. The gem’s crimson glow catches their attention—for a heartbeat, their eyes flicker with a faint memory, a flash of a mortal life before they signed their contract. Nyx re-solidifies beside her, their whisper voice cutting through the palace’s quiet hum. That’s the first crack in their chains—we can widen it. Rory nods. She tucks the pendant back under her coat, her scar throbbing in time with its pulse. She grips the blade’s hilt tighter, ready to step past the guard into the palace.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences1
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
94.61% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1857
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"tightly"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"tightly"
1"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
16.53% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1857
totalAiIsms31
found
0
word"warmth"
count4
1
word"pulse"
count4
2
word"weight"
count3
3
word"glistening"
count1
4
word"whisper"
count3
5
word"tracing"
count3
6
word"glint"
count1
7
word"silk"
count1
8
word"glinting"
count2
9
word"looms"
count2
10
word"rhythmic"
count3
11
word"reminder"
count1
12
word"velvet"
count1
13
word"racing"
count1
14
word"flicker"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"pulse"
2"weight"
3"glistening"
4"whisper"
5"tracing"
6"glint"
7"silk"
8"glinting"
9"looms"
10"rhythmic"
11"reminder"
12"velvet"
13"racing"
14"flicker"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences81
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences81
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tend to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences81
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen85
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1825
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions4
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
85.32% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions76
wordCount1778
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity1.29
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Isolde"
discoveredNames
Heartstone4
Pendant4
Golden1
Empress1
Isolde12
Veil3
Hel2
Rory23
Wardens1
Dymas2
Fae-Forged2
Blade2
Fae3
Prince1
Belphegor1
Cardiff1
Nyx10
Helbound3
persons
0"Empress"
1"Isolde"
2"Veil"
3"Hel"
4"Rory"
5"Blade"
6"Prince"
7"Belphegor"
8"Nyx"
places
0"Golden"
1"Dymas"
2"Fae-Forged"
3"Fae"
4"Cardiff"
5"Helbound"
globalScore0.853
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences69
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1825
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences81
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs52
mean35.1
std19.08
cv0.544
sampleLengths
0102
17
27
33
421
531
636
732
888
929
1034
1147
1238
1343
1473
1525
1651
1740
1829
1941
2084
2130
2225
2325
2437
2531
2625
2717
2839
2928
3014
3133
3220
3341
3423
3552
3636
377
3823
3935
4041
4121
4255
4324
4431
4524
4633
4751
4841
4946
96.60% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences81
matches
0"been scraped"
1"was hidden"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs282
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount27
semicolonCount13
flaggedSentences34
totalSentences81
ratio0.42
matches
0"She shifts her delivery bag’s strap higher on her shoulder—still dusted with flour from the Golden Empress’s morning dumplings—and glares at the faint shimmering distortion winking between two ancient oak standing stones marking Isolde’s grove boundary."
1"Vine’s breath lures the hungry, scar’s weight anchors the lost; the amber gate eats time but spits back what it costs."
2"The Veil’s tear reeks of excess—Hel’s gluttony clings to every wisp of energy."
3"Vineyards strung with grapes the color of crushed amethyst curl up sloping hills, their leaves glistening with a dew that catches the strange light and drips into soil that hums with a low, thrumming energy. Orchards burst with fruit she’s never seen—melon-sized orbs striped with emerald and gold, their rinds glowing faintly, their scent a mix of burnt honey and jasmine. A river of thick, syrupy nectar twists through the valleys, its surface dotted with floating wine goblets that clink together without wind."
4"A figure slumps past her—thin, gaunt, their skin a sickly gray, their hands calloused from tending vines. They don’t glance at her; their eyes are blank, as if their thoughts have been scraped clean."
5"They signed contracts for taste—traded their mortal freedom for a lifetime of plucking fruit no human tongue can bear without madness."
6"The fruit’s song hooks the greedy, the lost’s chains feed the vine; the prince’s table waits for those who won’t decline."
7"A grand feast unfolds on a hilltop ahead—long tables heaped with pastries tall enough to touch the amber sky, roasts of exotic beasts with scales that glint like polished copper, bowls of jellies that shift color with every breath. Figures in elaborate silk robes laugh and gorge themselves, their mouths stuffed with food, their eyes wild with excess. Helbound souls weave between the tables, refilling goblets and replacing empty plates without a word."
8"She spots a warden’s badge glinting on one of the feast’s servers—a small, silver token she’s seen pinned to the coats of men who patrolled the park’s rift points. The server’s eyes are blank, too; the badge hangs loose, as if it’s a leftover from a life they no longer remember."
9"The wardens didn’t catch this rift—its pulse was hidden by the grove’s time warp."
10"The rift’s hide is the grove’s breath, the pendant’s beat is the door’s key; the prince’s secret waits where the nectar runs free."
11"Rory follows the river of nectar upstream, away from the feast’s chaos. The vineyards thicken here, their amethyst grapes clinging so tightly to the branches they bend under the weight. A giant tree looms ahead—its trunk wide enough to fit three of her side by side, its branches dripping with fruit that glows like molten ruby. Helbound souls circle the tree, their hands moving in a rhythmic pattern as they pluck the ruby fruit and toss it into wicker baskets that float beside them."
12"She notices a crack in the tree’s trunk—faint, shimmering, the same color as the Veil’s rift. Her pendant pulses so hard she can feel it through her coat."
13"That’s a secondary rift—leads deeper into Dymas, to the prince’s private gardens."
14"The crack’s breath is the prince’s greed, the soul’s toil is the fruit’s seed; the blade’s cold will cut what the pendant’s heat will feed."
15"Rory’s hand flies to the Fae-Forged Blade she tucked into her delivery bag—Isolde’s gift, moonsilver, always cold to the touch. She’d forgotten it was there until Isolde’s riddle triggered the memory."
16"A helbound soul drifts to her side, their gray hand holding out a ruby fruit. They don’t speak; their blank eyes fix on her scar."
17"The gardens hold more than fruit—they hold the contract that binds these souls to the prince."
18"The time’s thread is fraying, the rift’s breath is weak; the choice’s weight is the scar’s silent speak."
19"Nyx drifts beside her, their shadow form wrapping around her arm for a heartbeat—cold, like the Fae blade—before shifting back to incorporeal."
20"The souls’ memories are trapped in the garden’s flowers; we can free them if we find the prince’s ledger."
21"A giant butterfly flutters past her—its wings the color of burnt amber, its body made of swirling shadow. It lands on her delivery bag, and her pendant pulses once, twice, before settling into a faint warmth."
22"That’s a messenger of Prince Belphegor—he knows we’re here."
23"The messenger’s song is the prince’s gaze, the blade’s cut is the cage’s haze; the memory’s key is the scar’s hidden blaze."
24"Rory clutches her left wrist, her crescent scar throbbing. She’d never thought her childhood accident’s mark would mean anything more than a reminder of a broken bike and a bloody knee. Now, it’s tied to the pendant, the blade, the rift—everything."
25"She plucks the butterfly from her bag. It doesn’t flutter away; it sits in her palm, its shadowy body warming slightly."
26"She takes another step deeper into the prince’s private gardens. The vineyards give way to a garden of giant flowers—their petals the color of crushed velvet, their centers oozing a sweet nectar that drips into the soil. Helbound souls tend to the flowers, their hands moving in the same rhythmic pattern as the fruit pickers."
27"A grand palace looms ahead—its walls made of polished amber, its towers twisting toward the darkening sky. Goblets float around its entrance, their wine glinting like liquid fire."
28"The ledger’s in the palace’s library—tied to a vine that grows through the window."
29"The palace’s doors are the greed’s gate, the ledger’s words are the souls’ fate; the scar’s fire is the escape’s date."
30"Rory grips the Fae-Forged Blade’s hilt through her delivery bag. The blade’s cold seeps through the fabric, calming her racing heart. She’s a delivery person from Cardiff, a pre-law dropout who fled an abusive ex—she’s not a hero. But her quick thinking has gotten her out of tighter spots than this."
31"A helbound soul stands guard at the doors—tall, broad, their skin a sickly gray, their hand resting on a sword hilt that glints like molten iron. They don’t glance at her; their eyes are blank."
32"She pulls the Heartstone Pendant from under her coat, holding it up to the guard’s blank eyes. The gem’s crimson glow catches their attention—for a heartbeat, their eyes flicker with a faint memory, a flash of a mortal life before they signed their contract."
33"That’s the first crack in their chains—we can widen it."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount177
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount2
adverbRatio0.011299435028248588
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences81
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences81
mean22.53
std16.74
cv0.743
sampleLengths
027
136
218
321
47
57
63
721
815
97
109
1123
1213
1332
145
1583
162
1727
1834
1926
2021
2117
2221
2343
2473
2525
2651
2726
2814
2929
3018
3123
3284
332
3428
3525
3613
3712
3812
3925
4031
4125
424
4313
4423
4516
4628
4714
4815
4918
46.30% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.14814814814814814
totalSentences81
uniqueOpeners12
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences76
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount17
totalSentences76
matches
0"She shifts her delivery bag’s"
1"She taps the gem with"
2"They step through the rift"
3"She plucks a gold-striped orb"
4"They signed contracts for taste—traded"
5"She spots a warden’s badge"
6"She notices a crack in"
7"She leans in, her scar"
8"Its skin is warm, like"
9"She places a boot on"
10"She takes another step into"
11"She stares at the butterfly."
12"She plucks the butterfly from"
13"She takes another step deeper"
14"She looks up."
15"She steps toward the palace’s"
16"She pulls the Heartstone Pendant"
ratio0.224
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount76
totalSentences76
matches
0"Rory clutches the crimson Heartstone"
1"She shifts her delivery bag’s"
2"Isolde stands beside her, silver"
3"Nyx drifts a foot off"
4"The pendant flutters like a"
5"Rory’s fingers curl tighter around"
6"The stones hum."
7"Vine’s breath lures the hungry,"
8"Rory’s quick thinking ties the"
9"She taps the gem with"
10"The cost’s tied to the"
11"Nyx solidifies, their"
12"The Veil’s tear reeks of"
13"They step through the rift"
14"Amber bleeds over the horizon."
15"Vineyards strung with grapes the"
16"She plucks a gold-striped orb"
17"A figure slumps past her—thin,"
18"Nyx shifts to incorporeal form,"
19"They signed contracts for taste—traded"
ratio1
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences76
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences63
technicalSentenceCount17
matches
0"They step through the rift first, their shadow form flickering as they breach the barrier. Rory follows, her boots hitting soil that thrums under her soles. Iso…"
1"Vineyards strung with grapes the color of crushed amethyst curl up sloping hills, their leaves glistening with a dew that catches the strange light and drips in…"
2"She plucks a gold-striped orb from a low-hanging branch. Its skin gives under her fingers, oozing a clear liquid that stings her scar when a drop falls."
3"A figure slumps past her—thin, gaunt, their skin a sickly gray, their hands calloused from tending vines. They don’t glance at her; their eyes are blank, as if …"
4"Rory drops the orb. It splatters on the soil, and the hum of the ground intensifies for a heartbeat before fading. She brushes the sticky liquid from her finger…"
5"A grand feast unfolds on a hilltop ahead—long tables heaped with pastries tall enough to touch the amber sky, roasts of exotic beasts with scales that glint lik…"
6"Rory’s pendant pulses faster, its warmth spreading up her neck to her jaw. She clutches it, her scar throbbing in time with the gem’s beat."
7"She spots a warden’s badge glinting on one of the feast’s servers—a small, silver token she’s seen pinned to the coats of men who patrolled the park’s rift poin…"
8"Rory follows the river of nectar upstream, away from the feast’s chaos. The vineyards thicken here, their amethyst grapes clinging so tightly to the branches th…"
9"Rory tucks the fruit into her delivery bag, her fingers brushing the cold moonsilver blade. She clutches the Heartstone Pendant, her scar throbbing in time with…"
10"The amber sky darkens a fraction, as if the realm itself is watching them."
11"Rory glances at the helbound soul still standing beside her. They’ve turned back to the giant tree, their hands resuming their rhythmic plucking."
12"She takes another step into the secondary rift’s other side. The vineyards here are thicker, the fruit glows brighter, and the hum of the soil is louder. She ca…"
13"She takes another step deeper into the prince’s private gardens. The vineyards give way to a garden of giant flowers—their petals the color of crushed velvet, t…"
14"A grand palace looms ahead—its walls made of polished amber, its towers twisting toward the darkening sky. Goblets float around its entrance, their wine glintin…"
15"Rory grips the Fae-Forged Blade’s hilt through her delivery bag. The blade’s cold seeps through the fabric, calming her racing heart. She’s a delivery person fr…"
16"A helbound soul stands guard at the doors—tall, broad, their skin a sickly gray, their hand resting on a sword hilt that glints like molten iron. They don’t gla…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags1
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
77.9788%