Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYANTK3R9PNQJQXYWBSCRNR

Run Details

Duration:
34.1s
Cost:
$0.001535
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora’s hand sweats against the silver chain of the Heartstone Pendant. The pendant presses warmer than usual, a dull throb like a pulse just beneath her skin. She glances at it, the deep crimson gemstone catching the weak winter sunlight filtering through the oak trees. *Veil’s thinning*, she thinks. Not that she needed the stone’s guidance—her gut had been coiling since Nyx materialized in her flat, shadow shifting like smoke, voice a whisper in her ear: *“Winter solstice. The Boundary frays. You’ll need the blade.”* She’d grabbed the Fae-Forged Blade hidden in her closet, its moonsilver edge cold as a grave, and met Nyx at the gate of Silas’ bar. They’d waited an hour for Isolde, who arrived as if from nowhere, her silver hair glowing in the gray afternoon, no footprints marring the muddy path of Richmond Park. Now, they stand before the ancient stones—ancient, but not in the way the park’s oaks are. These stones are alive, their bark rough as skin, leaves full and green even though the season’s turning. Nyx shifts beside her, a wisp of shadow thickening into a 6’2” silhouette, violet eyes narrowing. “Too bright,” they say, and Aurora realizes the air isn’t air anymore. It’s *rich*, like honey mixed with rain, and the birdsong—there is no birdsong—fades into a hum, low and steady, as if the world is breathing. “Through,” Isolde says, her voice a sigh, and steps between the stones. Aurora follows. The moment her boot touches the other side, the world *changes*. The sky is not the park’s gray. It’s amber, warm as candlelight, streaked with clouds that seem to flow upward, not downward. The trees around them aren’t oak—they’re something else, their leaves iridescent, shifting from gold to blue to green as the wind stirs. The ground is soft, moss that glows like crushed starlight, and wildflowers—poppies, lilies, flowers Aurora doesn’t recognize—burst from the earth in colors that shouldn’t exist. *Blood red*, *pale lavender*, *sunshine yellow* so bright it hurts her eyes. She blinks, and one of the flowers closes, its petals folding into a tight bud that pulses. “Time’s different,” Nyx says, and Aurora checks her phone. 3:17 PM. Her watch—old, a gift from her dad—reads 3:19. “Inside,” Isolde says, already moving, and Aurora hurries after her. They walk a path that isn’t there an hour ago. It winds through the grove, past a fountain where the water isn’t water—it’s liquid diamond, refracting the amber sky into a rainbow that splinters the air. Nyx pauses, shadow rippling. “Hel,” they whisper. Aurora’s hand flies to the pendant. It burns now, hot enough to make her yank it free, the stone glowing like a smoldering coal. “Close,” she says, and Nyx’s silhouette flickers, becoming more shadow than form. “Your kind doesn’t fare well near the Veil’s tears.” Isolde laughs, a sound like wind chimes. “Tears, yes. But not *tears* you’d recognize, little Rory. The Fae Grove is between. A pocket. A *gift*.” She stops, turns. Her lavender eyes lock onto Aurora’s, and for a second, Aurora sees it: a vision. A crown of thorns, a blade at her throat, the Heartstone shattered. But then Isolde blinks, and it’s gone, replaced by a smile. “You carry the Stone of Dymas. It hums for the gluttons’ realm, for the prince who hoards feasts like they’re life itself. Interesting. Very interesting.” “Isolde,” Nyx says, and the seer’s attention flicks to them. “You’ve warned us of the price, but what of the *sight*? We didn’t come here for pretty flowers.” Aurora steps closer, the pendant still hot. “What’s under all this?” Isolde sits on a rock, her silver hair pooling around her like a veil. She plucks a wildflower, its purple petals glowing, and turns it between her fingers. “Under the *lies*. The Veil is thin. Thinner than it’s been in centuries. Winter solstice, remember?” She plucks a petal, lets it fall. “The Fae take what they want from the mortal world at solstice. The Helborn, too. They slip through the cracks. Dymas doesn’t *need* portals—they *steal* them.” Aurora’s throat tightens. “Eva. She’s been acting strange. Dreaming of endless feasts, but not the good kind. Cold, empty feasts. Like the food doesn’t *exist*.” Isolde’s gaze sharpens. “Eva. The Irish girl with the luck of the beer-drunk. She carries a sliver of Dymas’ taint, doesn’t she? The desire to *consume*—not for hunger, but for *more*.” She plucks another petal, lets it fall. “The Grove is a mirror. What you see here is what you’ll take. Or what you’ll *stop*.” Nyx kneels, shadow wrapping around the glowing moss like a blanket. “Why bring us here? To see the problem, not solve it?” “To *feel* it,” Isolde says. “The boundaries aren’t just between realms. They’re within. The Heartstone will guide you. The Blade will cut through what’s invisible. And you—Rory—you’ll think. You always think.” She stands, and Aurora notices her feet don’t touch the moss. “Follow the thrum. It leads to the weak point. The place where the Veil breathes.” They move on. The grove grows wilder—trees with branches that twist into spiral staircases, a river that sings, its voice like a harp played by wind. Nyx points out a creature hiding in the undergrowth: a fox with nine tails, each tail a different color, its eyes the same faint violet as Nyx’s. “A shifter,” they say. “Common here. They guard the water.” The fox flicks its tail, then melts into the shadow of a tree. Aurora’s pendant burns hotter. She stops, bends, and brushes the moss with her free hand. It’s not just glowing—it’s *pulsing* in time with her heartbeat. The thrum Isolde mentioned is there, a low vibration in her bones. “It’s that way,” she says, pointing east. “The stone’s getting stronger.” Nyx’s shadow shifts, eyes narrowing. “There’s something *hungry* in that direction. Not for food. For … *entry*.” Isolde’s smile is grim. “Then we move faster.” They walk for what feels like hours, though Aurora’s phone still reads 3:22. The sky darkens, but there’s no sunset—only the amber light fading to a deep, warm gold. The trees thin, and suddenly they’re in a clearing, larger than the park’s green, with a single stone at its center. It’s not an oak, not a stone at all—*it’s a rift*. Aurora gasps. The air around the stone shimmers, a distortion like heat above asphalt, but brighter, more vivid. The thrum of the pendant is deafening now, the gemstone glowing so brightly she has to shield her eyes. “That’s it,” she says. “That’s the Veil’s tear.” “*Not* a tear,” Isolde says, and steps beside her. “A gate. The Helborn don’t need to *break* the Veil—they just need to *unlock* it. And the Heartstone? It’s a key. Dymas forged it to call the worthy. The ones who can stop him.” “Why us?” Nyx asks, shadow rippling with tension. “Why now?” “Because the solstice is almost here,” Isolde says. “And Eva—she’ll walk through this gate before midnight. She’ll carry a feast back to the mortal world, and it won’t be food. It’ll be *hunger*—black, insatiable, until she’s nothing but a shell, feeding Dymas’ hunger.” She pauses, looks at Aurora. “You once outran an abusive man with nothing but a can of mace and your wits. You can outsmart a prince.” Aurora grips the Fae Blade in her hand. It’s cold, colder than any metal should be, but she doesn’t flinch. “What do we do?” Isolde plucks a petal from her hair—pale lavender, glowing—and drops it into the rift. The moment it touches the shimmering air, the petal burns, white-hot, and the rift pulses. “You don’t close it,” she says. “You *divert* it. Lead the Helborn back to where they came. Dymas wants Eva because she’s *hungry*—feed him something else. A *lie*. A vision of plenty that’s nothing but dust.” Nyx shifts, becoming a wisp of shadow, and steps into the rift. The shimmering air parts, and for a second, Aurora sees Nyx’s old self: a man, with dark hair and a sword, screaming as the shadows claimed him. Then Nyx is back, shaking her head. “There’s a guard. Three of them. They’re not mortal. Their shadows are *thick*.” “Then the Blade will cut through the wards,” Aurora says. She draws it, the moonsilver edge catching the amber light, and the rift glows brighter, as if it recognizes the weapon. “We need to get inside. Close the gate from the other side.” Isolde’s hand rests on her arm. “Be careful, Rory. The Veil’s tears don’t just break the boundary—they break *you*. If you linger too long, you’ll be stuck here. A mortal caught between worlds.” Aurora thinks of Eva, laughing at parties, then quiet, staring at empty plates, her eyes hollow. She thinks of her dad, telling her stories of Ireland, of the law that can’t fix everything but can protect you. She tightens her grip on the pendant, its heat now a steady warmth, not a pulse. “I’m not going to linger.” She turns to Nyx. “Can you create a distraction? Keep the guards busy?” Nyx’s shadow solidifies, a grin flickering in their eyes. “Always.” Then Aurora steps into the rift. The world *swallows* her. It’s not dark. It’s a sea of amber, light so bright it hurts, and the air tastes of roasted fruit and something sharp, like vinegar. She hears music—loud,欢快, a symphony of drums and strings—and the sound of laughter, endless laughter. Ahead, there’s a hall, larger than a cathedral, its walls lined with mirrors that reflect feasts of every kind: roasted swans, towers of pastries, vats of wine that flow like water. And at the end of the hall, a man in a crown of thorns, his eyes black as coal, sitting on a throne of bones. That’s Dymas. That’s the prince of gluttony. Aurora’s hand trembles, but she doesn’t drop the sword. She looks for Eva, and there she is, standing at the edge of the hall, her eyes wide, her hands outstretched. “Eva!” Aurora calls. “Come on—now!” But Eva doesn’t move. She stares at the tables, at the food, her mouth watering. “But it’s *real*,” she whispers. “It’s so *real*.” Aurora takes a step forward. The floor is cold, marble that feels like ice. The air thickens, and she hears Nyx shout—a sound like wind through a canyon, then a roar of pain, then silence. *Guards down*, she thinks. “Eva, *look* at me!” She grabs her arm, and Eva flinches, but her eyes don’t leave the food. “It’s a trap. He’s using your hunger to lure you in. To take *you*.” Eva’s mouth twists, a snarl. “You don’t understand. He can *give* me everything. I won’t be poor anymore. I won’t be *nothing*.” Aurora glances at the man on the throne. He’s watching her now, a slow, hungry smile spreading across his face. “Eva, listen to me. The food isn’t real. It’s just smoke and mirrors. But *you*—*you* are real. And if you step through that gate, you’ll never be real again. You’ll be a ghost, feeding his hunger.” Eva’s eyes flicker, just for a second, and Aurora sees it: doubt. Grief, even. “My mum… she used to say… ‘Aurora, don’t fill your heart with what you can’t keep.’” Aurora’s throat tightens. “She was right. Come on. Let’s go home.” Eva takes a step toward her. The tables rattle, dishes shattering, and the crown on Dymas’ head tightens, his eyes narrowing. “Foolish girl. Return the Heartstone, and I’ll let you both live.” Aurora’s hand goes to her necklace. The pendant is on fire, but not with heat—with light. She rips it off, holds it high. “Take it. But leave us alone.” She hurls the Heartstone at the throne. The gemstone shatters, sending a wave of light across the hall. Dymas screams, a sound like nails on a blackboard, and the mirrors explode, glass raining down. The hall shakes, and Aurora grabs Eva’s hand, pulling her toward the gate. Nyx is there, shadow shifting, and they run for the rift, the ground crumbling beneath them. Behind them, the hall collapses. Aurora steps through the gate, into the Fae Grove, and stumbles. Isolde catches her, steadying her, and Aurora looks back. The rift is gone, the stone at the center of the clearing now just a smooth, gray rock. The sun has risen in the park, casting gray light over the trees. Eva is shaking, her eyes wide. “My mum… she said… ‘Aurora, don’t fill your heart with what you can’t keep.’” Aurora pulls her into a hug. “She was right. Let’s go get some breakfast. Silas makes the best hash browns this side of the Veil.” Eva laughs, a wet, shaky sound, and pulls away. “Hash browns. Yeah. Hash browns.” Isolde smiles, and her hand brushes Aurora’s scar, the small crescent on her wrist. “You did well, Rory. You always do.” Aurora looks at Nyx, who is now a wisp of shadow, watching the clearing. “We did well. Together.” Nyx’s voice is a whisper. “The Veil will mend. For now.” They walk back to the stones, the sun rising higher, the grove fading, the amber sky turning gray. Aurora’s hand finds its way to her wrist, the scar there a faint, warm reminder of home. And somewhere, in the distance, a feast begins. But that’s a story for another time.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags56
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"the gemstone glowing so [so]"
dialogueSentences78
tagDensity0.718
leniency1
rawRatio0.018
effectiveRatio0.018
95.54% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2243
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
64.33% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2243
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"throb"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count2
2
word"whisper"
count3
3
word"grave"
count1
4
word"shattered"
count1
5
word"desire"
count1
6
word"tension"
count1
7
word"warmth"
count1
8
word"symphony"
count1
9
word"marble"
count1
10
word"silence"
count1
11
word"flicker"
count1
12
word"reminder"
count1
highlights
0"throb"
1"pulse"
2"whisper"
3"grave"
4"shattered"
5"desire"
6"tension"
7"warmth"
8"symphony"
9"marble"
10"silence"
11"flicker"
12"reminder"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences142
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences142
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"see"
hedgeMatches
0"seem to"
98.72% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences146
gibberishSentences1
adjustedGibberishSentences1
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen101
ratio0.007
matches
0"It’s not dark. It’s a sea of amber, light so bright it hurts, and the air tastes of roasted fruit and something sharp, like vinegar. She hears music—loud,欢快, a symphony of drums an…"
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans41
markdownWords56
totalWords2214
ratio0.025
matches
0"Veil’s thinning"
1"“Winter solstice. The Boundary frays. You’ll need the blade.”"
2"rich"
3"changes"
4"Blood red"
5"pale lavender"
6"sunshine yellow"
7"tears"
8"gift"
9"sight"
10"lies"
11"need"
12"steal"
13"exist"
14"consume"
15"more"
16"stop"
17"feel"
18"pulsing"
19"hungry"
20"entry"
21"it’s a rift"
22"Not"
23"break"
24"unlock"
25"hunger"
26"divert"
27"hungry"
28"lie"
29"thick"
30"you"
31"swallows"
32"real"
33"real"
34"Guards down"
35"look"
36"you"
37"give"
38"nothing"
39"you"
40"you"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions21
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions123
wordCount1796
uniqueNames22
maxNameDensity1.73
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Heartstone5
Pendant1
Nyx21
Fae-Forged1
Blade3
Isolde15
Richmond1
Park1
Aurora31
Rory2
Fae5
Grove3
Stone1
Dymas6
Interesting1
Veil5
Helborn3
Irish1
Eva11
Close1
Ireland1
You4
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Pendant"
2"Nyx"
3"Blade"
4"Isolde"
5"Aurora"
6"Rory"
7"Stone"
8"Dymas"
9"Veil"
10"Helborn"
11"Eva"
12"You"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Fae"
3"Grove"
4"Ireland"
globalScore0.637
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences80
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"clouds that seem to flow upward, not downward"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.452
wordCount2214
matches
0"not for hunger, but for *more*"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences146
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs58
mean38.17
std29.71
cv0.778
sampleLengths
085
1141
212
313
498
529
688
791
828
911
1077
1125
1255
1322
1457
1576
1648
1717
188
1961
2045
2143
2210
2369
2424
2565
2659
2743
2833
2958
3013
3110
326
334
3496
357
3635
3723
3871
3922
4056
4130
4211
4332
4429
457
4656
475
4851
4920
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences142
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs329
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount27
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences20
totalSentences146
ratio0.137
matches
0"Not that she needed the stone’s guidance—her gut had been coiling since Nyx materialized in her flat, shadow shifting like smoke, voice a whisper in her ear: *“Winter solstice. The Boundary frays. You’ll need the blade.”*"
1"Now, they stand before the ancient stones—ancient, but not in the way the park’s oaks are."
2"The sky is not the park’s gray. It’s amber, warm as candlelight, streaked with clouds that seem to flow upward, not downward. The trees around them aren’t oak—they’re something else, their leaves iridescent, shifting from gold to blue to green as the wind stirs. The ground is soft, moss that glows like crushed starlight, and wildflowers—poppies, lilies, flowers Aurora doesn’t recognize—burst from the earth in colors that shouldn’t exist. *Blood red*, *pale lavender*, *sunshine yellow* so bright it hurts her eyes. She blinks, and one of the flowers closes, its petals folding into a tight bud that pulses."
3"“Time’s different,” Nyx says, and Aurora checks her phone. 3:17 PM. Her watch—old, a gift from her dad—reads 3:19. “Inside,” Isolde says, already moving, and Aurora hurries after her."
4"They walk a path that isn’t there an hour ago. It winds through the grove, past a fountain where the water isn’t water—it’s liquid diamond, refracting the amber sky into a rainbow that splinters the air. Nyx pauses, shadow rippling. “Hel,” they whisper. Aurora’s hand flies to the pendant. It burns now, hot enough to make her yank it free, the stone glowing like a smoldering coal. “Close,” she says, and Nyx’s silhouette flickers, becoming more shadow than form. “Your kind doesn’t fare well near the Veil’s tears.”"
5"Dymas doesn’t *need* portals—they *steal* them.”"
6"The desire to *consume*—not for hunger, but for *more*.” She plucks another petal, lets it fall. “The Grove is a mirror."
7"And you—Rory—you’ll think."
8"They move on. The grove grows wilder—trees with branches that twist into spiral staircases, a river that sings, its voice like a harp played by wind. Nyx points out a creature hiding in the undergrowth: a fox with nine tails, each tail a different color, its eyes the same faint violet as Nyx’s. “A shifter,” they say. “Common here."
9"Aurora’s pendant burns hotter. She stops, bends, and brushes the moss with her free hand. It’s not just glowing—it’s *pulsing* in time with her heartbeat. The thrum Isolde mentioned is there, a low vibration in her bones. “It’s that way,” she says, pointing east. “The stone’s getting stronger.”"
10"They walk for what feels like hours, though Aurora’s phone still reads 3:22. The sky darkens, but there’s no sunset—only the amber light fading to a deep, warm gold. The trees thin, and suddenly they’re in a clearing, larger than the park’s green, with a single stone at its center. It’s not an oak, not a stone at all—*it’s a rift*."
11"The Helborn don’t need to *break* the Veil—they just need to *unlock* it."
12"It’ll be *hunger*—black, insatiable, until she’s nothing but a shell, feeding Dymas’ hunger.” She pauses, looks at Aurora. “You once outran an abusive man with nothing but a can of mace and your wits."
13"Isolde plucks a petal from her hair—pale lavender, glowing—and drops it into the rift. The moment it touches the shimmering air, the petal burns, white-hot, and the rift pulses. “You don’t close it,” she says. “You *divert* it."
14"Dymas wants Eva because she’s *hungry*—feed him something else."
15"The Veil’s tears don’t just break the boundary—they break *you*."
16"It’s not dark. It’s a sea of amber, light so bright it hurts, and the air tastes of roasted fruit and something sharp, like vinegar. She hears music—loud,欢快, a symphony of drums and strings—and the sound of laughter, endless laughter. Ahead, there’s a hall, larger than a cathedral, its walls lined with mirrors that reflect feasts of every kind: roasted swans, towers of pastries, vats of wine that flow like water. And at the end of the hall, a man in a crown of thorns, his eyes black as coal, sitting on a throne of bones."
17"Aurora takes a step forward. The floor is cold, marble that feels like ice. The air thickens, and she hears Nyx shout—a sound like wind through a canyon, then a roar of pain, then silence. *Guards down*, she thinks. “Eva, *look* at me!” She grabs her arm, and Eva flinches, but her eyes don’t leave the food. “It’s a trap."
18"But *you*—*you* are real."
19"Aurora’s hand goes to her necklace. The pendant is on fire, but not with heat—with light. She rips it off, holds it high. “Take it."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1333
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount31
adverbRatio0.023255813953488372
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.002250562640660165
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences146
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences146
mean15.16
std18.18
cv1.199
sampleLengths
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116
218
34
436
525
629
716
818
953
1012
1113
1298
1329
1488
159
167
175
182
1949
2016
211
222
2321
247
2511
2631
274
286
2922
303
315
326
334
344
359
363
375
384
399
409
4121
428
434
4415
457
4611
472
485
497
53.88% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.3561643835616438
totalSentences146
uniqueOpeners52
26.46% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences126
matches
0"Then Aurora steps into the"
ratio0.008
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount31
totalSentences126
matches
0"She glances at it, the"
1"She’d grabbed the Fae-Forged Blade"
2"They’d waited an hour for"
3"They walk a path that"
4"It hums for the"
5"We didn’t come here for"
6"They slip through the cracks."
7"She’s been acting strange."
8"She carries a sliver of"
9"You always the thrum."
10"It leads to the weak"
11"They move on. The grove"
12"They guard the"
13"They walk for what feels"
14"It’s a key."
15"She’ll carry a feast back"
16"It’ll be *hunger*—black, insatiable, until"
17"You can outsmart a"
18"They’re not mortal."
19"Their shadows are"
ratio0.246
67.14% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount99
totalSentences126
matches
0"Aurora’s hand sweats against the"
1"The pendant presses warmer than"
2"She glances at it, the"
3"*Veil’s thinning*, she thinks."
4"She’d grabbed the Fae-Forged Blade"
5"They’d waited an hour for"
6"These stones are alive, their"
7"Nyx shifts beside her, a"
8"Isolde says, her voice a"
9"Aurora follows. The moment her"
10"The sky is not the"
11"Nyx says, and Aurora checks"
12"They walk a path that"
13"Isolde laughs, a sound like"
14"The Fae Grove is between."
15"A carry the Stone of"
16"It hums for the"
17"Nyx says, and the seer’s"
18"We didn’t come here for"
19"Aurora steps closer, the pendant"
ratio0.786
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences126
matches
0"Now, they stand before the"
1"To see the problem, not"
2"If you linger too long,"
ratio0.024
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences18
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"They’d waited an hour for Isolde, who arrived as if from nowhere, her silver hair glowing in the gray afternoon, no footprints marring the muddy path of Richmon…"
1"The sky is not the park’s gray. It’s amber, warm as candlelight, streaked with clouds that seem to flow upward, not downward. The trees around them aren’t oak—t…"
2"It’s not dark. It’s a sea of amber, light so bright it hurts, and the air tastes of roasted fruit and something sharp, like vinegar. She hears music—loud,欢快, a …"
3"The gemstone shatters, sending a wave of light across the hall. Dymas screams, a sound like nails on a blackboard, and the mirrors explode, glass raining down. …"
72.37% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags38
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"that she needed, shadow shifting like smoke, voice a whisper in her ear: *"
1"Nyx shifts, a wisp of shadow thickening into a 6’2"
2"Isolde says, her voice a sigh, and steps between the stones"
3"Nyx asks, shadow rippling with tension"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Nyx asks (nyx ask)"
1"Eva laughs (laugh)"
dialogueSentences78
tagDensity0.115
leniency0.231
rawRatio0.222
effectiveRatio0.051
84.2816%