Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYARM1XRSXVC34P8HYQCRAW

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Duration:
3m 21s
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$0.017284
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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Harlow Quinn’s boot crunched over a shard of cracked Tube tile as she descended the rusted metal staircase into the Camden underground. Dawn’s gray light didn’t reach this far down—her flashlight beam cut through a fog thick with the smell of moss, burnt sage, and something acrid, like singed hair, catching motes of dust that swirled like trapped ghosts. The bone token (a chipped raven’s talon she’d pried from a Coven of the Broken Veil gang member’s pocket two nights prior, his last words a gurgled warning about the “underground market”) still pressed a cold indent into her right palm; she’d fumbled with it for three minutes at the hidden entry hatch, her leather watch ticking a frantic countdown, before the iron lock had snarled open, granting her access to the Veil Market’s current lair. Eighteen years on the job, decorated with a shelf of commendations for closing gang rings and solving cold cases, and she’d never stepped into a crime scene that required a supernatural entry fee. The memory of DS Morris—his laugh, the way he’d teased her about her military rigidity—pricked at her throat as she stepped onto the platform; three years prior, he’d vanished while investigating a similar underground lead, his car found abandoned by the Thames, his phone dead, no sign of struggle beyond a faint, unidentifiable sigil etched into his neck. She found the victim slumped against the platform’s moss-caked central pillar, his form half-shrouded by a tattered black cloak that reeked of shadow energy (a scent she’d tried to forget since Morris’s body was pulled from the river). The first glance told her a textbook homicide: bullet wound to the chest, a clean hole just above the sternum, blood darkening the frayed fabric of his tunic to a sticky black. But even before she knelt, the inconsistencies pricked at her like thorns. No shell casing glinted in the damp concrete, not even a faint indent where one might have landed. No footprints marred the dust except her own—until she tilted her flashlight beam to the left, where a faint, shadowy smudge stretched from the pillar to the edge of the tracks, as if someone had dragged a pool of ink across the floor, its edges fading into nothingness. She marked it in her notebook, her sharp jaw tightening so fiercely her molars ached; Morris had taught her to never ignore the unseeable, to chase the gaps between the facts, and she’d failed him by dismissing that sigil on his neck as a gang tattoo. She reached for the victim’s hand to check for a pulse, then flinched so hard her flashlight clattered to the floor. His fingers were charred black, the skin cracked to reveal bone that glowed with a faint, greenish hue, as if lit from within by some unholy fire. Clutched in his singed grasp was a small brass compass, its casing coated in a thick verdigris patina that made it look older than the Tube station itself—older than London, even. Quinn pried it free with a pair of tweezers, her latex gloves protecting her from the residual heat that seeped through the metal, and held it up to her flashlight once she’d retrieved the device. The face was etched with looping protective sigils, their curves so intricate she couldn’t place them in any of the gang graffiti or ritual markings she’d studied, and the needle spun wildly, as if torn between a dozen invisible norths, its whirring a faint, high-pitched whine that cut through the station’s dripping water. She dropped it into an evidence bag, her brow furrowing so deeply a crease formed between her brown eyes; bullets didn’t char skin to the bone. Compasses didn’t spin for no reason. A floorboard creaked behind her, its groan echoing through the empty station like a ghost’s complaint. Quinn’s hand flew to her service weapon, her military bearing snapping into place as she spun, her boot sliding slightly on the damp concrete. A woman stood at the edge of the platform, her curly red hair tumbling over round glasses that slipped down a freckled nose dotted with specks of dust. She clutched a worn leather satchel to her chest, its straps frayed from years of use—she’d clearly hauled it through countless archives and hidden locations—and when she saw Quinn’s gun, she tucked a strand of hair behind her left ear—a nervous habit so pronounced, so repetitive, Quinn could spot it from ten feet away. The movement was familiar; Morris had a similar habit of twisting his wedding ring when he was anxious, a trait she’d watched vanish the night he disappeared. “Who are you?” Quinn’s voice was sharp, no room for pretense, her finger tightening on the trigger. The Coven of the Broken Veil she’d been investigating for six months had ties to occult researchers; she’d suspected the British Museum’s restricted archives were a front for their operations, a place where they could hoard enchanted goods and plan their raids on supernatural markets. “Eva Kowalski.” The woman’s voice trembled, but she stepped forward, her satchel bumping against her hip—she was 5’4”, short enough that Quinn had to tilt her head down to meet her green eyes. “Occult researcher. I’m a research assistant at the British Museum’s restricted archives—hold a master’s in Ancient History from Oxford, focused on Shade artisan craftsmanship. I’ve been tracking this man for three weeks.” She nodded at the victim, her glasses slipping further down her nose. “Kael,” she added, as if reading Quinn’s unspoken question. “He was one of the last Shade artisans making Veil Compasses. I found his name in a 17th-century manuscript in the archives—he’d been warning other artisans about the Coven’s attempts to exploit supernatural rifts for their black market goods.” Quinn’s finger tightened on the trigger. The Coven’s name was the same one the gang member had gurgled before he died. “You have no business here. This is a crime scene. Leave before I arrest you for trespassing.” “I know.” Eva tucked another strand of hair behind her left ear, her fingers fumbling slightly with the curly lock, then unslung her satchel and pulled out a thick leather-bound book—its cover embossed with the same looping sigils as the compass in Quinn’s evidence bag. The book’s pages were yellowed, its spine cracked, and she flipped to a marked page with a fumbling hand. “I followed Kael here last night. He met me at the entry hatch, his hands already charred, and told me about a rift opening beneath Camden—one the Coven was trying to widen to extract shadow energy. The bullet wound’s a decoy.” Quinn scoffed, but her eyes darted back to Kael’s charred hands. “Decoy? He’s got a bullet hole in his chest. I don’t care about your fairy tales or your Oxford degrees. This is a murder investigation.” But she found herself glancing at the evidence bag in her hand, the Veil Compass’s needle still whirring faintly. Eva stepped closer, her glasses slipping so far she had to push them up with her thumb, and nodded at the bag. “That’s a Veil Compass. Made by Shade artisans like Kael—points to the nearest supernatural rift. The verdigris patina is from prolonged exposure to shadow energy; it’s a sign the compass has been near an unstable rift for weeks. The needle’s spinning because the rift Kael was trying to seal is still fluctuating—he didn’t finish the ritual before he was interrupted.” Quinn’s leather watch ticked loudly in the silence, its sound amplified by the empty station. She’d dismissed the supernatural after Morris’s disappearance—refused to believe his death was anything other than a gang hit, even when the coroner had noted the unidentifiable sigil on his neck and the lack of any bullet or knife wound. She’d buried herself in case files, in gang raids, in anything to avoid facing the possibility that something unseeable had taken her partner. But the inconsistencies were piling up: no shell casing, no footprints beyond her own and Kael’s shadowy smudge, charred bones that glowed green, a compass that wouldn’t stop spinning. “Prove it,” she said, her voice softer now, the edge gone. Eva’s eyes lit up, a flash of excitement cutting through her nervousness. She knelt beside Kael, her satchel spilling open to reveal a stack of ancient scrolls tied with leather thongs and a small bone token of her own— a rabbit’s paw, polished smooth from use. She pointed to a faint carving on Kael’s forearm, one Quinn had missed in her initial sweep, its edges hidden beneath the tattered sleeve of his cloak. “That’s a sealing sigil. Same as the one on the compass and my book. He was trying to etch it into the pillar when he was hit. The charred hands are from a failed ritual—shadow energy backfired on him when he was interrupted, burning through his fingers before he could finish the sigil.” Quinn leaned in, her salt-and-pepper cropped hair falling forward slightly as she studied the carving. It was faint, almost invisible beneath the grime and blood, but it was there—its loops identical to the ones on the compass. She thought of Morris’s body, the sigil on his neck, the way the coroner had said it looked like it had been burned into his skin. She’d ignored it then. She couldn’t ignore it now. “What about the bullet wound?” she asked, her voice barely a whisper. “Magical projectile.” Eva flipped to another page in her book, pointing to a drawing of a glowing black pellet, its surface etched with the same sigil as the others. “Disguised as a bullet. No shell casing, no ballistic match—they dissolve into shadow energy within minutes of hitting a target. The Coven uses them to silence anyone who tries to stop their rift experiments. Kael told me they killed your partner.” Quinn’s blood ran cold. She’d never told anyone outside the department about Morris’s case. “How do you know about Morris?” “Kael was there.” Eva tucked another strand of hair behind her left ear, her voice trembling again. “He saw the Coven open a small rift by the Thames three years ago. They used a Veil Compass to find it. Morris stumbled on them while he was investigating a gang raid. They used a projectile on him, too—burned the sigil into his neck before he vanished into the rift.” Quinn pulled out her notebook, flipping to the page with Morris’s case notes, and found the same sigil scribbled in the margin—she’d thought it was a random doodle he’d made during a boring briefing. She looked back at the Veil Compass in the evidence bag; the needle had stopped spinning, now pointing directly at the pillar’s base. She shone her flashlight there, and found a small crack in the concrete, its edges glowing with the same greenish hue as Kael’s charred bones, a faint wisp of shadow energy curling out of it like smoke. “The rift’s still open?” she asked, her voice tight. “Barely.” Eva packed her scrolls back into her satchel, her hands fumbling slightly. “Kael sealed most of it before he was hit. But the Coven will be back tonight—full moon. The Veil Market moves locations then, and they’ll use the chaos to widen the rift.” Quinn glanced at her watch, its leather band scuffed and worn, and noted the time: 6:30 a.m. The full moon would rise at 9:00 p.m. She had less than 15 hours to stop the Coven, to close the rift, to finally get answers about Morris’s death. She slipped the bone token from her pocket, its cold surface pressing into her palm again, and nodded at Eva’s satchel. “Tell me everything you know about the sealing ritual. And don’t leave out a single detail.” Eva pushed her glasses up her nose and pulled a crinkled scroll from the bottom of her satchel, its edges frayed from being rolled and unrolled a dozen times. “It requires a bone token, a drop of shadow energy from the rift, and the full sigil carved into a solid surface. Kael’s half-finished sigil is a start, but we need to complete it before the moon peaks. If we don’t, the rift will swallow half of Camden by midnight.” Quinn looked at Kael’s charred hands, at the Veil Compass in the evidence bag, at the crack in the pillar glowing green. For three years, she’d run from the supernatural, from the truth about Morris’s death. But now, standing in that damp, ghostly Tube station, she realized running had only let the Coven grow stronger. She tucked the bone token back into her pocket, adjusted her watch’s leather strap, and nodded at the scroll. “Let’s get to work. We’ve got a sigil to finish.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags27
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.844
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
90.67% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2143
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count4
highlights
0"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
67.34% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2143
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"etched"
count3
1
word"pulse"
count1
2
word"intricate"
count1
3
word"furrowing"
count1
4
word"echoing"
count1
5
word"familiar"
count1
6
word"trembled"
count1
7
word"unspoken"
count1
8
word"silence"
count2
9
word"etch"
count1
10
word"whisper"
count1
highlights
0"etched"
1"pulse"
2"intricate"
3"furrowing"
4"echoing"
5"familiar"
6"trembled"
7"unspoken"
8"silence"
9"etch"
10"whisper"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"blood ran cold"
count1
highlights
0"blood ran cold"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences73
matches
0"was anxious"
5.87% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount5
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences73
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"look"
2"watch’s"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"tries to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences75
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen107
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2114
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions89
wordCount1946
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity0.87
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Quinn17
Tube3
Camden3
Coven9
Broken2
Veil8
Market2
Morris11
Thames1
London1
British2
Museum2
Ancient1
History1
Oxford2
Shade2
Eva8
Kael10
Compass4
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Coven"
2"Market"
3"Morris"
4"Museum"
5"Eva"
6"Kael"
7"Compass"
places
0"Camden"
1"Veil"
2"Thames"
3"London"
4"British"
5"Ancient"
6"Oxford"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
76.47% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences68
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"as if reading Quinn’s unspoken question"
1"looked like it had been burned into his s"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2114
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences75
matches
0"dismissing that sigil"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs28
mean75.5
std57.53
cv0.762
sampleLengths
0226
1194
2199
316
4133
562
677
748
838
9105
1036
11101
12106
1311
14126
1572
1612
1770
1820
1968
2094
219
2245
2367
2416
2579
2674
2710
71.62% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount7
totalSentences73
matches
0"was pulled"
1"were charred"
2"was etched"
3"were yellowed"
4"was interrupted"
5"been burned"
6"being rolled"
96.48% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs322
matches
0"was trying"
1"was trying"
2"were piling"
3"was trying"
4"was investigating"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount23
semicolonCount8
flaggedSentences26
totalSentences75
ratio0.347
matches
0"Dawn’s gray light didn’t reach this far down—her flashlight beam cut through a fog thick with the smell of moss, burnt sage, and something acrid, like singed hair, catching motes of dust that swirled like trapped ghosts."
1"The bone token (a chipped raven’s talon she’d pried from a Coven of the Broken Veil gang member’s pocket two nights prior, his last words a gurgled warning about the “underground market”) still pressed a cold indent into her right palm; she’d fumbled with it for three minutes at the hidden entry hatch, her leather watch ticking a frantic countdown, before the iron lock had snarled open, granting her access to the Veil Market’s current lair."
2"The memory of DS Morris—his laugh, the way he’d teased her about her military rigidity—pricked at her throat as she stepped onto the platform; three years prior, he’d vanished while investigating a similar underground lead, his car found abandoned by the Thames, his phone dead, no sign of struggle beyond a faint, unidentifiable sigil etched into his neck."
3"No footprints marred the dust except her own—until she tilted her flashlight beam to the left, where a faint, shadowy smudge stretched from the pillar to the edge of the tracks, as if someone had dragged a pool of ink across the floor, its edges fading into nothingness."
4"She marked it in her notebook, her sharp jaw tightening so fiercely her molars ached; Morris had taught her to never ignore the unseeable, to chase the gaps between the facts, and she’d failed him by dismissing that sigil on his neck as a gang tattoo."
5"Clutched in his singed grasp was a small brass compass, its casing coated in a thick verdigris patina that made it look older than the Tube station itself—older than London, even."
6"She dropped it into an evidence bag, her brow furrowing so deeply a crease formed between her brown eyes; bullets didn’t char skin to the bone."
7"She clutched a worn leather satchel to her chest, its straps frayed from years of use—she’d clearly hauled it through countless archives and hidden locations—and when she saw Quinn’s gun, she tucked a strand of hair behind her left ear—a nervous habit so pronounced, so repetitive, Quinn could spot it from ten feet away."
8"The movement was familiar; Morris had a similar habit of twisting his wedding ring when he was anxious, a trait she’d watched vanish the night he disappeared."
9"The Coven of the Broken Veil she’d been investigating for six months had ties to occult researchers; she’d suspected the British Museum’s restricted archives were a front for their operations, a place where they could hoard enchanted goods and plan their raids on supernatural markets."
10"“Eva Kowalski.” The woman’s voice trembled, but she stepped forward, her satchel bumping against her hip—she was 5’4”, short enough that Quinn had to tilt her head down to meet her green eyes. “Occult researcher."
11"I’m a research assistant at the British Museum’s restricted archives—hold a master’s in Ancient History from Oxford, focused on Shade artisan craftsmanship."
12"I found his name in a 17th-century manuscript in the archives—he’d been warning other artisans about the Coven’s attempts to exploit supernatural rifts for their black market goods.”"
13"“I know.” Eva tucked another strand of hair behind her left ear, her fingers fumbling slightly with the curly lock, then unslung her satchel and pulled out a thick leather-bound book—its cover embossed with the same looping sigils as the compass in Quinn’s evidence bag. The book’s pages were yellowed, its spine cracked, and she flipped to a marked page with a fumbling hand. “I followed Kael here last night."
14"He met me at the entry hatch, his hands already charred, and told me about a rift opening beneath Camden—one the Coven was trying to widen to extract shadow energy."
15"Made by Shade artisans like Kael—points to the nearest supernatural rift."
16"The verdigris patina is from prolonged exposure to shadow energy; it’s a sign the compass has been near an unstable rift for weeks."
17"The needle’s spinning because the rift Kael was trying to seal is still fluctuating—he didn’t finish the ritual before he was interrupted.”"
18"Quinn’s leather watch ticked loudly in the silence, its sound amplified by the empty station. She’d dismissed the supernatural after Morris’s disappearance—refused to believe his death was anything other than a gang hit, even when the coroner had noted the unidentifiable sigil on his neck and the lack of any bullet or knife wound. She’d buried herself in case files, in gang raids, in anything to avoid facing the possibility that something unseeable had taken her partner. But the inconsistencies were piling up: no shell casing, no footprints beyond her own and Kael’s shadowy smudge, charred bones that glowed green, a compass that wouldn’t stop spinning."
19"Eva’s eyes lit up, a flash of excitement cutting through her nervousness. She knelt beside Kael, her satchel spilling open to reveal a stack of ancient scrolls tied with leather thongs and a small bone token of her own— a rabbit’s paw, polished smooth from use. She pointed to a faint carving on Kael’s forearm, one Quinn had missed in her initial sweep, its edges hidden beneath the tattered sleeve of his cloak. “That’s a sealing sigil."
20"The charred hands are from a failed ritual—shadow energy backfired on him when he was interrupted, burning through his fingers before he could finish the sigil.”"
21"Quinn leaned in, her salt-and-pepper cropped hair falling forward slightly as she studied the carving. It was faint, almost invisible beneath the grime and blood, but it was there—its loops identical to the ones on the compass. She thought of Morris’s body, the sigil on his neck, the way the coroner had said it looked like it had been burned into his skin. She’d ignored it then. She couldn’t ignore it now."
22"No shell casing, no ballistic match—they dissolve into shadow energy within minutes of hitting a target."
23"They used a projectile on him, too—burned the sigil into his neck before he vanished into the rift.”"
24"Quinn pulled out her notebook, flipping to the page with Morris’s case notes, and found the same sigil scribbled in the margin—she’d thought it was a random doodle he’d made during a boring briefing. She looked back at the Veil Compass in the evidence bag; the needle had stopped spinning, now pointing directly at the pillar’s base. She shone her flashlight there, and found a small crack in the concrete, its edges glowing with the same greenish hue as Kael’s charred bones, a faint wisp of shadow energy curling out of it like smoke."
25"But the Coven will be back tonight—full moon."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1313
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"faint, high-pitched whine"
adverbCount27
adverbRatio0.020563594821020565
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.005331302361005331
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences75
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences75
mean28.19
std22.37
cv0.794
sampleLengths
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538
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818
948
1046
1121
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1435
1553
1626
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2028
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2227
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3430
355
3612
378
3811
395
4045
4111
4223
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44106
4511
4677
4710
4813
4926
65.78% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.4266666666666667
totalSentences75
uniqueOpeners32
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences73
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount20
totalSentences73
matches
0"She found the victim slumped"
1"She marked it in her"
2"She reached for the victim’s"
3"His fingers were charred black,"
4"She dropped it into an"
5"She clutched a worn leather"
6"I’m a research assistant at"
7"I’ve been tracking this man"
8"she added, as if reading"
9"I found his name in"
10"He met me at the"
11"He’s got a bullet hole"
12"I don’t care about your"
13"she said, her voice softer"
14"He was trying to etch"
15"she asked, her voice barely"
16"They used a Veil Compass"
17"They used a projectile on"
18"she asked, her voice tight"
19"We’ve got a sigil to"
ratio0.274
49.04% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount60
totalSentences73
matches
0"Harlow Quinn’s boot crunched over"
1"Dawn’s gray light didn’t reach"
2"The bone token (a chipped"
3"The memory of DS Morris—his"
4"She found the victim slumped"
5"The first glance told her"
6"She marked it in her"
7"She reached for the victim’s"
8"His fingers were charred black,"
9"Quinn pried it free with"
10"The face was etched with"
11"She dropped it into an"
12"Compasses didn’t spin for no"
13"A floorboard creaked behind her,"
14"Quinn’s hand flew to her"
15"A woman stood at the"
16"She clutched a worn leather"
17"The movement was familiar; Morris"
18"Quinn’s voice was sharp, no"
19"The Coven of the Broken"
ratio0.822
68.49% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences73
matches
0"If we don’t, the rift"
ratio0.014
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences38
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"Dawn’s gray light didn’t reach this far down—her flashlight beam cut through a fog thick with the smell of moss, burnt sage, and something acrid, like singed ha…"
1"She found the victim slumped against the platform’s moss-caked central pillar, his form half-shrouded by a tattered black cloak that reeked of shadow energy (a …"
2"No footprints marred the dust except her own—until she tilted her flashlight beam to the left, where a faint, shadowy smudge stretched from the pillar to the ed…"
3"Clutched in his singed grasp was a small brass compass, its casing coated in a thick verdigris patina that made it look older than the Tube station itself—older…"
4"Quinn pried it free with a pair of tweezers, her latex gloves protecting her from the residual heat that seeped through the metal, and held it up to her flashli…"
5"The face was etched with looping protective sigils, their curves so intricate she couldn’t place them in any of the gang graffiti or ritual markings she’d studi…"
6"Quinn’s hand flew to her service weapon, her military bearing snapping into place as she spun, her boot sliding slightly on the damp concrete."
7"A woman stood at the edge of the platform, her curly red hair tumbling over round glasses that slipped down a freckled nose dotted with specks of dust."
8"Quinn’s leather watch ticked loudly in the silence, its sound amplified by the empty station. She’d dismissed the supernatural after Morris’s disappearance—refu…"
9"The Coven uses them to silence anyone who tries to stop their rift experiments."
10"Quinn pulled out her notebook, flipping to the page with Morris’s case notes, and found the same sigil scribbled in the margin—she’d thought it was a random doo…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"she added, as if reading Quinn’s unspoken question"
1"she said, her voice softer now, the edge gone"
2"she asked, her voice barely a whisper"
3"Eva tucked, her voice trembling again"
4"she asked, her voice tight"
5"Eva packed, her hands fumbling slightly"
87.50% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she added (add)"
1"a failed ritual—shadow energy backfired (backfire)"
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.188
leniency0.375
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.125
75.2196%