Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYASS3YGRWJCE01HTHDCJZK

Run Details

Duration:
31.6s
Cost:
$0.001527
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The humid air of Camden Closes clung to Detective Harlow Quinn’s collar as she climbed the rusted fire escape, her boots echoing against the metal rungs. The rain from last night had left the brick slick, and she caught herself tucking her left hand into the back of her jacket where her service weapon lay—an old habit, honed during years chasing human predators, but these days, she’d learned to keep a finger near the grip just in case. *Three years*, she thought, as she reached the top. *Three years since Morris didn’t come home from a “routine” burglary in Whitechapel.* The memory coiled in her chest, sharp as the edge of a blade. She pushed it down. Focus. The exit was a half-sealed manhole, its cover resting on the ground beside a pile of pigeon droppings. She flicked her flashlight on, the beam cutting through the dusk, and saw the spray-painted sign scrawled on the wall behind: *NO TRESPASSING—DANGER*. Below it, a smudge of charcoal marked the spot where someone had scrawled a smaller message: *Veil’s open. Don’t close it.* Quinn knelt, brushing mud from the sign. The charcoal was fresh. *Eva*, she thought. Her best friend, the occult researcher with a penchant for leaving cryptic warnings, had arrived hours ago. Good. She needed someone to cut through the noise—someone who didn’t flinch at the phrase *supernatural origins*. “Took you long enough,” a voice called from the darkness. Quinn twitched. Eva was leaning against the wall forty feet away, her curly red hair a halo against the graffiti, round glasses reflecting the beam of her own flashlight. She had a satchel slung over one shoulder, its leather worn thin at the strap, and for a second, Quinn swore she saw a book peeking out—*The Demonologist’s Primer* by Marcus Blackwood, judging by the cover. Eva tucked a strand of hair behind her left ear, a nervous habit, and pushed off the wall. “Traffic,” Quinn said, though it wasn’t the truth. She’d lingered at the station, re-reading the case file. Lila Voss, 28, self-proclaimed “private consultant” with a rap sheet longer than her commute. Last seen entering the Veil Market three nights ago. Her body found this morning by a流浪汉 who’d wandered into the abandoned Tube station. Eva stepped closer, her glasses slipping down her nose. “You should’ve called. The place creeps me out—even without the… the *thing*.” “*The Veil Market*, not *the thing*,” Quinn corrected, but her tone was softer. She nodded at the manhole. “Lead the way.” The tunnel beyond smelled of damp concrete and rot. The graffiti here was more elaborate—painted sigils, glowing runes that pulsed faintly under the flashlight beam. Eva paused, studying a glyph on the wall. “That’s a *warding*. Prevents spirits from following the trail. Must’ve been drawn within the last twenty-four hours.” Quinn’s throat tightened. *Morris’ case had warding glyphs on his apartment door.* She pushed the thought away. “Body?” “Down here,” Eva said, leading the way. The tunnel curved left, then right, and the air grew colder. By the time they reached the platform, Quinn’s jacket felt too thin. The station was dark, but the faint flicker of candles revealed the body on the tiles. Lila lay on her back, her dark hair fanned out around her. Her eyes were open, wide with shock, and her mouth was slightly agape as if she’d been mid-sentence when she died. Her killer hadn’t bothered to hide her—no covering of the body, no signs of a struggle. The detective knelt, shining her light over Lila’s face. “Her skin’s… *cold*,” Eva said, a few feet behind. “But the air in here is barely chilly. Must be… a spell. To muffle the heat of decomposition.” Quinn pressed a finger to Lila’s neck. No pulse, no warmth. Rigor mortis had set in halfway, a sign the body had been dead between 24 and 36 hours. *Found this morning*, she thought. *So she died last night or the night before.* “Any visible trauma?” Eva leaned down, squinting. “No knife wounds, no fractures. Her clothes are torn at the cuffs—could be from a struggle, but… the fabric’s singed. Like it caught on fire, but didn’t burn. Look here.” She pointed to Lila’s left hand. A faint, circular burn ringed her wrist, as if something hot had been pressed there. “Magic. Dark magic.” Quinn’s gaze flicked to the ground beside Lila. A small, silver pocket watch lay open, its hands frozen at 2:17. The glass was cracked, but the mechanism still ticked—*tock, tock, tock*—though the sound was off, as if the gears were stripped. She picked it up, noting the engraving: *To Lila, on her 25th. Love, Mum.* The initials were smudged, as if someone had cried on the metal. “Mum’s watch,” Eva said. “Lila mentioned it in an interview last year. Said it was her only link to her family, who’d disowned her for joining the clique.” “Clique?” Quinn asked. Eva shifted, her satchel strap sliding off her shoulder. “The Market regulars. Call themselves the Veilwardens. Deal in arcane stuff—potions, talismans, information. They think they’re above the rules, but the Market has rules. Break them, and you disappear. Or worse.” She paused, then added, “Lila was pushing those rules. Hard. Had a reputation for stealing from competitors, for opening rifts and selling access to them. The other Wardens warned her.” Quinn set the watch down, her thumb brushing the engraving. “Rifts. The compass.” She nodded at the floor, where a brass object lay partially buried in debris. Eva knelt, brushing away dirt. “That’s a Veil Compass. Shade craftsmanship. Wards against demons, points to rifts. It should’ve been with Lila—she traded her last bone token for it six months ago. But it’s here, on the edge of the platform. Like it was dropped in a hurry.” “Not dropped,” Quinn said. She pointed to the track beside the platform, where a small trail of ash led into the tunnel. “Pushed. Or… *tossed*.” Eva stood, her brow furrowed. “Why would someone toss it? It’s valuable. The compass alone costs more than a year’s rent in Camden.” Quinn studied the ash trail, then the compass. The face was etched with sigils, but one was chipped, a jagged crack that ran from the north cardinal point to the glass. “The needle’s broken. Look.” She tapped the compass with a finger. The needle, which should be spinning wildly, lay still, pointing east. “East leads to the rift,” Eva said, frowning. “But the Market moves every full moon. The rift that was open last night would’ve closed by now. Unless…” “Unless someone *reopened* it,” Quinn finished. She stood, her spine rigid. “Lila was killed because she tried to reopen a rift. The killer wanted it closed, or they wanted something from it. And they didn’t care who got in the way.” Eva bit her lip. “But the body’s here, on the main platform. If the rift was east of the station, why drag her all the way out here? Why not leave her by the tracks, make it look like an accident?” Quinn knelt again, running a finger over Lila’s cheek. The skin was clammy, as if her body had been cold for hours. “Because it wasn’t an accident. The killer wanted the police to find her. They wanted us to think Lila’s death is part of the clique’s infighting. But…” She paused, her thumb brushing the frayed edge of Lila’s sleeve. “Look at this.” Eva leaned in. The fabric was torn at the elbow, but the tear was irregular, as if something had *ripped* through it from the inside, not the outside. “Magic,” Eva said, matter-of-fact. “A spell gone wrong. Or… a spirit.” Quinn’s eyes narrowed. “Morris’ case had irregular torn fabric, too. Back of his jacket, where the rent was. He said he’d been attacked by a man, but the evidence… it didn’t add up. No footprints, no DNA. Just… a smell. Like ozone and rot.” Eva’s hand flew to her mouth. “You think—” “I think Lila’s death is linked to mine,” Quinn said, her voice hard. “And if we don’t figure out what’s going on, someone else is going to end up like both of them.” She stood, her flashlight beam sweeping the tunnel. The walls were covered in graffiti, some new, some old—prayer wheels, exorcism symbols, warnings in a dozen languages. One sticker, faded but intact, read: *THE VEIL DOES NOT FORGIVE*. Eva picked up the compass, her fingers brushing the cracked glass. “The needle’s pointing east. The rift’s that way. But the Market’s supposed to be closed for the full moon. No one’s supposed to be there.” Quinn’s jaw tightened. “Then someone broke the rules. Again.” She walked to the east end of the platform, where a metal door led to a service tunnel. The door was ajar, the lock shattered. Inside, the tunnel was pitch-black, but Quinn could see the ash trail leading deeper, as if the killer had dragged the compass with them. “Stay close,” she said, shining her light ahead. The tunnel curved downward, the air growing colder with each step. Eva’s breath hitched—Quinn heard it, the sound of her glasses fogging up. “Harlow. There’s… there’s something up ahead.” Quinn stepped forward, her gun drawn. The light revealed a wall of stone, but not a natural wall—*a rift*. Faint, pulsing, like a heartbeat, it glowed with a sickly green light, and through it, Quinn could see a landscape of jagged peaks and swirling mist. The air in the tunnel hummed, as if alive. “Lila was here,” Eva whispered. “The compass. It’s pointing to the rift. She was trying to—” “Open it,” Quinn finished. “But why?” Eva asked. “The rift’s unstable. It could send demons through. That’s how the Market works—they *feed* on the chaos. But Lila… she was desperate. The clique’s been losing clients. She owed a lot of money to the Blackened Hand, a gang that deals in souls. If she couldn’t pay, they’d… they’d take her soul.” Quinn’s flashlight flickered, as if the rift’s light was interfering with the battery. She lowered the beam, studying the ground. A single bone token lay near the rift, its surface carved with a snake coiled around a star. *The Market’s entry requirement*, she thought. *A bone from a supernatural creature.* But Lila had traded her last token for the compass. So who left this one here? “Someone followed her,” she said. “A buyer. Someone who wanted the rift opened, but not by Lila. They wanted to take the credit, or the power. And when she tried to double-cross them… they killed her.” Eva stepped closer, her satchel dangling from her hand. “The torn fabric. The burn ring on her wrist. It was the kill spell. A spirit bound to the rift, used to take her life. But the spirit didn’t finish the job. It got scattered when Lila died, maybe? Or trapped?” Quinn knelt, running a finger over the bone token. The snake on the surface was moving, she realized—slowly, slithering over the carved surface. She drew back, her heart racing. “The token’s enchanted. It was meant to keep the rift closed. But it’s broken. The crack—” She pointed to a split in the bone. “—it happened when I touched it. The rift’s destabilizing. If it breaks, the spirit will escape. And then… who knows what it’ll do.” Eva fumbled with her satchel, pulling out a notebook and a pen. “I can try to seal it. With a temporary ward. But I need—” Quinn’s watch beeped. She checked it—11:47 PM. “We don’t have time. The rift’s been open too long. The spirit’s already seeping through.” She glanced at the rift, and saw it—the flicker of a shadow, a face twisted in pain, reaching toward them. Then it was gone. “The Blackened Hand,” she said. “They’re the ones behind this. They want the rift open, and they’ll sell access to anyone who can pay. But they didn’t count on Lila double-crossing them, or on the spirit escaping.” Eva closed her notebook, her freckled face pale. “Then we have to close it. Now. Before it spreads.” Quinn stood, her gun still drawn. “How?” Eva pointed to the bone token. “We use it. The rift was sealed with it, so it should work. But we need to get it close. And we need to—” The rift roared, and the ground shook. A gust of cold wind blew from it, snuffing out Quinn’s flashlight. In the darkness, she heard Eva’s gasp, and then a scream. “EVA!” Quinn yelled, fumbling for her flashlight. The beam flickered on, illuminating Eva on the ground beside the rift, a streak of blood on her cheek. “The spirit,” she panted, pushing herself up. “It got her. The burn ring—” She touched her wrist, and Quinn saw the faint, circular mark glowing beneath her sleeve. “It’s spreading.” Quinn knelt beside her, studying the burn. It was black, oozing, and it pulsed in time with the rift. “You’re possessed,” she said, her voice steady. Eva nodded, her eyes wide. “I can feel it. It’s hungry. It wants the rift to close so it can find a new host. Help me—” “No,” Quinn said, standing. She drew her gun, pointing it at the rift. “I’ll close it. You need to get out of here. Go to the station, call for backup. Tell them—” “Tell them what?” Eva asked, struggling to her feet. “That the Market’s real? That spirits are real? They’ll think I’m crazy.” Quinn stepped closer, her jaw set. “Then tell them I’m crazy. But you need to go. Now.” She raised the gun, aiming at the bone token. The rift glowed brighter, and the spirit shrieked, pouring through the crack in the tokens. Quinn recognized it—the same face Morris had seen, the one with no eyes and a mouth full of teeth. She fired. The bullet hit the spirit, and it howled, dissolving into a cloud of black smoke. The rift shuddered, and the spirit raced back through it, sealing the crack with a flash of green light. The token glowed, then dimmed, its surface smooth again. Quinn lowered the gun, her chest heaving. The air in the tunnel felt normal now, warm and damp, no longer hummed with magic. “Eva,” she said, turning. Her best friend was leaning against the wall, her hand pressed to her stomach, but the burn on her wrist was gone. “You did it,” Eva said, a weak smile on her face. Quinn knelt, checking her pulse. “You were possessed. How are you still here?” Eva laughed, a small, tired sound. “The bone token. It’s old magic—protects the host from the spirit. For a little while, at least. I’ll be fine. The ward I was casting should hold the spirit off until backup arrives.” Quinn stood, her flashlight beam sweeping the tunnel. The rift was closed, the door to the service tunnel ajar, and the spirit was gone. “Lila,” she said, remembering. She knelt beside the body, her hand on Lila’s shoulder. “I’m sorry.” Eva sat down beside her, her satchel on the ground. “She didn’t deserve this. She was just trying to survive.” Quinn closed Lila’s eyes. “We’ll find out who killed her. And we’ll make them pay.” The sound of sirens echoed in the tunnel, growing closer. Eva stood, brushing dirt from her pants. “Come on. Let’s get out of here. The police can take care of the rest.” Quinn nodded, picking up the bone token. The glow was gone, but she could still feel it, a faint warmth in her palm—a reminder that the supernatural was real, that it was hungry, and that it would never stay hidden for long. She followed Eva out of the tunnel, the flashlight beam cutting through the darkness, and thought of Morris. *I’m close*, she promised him, her voice silent. *I’m so close.* The rain started again, soft at first, then hard, washing away the blood and the ash and the memories. But Quinn knew they wouldn’t be erased. Some things, like the Veil, couldn’t be closed. They could only be watched. And waited for.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags35
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"She paused then [then]"
dialogueSentences79
tagDensity0.443
leniency0.886
rawRatio0.029
effectiveRatio0.025
96.30% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2704
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"slowly"
60.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Blackwood"
1"Marcus"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
61.17% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2704
totalAiIsms21
found
0
word"echoing"
count1
1
word"flicked"
count2
2
word"pulsed"
count2
3
word"flicker"
count2
4
word"pulse"
count2
5
word"warmth"
count2
6
word"furrowed"
count1
7
word"etched"
count1
8
word"shattered"
count1
9
word"flickered"
count2
10
word"racing"
count1
11
word"raced"
count1
12
word"stomach"
count1
13
word"echoed"
count1
14
word"reminder"
count1
highlights
0"echoing"
1"flicked"
2"pulsed"
3"flicker"
4"pulse"
5"warmth"
6"furrowed"
7"etched"
8"shattered"
9"flickered"
10"racing"
11"raced"
12"stomach"
13"echoed"
14"reminder"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences169
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences169
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences214
gibberishSentences1
adjustedGibberishSentences1
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen62
ratio0.005
matches
0"Her body found this morning by a流浪汉 who’d wandered into the abandoned Tube station."
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans27
markdownWords93
totalWords2677
ratio0.035
matches
0"Three years"
1"Three years since Morris didn’t come home from a “routine” burglary in Whitechapel."
2"NO TRESPASSING—DANGER"
3"Veil’s open. Don’t close it."
4"Eva"
5"supernatural origins"
6"The Demonologist’s Primer"
7"thing"
8"The Veil Market"
9"the thing"
10"warding"
11"Morris’ case had warding glyphs on his apartment door."
12"cold"
13"Found this morning"
14"So she died last night or the night before."
15"tock, tock, tock"
16"To Lila, on her 25th. Love, Mum."
17"tossed"
18"reopened"
19"ripped"
20"THE VEIL DOES NOT FORGIVE"
21"a rift"
22"feed"
23"The Market’s entry requirement"
24"A bone from a supernatural creature."
25"I’m close"
26"I’m so close."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions30
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
30.19% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions104
wordCount1711
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity2.4
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Camden1
Closes1
Detective1
Harlow1
Quinn41
Morris3
Demonologist1
Marcus1
Blackwood1
Voss1
Veil3
Market2
Tube1
Lila12
Eva34
persons
0"Closes"
1"Harlow"
2"Quinn"
3"Morris"
4"Demonologist"
5"Marcus"
6"Blackwood"
7"Voss"
8"Veil"
9"Market"
10"Lila"
11"Eva"
places(empty)
globalScore0.302
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences121
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.374
wordCount2677
matches
0"not *the thing*,” Quinn corrected, but her tone was softer"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences214
matches
0"runes that pulsed"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs79
mean33.89
std20.26
cv0.598
sampleLengths
0118
162
248
310
483
554
621
721
850
918
1046
1158
1227
1343
143
1558
1667
1728
183
1970
2027
2148
2225
2323
2453
2527
2641
2741
2863
2939
3044
318
3233
3337
3436
359
3649
378
3829
3954
4016
414
4256
4350
4416
4536
4650
4776
4825
4922
86.58% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount9
totalSentences169
matches
0"been pressed"
1"were smudged"
2"was etched"
3"was chipped"
4"was torn"
5"were covered"
6"was gone"
7"was gone"
8"was closed"
9"was gone"
10"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs319
matches
0"was interfering"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount16
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences15
totalSentences214
ratio0.07
matches
0"The rain from last night had left the brick slick, and she caught herself tucking her left hand into the back of her jacket where her service weapon lay—an old habit, honed during years chasing human predators, but these days, she’d learned to keep a finger near the grip just in case."
1"She flicked her flashlight on, the beam cutting through the dusk, and saw the spray-painted sign scrawled on the wall behind: *NO TRESPASSING—DANGER*."
2"She needed someone to cut through the noise—someone who didn’t flinch at the phrase *supernatural origins*."
3"She had a satchel slung over one shoulder, its leather worn thin at the strap, and for a second, Quinn swore she saw a book peeking out—*The Demonologist’s Primer* by Marcus Blackwood, judging by the cover."
4"The graffiti here was more elaborate—painted sigils, glowing runes that pulsed faintly under the flashlight beam."
5"Her killer hadn’t bothered to hide her—no covering of the body, no signs of a struggle."
6"The glass was cracked, but the mechanism still ticked—*tock, tock, tock*—though the sound was off, as if the gears were stripped."
7"The walls were covered in graffiti, some new, some old—prayer wheels, exorcism symbols, warnings in a dozen languages."
8"Eva’s breath hitched—Quinn heard it, the sound of her glasses fogging up."
9"The light revealed a wall of stone, but not a natural wall—*a rift*."
10"The snake on the surface was moving, she realized—slowly, slithering over the carved surface."
11"She checked it—11:47 PM."
12"She glanced at the rift, and saw it—the flicker of a shadow, a face twisted in pain, reaching toward them."
13"Quinn recognized it—the same face Morris had seen, the one with no eyes and a mouth full of teeth."
14"The glow was gone, but she could still feel it, a faint warmth in her palm—a reminder that the supernatural was real, that it was hungry, and that it would never stay hidden for long."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1208
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount23
adverbRatio0.01903973509933775
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.004966887417218543
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences214
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences214
mean12.51
std9.97
cv0.797
sampleLengths
026
152
29
326
44
51
618
723
818
93
107
114
123
1317
141
1516
1610
172
1827
1936
2018
218
229
2314
249
2514
269
2712
2813
295
303
319
3216
338
3417
353
3614
371
387
3911
4012
4116
4212
4321
4416
459
469
4718
487
494
44.86% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.27102803738317754
totalSentences214
uniqueOpeners58
21.37% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences156
matches
0"Then it was gone."
ratio0.006
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount40
totalSentences156
matches
0"She pushed it down."
1"She flicked her flashlight on,"
2"Her best friend, the occult"
3"She needed someone to cut"
4"She had a satchel slung"
5"She’d lingered at the station,"
6"Her body found this morning"
7"She nodded at the manhole."
8"Her eyes were open, wide"
9"Her killer hadn’t bothered to"
10"She pointed to Lila’s left"
11"She picked it up, noting"
12"She paused, then added"
13"She nodded at the floor,"
14"She pointed to the track"
15"She tapped the compass with"
16"She stood, her spine rigid."
17"She paused, her thumb brushing"
18"She stood, her flashlight beam"
19"She walked to the east"
ratio0.256
20.90% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount137
totalSentences156
matches
0"The humid air of Camden"
1"The rain from last night"
2"She pushed it down."
3"The exit was a half-sealed"
4"She flicked her flashlight on,"
5"Quinn knelt, brushing mud from"
6"The charcoal was fresh."
7"*Eva*, she thought."
8"Her best friend, the occult"
9"She needed someone to cut"
10"a voice called from the"
11"Eva was leaning against the"
12"She had a satchel slung"
13"Eva tucked a strand of"
14"Quinn said, though it wasn’t"
15"She’d lingered at the station,"
16"Lila Voss, 28, self-proclaimed with"
17"Her body found this morning"
18"Eva stepped closer, her glasses"
19"Quinn corrected, but her tone"
ratio0.878
64.10% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences156
matches
0"By the time they reached"
1"*So she died last night"
ratio0.013
62.21% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences62
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"Her body found this morning by a流浪汉 who’d wandered into the abandoned Tube station."
1"Her eyes were open, wide with shock, and her mouth was slightly agape as if she’d been mid-sentence when she died."
2"A faint, circular burn ringed her wrist, as if something hot had been pressed there."
3"The glass was cracked, but the mechanism still ticked—*tock, tock, tock*—though the sound was off, as if the gears were stripped."
4"The fabric was torn at the elbow, but the tear was irregular, as if something had *ripped* through it from the inside, not the outside."
5"Inside, the tunnel was pitch-black, but Quinn could see the ash trail leading deeper, as if the killer had dragged the compass with them."
6"Quinn’s flashlight flickered, as if the rift’s light was interfering with the battery."
67.86% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags35
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"Quinn corrected, but her tone was softer"
1"She paused, her thumb brushing the frayed edge of Lila’s sleeve"
2"Quinn said, her voice hard"
3"she said, her voice steady"
86.71% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags25
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"self-proclaimed (proclaim)"
1"Quinn corrected (correct)"
2"Eva whispered (whisper)"
3"Quinn yelled (yell)"
4"she panted (pant)"
dialogueSentences79
tagDensity0.316
leniency0.633
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.127
80.0747%