Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYAVVJFS0QE2N1BYCZ02PT2

Run Details

Duration:
24.7s
Cost:
$0.001234
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The air below Camden smells of damp stone and something sharper, metallic, coppery—too clean for blood, but not quite. Detective Harlow Quinn pauses at the mouth of the Tube entrance, her boots sinking into mud that isn’t mud. It’s old, crumbly, like the station’s been swallowed by the earth for decades. The sign above the turnstile is bent, *“Camden Town—Next Stop, Euston,”* painted over with something newer, yellow letters peeling to reveal *“No Admittance.”* She tugs at her collar; the leather of her watch creaks against her wrist, the time reading 2:17 AM. *Eva.* Of course. The best friend who moonlights as an occult researcher would have known she was coming. Quinn ducks under a loose piece of plywood, the sound of her breathing loud in her ears. The tunnel beyond is pitch-black, but her eyes adjust—scales of moonlight leak through the cracks in the concrete, gilding the graffiti scrawled on the walls: *“Beware the Veil,”* *“They take what you lost.”* Below it, a newer mark: three dots in a triangle, ink still fresh. Halfway down, she hears it: a soft *shush*, like a finger pressed to a child’s lips. Eva. “Took you long enough,” the smaller woman says, emerging from the gloom. She’s wearing a thrifted overcoat, sleeves rolled up, round glasses smudged with... *ash*? Her curly red hair, always a wild halo, is sticking up on one side, and she’s tucking a strand behind her left ear—nervous habit, the one Quinn knows so well. “Marcus didn’t make it. Again.” “Who *is* Marcus?” Quinn asks, but she already knows. The dead merchant with the penchant for cursed jewelry, last seen haggling with a “traveler” from Edinburgh. The one who’d bragged, *“Veil’s the only place where you can sell a ghost and sleep at night.”* Eva leads the way, her satchel bouncing against her thigh. “He ran the ‘Hearth’ stall. Sold protection charms, ward stones—” She pauses, gesturing to the wall ahead, where a metal gate has been welded shut, a bone token dangling from the latch: a wolf’s skull, teeth filed to points. “—but he was branching out. Told me he had a client who wanted a *binder*.” Quinn’s jaw tightens. She doesn’t like binders. They trap spirits, keep them from moving on. Used right, they’re a tool. Used wrong, they’re a prison. And prisons have a way of *breaking*. The gate creaks open. Beyond it, the market is chaos—bales of velvet, overturned crates of dried herbs, a stall selling glowing vials of “moonwater” lies shattered, the liquid seeping into the floor, eating it away. But at the center, a heavy oak door is ajar, and the air there hums, like a live wire. Quinn steps forward, her hand going to her holster, but Eva beats her to it. “Don’t. The wards are still active—” “Wards don’t *hum*,” Quinn says, pushing past her. The door is carved with sigils, looping and intricate, glowing faintly silver. Normally, protective wards are geometric, sharp—angles, runes that bite. These are fluid, almost organic, like veins pulsing under skin. Inside, the room is small, stone walls lined with shelves. On the floor lies Marcus Voss. He’s in his fifties, by the look of him, with a face like weathered oak and a neckerchief tied around his head. His eyes are wide, frozen open, and there’s a dark, spreading stain on his chest—*not* blood, but something black, roiling, like oil that’s alive. His hands are curled into fists, nails split, and in the circle he’d drawn (or tried to draw) with a silver marker, the lines are incomplete, jagged, as if he’d been interrupted mid-ritual. “Medical examiner says cause of death is... *exsanguination*,” Eva says, quiet. “But look at his veins. They’re *pale*. No blood there to bleed.” Quinn kneels, her gloves cracking against the stone. She touches his wrist—no pulse, skin cold as a corpse’s. But there’s something else: a faint, sweet scent, like jasmine, under the copper. Poison? Magic? Her eyes flick to the shelf behind him. A single vial is missing: green, with a stopper of bone. The label is gone, but she recognizes the shape. *“Mist of the Dying Sun,”* Marcus had called it once. *“Burns the spirit from your bones. Safe, if you know the price.”* “It’s not a rift,” Eva says, beside her. “Not that I can see. The Compass would’ve gone haywire if it were.” Quinn’s head snaps up. “You brought the Compass?” Eva flushes, tucking the brass case from her satchel. The patina is dull, almost dead. “I... I thought it might help. The market’s energy messes with it, but—” Quinn snatches it, her fingers closing around the cool metal. The needle twitches, spinning wildly, then locks. It points *directly* at Marcus’s chest. “What the hell is that?” she says, but she already knows. The Veil Compass isn’t supposed to point at people. It’s supposed to point at *rift*s—cracks between worlds, where magic leaks through. That it’s fixated here... Her gaze drifts to the sigils on the door, the ones she’d thought were protective. Half of them are inverted. *Inverted*, not broken. Someone didn’t destroy the wards—they *perverted* them. “Eva,” she says, voice low. “When was the last time you were here, before you called me?” Eva hesitates. “Last Tuesday. Marcus said he was having trouble with a client—someone who wanted the binder, but didn’t want to pay in gold. ‘Wants payment in *time*,’ he joked. I told him he was daft—” She cuts off, biting her lip. “I didn’t think—” Quinn stands, her boots scuffing the stone. “He saw something he shouldn’t have. The binder. Or the client. And the client didn’t want to pay in time. They wanted to *take* something.” She kneels again, closer to Marcus. His mouth is slightly open, as if he’d been about to speak when he died. His left hand is fisted, but his right is open, palm up. In the dirt, there’s a single coin: copper, with a wolf’s head on one side, and a symbol Quinn doesn’t recognize on the other. “The bone token,” she says. “Eva, how do you get in here?” “Bone token,” she repeats. “Marcus traded his sister’s for access. Said it was ‘worth more than a lifetime of good luck.’” Quinn picks up the coin. The symbol is a circle with three dots, like the one she’d seen on the tunnel walls. *Three dots in a triangle.* A summoning sigil, or a protection? Or both? Her watch buzzes. A text from the ME: *DNA’s clean. No traces of magic on the body. But that stain... it’s not anything we’ve seen. Like it’s feeding on him.* Quinn’s thumb rubs the edge of the coin. *Feeding.* That’s a word. Vampires feed. But vampires don’t use binders. Witches? Maybe. But the veins—pale, exsanguinated—*spirits* feed on blood, too. But spirits don’t need to sell cursed trinkets on the Veil Market. She stands, the coin in her palm. The compass is still pointing at Marcus, needle trembling. “Eva, when you said Marcus was branching out... what did he *really* tell you?” Eva tugs at her glasses, her nervous habit flaring. “He said the buyer was ‘from out of town.’ Didn’t want to meet in the market—wanted a private room. ‘Like a business deal,’ he said. I told him that’s how people get killed in here. He laughed. Said, ‘Detective Quinn’s on my side.’” Quinn’s chest tightens. Morris had laughed like that, too. *“Harlow, what are you so scared of? It’s just a ghost.”* Then he’d called her from a private room, and the line had gone dead. The market hums again, louder this time. Quinn looks up, the coin falling from her hand. The sigils on the door are *moving*, shifting, as if the stone itself is breathing. “Eva,” she says, slow. “How do you break a perverted ward?” Eva’s face goes pale. “You don’t. You *banish* the energy. But it takes a—” “—bone token,” Quinn finishes. She drops to her knees, scanning the floor. There, behind a crate, a fragment of bone: white, polished, with a chip out of the edge. *His sister’s.* She picks it up, the chip digging into her palm. The hum sharpens, a sound like a thousand voices whispering. Marcus’s body twitches, his fingers curling into a claw. The stain on his chest spreads, black tendrils coiling up his throat. “Quinn—” Eva’s voice is high, panicked. “The binder. It’s not a trap. It’s a *key*. To open the rift.” The needle on the compass spins, a blur. The rift isn’t far. Quinn stands, the bone token in her right hand, the compass in her left. The sigils on the door split apart, revealing a blackness beyond—pitch so thick it *shimmers*, like oil on water. “Marcus didn’t want to sell the binder,” she says, to no one. “He wanted to *close* the rift. But the client—they knew. They perverted the wards, fed the spirit, and now it’s loose. And the rift—” She looks at the compass. It’s spinning faster, faster, then stops. It points at the door. “The client’s already through,” she says. Eva grabs her arm, her fingers cold. “What are you going to do?” Quinn smiles, sharp and hard, the same smile she uses on perps. “I’m going to give them a *receipt*.” The hum becomes a scream. The blackness crawls toward them, oozing through the split in the wards. Quinn raises the compass, the bone token in her other hand. The sigils on the casing glow, etched into something ancient, something alive. “Bring him back,” she says, to the ghosts in the machine. “All of him. And I’ll let you pass.” The tendrils on Marcus’s body recoil, his eyes fluttering. The stain dims, black turning to gray. The client steps through the rift. Quinn doesn’t flinch. She knows that face now—pale, with eyes like flint. A man she’d seen once, in a café near Westminster, carrying a briefcase that *vibrated* with static. Morris had asked about him, once. *“Looks like a banker,”* he’d said. *“But his hands shake like a junkie’s.”* The man sees her, freezes. “You’re not supposed to be here—” “I’m the one who *is* supposed to be here,” Quinn says, and the compass in her hand booms, a sound like thunder. The bone token glows, white hot, and the rift *snaps shut*, the door sealing with a roar. The man screams, his body dissolving into smoke. The hum dies away, the sigils on the door melting back into place, calm and protective. Marcus’s body goes still. Eva kneels, pressing two fingers to his wrist. “He’s alive. Barely. The binder—” She looks at the shelf, where the vial should be. It’s back, the label now visible: *“Mist of the Returning Sun.”* Quinn picks up the coin, the symbol on it vanishing, leaving only the wolf’s head. She tucks it into her pocket. Morris’s missing file, she thinks. The one with the case notes, the witness statements, the photo of the circle he’d found in a warehouse. The circle with three dots in a triangle. “Eva,” she says, soft. “I need you to get me those Marcus Voss’s clients. All of them. Starting with the one from Edinburgh.” Eva nods, her hands steady now. “I’ll have the list by morning.” Quinn turns to leave, pausing at the door. Marcus stirs, his eyes fluttering open. “Thank you,” he whispers. She nods. Doesn’t say anything. Some things aren’t meant to be understood. The market falls silent. Outside, the graffiti glows faintly, the *Beware the Veil* now crossed out, replaced by a single, bold *Found*. Quinn’s watch reads 3:02. She tugs the gate closed, the bone token slipping into the lock. Somewhere, a clock ticks. Somewhere, a spirit is bound. Somewhere, a killer is hunting. She walks back through the tunnel, her boots crunching on the mud that isn’t mud. The air no longer smells of copper. It smells of jasmine, and pine, and new beginnings. Or maybe not. Maybe it just smells like a job well done. Either way, she’ll take it. For Morris. For the dead. For the ones who can’t speak.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags28
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences56
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.06% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2026
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"really"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Marcus"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
80.26% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2026
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"gloom"
count1
1
word"velvet"
count1
2
word"shattered"
count1
3
word"intricate"
count1
4
word"pulse"
count1
5
word"scanning"
count1
6
word"etched"
count1
7
word"vibrated"
count1
highlights
0"gloom"
1"velvet"
2"shattered"
3"intricate"
4"pulse"
5"scanning"
6"etched"
7"vibrated"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences174
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences174
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences199
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen48
ratio0
matches(empty)
66.67% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans44
markdownWords134
totalWords2010
ratio0.067
matches
0"“Camden Town—Next Stop, Euston,”"
1"“No Admittance.”"
2"Eva."
3"“Beware the Veil,”"
4"“They take what you lost.”"
5"shush"
6"ash"
7"is"
8"“Veil’s the only place where you can sell a ghost and sleep at night.”"
9"binder"
10"breaking"
11"hum"
12"not"
13"exsanguination"
14"pale"
15"“Mist of the Dying Sun,”"
16"“Burns the spirit from your bones. Safe, if you know the price.”"
17"directly"
18"rift"
19"Inverted"
20"perverted"
21"time"
22"take"
23"Three dots in a triangle."
24"DNA’s clean. No traces of magic on the body. But that stain... it’s not anything we’ve seen. Like it’s feeding on him."
25"Feeding."
26"spirits"
27"really"
28"“Harlow, what are you so scared of? It’s just a ghost.”"
29"moving"
30"banish"
31"His sister’s."
32"key"
33"shimmers"
34"close"
35"receipt"
36"vibrated"
37"“Looks like a banker,”"
38"“But his hands shake like a junkie’s.”"
39"is"
40"snaps shut"
41"“Mist of the Returning Sun.”"
42"Beware the Veil"
43"Found"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions31
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
68.25% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions63
wordCount1529
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1.64
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Camden1
Harlow1
Quinn25
Tube1
Edinburgh1
Eva14
Marcus9
Voss1
Veil3
Compass1
Market1
Westminster1
Morris4
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Eva"
3"Marcus"
4"Voss"
5"Market"
6"Morris"
places
0"Edinburgh"
1"Compass"
globalScore0.682
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences109
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"not quite"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.498
wordCount2010
matches
0"not* blood, but something black, roiling, like oil"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences199
matches
0"runes that bite"
1"knows that face"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs69
mean29.13
std18.56
cv0.637
sampleLengths
094
117
263
317
460
544
664
732
854
921
1039
1116
1279
1323
1433
1550
1621
178
1828
1923
2036
2130
2217
2345
2432
2557
2612
2721
2835
2930
3041
3130
3252
3334
3431
3511
3614
3731
3841
3919
4012
4133
4247
435
446
4513
4619
4740
4819
4916
95.18% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences174
matches
0"been swallowed"
1"been welded"
2"is carved"
3"are curled"
4"been interrupted"
5"are inverted"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs272
matches
0"was coming"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount13
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences13
totalSentences199
ratio0.065
matches
0"The air below Camden smells of damp stone and something sharper, metallic, coppery—too clean for blood, but not quite."
1"The sign above the turnstile is bent, *“Camden Town—Next Stop, Euston,”* painted over with something newer, yellow letters peeling to reveal *“No Admittance.”* She tugs at her collar; the leather of her watch creaks against her wrist, the time reading 2:17 AM."
2"The tunnel beyond is pitch-black, but her eyes adjust—scales of moonlight leak through the cracks in the concrete, gilding the graffiti scrawled on the walls: *“Beware the Veil,”* *“They take what you lost.”* Below it, a newer mark: three dots in a triangle, ink still fresh."
3"Her curly red hair, always a wild halo, is sticking up on one side, and she’s tucking a strand behind her left ear—nervous habit, the one Quinn knows so well."
4"Beyond it, the market is chaos—bales of velvet, overturned crates of dried herbs, a stall selling glowing vials of “moonwater” lies shattered, the liquid seeping into the floor, eating it away."
5"Normally, protective wards are geometric, sharp—angles, runes that bite."
6"His eyes are wide, frozen open, and there’s a dark, spreading stain on his chest—*not* blood, but something black, roiling, like oil that’s alive."
7"She touches his wrist—no pulse, skin cold as a corpse’s."
8"It’s supposed to point at *rift*s—cracks between worlds, where magic leaks through."
9"Someone didn’t destroy the wards—they *perverted* them."
10"But the veins—pale, exsanguinated—*spirits* feed on blood, too."
11"The sigils on the door split apart, revealing a blackness beyond—pitch so thick it *shimmers*, like oil on water."
12"She knows that face now—pale, with eyes like flint."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1541
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount55
adverbRatio0.035691109669046074
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.005840363400389357
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences199
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences199
mean10.1
std7.91
cv0.784
sampleLengths
019
119
213
342
41
52
615
717
846
916
101
1112
1212
131
1430
155
169
1717
1818
1910
2039
2115
223
234
248
255
265
277
284
2931
3019
3115
326
338
3412
359
3610
3710
386
3922
4024
4133
4211
4312
448
4510
4613
471
481
498
45.73% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats19
diversityRatio0.3316582914572864
totalSentences199
uniqueOpeners66
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount6
totalSentences154
matches
0"Normally, protective wards are geometric,"
1"Then he’d called her from"
2"Somewhere, a clock ticks."
3"Somewhere, a spirit is bound."
4"Somewhere, a killer is hunting."
5"Maybe it just smells like"
ratio0.039
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount39
totalSentences154
matches
0"It’s old, crumbly, like the"
1"She’s wearing a thrifted overcoat,"
2"Her curly red hair, always"
3"She pauses, gesturing to the"
4"She doesn’t like binders."
5"They trap spirits, keep them"
6"He’s in his fifties, by"
7"His eyes are wide, frozen"
8"His hands are curled into"
9"She touches his wrist—no pulse,"
10"Her eyes flick to the"
11"It points *directly* at Marcus’s"
12"she says, but she already"
13"It’s supposed to point at"
14"Her gaze drifts to the"
15"she says, voice low"
16"She cuts off, biting her"
17"She kneels again, closer to"
18"His mouth is slightly open,"
19"His left hand is fisted,"
ratio0.253
57.40% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount124
totalSentences154
matches
0"The air below Camden smells"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn pauses at"
2"It’s old, crumbly, like the"
3"The sign above the turnstile"
4"The best friend who moonlights"
5"Quinn ducks under a loose"
6"The tunnel beyond is pitch-black,"
7"Halfway down, she hears it:"
8"the smaller woman says, emerging"
9"She’s wearing a thrifted overcoat,"
10"Her curly red hair, always"
11"Quinn asks, but she already"
12"The dead merchant with the"
13"The one who’d bragged,"
14"Eva leads the way, her"
15"She pauses, gesturing to the"
16"Quinn’s jaw tightens."
17"She doesn’t like binders."
18"They trap spirits, keep them"
19"The gate creaks open."
ratio0.805
32.47% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences154
matches
0"Either way, she’ll take it."
ratio0.006
57.14% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences50
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn pauses at the mouth of the Tube entrance, her boots sinking into mud that isn’t mud."
1"The best friend who moonlights as an occult researcher would have known she was coming."
2"His eyes are wide, frozen open, and there’s a dark, spreading stain on his chest—*not* blood, but something black, roiling, like oil that’s alive."
3"His hands are curled into fists, nails split, and in the circle he’d drawn (or tried to draw) with a silver marker, the lines are incomplete, jagged, as if he’d…"
4"The sigils on the door are *moving*, shifting, as if the stone itself is breathing."
5"A man she’d seen once, in a café near Westminster, carrying a briefcase that *vibrated* with static."
53.57% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags28
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"Eva says, quiet"
1"she says, voice low"
2"she says, slow"
3"she says, soft"
78.57% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags18
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"The one who’d bragged (had brag)"
1"she repeats (repeat)"
2"he’d (would)"
3"he whispers (whisper)"
dialogueSentences56
tagDensity0.321
leniency0.643
rawRatio0.222
effectiveRatio0.143
83.6767%