Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYAWZ5RGFTJ0WMFNEV3BCYM

Run Details

Duration:
31.0s
Cost:
$0.001531
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rain lashed the streets of Camden like a thousand tiny knives, turning the night into a blurred watercolor of neon and shadow. Detective Harlow Quinn sprinted through the downpour, her boots slapping against the slick pavement with military precision. Water streamed down her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair, soaking into the collar of her trench coat, but she didn't slow. Not now. Not when she'd finally cornered the ghost she'd been chasing for weeks. Tomás Herrera—Tommy to his friends, the off-the-books healer to the shadowy clique she suspected of everything from drug trafficking to something far darker—darted ahead like a fox sensing the hounds. He was fast for a former paramedic, his short curly dark brown hair plastered to his olive-skinned forehead, the Saint Christopher medallion around his neck glinting under sporadic streetlights as he glanced back. Those warm brown eyes widened for a split second when they met hers, confirming what she already knew: he was running because he knew she was closing in. "Stop! Police!" Her voice cut through the roar of the storm, sharp and commanding, honed from eighteen years on the force. But the wind swallowed it whole. Herrera veered left, into a narrow alley off Camden High Street, the kind of forgotten crevice where the city's underbelly festered. Harlow's sharp jaw clenched as she pushed harder, her worn leather watch ticking relentlessly on her left wrist, a steady reminder that time was never on her side. Not since DS Morris. Three years, and the unexplained horror of that night still clawed at her dreams—shadows that moved wrong, a scream cut short. Supernatural, they whispered in the precinct, but she didn't believe in ghosts. Not until they stared back at her. The alley reeked of damp garbage and urine, the walls closing in like the jaws of some urban beast. Puddles exploded under her feet as she gained ground. Herrera stumbled once, his left forearm flashing white where the old knife scar twisted like a warning. He recovered quickly, shoving past overflowing bins toward a rusted grate half-hidden behind a dumpster. The underground entrance to the abandoned Tube station—everyone knew about these relics, sealed off decades ago after the war. But Herrera didn't hesitate. He yanked at the grate, muscles straining under his soaked jacket, and it gave way with a metallic screech that echoed like a death knell. Harlow's hand flew to her holster, drawing her service pistol in one fluid motion. "Herrera! Don't make this worse!" Rain blurred her vision, but she saw the desperation in his posture as he dropped the grate and vanished into the black maw below. A ladder, maybe stairs—didn't matter. She holstered the gun; firing blind into the dark would only get her killed. Or worse, him. She needed answers, not a body. Heart pounding, she approached the opening. The wind howled up from the depths, carrying the faint, acrid tang of something unnatural—sulfur? Ozone? Her brown eyes narrowed against the spray. This was it: the line between known London and whatever festered beneath. The clique's trail had led her here, whispers of a black market for the impossible. Enchanted trinkets, alchemical poisons, secrets that could explain Morris's death. But following meant stepping into the void, unarmed in ways that mattered more than bullets. She glanced back at the alley's mouth, where the rain-swept streetlights flickered like dying stars. No backup tonight; she'd shaken her tail for this solo stakeout after a tip from an informant at The Raven's Nest. Silas's bar in Soho, with its green neon sign and hidden back room, had been buzzing with coded talk about "the Market" moving under the full moon. Tonight was the night. Herrera was her ticket in. Screw it. Harlow gripped the ladder's slick rungs, her bearing unyielding as she descended. The metal groaned under her 5'9" frame, each step plunging her deeper into chill darkness. Water dripped from above, pattering like impatient fingers. Ten feet, twenty—the air grew thicker, laced with the hum of illicit life. A faint glow seeped up from below, not electric but something warmer, like candlelight warped through stained glass. Her boots hit solid ground with a wet thud. She crouched in the shadows of the platform, the abandoned station unfolding before her like a fever dream. Cracked tiles lined the walls, graffiti twisting into symbols she couldn't place—runes? The air buzzed with voices, low and urgent, mingling with the scent of incense and something metallic, like blood. Straight ahead, a makeshift archway loomed, framed by tattered curtains that billowed slightly, as if breathing. No ticket booth, no turnstiles. Just a hooded figure at the threshold, skeletal hands outstretched. Herrera was already there, fumbling in his pocket. He produced a small object—a bone token, carved smooth and yellowed, like a relic from a forgotten grave. The guard snatched it, eyes gleaming unnaturally in the dim light, and waved him through. The curtains parted with a whisper, revealing a warren of stalls stretching into the gloom. Voices rose: haggling in accents from every corner of the world, laughter that grated like broken glass. Harlow's pulse thundered in her ears. This was The Veil Market, the underground pulse of a hidden London she'd only glimpsed in case files. Banned substances that could melt steel or mend flesh in seconds. Information brokers peddling truths that governments buried. And the clique—Herrera's people—right in the thick of it. She could turn back now, call for SWAT, flood this pit with light and law. But by the time they arrived, it would be scrubbed clean. Morris's ghost demanded more. She straightened, coat shedding rivulets onto the filthy floor, and stepped forward. The guard's head snapped toward her, nostrils flaring like an animal's. "Token," he rasped, voice like gravel in a blender. Harlow's mind raced. No token. Improvise. She met his gaze with the cold authority of her badge, even as doubt gnawed at her gut. "Metropolitan Police. Step aside." The guard laughed, a wet, bubbling sound, and reached into his robes. Not a weapon—a mirror, small and cracked, held up to reflect her face. Her reflection stared back, but distorted, eyes hollow, mouth twisted in a scream she hadn't made. The guard's lips peeled back. "No badge passes the veil, copper. Pay or perish." Panic flickered, but she quashed it. Her hand dipped into her coat pocket, fingers closing around the only thing she had: a spare bullet casing from her last range session, etched with Morris's initials in a moment of weakness. It wasn't a bone token, but in the rain's chaos, it might pass for something arcane. She pressed it into his palm. "This buys my way. Once." He examined it, the mirror forgotten. A sly grin split his face. "Fresh blood, eh? Go on, then. But the Market bites back." The curtains parted for her, and Harlow crossed the threshold. The world shifted. The platform's decay gave way to a labyrinth of tunnels repurposed into a bazaar from hell. Lanterns hung from hooks, casting erratic shadows that danced like living things. Stalls crammed every inch: one hawking vials of glowing liquid that whispered promises of eternal youth; another displaying amulets pulsing with inner light, warding off "the unseen." A woman with scales for skin bartered a dagger that sang when swung. The air thrummed with magic—real, impossible, terrifying. Herrera was ahead, weaving through the crowd, his medallion swinging like a pendulum. He didn't look back, but his shoulders were tense, aware. Harlow followed, keeping to the edges, her pistol a comforting weight against her hip. Whispers followed her: "Normie... fresh meat..." Eyes watched from hoods and masks—human, not quite, something else. A man with horns bartering spells bumped her shoulder, his touch sending ice through her veins. She jerked away, jaw set, forcing herself to blend. Deeper in, the market narrowed into a vein of stalls selling information. Brokers hunched over crystal orbs, murmuring futures. Herrera stopped at one, sliding coins across a scarred table to a crone with eyes like polished obsidian. Harlow edged closer, straining to hear over the din. "...the nest stirs," the crone hissed. "Shadows rise with the moon. The one you patch won't last without the elixir." Herrera nodded, voice low. "The detective's closing in. Quinn. We need to move the safehouse." Quinn. Her name on his lips sent a jolt through her. They knew. The clique knew she was hunting them. She stepped forward, hand on her gun, but a hand clamped her shoulder—firm, unyielding. "Lost, love?" A voice purred from behind, laced with menace. She spun to face a figure cloaked in velvet, face obscured by a porcelain mask etched with veins. The guard's warning echoed: the Market bites back. Harlow's training kicked in. She twisted free, elbow driving into the figure's gut. It grunted, staggering, and she bolted after Herrera. The crowd parted like water, but not in her favor—vendors shouted, alarms of sorts wailed, ethereal and piercing. Herrera glanced back now, eyes widening in true alarm. He sprinted toward a side tunnel, marked by a sign in flickering script: "Exits Shift." She pursued, lungs burning, the thrill of the chase mingling with raw fear. This wasn't just a market; it was a trap, alive and hungry. Bullets might not matter here—stories from cold cases spoke of officers vanishing, chalked up to "accidents." But Morris's face flashed in her mind, twisted in that final scream. She couldn't stop. Not now. The tunnel narrowed, walls slick with moisture and something viscous. Herrera reached a dead end—or so it seemed. He pressed a panel, and a section of wall ground open, revealing stairs plunging deeper. He hesitated, looking back one last time. "Quinn! You don't belong here!" "Neither do you, Herrera!" she shouted, closing the gap. Rainwater from above dripped into her eyes, but she saw the conflict in his warm brown gaze—fear, yes, but something like pity. He vanished down the stairs. Harlow skidded to a halt at the threshold, breath ragged. Below, voices echoed, more of the market's denizens converging. The porcelain-masked figure was gaining, flanked by others—claws glinting, spells crackling in their palms. Decision point. Turn back, live to fight another day with evidence and warrants. Or dive in, risk everything for the truth that had eluded her since Morris. Her watch ticked. The shadows lengthened. "Damn you," she muttered to the void, and jumped. The stairs spiraled into oblivion, each step echoing her resolve. The market's heart pulsed around her, secrets unfolding like veins. Whatever lay below, she'd face it head-on—because some chases weren't about catching the prey, but surviving the hunt. And Harlow Quinn had never been one to run. The air grew heavier, laced with the scent of forbidden alchemy. Herrera's footsteps faded ahead, but she pressed on, pistol drawn now, the weight of her world narrowing to this descent. The Veil Market welcomed her with open, jagged arms.
created_at"2026-02-20T20:12:15.94Z" 2/20/2026, 8:12:15 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags22
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"the crowd his medallion swinging like [like]"
dialogueSentences27
tagDensity0.815
leniency1
rawRatio0.045
effectiveRatio0.045
94.57% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1842
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1842
totalAiIsms37
found
0
word"glinting"
count2
1
word"jaw clenched"
count1
2
word"reminder"
count1
3
word"echoed"
count3
4
word"maw"
count1
5
word"pounding"
count1
6
word"depths"
count1
7
word"flickered"
count2
8
word"coded"
count1
9
word"chill"
count1
10
word"electric"
count1
11
word"loomed"
count1
12
word"grave"
count1
13
word"gleaming"
count1
14
word"whisper"
count1
15
word"gloom"
count1
16
word"pulse"
count2
17
word"thundered"
count1
18
word"raced"
count1
19
word"etched"
count2
20
word"comforting"
count1
21
word"weight"
count2
22
word"crystal"
count1
23
word"velvet"
count1
24
word"porcelain"
count2
25
word"echoing"
count1
26
word"resolve"
count1
27
word"pulsed"
count1
28
word"footsteps"
count1
highlights
0"glinting"
1"jaw clenched"
2"reminder"
3"echoed"
4"maw"
5"pounding"
6"depths"
7"flickered"
8"coded"
9"chill"
10"electric"
11"loomed"
12"grave"
13"gleaming"
14"whisper"
15"gloom"
16"pulse"
17"thundered"
18"raced"
19"etched"
20"comforting"
21"weight"
22"crystal"
23"velvet"
24"porcelain"
25"echoing"
26"resolve"
27"pulsed"
28"footsteps"
33.33% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches4
maxInWindow3
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count2
1
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
2
label"sent a shiver through"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
1"eyes narrowed"
2"jaw clenched"
3"sent a jolt through"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences79
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences79
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences80
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen90
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1812
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions57
wordCount1668
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity0.84
worstName"Herrera"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Herrera"
discoveredNames
Camden2
Harlow12
Quinn4
Herrera14
Tommy1
Saint1
Christopher1
High1
Street1
Morris6
Tube1
London2
Raven1
Nest1
Soho1
Veil2
Market4
Panic1
Deeper1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Herrera"
3"Tommy"
4"Saint"
5"Christopher"
6"Morris"
7"Market"
8"Panic"
places
0"Camden"
1"High"
2"Street"
3"London"
4"Raven"
5"Soho"
globalScore1
windowScore1
65.25% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences59
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"as if breathing"
1"something like pity"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.552
wordCount1812
matches
0"not electric but something warmer, like candlelight warped through stained gl"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences80
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs33
mean54.91
std28.37
cv0.517
sampleLengths
073
191
2120
3108
471
581
672
768
889
973
1081
1132
1228
1355
1466
1523
1688
1778
1846
1920
2015
2134
2236
2363
2458
2545
2631
2738
2827
296
309
3147
3240
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences79
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs311
matches
0"was running was closing"
1"was hunting"
2"was gaining"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount18
semicolonCount4
flaggedSentences18
totalSentences80
ratio0.225
matches
0"Tomás Herrera—Tommy to his friends, the off-the-books healer to the shadowy clique she suspected of everything from drug trafficking to something far darker—darted ahead like a fox sensing the hounds."
1"Three years, and the unexplained horror of that night still clawed at her dreams—shadows that moved wrong, a scream cut short."
2"The underground entrance to the abandoned Tube station—everyone knew about these relics, sealed off decades ago after the war."
3"A ladder, maybe stairs—didn't matter."
4"She holstered the gun; firing blind into the dark would only get her killed."
5"The wind howled up from the depths, carrying the faint, acrid tang of something unnatural—sulfur?"
6"No backup tonight; she'd shaken her tail for this solo stakeout after a tip from an informant at The Raven's Nest."
7"Her boots hit solid ground with a wet thud. She crouched in the shadows of the platform, the abandoned station unfolding before her like a fever dream. Cracked tiles lined the walls, graffiti twisting into symbols she couldn't place—runes? The air buzzed with voices, low and urgent, mingling with the scent of incense and something metallic, like blood. Straight ahead, a makeshift archway loomed, framed by tattered curtains that billowed slightly, as if breathing. No ticket booth, no turnstiles. Just a hooded figure at the threshold, skeletal hands outstretched."
8"Herrera was already there, fumbling in his pocket. He produced a small object—a bone token, carved smooth and yellowed, like a relic from a forgotten grave. The guard snatched it, eyes gleaming unnaturally in the dim light, and waved him through. The curtains parted with a whisper, revealing a warren of stalls stretching into the gloom. Voices rose: haggling in accents from every corner of the world, laughter that grated like broken glass."
9"Harlow's pulse thundered in her ears. This was The Veil Market, the underground pulse of a hidden London she'd only glimpsed in case files. Banned substances that could melt steel or mend flesh in seconds. Information brokers peddling truths that governments buried. And the clique—Herrera's people—right in the thick of it. She could turn back now, call for SWAT, flood this pit with light and law. But by the time they arrived, it would be scrubbed clean. Morris's ghost demanded more."
10"The guard laughed, a wet, bubbling sound, and reached into his robes. Not a weapon—a mirror, small and cracked, held up to reflect her face. Her reflection stared back, but distorted, eyes hollow, mouth twisted in a scream she hadn't made. The guard's lips peeled back. \"No badge passes the veil, copper."
11"The curtains parted for her, and Harlow crossed the threshold. The world shifted. The platform's decay gave way to a labyrinth of tunnels repurposed into a bazaar from hell. Lanterns hung from hooks, casting erratic shadows that danced like living things. Stalls crammed every inch: one hawking vials of glowing liquid that whispered promises of eternal youth; another displaying amulets pulsing with inner light, warding off \"the unseen.\" A woman with scales for skin bartered a dagger that sang when swung. The air thrummed with magic—real, impossible, terrifying."
12"Quinn. Her name on his lips sent a jolt through her. They knew. The clique knew she was hunting them. She stepped forward, hand on her gun, but a hand clamped her shoulder—firm, unyielding."
13"Harlow's training kicked in. She twisted free, elbow driving into the figure's gut. It grunted, staggering, and she bolted after Herrera. The crowd parted like water, but not in her favor—vendors shouted, alarms of sorts wailed, ethereal and piercing. Herrera glanced back now, eyes widening in true alarm. He sprinted toward a side tunnel, marked by a sign in flickering script: \"Exits Shift.\""
14"She pursued, lungs burning, the thrill of the chase mingling with raw fear. This wasn't just a market; it was a trap, alive and hungry. Bullets might not matter here—stories from cold cases spoke of officers vanishing, chalked up to \"accidents.\" But Morris's face flashed in her mind, twisted in that final scream. She couldn't stop. Not now."
15"The tunnel narrowed, walls slick with moisture and something viscous. Herrera reached a dead end—or so it seemed. He pressed a panel, and a section of wall ground open, revealing stairs plunging deeper. He hesitated, looking back one last time. \"Quinn!"
16"\"Neither do you, Herrera!\" she shouted, closing the gap. Rainwater from above dripped into her eyes, but she saw the conflict in his warm brown gaze—fear, yes, but something like pity."
17"He vanished down the stairs. Harlow skidded to a halt at the threshold, breath ragged. Below, voices echoed, more of the market's denizens converging. The porcelain-masked figure was gaining, flanked by others—claws glinting, spells crackling in their palms."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount688
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount20
adverbRatio0.029069767441860465
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.010174418604651164
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences80
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences80
mean22.65
std20.81
cv0.919
sampleLengths
022
117
220
32
412
530
633
728
821
96
1021
1128
124
1321
1412
157
1619
179
1817
1915
2019
214
2225
2314
2429
255
2614
273
286
296
3015
311
327
3312
3415
3510
3615
3715
3821
3927
404
415
422
4312
4454
4589
4673
4781
4832
4926
81.67% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.5125
totalSentences80
uniqueOpeners41
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences72
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount18
totalSentences72
matches
0"He was fast for a"
1"Her voice cut through the"
2"He recovered quickly, shoving past"
3"He yanked at the grate,"
4"She holstered the gun; firing"
5"She needed answers, not a"
6"Her brown eyes narrowed against"
7"She glanced back at the"
8"Her boots hit solid ground"
9"She straightened, coat shedding rivulets"
10"He examined it, the mirror"
11"We need to move the"
12"She pursued, lungs burning, the"
13"You don't belong"
14"she shouted, closing the gap."
15"He vanished down the stairs."
16"Her watch ticked. The shadows"
17"she muttered to the void,"
ratio0.25
57.22% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount58
totalSentences72
matches
0"Rain lashed the streets of"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn sprinted through"
2"Water streamed down her closely"
3"Tomás Herrera—Tommy to his friends,"
4"He was fast for a"
5"Those warm brown eyes widened"
6"Her voice cut through the"
7"Herrera veered left, into a"
8"Harlow's sharp jaw clenched as"
9"The alley reeked of damp"
10"Puddles exploded under her feet"
11"Herrera stumbled once, his left"
12"He recovered quickly, shoving past"
13"The underground entrance to the"
14"He yanked at the grate,"
15"Harlow's hand flew to her"
16"Rain blurred her vision, but"
17"A ladder, maybe stairs—didn't matter."
18"She holstered the gun; firing"
19"She needed answers, not a"
ratio0.806
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences72
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences35
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"He yanked at the grate, muscles straining under his soaked jacket, and it gave way with a metallic screech that echoed like a death knell."
1"Enchanted trinkets, alchemical poisons, secrets that could explain Morris's death."
2"Her boots hit solid ground with a wet thud. She crouched in the shadows of the platform, the abandoned station unfolding before her like a fever dream. Cracked …"
3"Herrera was already there, fumbling in his pocket. He produced a small object—a bone token, carved smooth and yellowed, like a relic from a forgotten grave. The…"
4"Harlow's pulse thundered in her ears. This was The Veil Market, the underground pulse of a hidden London she'd only glimpsed in case files. Banned substances th…"
5"He vanished down the stairs. Harlow skidded to a halt at the threshold, breath ragged. Below, voices echoed, more of the market's denizens converging. The porce…"
6"The stairs spiraled into oblivion, each step echoing her resolve. The market's heart pulsed around her, secrets unfolding like veins. Whatever lay below, she'd …"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"The metal groaned (groan)"
1"The guard laughed (laugh)"
2"the crone hissed (hiss)"
3"she shouted (shout)"
4"she muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences27
tagDensity0.185
leniency0.37
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.37
74.4016%