Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYAX1H7JB9ZSX1T8P5T9W27

Run Details

Duration:
10.3s
Cost:
$0.001667
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora's boot caught on a root that shouldn't have been there, twisting her ankle just enough to send her stumbling forward into the clearing. She caught herself against one of the ancient oaks, its bark rough and unnaturally warm under her palm, like flesh pulsing faintly beneath the skin. The Heartstone pendant at her throat throbbed in response, a deep crimson glow seeping through her shirt, warm as fresh blood. She straightened, heart hammering, and scanned the grove. Wildflowers carpeted the ground in defiant bloom, their petals stark white against the encroaching dark, untouched by the autumn chill that gripped Richmond Park beyond. The standing stones loomed at the edges, twisted oaks that formed a ragged circle, their branches interlocking overhead like skeletal fingers. Eva had described this place in whispers over late-night pints at Silas', calling it a shortcut, a secret spot where time bent and worries slipped away. But Rory hadn't come for respite. The pendant had pulled her here, its warmth building through the evening delivery route until she abandoned the scooter at the park's edge and followed the tug through the fog-shrouded paths. She flexed her fingers, the small crescent scar on her left wrist itching under the sleeve of her jacket. No phone signal, of course. The screen had gone blank the moment she crossed the boundary, as if the oaks had swallowed the world outside. Fine. She'd check the pendant's behaviour, note anything odd, and leave. Quick out-of-the-box thinking, that's what got her through law lectures and Evan's rages. This was just another puzzle. A rustle came from the underbrush to her right, soft as silk tearing. Rory froze, ears straining. Wind through leaves, she told herself. But the air hung still, heavy with the cloying scent of honeysuckle that bloomed out of season, its sweetness cloying enough to coat her tongue. She stepped forward, boots sinking into the mossy earth that gave way like damp sponge. The flowers brushed her calves, petals cool and slick, almost clinging. The pendant warmed again, insistent now, drawing her toward the centre of the grove where a flat stone altar waited, etched with symbols that twisted like veins. Rory knelt, tracing one with her fingertip. It hummed under her touch, vibrating up her arm. Irish folklore, her da would say, the kind Brendan Carter dissected in dusty law books back in Cardiff. Fae bargains, portals to other realms. But this felt too real, too immediate. She slipped the pendant's chain over her head, holding the thumbnail-sized gem in her palm. Its inner glow pulsed in time with her heartbeat, casting erratic shadows that danced across the stones. Another sound, closer this time—a faint click, like a twig snapping under careful weight. Rory whipped her head around, bright blue eyes piercing the gloom. Nothing. Just the oaks, their trunks gnarled into shapes that suggested faces if she stared too long. Paranoia from the long shift, deliveries piling up at Golden Empress while Yu-Fei grumbled about her tardiness. She replaced the pendant, its chain cool against her flushed skin, and stood. The grove seemed smaller now, the standing stones inching inward. She blinked, shook her head. Illusion. Time moved differently here, Eva had warned, an hour inside could stretch or snap like elastic outside. Rory paced the perimeter, counting her steps. One, two, three—her boot pressed down on something yielding, not stone or root, but a petal that squelched wetly. She lifted her foot. A wildflower, crushed, but its centre wept a thick, dark sap that smelled of iron. Blood? No, just sap. She wiped it on her jeans, pulse quickening. She needed to leave. The entrance path lay behind her, swallowed by the oaks' embrace. Rory pushed through the underbrush, thorns snagging her jacket like desperate fingers. A whisper slithered past her ear, breathy and wordless, carrying the tang of salt and decay. She spun, fists clenched. The air shimmered, distorting the flowers into wavering blurs. "Hello?" Her voice echoed oddly, layered as if spoken by someone else. Silence answered, thick and watchful. She pressed on, the pendant burning against her chest now, a warning she couldn't ignore. The path narrowed, branches scraping her arms, drawing thin lines that stung with unnatural heat. At the edge of her vision, a shadow flitted—low to the ground, sinuous, gone when she turned. A fox, perhaps, or a deer startled by her intrusion. But the movement repeated, on the left now, then right, always just beyond sight, a peripheral tease. Rory's breath came shorter, the honeysuckle scent turning sour in her nostrils, like milk left too long in the sun. She broke into a jog, the grove's boundary stones blurring past. One oak loomed larger than the others, its trunk split wide like an open maw. She veered away, but the ground tilted, moss sucking at her boots as if reluctant to release her. The whispers returned, overlapping now, murmurs in a tongue that tugged at half-remembered stories from her mum's Welsh lullabies—melodic, insistent, pleading. She reached the split oak, hands gripping its edges to haul herself through. Splinters bit into her palms, warm and slick. Blood welled, dripping onto the roots below. The pendant flared, crimson light spilling into the crevice, illuminating something within: eyes. Multiple, pinprick bright, staring up from the dark hollow. Not animal. Too deliberate, too hungry. Rory recoiled, heart slamming against her ribs. The eyes blinked in unison, lids sliding sideways like a reptile's. A shape uncoiled behind them, pale and elongated, limbs folding wrong. The whispers coalesced into words, sibilant and close. "Stay. Join the bloom." She bolted, branches whipping her face, the path twisting underfoot. The grove contracted, flowers rising like a tide, their stems wrapping around her ankles. At the corner of her eye, the shadow darted again—closer, humanoid now, with limbs that stretched too far. The pendant scalded her skin, a beacon drawing whatever lurked nearer. The boundary loomed ahead, a veil of mist between the oaks. Rory lunged for it, fingers outstretched. But the mist thickened, coiling like smoke from a dying fire, and hands—cold, insistent—grazed her shoulder from behind.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags3
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Her voice echoed oddly [oddly]"
dialogueSentences2
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.333
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1031
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1031
totalAiIsms22
found
0
word"throbbed"
count1
1
word"scanned"
count1
2
word"stark"
count1
3
word"chill"
count1
4
word"loomed"
count3
5
word"warmth"
count1
6
word"silk"
count1
7
word"etched"
count1
8
word"tracing"
count1
9
word"pulsed"
count1
10
word"weight"
count1
11
word"gloom"
count1
12
word"pulse"
count1
13
word"whisper"
count1
14
word"shimmered"
count1
15
word"wavering"
count1
16
word"echoed"
count1
17
word"silence"
count1
18
word"maw"
count1
19
word"beacon"
count1
highlights
0"throbbed"
1"scanned"
2"stark"
3"chill"
4"loomed"
5"warmth"
6"silk"
7"etched"
8"tracing"
9"pulsed"
10"weight"
11"gloom"
12"pulse"
13"whisper"
14"shimmered"
15"wavering"
16"echoed"
17"silence"
18"maw"
19"beacon"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"fists clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences83
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences83
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences84
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1019
ratio0
matches(empty)
83.33% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Wind through leaves, she told herself."
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions23
wordCount997
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity0.9
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Heartstone1
Richmond1
Park1
Rory9
Evan1
Brendan1
Carter1
Cardiff1
Golden1
Empress1
Yu-Fei1
Eva2
Silence1
Welsh1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Evan"
2"Brendan"
3"Carter"
4"Yu-Fei"
5"Eva"
6"Silence"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Cardiff"
3"Golden"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences68
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"seemed smaller now, the standing stones inching inward"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.981
wordCount1019
matches
0"not stone or root, but a petal"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences84
matches(empty)
42.93% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs14
mean72.79
std21.85
cv0.3
sampleLengths
070
1117
273
374
4106
572
690
768
879
985
1056
1141
1253
1335
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences83
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs183
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences84
ratio0.071
matches
0"Another sound, closer this time—a faint click, like a twig snapping under careful weight."
1"One, two, three—her boot pressed down on something yielding, not stone or root, but a petal that squelched wetly."
2"At the edge of her vision, a shadow flitted—low to the ground, sinuous, gone when she turned."
3"The whispers returned, overlapping now, murmurs in a tongue that tugged at half-remembered stories from her mum's Welsh lullabies—melodic, insistent, pleading."
4"At the corner of her eye, the shadow darted again—closer, humanoid now, with limbs that stretched too far."
5"But the mist thickened, coiling like smoke from a dying fire, and hands—cold, insistent—grazed her shoulder from behind."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount138
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount3
adverbRatio0.021739130434782608
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.014492753623188406
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences84
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences84
mean12.13
std6.81
cv0.562
sampleLengths
024
125
221
38
425
521
626
76
831
919
105
1120
121
1310
1413
155
1613
174
186
1925
2015
2111
2227
237
249
2518
266
277
2815
2917
3014
3111
321
3316
3417
3513
3610
375
381
3917
407
4119
424
4315
441
453
468
474
4811
4912
61.90% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.39285714285714285
totalSentences84
uniqueOpeners33
85.47% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences78
matches
0"Just the oaks, their trunks"
1"Too deliberate, too hungry."
ratio0.026
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount20
totalSentences78
matches
0"She caught herself against one"
1"She straightened, heart hammering, and"
2"She flexed her fingers, the"
3"She'd check the pendant's behaviour,"
4"She stepped forward, boots sinking"
5"It hummed under her touch,"
6"She slipped the pendant's chain"
7"Its inner glow pulsed in"
8"She replaced the pendant, its"
9"She blinked, shook her head."
10"She lifted her foot."
11"She wiped it on her"
12"She needed to leave."
13"She spun, fists clenched."
14"Her voice echoed oddly, layered"
15"She pressed on, the pendant"
16"She broke into a jog,"
17"She veered away, but the"
18"She reached the split oak,"
19"She bolted, branches whipping her"
ratio0.256
68.97% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount61
totalSentences78
matches
0"Aurora's boot caught on a"
1"She caught herself against one"
2"The Heartstone pendant at her"
3"She straightened, heart hammering, and"
4"Wildflowers carpeted the ground in"
5"The standing stones loomed at"
6"Eva had described this place"
7"The pendant had pulled her"
8"She flexed her fingers, the"
9"The screen had gone blank"
10"She'd check the pendant's behaviour,"
11"This was just another puzzle."
12"A rustle came from the"
13"Rory froze, ears straining."
14"She stepped forward, boots sinking"
15"The flowers brushed her calves,"
16"The pendant warmed again, insistent"
17"Rory knelt, tracing one with"
18"It hummed under her touch,"
19"Fae bargains, portals to other"
ratio0.782
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences78
matches(empty)
ratio0
40.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences49
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"Aurora's boot caught on a root that shouldn't have been there, twisting her ankle just enough to send her stumbling forward into the clearing."
1"The standing stones loomed at the edges, twisted oaks that formed a ragged circle, their branches interlocking overhead like skeletal fingers."
2"Quick out-of-the-box thinking, that's what got her through law lectures and Evan's rages."
3"But the air hung still, heavy with the cloying scent of honeysuckle that bloomed out of season, its sweetness cloying enough to coat her tongue."
4"Its inner glow pulsed in time with her heartbeat, casting erratic shadows that danced across the stones."
5"The path narrowed, branches scraping her arms, drawing thin lines that stung with unnatural heat."
6"The whispers returned, overlapping now, murmurs in a tongue that tugged at half-remembered stories from her mum's Welsh lullabies—melodic, insistent, pleading."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags3
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
79.4476%