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Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYAXP9D8V7CWAHEEA3PR1HG
Run Details
Model:
Grok 4.1 Fast
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:
40.8s
Cost:
$0.002030
Provider:
xAI
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
0.00%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
50.70%
Name drop frequency
(details)
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
0.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
85.47%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
0.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
20.48%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
40.32%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
61.22%
Technical jargon density
(details)
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
81.9399%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
Aurora Carter gripped the silver
chain around her neck, the Heartstone pendant's faint
warmth
a nagging distraction amid the
chill
autumn bite of Richmond Park.
She scanned the treeline, boots
crunching leaves. Nyx drifted at her shoulder, a humanoid silhouette of writhing shadow, violet eyes pulsing like distant stars. "Those oaks ahead. Twisted wrong." Aurora nodded toward the cluster, bark grooved into impossible arches.
Nyx's form sharpened, edges bleeding
into solid black. "The Veil thins. Feel the pull?" She nodded,
pulse
quickening.
The air grew thick, laced
with a scent like crushed violets and rain-soaked stone.
They pushed through brambles, thorns
snagging her jacket. One final step past the outermost oak, and the world flipped.
Sunlight fractured into rainbows across
petals the size of dinner plates.
Wildflowers carpeted the ground in
riots of crimson, sapphire, and gold, none matching Earth's palette.
Blooms nodded without wind, releasing
pollen that sparkled midair like fireflies frozen in amber. Aurora blinked hard. "Bloody hell. This ain't no clearing."
Nyx flowed forward, incorporeal tendrils
testing the air. "No
echo
from the park. Time frays here."
Her boots sank into moss
softer than feathers, muffling every step. No path marked the way, yet flowers parted before Nyx, reforming behind.
She knelt, fingers brushing a
stem. Petals unfurled under her touch, revealing dewdrops that swirled into tiny whirlpools, each droplet reflecting her face a thousand times over. "Look."
She plucked one, held it
up. The water inside
churned
faster, images flickering—Cardiff streets, her flat above Silas's bar, a shadow fleeing London alleys. Nyx's
whisper
cut the hum. "Echoes of your steps. Past threads woven in."
She dropped it, wiped her
hand on her jeans. Unease coiled in her gut. The air tasted sweeter now, coating her tongue like honeyed wine. Distant laughter bubbled, childlike and sharp, vanishing when she turned. "Keep moving. Deeper." Nyx solidified, towering at six-foot-two, hand—more claw than flesh—gesturing ahead. They wove through flower seas. Vines climbed invisible trellises, leaves broad as shields pulsing with veins of light. One vine snagged Aurora's wrist, the small crescent scar there igniting with cool fire.
She yanked free, skin unmarked
but tingling. "Alive. All of it."
Her voice dropped
. "Hear that?" A melody drifted, strings plucked by unseen fingers. Notes twisted, rising in pitch until they pierced like glass shards, then softened to sighs. Birds—feathers shimmering oil-slick—darted between branches, trails of glitter dissolving in their wake. Nyx paused at a ring of toadstools, caps broad and veined purple. "Cross with care. Circles bind." She stepped over, ginger. Inside the ring, ground heaved gentle breaths, exhaling mist that warmed her face. A toadstool stem split, birthing a fruit like polished ruby, skin taut and
gleaming
. "Smell it." Nyx leaned close, voice a breeze. Aurora inhaled. Spice exploded—cinnamon fire laced with ocean salt. Hunger gnawed sudden and fierce, her
stomach
twisting despite lunch hours ago. She reached, fingers hovering. "Don't." Nyx's claw clamped her arm. "Fae traps. Eat, and hours bleed to days." She pulled back, breath ragged. "How do you know?" "Shadows
whisper
old debts." Nyx released her, form flickering unease.
Even they recoiled, silhouette thinning
against the relentless glow. They pressed on. Trees
loomed
taller, trunks braided like lovers' limbs, bark
etched
with runes that shifted under gaze. Aurora
traced
one—curved like her scar—and the tree shuddered, bark peeling to reveal inner glow, pale lavender light pulsing like a heartbeat. "Runes move."
She pressed palm flat
. Visions slammed in: silver-haired woman weaving fates, exiled courts, groves eternal. Nyx yanked her away. "Not yours to claim." Sweat beaded her brow despite cool air. Time warped; her
watch
hands spun backward, then froze. Minutes inside, but park paths outside stretched eternal in memory. A stream appeared, no source in sight. Water flowed upstream, defying gravity, surface rippling with faces—hers, Nyx's
fractured
shadow, a crimson gem pulsing. "The pendant." Aurora clawed it free.
It thrummed hotter, though no
Hel stink tainted the air. "Reacting weird." Nyx's
eyes narrowed
. "Veil's
echo
. Fae bleeds into Hel's hunger." Laughter swelled again, closer. Shapes danced at periphery—will-o'-wisps? No, figures translucent, skirts swirling in frozen twirls. "Ghosts?" Aurora drew the Fae-Forged Blade from her belt, moonsilver leaf-shape
gleaming
cold. It hummed, tip pointing deeper. "Not ghosts. Echo-memories." Nyx flowed ahead, scouting. "Follow the blade's song." Path emerged, petals crushing underfoot into perfume clouds. Air thickened, pressing lungs. Aurora's skin prickled; hairs rose as if lightning brewed unseen. They crested a rise. A glade unfolded, heart of the grove. Central oak dwarfed kin, roots sprawling like veins, crown blotting fabricated sky. Wildflowers ringed a stone altar,
etched
runes matching trees. No wind stirred, yet branches swayed
rhythmic
. A woman stood there, silver hair
cascading
waist-length, pale lavender eyes fixed distant. Barefoot, she left no print on moss. Ethereal, ageless, skin luminous as pearl. "You seek what devours."
Her voice lilted, riddle-wrapped silk
. Aurora gripped the blade tighter. "Isolde? The Seer?" The woman turned, no surprise cracking composure. "Names chain truths. You breach boundaries, shadow and scar-bearer." Nyx solidified fully, claws flexing. "Prophecies called us. Hel stirs." Isolde's lips curved, misleading smile. "Feasts await where amber skies weep wine. But first, taste the grove's gift." She extended hand. A berry cluster dangled from her palm, skins translucent, juice beading like blood. Aurora's hunger surged anew. "No games. The pendant burns. Portals?" Isolde circled the altar, skirt whispering moss. "Warmth heralds excess. Gluttony's prince hungers for more than flesh." Nyx's form rippled, violet glow flaring. "Dymas. We cross?" "Not yet." Isolde plucked a berry, crushed it. Juice stained fingers crimson, scent intoxicating. "Grove tests first. Walk the spiral." She
traced
ground. Petals swirled inward, forming spiral path to altar base. Air hummed louder, melody
resolving
into chorus—voices layered, ancient tongues pleading, laughing, weeping. Aurora stepped onto it. Ground yielded, massaging soles through boots. Colors intensified; flowers bled hues into air, painting halos. Her scar itched fierce. Halfway, spiral buckled. Roots erupted, coiling ankles. She slashed with blade—moonsilver sheared clean, cold bite numbing vines. "Alive again!" She stomped forward. Nyx laughed, wind-rasp. "Grove plays. Push through." Isolde watched from center, lavender eyes unblinking. "What you sever, returns woven anew." Deeper in spiral, time
fractured
open. Aurora glimpsed herself younger—Cardiff uni, Evan's fist raised—then London rain, Eva's plea. Echoes overlapped, her voice pleading with mother's
lilt
. "Stop it." She lunged last steps, blade raised. Altar cool under palms. Pendant scorched now, pulsing sync with oak's glow. Nyx materialized beside, shadow bleeding into roots. Isolde closed distance, no footprints trailing. "You carry Dymas's heart, yet seek Fae steel's bite." Aurora sheathed blade—Isolde's prior gift, cold
weight
reassuring. "Portals weaken. Veil tears. We need your sight." The seer tilted head, silver strands catching nonexistent light. "Sight shows vines of gluttony strangling Earth's throat. Chefs stir souls in amber vats, Belphegor toasts with stolen time." Nyx leaned in,
whisper
fierce. "Lead us through." Isolde's hand hovered pendant. It cooled under touch, crimson gem steadying. "Not through. Around. Grove bends realms." She snapped fingers. Altar runes ignited lavender, air splitting shimmer. Beyond, not park, not Hel—pocket vista of floating isles, waterfalls arcing upward, fruits dangling ripe and singing low tones. Aurora's breath caught. Wonder drowned unease. "This... deeper still?" Isolde stepped aside, gesturing spiral's end. "Deeper devours. Choose your thread." Petals surged, path fracturing three ways: one to isles, one darkening to shadows thick as pitch, one rippling crimson like pendant's glow. Nyx's claws scraped stone. "Which binds least?" Isolde's smile deepened, riddle blooming. "The one your scars remember."
created_at
"2026-02-20T20:12:39.609Z"
2/20/2026, 8:12:39 PM
model
"x-ai/grok-4.1-fast"
app_id
182717
external_user
(null)
streamed
true
cancelled
false
latency
748
moderation_latency
(null)
generation_time
40652
tokens_prompt
1816
tokens_completion
2554
native_tokens_prompt
1792
native_tokens_completion
3389
native_tokens_completion_images
0
native_tokens_reasoning
1485
native_tokens_cached
151
num_media_prompt
(null)
num_input_audio_prompt
(null)
num_media_completion
0
num_search_results
(null)
origin
"https://ncbench.com/"
is_byok
false
finish_reason
"stop"
native_finish_reason
"completed"
usage
0.00203025
router
(null)
provider_responses
0
endpoint_id
"9821aa0e-dce3-4c27-9716-161359123d0b"
id
"151aa48a-cf5a-b06a-ae5f-bab5834c31cd"
is_byok
false
latency
458
model_permaslug
"x-ai/grok-4.1-fast"
provider_name
"xAI"
status
200
api_type
"completions"
id
"gen-1771618359-B4fbe1JvNMFE3lHJfUFi"
upstream_id
"151aa48a-cf5a-b06a-ae5f-bab5834c31cd"
total_cost
0.00203025
cache_discount
0.00002265
upstream_inference_cost
0
provider_name
"xAI"
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
17
adverbTagCount
1
adverbTags
0
"Nyx leaned close [close]"
dialogueSentences
46
tagDensity
0.37
leniency
0.739
rawRatio
0.059
effectiveRatio
0.043
100.00%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
1275
totalAiIsmAdverbs
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
0.00%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
1275
totalAiIsms
31
found
0
word
"warmth"
count
2
1
word
"chill"
count
1
2
word
"scanned"
count
1
3
word
"pulse"
count
1
4
word
"fractured"
count
3
5
word
"echo"
count
3
6
word
"churned"
count
1
7
word
"whisper"
count
3
8
word
"echoes"
count
2
9
word
"gleaming"
count
2
10
word
"stomach"
count
1
11
word
"loomed"
count
1
12
word
"etched"
count
2
13
word
"traced"
count
2
14
word
"rhythmic"
count
1
15
word
"cascading"
count
1
16
word
"silk"
count
1
17
word
"resolving"
count
1
18
word
"lilt"
count
1
19
word
"weight"
count
1
highlights
0
"warmth"
1
"chill"
2
"scanned"
3
"pulse"
4
"fractured"
5
"echo"
6
"churned"
7
"whisper"
8
"echoes"
9
"gleaming"
10
"stomach"
11
"loomed"
12
"etched"
13
"traced"
14
"rhythmic"
15
"cascading"
16
"silk"
17
"resolving"
18
"lilt"
19
"weight"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
1
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"eyes widened/narrowed"
count
1
highlights
0
"eyes narrowed"
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
125
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
1
hedgeCount
0
narrationSentences
125
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
(empty)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
156
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
25
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
1245
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
7
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
50.70%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
68
wordCount
1007
uniqueNames
21
maxNameDensity
1.99
worstName
"Nyx"
maxWindowNameDensity
3
worstWindowName
"Nyx"
discoveredNames
Carter
1
Heartstone
1
Richmond
1
Park
1
Nyx
20
Earth
1
Cardiff
2
Silas
1
London
2
Aurora
15
Visions
1
Hel
2
Fae-Forged
1
Blade
1
Path
1
Juice
1
Evan
1
Eva
1
Altar
2
Isolde
9
Petals
3
persons
0
"Carter"
1
"Nyx"
2
"Earth"
3
"Silas"
4
"Aurora"
5
"Visions"
6
"Blade"
7
"Path"
8
"Juice"
9
"Evan"
10
"Eva"
11
"Altar"
12
"Isolde"
13
"Petals"
places
0
"Richmond"
1
"Park"
2
"Cardiff"
3
"London"
globalScore
0.507
windowScore
0.667
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
82
glossingSentenceCount
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
0
per1kWords
0
wordCount
1245
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
156
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
65
mean
19.15
std
10.71
cv
0.559
sampleLengths
0
49
1
15
2
14
3
37
4
40
5
9
6
16
7
50
8
25
9
13
10
35
11
13
12
39
13
9
14
35
15
17
16
31
17
8
18
25
19
14
20
9
21
19
22
41
23
17
24
8
25
26
26
23
27
18
28
10
29
16
30
18
31
11
32
22
33
39
34
26
35
9
36
8
37
16
38
10
39
18
40
16
41
10
42
17
43
9
44
20
45
25
46
23
47
17
48
5
49
7
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
0
totalSentences
125
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
236
matches
(empty)
0.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
16
semicolonCount
3
flaggedSentences
15
totalSentences
156
ratio
0.096
matches
0
"The water inside churned faster, images flickering—Cardiff streets, her flat above Silas's bar, a shadow fleeing London alleys."
1
"\"Keep moving. Deeper.\" Nyx solidified, towering at six-foot-two, hand—more claw than flesh—gesturing ahead."
2
"Birds—feathers shimmering oil-slick—darted between branches, trails of glitter dissolving in their wake."
3
"Spice exploded—cinnamon fire laced with ocean salt."
4
"Aurora traced one—curved like her scar—and the tree shuddered, bark peeling to reveal inner glow, pale lavender light pulsing like a heartbeat."
5
"Time warped; her watch hands spun backward, then froze."
6
"Water flowed upstream, defying gravity, surface rippling with faces—hers, Nyx's fractured shadow, a crimson gem pulsing."
7
"Shapes danced at periphery—will-o'-wisps?"
8
"Aurora's skin prickled; hairs rose as if lightning brewed unseen."
9
"Air hummed louder, melody resolving into chorus—voices layered, ancient tongues pleading, laughing, weeping."
10
"Colors intensified; flowers bled hues into air, painting halos."
11
"She slashed with blade—moonsilver sheared clean, cold bite numbing vines."
12
"Aurora glimpsed herself younger—Cardiff uni, Evan's fist raised—then London rain, Eva's plea."
13
"Aurora sheathed blade—Isolde's prior gift, cold weight reassuring."
14
"Beyond, not park, not Hel—pocket vista of floating isles, waterfalls arcing upward, fruits dangling ripe and singing low tones."
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
576
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
10
adverbRatio
0.017361111111111112
lyAdverbCount
0
lyAdverbRatio
0
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
156
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
156
mean
7.98
std
4.44
cv
0.557
sampleLengths
0
25
1
7
2
17
3
15
4
8
5
6
6
4
7
14
8
8
9
11
10
11
11
15
12
14
13
3
14
6
15
8
16
8
17
11
18
12
19
6
20
21
21
7
22
18
23
5
24
8
25
9
26
5
27
11
28
10
29
13
30
5
31
13
32
14
33
7
34
7
35
2
36
8
37
15
38
12
39
12
40
5
41
4
42
13
43
14
44
8
45
2
46
7
47
12
48
4
49
6
85.47%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
0
diversityRatio
0.5128205128205128
totalSentences
156
uniqueOpeners
80
0.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
0
totalSentences
124
matches
(empty)
ratio
0
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
27
totalSentences
124
matches
0
"She scanned the treeline, boots"
1
"She nodded, pulse quickening."
2
"They pushed through brambles, thorns"
3
"Her boots sank into moss"
4
"She knelt, fingers brushing a"
5
"She plucked one, held it"
6
"She dropped it, wiped her"
7
"They wove through flower seas."
8
"She yanked free, skin unmarked"
9
"Her voice dropped"
10
"She stepped over, ginger."
11
"She reached, fingers hovering."
12
"She pulled back, breath ragged."
13
"They pressed on."
14
"She pressed palm flat"
15
"It thrummed hotter, though no"
16
"It hummed, tip pointing deeper."
17
"They crested a rise."
18
"Her voice lilted, riddle-wrapped silk"
19
"She extended hand."
ratio
0.218
20.48%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
109
totalSentences
124
matches
0
"Aurora Carter gripped the silver"
1
"She scanned the treeline, boots"
2
"Nyx drifted at her shoulder,"
3
"Aurora nodded toward the cluster,"
4
"Nyx's form sharpened, edges bleeding"
5
"She nodded, pulse quickening."
6
"The air grew thick, laced"
7
"They pushed through brambles, thorns"
8
"Sunlight fractured into rainbows across"
9
"Wildflowers carpeted the ground in"
10
"Blooms nodded without wind, releasing"
11
"Aurora blinked hard."
12
"Nyx flowed forward, incorporeal tendrils"
13
"Her boots sank into moss"
14
"She knelt, fingers brushing a"
15
"Petals unfurled under her touch,"
16
"She plucked one, held it"
17
"The water inside churned faster,"
18
"Nyx's whisper cut the hum."
19
"She dropped it, wiped her"
ratio
0.879
40.32%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
1
totalSentences
124
matches
0
"Even they recoiled, silhouette thinning"
ratio
0.008
61.22%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
35
technicalSentenceCount
4
matches
0
"Blooms nodded without wind, releasing pollen that sparkled midair like fireflies frozen in amber."
1
"Petals unfurled under her touch, revealing dewdrops that swirled into tiny whirlpools, each droplet reflecting her face a thousand times over."
2
"Inside the ring, ground heaved gentle breaths, exhaling mist that warmed her face."
3
"Aurora's skin prickled; hairs rose as if lightning brewed unseen."
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
17
uselessAdditionCount
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
1
fancyCount
1
fancyTags
0
"She pressed (press)"
dialogueSentences
46
tagDensity
0.022
leniency
0.043
rawRatio
1
effectiveRatio
0.043
81.9399%