Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYAYM9S6Q1EK1KPS1HZ8HMH

Run Details

Duration:
1m 39s
Cost:
$0.009198
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Harlow’s boot crunched through a shard of enchanted glass as she pried open the rusted Tube station door. Copper stung her nostrils—blood, recent, thick enough to cling to the damp stone walls of the abandoned Camden platform. She stepped down, her worn leather watch catching the faint glow of her torch. The platform reeked of burnt sage and rot, leftover traces of the Veil Market that had fled the spot at last full moon. A street kid had stumbled on the body an hour prior, babbling about glowing sigils and a brass trinket in the victim’s hand. The Met had called Eva Kowalski—occult research assistant at the British Museum’s restricted archives—as a last-ditch consultant; no uniformed officer had dared touch the trinket after two reported sudden, blinding headaches. Eva huddled by the body, her curly red hair tumbling over round glasses as she flipped through a weathered leather-bound book from her satchel. She tucked a strand behind her left ear, a nervous habit Harlow had noted within five minutes of their introduction. The book’s cover bore the same sigils as the trinket, its pages frayed from repeated use. “The trinket’s a Veil Compass,” Eva said without looking up. “Prop,” Harlow said. She knelt, her sharp jaw tightening as she studied the small brass object in the victim’s clenched fist. Verdigris patina coated its casing, sigils etched into the face that made her recall the unexplained symbols at her partner Morris’s death scene three years prior. Her fingers curled into a fist beneath her glove—she’d never told anyone about those symbols, had written them off as a killer’s sick joke until now. “Crafted by a Shade artisan,” Eva said. She closed her book, tapping a page marked with a pressed raven feather. “I’ve studied their work in the archives—each sigil is a unique protective ward, tailored to the compass’s owner. This one’s inscribed with a ward against involuntary rift travel.” “Needle’s stuck,” Harlow said. She prodded the compass with her gloved finger. The metal point didn’t budge, fixed on a spot somewhere beyond the dark tunnel mouth. “A working compass wouldn’t freeze.” “Blocked,” Eva said. She tucked another hair strand back, her freckled complexion pale. “It points to supernatural rifts. Something’s masking the signal here—maybe a counter-ward, or a rift that’s been sealed improperly.” Harlow stood, her military precision keeping her balance on the loose gravel scattered across the platform. She scanned the tunnel, her torch beam cutting through the dark to reveal faded posters for 1970s rock shows and a rusted ticket booth leaning to one side. The Veil Market’s entry requirement was a bone token—she’d heard rumors from informants, though she’d never been able to prove the market’s existence until now. The air felt thick, as if the platform held its breath, and the distant rumble of a passing train above made the walls shake faintly. “Victim’s ID?” Harlow said. “None,” Eva said. She nodded at the victim’s empty pockets. “Whoever did this took his wallet, but left the compass. That’s unusual for a mugging.” “Muggers don’t leave enchanted trinkets,” Harlow said. She knelt again, running her gloved hand along the victim’s coat. A small tear in the lining caught her eye—she reached in, pulling out a tiny, weathered bone token. It bore the same sigils as the compass, its surface smoothed by repeated handling. “Entry token for the Veil Market,” Eva said. She leaned in, her round glasses slipping down her nose. “He must have been a customer. Or a seller—some of the market’s vendors trade in rare occult texts I’ve only read about in the archives.” “Hacked to death with a bladed weapon,” Harlow said. She pointed to the deep gashes across the victim’s throat and chest. “No bullet wounds, no signs of a struggle. He trusted his killer.” “Someone he knew from the market,” Eva said. She flipped open her book again, checking a page of sigil translations. “The compass’s ward would have protected him from rifts, but not from a physical attack. Whoever did this knew his weaknesses.” Harlow stood, her watch’s leather strap digging into her wrist as she clenched her hand. Morris had been found with similar gashes, his body dumped in an abandoned warehouse with no signs of a struggle. She’d never connected it to supernatural activity—until now. The symbols, the trinket, the bone token—all of it tied back to the same hidden world Eva studied. She could almost hear Morris’s laugh, the way he’d teased her for dismissing his odd informants’ stories about the Veil Market. Now those stories felt like warnings she’d ignored. “The killer lured him here after the market moved,” Harlow said. She stared at the tunnel, her torch beam picking out a faint trail of blood leading toward the dark mouth. “Used the token to gain his trust, then attacked. Left the compass to mark the spot.” “Why send a message?” Eva said. “To scare the market’s patrons,” Harlow said. She knelt again, tracing the sigils on the compass with her gloved finger. “Or to draw someone specific here. Someone who’d recognize the trinket.” As she spoke, a faint hum filled the air. It started low, then grew until the platform’s walls vibrated. The compass’s needle twitched, then jolted to life. It spun wildly for a second, its metal point cutting through the sigils etched into the face, then fixed directly on Harlow. A cold wind blasts through the tunnel, carrying the scent of burnt sage and something darker—rot, and the faint scream of a voice she recognized as Morris’s. Eva’s eyes widened. “Harlow—” A rift tore open behind Harlow, its edges glowing with a sickly purple light. The damp stone walls shook, gravel raining down from the ceiling. Her torch clattered to the ground, its beam flickering out as she turned. The swirling portal’s light cast long shadows across the platform, and a shadowy figure stepped through. Its form shifted like smoke, but it held a bladed weapon identical to the one that had killed the victim and Morris. The figure raised the weapon, and Harlow saw a flash of the same sigils etched into its hilt before it lunged.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"She could almost [almost]"
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.625
leniency1
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.067
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1039
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
71.13% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1039
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"etched"
count3
1
word"scanned"
count1
2
word"tracing"
count1
3
word"vibrated"
count1
highlights
0"etched"
1"scanned"
2"tracing"
3"vibrated"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
1"clenched fist"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences61
matches(empty)
96.02% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences61
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"watch’s"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences71
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1024
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
63.15% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions40
wordCount806
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1.74
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
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Camden1
Veil2
Market2
Met1
Eva11
Kowalski1
British1
Museum1
Harlow14
Morris5
persons
0"Market"
1"Met"
2"Eva"
3"Kowalski"
4"Museum"
5"Harlow"
6"Morris"
places
0"British"
globalScore0.632
windowScore0.833
95.65% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences46
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like warnings she’d ignored"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1024
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences71
matches(empty)
96.10% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs10
mean102.4
std49.8
cv0.486
sampleLengths
037
191
260
3195
494
5196
690
784
876
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99.51% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences61
matches
0"been found"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs139
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount9
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences71
ratio0.113
matches
0"Copper stung her nostrils—blood, recent, thick enough to cling to the damp stone walls of the abandoned Camden platform."
1"The Met had called Eva Kowalski—occult research assistant at the British Museum’s restricted archives—as a last-ditch consultant; no uniformed officer had dared touch the trinket after two reported sudden, blinding headaches."
2"Her fingers curled into a fist beneath her glove—she’d never told anyone about those symbols, had written them off as a killer’s sick joke until now."
3"The Veil Market’s entry requirement was a bone token—she’d heard rumors from informants, though she’d never been able to prove the market’s existence until now."
4"A small tear in the lining caught her eye—she reached in, pulling out a tiny, weathered bone token."
5"She’d never connected it to supernatural activity—until now."
6"The symbols, the trinket, the bone token—all of it tied back to the same hidden world Eva studied."
7"A cold wind blasts through the tunnel, carrying the scent of burnt sage and something darker—rot, and the faint scream of a voice she recognized as Morris’s."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount628
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"weathered leather-bound book"
adverbCount7
adverbRatio0.011146496815286623
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.0031847133757961785
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences71
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences71
mean14.42
std7.36
cv0.51
sampleLengths
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720
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910
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4312
4421
4515
4620
478
4818
4921
69.95% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.43661971830985913
totalSentences71
uniqueOpeners31
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences48
matches(empty)
ratio0
36.67% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount22
totalSentences48
matches
0"She stepped down, her worn"
1"She tucked a strand behind"
2"She knelt, her sharp jaw"
3"Her fingers curled into a"
4"She closed her book, tapping"
5"She prodded the compass with"
6"She tucked another hair strand"
7"She scanned the tunnel, her"
8"She nodded at the victim’s"
9"She knelt again, running her"
10"It bore the same sigils"
11"She leaned in, her round"
12"She pointed to the deep"
13"She flipped open her book"
14"She’d never connected it to"
15"She could almost hear Morris’s"
16"She stared at the tunnel,"
17"She knelt again, tracing the"
18"It started low, then grew"
19"It spun wildly for a"
ratio0.458
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount46
totalSentences48
matches
0"Harlow’s boot crunched through a"
1"Copper stung her nostrils—blood, recent,"
2"She stepped down, her worn"
3"The platform reeked of burnt"
4"A street kid had stumbled"
5"The Met had called Eva"
6"Eva huddled by the body,"
7"She tucked a strand behind"
8"The book’s cover bore the"
9"Eva said without looking up"
10"She knelt, her sharp jaw"
11"Verdigris patina coated its casing,"
12"Her fingers curled into a"
13"She closed her book, tapping"
14"She prodded the compass with"
15"The metal point didn’t budge,"
16"She tucked another hair strand"
17"Harlow stood, her military precision"
18"She scanned the tunnel, her"
19"The Veil Market’s entry requirement"
ratio0.958
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences48
matches
0"Now those stories felt like"
ratio0.021
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences39
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Verdigris patina coated its casing, sigils etched into the face that made her recall the unexplained symbols at her partner Morris’s death scene three years pri…"
1"The air felt thick, as if the platform held its breath, and the distant rumble of a passing train above made the walls shake faintly."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags14
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.583
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
82.9615%