Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYB1J2BKG7650XF0Y708CGM

Run Details

Duration:
22.3s
Cost:
$0.001463
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora Carter parked her battered Vespa on the gravel edge of Richmond Park, the engine's sputter dying into the night's hush. She killed the headlights, and darkness swallowed the path ahead, thick as ink spilled over the world. The air hung heavy, laced with a sweetness that cloyed her throat—honeysuckle, maybe, but sharper, like fruit left too long in the sun. She had come for the pendant. That faint pulse in her pocket had quickened two nights back, warm against her thigh during a late shift at the Golden Empress. Yu-Fei had noticed her fidgeting, asked if she carried a hot coal, but she brushed it off with a laugh. Now, the map app on her phone had led her here, to this forgotten corner of the park, marked only as "ancient oaks." The pendant's donor remained a ghost—no name, no note, just the silver chain slipped into her delivery bag one foggy morning. She swung her leg over the scooter, boots crunching leaves that shouldn't litter the ground this deep into autumn. Richmond Park sprawled vast during the day, deer grazing under tourists' lenses, but at midnight, the gates locked, and the wild claimed it back. Rory zipped her jacket higher, the chill seeping through denim like fingers probing for weakness. Her wrist itched where the old scar pulled tight, a crescent moon etched from a fall off her father's garden wall as a kid. She shook it off, pocketed her keys, and clicked on the torch from her phone. The beam sliced a narrow cone through the black, illuminating twisted roots that snaked across the earth like veins. The path wound narrow, flanked by brambles that tugged at her sleeves. She pressed on, the pendant's warmth building in her pocket, a steady throb now, like a second heartbeat. Isolde's grove, the old stories called it—whispers from Eva's late-night ramblings after too much gin, tales of a hidden spot where time bent. Rory dismissed them as pub lore, but the pendant's glow had flickered crimson in her flat above Silas's bar, drawing her out. If it pointed to something Fae-touched, as the warmth suggested, maybe answers lay here. Answers to what haunted her dreams since London: shadows that stretched too long, voices murmuring in Welsh she half-remembered from her mother's lessons. Ten minutes in, the trees thickened, their branches interlocking overhead to form a canopy that smothered starlight. The air grew denser, pressing against her skin, and the ground softened underfoot, springy as if layered with moss no boot had ever trod. Wildflowers dotted the edges—violets and lupines, blooming defiant against the season's frost. She paused, sweeping the torch low. Petals gleamed unnaturally vivid, edges shimmering as if edged in frost that didn't melt. A breeze stirred, but no leaves rustled in response. Silence blanketed everything, the kind that amplified her own breath, ragged now in the stillness. She pushed deeper, the path vanishing into a clearing ringed by ancient oaks. Their trunks rose like sentinels, bark etched with patterns that caught her light—swirls resembling runes, or perhaps just the scars of wind and rain. At the center stood stones, not boulders but slabs of oak weathered to mimic granite, upright and evenly spaced, forming a rough circle. The Fae Grove. Her pulse matched the pendant's rhythm, quickening as she crossed the boundary. Inside, the air shifted, warmer, the sweetness blooming into something metallic, like blood mixed with nectar. Rory circled the stones, fingers brushing one. The wood felt alive, pulsing faintly under her touch, warm as flesh. She yanked back, heart slamming. Imagination, she told herself—low blood sugar from skipping dinner. But the pendant burned hotter, and she drew it out, the deep crimson gem catching her torchlight in a faint inner glow. It hung there, thumbnail-sized on its silver chain, no longer just warm but insistent, vibrating against her palm. She scanned the clearing: grass knee-high, dotted with more flowers that swayed without wind, their colors too bright, too wrong for October. A sound broke the quiet—a snap, like a twig underfoot, but from behind the stones. She whipped around, torch beam jerking. Nothing. Just shadow pooling where the oaks met earth. "Hello?" Her voice cracked, swallowed by the grove. No echo returned. She waited, breath held, but the silence pressed back harder, expectant. She moved on, pendant clutched tight. The purpose anchored her: find the source of the pulse, whatever portal or relic it signaled. Hel's domain or Fae whim, she didn't care—answers beat the nightmares. The flowers brushed her jeans as she walked the circle's edge, petals soft as silk but sticking, leaving faint stains like ink on her cuffs. Another sound, softer this time—a rustle, fabric on leaves? No, too dry, like scales shifting over stone. She froze, beam fixed on a gap between stones. The darkness there seemed to deepen, coiling, but when she blinked, it flattened to ordinary night. Her skin prickled, hairs rising along her arms. The air tasted thicker now, laced with that metallic tang, and her scar throbbed in rhythm with the pendant. She pressed forward, weaving through the stones toward the clearing's heart. A low mound rose there, carpeted in clover that glowed faintly phosphorescent. Kneeling, she parted the growth. Beneath lay a flat stone, etched with the same swirling marks as the oaks— a slab perhaps, or an altar. The pendant swung forward, inches above it, and the glow intensified, crimson light bleeding into the etchings like water into parched soil. The rustle came again, closer, circling from her left. Rory's head snapped up. The torch swept wide, catching a flicker at the edge—a shape, tall and thin, melting back into shadow before she could focus. Deer, she thought, heart pounding. The park teemed with them. But deer didn't pause, didn't watch. She stood slowly, beam steady on the spot. Empty. Just brambles and oak bark. The certainty crept in then, slow as fog rolling off the Thames. She wasn't alone. The grove held its breath with her, the flowers still, the stones silent witnesses. Another sound—whisper this time, faint words in a tongue that twisted her gut, half-Gaelic, half-gibberish, slithering from the canopy above. Leaves? No, the branches hung motionless. She tilted her head, torch upward. Shapes darted there, brief as bats, but larger, limbs too jointed, eyes catching the light in silver glints before vanishing. Rory backed toward the stones, pendant tight in her fist. The warmth spread up her arm, comforting yet wrong, like a promise laced with threat. The whispers grew, overlapping, a chorus murmuring her name—Rory, Laila, Aurora—aliases she hadn't voiced aloud in years. Eva's drunken tales flooded back: the grove's boundary thinned at night, pulling the unwary in, where hours stretched to eternities. Time moved differently here, an hour inside minutes or days without. A branch creaked overhead, deliberate, and she spun. Nothing. But the shadows lengthened, stretching from the oaks like fingers inching across the grass. One brushed her boot, or seemed to—cold, insubstantial, yet it sent a shiver racing up her spine. She bolted for the circle's edge, torch bouncing, illuminating petals that now curled as if flinching from her light. The whispers swelled, names twisting into laughter, light and brittle as breaking glass. She reached the first stone, hand slamming against its warmth. Solid, but yielding, like pressing into dough that reformed behind her palm. Panic clawed her throat, but she swallowed it, cool-headed Rory, the one who outthought Evan back in Cardiff, who mapped escape routes in her sleep. Think. The pendant—follow its pull. It led here, so it led out. She held it aloft, the crimson glow painting the stones in ruddy hues, and the whispers stuttered, faltering. But the shapes returned, edging into view now, not at the periphery but bolder. A silhouette detached from an oak, humanoid yet elongated, limbs folding at impossible angles. It didn't advance, merely observed, head tilting as if appraising. Rory's breath hitched. Not deer. Not human. The air hummed, vibrating through her bones, and the metallic scent sharpened, blood and ozone. She edged sideways, keeping the stone at her back. The shape mirrored her, silent, and another peeled from the shadows to her right—shorter, hunched, fingers—claws?—trailing the air. The pendant's pulse raced, warning or urging, she couldn't tell. Whispers resumed, closer, brushing her ear like breath: "Stay, Rory. Time bends for you." Her scar burned, the old wound reopening in her mind's eye, spilling memories of falls and hidden hurts. The grove tightened around her, the circle shrinking, flowers encroaching, their blooms unfurling petals that resembled eyes, watching. She ran then, not toward the path but circling the stones, pendant swinging like a compass. The shapes pursued, not chasing but herding, their forms blurring at the edges, merging with the night. A low moan rose from the ground, the mound in the center splitting with a crack like thunder muffled in cotton. Crimson light spilled from the fissure, matching the pendant, and the whispers peaked in a cacophony of voices—her father's stern tones, her mother's soft songs, Eva's laughter twisted sour. Rory stumbled, torch dropping into clover that swallowed it whole, plunging her into near-blackness save for the gem's glow. The shapes closed in, outlines sharpening: faces elongated, eyes like polished obsidian, mouths lipless and smiling. One reached, fingers grazing her sleeve, cold as grave soil, and the pendant flared, searing her palm. She wrenched free, vision blurring with tears of strain, and dashed between stones. The boundary loomed, oaks parting like a curtain parting for the final act. But the whispers followed, coiling around her ankles, and a hand—real, clammy—brushed her wrist, right over the scar. She screamed, sound lost in the grove's maw, and the world tilted, time folding in on itself.
created_at"2026-02-20T20:14:46.359Z" 2/20/2026, 8:14:46 PM
model"x-ai/grok-4-fast"
app_id182717
external_user(null)
streamedtrue
cancelledfalse
latency3691
moderation_latency(null)
generation_time22021
tokens_prompt1038
tokens_completion2551
native_tokens_prompt1040
native_tokens_completion2556
native_tokens_completion_images0
native_tokens_reasoning408
native_tokens_cached151
num_media_prompt(null)
num_input_audio_prompt(null)
num_media_completion0
num_search_results(null)
origin"https://ncbench.com/"
is_byokfalse
finish_reason"stop"
native_finish_reason"completed"
usage0.00146335
router(null)
provider_responses
0
endpoint_id"c9586d9d-97ff-40ca-ae94-22504d6f9b7e"
id"11b51da0-7030-af08-30c7-9d990e40116d"
is_byokfalse
latency443
model_permaslug"x-ai/grok-4-fast"
provider_name"xAI"
status200
api_type"completions"
id"gen-1771618486-GgdwnMElNhAwsYiGQkxx"
upstream_id"11b51da0-7030-af08-30c7-9d990e40116d"
total_cost0.00146335
cache_discount0.00002265
upstream_inference_cost0
provider_name"xAI"

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences3
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
96.98% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1656
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.36% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1656
totalAiIsms33
found
0
word"pulse"
count4
1
word"quickened"
count1
2
word"chill"
count1
3
word"etched"
count3
4
word"warmth"
count4
5
word"throb"
count1
6
word"flickered"
count1
7
word"silence"
count2
8
word"sentinels"
count1
9
word"scanned"
count1
10
word"echo"
count1
11
word"silk"
count1
12
word"throbbed"
count1
13
word"flicker"
count1
14
word"pounding"
count1
15
word"whisper"
count1
16
word"comforting"
count1
17
word"racing"
count1
18
word"raced"
count1
19
word"cacophony"
count1
20
word"grave"
count1
21
word"searing"
count1
22
word"loomed"
count1
23
word"maw"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"quickened"
2"chill"
3"etched"
4"warmth"
5"throb"
6"flickered"
7"silence"
8"sentinels"
9"scanned"
10"echo"
11"silk"
12"throbbed"
13"flicker"
14"pounding"
15"whisper"
16"comforting"
17"racing"
18"raced"
19"cacophony"
20"grave"
21"searing"
22"loomed"
23"maw"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences120
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences120
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences120
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen45
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1625
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Imagination, she told herself—low blood sugar from skipping dinner."
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions35
wordCount1602
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity0.56
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Carter1
Vespa1
Richmond2
Park2
Golden1
Empress1
Rory9
Eva3
Silas1
Fae-touched1
London1
Welsh1
Fae3
Grove1
October1
Thames1
Laila1
Aurora2
Evan1
Cardiff1
persons
0"Carter"
1"Rory"
2"Eva"
3"Silas"
4"Laila"
5"Aurora"
6"Evan"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Golden"
3"London"
4"Welsh"
5"Fae"
6"Grove"
7"Thames"
8"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences101
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"as if flinching from her light"
1"as if appraising"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches5
per1kWords3.077
wordCount1625
matches
0"not boulders but slabs of oak weathered to mimic granite, upright"
1"no longer just warm but"
2"not at the periphery but bolder"
3"not toward the path but circling the stones, pendant swinging like a compass"
4"not chasing but herding, their forms blurring at the edges, merging with the"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences120
matches(empty)
50.74% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs20
mean81.25
std26.62
cv0.328
sampleLengths
0154
1116
2112
397
491
595
652
7100
897
965
1081
1173
1272
1377
1460
1551
1669
1769
1859
1935
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences120
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs305
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount22
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences18
totalSentences120
ratio0.15
matches
0"The air hung heavy, laced with a sweetness that cloyed her throat—honeysuckle, maybe, but sharper, like fruit left too long in the sun."
1"Now, the map app on her phone had led her here, to this forgotten corner of the park, marked only as \"ancient oaks.\" The pendant's donor remained a ghost—no name, no note, just the silver chain slipped into her delivery bag one foggy morning."
2"Isolde's grove, the old stories called it—whispers from Eva's late-night ramblings after too much gin, tales of a hidden spot where time bent."
3"Wildflowers dotted the edges—violets and lupines, blooming defiant against the season's frost."
4"Their trunks rose like sentinels, bark etched with patterns that caught her light—swirls resembling runes, or perhaps just the scars of wind and rain."
5"Imagination, she told herself—low blood sugar from skipping dinner."
6"A sound broke the quiet—a snap, like a twig underfoot, but from behind the stones."
7"Hel's domain or Fae whim, she didn't care—answers beat the nightmares."
8"Another sound, softer this time—a rustle, fabric on leaves?"
9"Beneath lay a flat stone, etched with the same swirling marks as the oaks— a slab perhaps, or an altar."
10"The torch swept wide, catching a flicker at the edge—a shape, tall and thin, melting back into shadow before she could focus."
11"Another sound—whisper this time, faint words in a tongue that twisted her gut, half-Gaelic, half-gibberish, slithering from the canopy above."
12"The whispers grew, overlapping, a chorus murmuring her name—Rory, Laila, Aurora—aliases she hadn't voiced aloud in years."
13"One brushed her boot, or seemed to—cold, insubstantial, yet it sent a shiver racing up her spine."
14"The pendant—follow its pull."
15"The shape mirrored her, silent, and another peeled from the shadows to her right—shorter, hunched, fingers—claws?—trailing the air."
16"Crimson light spilled from the fissure, matching the pendant, and the whispers peaked in a cacophony of voices—her father's stern tones, her mother's soft songs, Eva's laughter twisted sour."
17"But the whispers followed, coiling around her ankles, and a hand—real, clammy—brushed her wrist, right over the scar."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount188
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount4
adverbRatio0.02127659574468085
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.005319148936170213
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences120
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences120
mean13.54
std7.28
cv0.537
sampleLengths
021
117
223
36
423
520
644
719
824
915
1024
1115
1219
1312
1418
1523
1622
1714
1823
1917
2024
2112
226
2314
249
2515
2613
2724
2823
293
3012
3116
327
3312
345
359
3622
3718
3822
3915
406
411
428
438
443
4511
466
4716
4811
4925
56.11% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.36666666666666664
totalSentences120
uniqueOpeners44
59.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences113
matches
0"Just shadow pooling where the"
1"Just brambles and oak bark."
ratio0.018
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount33
totalSentences113
matches
0"She killed the headlights, and"
1"She had come for the"
2"She swung her leg over"
3"Her wrist itched where the"
4"She shook it off, pocketed"
5"She pressed on, the pendant's"
6"She paused, sweeping the torch"
7"She pushed deeper, the path"
8"Their trunks rose like sentinels,"
9"Her pulse matched the pendant's"
10"She yanked back, heart slamming."
11"It hung there, thumbnail-sized on"
12"She scanned the clearing: grass"
13"She whipped around, torch beam"
14"Her voice cracked, swallowed by"
15"She waited, breath held, but"
16"She moved on, pendant clutched"
17"She froze, beam fixed on"
18"Her skin prickled, hairs rising"
19"She pressed forward, weaving through"
ratio0.292
48.50% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount93
totalSentences113
matches
0"Aurora Carter parked her battered"
1"She killed the headlights, and"
2"The air hung heavy, laced"
3"She had come for the"
4"That faint pulse in her"
5"Yu-Fei had noticed her fidgeting,"
6"She swung her leg over"
7"Richmond Park sprawled vast during"
8"Rory zipped her jacket higher,"
9"Her wrist itched where the"
10"She shook it off, pocketed"
11"The beam sliced a narrow"
12"The path wound narrow, flanked"
13"She pressed on, the pendant's"
14"Isolde's grove, the old stories"
15"Rory dismissed them as pub"
16"Answers to what haunted her"
17"The air grew denser, pressing"
18"Wildflowers dotted the edges—violets and"
19"She paused, sweeping the torch"
ratio0.823
88.50% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences113
matches
0"Now, the map app on"
1"If it pointed to something"
ratio0.018
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences80
technicalSentenceCount17
matches
0"The air hung heavy, laced with a sweetness that cloyed her throat—honeysuckle, maybe, but sharper, like fruit left too long in the sun."
1"She swung her leg over the scooter, boots crunching leaves that shouldn't litter the ground this deep into autumn."
2"The beam sliced a narrow cone through the black, illuminating twisted roots that snaked across the earth like veins."
3"Answers to what haunted her dreams since London: shadows that stretched too long, voices murmuring in Welsh she half-remembered from her mother's lessons."
4"Ten minutes in, the trees thickened, their branches interlocking overhead to form a canopy that smothered starlight."
5"The air grew denser, pressing against her skin, and the ground softened underfoot, springy as if layered with moss no boot had ever trod."
6"Petals gleamed unnaturally vivid, edges shimmering as if edged in frost that didn't melt."
7"Silence blanketed everything, the kind that amplified her own breath, ragged now in the stillness."
8"Their trunks rose like sentinels, bark etched with patterns that caught her light—swirls resembling runes, or perhaps just the scars of wind and rain."
9"She scanned the clearing: grass knee-high, dotted with more flowers that swayed without wind, their colors too bright, too wrong for October."
10"Another sound—whisper this time, faint words in a tongue that twisted her gut, half-Gaelic, half-gibberish, slithering from the canopy above."
11"She bolted for the circle's edge, torch bouncing, illuminating petals that now curled as if flinching from her light."
12"Solid, but yielding, like pressing into dough that reformed behind her palm."
13"Panic clawed her throat, but she swallowed it, cool-headed Rory, the one who outthought Evan back in Cardiff, who mapped escape routes in her sleep."
14"The grove tightened around her, the circle shrinking, flowers encroaching, their blooms unfurling petals that resembled eyes, watching."
15"The shapes pursued, not chasing but herding, their forms blurring at the edges, merging with the night."
16"Rory stumbled, torch dropping into clover that swallowed it whole, plunging her into near-blackness save for the gem's glow."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
80.0062%