Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYB27H5DQG5XKTM65GENR7B

Run Details

Duration:
37.2s
Cost:
$0.001508
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The first breath of rain hit Camden Town as Detective Harlow Quinn adjusted her coat, the collar turned up against the chill. The streetlamp flickered, casting her shadow long over a stack of crates marked *FRAGILE*—the kind of warning that meant nothing here, in the alley behind the pub. Three blocks back, the main drag buzzed with tourists and students, but this lane was a dead end, its brick walls discolored by decades of cigarette smoke and something older. She took the first step off the pavement, boots crunching on a shard of glass, and the world *shifted*. Not a sound changed, not at first. The hum of traffic faded, the distant laugh of a group of friends dissolved. Then—*there*. A pressure behind her eyes, like the first hint of a sinus headache, but sharper, as if the air itself was *thickening*. The alley narrowed, the walls closing in until she could almost feel their texture, rough with age and the ghosts of hands that had pressed against them over the years. She reached under her jacket, fingers brushing the holster at her hip, and nodded at the man loitering by a dumpster. “Any luck, O’Connor?” He exhaled a cloud of smoke. “Just the usual. The *usual* doesn’t tip. But…”, he flicked ash into a puddle, “a bloke came through here an hour back. Tall, in a duster, bone in his pocket. That’s the only lead.” Quinn grunted. The bone token. The Veil Market’s entry requirement—proof of a soul, sharpened and buried, to keep the Gorgons at bay. She’d spent three weeks chasing scraps of information about the clique that ran it, the ones preying on the vulnerable, selling secrets like they were bread. Morris would have had a file on them by now. Morris… She shook her head, hard, and refocused. The alley opened into a tunnel, its ceiling sagging,灯泡sputtering overhead. The smell hit her next: mildew and iron, with a undercurrent of something metallic, like burnt metal. O’Connor muttered a quiet “goodnight” and turned away. Quinn stepped into the tunnel, her boots echoing, and the pressure behind her eyes faded. For a moment, normal. Then—*the hum*. It wasn’t sound. It was a vibration, thrumming in her teeth, in the bones of her skull. She paused, closing her eyes. 18 years on the force had taught her to read patterns—footsteps, voices, the way a room settled when someone important entered. This was a pattern she didn’t recognize: a low, steady hum, like a hive of bees in a wall, but smaller, more concentrated. To her right, a grate covered a manhole. The hum grew louder as she approached. “Quinn.” She turned. constable Miller, her face pale in the harsh light. “Found them yet?” Quinn nodded. Miller led her around a pile of discarded bottles, past a leaky pipe that dripped into a rusted bucket, and stopped. “Back there.” Quinn squinted. The tunnel ended at a dark archway, framed by stone that looked newer than the rest—cracks filled with something that glinted, like silver. Beyond it, a faint glow; not electric, but warm, the color of old copper. The pressure returned, sharper now, and she noticed the hair on the back of her neck stood up. “What’s down there?” “Medic’s inside. Waitin’ for you. Says it’s… *odd*.” Miller shifted, uncomfortable. “Coroner’s got a theory, but he’s whisperin’ like it’s a ghost story.” Quinn’s jaw tightened. She stepped past the archway, her boot hitting something soft. A hand, half-buried in the dirt, fingers splayed. The skin was pale, almost translucent, like parchment stretched over bone. Her pulse quickened. She knelt, careful not to smudge the fingers, and brushed back the hair from the scalp. The man’s eyes were closed, but the irises were clouded, a milky blue that didn’t reflect light. No blood. Not at the wound—she saw that now, a fresh gash on the throat, deep enough to see muscle, but no blood. Just a faint, coppery scab. “Jesus,” Miller said behind her. “He doesn’t have a pulse. Doc says the heart stopped two hours ago, but the wound’s… *healing*.” Quinn ignored him. She leaned closer, studying the man’s face. A tattoo on his left wrist: a compass, etched into the skin, the needle pointing north. Familiar. She remembered the image from the files—Clive Voss, 34, a nightcllub manager with a rap sheet for fraud. And disappearances. Five people in the last six months, all linked to him. “Quinn.” She turned. Dr. Patel, the coroner, a tall man with a gray beard, stood at the archway, his white coat rumpled. “Back of the throat. Looks like he was strangled. But the soft tissue… it’s *healing*. Like the body’s rejecting the trauma. No bruising, no sign of suffocation.” He paused, glancing at the glowing light. “There’s something else. Come see.” Quinn followed him to the far end of the tunnel. Here, the stone was cracked, and beyond the crack, a rift. Not a portal, exactly—more like a tear in the fabric of the world. The air rippled, as if viewed through water, and the hum in her skull was deafening. At the edge of the rift, a circle of stones, their surfaces carved with sigils she didn’t recognize. And in the center, a compass. Small brass, verdigris patina, the face etched with swirling lines. The needle spun wildly, pointing first at the rift, then at Voss, then back at the rift. “Veil Compass,” a voice said. Quinn jumped. Eva stood in the archway, her red hair frizzy, glasses askew, a worn leather satchel slung over one shoulder. She was still wearing the coat she’d had on when they’d met for coffee that morning—*charred sockets*, she’d called the café where they’d debated the authenticity of a 17th-century grimoire. “Eva. What the hell are you doing here?” “Same as you, I assume. Chasing Voss.” She stepped closer, her nervous habit kicking in—tucking a strand of hair behind her left ear. “That’s no normal compass. It’s a Veil Compass. Crafted by Shade artisans, 200 years ago. They’re attuned to rifts, right? But they’re *meant* to close them, not open them.” She nodded at the stone circle. “Look at the sigils. They’re reversed. The ones on the compass, too. Someone wanted to *widen* the rift, not seal it. But they didn’t do it right. The sigils cracked the fabric.” Quinn knelt, ignoring the chill seeping through her pants. The compass’s needle was still spinning, faster now. “Why would Voss be here?” Eva’s fingers brushed the satchel. “He was investigating the clique, same as you. He’d been in the restricted archives at the Museum—you remember, I told you about the grimoire with the rift maps? He was warning people, said the clique was going to ‘release the Old Ones.’ Stupid, if you ask me—” “Stupid doesn’t get people killed,” Quinn said, sharp. Eva flinched, but didn’t back down. “No, it doesn’t. But look at the body again. No blood, no bruising. He didn’t die from the rift. The rift *killed* him. The energy from it, right? It burns through matter. The stone circle was supposed to stabilize it, but the sigils were wrong. So the rift ate him alive from the inside.” She glanced at the Veil Compass. “And the compass? It’s a fail-safe. Only it didn’t fail. It… *fought* the rift. See how the needle’s pointing at Voss? It was trying to pull him out. But the rift’s too strong. It just… *unwrote* him. Like he was never here.” Quinn stared at the body. The gash on Voss’s throat was closing, the edges knitting together, the skin pink and new. The milky cloud in his eyes was spreading, swallowing his pupils. “You sure about that?” Eva bit her lip. “Positive. I’ve seen rift residue before. When I was a grad student, my professor did some… *experiments*. The bodies looked like this—faded, like the light’s been burned out of them. But these sigils… they’re different. They’re not just a rift. They’re a *trap*. The clique wanted to collect the Old Ones in the market, use them to blackmail governments, take over the city. But the rift’s too powerful. It didn’t just let them in—it *hungered*. Ate Voss whole.” Quinn stood, her boots crunching on the dirt. She walked back to the archway, Miller still lingering there. “O’Connor said a bloke with a bone token came through here an hour back. Voss didn’t have a bone token.” Miller shrugged. “Could’ve dropped it. Or maybe he didn’t need one. The clique’s got connections. They let people in without tokens if they’re rich enough.” Quinn didn’t answer. She was looking at the rift again, the air rippling like a disturbed pond. Morris had told her, three years ago, about a case in Whitechapel—five young women dead, their throats slit, their bodies found with the skin stripped away. “Like the devil took a bite,” he’d said, his voice tight. “Supernatural, Quinn. I know it. But the brass won’t listen. They think it’s a serial killer.” She’d argued with him for weeks. Said he was letting his grief cloud his judgment. Morris had been her partner since academy, her rock. They’d solved 37 cases together. Then he’d vanished, chasing a lead in Spitalfields. His car was found abandoned in a alley, the doors locked, the engine running. No body. No blood. Just a single sigil, carved into the steering wheel, the same sigil she now saw on the walls of the tunnel. “Quinn?” Eva was in front of her, her satchel open, a notebook in hand. “We need to get out of here. The compass is unstable. The rift’s spreading. If we don’t seal it, it’ll feed. It’ll *grow*. And when it does, it won’t just take cliques and tourists. It’ll take *us*.” She shut the notebook, her voice steady now, no longer nervous. “But we can fix it. The sigils are reversed, but if we alternate them… swap the north and south points, rewrite the incantation—” Quinn held up a hand. “How do you know all this?” Eva blinked. “I… I studied the Shade dialect. The incantations are written in their tongue. It’s like cipher, Quinn. The Museum has a book—” “Why didn’t you tell me?” Eva flinched. “You said it was ‘fairy tales,’ remember? That I should ‘stick to dusty archives’ instead of chasing ghosts. And I did. For two years. But then the first body turned up, the one with the compass tattoo, and I knew. I had to tell you.” Quinn didn’t say anything. She was looking at the compass again, the needle spinning faster, the hum in her skull a roar. Morris had died because he’d refused to ignore the supernatural. Because he’d trusted his gut. And now, here she was, about to make the same mistake—or maybe the *right* one. “Eva,” she said, soft. “What’s the incantation?” Eva’s face lit up. “It’s in the grimoire. The one I mentioned. The restricted section—” “Tell me.” Quinn’s voice was harsh, but not unkind. Eva opened her mouth, then closed it, confused. “What?” “Tell me the incantation.” Eva nodded, her voice trembling. “*’Zephyros, regina tenebrarum, claudere portas inferni. Non ignis, non aqua, sed veritas vincit. Tenere, non tollere. Silentiis custodire.*’” She paused. “It translates to… ‘Zephyros, queen of shadows, close the gates of hell. Not fire, not water, but truth prevails. Hold, do not take. Guard the silence.’” Quinn knelt, picking up the chalk from the stone. The archivists at the Museum used it to mark rifts—*silent, so the Gorgons won’t see*. She began to draw, following the sigils she remembered from Morris’s steering wheel, the same ones etched into the walls of the tunnel. Eva knelt beside her, helping, her fingers brushing Quinn’s as they drew. The chalk glowed, a pale blue light, and the hum in Quinn’s skull faded. “We need to seal the rift,” Eva said, as they finished. “Now.” Quinn stood, gripping the compass. She flipped it over, revealing the etched sigils. The needle had slowed, pointing north, away from the rift. Good. The fail-safe still worked. “You ready?” Eva nodded. “I’m ready.” Quinn stepped to the edge of the rift, the compass in one hand, the chalk in the other. The air rippled, and she felt it—the hunger, the need to *take*. She closed her eyes, repeating the incantation silently. Morris’s face flashed in her mind: his smile, the way he’d teased her about her coffee (“Black as a cop’s heart, Harlow”), the last time she’d seen him, standing in the alleyway, looking at her like he was saying goodbye. “Regina tenebrarum,” she whispered. The rift shuddered. A tendril of darkness reached for her, and she flinched, but didn’t step back. “Close the gates of hell. Not fire, not water, but truth prevails. Hold, do not take. Guard the silence.” The light flared, bright enough to hurt her eyes. The rift shrank, the ripples fading, the air calming. The sigils on the stone walls glowed, then dimmed. The compass’s needle stopped, pointing straight north. Eva exhaled, a shaky breath. “It’s closed.” Quinn nodded, but she was looking at the body of Clive Voss. The gash on his throat was fully healed, his skin pink and warm. His eyes were clear, blue and bright. The milky cloud had vanished. “He’s alive,” Eva said, shock in her voice. Quinn knelt, checking his pulse. It was steady, strong. She felt for a neck wound—gone. “How?” Eva stared at the compass. “The Fail-safe… it not only closes rifts. It heals. The Shade artisans built it that way. If a rift opens accidentally, the compass tries to reverse the damage. But it’s never been tested on a human. Not like this.” She smiled, her eyes shining. “We did it, Quinn. We *did* it.” Quinn didn’t smile. She was looking at the tattoo on Voss’s wrist, at the compass needle pointing north. The compass was still warm, in her hand. She remembered O’Connor’s words: *a bloke came through here an hour back. Bone in his pocket.* The cliques weren’t just selling secrets. They were *opening* doors. And they’d leave a trail of bodies—human and otherwise—until someone stopped them. She stood, brushing dirt from her knees. “Let’s go. We need to find the bone token. And the bloke with it.” Eva picked up her satchel, her nervous habit gone. “You got it.” Quinn walked back to the archway, the compass in her hand. The rain had started again, a fine drizzle, and the streetlamp flickered, casting her shadow long over the alley. For a moment, she swore she saw Morris standing in the dark, his face smiling, his hand raised in a wave. Then he was gone. Quinn squeezed her eyes shut, hard, and exhaled. When she opened them, the shadow was just a shadow—nothing more. “Ready?” she said. Eva nodded. “Ready.” They walked into the rain, their footsteps crunching on glass and dirt, into the world that still didn’t know what was coming.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences61
tagDensity0.328
leniency0.656
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2505
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Patel"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
60.08% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2505
totalAiIsms20
found
0
word"chill"
count2
1
word"flickered"
count2
2
word"flicked"
count1
3
word"echoing"
count1
4
word"footsteps"
count2
5
word"electric"
count1
6
word"pulse"
count3
7
word"quickened"
count1
8
word"etched"
count4
9
word"familiar"
count1
10
word"silence"
count2
highlights
0"chill"
1"flickered"
2"flicked"
3"echoing"
4"footsteps"
5"electric"
6"pulse"
7"quickened"
8"etched"
9"familiar"
10"silence"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences172
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences172
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
96.97% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences213
gibberishSentences2
adjustedGibberishSentences2
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount1
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen80
ratio0.009
matches
0"The alley opened into a tunnel, its ceiling sagging,灯泡sputtering overhead."
1"“*’Zephyros, regina tenebrarum, claudere portas inferni. Non ignis, non aqua, sed veritas vincit. Tenere, non tollere. Silentiis custodire.*’” She paused."
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans27
markdownWords62
totalWords2484
ratio0.025
matches
0"FRAGILE"
1"shifted"
2"there"
3"thickening"
4"usual"
5"the hum"
6"odd"
7"healing"
8"healing"
9"charred sockets"
10"meant"
11"widen"
12"killed"
13"fought"
14"unwrote"
15"experiments"
16"trap"
17"hungered"
18"grow"
19"us"
20"right"
21"’Zephyros, regina tenebrarum, claudere portas inferni. Non ignis, non aqua, sed veritas vincit. Tenere, non tollere. Silentiis custodire."
22"silent, so the Gorgons won’t see"
23"take"
24"did"
25"a bloke came through here an hour back. Bone in his pocket."
26"opening"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions25
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"For a moment, she swore she saw Morris standing in the dark, his face smiling, his hand raised in a wave."
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions79
wordCount1681
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity1.61
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Camden1
Town1
Detective1
Harlow1
Quinn27
Veil2
Market1
Gorgons2
Miller6
Clive2
Voss5
Eva18
Compass1
Whitechapel1
Spitalfields1
Museum1
Morris8
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Market"
3"Gorgons"
4"Miller"
5"Clive"
6"Voss"
7"Eva"
8"Compass"
9"Morris"
places
0"Camden"
1"Town"
2"Veil"
3"Whitechapel"
4"Spitalfields"
globalScore0.697
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences110
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches5
per1kWords2.013
wordCount2484
matches
0"not electric, but warm, the color of old copper"
1"Not fire, not water, but truth prevails"
2"not water, but truth prevails"
3"Not fire, not water, but truth prevails"
4"not water, but truth prevails"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences213
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs67
mean37.07
std29.88
cv0.806
sampleLengths
098
198
240
359
463
581
61
714
825
960
1023
1196
1222
1358
141
1560
1674
1727
185
1959
2090
2122
2252
238
24108
2536
2682
2738
2825
2970
3076
311
3284
3311
3424
355
3647
3752
387
3915
402
4116
424
4351
4473
4512
4630
474
4878
494
99.14% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences172
matches
0"were clouded"
1"was found"
2"was gone"
0.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount12
totalVerbs309
matches
0"was *thickening"
1"was deafening"
2"was closing"
3"was spreading"
4"was looking"
5"was letting"
6"was looking"
7"was saying"
8"was looking"
9"was looking"
10"were *opening"
11"was coming"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount19
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences19
totalSentences213
ratio0.089
matches
0"The streetlamp flickered, casting her shadow long over a stack of crates marked *FRAGILE*—the kind of warning that meant nothing here, in the alley behind the pub."
1"Then—*there*."
2"The Veil Market’s entry requirement—proof of a soul, sharpened and buried, to keep the Gorgons at bay."
3"Then—*the hum*."
4"18 years on the force had taught her to read patterns—footsteps, voices, the way a room settled when someone important entered."
5"The tunnel ended at a dark archway, framed by stone that looked newer than the rest—cracks filled with something that glinted, like silver."
6"Beyond it, a faint glow; not electric, but warm, the color of old copper."
7"Not at the wound—she saw that now, a fresh gash on the throat, deep enough to see muscle, but no blood."
8"She remembered the image from the files—Clive Voss, 34, a nightcllub manager with a rap sheet for fraud."
9"Not a portal, exactly—more like a tear in the fabric of the world."
10"She was still wearing the coat she’d had on when they’d met for coffee that morning—*charred sockets*, she’d called the café where they’d debated the authenticity of a 17th-century grimoire."
11"“Same as you, I assume. Chasing Voss.” She stepped closer, her nervous habit kicking in—tucking a strand of hair behind her left ear."
12"Morris had told her, three years ago, about a case in Whitechapel—five young women dead, their throats slit, their bodies found with the skin stripped away."
13"And now, here she was, about to make the same mistake—or maybe the *right* one."
14"The archivists at the Museum used it to mark rifts—*silent, so the Gorgons won’t see*."
15"The air rippled, and she felt it—the hunger, the need to *take*."
16"She felt for a neck wound—gone."
17"And they’d leave a trail of bodies—human and otherwise—until someone stopped them."
18"When she opened them, the shadow was just a shadow—nothing more."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1697
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount50
adverbRatio0.02946375957572186
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.002357100766057749
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences213
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences213
mean11.66
std11.11
cv0.953
sampleLengths
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319
47
514
61
722
830
921
103
116
1234
132
143
1517
1626
1710
181
197
2010
2117
228
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2921
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47.73% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.3145539906103286
totalSentences213
uniqueOpeners67
90.09% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences148
matches
0"Just a faint, coppery scab."
1"Then he’d vanished, chasing a"
2"Just a single sigil, carved"
3"Then he was gone."
ratio0.027
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount40
totalSentences148
matches
0"She took the first step"
1"She reached under her jacket,"
2"He exhaled a cloud of"
3"he flicked ash into a"
4"She’d spent three weeks chasing"
5"She shook her head, hard,"
6"It wasn’t sound."
7"It was a vibration, thrumming"
8"She paused, closing her eyes."
9"She stepped past the archway,"
10"Her pulse quickened."
11"She knelt, careful not to"
12"She leaned closer, studying the"
13"She remembered the image from"
14"He paused, glancing at the"
15"She was still wearing the"
16"She stepped closer, her nervous"
17"She nodded at the stone"
18"She glanced at the Veil"
19"She walked back to the"
ratio0.27
37.70% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount125
totalSentences148
matches
0"The first breath of rain"
1"The streetlamp flickered, casting her"
2"She took the first step"
3"The hum of traffic faded,"
4"A pressure behind her eyes,"
5"The alley narrowed, the walls"
6"She reached under her jacket,"
7"He exhaled a cloud of"
8"he flicked ash into a"
9"The bone token."
10"The Veil Market’s entry requirement—proof"
11"She’d spent three weeks chasing"
12"Morris would have had a"
13"She shook her head, hard,"
14"The alley opened into a"
15"The smell hit her next:"
16"O’Connor muttered a quiet and"
17"Quinn stepped into the tunnel,"
18"It wasn’t sound."
19"It was a vibration, thrumming"
ratio0.845
67.57% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences148
matches
0"To her right, a grate"
1"Because he’d trusted his gut."
ratio0.014
90.34% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences68
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"A pressure behind her eyes, like the first hint of a sinus headache, but sharper, as if the air itself was *thickening*."
1"She’d spent three weeks chasing scraps of information about the clique that ran it, the ones preying on the vulnerable, selling secrets like they were bread."
2"She was still wearing the coat she’d had on when they’d met for coffee that morning—*charred sockets*, she’d called the café where they’d debated the authentici…"
3"Eva knelt beside her, helping, her fingers brushing Quinn’s as they drew."
4"They walked into the rain, their footsteps crunching on glass and dirt, into the world that still didn’t know what was coming."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags20
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"Miller shifted, uncomfortable"
1"Quinn said, sharp"
2"he’d, his voice tight"
3"She shut, her voice steady now, no longer nervous"
4"she said, soft"
5"She smiled, her eyes shining"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"O’Connor muttered (mutter)"
1"he’d (would)"
2"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences61
tagDensity0.164
leniency0.328
rawRatio0.3
effectiveRatio0.098
76.7652%