Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYB361JGB1DFMQ6YDMR8728

Run Details

Model:
Grok 4
Duration:
2m 8s
Cost:
$0.053393
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora pushed through the overgrown brambles at the edge of Richmond Park, her breath clouding in the chill night air. Moonlight filtered through the canopy, casting jagged shadows across the path she followed—an old trail she'd pieced together from half-remembered whispers and the pendant's insistent pull. The Heartstone hung heavy against her chest, its deep crimson gem pulsing with a warmth that bordered on feverish, drawing her here like a compass needle to true north. She needed answers. The pendant had arrived in a plain envelope weeks ago, no note, no sender, but it thrummed in her palm whenever she thought of Evan, of escape, of the life she'd fled in Cardiff. Tonight, under the full moon, the grove called loudest. Isolde's grove, some old texts named it, a pocket of forgotten magic tucked between worlds. She adjusted her backpack, stuffed with a flashlight, a notebook, and a thermos of tea gone cold, and stepped forward. The air shifted as she crossed the boundary marked by those ancient oak standing stones, weathered sentinels that loomed like forgotten giants. Wildflowers brushed her ankles, their petals unfurling in impossible blooms despite the autumn frost—violets and daisies that should have withered months ago. Time bent here, or so the stories went. An hour inside could stretch to days outside, or shrink to minutes. She checked her watch: 11:47 PM. Fine. She had time. But the silence pressed in wrong. No distant hum of London traffic, no rustle of nocturnal creatures foraging in the underbrush. Just her footsteps crunching on fallen leaves that sounded too loud, like bones snapping underfoot. She paused at the clearing's heart, where the grass formed a perfect circle, ringed by those stones. Moonlight pooled in the center, turning the ground silver. The pendant warmed against her skin, its faint inner glow seeping through her shirt. She slipped it out, holding it up to the light. The thumbnail-sized gem caught the moonbeams, refracting them into crimson sparks that danced across her fingers. "This better be worth it," she muttered, her voice swallowed by the stillness. "Whatever you are, show yourself." Nothing answered. She lowered the pendant and scanned the perimeter. The oaks stood silent, their branches interlocking overhead like a woven cage. She set her backpack down and knelt, pulling out the notebook. Sketches filled the pages—symbols she'd copied from library books on Fae lore, patterns that matched the pendant's etchings. If this place bridged realms, maybe it could explain the dreams, the visions of shadowed figures calling her Malphora, a name that echoed in her blood like a half-forgotten song. A twig snapped somewhere beyond the stones. She froze, ears straining. Wind? No, the air hung dead still. Animals avoided this grove, or so the codex fragments she'd found suggested. She waited, breath held, but only silence followed. She shook her head. Imagination. Nerves from the long walk through the dark park. She flipped a page in the notebook, her pen scratching notes on the pendant's behavior. Warms near portals, pulses with... something. Like a heartbeat. Another sound—a soft rustle, like fabric dragging over grass. It came from the left, just at the edge of the stones. She whipped her head around, but shadows clung thick there, unmoving. Her pulse quickened, matching the pendant's throb. "Hello?" Her voice cracked the quiet, sharper than intended. "If someone's out there, this isn't funny." The rustle faded. She stood, flashlight in hand, beam slicing through the dark. It caught a cluster of wildflowers, their heads bobbing as if in a breeze she couldn't feel. She swept the light further, illuminating bark etched with spirals that seemed to twist under the glare. Nothing else. No eyes reflecting back, no shapes lurking. She clicked off the light to save battery, plunging the grove back into moonlight. Better to let her eyes adjust. She paced the clearing's edge, fingers tracing the small crescent scar on her left wrist—a habit from childhood, a reminder of falls and recoveries. The pendant grew hotter, almost uncomfortable against her skin. She tugged at her collar, the black strands of her hair sticking to her neck with sudden sweat despite the cold. Footsteps. Faint, deliberate, circling the stones from outside. She spun, heart slamming. "Who's there? I heard you." No response. The steps halted, then resumed, slower, as if whatever made them savored the pause. She backed toward the center, eyes darting. A shape flickered at the corner of her vision—low to the ground, hunched, gone when she turned. Not a deer. Too deliberate, too elusive. She gripped the pendant, its warmth spreading up her arm like liquid fire. "This is your fault," she whispered to it, voice low. "You brought me here. Now what?" The rustling returned, closer now, weaving through the wildflowers inside the circle. Petals crumpled under invisible weight, stems bending one by one in a path that curved toward her. She retreated a step, boots sinking into soft earth. The air thickened, carrying a scent like damp soil and decaying leaves, though no rot marred the blooms. Something brushed her ankle—a fleeting touch, cold and insubstantial, like fingers made of mist. She yelped, kicking out, but her foot met empty air. The wildflowers around her swayed violently, as if a windstorm raged only in that spot. "Stop it!" she shouted, voice echoing back distorted, like multiple throats mocking her. The pendant flared, its glow bright enough to cast red hues across the grass. Shadows lengthened unnaturally, stretching from the oaks toward the center, fingers of darkness that clawed at the moonlight. One shadow detached, slinking along the ground like spilled ink, pooling near her backpack. She lunged for it, snatching the strap just as the shadow recoiled. Her watch beeped midnight, but when she glanced down, the hands spun wildly—forward, backward, settling on 11:47 again. Time looped, or broke. She didn't know which terrified her more. Whispers started then, faint at first, like wind through leaves, but resolving into words. Not English. Something older, guttural, repeating "Malphora" like a chant. They came from everywhere—the stones, the flowers, the air itself. "Malphora," they hissed, the sound slithering into her ears. "Come home." She clapped hands over her ears, but the voices burrowed deeper, vibrating in her skull. "I'm not her! I'm Aurora. Rory. Leave me alone!" The whispers laughed, a chorus of dry leaves scraping stone. Movement flashed again—tall figures now, silhouettes darting between the oaks, never fully in view. One paused just long enough for her to catch a glimpse: elongated limbs, eyes like glowing embers, vanishing as she blinked. She ran to the boundary, but the stones seemed farther apart, the clearing expanding. Her foot caught on a root that hadn't been there moments ago, sending her sprawling. Dirt filled her mouth, gritty and alive, wriggling like tiny worms. She spat it out, scrambling up. The pendant burned now, searing her skin. She yanked it off, chain dangling from her fist. "Take it back! I don't want this!" As if in answer, the ground trembled. Cracks spiderwebbed through the grass, faint light seeping from below—crimson, matching the gem. Something pushed up from beneath, not breaking the surface, but pressing against it like a hand under fabric. She staggered back, breath ragged. The whispers grew louder, overlapping, demanding. "Malphora. Join us." A hand—pale, claw-tipped—emerged from the shadow of a stone, grasping at the air inches from her boot. It retracted when she screamed, but not before she saw the skin shimmer, iridescent like oil on water. She whirled, searching for the path out. The brambles had thickened, thorns glinting like teeth. Footsteps multiplied, closing in from all sides, no longer hiding. Eyes watched her now, dozens of pairs glowing faintly in the dark beyond the stones—watching, waiting. "Get away!" she yelled, swinging the flashlight like a club. The beam caught one pair of eyes, illuminating a face twisted in a grin too wide, teeth sharp as needles. It melted back into shadow. The air grew heavier, pressing down on her chest, making each breath a struggle. The wildflowers wilted suddenly, petals curling black, releasing a sickly sweet rot that cloyed in her throat. The pendant in her hand pulsed in rhythm with her heart, syncing them, pulling her toward the cracks in the earth. She dropped it, but it clung to her palm, chain wrapping around her fingers like living vines. "No," she gasped, prying at it. "Let go." Whispers turned to laughter, echoing louder, the grove alive with unseen presences. Shapes crowded the edges, pressing closer, their forms shifting—now humanoid, now beast-like, always evading direct sight. Something cold grazed her shoulder, a breath on her neck that carried the chill of graves. She spun, but nothing stood there. Only the sense of it lingered, intimate, invasive. Her scar itched fiercely, as if the old wound remembered this place, this wrongness. Time on her watch blurred, hands a whirlwind. The moon above dimmed, stars winking out one by one. "Help," she whispered, though no one could hear. "Someone..." The footsteps halted, silence crashing back heavier than before. But the eyes remained, burning brighter, drawing nearer. The ground beneath her feet softened, sucking at her boots like mud after rain. She pulled free with effort, inching toward the stones. A low growl rumbled from the dark, vibrating through her bones. Not animal. Something hungrier. The pendant cooled abruptly, its glow fading. Relief? No—warning. The whispers resumed, closer, breaths stirring her hair. "Malphora," they cooed. "Stay." She bolted for the boundary, branches whipping her face, drawing blood. The stones loomed, but as she neared, they shifted, rearranging like pieces on a board. The path twisted, leading her in circles. Exhaustion burned in her legs, but she pushed on. A shape lunged from the side, brushing her arm—claws raking fabric, not skin. She dodged, heart thundering. Another touch, this time on her back, pushing her forward. Toward what? The center again, where the cracks widened, light pulsing stronger. She resisted, digging heels in. "Fight me, then! Show yourselves!" Laughter bubbled up from the earth, mocking. The air hummed with energy, static raising hairs on her arms. Shadows coalesced, forming barriers that herded her like prey. Her backpack lay forgotten in the chaos, contents spilled—notebook pages fluttering like trapped birds. Symbols on them glowed faintly, mirroring the pendant's etchings. She grabbed a page, crumpling it in her fist. "This is a dream. Wake up." But the cold seeped deeper, numbing her fingers. The whispers fragmented into pleas, threats, invitations—all in that ancient tongue, weaving through her thoughts. A figure stepped into the moonlight at last—tall, ethereal, features blurring like smoke. It extended a hand, palm up, waiting. "Join," it murmured, voice like silk over blades. She backed away, pendant swinging from her entangled fingers. The grove constricted, oaks creaking as branches lowered, caging her further. More figures emerged, circling, their eyes locking on her scar, on the pendant, on her face. They chanted in unison, the sound building to a crescendo that drowned her screams. Time stretched, each second an eternity of pursuit and evasion. Her breaths came in gasps, vision blurring from tears or fatigue. One figure drew closer than the rest, its breath frosting the air between them. Fingers—long, bony—reached for her wrist, tracing the scar with deliberate slowness. Pain flared, old memories surging: the childhood fall, the blood, the fear. But this touch dug deeper, unearthing something buried. "Remember," it whispered. She jerked free, stumbling into the wildflowers. They wrapped around her ankles now, vines tightening like ropes. The pendant flared once more, hot enough to blister. She hurled it toward the figure, chain snapping taut mid-air, yanking her forward instead. Pulled into the circle's heart, she fell to her knees. The cracks yawned wider, warmth rising from below—inviting, insidious. Hands emerged from the earth, grasping at her clothes, her hair. Not pulling down, but holding, caressing. "Home," the voices sighed, a symphony of longing. She fought, nails scraping dirt, but the grip strengthened. Eyes everywhere watched, unblinking. A final whisper brushed her ear: "Aurora no more." Darkness encroached, not from above, but from within—the grove's influence seeping into her veins, syncing with her pulse. She clawed at the ground, fingers finding the pendant's chain. With a wrench, she snapped it free, gem skittering across the grass. The figures recoiled, hissing. The hands released her, retreating into the cracks. She scrambled up, lungs burning, and ran for the stones again. This time, the path held straight. Branches parted reluctantly, thorns nicking her skin. She burst through, collapsing onto the park's familiar path. Behind her, the grove's boundary sealed, but the whispers lingered in her mind, faint echoes promising return. Her watch ticked normally now: 11:48 PM. Only a minute gone. But the pendant—lost? No, it hung around her neck again, cool and innocent. She touched it, scar throbbing. The night stretched on, London humming distant and unaware.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences27
tagDensity0.481
leniency0.963
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.41% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2181
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"reluctantly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"reluctantly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
1.42% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2181
totalAiIsms43
found
0
word"chill"
count2
1
word"warmth"
count3
2
word"sentinels"
count1
3
word"loomed"
count2
4
word"silence"
count3
5
word"footsteps"
count4
6
word"perfect"
count1
7
word"scanned"
count1
8
word"echoed"
count1
9
word"pulse"
count2
10
word"quickened"
count1
11
word"throb"
count1
12
word"etched"
count1
13
word"tracing"
count2
14
word"reminder"
count1
15
word"flickered"
count1
16
word"weight"
count1
17
word"fleeting"
count1
18
word"echoing"
count2
19
word"resolving"
count1
20
word"searing"
count1
21
word"trembled"
count1
22
word"glinting"
count1
23
word"pulsed"
count1
24
word"sense of"
count1
25
word"fragmented"
count1
26
word"silk"
count1
27
word"symphony"
count1
28
word"whisper"
count1
29
word"familiar"
count1
30
word"echoes"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"warmth"
2"sentinels"
3"loomed"
4"silence"
5"footsteps"
6"perfect"
7"scanned"
8"echoed"
9"pulse"
10"quickened"
11"throb"
12"etched"
13"tracing"
14"reminder"
15"flickered"
16"weight"
17"fleeting"
18"echoing"
19"resolving"
20"searing"
21"trembled"
22"glinting"
23"pulsed"
24"sense of"
25"fragmented"
26"silk"
27"symphony"
28"whisper"
29"familiar"
30"echoes"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences200
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences200
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences213
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2150
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"With a wrench, she snapped it free, gem skittering across the grass."
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions20
wordCount2066
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity0.19
worstName"Time"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"One"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Heartstone1
Evan1
Cardiff1
London2
Fae1
Malphora1
English1
Whispers2
Darkness1
Time4
One3
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Evan"
2"Whispers"
3"Darkness"
4"Time"
5"One"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Cardiff"
3"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences163
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"spirals that seemed to twist under the glare"
1"seemed farther apart, the clearing expanding"
60.47% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.395
wordCount2150
matches
0"not breaking the surface, but pressing against it like a hand under fabric"
1"Not pulling down, but holding, caressing"
2"not from above, but from within"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences213
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs73
mean29.45
std22.12
cv0.751
sampleLengths
0156
174
236
366
418
581
638
738
839
916
1056
1174
1217
1347
1429
1556
1639
1727
1844
1929
2034
2111
2224
2345
2446
2523
2638
2714
2835
2941
3035
3152
3225
3328
3430
3532
369
3731
3824
3917
404
4133
4226
4322
4410
4527
4623
4715
4823
4920
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences200
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs423
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount24
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences23
totalSentences213
ratio0.108
matches
0"Moonlight filtered through the canopy, casting jagged shadows across the path she followed—an old trail she'd pieced together from half-remembered whispers and the pendant's insistent pull."
1"Wildflowers brushed her ankles, their petals unfurling in impossible blooms despite the autumn frost—violets and daisies that should have withered months ago."
2"Sketches filled the pages—symbols she'd copied from library books on Fae lore, patterns that matched the pendant's etchings."
3"Another sound—a soft rustle, like fabric dragging over grass."
4"She paced the clearing's edge, fingers tracing the small crescent scar on her left wrist—a habit from childhood, a reminder of falls and recoveries."
5"A shape flickered at the corner of her vision—low to the ground, hunched, gone when she turned."
6"Something brushed her ankle—a fleeting touch, cold and insubstantial, like fingers made of mist."
7"Her watch beeped midnight, but when she glanced down, the hands spun wildly—forward, backward, settling on 11:47 again."
8"They came from everywhere—the stones, the flowers, the air itself."
9"Movement flashed again—tall figures now, silhouettes darting between the oaks, never fully in view."
10"Cracks spiderwebbed through the grass, faint light seeping from below—crimson, matching the gem."
11"A hand—pale, claw-tipped—emerged from the shadow of a stone, grasping at the air inches from her boot."
12"Eyes watched her now, dozens of pairs glowing faintly in the dark beyond the stones—watching, waiting."
13"Shapes crowded the edges, pressing closer, their forms shifting—now humanoid, now beast-like, always evading direct sight."
14"No—warning."
15"A shape lunged from the side, brushing her arm—claws raking fabric, not skin."
16"Her backpack lay forgotten in the chaos, contents spilled—notebook pages fluttering like trapped birds."
17"The whispers fragmented into pleas, threats, invitations—all in that ancient tongue, weaving through her thoughts."
18"A figure stepped into the moonlight at last—tall, ethereal, features blurring like smoke."
19"Fingers—long, bony—reached for her wrist, tracing the scar with deliberate slowness."
20"The cracks yawned wider, warmth rising from below—inviting, insidious."
21"Darkness encroached, not from above, but from within—the grove's influence seeping into her veins, syncing with her pulse."
22"But the pendant—lost?"
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2097
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"last—tall, ethereal, features"
adverbCount73
adverbRatio0.03481163567000477
lyAdverbCount16
lyAdverbRatio0.007629947544110634
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences213
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences213
mean10.09
std5.77
cv0.572
sampleLengths
020
126
229
33
434
59
615
720
822
922
108
1112
126
131
143
156
1615
1715
1817
199
2014
2110
2216
2313
245
252
268
2712
2811
2918
3030
317
324
331
346
3512
368
374
381
399
4015
415
421
433
449
4512
4611
477
489
497
57.90% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.3615023474178404
totalSentences213
uniqueOpeners77
72.46% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences184
matches
0"Just her footsteps crunching on"
1"Too deliberate, too elusive."
2"Only the sense of it"
3"Only a minute gone."
ratio0.022
67.83% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount70
totalSentences184
matches
0"She needed answers."
1"She adjusted her backpack, stuffed"
2"She checked her watch: 11:47"
3"She had time."
4"She paused at the clearing's"
5"She slipped it out, holding"
6"she muttered, her voice swallowed"
7"She lowered the pendant and"
8"She set her backpack down"
9"She froze, ears straining."
10"She waited, breath held, but"
11"She shook her head."
12"She flipped a page in"
13"It came from the left,"
14"She whipped her head around,"
15"Her pulse quickened, matching the"
16"Her voice cracked the quiet,"
17"She stood, flashlight in hand,"
18"It caught a cluster of"
19"She swept the light further,"
ratio0.38
44.24% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount153
totalSentences184
matches
0"Aurora pushed through the overgrown"
1"Moonlight filtered through the canopy,"
2"The Heartstone hung heavy against"
3"She needed answers."
4"The pendant had arrived in"
5"Tonight, under the full moon,"
6"Isolde's grove, some old texts"
7"She adjusted her backpack, stuffed"
8"The air shifted as she"
9"Wildflowers brushed her ankles, their"
10"An hour inside could stretch"
11"She checked her watch: 11:47"
12"She had time."
13"She paused at the clearing's"
14"Moonlight pooled in the center,"
15"The pendant warmed against her"
16"She slipped it out, holding"
17"The thumbnail-sized gem caught the"
18"she muttered, her voice swallowed"
19"She lowered the pendant and"
ratio0.832
54.35% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences184
matches
0"If this place bridged realms,"
1"As if in answer, the"
ratio0.011
27.42% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences99
technicalSentenceCount16
matches
0"The Heartstone hung heavy against her chest, its deep crimson gem pulsing with a warmth that bordered on feverish, drawing her here like a compass needle to tru…"
1"The air shifted as she crossed the boundary marked by those ancient oak standing stones, weathered sentinels that loomed like forgotten giants."
2"Wildflowers brushed her ankles, their petals unfurling in impossible blooms despite the autumn frost—violets and daisies that should have withered months ago."
3"Just her footsteps crunching on fallen leaves that sounded too loud, like bones snapping underfoot."
4"Sketches filled the pages—symbols she'd copied from library books on Fae lore, patterns that matched the pendant's etchings."
5"If this place bridged realms, maybe it could explain the dreams, the visions of shadowed figures calling her Malphora, a name that echoed in her blood like a ha…"
6"Petals crumpled under invisible weight, stems bending one by one in a path that curved toward her."
7"Shadows lengthened unnaturally, stretching from the oaks toward the center, fingers of darkness that clawed at the moonlight."
8"The wildflowers wilted suddenly, petals curling black, releasing a sickly sweet rot that cloyed in her throat."
9"The pendant in her hand pulsed in rhythm with her heart, syncing them, pulling her toward the cracks in the earth."
10"Shapes crowded the edges, pressing closer, their forms shifting—now humanoid, now beast-like, always evading direct sight."
11"Something cold grazed her shoulder, a breath on her neck that carried the chill of graves."
12"She bolted for the boundary, branches whipping her face, drawing blood."
13"More figures emerged, circling, their eyes locking on her scar, on the pendant, on her face."
14"They chanted in unison, the sound building to a crescendo that drowned her screams."
15"Darkness encroached, not from above, but from within—the grove's influence seeping into her veins, syncing with her pulse."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"she whispered, voice low"
1"she shouted, voice echoing back distorted, like multiple throats mocking her"
2"they hissed, the sound slithering into her ears"
3"the voices sighed, a symphony of longing"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount11
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"she whispered (whisper)"
2"she shouted (shout)"
3"they hissed (hiss)"
4"she yelled (yell)"
5"she gasped (gasp)"
6"she whispered (whisper)"
7"they cooed (coo)"
8"it murmured (murmur)"
9"it whispered (whisper)"
10"the voices sighed (sigh)"
dialogueSentences27
tagDensity0.407
leniency0.815
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.815
75.8499%