Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYB3DWK3QFN186W5ZBT9FVN

Run Details

Duration:
25.9s
Cost:
$0.001305
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rain slashes the streets of Soho, a silver veil that blurs the neon and turns the pavement to a mirror. Detective Harlow Quinn’s boots pound through puddles, her coat clinging to her shoulders, the salt-and-pepper stubble on her jaw damp. She checks her watch—11:17 PM—fingers brushing the worn leather band, the same one Morris used to wear, the one he’d never taken off. The case had started as a routine smuggling ring: boxes of rare minerals seized at the docks, labels in a script no linguist recognized. Then the first body—found in a warehouse, throat slit, eyes replaced by black glass. Then Morris, sent to follow a lead, and he vanished. No blood, no tracks, just a single black feather left in his empty cruiser. Three years. Three years of digging, of collecting half-truths, of the Clique—so named because they moved in a tight, secret circle—eluding her like smoke. They didn’t just deal in contraband. They dealt in *something else*. The suspect materializes out of the gloom: a man in a black duster, hat pulled low, strides toward the alley where Quinn had last spotted him. She flicks on her flashlight, cutting through the rain, and the beam catches his profile—sharp cheekbones, a jagged scar above his left eyebrow. *Jax*. They’d picked up his trail two weeks ago, after a senior member of the Clique was found dead in his apartment, his heart extracted and replaced with a glowing orb. Jax had been the go-between, the *keeper* of secrets. She chases. Jax moves like water—smooth, unpredictable—darting left, then right, as if the rain itself is guiding him. Quinn’s boots slip on a patch of oil; by the time she catches her balance, he’s gone. But she hears him: a breath, shallow, then a *thud* as he drops something. She skids to a halt, beam focused on the cobblestones. A bone token, carved from what looks like deer antler, etched with runes that glow faintly under her light. *Veil Market*, she thinks. The rumors had always been there—about an underground market beneath Camden, a place for those who traded in what the law deemed *unholy*. But she’d never believed them. Not until Morris— She shakes her head, casting aside the memory. The token is warm, almost pulsing, as if it’s alive. She tucks it into her coat pocket, then presses her ear to the wet brick wall. Footsteps, receding—*but not down the alley*. He’s heading *underground*. Quinn follows, her pulse a drumbeat in her ears. Soho’s backstreets curve downward, leading to a warren of cellars and service doors. She reaches a metal grate, its lock bent—Jax had pried it open. She heaves it aside, rain pouring into the darkness below. The air smells of damp concrete and something sharper, metallic, like ozone. She lowers herself into the space, flashlight trembling, and lands with a thud. The sewer tunnel is a straight line, but it splits after 50 feet. Jax’s tracks lead left—she can see the indentation of his boots in the mud. She crawls, elbows scraped, until she reaches a set of stone steps leading upward. The walls are slick with moss; above, a faint glow filters through a cracked manhole cover. *Street level*, she realizes. But not Soho. *Camden*. She climbs, pulling herself up by a rusted pipe, and bursts into the open. The steps lead to a derelict Tube station—signs for “Camden Town” hang crookedly, their paint peeling. The platform is empty, but the ceiling is pockmarked with holes, letting in the rain. And there, across the tracks, is Jax. He’s fumbling with his duster, revealing a leather satchel, and—*a bone token in his hand*. He presses it to a brick wall, which slides open with a hiss, revealing a narrow staircase. Quinn draws her service pistol. The gun is hot in her hand, its weight a familiar comfort. “Halt!” she yells. Her voice cracks, drowned out by the rain. Jax doesn’t stop. He descends the stairs, the wall sliding shut behind him. Quinn runs to the brick wall, pressing her palm to the cool stone—no token in her coat pocket, she realizes. *Of course*, she thinks. She should have known. The Clique didn’t leave trails for amateurs. But she’s not an amateur. She fumbles with her keys, yanking a small, rusted lockpick from her pocket—Morris had taught her, way back when. She jams it into the crack, twists. The wall creaks, then slides open. The staircase is steep, the air thick with the smell of sage and something sweet, cloying—like burning honey. She follows, her breath ragged, the pistol raised. The staircase ends in a vast chamber. The tube station has been transformed: stalls line the walls, their vendors hidden behind tattered curtains, their wares glowing with strange light—vials of liquid that pulse like hearts, swords with blades that shimmer like smoke, cages holding tiny, winged creatures that chirp softly. The ceiling is low, but the air is warm, the rain long since forgotten. This is the Veil Market. Jax is ahead, heading for a booth draped in black velvet. A woman sits inside, her face hidden by a hood, her hands busy with a vial of glowing green liquid. “Herrera’s medallion,” Jax says, his voice tight. “I need it. The orb—” “—needs a consecrated vessel,” the woman says, her voice a purr. “Saint Christopher, huh? Cute. But you think *he’ll* let you touch it? Not after what you did to Maria.” Maria—Jax had killed her, two months ago. She’d been a healer, one of Tomás’ patients. Quinn had tracked Jax to this market three times before—each time, he’d vanished into the crowd, his token leading her here, only to disappear into the stalls. But this time, she’s ready. She steps forward, pistol steady. “Clique business is over, Jax. You’re coming with me.” The woman behind the velvet booth looks up. Her hood falls, revealing a face like cracked porcelain, her eyes milky white. “You shouldn’t be here, Detective. The rules—” “—are for those who follow them,” Quinn finishes. She doesn’t take her eyes off Jax, who’s now reaching into his satchel. Inside, a glint of metal—*a knife*, its blade etched with the same runes as the bone token. Jax turns, knife in hand. “You think you can stop me? The market protects us. It sees what you *don’t*.” “Then let it see,” Quinn says. “I’ve got warrants. Murder. Conspiracy. The eye glass at the warehouse—*they’re* supernatural. Morris would’ve seen that. He—” She stops. The woman behind the booth has stood, her hood gone, her porcelain face now *flickering*, like a candle in a wind. “Morris,” the woman says, and her voice is Morris’—warm, with a hint of a Spanish accent. “He meant well. But he *snooped*.” Quinn’s stomach drops. “What… what are you?” “*I* am what the market is,” the woman says. “A keeper. A guardian. We watch. We wait. And when fools like you get too close—” Jax lunges. Quinn dives, rolling across the stone floor. The knife whizzes past her ear, embedding itself in a stall. She comes up firing, the bullet grazing Jax’s shoulder. He screams, blood blooming dark on his duster, and staggers back. The woman—*the keeper*—reaches into her pocket, pulling out a vial of the green liquid. She hurls it at Quinn, who ducks. The vial shatters, and a cloud of smoke erupts, filling the chamber. “Run!” the keeper yells. “Before it—” Her words are cut off by a roar. Quinn squints through the smoke, heart pounding. Jax is gone. In his place, a shadow—tall, thin, with eyes like black pits—looms over the keeper. Its mouth opens, a scream that splits the air, and the woman dissolves, her porcelain face crumbling to dust. The smoke clears. The shadow is gone. Quinn stands, pistol shaking. The stalls are empty now, the vendors vanished. But on the floor, where the keeper had stood, is a single Saint Christopher medallion. She picks it up, its metal warm against her palm. The ribbon is frayed, the saint’s face worn smooth by time. A voice behind her. “You shouldn’t have come here.” Quinn spins, pistol trained. Tomás Herrera stands in the shadows, his left forearm bare, the scar running from his wrist to his elbow taut. His eyes are wide, his jaw set. “That’s mine,” he says, nodding at the medallion. “My father gave it to me before he died. You tracked it here.” Quinn glances at the medallion, then back at Tomás. “You’re part of the clique, aren’t you? The market… the supernatural stuff. Morris would’ve—” “—would’ve died,” Tomás finishes. His voice is quiet, but his hands are clenched, the knuckles white. “He *did* die. In that warehouse. I saw it. The shadow. It took him.” Quinn’s breath catches. “You saw it? How?” Tomás steps into the light, his olive skin pale. “I was there. I was treating a patient, and I heard him screaming. I ran into the warehouse, and… and it was gone. Just the feather. The black feather.” Quinn’s hand goes to her pocket, pulling out a crumpled photograph: Morris, grinning, holding a feather. She’d kept it, hidden in her wallet. “You never told me.” Tomás looks away. “I didn’t want to believe it. The Clique… they’re broken people. Maria, the healer. She was dying, Tomás. Brain cancer. The doctors said she had months. The Clique… they offered me a way to help her. To make her better. I couldn’t say no.” “You administered unauthorized treatments,” Quinn says, recalling the codex. “To supernatural patients.” He nods. “I know it’s illegal. But she was *my* friend. And then… and then Jax came. He said the orb could fix anything. But it didn’t. It took her. And then it took Morris.” Quinn studies him, the medallion in her hand. His eyes are red, his voice thick with pain. “Why didn’t you tell me?” “Because I was scared,” he says. “Scared of what you’d do. Scared of what *they’d* do. But Jax… he’s planning something. He wants to use the orb to break the veil, to let… to let *them* in. And when he does, no one will be safe. Not even you.” Quinn looks up, toward the stairs. The air still hums with the residual magic of the market, the weight of secrets hidden in the stalls. Jax is out there, somewhere, but so is the truth—about Morris, about the Clique, about the supernatural that haunts London. She tucks the medallion into her coat, next to the bone token. “I need to find Jax,” she says. Tomás reaches into his pocket, pulling out a small vial. “Take this. It’ll help you see. The magic… it clings to things. To people. And Jax… he’s been using it. There’s a trace of it on him. It’ll guide you.” Quinn takes the vial, its contents a glowing blue liquid. “Thank you,” she says. He shakes his head. “Be careful, Harlow. The market doesn’t forget. And it doesn’t forgive.” She turns, heading for the stairs. The rain is falling again, soft now, as if the sky is crying. Behind her, the medallion pulses, warm against her chest. Somewhere, a clock ticks. Somewhere, a shadow waits. Quinn grips her pistol, the vial in her other hand. She takes a step forward, into the darkness. And into the unknown.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences39
tagDensity0.41
leniency0.821
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
97.37% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1902
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
50.05% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1902
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"gloom"
count1
1
word"eyebrow"
count1
2
word"etched"
count2
3
word"footsteps"
count1
4
word"pulse"
count2
5
word"weight"
count2
6
word"familiar"
count1
7
word"velvet"
count2
8
word"porcelain"
count3
9
word"glint"
count1
10
word"stomach"
count1
11
word"pounding"
count1
12
word"looms"
count1
highlights
0"gloom"
1"eyebrow"
2"etched"
3"footsteps"
4"pulse"
5"weight"
6"familiar"
7"velvet"
8"porcelain"
9"glint"
10"stomach"
11"pounding"
12"looms"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences147
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences147
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences171
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen44
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans24
markdownWords39
totalWords1878
ratio0.021
matches
0"something else"
1"Jax"
2"keeper"
3"thud"
4"Veil Market"
5"unholy"
6"but not down the alley"
7"underground"
8"Street level"
9"Camden"
10"a bone token in his hand"
11"Of course"
12"he’ll"
13"a knife"
14"don’t"
15"they’re"
16"flickering"
17"snooped"
18"I"
19"the keeper"
20"did"
21"my"
22"they’d"
23"them"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions74
wordCount1478
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity1.56
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Soho3
Harlow1
Quinn23
Morris7
Clique4
Camden2
Jax17
Tube1
Veil2
Market2
Maria1
Spanish1
Saint1
Christopher1
Herrera1
Tomás6
London1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Morris"
3"Clique"
4"Jax"
5"Maria"
6"Saint"
7"Christopher"
8"Herrera"
9"Tomás"
places
0"Soho"
1"London"
globalScore0.722
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences100
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1878
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences171
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs52
mean36.12
std26.93
cv0.746
sampleLengths
0125
135
289
32
4111
543
669
765
884
928
1048
115
1258
1369
1443
1530
1647
1714
1828
1938
2020
2123
2245
237
2425
252
2671
276
288
2943
307
3148
329
3352
3423
3530
367
3738
3827
3947
4012
4135
4222
4349
4445
4519
4640
4714
4815
4936
95.72% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences147
matches
0"was found"
1"is pockmarked"
2"been transformed"
3"are clenched"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs255
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount28
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences25
totalSentences171
ratio0.146
matches
0"She checks her watch—11:17 PM—fingers brushing the worn leather band, the same one Morris used to wear, the one he’d never taken off."
1"Then the first body—found in a warehouse, throat slit, eyes replaced by black glass."
2"Three years of digging, of collecting half-truths, of the Clique—so named because they moved in a tight, secret circle—eluding her like smoke."
3"She flicks on her flashlight, cutting through the rain, and the beam catches his profile—sharp cheekbones, a jagged scar above his left eyebrow."
4"Jax moves like water—smooth, unpredictable—darting left, then right, as if the rain itself is guiding him."
5"Quinn’s boots slip on a patch of oil; by the time she catches her balance, he’s gone."
6"The rumors had always been there—about an underground market beneath Camden, a place for those who traded in what the law deemed *unholy*."
7"Not until Morris—"
8"Footsteps, receding—*but not down the alley*."
9"She reaches a metal grate, its lock bent—Jax had pried it open."
10"Jax’s tracks lead left—she can see the indentation of his boots in the mud."
11"The walls are slick with moss; above, a faint glow filters through a cracked manhole cover."
12"The steps lead to a derelict Tube station—signs for “Camden Town” hang crookedly, their paint peeling."
13"He’s fumbling with his duster, revealing a leather satchel, and—*a bone token in his hand*."
14"Quinn runs to the brick wall, pressing her palm to the cool stone—no token in her coat pocket, she realizes."
15"She fumbles with her keys, yanking a small, rusted lockpick from her pocket—Morris had taught her, way back when."
16"The staircase is steep, the air thick with the smell of sage and something sweet, cloying—like burning honey."
17"The tube station has been transformed: stalls line the walls, their vendors hidden behind tattered curtains, their wares glowing with strange light—vials of liquid that pulse like hearts, swords with blades that shimmer like smoke, cages holding tiny, winged creatures that chirp softly."
18"Maria—Jax had killed her, two months ago."
19"Quinn had tracked Jax to this market three times before—each time, he’d vanished into the crowd, his token leading her here, only to disappear into the stalls."
20"Inside, a glint of metal—*a knife*, its blade etched with the same runes as the bone token."
21"“Morris,” the woman says, and her voice is Morris’—warm, with a hint of a Spanish accent."
22"The woman—*the keeper*—reaches into her pocket, pulling out a vial of the green liquid."
23"In his place, a shadow—tall, thin, with eyes like black pits—looms over the keeper."
24"Jax is out there, somewhere, but so is the truth—about Morris, about the Clique, about the supernatural that haunts London."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1206
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount30
adverbRatio0.024875621890547265
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.003316749585406302
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences171
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences171
mean10.98
std7.86
cv0.716
sampleLengths
020
120
223
324
414
510
614
72
822
96
105
1126
1223
131
1430
159
162
1716
1817
1914
2010
2119
224
2323
245
253
268
2710
2816
296
303
319
3213
3312
3410
3512
3613
3713
3814
3914
4016
414
423
431
4414
4516
4615
477
4815
4917
44.64% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.30994152046783624
totalSentences171
uniqueOpeners53
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences133
matches
0"Then the first body—found in"
1"Then Morris, sent to follow"
2"*Of course*, she thinks."
3"Somewhere, a clock ticks."
4"Somewhere, a shadow waits."
ratio0.038
96.69% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount41
totalSentences133
matches
0"She checks her watch—11:17 PM—fingers"
1"They didn’t just deal in"
2"They dealt in *something else*."
3"She flicks on her flashlight,"
4"They’d picked up his trail"
5"She skids to a halt,"
6"She shakes her head, casting"
7"She tucks it into her"
8"He’s heading *underground*."
9"She reaches a metal grate,"
10"She heaves it aside, rain"
11"She lowers herself into the"
12"She crawls, elbows scraped, until"
13"She climbs, pulling herself up"
14"He’s fumbling with his duster,"
15"He presses it to a"
16"Her voice cracks, drowned out"
17"He descends the stairs, the"
18"She should have known."
19"She fumbles with her keys,"
ratio0.308
35.19% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount113
totalSentences133
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn’s boots pound"
1"She checks her watch—11:17 PM—fingers"
2"The case had started as"
3"They didn’t just deal in"
4"They dealt in *something else*."
5"The suspect materializes out of"
6"She flicks on her flashlight,"
7"They’d picked up his trail"
8"Jax had been the go-between,"
9"Jax moves like water—smooth, unpredictable—darting"
10"Quinn’s boots slip on a"
11"She skids to a halt,"
12"A bone token, carved from"
13"*Veil Market*, she thinks."
14"The rumors had always been"
15"She shakes her head, casting"
16"The token is warm, almost"
17"She tucks it into her"
18"Footsteps, receding—*but not down the"
19"He’s heading *underground*."
ratio0.85
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences133
matches(empty)
ratio0
77.92% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences66
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"Jax moves like water—smooth, unpredictable—darting left, then right, as if the rain itself is guiding him."
1"He’s fumbling with his duster, revealing a leather satchel, and—*a bone token in his hand*."
2"He presses it to a brick wall, which slides open with a hiss, revealing a narrow staircase."
3"The tube station has been transformed: stalls line the walls, their vendors hidden behind tattered curtains, their wares glowing with strange light—vials of liq…"
4"Its mouth opens, a scream that splits the air, and the woman dissolves, her porcelain face crumbling to dust."
5"Quinn’s hand goes to her pocket, pulling out a crumpled photograph: Morris, grinning, holding a feather."
31.25% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Jax says, his voice tight"
1"the woman says, her voice a purr"
2"the woman says, and her voice is Morris’—warm, with a hint of a Spanish accent"
98.72% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she yells (yell)"
1"the keeper yells (yell)"
dialogueSentences39
tagDensity0.308
leniency0.615
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.103
82.0294%